Sofiel's Place of Being

[Yuno]

Oh dear, you've lost your PC? what happened did the harddrive fail? I once had a hard drive with 12 rough drafts for 12 books crash and be destroyed. I announced that I would give up writing from then on. That giving up lasted for a few days and next thing I know I was rewriting them all. I after a year am still only on book seven, but I think I shall slim the series down and edit the copies to encompass things from the other books. So I can share in your pain. Definitely a bit of everything~

I am glad to hear from you, and it's good your brother is letting you borrow his laptop. I am so restricting about people using my computer (mainly because my stories are on there) that I would never lend it >.<

[Chimuts]

Originally Posted by Hooves

*uses hypnosis* (The old watch way) you are getting sleeeepy

Your hypnotism worked!!

@Daniel E
did your pc broke down?

[Daniel E.]

Originally Posted by Sofiel

what happened did the harddrive fail?

No, I believe the hard drive still works. Mind you, the whole thing is pretty old, so I am seriously considering getting myself a new one.

Originally Posted by Chimuts

@Daniel E
did your pc broke down?

Yes, at the same time as the monitor.

[Hooves]

Originally Posted by Sofiel

False masks are a dangerous trap I think about it at times a lot. If I am talking to someone in real life I wonder how much of "Them" I am seeing and how much they have hidden. The closer I get to people I tend to try and tear down their masks to see the real person because that is the most special thing about them.

Hehe, I look forward to hearing your input about the story~ I am glad you're enjoying my writing hehe ^.^

That just reminded me of a Code Geass scene

Spoiler for Code Geass R2 Scene:

Where Shirley in R2 was in serious instability with the Geass that was put on her by Lelouch to forget the moment that happened between them in Season 1 dissapered with Jeramiah's Geass Canceler. Shirley was starting to lose her mind when she had the dream of everyone smiling, but then a mask appeared on their face and started peeling off. Making Shirley run away from them, but they just kept appearing. Then when she saw Lelouch, who she thought she trusted the most out of everyone, appeared to have a fake mask as well, revealing him to be Zero. Then it happened again on a rooftop where Suzaku and Lelouch had to team up to save Shirley... Fake Masks can defiantly scar someone.

No, I believe the hard drive still works. Mind you, the whole thing is pretty old, so I am seriously considering getting myself a new one.

How old is it? Mine is about 5 years old, but still works well with the latests games... Well a little

[Yuno]

I'm so glad that it wasn't your harddrive. I would not wish that misfortune on anyone. It would seem it is time to upgrade. It has left you with little other options.

Hooves: Hmm, interesting I can feel that intense about other's social masks too, but of course it's quite dramatized in the anime I would imagine. My computer is also five years old and I can play most games, just not anything coming out after 2011 I am thinking.

[Hooves]

Originally Posted by Sofiel

Hooves: Hmm, interesting I can feel that intense about other's social masks too, but of course it's quite dramatized in the anime I would imagine. My computer is also five years old and I can play most games, just not anything coming out after 2011 I am thinking.

Well the girl in the anime is the type to get along quite well with everyone, and trust them alot. But when that dream happened, it would be very dreadful for her (even some dramatizing scenes included in the anime)

[Yuno]

Oh I see, that is really interesting. I must confess that I have never watched Code Geass because isn't my cup of tea, but I am slowly being intrigued by your words hehe~

[Patchy]

So that's why I can't find Sora..... changed to Sofiel >_<

I'm a fan of your poetry Sofiel-sama,

admired those people with some huge thoughts and imagination, you, hooves-sama and PM-sama, the author trios ^^ keep up the great work Sofiel-sama

[Hooves]

Originally Posted by Patchy

So that's why I can't find Sora..... changed to Sofiel >_<

I'm a fan of your poetry Sofiel-sama,

admired those people with some huge thoughts and imagination, you, hooves-sama and PM-sama, the author trios ^^ keep up the great work Sofiel-sama

I still havnt released any of my stories, so it cannot really be put out about my "huge" thoughts and imaginations I might post one of the recent stories I'm working on now.. But I will have to get someone to check over it to make sure it doesn't bore anyone.. I choose Sofiel! Thats if you dont mind Sofiel...

[Chimuts]

Originally Posted by Hooves

I still havnt released any of my stories, so it cannot really be put out about my "huge" thoughts and imaginations I might post one of the recent stories I'm working on now.. But I will have to get someone to check over it to make sure it doesn't bore anyone.. I choose Sofiel! Thats if you dont mind Sofiel...

