Alright then here goes. please give your comments and criticisms
Spoiler:
Name: "Irish" (Given name is unknown)
Age: 14
Height: 5'1
Nationality: Unknown
Appearance: A short teenager with White hair (formerly black, turned white due to overuse of skull suit), sickly pale skin, yellow-brown eyes and a thin and androgynous body build.
Personality: In battle he is always focused on the task at hand and never lets his emotions dictate his actions (at least at first), outside of battle he is quiet and when he does talk he often says things in a blunt or direct manner,due to experiences in his past he is gynophobic and thus is both distrustful and fearful of females (the skull suit helps him calm his nerves in combat), because of his short and androgynous build he is easily angered when people call him "kid" or girly".
Short history: Irish's earliest memories are when he was seven years old and it was seeing an IS murder a man in front of him, due to injuries he received right before the IS killed the man (explain later in the story why he was injured) he doesn't remember anything from before he was that exact moment. After the IS kills the man it saw Irish was injured and took him with it, contrary to stories where the robot saves the kid the IS put him into a Concentration camp where he was forced to work and help build new IS units like an animal and act lower than a human being just to survive. Several months after a group of men came into the camp when security was the most lax and managed to sneak everyone out, the others thanked the men and left to start a new life but Irish, angry at what he's been through and having nowhere else to go, chooses to join the group (they named him "Irish" as a joke for him being short) and help him on their mission- To destroy the Infinite Stratos
Equipment: Due to being male he is forced to use modified equipment and conventional weaponry when fighting with the IS, he does however, possess unique equipment which give him an edge on the battlefield. the first is the 'Prototype skull suit' and the second is the 'Jammer knife'
1.Skull suit- The skull suit was an experimental pilot suit suit (but it doesn't look like a swimsuit, more like what Raiden from metal gear 2 wears) designed for improving the performance of an individual both inside the IS suit and out of it, it strengthens the muscles, eyesight, and reaction time of an individual which would then be carried over to the IS when equipped. Unfortunately they later found out that the improvements cause strain on the human body in addition to stunting hormone and muscle growth (explaining his short stature and androgynous appearance) which causes the wearer to experience intense muscle pains whenever the suit was in use, Irish's teammates found the suit during one of their raids and gave it to Irish upon returning, he wears the suit despite the side effects. To combat the pain received from the suit he takes painkillers on a daily basis which leads to his drug dependency and withdrawal symptoms if he isn't able to take the painkillers. In addition to the improved capabilities of the suit, it also defends the wearer from toxic materials and can function as a wetsuit if needed.
2.Jammer knife- The jammer knife is the other piece of equipment he relies on in close combat situations, when stabbed into machinery it can temporarily jam and possibly destroy them which helps him if an IS gets too close.
Abilities:
Strengths:"Irish" fights using stealth due to the fact that fighting an IS head-on with conventional weaponry is suicide even with the suit he wears, he usually snipes an enemy from afar (with the help of the suits enhanced vision) and uses the Jammer knife if they manage to get close. He also carries backup weapons such as Chaff grenades (grenades that can jam electricity and frequencies, useful for jamming an IS' radar and taking out its 360* vision) and any gun he manages to pick up. Due to being used to fighting against stacked odds he can also function as a strategist and mission support if needed.
Weaknesses:Unfortunately, without his gear Irish becomes near useless in a fight. Since his prolonged use of the skull suit stunted his muscle and hormone growth he is physically not that strong when not in use of the suit and due to his drug abuse he exhibits normal withdrawal symptoms such as cold sweats, vomiting etc (He's basically caught in a loop: if he doesn't take the painkillers the suit will cause him extreme pain, if he does take the painkillers then the suit will stop hurting him but he will have to take it on a regular basis. If he's not wearing the suit then he doesn't have to take the painkillers but without the suit protecting him he suffers the full burnt of the withdrawal symptoms). He also isn't very good in a close combat fight since he wasn't actually trained so a regular soldier or even Ichika with some kendo training can take him down pretty easily.
.....If my premonition as a troper is right, this OC is an Anti-Villain. You really want to put him in your current fic? What a mood whiplash! Sorta fit the title though...Well, I see the character is sorta counterpart of Laura.
From the profile, the character has potential, if not outright good. But in the end, it's up to how you put him in the story, if you think he's out of context (meaning a Child Soldier that DOESN'T act like a child soldier, then fix it).
I'm planning to have him and his teammates appear as the antagonists at chapter 3 before being beaten by Ichika and/or Kyuukai (they'll attack during the conference).
They'll be captured later on in the story and he'll be forced to work for the people who captured him or his teammates will possibly get killed, I'm planning to have him partner up with Tatenashi (her families organization fights behind the scenes, She's one of the strongest IS pilots, her abilities complement his because he's a long range sniper and tracker while Tatenashi's more of a frontline powerhouse and, of course, she's the type of girl that will piss him off and trigger his phobia the most considering how she acts) this is also when he'll shift from anti-villain to a more sympathetic anti-hero.
BTW here is about 45% of chapter 2, please read if you can and say if it needs any work, oh! and a cookie to anyone who can guess what Cecilia and Ichika are doing at the end
Spoiler:
“Speaking”
‘Thinking’
(Side comments)
Bolded words are what Ichika perceive as English
Location: Airport POV: Ichika Orimura
‘Ahh~ my legs are killing me, I can’t believe I didn’t notice that I could’ve just stood up while Chifuyu-nee was asleep’ I thought as I cursed my stupidity.
“Orimura, quit slacking off and hurry up” I heard a voice from the entrance yell at me
“Yes Orimura-sensei” I say to myself in a dejected tone
Walking towards the entrance, I suddenly felt the need to go to the restroom and quickly made my way there.
‘Got to go to the bath- hey what’re they doing?’
In front of me I saw three guys and two girls standing in the hallway to the girls bathroom, it looks like the guys are talking to the girls.
“You girls are from that IS academy right? Wanna hang out with us for a while?” A beefy brunette said with a cocky smile.
‘Are those guys hitting on the girls? It’s kinda hard to tell since they’re saying it in English’
“Come on, why don’t you ditch the snooze fest and come with us?” A blonde man with black sunglasses said as he leaned towards the girls.
“Yeah yeah, let’s go have fun somewhere else” Another guy said with a lecherous grin on his face.
‘I guess they are. Well that’s not really surprising nowadays, male social standing has hit the all time low with the IS’ introduction to the world so being friends with someone can use the IS would be useful I guess’
“W-We’re really sorry but were on a field trip so we’ll have to say no” A girl with light blue hair (she can speak English?) said while bowing in an apologetic manner.
‘Since the IS was released schools specifically designed to train potential IS pilots have been popping up all over the world, males and females tend to be separated after elementary school since males can’t pilot the IS and don’t have to be trained (present company excluded). As a result girls tend to have no experience with guys and are either shy or overly proud, guess those guys are out of luck.
