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Eratas123 · 2011-10-27, 23:51

@ Jak - Shield energy and power are the same thing. Once one's gone the other leaves too.

EthernalRain · 2011-10-28, 00:13

I see it'll be a pleasure working with you guys.

Anyway, I need help with one thing regarding my story: Though if I say what it is, there's MAJOR spoilers abound.

So if you can, can somebody help me out?

MeisterBabylon · 2011-10-28, 00:16

I can't believe I completely forgot 2 people!

Eras, you've already seen IKaron's daughter. She's basically another Karon... on the surface, but a chessmaster underneath. Her psychic potential is even greater than her mother, and as one of 4 Archangels is given the Vandam Merlion (Raphael Gundam in IS form) by Three Diagram. She sides with Irish in the fight against Palm Heir.

Introducing a new route!

Maximillan x Louise. Their child is one hell of a 4th wall breaker, routinely speaking to the reader and referencing events that are in another anime but occur within Meister Babylon's convoluted timeline. She also inherits all of her mother's abilities across all the different fandoms she has appeared in, and there's so many, that anything goes! Has a habit of calling men she likes Hanii~~ like her mother does.

YOU COUNT THE CRACK ONE TWO AND THREE!!

Eratas123 · 2011-10-28, 00:17

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Originally Posted by EthernalRain

I see it'll be a pleasure working with you guys.

Anyway, I need help with one thing regarding my story: Though if I say what it is, there's MAJOR spoilers abound.

So if you can, can somebody help me out?

What do you need exactly? You''ll need to ask different people depending on whether you need romance, action etc etc.

Eratas123 · 2011-10-28, 00:20

@ Meister - How old should they both be? IKaron's daughter will probably be 15 just to add some lulz cause of the fact that his daughter's older than him

What about the other one?

MeisterBabylon · 2011-10-28, 00:22

Other one is 2nd year ISA.

Now I'm off!

EthernalRain · 2011-10-28, 00:28

I'm talking about spoilers for the next 3 chapters after the latest VOTP chapter for Heart of the Machine. I've got a solid plot, but there's content that... Well, I don't know how it may be recieved, so I'd love an opinion on those individual scenes.

Eratas123 · 2011-10-28, 00:32

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Originally Posted by EthernalRain

I'm talking about spoilers for the next 3 chapters after the latest VOTP chapter for Heart of the Machine. I've got a solid plot, but there's content that... Well, I don't know how it may be recieved, so I'd love an opinion on those individual scenes.

Post it then, we'll see what we can do.

EthernalRain · 2011-10-28, 00:59

Okay then, Scene 1, Take 1!

Spoiler for Draft Scene:

An emotionally tense moment, but one needed to help advance the plot.

Eratas123 · 2011-10-28, 01:08

@ Rain - Pretty good

Do you mind if I portray Tabane in a more morally ambiguous light in "What lies in Shadow"?

EthernalRain · 2011-10-28, 01:11

@Eratas123

Define "morally ambiguous"?

Eratas123 · 2011-10-28, 01:16

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Originally Posted by EthernalRain

@Eratas123

Define "morally ambiguous"?

One of the reasons that I use Irish is the fact that he's the protagonist who's life has been completely screwed over because of the IS. He represents an opposite to Kyuukai who views Tabane as a loving mother and well meaning woman compared to Irish who sees her as the creator of the IS and the reason things happened as they did.

The fact that she launched missiles at a populated city just to introduce the IS really doesn't help things.

I plan to put arguments between the two of them regarding the nature of Tabane's actions and motivations.

Side note - How old is Tabane in your fic.

EthernalRain · 2011-10-28, 01:22

In my story, Tabane isn't the one who fired missiles at Japan. So anyway, go right ahead.

Oh, Tabane's in her late 30s, but is healthy enough and with the power of science, looks like she's still in her late 20s.

Eratas123 · 2011-10-28, 01:27

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Originally Posted by EthernalRain

In my story, Tabane isn't the one who fired missiles at Japan. So anyway, go right ahead.

