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hobbs · 2004-08-13, 16:20

i hope you like, i messed up the upload (??) i think but you have to download the image to view it:
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/9749053/

yaaay my 1st deviation!

hobbs · 2004-08-13, 20:02

link may have changed.. dunno but i re uploaded it correctly http://www.deviantart.com/view/9754608/

DukeGaladrien · 2004-08-13, 20:33

That's not bad. I'll point out a couple of things to help you improve though. The first is to remember the head is an oval, whereas you drew the top of her head more like a rectangle. You might also want to give her a more angled jaw, instead of so flat, of course she might look quite so much like a thug then

puffpuff · 2004-08-13, 20:47

I like her style!!
But the hair somehow looks flat. I don´t know how to make it bettre since I´m no good at drawing hair... Maybe some more shadowing would do it!?

Forsaken102 · 2004-08-13, 22:58

Oh... My... goodness.

I think I've met a few people like that..... O.o

Anyway, good job!

Her neck is a bit long, though. A basic rule of thumb that I've started using is that the neck's length from the chin to the clavicle is one handwidth... about the distance between one's mouth and nose. The length between where the muscles meet the neck and the chin... that's about half of that... so about the distance between the chin and the lips. I hope that helps!!

EDIT: And, ummm... in the future, you may want to just edit your first post. Double (or more) posting is probably one of the easiest ways to get mods irritated at you.

hobbs · 2004-08-13, 23:08

hehe soz bout the double post!

also thanks tons for the help! ill get working on it and post some more work soon! by the way a lil warning im not great with colour so i never really add colour in..hehe

ChibiDusk · 2004-08-13, 23:28

Hm, its ok. Like everyone else said, the head is a little flat. The eye looks a little too far over, might want to try moving it a *little* to the right some more. I find the lines by her mouth make her seem a little old-looking.

hobbs · 2004-08-14, 10:45

she is ment to look rough

Asura · 2004-08-14, 10:57

it may be messy, it may be rough, it may be imperfect, etc... but for sure, it's yours.

you mentioned that you only draw from imagination... my suggestion is (that is, if you want to improve -don't take it if you don't want it)... be an observer and observe people (being a peeping tom is excused). that.. and lot's of practice.

anyways, of your sig... yaoi-ness eh? neat.

hobbs · 2004-08-14, 11:02

thanks for the advice asura ^_^ also thanks for the advice from the others, forsaken and puffpuff, oh and duke! hehe

i put another 'rough' one up http://www.deviantart.com/view/9770508/
i will put some more work up which is complete but at the mo alot of that is in a big pile with my art folders and stuff. hehe ^_^

Asura · 2004-08-14, 11:20

heh, what a good idea... shoving a knife through a head.. looks like you're into gore-ish stuff..neat.

hobbs · 2004-08-14, 11:34

^_^ i am. even tho i rarely draw it.. im more into wierdness gore-ish. I have some wierd drawing ill upload today but wont be active for a while, as you may know from my new sig ^_^
thanks for the comment again

2004-08-13, 16:20	Link #1
hobbs nothing 2 do with calvin! Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Essex, UK Age: 35	hobbsy art! ^_^ i hope you like, i messed up the upload (??) i think but you have to download the image to view it: http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/9749053/ yaaay my 1st deviation!

2004-08-13, 20:02	Link #2
hobbs nothing 2 do with calvin! Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Essex, UK Age: 35	changed it link may have changed.. dunno but i re uploaded it correctly http://www.deviantart.com/view/9754608/

2004-08-13, 23:28	Link #7
ChibiDusk Back From The Dead? Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: Canada Age: 34	Hm, its ok. Like everyone else said, the head is a little flat. The eye looks a little too far over, might want to try moving it a little to the right some more. I find the lines by her mouth make her seem a little old-looking. Last edited by ChibiDusk; 2004-08-14 at 00:04.

2004-08-13, 20:33	Link #3
DukeGaladrien Hopeless Baseball Fanatic Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: Oceanside, CA Age: 40	That's not bad. I'll point out a couple of things to help you improve though. The first is to remember the head is an oval, whereas you drew the top of her head more like a rectangle. You might also want to give her a more angled jaw, instead of so flat, of course she might look quite so much like a thug then

2004-08-13, 20:47	Link #4
puffpuff Fallen Raven Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: in the chaos between life and death. Age: 34	I like her style!! But the hair somehow looks flat. I don´t know how to make it bettre since I´m no good at drawing hair... Maybe some more shadowing would do it!?

2004-08-13, 22:58	Link #5
Forsaken102 Insanity Goddess Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Missouri Age: 40	Oh... My... goodness. I think I've met a few people like that..... O.o Anyway, good job! Her neck is a bit long, though. A basic rule of thumb that I've started using is that the neck's length from the chin to the clavicle is one handwidth... about the distance between one's mouth and nose. The length between where the muscles meet the neck and the chin... that's about half of that... so about the distance between the chin and the lips. I hope that helps!! EDIT: And, ummm... in the future, you may want to just edit your first post. Double (or more) posting is probably one of the easiest ways to get mods irritated at you.

2004-08-13, 23:08	Link #6
hobbs nothing 2 do with calvin! Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Essex, UK Age: 35	hehe soz bout the double post! also thanks tons for the help! ill get working on it and post some more work soon! by the way a lil warning im not great with colour so i never really add colour in..hehe

2004-08-14, 10:45	Link #8
hobbs nothing 2 do with calvin! Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Essex, UK Age: 35	she is ment to look rough

2004-08-14, 10:57	Link #9
Asura should i stay longer? Join Date: May 2003 Location: Hong Kong until May 6 2006.... it's paradise ;)	it may be messy, it may be rough, it may be imperfect, etc... but for sure, it's yours. you mentioned that you only draw from imagination... my suggestion is (that is, if you want to improve -don't take it if you don't want it)... be an observer and observe people (being a peeping tom is excused). that.. and lot's of practice. anyways, of your sig... yaoi-ness eh? neat.

2004-08-14, 11:02	Link #10
hobbs nothing 2 do with calvin! Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Essex, UK Age: 35	thanks for the advice asura ^_^ also thanks for the advice from the others, forsaken and puffpuff, oh and duke! hehe i put another 'rough' one up http://www.deviantart.com/view/9770508/ i will put some more work up which is complete but at the mo alot of that is in a big pile with my art folders and stuff. hehe ^_^

2004-08-14, 11:20	Link #11
Asura should i stay longer? Join Date: May 2003 Location: Hong Kong until May 6 2006.... it's paradise ;)	heh, what a good idea... shoving a knife through a head.. looks like you're into gore-ish stuff..neat.

2004-08-14, 11:34	Link #12
hobbs nothing 2 do with calvin! Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Essex, UK Age: 35	^_^ i am. even tho i rarely draw it.. im more into wierdness gore-ish. I have some wierd drawing ill upload today but wont be active for a while, as you may know from my new sig ^_^ thanks for the comment again