“Huh, why not? A stupid field trip is nothing to some fun in the city” The blonde haired man said in a cocky voice.
“We’ll just have to take your word for it sir, now please, we really have to-“
Before the girl could finish her sentence the beefy brunette had grabbed her hand and tried to pull her away.
“Hey! Let go of my friend” The other girl who had stayed quiet so far suddenly screamed out
“Come on, you’ll have a good time with us, won’t they boys?” The brunette “asked” the other two men present.
‘That’s going too far!’
Walking quickly towards them I grabbed the Brunette mans arm before he could pull the frightened girl away.
“Ichika-san!” The girl said in a surprised tone.
“Get out of here, both of you, I’ll deal with these guys”
“But-“
“Just go!”
Taking my advice the two girls immediately ran to the airport exit.
‘Now, having said that, I have no idea what I’m going to do right now’
“What the hell was that for? We were just gonna take those girls for a little tour” the man whose arm I was holding said in an angry tone
“Hey, the girl said NO!”
Glaring at me, the man pulled his hand from my grip before he started talking again.
“What the hell did you say? Whatever it is, it sounds insulting”
‘I forgot, they probably can’t understand Japanese’
“Hey! He’s wearing the same uniforms as those girls, he’s that guy that was on the news a few months back” The one with the lecherous grin from earlier said in a surprised tone.
“You mean the one who can use an IS? He doesn’t look so though” The blonde guy remarked.
“ Yeah, let’s take him down then get back to those girls” The brunette (he seems to be the leader) said as he cracked his fists.
‘This is bad! I can’t take them at the same time, I need to even the odds a bit”
“INFINITE STRATOS! SUMMON!”
Acting on the spur of the moment, I (Hopefully in english) yelled out in a “Super Sentai” like voice while doing a pose.
“BWAAH~ HE’S GONNA SUMMON HIS IS! IM OUT OF HERE!” The blonde one said as he ran away in fear.
“YEAH MAN! THIS AINT WORTH IT! IM OUT TOO!” The third man said as he also ran.
“HEY! HE JUST BULLSHITTING! COME BACK YOU IDIOTS!” The brunette yelled at the other two men.
Not believing or not hearing the brunette’s cries, the other two men ran away and got lost in the crowd.
‘Okay that worked way better than I expected, that’s two down and one to go!’
Before I could think of another plan the angry brunette grabbed me by the throat and held me up like a rag doll.
“I guess its just you and me now IS boy, Come on! Let’s see what you got”
Tightening his grip on my neck, I felt him trying to squeeze the air out of my lungs and myself losing breath.
‘Not good, need to get out of this FAST!’
Forcing myself to stay conscious, I managed to raise my right fist and smack him
in the face as hard as I can.
“You little bastard!”
Tightening his hold on my throat even more, I started seeing black and my vision fading.
‘Damn it? Is there nothing I can do?’
“What’s going on here!”
Hearing the loud voice behind him, the large man let go of me and immediately turned around.
Lying sprawled out on the floor, coughing, and barely aware of my surroundings. I almost missed the conversation going on right in front of me.
‘Wait a minute…that voice?’
“What do you want? Can’t you see I’m busy here”
“I’d like to know what your doing to that young man”
‘CHIFUYU-NEE!’ “Just teaching him a lesson, why, what’s it to you?”
“He happens to be one of my students, so I’ll be taking him back now”
‘Chifuyu-nee, get out of here!’
“I don’t think so lady, this little punk pissed me off and he’s gonna get what’s coming to him”
“I’ll make sure to punish him heavily for choosing to get involved with scum like you, you can be sure of that. Now I’ll say it again, I’ll be taking him back now”
‘P-Punish!?’
“WHAT DID YOU CALL ME!”
“Oh? Do I have to repeat myself ”
“YOU COCKY BITCH!”
With an angry roar, the beefy man charged at Chifuyu-nee like some kind of raging bull.
“Honestly, I wanted to solve this peacefully”
Looking bored despite the situation. Chifuyu-nee lazily sidestepped the man’s charge, grabbed his arm and held it behind his back in a locking position.
“Now do you understand what I’m saying?”
“Y-YES! I UNDERSTAND! NOW LET ME GO!”
It seems he’s given up trying to beat me up.
“Not yet, you still have to do one thing”
“W-What’s that?”
Turning him around by the arm she made him face towards me who’s still lying on the floor coughing.
“Apologize to him”
“Why hell should I!? He was the one wh- AAAAAAAGGGGGHHHHHHHHH”
*Crack*
Twisting the man’s arm in a painful manner, she spoke her next words in a slow, deliberate manner.
“It wasn’t a request”
“ALRIGHT!ALRIGHT! IM SORRY KID!”
The screaming abruptly stopped as she let go of his arm and kicked him in the back towards the airport security (where did they come from?).
“That’s all we need then, take him away officers”
Turning back towards me. She helped me stand up and patted me on the back until I stopped coughing. After feeling my voice come back I tried to thank her for her rescue.
“T-Thanks for the help Chif-“
*Smack*
“THAT, is for getting yourself in trouble AGAIN” she said in a quiet tone
*Smack*
“THAT, is for causing me to worry” she said in an even quieter tone
‘Ow! She’s really merciless’
“And THIS” she said as her voice became a barely audible whisper.
Closing my eyes, I prepared myself for the third smack.
“Is for being a brave young man”
‘Huh’
Opening my eyes I noticed that she put her arms around my neck and held me close to her.
‘What’s happening? Am I dreaming? Why is she hugging me?’
Unfortunately I couldn’t find the answer to those questions as she quickly let me go and started leading me back to the entrance.
‘W-Wait Chifuyu-nee, how did you know I was here?”
“Two girls came running up to the entrance and started yelling something about you being in trouble”
“T-They did huh”
‘Guess I got lucky then, didn’t I?’ I thought as I sighed in relief
“Be careful Ichika, I wouldn’t relax just yet if I were you”
‘Huh? How come?”
“I did say they were yelling, didn’t I? I wasn’t the only one who heard”
‘Huh? What does that mea-“
“ICHIKA!”
“ICHIKA-SAN!”
Before I could react I felt myself being tackled painfully to the ground and being pinned by three bodies to the airport floor.
“Why did you do that? Are you an idiot” an angry childlike voice said.
‘Rin?’
“Honestly, this wouldn’t have happened if you took your kendo training seriously” a voice dripping with disapproval remarked.
‘Houki?’
“It’s my fault, I should’ve kept a closer eye on you” a sad voice said softly.
‘Cecilia-san’
Taking a few seconds to catch my breath, I notice Houki, Rin, and Cecilia-san all looking at me with worried expressions.
