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RadiantBeam · 2010-01-08, 16:34

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Originally Posted by Satashi

You know those reviews you get that just make you stare at the screen and go "...huh?" well, I got one....

Spoiler for Review on Vampire!Fate:

Seriously... huh!?

Reminds me of the "complaint" I got for my Shadow/ViCia series...

EDIT: Pageclaim for hard to understand reviews and complaints!

deathcurse · 2010-01-08, 16:50

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Originally Posted by Satashi

You know those reviews you get that just make you stare at the screen and go "...huh?" well, I got one....

Spoiler for Review on Vampire!Fate:

Seriously... huh!?

Even if the sentences were written properly, I still have no idea what's being said

. Is it at least kind of funny that you guys get reviews like these?

Kaijo · 2010-01-08, 16:52

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Originally Posted by Satashi

You know those reviews you get that just make you stare at the screen and go "...huh?" well, I got one....

Spoiler for Review on Vampire!Fate:

Seriously... huh!?

The ironic thing being, I wouldn't mind if someone left an incomprehensible line of drooling text as if a cat walked over the keyboard, for a review. There is that part of me that just feels the ego boost of having a large number of reviews.

That said, modified a few sections of Family, and just reposting those below. If there are no major issues, I'll go ahead and post it to ff.net.

Spoiler for "Family" repost sections:

First section:

Vivio sighed as she found her partner, a girl with blonde hair and twin ponytails that reminded her of her Fate-mama's hair when she was in her barrier jacket. She remembered the girl's name as “Corona” but that was mostly all she knew. The girl was one of the quieter ones, and they had partnered up a few times before on assignments, but they didn't speak much beyond that.

In fact, Vivio hadn't really made any true friends in her classes yet, as most seemed to keep their distance. Oh sure, she talked to quite a few from time to time, but she wasn't really close to any of them. She didn't walk to school with them, or do things after school with them. In time, she had come to believe there was a reason for that.

She knew she wasn't like them; she was a a clone, an artificial human, while they were born from two parents. Perhaps they sensed that difference, or maybe they were still too intimidated by the incident that happened not long after she joined this school. One of her male classmates had attempted to pick on her, but she quickly dropped him on his butt. So part of it was that she felt different; she didn't have the same likes and desires as other girls her age. And another part was that she was intimidating. Or at least, that's what she thought, anyway.

Corona shyly took her hand as the two followed the rest of the class, and Vivio smiled at her. To her surprise, Corona hesitantly smiled back, but then quickly turned her gaze away. The young Takamachi girl sighed and attempted to focus on Yuuno's speech.

*skips text*

“Sort of...” Vivio replied, wondering just how to explain it when she didn't really understand. “He's a friend of my mamas. I think he's gonna be my papa. I visit with him in the Infinity Library and he teaches me stuff.”

The other girl stared in awe. “Really? That's pretty cool.”

Vivio's smile widened. Maybe things could be different....

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Second section:

“Back then, I hadn't learned how,” Yuuno explained, then smiled. “But it did spur me into learning how, over the next year or so. I had the basics within a few months, but the advanced stuff took me longer.”

00-Raiser · 2010-01-08, 16:53

*Blinks* The review Satashi got is actually rather easy to understand. They liked the fic, have a hard on for vampires, and would get turned into a leech (vampire) if they were able to. They also want more sweet and fluffy NanoFate scenes.

deathcurse · 2010-01-08, 16:58

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Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

*Blinks* The review Satashi got is actually rather easy to understand. They liked the fic, have a hard on for vampires, and would get turned into a leech (vampire) if they were able to. They also want more sweet and fluffy NanoFate scenes.

That's what I mean by I get the words, but not what's being said

. I don't know if I can turn my brain's mental filter off long enough to comprehend the rationale behind those statements, other than the parts about liking the story and wanting more fluffy scenes.

RadiantBeam · 2010-01-08, 17:04

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Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

*Blinks* The review Satashi got is actually rather easy to understand. They liked the fic, have a hard on for vampires, and would get turned into a leech (vampire) if they were able to. They also want more sweet and fluffy NanoFate scenes.

...

I could have done without knowing that, Onii-chan.

