2012-05-18, 08:16 | Link #31043 |
That one guy
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It gets worse... the anti-matter engine is only attatched to Byakushiki. Since the bus slots are already full, they could only squeeze in enough data for a reactor regulating program. So in effect, it's physically equipped but not really part of the Byakushiki so it can't be quantized. This is all good because the whole point was only for a demonstration that the engine could provide energy on level of an IS core and more.
Problem is... Byakushiki got really comfy with it. It undergoes a half-shift where it assimilates the engine... |
2012-05-18, 10:21 | Link #31047 |
I am no one
Join Date: Apr 2010
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@ Demi
So long as you portray it 'right'. Meaning Plot power + Common sense > Actual Science @ Stratos Hmm, I don't see any problem with anon review, other than you can't contact them back (as Box said)
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2012-05-19, 03:07 | Link #31050 |
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Same here. Need to refine the whole confrontation scene where Kanzashi tries to apologize for ditching Saito. Unlike the draft, he doesn't say "I forgive you" immediately. More like:
"I'm tired. Tired of....pretending we're a happy family. I do that enough back in our own time. Let's just.....forget this ever happened, okay mo-" He took a deep breath head and shook his head quickly. "....Kanzashi?"
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2012-05-19, 03:31 | Link #31052 |
I am no one
Join Date: Apr 2010
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The wording
I really, really want to use TP POV this time, but the more I think about what to write, the more I realize my stile making the characters emotionless, talking & living properties. OTOH if I use "Lemon" style narrative, it's a bit better, especially due to the comedic nature of the story. So I rewrite it again....
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2012-05-20, 02:30 | Link #31055 |
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Join Date: Apr 2011
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The Sky is no Limit got an update, I have to say his Substitute Stratos concept works really well.
Though I'm having a hard time imagining the Uchigane Hana-B's appearance based on his description.
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