“D-Don’t worry about me you three, Chifuyu-nee saved me and I didn’t get hurt” I said trying to reassure them
They all looked like they wanted to say something else but Chifuyu-nee made an announcement before they could start.
“Alright that’s enough, we can continue this conversation at the bus, we’ve wasted enough time here”
Time skip: 20 minutes later Location: Bus
Me and Houki were seated together at the back of the bus, Cecilia and Rin got seated together towards the front (They didn’t look too happy about it for some reason), it’s been 20 minutes since the start of the bus ride and Houki hasn’t said a word.
‘Why’s she being so quiet? Usually she’d be telling me about our next kendo session or something’
“You’re a bad liar Ichika” Houki suddenly remarked.
“What are you talking about Houki? ”
“You really did get hurt didn’t you?”
“Like I said, Chifuyu-nee saved me before anything could happen”
“There are bruises all over your neck you know” she said as she pointed towards my neck.
‘What! There are?’
Putting my hands up to touch my neck, I flinched at the sore feeling around my throat area.
‘How come I didn’t notice earlier?’
“It’s not a big deal, really, I’m used to getting hit you know”
“What do you mean you’re used to getting hit!?” Houki suddenly yelled in an outraged voice.
“W-Well, you do hit me a bunch of times when something awkward happens or when I have an accident or something” I said trying to stop her yelling.
…
Houki stopped talking and just looked down at the floor in front of her.
‘M-Maybe that was the wrong thing to say’
“…Did you really get hurt by those hits like you did today?”
“H-Hey Houki, I didn’t mean it th-“
“U-Um, e-e-excuse me” A soft voice said before I could finish trying to apologize.
Looking to my right I noticed a girl standing nervously and fidgeting in place, she seemed to be trying to say something but I couldn’t hear because her voice was really soft.
“Uh, yes, what is it?” I say in a slightly anxious tone as I stand up to talk to her.
“I-I-I j-just want to t-thank you for h-helping me and my f-friend earlier” She said in a nervous tone.
‘Her and her friend? She must be the girl from earlier, funny I didn’t notice that earlier’
“Oh it was nothing, Chifu- I mean Orimura-sensei was the one who did all the work, I just distracted them for a bit that’s all”
“Y-You were still the o-o-one who saved us so I’d like to-AHHH!”
The bus suddenly hit a bump on the road and the girl, unfortunately, had not held onto anything and fell right towards me.
*Crash*
I’m on the floor again, and this time I have somebody on top of me (that sounded wrong).
‘I’m spending a lot of time on the floor today aren’t I? Hm? what’s this soft feeling on my hands?’
*Squeeze*
“K-KYAAAAH!”
‘I have a bad feeling about this’
“L-LET GO OF MY CHEST!”
I suddenly feel something hitting me painfully hard on the face before I see the girl running back to her seat.
“Hey! Did you see that?”
“Orimura-kun DOES have urges”
“WE HAVE A CHANCE!”
Girls suddenly started talking with each other while pointing at me who’s still sprawled out on the floor.
‘Why does do these things always happen to me’
“Everybody quiet down now!” I heard a voice from the front of the bus yell.
“Yes Orimura-sensei” all the girls said
Chifuyu-nee suddenly appeared in front of me and helped me up from the floor.
“You never stop getting in trouble, do you Orimura? I’d advise you to be careful though”
“Why? Who was that girl?”
“She’s Saranshiki Kanzashi, the little sister of the student council president, and she’s very protective of her, so you better go to sleep with one night open from now on” she said with genuine concern in her voice.
‘I hate my life’
Time skip: 2 hours later Time: 6:30 pm Location: Hotel lobby
“Alright class, listen up. We’ll be staying here for a duration of 4 days and 3 nights, we start the registration for the conference meeting tomorrow at noon so make sure to wake up and prepare before then, that is all, now go to your rooms" Chifuyu-nee announced to the class.
Following her advice I made my way to the elevator and hit the button for the 19th floor.
‘Room 1907 huh, I wonder who my roommate is? They said I had to partner with a girl but what are the chances it’s someone I know’
Stepping out of the elevator, I made my way for the room designated in my card.
‘You just slide the card in, and it opens the door automatically right? Well, here goes’
Reaching into my pocket, I pull out my keycard, place it on the card reader, and make my way inside.
POV: Chifuyu Orimura
Looking up from the bed I’m resting on, I notice my brother entering the room, he suddenly stopped and stared at me.
‘Seems surprised to see me, he was probably expecting someone else’
“Chifuyu-nee! You’re my roommate?”
“Well, what did you expect? That they’d let you room with another girl after what happened at the dorms? It was either me or Yamada-sensei’
“Well, at least now it won’t be awkward” he said as he went to the second bed and collapsed into it.
Standing up I make my way for the door.
“Huh? Chifuyu-nee, where are you going?’
“I’m going to the lounge and go drinking with Yamada-kun. I’ll be back later tonight, will you be alright by yourself?”
“Yeah, Cecilia-san will be here later and help me with something for the demo, don’t worry it’ll be just the two of us”
‘That’s exactly what I’m worried about, I wonder if it’s too much to hope that nothing will happen tonight?’
“Alright then, I’ll see you later Ichika”
Location: Hotel Bar
“Ahh~ what a tiring day”
“Are you alright Orimura-sensei?”
“I’m fine Yamada-kun, just have some jetlag, that’s all”
“Alright then, be careful though, you can’t be too drunk because we have to wake up before noon”
“I’ll keep that in mind, thanks”
Contrary to my words, I kept drinking more of the alcohol that was placed in front of me
“Is Orimura-kun ready for his demo?”
“He’s practicing for it right now, he told me that Alcott’s helping him with it”
“Y-You mean they’re alone in your room right now!” She suddenly yelled out.
“Yeah? What’s your point?”
“A-A-Aren’t you worried about what could happen! A b-boy and a g-girl, all alone in a room”
“You really need to stop reading those ero manga you confiscate from the girls”
“E-Ero Manga! I don’t read those!”
‘Yeah right’
“Besides, she wont try anything if she knows what’s good for her” I said as I took another shot of alcohol.
‘At least I hope so’
POV: Ichika Orimura Location: Hotel toom
“You have to try HARDER Ichika-san”
“I-I know that, but this is my first time doing this kind of thing you know”
“What? But everyone in school has done it at least once, myself included”
“It’s harder than I thought it would be alright!”
“You can’t give up Ichika-san, I’m sure Dunoa’s representative has done something as simple as this multiple times
as well, you cant lose to him!”
‘I didn’t think this was a competition, might as well try my best either way’
“Maybe I should call Rin, I do see her doing this a lot”
“Why? Am I not enough Ichika-san?”