Oh, Tabane's in her late 30s, but is healthy enough and with the power of science, looks like she's still in her late 20s.

Thanks

It may seem like bashing but the some of the POV's are extremely stilted in regards how they view things so it's to be expected.

Side note - Late 30's? Does that mean that Chifuyu's also in her late 30's here?

EthernalRain · 2011-10-28, 01:32

I'm still working out major kinks in the timeline, but Chifuyu should be at leat in her late 20s or early 30s.

Also, I demand to see a bit of Daisuke Murakami bashing somewhere. Either literal or figurative, or happily both.

Eratas123 · 2011-10-28, 01:36

Quote:

Originally Posted by EthernalRain

I'm still working out major kinks in the timeline, but Chifuyu should be at leat in her late 20s or early 30s.

Also, I demand to see a bit of Daisuke Murakami bashing somewhere. Either literal or figurative, or happily both.

I'm really trying to avoid bashing anyone, the only reason Tabane's being questioned is because the POV is from a child terrorist who hates the IS. Kyuukai will be there to defend her which might lead to blows if Irish keeps pushing it.

EthernalRain · 2011-10-28, 01:42

I don't mean bashing like that, what I meant was bashing Kyuukai's bastard father from chapter 9. That Daisuke Murakami. I kinda wanna see what kind of thing you could cook up for him.

Eratas123 · 2011-10-28, 01:52

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Originally Posted by EthernalRain

I don't mean bashing like that, what I meant was bashing Kyuukai's bastard father from chapter 9. That Daisuke Murakami. I kinda wanna see what kind of thing you could cook up for him.

Oh....in that case no problem!

Can you give me a reminder of how he acts other than being a bastard?

EthernalRain · 2011-10-28, 02:05

Well, he's a literal bastard, other than being Kyuukai's illegitimate father. He's shorter than Kyuukai, acts rash with his money, runs an arms trade organization, has a wife who desperately wants Kyuukai as her stepson and the fiance to her daughter from another marriage.

Basically, cook up a coniving, deceitful, infidelious asshole, and you have Daisuke Murakami.

Eratas123 · 2011-10-28, 02:15

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Originally Posted by EthernalRain

Well, he's a literal bastard, other than being Kyuukai's illegitimate father. He's shorter than Kyuukai, acts rash with his money, runs an arms trade organization, has a wife who desperately wants Kyuukai as her stepson and the fiance to her daughter from another marriage.

Basically, cook up a coniving, deceitful, infidelious asshole, and you have Daisuke Murakami.

Arms dealer? I can work with that, Viktor deals with weapons behind his team's back and I can make him his contact behind the deals.

Would Kyuukai be willing to kill him? I could add another argument between the protags on the course of action.

2011-10-28, 00:16	Link #4683
MeisterBabylon ~ Your Smile ~ Author Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: 346Pro Age: 38	I can't believe I completely forgot 2 people! Eras, you've already seen IKaron's daughter. She's basically another Karon... on the surface, but a chessmaster underneath. Her psychic potential is even greater than her mother, and as one of 4 Archangels is given the Vandam Merlion (Raphael Gundam in IS form) by Three Diagram. She sides with Irish in the fight against Palm Heir. Introducing a new route! Maximillan x Louise. Their child is one hell of a 4th wall breaker, routinely speaking to the reader and referencing events that are in another anime but occur within Meister Babylon's convoluted timeline. She also inherits all of her mother's abilities across all the different fandoms she has appeared in, and there's so many, that anything goes! Has a habit of calling men she likes Hanii~~ like her mother does. YOU COUNT THE CRACK ONE TWO AND THREE!! __________________ 白露型駆逐艦の４番艦、夕立です。第三次ソロモン海戦では、けっこう頑張ったっぽい★？

2011-10-28, 00:22	Link #4686
MeisterBabylon ~ Your Smile ~ Author Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: 346Pro Age: 38	Other one is 2nd year ISA. Now I'm off! __________________ 白露型駆逐艦の４番艦、夕立です。第三次ソロモン海戦では、けっこう頑張ったっぽい★？