00-Raiser · 2010-01-08, 17:27

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Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

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I could have done without knowing that, Onii-chan.

Sorry, but my moron to english translator is stuck in the on position

Thunderbird · 2010-01-08, 18:22

@RB I could have sworn it was more than 24 hours already

@Satashi ...you have some weird fans XD

Then again I am sure all of us have had the "odd" reviews before. You just gotta...how should I put it...look outside the box I guess is the best way. The ones I find most frustrating are those that someone is trying to tell you that something is wrong or they are upset at something, but you...just...cant...make..sense of them. A perfect example would be the review RB had recently. Those drive me up the wall...and to make matters worse...when you PM them and ask what they meant or for clarification...they dont respond back and they just say the same exact thing on the next review its like....*gaaaaaaah~*

DezoPenguin · 2010-01-08, 19:48

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Originally Posted by Thunderbird

@RB I could have sworn it was more than 24 hours already

@Satashi ...you have some weird fans XD

Then again I am sure all of us have had the "odd" reviews before. You just gotta...how should I put it...look outside the box I guess is the best way. The ones I find most frustrating are those that someone is trying to tell you that something is wrong or they are upset at something, but you...just...cant...make..sense of them. A perfect example would be the review RB had recently. Those drive me up the wall...and to make matters worse...when you PM them and ask what they meant or for clarification...they dont respond back and they just say the same exact thing on the next review its like....*gaaaaaaah~*

I myself am always fond of getting story alerts for my one-shots.

There's nothing that takes the happy out of getting a good review than the reviewer waving a giant sign saying "I did not pay the slightest bit of attention to either the big "Complete" flag in the story line or to the actual completion of the narrative."

(Mind you, I've flagged one apparently completed story with a story alert myself, but in my defense, Satashi still hasn't marked "Spinel Heart" as complete!

)

Like 00-Raiser, I had no trouble interpreting that review Satashi got at a glance; it just left me shaking my head wondering why the person would write like that. I always wonder if people who leave reviews like that are posting those reviews from their cell phone or something...particularly when they can't...get...the...shift...key...to...work!

@Kaijo: On a completely different note, with regard to Vivio and her friends, unless you want to skate away from canon, I'd suggest avoiding the "lonely kid"/"trouble making friends" trope. Everything mentioned about her seems quite the opposite: from Strikers Sound Stage 4, Track 11 (where she basically ends up chatting eagerly with the first kids she meets), to Movie Sound Stage (N Side) Tracks 8-9, to ViVid, shows her as an outgoing girl who has no trouble making friends and getting along with people wherever she goes (note that in ch. 1 of ViVid, she, Corona, and Rio are excited about all being in the same class, which negates the "Corona's the new kid" theory--they had to know each other before 4th Grade started), whether they're her own age or older than her. Actually, if you get right down to it, Quattro is the only person in the series who ever has any kind of "I don't get along with you" moment with Vivio at all.

(Honestly, it sometimes seems that Nanoha is actually learning from the abandonment issues of her own childhood and making sure that Vivio doesn't have those moments, though I'm probably giving the writers too much credit.)

RadiantBeam · 2010-01-08, 20:47

So... I've been issued another challenge, from one Deathcurse....

Wish me luck.

spawnofthejudge · 2010-01-08, 20:51

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RadiantBeam · 2010-01-08, 20:53

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Oh come on, you too?

DezoPenguin · 2010-01-08, 20:56

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Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Oh come on, you too?

RadiantBeam's morning: Wake up, take a shower, put on clean clothing, change avatar, brush teeth, eat breakfast...

RadiantBeam · 2010-01-08, 20:58

I swear, you guys, all of you have way too much fun teasing me about this.

deathcurse · 2010-01-08, 21:02

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Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

So... I've been issued another challenge, from one Deathcurse....

Wish me luck.

Good luck with Rule #5!

*snicker*

@Thread: Some people may be very happy with the contents of the challenge

...

spawnofthejudge · 2010-01-08, 21:03

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Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

I swear, you guys, all of you have way too much fun teasing me about this.

It is impossible to have, as you say, "too much fun".

Thunderbird · 2010-01-08, 21:28

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Originally Posted by deathcurse

Good luck with Rule #5!