“No! I’m not saying you’re a bad teacher or anything, I just see her doing it a lot more than you do, that’s all”
“Honestly Ichika-san, it isn’t that hard, you just have to know when to flex your fingers. You’re a beginner so you can move your arms up and down if you want”
After three minutes of thrusting my arms up and down nothing had changed.
“Argh! This is so annoying, it really won’t come out no matter what I do”
“Calm down Ichika-san, just imagine something white and it’ll be out before you know it”
“Yeah, I guess your right Cecilia-san”
Thrusting my arms up and down yet again I imagine a white empty space and before I knew it I felt something make contact with my hand.
“I DID IT!”
“See, I knew you could do it Ichika-san. Now try practicing without moving your hands, remember, flex your fingers”
Last edited by Eratas123; 2011-09-10 at 09:18.
Reason: made a misstype
I'm planning to have him and his teammates appear as the antagonists at chapter 3 before being beaten by Ichika and/or Kyuukai (they'll attack during the conference).
They'll be captured later on in the story and he'll be forced to work for the people who captured him or his teammates will possibly get killed, I'm planning to have him partner up with Tatenashi (her families organization fights behind the scenes, She's one of the strongest IS pilots, her abilities complement his because he's a long range sniper and tracker while Tatenashi's more of a frontline powerhouse and, of course, she's the type of girl that will piss him off and trigger his phobia the most considering how she acts) this is also when he'll shift from anti-villain to a more sympathetic anti-hero.
BTW here is about 45% of chapter 2, please read if you can and say if it needs any work, oh! and a cookie to anyone who can guess what Cecilia and Ichika are doing at the end
Spoiler:
“Speaking”
‘Thinking’
(Side comments)
Bolded words are what Ichika perceive as English
Location: Airport
POV: Ichika Orimura ‘Ahh~ my legs are killing me, I can’t believe I didn’t notice that I could’ve just stood up while Chifuyu-nee was asleep’ I thought as I cursed my stupidity.
“Orimura, quit slacking off and hurry up” I heard a voice from the entrance yell at me
“Yes Orimura-sensei” I say to myself in a dejected tone
Walking towards the entrance, I suddenly felt the need to go to the restroom and quickly made my way there. ‘Got to go to the bath- hey what’re they doing?’
In front of me I saw three guys and two girls standing in the hallway to the girls bathroom, it looks like the guys are talking to the girls. “You girls are from that IS academy right? Wanna hang out with us for a while?” A beefy brunette said with a cocky smile. ‘Are those guys hitting on the girls? It’s kinda hard to tell since they’re saying it in English’ “Come on, why don’t you ditch the snooze fest and come with us?” A blonde man with black sunglasses said as he leaned towards the girls. “Yeah yeah, let’s go have fun somewhere else” Another guy said with a lecherous grin on his face. ‘I guess they are. Well that’s not really surprising nowadays, male social standing has hit the all time low with the IS’ introduction to the world so being friends with someone can use the IS would be useful I guess’ “W-We’re really sorry but were on a field trip so we’ll have to say no” A girl with light blue hair (she can speak English?) said while bowing in an apologetic manner. ‘Since the IS was released schools specifically designed to train potential IS pilots have been popping up all over the world, males and females tend to be separated after elementary school since males can’t pilot the IS and don’t have to be trained (present company excluded). As a result girls tend to have no experience with guys and are either shy or overly proud, guess those guys are out of luck. “Huh, why not? A stupid field trip is nothing to some fun in the city” The blonde haired man said in a cocky voice.
“We’ll just have to take your word for it sir, now please, we really have to-“
Before the girl could finish her sentence the beefy brunette had grabbed her hand and tried to pull her away. “Hey! Let go of my friend” The other girl who had stayed quiet so far suddenly screamed out “Come on, you’ll have a good time with us, won’t they boys?” The brunette “asked” the other two men present. ‘That’s going too far!’
Walking quickly towards them I grabbed the Brunette mans arm before he could pull the frightened girl away.
“Ichika-san!” The girl said in a surprised tone.
“Get out of here, both of you, I’ll deal with these guys”
“But-“
“Just go!”
Taking my advice the two girls immediately ran to the airport exit.
‘Now, having said that, I have no idea what I’m going to do right now’ “What the hell was that for? We were just gonna take those girls for a little tour” the man whose arm I was holding said in an angry tone
“Hey, the girl said NO!”
Glaring at me, the man pulled his hand from my grip before he started talking again. “What the hell did you say? Whatever it is, it sounds insulting”
‘I forgot, they probably can’t understand Japanese’ “Hey! He’s wearing the same uniforms as those girls, he’s that guy that was on the news a few months back” The one with the lecherous grin from earlier said in a surprised tone. “You mean the one who can use an IS? He doesn’t look so though” The blonde guy remarked. “ Yeah, let’s take him down then get back to those girls” The brunette (he seems to be the leader) said as he cracked his fists. ‘This is bad! I can’t take them at the same time, I need to even the odds a bit” “INFINITE STRATOS! SUMMON!”
Acting on the spur of the moment, I (Hopefully in english) yelled out in a “Super Sentai” like voice while doing a pose. “BWAAH~ HE’S GONNA SUMMON HIS IS! IM OUT OF HERE!” The blonde one said as he ran away in fear. “YEAH MAN! THIS AINT WORTH IT! IM OUT TOO!” The third man said as he also ran. “HEY! HE JUST BULLSHITTING! COME BACK YOU IDIOTS!” The brunette yelled at the other two men.
Not believing or not hearing the brunette’s cries, the other two men ran away and got lost in the crowd.
‘Okay that worked way better than I expected, that’s two down and one to go!’
Before I could think of another plan the angry brunette grabbed me by the throat and held me up like a rag doll. “I guess its just you and me now IS boy, Come on! Let’s see what you got”
Tightening his grip on my neck, I felt him trying to squeeze the air out of my lungs and myself losing breath. ‘Not good, need to get out of this FAST!’
Forcing myself to stay conscious, I managed to raise my right fist and smack him
in the face as hard as I can. “You little bastard!”
Tightening his hold on my throat even more, I started seeing black and my vision fading. ‘Damn it? Is there nothing I can do?’ “What’s going on here!”
Hearing the loud voice behind him, the large man let go of me and immediately turned around.
Lying sprawled out on the floor, coughing, and barely aware of my surroundings. I almost missed the conversation going on right in front of me.
‘Wait a minute…that voice?’ “What do you want? Can’t you see I’m busy here” “I’d like to know what your doing to that young man”
‘CHIFUYU-NEE!’ “Just teaching him a lesson, why, what’s it to you?” “He happens to be one of my students, so I’ll be taking him back now” ‘Chifuyu-nee, get out of here!’ “I don’t think so lady, this little punk pissed me off and he’s gonna get what’s coming to him” “I’ll make sure to punish him heavily for choosing to get involved with scum like you, you can be sure of that. Now I’ll say it again, I’ll be taking him back now” ‘P-Punish!?’ “WHAT DID YOU CALL ME!” “Oh? Do I have to repeat myself ” “YOU COCKY BITCH!”