*hypnotizes you* Release your stories... release your stories...

[Rhythm]

Sofiel I just finished Part. 1 of Forbidden Desire. ^^ I must say, wowzers!

I absolutely love how sophisticated your writing style is, and how you include various rhetoricals and extremely descriptive language.

her eyes glow with a blue brilliance that even the sky would envy.

Again loud invasive knocks rattled my ear and my being along with it.

I think lines like these two are your most descriptive. Very good I must say, without over doing it, you're able to describe the situation perfectly. "Invasive, blue brilliance that even the sky would envy". It also gives us some more insight into the character of our unfortunate protagonist.

how was it that the devil acquired souls?

I believe this was a very good rhetorical question for the context it's set in, what a question indeed. It's not everyday someone asks themselves this, and it certainly adds to the mood of the story, for me anyway.

Seeing a person face to face… I shrunk. I shrunk quickly my flame put out in an instant. I smoothed down the mess that was my hair and grinned weakly interlocking my fingers innocently.

she looked me up and down I knew what she wanted to say, but her beliefs kept her from insulting me directly.

I would enjoy watching her suffer. One who lives in the light, but has the forked tongue of a devil.

I also think these three sentences are perfectly worded, we receive a deeper insight into the characters of that they're referring to, namely their personality's. Simply put, it really helps with the characterization in your story.

This world of duality where light and dark seemed to exist in all people.

This sentence itself is quite deep, the extent of the conclusion one comes to after reading this is ambiguous because of one's own experiences, but I think we can all safely say that this is a core truth of the world and a truth of living.

In summary, very nicely written, I would rather read this story than a multitude of other books that have been published of the same genre.

Although one thing, it's seems so stupid for me to point it out, but I MUST!

"Another knock came just as jarring as the other, the wood within my door seemed to groan in the same displeasure as I. We were being invaded upon."

I think a comma was missing from this sentence. Yeah I know, I'm an idiot.

I will continue Part 2, later. Once again, lazy.

[Yuno]

Thank you all of you for your indepth comments. I am thankful people were able to gain some enjoyment out of my writing. As for the mistakes, I thank you for pointing it out, but I shall not edit it here, but rather on the original copy. I must caution in correcting my mistakes, as these are first drafts. As such I don't intend on publishing these works so I have been kind of lazy editing them (A glance over at best T.T). So you may find a lot of mistakes and I don't want to waste anyones time~ I'm so sorry if one thought these are actual works I am hoping to do things with. If anyone is curious at the publishing process do let me know and I will gladly explain and help you gain the confidence you need.

Also replies to messages may vary in time as I am usually at the hospital~

[Hooves]

Originally Posted by Sofiel

Thank you all of you for your indepth comments. I am thankful people were able to gain some enjoyment out of my writing. As for the mistakes, I thank you for pointing it out, but I shall not edit it here, but rather on the original copy. I must caution in correcting my mistakes, as these are first drafts. As such I don't intend on publishing these works so I have been kind of lazy editing them (A glance over at best T.T). So you may find a lot of mistakes and I don't want to waste anyones time~ I'm so sorry if one thought these are actual works I am hoping to do things with. If anyone is curious at the publishing process do let me know and I will gladly explain and help you gain the confidence you need.

Also replies to messages may vary in time as I am usually at the hospital~

Where did you get this idea! Of course you're not wasting anyone's time Sofiel!

The sounds of the hospital visits is getting me even more worried now

[Yuno]

I promise that the hospital visits will lead to good results. I am under going a lot of treatment so I am being taken away from here a lot to be there. I am sorry if I worried you, but it's for the best. This will keep me able and at least a bit more healthy than I have been of late~

Hehe, you are very kind to say. I should be a bit more mindful of other people's caring. I was just worried people might do so much more to help me than I can repay~ I would never post an actual work here though because I am worried about having my idea's copied and that people might take too much time to help me~

[Hooves]

Originally Posted by Sofiel

Hehe, you are very kind to say. I should be a bit more mindful of other people's caring. I was just worried people might do so much more to help me than I can repay~

To repay? Oh you don't have to worry about repaying the kindness of the people here, we always love to help as much as we can

I would never post an actual work here though because I am worried about having my idea's copied and that people might take too much time to help me~

Having your idea's copied is a constant fear all writers who post their works online fear, since their are some people who just steal work, and try to make it so that they wrote it to impress people. But let's see those people who copied back those stories up when people ask questions