*snicker*

@Thread: Some people may be very happy with the contents of the challenge

...

ooh~ cant wait for this one.

@RB See! You cant say I'm bad when its part of your morning routine

Edit: Avatar counter 0...AGAIN! Dont think we didnt see that! XD

deathcurse · 2010-01-08, 21:32

This story takes place before Log #3 in the month of January that got skipped

. Therefore, this is Log #2.1

And we return to the crack! Although the angst made a surprise appearance at the end

, but that's to be expected from RB and me

.

Daily Activity Log of Officers F. Testarossa and N. Takamachi

Spoiler for Log #2.1:

RadiantBeam · 2010-01-08, 21:36

And before you ask us if Subaru and Teana will be appearing in the story again, please don't.

Right now, we honestly don't know if we'll go back to them. Ginga comes up as part of the larger story arc, but whether or not Subaru and Teana return is something we haven't discussed yet.

isagrimorie · 2010-01-08, 22:12

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Originally Posted by deathcurse

This story takes place before Log #3 in the month of January that got skipped

. Therefore, this is Log #2.1

And we return to the crack! Although the angst made a surprise appearance at the end

, but that's to be expected

.

Daily Activity Log of Officers F. Testarossa and N. Takamachi

Spoiler for Log #2.1:

Guys! Guys! This installment! I mean there's Tea and Subaru and then! Wow, when Fate snaps, huh? And, Fate is right, Nanoha need to follow her own advice and think about her actions for a bit. I'm actually surprised it took Fate long before she snapped but then again, she always had the patience of a saint but this time Nanoha pushed too far.

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Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

And before you ask us if Subaru and Teana will be appearing in the story again, please don't.

Right now, we honestly don't know if we'll go back to them. Ginga comes up as part of the larger story arc, but whether or not Subaru and Teana return is something we haven't discussed yet.

A larger arc! That is just awesome to hear! I'm really excited about this!