With an angry roar, the beefy man charged at Chifuyu-nee like some kind of raging bull. “Honestly, I wanted to solve this peacefully”
Looking bored despite the situation. Chifuyu-nee lazily sidestepped the man’s charge, grabbed his arm and held it behind his back in a locking position. “Now do you understand what I’m saying?” “Y-YES! I UNDERSTAND! NOW LET ME GO!”
It seems he’s given up trying to beat me up. “Not yet, you still have to do one thing” “W-What’s that?”
Turning him around by the arm she made him face towards me who’s still lying on the floor coughing. “Apologize to him” “Why hell should I!? He was the one wh- AAAAAAAGGGGGHHHHHHHHH”
*Crack*
Twisting the man’s arm in a painful manner, she spoke her next words in a slow, deliberate manner. “It wasn’t a request” “ALRIGHT!ALRIGHT! IM SORRY KID!”
The screaming abruptly stopped as she let go of his arm and kicked him in the back towards the airport security (where did they come from?). “That’s all we need then, take him away officers”
Turning back towards me. She helped me stand up and patted me on the back until I stopped coughing. After feeling my voice come back I tried to thank her for her rescue.
“T-Thanks for the help Chif-“
*Smack*
“THAT, is for getting yourself in trouble AGAIN” she said in a quiet tone
*Smack*
“THAT, is for not causing me to worry” she said in an even quieter tone ‘Ow! She’s really merciless’
“And THIS” she said as her voice became a barely audible whisper.
Closing my eyes, I prepared myself for the third smack.
“Is for being a brave young man” ‘Huh’
Opening my eyes I noticed that she put her arms around my neck and held me close to her.
‘What’s happening? Am I dreaming? Why is she hugging me?’
Unfortunately I couldn’t find the answer to those questions as she quickly let me go and started leading me back to the entrance.
‘W-Wait Chifuyu-nee, how did you know I was here?”
“Two girls came running up to the entrance and started yelling something about you being in trouble”
“T-They did huh” ‘Guess I got lucky then, didn’t I?’ I thought as I sighed in relief
“Be careful Ichika, I wouldn’t relax just yet if I were you”
‘Huh? How come?”
“I did say they were yelling, didn’t I? I wasn’t the only one who heard”
‘Huh? What does that mea-“
“ICHIKA!”
“ICHIKA-SAN!”
Before I could react I felt myself being tackled painfully to the ground and being pinned by three bodies to the airport floor.
“Why did you do that? Are you an idiot” an angry childlike voice said. ‘Rin?’
“Honestly, this wouldn’t have happened if you took your kendo training seriously” a voice dripping with disapproval remarked.
‘Houki?’
“It’s my fault, I should’ve kept a closer eye on you” a sad voice said softly. ‘Cecilia-san’
Taking a few seconds to catch my breath, I notice Houki, Rin, and Cecilia-san all looking at me with worried expressions.
“D-Don’t worry about me you three, Chifuyu-nee saved me and I didn’t get hurt” I said trying to reassure them
They all looked like they wanted to say something else but Chifuyu-nee made an announcement before they could start.
“Alright that’s enough, we can continue this conversation at the bus, we’ve wasted enough time here”
Time skip: 20 minutes later
Location: Bus
Me and Houki were seated together at the back of the bus, Cecilia and Rin got seated together towards the front (They didn’t look too happy about it for some reason), it’s been 20 minutes since the start of the bus ride and Houki hasn’t said a word. ‘Why’s she being so quiet? Usually she’d be telling me about our next kendo session or something’
“You’re a bad liar Ichika” Houki suddenly remarked.
“What are you talking about Houki? ”
“You really did get hurt didn’t you?”
“Like I said, Chifuyu-nee saved me before anything could happen”
“There are bruises all over your neck you know” she said as she pointed towards my neck.
‘What! There are?’
Putting my hands up to touch my neck, I flinched at the sore feeling around my throat area. ‘How come I didn’t notice earlier?’
“It’s not a big deal, really, I’m used to getting hit you know”
“What do you mean you’re used to getting hit!?” Houki suddenly yelled in an outraged voice.
“W-Well, you do hit me a bunch of times when something awkward happens or when I have an accident or something” I said trying to stop her yelling.
…
Houki stopped talking and just looked down at the floor in front of her. ‘M-Maybe that was the wrong thing to say’
“…Did you really get hurt by those hits like you did today?”
“H-Hey Houki, I didn’t mean it th-“
“U-Um, e-e-excuse me” A soft voice said before I could finish trying to apologize.
Looking to my right I noticed a girl standing nervously and fidgeting in place, she seemed to be trying to say something but I couldn’t hear because her voice was really soft.
“Uh, yes, what is it?” I say in a slightly anxious tone as I stand up to talk to her.
“I-I-I j-just want to t-thank you for h-helping me and my f-friend earlier” She said in a nervous tone. ‘Her and her friend? She must be the girl from earlier, funny I didn’t notice that earlier’
“Oh it was nothing, Chifu- I mean Orimura-sensei was the one who did all the work, I just distracted them for a bit that’s all”
“Y-You were still the o-o-one who saved us so I’d like to-AHHH!”
The bus suddenly hit a bump on the road and the girl, unfortunately, had not held onto anything and fell right towards me.
*Crash*
I’m on the floor again, and this time I have somebody on top of me (that sounded wrong). ‘I’m spending a lot of time on the floor today aren’t I? Hm? what’s this soft feeling on my hands?’
*Squeeze*
“K-KYAAAAH!” ‘I have a bad feeling about this’
“L-LET GO OF MY CHEST!”
I suddenly feel something hitting me painfully hard on the face before I see the girl running back to her seat.
“Hey! Did you see that?”
“Orimura-kun DOES have urges”
“WE HAVE A CHANCE!”
Girls suddenly started talking with each other while pointing at me who’s still sprawled out on the floor. ‘Why does do these things always happen to me’
“Everybody quiet down now!” I heard a voice from the front of the bus yell.
“Yes Orimura-sensei” all the girls said
Chifuyu-nee suddenly appeared in front of me and helped me up from the floor.
“You never stop getting in trouble, do you Orimura? I’d advise you to be careful though”
“Why? Who was that girl?”
“She’s Saranshiki Kanzashi, the little sister of the student council president, and she’s very protective of her, so you better go to sleep with one night open from now on” she said with genuine concern in her voice. ‘I hate my life’ Time skip: 2 hours later Time: 6:30 pm Location: Hotel lobby
“Alright class, listen up. We’ll be staying here for a duration of 4 days and 3 nights, we start the registration for the conference meeting tomorrow at noon so make sure to wake up and prepare before then, that is all, now go to your rooms. Chifuyu-nee announced to the class.