2011-10-28, 00:59	Link #4689
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	Okay then, Scene 1, Take 1! Spoiler for Draft Scene: Chapter 15, final scene POV: Tabane Shinonono The world fell out from under my feet as I listened to the words coming out of my husband's best friend's mouth. "Tabane... Your son's missing... Presumed dead. We found these." Ethan held something out to me. My heart dropped into my stomach, my breathing shallow and eyes swelling with tears. Dangling on a chain were Kyuukai's and Ryuu's dog tags, along with his rings, the anti-IS weapons. They were scratched, partially damaged. And they were caked with blood. "This is all the search party found, Tabane. I'm so sorry... But he's gone." He began to cry. My world shattered into a million pieces. Disbelief came first, then shock. My little boy, the one who always begged for more sweets, the latest gadgets, and for me to read him a bedtime story up until he was 13... My little boy... He's gone? Ethan's lying. He has to be. This is all some cruel trick, right? Any second now, Kyuukai's gonna walk through that door with Laura hanging off his arm, and he'll play games with Koyomi, tell her a story, have man-time with Ichika or Akira... Right? My boy... My baby boy... He's gone? Then as if time had paused then played again, the gravity of the words hit me like a meteor. Kyuukai was dead. He was killed, died the way he feared he would. That last phone call when he was coughing- no... Hacking up blood, telling me... "Mommy...? I love you Mommy. I don't know why, cough, I'm saying this now... but Mommy? I love you... I'm sorry, but I've only, cough, got time for three more calls... And Mommy? Don't forget I love you... I drop to the ground, cradling my self, sobbing. My son wasdead. I... *Oh my god... kyuukai...* "*Kyyyyuuuuuuuuukaaaaaaaaaaiii!!!*" An emotionally tense moment, but one needed to help advance the plot.

2011-10-27, 23:51	Link #4681
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Jak - Shield energy and power are the same thing. Once one's gone the other leaves too.

2011-10-28, 00:13	Link #4682
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	I see it'll be a pleasure working with you guys. Anyway, I need help with one thing regarding my story: Though if I say what it is, there's MAJOR spoilers abound. So if you can, can somebody help me out?

2011-10-28, 00:20	Link #4685
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Meister - How old should they both be? IKaron's daughter will probably be 15 just to add some lulz cause of the fact that his daughter's older than him What about the other one?

2011-10-28, 00:28	Link #4687
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	I'm talking about spoilers for the next 3 chapters after the latest VOTP chapter for Heart of the Machine. I've got a solid plot, but there's content that... Well, I don't know how it may be recieved, so I'd love an opinion on those individual scenes.

2011-10-28, 01:08	Link #4690
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Rain - Pretty good Do you mind if I portray Tabane in a more morally ambiguous light in "What lies in Shadow"?

2011-10-28, 01:11	Link #4691
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	@Eratas123 Define "morally ambiguous"?

2011-10-28, 01:22	Link #4693
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	In my story, Tabane isn't the one who fired missiles at Japan. So anyway, go right ahead. Oh, Tabane's in her late 30s, but is healthy enough and with the power of science, looks like she's still in her late 20s.

2011-10-28, 01:32	Link #4695
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	I'm still working out major kinks in the timeline, but Chifuyu should be at leat in her late 20s or early 30s. Also, I demand to see a bit of Daisuke Murakami bashing somewhere. Either literal or figurative, or happily both.

2011-10-28, 01:42	Link #4697
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	I don't mean bashing like that, what I meant was bashing Kyuukai's bastard father from chapter 9. That Daisuke Murakami. I kinda wanna see what kind of thing you could cook up for him.

2011-10-28, 02:05	Link #4699
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	Well, he's a literal bastard, other than being Kyuukai's illegitimate father. He's shorter than Kyuukai, acts rash with his money, runs an arms trade organization, has a wife who desperately wants Kyuukai as her stepson and the fiance to her daughter from another marriage. Basically, cook up a coniving, deceitful, infidelious asshole, and you have Daisuke Murakami.