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deathcurse Queen of Tragedy Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: Place of rocks and trees, and trees and rocks...and water. Age: 33	This story takes place before Log #3 in the month of January that got skipped . Therefore, this is Log #2.1 And we return to the crack! Although the angst made a surprise appearance at the end , but that's to be expected from RB and me . Daily Activity Log of Officers F. Testarossa and N. Takamachi Spoiler for Log #2.1: UCPD Log: Jan-3-20XX Officers: F. Testarossa and N. Takamachi “Unit LS-1, this is Dispatch.” Nanoha set down the pieces of her diassembled gun and picked up the mic. “Dispatch, this is Unit LS-1.” “Unit LS-1, there is a jumper on the Port Bridge, adolescent female, caution, subject is armed.” Fate turned on the sirens and lights, making a U-turn in the stopped intersection as she headed towards the bridge. “Nanoha, you talk with the girl while I deal with traffic.” “Can you deal with the girl?” Nanoha begged as she rapidly reassembled her firearm and reached under her seat for their Kevlar vests. “You took more Negotiation courses than I did.” Shaking her head, Fate lamented, “Irony is very present in the world.” "So is that a yes?" "..." Fate groaned. "Fine, you take care of traffic, but when backup comes you’re coming up too. Just please, promise me you won't push her off." "Like I would do that!" “Yes you would!” If she hadn’t been speeding down the road, Fate would have smacked her head into the steering wheel a few times. “Don’t shoot her either!” “She’s armed,” Nanoha pointed out. “And that’s a busy bridge. It may come to that.” “Don’t let it go to that. I mean it!” There was a long pause. "...What if she shoots first?" Nanoha asked. Fate had to resist the overpowering urge to smack her head against the steering wheel. "Fine! If she shoots first, you can return the favor! Just don't kill her!" "But what if—" "No buts!" Inching onto the packed bridge, Fate glanced up. “Geez!” She pulled over underneath the figure perched on the high beams of the bridge and cut the siren but left the lights on. “Police tape is in the trunk. And even if people are being stubborn—” “—don’t pull out your gun,” Nanoha finished for her, rolling her eyes. “Sheesh, you act like I’m a total maniac!” That was absolutely too easy of an opening—if Fate was in a nice mood, she’d let the under-the-belt retaliation go. Unfortunately, she wasn't in a nice mood. "Nanoha, you are a maniac." Nanoha grinned at her. "Love you too, honey," she said before darting over to begin diverting traffic. Rolling her eyes, Fate prepared to go up and talk. She prayed that she wouldn’t get shot going up the ladder. And it was a long way up. Teasing aside, she knew that Nanoha was keeping an eye on them, which made Fate feel oddly secure. Well, if you had the biggest bully in the playground on your side, you’d feel pretty good too. Even if you were supposed to be the good guy. Then again...despite her personality, Nanoha was definitely a good guy. At least, Fate thought she was. Better question would be, am I a good guy? “Hi there,” Fate called out, and the girl whirled in surprise, then stiffened in anger. “Stay away from me!” “Okay,” Fate agreed, lowering herself to sit on one of the beams. She rubbed her hands against her thighs, her skin cold from clinging onto the metal ladder rungs. “I’m Officer Fate Testarossa. It’s nice to meet you.” Automatically, the girl muttered, “It’s nice to meet you,” in response. That was a good sign. Fate smiled slightly. Baffled, the girl frowned. "What?" she muttered. "I said hi." "Don't you have a name?" Fate purposely kept her voice calm and gentle, not wanting to startle the girl or do anything to agitate her. "Why do you want to know my name?" "I'm just curious. You know mine, after all." There was a pause before the girl spoke again. "Teana. Teana Lanster. All my friends call me Tea." She was willing to talk. Another good sign. “What school do you go to, Tea?” Hopefully, Teana wouldn’t blow a gasket at the friendly usage of her nickname. Teana opened her mouth to answer, then checked herself, a scowl reappearing on her face. “Look, just leave me alone. I know you’re trying to stop me!” Her hand drifted to the gun tucked in her belt. Fate didn’t move, but her whole body tensed in readiness. “I’m not trying anything,” Fate said patiently. “We’re just talking, see?” “Of course you’re trying something!” Teana shouted. “Adults always do. You’re all the same!” The orange-haired girl’s hand closed over the gun’s grip and trigger guard. Okay, this wasn’t going so well anymore. Desperate to change the subject, Fate glanced down at the bridge and blinked as a tall, short-haired girl burst through the crowd despite the best attempts of the cops to keep her back, frantically calling Teana's name. "Friend of yours?" she asked lightly. Teana glanced down; for just an instant, a warm, if annoyed expression flitted across her face. "Subaru," she murmured. "Idiot. I told her to go to school today and act like nothing was wrong." “It doesn’t look like she listened to you,” Fate noted blandly. “She always makes things worse.” Teana hit one of the beams in agitation. “I told her that nothing would ever change