Following her advice I made my way to the elevator and hit the button for the 19th floor. ‘Room 1907 huh, I wonder who my roommate is? They said I had to partner with a girl but what are the chances it’s someone I know’
Stepping out of the elevator, I made my way for the room designated in my card. ‘You just slide the card in, and it opens the door automatically right? Well, here goes’
Reaching into my pocket, I pull out my keycard, place it on the card reader, and make my way inside. POV: Chifuyu Orimura
Looking up from the bed I’m resting on, I notice my brother entering the room, he suddenly stopped and stared at me. ‘Seems surprised to see me, he was probably expecting someone else’
“Chifuyu-nee! You’re my roommate?”
“Well, what did you expect? That they’d let you room with another girl after what happened at the dorms? It was either me or Yamada-sensei’
“Well, at least now it won’t be awkward” he said as he went to the second bed and collapsed into it.
Standing up I make my way for the door.
“Huh? Chifuyu-nee, where are you going?’
“I’m going to the lounge and go drinking with Yamada-kun. I’ll be back later tonight, will you be alright by yourself?”
“Yeah, Cecilia-san will be here later and help me with something for the demo, don’t worry it’ll be just the two of us” ‘That’s exactly what I’m worried about, I wonder if it’s too much to hope that nothing will happen tonight?’
“Alright then, I’ll see you later Ichika”
Location: Hotel Bar
“Ahh~ what a tiring day”
“Are you alright Orimura-sensei?”
“I’m fine Yamada-kun, just have some jetlag, that’s all”
“Alright then, be careful though, you can’t be too drunk because we have to wake up before noon”
“I’ll keep that in mind, thanks”
Contrary to my words, I kept drinking more of the alcohol that was placed in front of me
“Is Orimura-kun ready for his demo?”
“He’s practicing for it right now, he told me that Alcott’s helping him with it”
“Y-You mean they’re alone in your room right now!” She suddenly yelled out.
“Yeah? What’s your point?”
“A-A-Aren’t you worried about what could happen! A b-boy and a g-girl, all alone in a room”
“You really need to stop reading those ero manga you confiscate from the girls”
“E-Ero Manga! I don’t read those!”
‘Yeah right’
“Besides, she wont try anything if she knows what’s good for her” I said as I took another shot of alcohol. ‘At least I hope so’ POV: Ichika Orimura Location: Hotel toom
“You have to try HARDER Ichika-san”
“I-I know that, but this is my first time doing this kind of thing you know”
“What? But everyone in school has done it at least once, myself included”
“It’s harder than I thought it would be alright!”
“You can’t give up Ichika-san, I’m sure Dunoa’s representative has done something as simple as this multiple times as well, you cant lose to him!”
‘I didn’t think this was a competition, might as well try my best either way’
“Maybe I should call Rin, I do see her doing this a lot”
“Why? Am I not enough Ichika-san?”
“No! I’m not saying you’re a bad teacher or anything, I just see her doing it a lot more than you do, that’s all”
“Honestly Ichika-san, it isn’t that hard, you just have to know when to flex your fingers. You’re a beginner so you can move your arms up and down if you want”
After three minutes of thrusting my arms up and down nothing had changed.
“Argh! This is so annoying, it really won’t come out no matter what I do”
“Calm down Ichika-san, just imagine something white and it’ll be out before you know it”
“Yeah, I guess your right Cecilia-san”
Thrusting my arms up and down yet again I imagine a white empty space and before I knew it I felt something make contact with my hand.
“I DID IT!”
“See, I knew you could do it Ichika-san. Now try practicing without moving your hands, remember, flex your fingers”
PRESS ENTER TO ADD SPACE, MAN! It's a frakking walk of text.
Use a distinct border to separate author commentaries/ explanation and story.
Outside that, DAMN IT IT"S FUNNY!! THE LAST PART IS VERY FREUDIAN!! BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHA!!!!!
Sorry about that, it is spaced in my save file but I forgot to do it when I copy pasted, I'll edit it and add some spaces right after this message
Do you think its okay, is there anything that needs changing?
Do you think making "Irish" and Tatenashi partner up is a bad idea? pairing an OC with a Canon sue will be hard but they're the ones who are the most opposites and the best way to put comedy in a serious situation is making two complete opposites cooperate with each other.
BTW did you figure out what they were doing at the end?
EDIT: Finished adding spaces, should be easier for you to read now.
@ Detective-san Tip: It's part of the IS training.
@MeisteirBabylon- Good luck with your Infinite Stratos grimdark fic, looking forward to it, please try to avoid Marty stu characters
I'm trying to make my character a bit of a 'deconstruction' of the badass normal since the equipment he wears decays his health to the point that he needs drugs to fight and the fact that he's near useless without the suit or equipment.
Sorry about that, it is spaced in my save file but I forgot to do it when I copy pasted, I'll edit it and add some spaces right after this message
Do you think its okay, is there anything that needs changing?
Do you think making "Irish" and Tatenashi partner up is a bad idea? pairing an OC with a Canon sue will be hard but they're the ones who are the most opposites and the best way to put comedy in a serious situation is making two complete opposites cooperate with each other.
BTW did you figure out what they were doing at the end?
EDIT: Finished adding spaces, should be easier for you to read now.
Not exactly hard, it's EXTREMELY hard, that Tatenashi is fandom's favorite darkhorse (which by I mean, a girl not included in Ichika's harem yet very, very popular). But if you done Irish right according to his profile, he might be good as Tatenashi's boyfriend/boytoy combo (for comedy reason), even moreso than Ichika does.
By the way, are you're friends with Ethernal Rain? Because I'm damn sure you mentioned Kyuukai (HotM).
Meister, good to see you again, I want to see that GRIMDARK fic of yours.
Sorta, I asked him if I could use his OC's for my fanfic and he agreed as long as I give him credit for them and portray them correctly.
I also told him the plot summary of my entire fic and he asked if he could help me by beta reading my story, I accepted
Oh, I plan to have Tatenashi both piss him off and try to help him get over his trauma's over the course of the story.
Should I post the plot summary here in a post?
I'm planning to take a darker turn of the Infinite Stratos canon and have the IS be used by multiple corporations or countries (cant decide) for a power struggle behind the scenes and Ichika is a primary target of multiple organizations because of his IS capabilities and they wanna take him and experiment on him.
The harem and humor aspect is still present in the fic but I'll have the girls past have more adverse effects on their personality; the biggest change will be to Charlotte and Laura since they'll act darker on this fic compared to their canon counterparts. Charlotte will be more meek and mentally scarred( due to the physical and mental abuse she receives from her home) and Laura will be more cold and pragmatic (due to her past as a child soldier) and will take longer to defrost.