We always have some spare time in our lives to help Sofiel, no need to worry about that

[Yuno]

It's been a while. I thought of this after a long hard day of appointments and getting my home. It would seem that my stray days are slowly coming to an end. I have been applied to "streets to homes" program in my city. I will also be seeking aid for my past, with counciling and other things. This will be done through an amazing program. As well my disability was sent out and I can only hope that will come into effect soon. Yet as I did all this something deep within my heart began to stir. I couldn't put it into words so I tried to write it in a poem. I am so protective of my new life that it seems I don't want to share it with anyone. Since when I do abuse, and having to escape follow. Anyway, without further ado~

Spoiler for Dear Dream:

Dear Dream,

It is with little regret that I write this. I believe that you are something I shall not miss.
Often I breathed your sweet scent of hope, only to be tricked hurt so much one know not the scope!
Oh how things always seemed sad and painful when I give into your will, but your chalice I shall spill.
You see dream, you can not exist in this world of lies for you have caused me much to despise.

I must apologise oh husband of my dreams for I do not have a red thread it seems.
It was cut by me during the pain, sorrow, and strife in order to protect my small new life.
Too many complications love does bring, an endless struggle only to end- such a curious thing.
I shall have none of it and so let it be, the life I made is enough for me.

Oh how I am limited, yet so much I built with meagre hands, weak heart, and broken plans.
Heavy was my heart when I cut you loose, but you see it’s necessary your prattle was a noose.
You strangled me endlessly an error in my ways abuse, illness, and suffering were my days.
Be a martyr if you will, yet I felt much joy when my heart became still.

So goodbye love I no longer need your state for the pen is my lust the page my mate.
All that remains of my dream will be nothing more than ash and steam.
The scar in my chest of endless remind that this life was something I alone must find.
So be gone dream and do not interrupt this life or you shall find your head under my knife.

Sincerely,

Sofiel

[Hooves]

Originally Posted by Sofiel

It's been a while. I thought of this after a long hard day of appointments and getting my home. It would seem that my stray days are slowly coming to an end. I have been applied to "streets to homes" program in my city. I will also be seeking aid for my past, with counciling and other things. This will be done through an amazing program. As well my disability was sent out and I can only hope that will come into effect soon. Yet as I did all this something deep within my heart began to stir. I couldn't put it into words so I tried to write it in a poem. I am so protective of my new life that it seems I don't want to share it with anyone. Since when I do abuse, and having to escape follow. Anyway, without further ado~

Spoiler for Dear Dream:

Dear Dream,

It is with little regret that I write this. I believe that you are something I shall not miss.
Often I breathed your sweet scent of hope, only to be tricked hurt so much one know not the scope!
Oh how things always seemed sad and painful when I give into your will, but your chalice I shall spill.
You see dream, you can not exist in this world of lies for you have caused me much to despise.

I must apologise oh husband of my dreams for I do not have a red thread it seems.
It was cut by me during the pain, sorrow, and strife in order to protect my small new life.
Too many complications love does bring, an endless struggle only to end- such a curious thing.
I shall have none of it and so let it be, the life I made is enough for me.

Oh how I am limited, yet so much I built with meagre hands, weak heart, and broken plans.
Heavy was my heart when I cut you loose, but you see it’s necessary your prattle was a noose.
You strangled me endlessly an error in my ways abuse, illness, and suffering were my days.
Be a martyr if you will, yet I felt much joy when my heart became still.

So goodbye love I no longer need your state for the pen is my lust the page my mate.
All that remains of my dream will be nothing more than ash and steam.
The scar in my chest of endless remind that this life was something I alone must find.
So be gone dream and do not interrupt this life or you shall find your head under my knife.

Sincerely,

Sofiel

Oh my... Such a deeply written poem here Sofiel, here are my opinions of what they mean by reading them.

Spoiler for Speculation:

It is with little regret that I write this. I believe that you are something I shall not miss.
Often I breathed your sweet scent of hope, only to be tricked hurt so much one know not the scope!
Oh how things always seemed sad and painful when I give into your will, but your chalice I shall spill.
You see dream, you can not exist in this world of lies for you have caused me much to despise.

You trusted your feelings all too well, but eventually came to realize that they were merely crushing your life, slowly by slowly as time passed. But you dream of such things that will never happen in the world, that these dreams bring you hope that they might actually come true in the world. But became even more depressed as you realize they were fake in this world that lies to one another.

