Muv-Luv Franchise - FanFiction Discussion

[erakk]

I kinda regret having known of Muv Luv: Comet...
I just devoured it all in one single afternoon and can't wait for more...
(Excelent work)

Spoiler for ML:comet:

- Yuuya character looks much more deep and badass, since now hes a full fledged elite on the front lines
- I really liked his relationship with Max, like best budies who respect each other even though they talk trash at one another =P
- I allways though "Sharon is a master bitch". i don'nt know what happened, i think of her as "only a bitch" now.
- Col. Bishop gives the air of a "badass mom" at Yuuya, dunno why?
- Yuuko
- That 4v2 fight (vs infinity) was fucking awesome, made me remember the Anime when he fights Tarisa. I guess it was intended?

I could comment on more awesome stuff, but then i might aswell write a review.

[kaizerknight01]

@Mr terrorist

about Sumika and Takeru situation

Spoiler for .......:

If i remember correctly its not the only G bombs , couple more factors how the other version of Takeru came to Unlimited/Alternative, like G elements and such the event that severely traumatized Sumka mind by alternative/Unlimited Takeru's death ( He fought a couple soilder class bare handed in to protecting Sumika)and then grotesque scene that followed ( just remembering it i want to puke , was very disgusted and disturbing ....... you should really try playing extra/unlimited/alternative if you have the chance / and good luck and good will on your fanfic

[John117xCortana]

Takeru was.....devoured in front of Sumika.

[MrTerrorist]

Originally Posted by kaizerknight01

@Mr terrorist

about Sumika and Takeru situation

Spoiler for .......:

If i remember correctly its not the only G bombs , couple more factors how the other version of Takeru came to Unlimited/Alternative, like G elements and such the event that severely traumatized Sumka mind by alternative/Unlimited Takeru's death ( He fought a couple soilder class bare handed in to protecting Sumika)and then grotesque scene that followed ( just remembering it i want to puke , was very disgusted and disturbing ....... you should really try playing extra/unlimited/alternative if you have the chance / and good luck and good will on your fanfic

So basically......

Spoiler for reply:

Sumika saw the Takeru of the MLU/MLA universe died in front of her eyes which traumatize her before the BETA took her brain to the Yokohama Hive. When the G-Bombs dropped at the Hive, the combined high concentration of G-elements, Sumika's psychic powers and her trauma caused a rupture in the Space Time continuum that brought the Takeru of MLE to the MLU/MLA universe.

If this is correct then i might have a solution in my fanfic to bring Takeru to the MLA universe without the need of G-Bombing.

[kaizerknight01]

Originally Posted by John117xCortana

Takeru was.....devoured in front of Sumika.

and what happen next was even more worst ...( all muv luv vets knows that scene ....)

[John117xCortana]

Hear hear.

Anyway, how would the White Glint fare against other TSFs ?

[kaizerknight01]

Spoiler for Muv luv alternative fanfic ultimate goal dream:

[Azrulnin]

Originally Posted by kaizerknight01

and what happen next was even more worst ...( all muv luv vets knows that scene ....)

I just finish played the game months ago and i still remember the scene and all the horrible parts...

[EagleBlue]

Originally Posted by Alastor Mobius Toth

Hmmm, I'm generally not good with advice, but what I used to, and still do in a way, is to read a lot of other...works. Books, plays, you name it. Like 1982, Death of a Salesman, The Witcher, Honor Harrington series, Dune etc.

Not for ripping off anything, but seeing how you can construct world, characters, different styles of writing, setting up plots etc. in various different ways. Alternatively, have English Literature course, which is about the same thing, only the teacher has you picking up stuff from book and writing 1000 word report on it.

And inspiration. Arguably, I cannot work until I get a set of events or a "picture" in my head and say "Yeah, this is awesome" and then work around it.

Thank you, I can use most of it to help me.

Anyone else have any tips for writing stories?

Originally Posted by John117xCortana

Hear hear.

Anyway, how would the White Glint fare against other TSFs ?

White Glint will stomp any TSF very easily. Consider that the ACs from 4 and For Answer have can move and maneuver insanely fast. Their Primal Armor also negates most of the ranged weaponry that the TSFs have. And if White Glint runs out of ammo, it can use blades which can destroy a TSF in one or two strikes. Even two or three wings of Takemikazuchis, Raptors or any advanced 3rd-Gen TSF will only have a low chance of killing WG.

[kaizerknight01]

Originally Posted by EagleBlue

Thank you, I can use most of it to help me.

Anyone else have any tips for writing stories?



White Glint will stomp any TSF very easily. Consider that the ACs from 4 and For Answer have can move and maneuver insanely fast. Their Primal Armor also negates most of the ranged weaponry that the TSFs have. And if White Glint runs out of ammo, it can use blades which can easily destroy a TSF in one or two strikes. Even two or three wings of Takemikazuchis, Raptors or any advanced 3rd-Gen TSF will only have a low chance of killing WG.