I'm going to use three main point of views to show the different parts of the main story.
I plan to have the story center around Ichika and the main cast, but there will be three primary conflicts.
1. Ichika's fight against phantom task,his origins which will explain how he can use the IS at all,the multiple organizations trying to dissect him for his DNA and of course the romance, which will be Harem based.
2. Kyuukai's (EthernalRain's OC) fight against the multiple corporations/organiations trying to destabilize the current treaty being held, he will have to go all over the world and prevent the conflict before it escalates. The romance will be with Laura and a big chunk of it will be him trying to rehabilitate Laura and make her more of a person and less of a killing machine.
3. "Irish's" (My OC) story will start with him in a terrorist group hoping to destroy the IS due to bad experiences in the past, he'll be captured by FRACTURE shortly into the story and be blackmailed/coerced into working for them. His story will deal with him and his partner (Tatenashi) trying to stop the possible duplication of the IS cores which will shift the balance of power and cause worldwide conflict. Romance I'm not so sure yet because he will be gynophobic due to past experiences and I'm not sure how a romance with somebody who's afraid of girls will work.
Two possible drafts for later
Draft 1
Spoiler:
POV:"Irish" Location:Room 1059, IS Academy
Lying down on the bed, I do nothing but stare up at the ceiling as time passes by.
'What am I doing here? I know we're supposed to partner up but why the hell am I sharing a room with her and in this academy of all places'
"Hey hey Irish-kun, up and at them" I hear my "partner" say as she enters the room.
"..."
"Still giving me the silent treatment huh?"
"...Tell me one thing"
"Hm?"
"Why am I here? we're partners, not friends, why do I have to stay with you in this damned academy?"
"Well, I didn't want to have to pick you up from a prison cell whenever we have a mission"
"..."
Deciding I couldn't get anything more out of her, I turned to the left and turn my back towards her
'I better gather all the data I can on her during our missions, she'll probably be an enemy later on'
"Hey, are you listening to me?" she said loudly next to my ear.
"SHIT!"
Nearly getting a heart attack, I jump off the bed and turn to face her.
'How the hell did she sneak up on me?'
"I was just asking if you were listening to me, why'd you act so scared?"
'Damn it, I don't have the suit to calm me down,wait! "why'd you act so scared?". She doesn't know about my gynophobia! I need to make sure she doesn't find out then'
"...Just surprised that's all"
"Well, I said I'm gonna go shopping"
"Have fun then"
Without another word I make my back to the bed and lie down on it
"You're coming with me" She suddenly said.
"Like hell I am! Like I said I'm your partner, not your friend. Last time I checked, partners don't go shopping together"
"You don't have a choice. I promised the commander I'd keep an eye on you when I asked you to be transferred here, now get up"
"No"
"No choice then" She said as she grabbed my legs and tried to pull me off the bed.
Acting like an immature child I immediately grabbed the beds railing and held on as hard as I could.
"C'mon, I'll get in trouble if you don't go with me!"
"I don't care, now let me go"
"Alright then you asked for it!"
She let go of my legs and tackled me while I was on the bed"
"Get off me!"
She didn't seem to acknowledge my reply as she proceeded to put her arms at my side.
"Last ditch resort"
She then proceeded to start tickling my sides.
"Ahaha-let-ahahaha-go-ahahahahah!"
"Will you go with me now?" she said as she continued the onslaught.
"Ahahaha-ALR-hahaha-IGHT!"
"See, that wasn't so hard was it?
'You win this round'[/I]
"Onee-chan"
Looking to the side I saw a girl with glasses and light blue hair standing at the doorway looking at us in shock.
"Uh, hehehe, This isn't what it looks like Kanzashi. You see what happ-"
She couldn't finish her sentence as the girl ran away in the middle.
"Im gonna have some explaining to do later"
"Hey"
"Hm?"
"Get off me!"
Draft 2
Spoiler:
POV:Irish Location:Mission Control
"You know what the mission is, right Irish"
"You infiltrate the party using the invitation your family got you, I provide recon outside"
"Not exactly"
"What?"
"BOTH of us are going to the party, capturing the fugitive will be easier with the two of us"
"Last time I checked the party was female only"
"It is"
"Then how the hell do I-"
It was then that I realized that she was smiling and hadn't removed her hands from her back.
'OH NO! Oh GOD NO!'
"Well, you see, they said they'd let me bring a maid along if I wanted to" she said as her smile kept getting bigger.
"AAAAAAAAHHHH!"
Time skip: 30 minutes later
"I HATE you"
"Aw, cmon, you look so cute Airi-chan"
"...fuck you"
Looking at the mirror, I saw my reflection staring back at me.
'I cant believe this'
Staring back at me was a short girl with long white hair reaching up to her waist dressed in a skimpy maid outfit.
I'm planning to have him and his teammates appear as the antagonists at chapter 3 before being beaten by Ichika and/or Kyuukai (they'll attack during the conference).
They'll be captured later on in the story and he'll be forced to work for the people who captured him or his teammates will possibly get killed, I'm planning to have him partner up with Tatenashi (her families organization fights behind the scenes, She's one of the strongest IS pilots, her abilities complement his because he's a long range sniper and tracker while Tatenashi's more of a frontline powerhouse and, of course, she's the type of girl that will piss him off and trigger his phobia the most considering how she acts) this is also when he'll shift from anti-villain to a more sympathetic anti-hero.
BTW here is about 45% of chapter 2, please read if you can and say if it needs any work, oh! and a cookie to anyone who can guess what Cecilia and Ichika are doing at the end
Spoiler:
“Speaking”
‘Thinking’
(Side comments)
Bolded words are what Ichika perceive as English
Location: Airport POV: Ichika Orimura
‘Ahh~ my legs are killing me, I can’t believe I didn’t notice that I could’ve just stood up while Chifuyu-nee was asleep’ I thought as I cursed my stupidity.
“Orimura, quit slacking off and hurry up” I heard a voice from the entrance yell at me
“Yes Orimura-sensei” I say to myself in a dejected tone
Walking towards the entrance, I suddenly felt the need to go to the restroom and quickly made my way there.
‘Got to go to the bath- hey what’re they doing?’
In front of me I saw three guys and two girls standing in the hallway to the girls bathroom, it looks like the guys are talking to the girls.
“You girls are from that IS academy right? Wanna hang out with us for a while?” A beefy brunette said with a cocky smile.
‘Are those guys hitting on the girls? It’s kinda hard to tell since they’re saying it in English’
“Come on, why don’t you ditch the snooze fest and come with us?” A blonde man with black sunglasses said as he leaned towards the girls.
“Yeah yeah, let’s go have fun somewhere else” Another guy said with a lecherous grin on his face.