my parents’ minds, but she’s so stupid. She keeps thinking that things always turn out okay, when they don’t.” Out of the corner of her eye, Fate noticed Nanoha scaling the ladder silently, channelling her inner ninja. Man, this situation was either going to get better or worse in a hurry. "Sounds like she's more than just a friend." Fate took a chance; perhaps she was wrong, but if this Subaru girl was important to Teana, then perhaps... Teana hesitated a moment before she responded. "She's my girlfriend. We've been best friends for years... only just started going out now." "I see." Fate smiled slightly. "Well, congratulations." “Yeah, well, that makes it worse.” Sulking, Teana turned to glare out at the river beneath them. “I keep trying to break it off, but she’s so damned persistent and just can’t take no for an answer.” “Is she harassing you?” “No!” Teana shook her head, clearly angry that Fate wasn’t getting her obscure point. “I’m not good for her, but she’s too stupid to get that!” Fate glanced down at the other girl again and sighed. "She's probably going to need years of therapy to get over this... if she ever does." Teana hesitated. So did Nanoha, still unseen by Teana below them. Finally, Teana sighed. "She won't need anything like that," she murmured. "Oh?" Fate was curious, despite herself. "Yeah. She'll get over me easily enough. Maybe one day she'll even think I did the right thing." At that, Nanoha started climbing again. “Subaru seems like a kind person.” “She is, even though she’s an idiot.” Fate scratched her ear, affecting confusion. “Then you think she’s lying about how much she cares about you?” "No." Teana shook her head, seeming to have completely forgotten about her original goal for the moment. "I know she's being honest." "Then why?" "Because. She's strong, and she has a good family supporting her. She'll forget about me in two years, three tops." “Uh…” Fate wanted to facepalm herself, but that probably wasn’t a good idea. “Tea, I don’t think that you’re being—” “I know what you’re going to say,” Teana snapped. “Silly, stupid, putting myself down?” "No, actually, I think you're giving Subaru too much credit..." “You don’t know her,” Teana shook her head sullenly, dismissing the issue stubbornly. “You don’t know what you’re talking about, just leave me alone. I’m not bugging anyone, it’s my life.” Fate blinked. "Well, uh..." She never had a chance to finish her thought as Nanoha smoothly slid up behind Teana, flashed Fate a terse smile, and cleanly pushed the girl off the bridge. “NANOHA!” While Fate felt herself go berserk, and while Teana was screaming during her long fall, Nanoha had hooked a climbing rope to a make-shift harness of two belts buckled around her chest and shoulders and flung the rest of the rope coil to Fate. “Oh sh—” Fate scrambled to loop the rope around one of the support beams and began to adjust her grip into a simple belaying stance when Nanoha swung into an upside-down grip on the bridge supports and kicked off, shooting downwards towards the falling teenager. “You’re fucking crazy!” Teana screamed. “Right out of my mouth,” Fate muttered as she watched Nanoha catch Teana around the waist. She quickly stopped the rope and threw her weight back, letting out a strangled yell of pain. "Fate-chan?" "I'm all right." Fate took several deep breaths. "I'm all right. It just startled me." "Crazy," Teana whimpered. "All my luck, I had to be saved by the fucking crazy cop." "Hey, I'm only slightly crazy," Nanoha muttered. “YOU’RE FUCKING CRAZY, NANOHA!” Fate slowly lowered the two of them down the last ten metres to the bridge surface, grimacing as the rope burns on her hands complained. "Sorry." Nanoha's voice was easy to hear, her unrepentant tone making Fate steam with anger. "I can't stand people who talk like that." Fate continued to fume. "Of all the—" "People who talk like their death doesn't mean anything to the people they love." Nanoha gently wrestled the gun from Teana's grasp, not that she was resisting much to begin with. "I hate that." The blonde didn't respond, and didn't have time to; Teana's Subaru had managed to somehow make her way through the crowd and now hovered uneasily on the edge, clearly wanting to go to her girlfriend but unsure of whether or not it was right. “So how did it feel?” Nanoha asked Teana, her arms crossed. “Thinking that you were going to die.” Teana didn’t answer, her gaze turned downward. “So now you know.” Waving Subaru over, Nanoha finished with, “Don’t ever let me catching you doing something like this again, no matter what crap might be happening in your life.” Subaru was hugging her girlfriend and crying when Nanoha left them to walk over to the base of the ladder, watching Fate gingerly climb down. She helped her partner down the last few feet, taking one of Fate’s hands and wincing at the red weals across her palms. “Ah, I’m—” BAM! Nanoha didn’t get a chance to finish; Fate socked her one across the face. When Fate hit, she hit hard; Nanoha was thrown roughly to the ground and skidded a few feet before ultimately coming to a stop. With a loud groan, she rubbed her cheek. "—sorry," she finished weakly. "Yeah, I probably deserved that." Fate glared at her. “What the hell did you take Negotiation classes