Actually would prefer the White Glint to curb stomp BETA's horde than fighting TSF , and basically giving the beta the middle finger and sending a message " Your dealing will the human race pal. Get the f**k off our solar system

Off topic " for the extra armor modules planning to add on White Glint for Takeru

Spoiler for Homage to ridiculous armored ,shit load of hidden weapon container in the armor:

As for writing stories .. this might sound clique ... write with in your mind and in your thoughts .... be your self , but be open it listening on other opinions ... writting fanfic is a hobby/ it our outlet for imagination of what if ? as a great wise man said imagination is more important that knowledge ( IMHO just avoid self insert character or troll fic you'll be fine )

[tsunade666]

Originally Posted by kaizerknight01

Off topic " for the extra armor modules planning to add on White Glint for Takeru

Spoiler for Homage to ridiculous armored ,shit load of hidden weapon container in the armor:

wouldn't it make too bulky and less flexible in its moves?

[kaizerknight01]

Originally Posted by tsunade666

wouldn't it make too bulky and less flexible in its moves?

I won't spoil much, where and when, Takeru will use it, as the name sake "Storm Fortress" has incredible acceleration in a straight line , it not meant to be maneuverable, purpose to create overwhelming force that breaks through BETA hordes ( that why it has stronger inertia canceller systems plus, anti-gravity system that powered by 2+1 pulse transposition engines (basically nerf down Moorcock-Lechte drive but, compact) there's engines two the Storm Fortress module one of the White Glint like TSF )

Second a mobile fortress its defensive systems has particle frequency coating , Lasers are particles of light that travels in frequency , it dissipate the energy of lasers. and in build power reflex armor that uses it power source to strengthen the armor, is highly resistant to physical/kinetic attacks/Chemical/Terminal energy ( Fort class beta stringer will just bounce of and a stupid tank tries to bite it all of it teeth will be broken ) and other materials alloys called "Valgernaium Alloy"

Lastly it purge all spent weapon containers/ armor to reveal the White Glint. which Uber fast and maneuverable, will obliterate the remaining beta

Spoiler for Picture:

The technology use on this mecha are tier 1.5 of the Kardashev scale

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kardashev_scale

[MrTerrorist]

Sorry guys but i'll have to postpone posting more info about my fanfic for now due to real life commitments. But i will leave this instead.

Spoiler for More info:

The fanfic will have Yuuya x Yui shipping moments between the two which will eventually lead to them becoming a couple. This is due to several factors like certain things like Yuuya's mother is still alive in this fanfic which influences Yuuya to be a better boyfriend and Yui's friends being shippers on deck between her and Yuuya. But the harem antics will still be there after Yui accidentally slips out that Yuuya's "a very good lover", much to the girls curiosity.

There's also a sidestory where Yuuya is given shore leave and brings Yui with him to visit his mom at his home town. What was suppose to be a private time between the two gets funny when the Argos Flight crew and Yui's friends tag along.

Again, i'm sorry about this.

[tsunade666]

Originally Posted by kaizerknight01

I won't spoil much, where and when, Takeru will use it, as the name sake "Sto materials alloys called "Valgernaium Alloy"

LoL reminds me of gundam wing's "gundamium alloy"

The tsf is overkill. I pity the BETA that will stand in his way

then I will wait for the update

tsun

[erakk]

Originally Posted by MrTerrorist

Sorry guys but i'll have to postpone posting more info about my fanfic for now due to real life commitments. But i will leave this instead.

Spoiler for More info:

The fanfic will have Yuuya x Yui shipping moments between the two which will eventually lead to them becoming a couple. This is due to several factors like certain things like Yuuya's mother is still alive in this fanfic which influences Yuuya to be a better boyfriend and Yui's friends being shippers on deck between her and Yuuya. But the harem antics will still be there after Yui accidentally slips out that Yuuya's "a very good lover", much to the girls curiosity.

There's also a sidestory where Yuuya is given shore leave and brings Yui with him to visit his mom at his home town. What was suppose to be a private time between the two gets funny when the Argos Flight crew and Yui's friends tag along.

Again, i'm sorry about this.

Where you will post/host the fanfic?
So i can follow. I got interested.

[MrTerrorist]

^ Fanfiction.net after i sort things out.

[MeisterBabylon]

You know... with all that time-rifting involved, I'd half expect a starship named Defiant fall through the cracks...

[John117xCortana]

Commanded by the Sisko ?

[MeisterBabylon]

Not really; in the expanded universe, "Defiant falls into another timeline" is an ascended trope, where ships from various classes, as long as they were named Defiant, would become lost to Starfleet, and end up in another universe where they wreck havoc (ENT, and I know some novels).

All these Defiants predated the Sisko's Defiant (and even then his Defiant got cloned by Smiley), and were from anything from Constituition-classes to a Saber.

I was thinking a Intrepid-class named Defiant is lost and ends up in MLA, right in the middle of a losing battle where troops were evacuating citizens from somewhere in North Asia. In the confusion, the stragglers consisting of a mix of scared shitless, hardcore soldiers, TSF pilots and scientists, and one Ensign Takeru who miraculously survives the migration across timelines, get on the ship and get warped into high space. When they realize it, they are out of dilithium fuel (no warp drive), 70 light years from Earth, adrift with only impulse power. The story involves all original characters to minimize the impact on the MLA timeline, and covers how they first attempt to get home, and later decide to head to the BETA homeworld and hopefully make a big enough dent on it.

[John117xCortana]

Head to the BETA homeworld ? Are they nuts ?