I must apologies oh husband of my dreams for I do not have a red thread it seems.
It was cut by me during the pain, sorrow, and strife in order to protect my small new life.
Too many complications love does bring, an endless struggle only to end- such a curious thing.
I shall have none of it and so let it be, the life I made is enough for me.

You seem to be talking about the red thread of fate that comes from the East Asian belief that originated from Chinese legend, where you cut ties with your own feelings in order to not suffer the pain it seemed to have caused to your life by making you believe in false accusations that only turned into horror, and hurt you in ways unimaginable. So you're going to live your own life without the need of it.

Oh how I am limited, yet so much I built with meagre hands, weak heart, and broken plans.
Heavy was my heart when I cut you loose, but you see it’s necessary your prattle was a noose.
You strangled me endlessly an error in my ways abuse, illness, and suffering were my days.
Be a martyr if you will, yet I felt much joy when my heart became still.

You felt possibly ashamed, or guilty when you tried to block out the thing that you once believed in, the very thing that caused you many great sorrow in life. But when you finally cutted ties with it, you felt a little happiness of finally ridding of it.

So goodbye love I no longer need your state for the pen is my lust the page my mate.
All that remains of my dream will be nothing more than ash and steam.
The scar in my chest of endless remind that this life was something I alone must find.
So be gone dream and do not interrupt this life or you shall find your head under my knife.

That you are no longer going to believe in the dreams that come in your head when you sleep, but try to find a destiny for your life that only you can find alone. But the knife part was sorta hard to think about.

Of course these opinions might not be accurately correct, but that is what I think your poem meant

[Yuno]

Hehe, you're very accurate~ I am glad you enjoyed it. As I said it came to my head as I heard these lines: "The WIN program or "Women in Need" is for women who escaped abusive relationships. It provides them with furniture, and basic needs they may not have gotten when they escaped. However, the WIN program can only be used ONCE." My eyes widened at that. I promised that the events in my past would be the last time I suffer. Also that I shall only use "WIN" once and not regret.

[Hooves]

Originally Posted by Sofiel

Hehe, you're very accurate~ I am glad you enjoyed it. As I said it came to my head as I heard these lines: "The WIN program or "Women in Need" is for women who escaped abusive relationships. It provides them with furniture, and basic needs they may not have gotten when they escaped. However, the WIN program can only be used ONCE." My eyes widened at that. I promised that the events in my past would be the last time I suffer. Also that I shall only use "WIN" once and not regret.

Well it seems I was completely off the topic in this one

[Chimuts]

Originally Posted by Sofiel

Spoiler for Dear Dream:

Dear Dream,

It is with little regret that I write this. I believe that you are something I shall not miss.
Often I breathed your sweet scent of hope, only to be tricked hurt so much one know not the scope!
Oh how things always seemed sad and painful when I give into your will, but your chalice I shall spill.
You see dream, you can not exist in this world of lies for you have caused me much to despise.

I must apologise oh husband of my dreams for I do not have a red thread it seems.
It was cut by me during the pain, sorrow, and strife in order to protect my small new life.
Too many complications love does bring, an endless struggle only to end- such a curious thing.
I shall have none of it and so let it be, the life I made is enough for me.

Oh how I am limited, yet so much I built with meagre hands, weak heart, and broken plans.
Heavy was my heart when I cut you loose, but you see it’s necessary your prattle was a noose.
You strangled me endlessly an error in my ways abuse, illness, and suffering were my days.
Be a martyr if you will, yet I felt much joy when my heart became still.

So goodbye love I no longer need your state for the pen is my lust the page my mate.
All that remains of my dream will be nothing more than ash and steam.
The scar in my chest of endless remind that this life was something I alone must find.
So be gone dream and do not interrupt this life or you shall find your head under my knife.

Sincerely,

Sofiel

trying to summarise it...

Spoiler for space~:

or maybe I'll just write a response to it?
umm first of all congratulations for... well for everything? since your medication is going well and your home and finances are gettign taken care of as well~
first paragraph... "You used to believe in dreams and in that person as well, but when you realise you are tricked you can no longer trust him and your dreams?"
second paragraph... "you have cut all the chains that bind you to your past.. be it love, or hate. All for the sake of living a new life"
third paragraph... "despite all your limitations, physical or otherwise, your can still build something~ and eventhough it was heavy to part with him you have to, for both of you"
fourth paragraph... "are you thinking of becoming a novelist?"

and the first poem is still revolving around my head...