for?” “Um…they wouldn’t let me take another fighting class elective?” "Nanoha!" "Oh, come on!" Nanoha tried to defend herself. "How long were you going to listen to her whine and cry, anyway?" She jerked a thumb at Teana, who was trying her best to calm a sobbing Subaru. "Do you really think she was right?!" Fate grabbed Nanoha by the lapel of her jacket and Nanoha couldn’t help it. She flinched and ducked her head. Luckily, Hayate had grabbed Fate’s arm. “Kids, you’re in public. Please take the DV home, okay?” Fate glared at Hayate. "This isn't—" "She makes a good point," Yuuno cut in cautiously, coming up to his partner's side. "Why don't you two take this home? Fate, you need to get your hands tended to, anyway." Clearly Fate wasn’t convinced, but it was hard to be mean to Yuuno. Gingerly, Nanoha led both of them back to their patrol car, grimacing a few times to work the numbness out of her swollen cheek. They went to Nanoha's apartment, of course; it was close to the station, and most of the time Fate practically lived there anyway. And driving with injured hands wasn’t fun at all. Thankfully, although Nanoha looked at her anxiously she didn’t try something stupid like offer to drive. That would probably have set Fate off on another yelling rant about the incident that had resulted in Nanoha’s licence being suspended for three months. “I’ll, uh, get the first aid kit,” Nanoha said lamely when they were inside. Fate just gave her a look. Properly cowed, the brunette left the living room to go fetch the first aid kit from the bathroom as Fate shrugged off her jacket, leaving it draped over the couch as she sat down. "Looks like Mom refilled it while I was away," Nanoha said, still sounding lame, as she came into the room with the kit. Fate didn’t say anything. Gulping, Nanoha sat down on the table and started to apply antiseptic to Fate’s hands. Slowly, the tension eased a little in the silence as Nanoha gently patched up her partner’s hands and rolled a thin layer of gauze across her palms. Finally, Nanoha spoke again. "I really am sorry, Fate-chan," she said softly. A soft sigh answered her. “Why do you always do something stupid then apologize for it later?” Fate rubbed her eyes, flinching when she put pressure on her torn fingers. “Even ignoring how cops should act—why can’t you think a little before taking risks?” Nanoha grabbed Fate's hands and lowered them from her face, keeping her wrists still as she cleaned the wounds and finished wrapping Fate’s hands with bandages. "I already told you why. I hate it when people talk like their death won't have an effect on their loved ones." “You’re just so…” Fate scowled, but she just looked tired instead of furious. “Argh, I should just punch you again.” “What did I do now?” Nanoha asked, indignant but meek. “Nothing, I just can’t find the words to express how I feel about you at the moment.” "Sorry," Nanoha repeated softly. "Stop apologizing." "Why? I mean it, and you're still angry at me." Giving Fate's bandages one last testing tug, Nanoha released her hands and clicked the kit shut. "I don't know what else you want me to do other than kiss you to make it better, Fate-chan." Violently, Fate grabbed Nanoha by the neck and crushed them together, kissing her hard. Time spun and warped until Fate broke their kiss just as abruptly and put her forehead on Nanoha’s shoulder, breathing hard. “You drive me nuts when you do your usual stuff,” growled Fate, clutching onto Nanoha tightly. “But you should also fucking follow your own advice. I can’t believe you did such a dangerous thing, jumping off the fucking bridge.” Her white-gauzed hands twisted fistfuls of Nanoha’s jacket, pulling her closer and preventing Nanoha from leaving, although that was the last thing Nanoha wanted to do. “What if I hadn’t been strong enough to break your fall?” "Er..." Nanoha swallowed hard, trying to clear her head and failing miserably as the haze refused to lift from her thoughts. "I didn't think about that." “Idiot, yeah, you should have. I had to take the weight of you and Teana.” Despite herself, Fate slumped heavily against her partner, half-asleep from weariness. “You’re heavy.” “No I’m not.” Nanoha shifted their weight until she had Fate in her arms. “Yeah you are,” Fate muttered drowsily. “It must be all those cakes.” "Are you implying I'm fat?" Nanoha asked, amused. "Very fat." Fate chuckled. "Extremely fat. It's lucky I managed to hold onto you." They sat like that for a moment in comfortable silence before Nanoha took a deep breath. "Fate-chan..." "Hmm?" Fate was falling asleep. "Should I not read too deeply into that kiss?" No answer—Fate had fallen asleep, her breathing coming slow and even. Nanoha sighed, rising and hesitating before carrying Fate into her guest room, setting her friend down and pulling the comforter over her. She would have helped Fate change if she hadn’t been so tired herself, just about ready to collapse. There was an equal chance that Fate could have been faking, but Nanoha was sure that she wouldn’t like the answer anyways. END LOG 1-3-20XX __________________ Fanfic Archive--Latest "Angel" chapter--Latest "Daily Activity Logs" chapter--Latest "Crime Never Sleeps"--The Hayate x Vivio Files Last edited by deathcurse; 2010-03-04 at 01:27.