‘I guess they are. Well that’s not really surprising nowadays, male social standing has hit the all time low with the IS’ introduction to the world so being friends with someone can use the IS would be useful I guess’
“W-We’re really sorry but were on a field trip so we’ll have to say no” A girl with light blue hair (she can speak English?) said while bowing in an apologetic manner.
‘Since the IS was released schools specifically designed to train potential IS pilots have been popping up all over the world, males and females tend to be separated after elementary school since males can’t pilot the IS and don’t have to be trained (present company excluded). As a result girls tend to have no experience with guys and are either shy or overly proud, guess those guys are out of luck.
“Huh, why not? A stupid field trip is nothing to some fun in the city” The blonde haired man said in a cocky voice.
“We’ll just have to take your word for it sir, now please, we really have to-“
Before the girl could finish her sentence the beefy brunette had grabbed her hand and tried to pull her away.
“Hey! Let go of my friend” The other girl who had stayed quiet so far suddenly screamed out
“Come on, you’ll have a good time with us, won’t they boys?” The brunette “asked” the other two men present.
‘That’s going too far!’
Walking quickly towards them I grabbed the Brunette mans arm before he could pull the frightened girl away.
“Ichika-san!” The girl said in a surprised tone.
“Get out of here, both of you, I’ll deal with these guys”
“But-“
“Just go!”
Taking my advice the two girls immediately ran to the airport exit.
‘Now, having said that, I have no idea what I’m going to do right now’
“What the hell was that for? We were just gonna take those girls for a little tour” the man whose arm I was holding said in an angry tone
“Hey, the girl said NO!”
Glaring at me, the man pulled his hand from my grip before he started talking again.
“What the hell did you say? Whatever it is, it sounds insulting”
‘I forgot, they probably can’t understand Japanese’
“Hey! He’s wearing the same uniforms as those girls, he’s that guy that was on the news a few months back” The one with the lecherous grin from earlier said in a surprised tone.
“You mean the one who can use an IS? He doesn’t look so though” The blonde guy remarked.
“ Yeah, let’s take him down then get back to those girls” The brunette (he seems to be the leader) said as he cracked his fists.
‘This is bad! I can’t take them at the same time, I need to even the odds a bit”
“INFINITE STRATOS! SUMMON!”
Acting on the spur of the moment, I (Hopefully in english) yelled out in a “Super Sentai” like voice while doing a pose.
“BWAAH~ HE’S GONNA SUMMON HIS IS! IM OUT OF HERE!” The blonde one said as he ran away in fear.
“YEAH MAN! THIS AINT WORTH IT! IM OUT TOO!” The third man said as he also ran.
“HEY! HE JUST BULLSHITTING! COME BACK YOU IDIOTS!” The brunette yelled at the other two men.
Not believing or not hearing the brunette’s cries, the other two men ran away and got lost in the crowd.
‘Okay that worked way better than I expected, that’s two down and one to go!’
Before I could think of another plan the angry brunette grabbed me by the throat and held me up like a rag doll.
“I guess its just you and me now IS boy, Come on! Let’s see what you got”
Tightening his grip on my neck, I felt him trying to squeeze the air out of my lungs and myself losing breath.
‘Not good, need to get out of this FAST!’
Forcing myself to stay conscious, I managed to raise my right fist and smack him
in the face as hard as I can.
“You little bastard!”
Tightening his hold on my throat even more, I started seeing black and my vision fading.
‘Damn it? Is there nothing I can do?’
“What’s going on here!”
Hearing the loud voice behind him, the large man let go of me and immediately turned around.
Lying sprawled out on the floor, coughing, and barely aware of my surroundings. I almost missed the conversation going on right in front of me.
‘Wait a minute…that voice?’
“What do you want? Can’t you see I’m busy here”
“I’d like to know what your doing to that young man”
‘CHIFUYU-NEE!’ “Just teaching him a lesson, why, what’s it to you?”
“He happens to be one of my students, so I’ll be taking him back now”
‘Chifuyu-nee, get out of here!’
“I don’t think so lady, this little punk pissed me off and he’s gonna get what’s coming to him”
“I’ll make sure to punish him heavily for choosing to get involved with scum like you, you can be sure of that. Now I’ll say it again, I’ll be taking him back now”
‘P-Punish!?’
“WHAT DID YOU CALL ME!”
“Oh? Do I have to repeat myself ”
“YOU COCKY BITCH!”
With an angry roar, the beefy man charged at Chifuyu-nee like some kind of raging bull.
“Honestly, I wanted to solve this peacefully”
Looking bored despite the situation. Chifuyu-nee lazily sidestepped the man’s charge, grabbed his arm and held it behind his back in a locking position.
“Now do you understand what I’m saying?”
“Y-YES! I UNDERSTAND! NOW LET ME GO!”
It seems he’s given up trying to beat me up.
“Not yet, you still have to do one thing”
“W-What’s that?”
Turning him around by the arm she made him face towards me who’s still lying on the floor coughing.
“Apologize to him”
“Why hell should I!? He was the one wh- AAAAAAAGGGGGHHHHHHHHH”
*Crack*
Twisting the man’s arm in a painful manner, she spoke her next words in a slow, deliberate manner.
“It wasn’t a request”
“ALRIGHT!ALRIGHT! IM SORRY KID!”
The screaming abruptly stopped as she let go of his arm and kicked him in the back towards the airport security (where did they come from?).
“That’s all we need then, take him away officers”
Turning back towards me. She helped me stand up and patted me on the back until I stopped coughing. After feeling my voice come back I tried to thank her for her rescue.
“T-Thanks for the help Chif-“
*Smack*
“THAT, is for getting yourself in trouble AGAIN” she said in a quiet tone
*Smack*
“THAT, is for causing me to worry” she said in an even quieter tone
‘Ow! She’s really merciless’
“And THIS” she said as her voice became a barely audible whisper.
Closing my eyes, I prepared myself for the third smack.
“Is for being a brave young man”
‘Huh’
Opening my eyes I noticed that she put her arms around my neck and held me close to her.
‘What’s happening? Am I dreaming? Why is she hugging me?’
Unfortunately I couldn’t find the answer to those questions as she quickly let me go and started leading me back to the entrance.
‘W-Wait Chifuyu-nee, how did you know I was here?”
“Two girls came running up to the entrance and started yelling something about you being in trouble”
“T-They did huh”
‘Guess I got lucky then, didn’t I?’ I thought as I sighed in relief
“Be careful Ichika, I wouldn’t relax just yet if I were you”
‘Huh? How come?”
“I did say they were yelling, didn’t I? I wasn’t the only one who heard”
‘Huh? What does that mea-“
“ICHIKA!”
“ICHIKA-SAN!”
Before I could react I felt myself being tackled painfully to the ground and being pinned by three bodies to the airport floor.
“Why did you do that? Are you an idiot” an angry childlike voice said.
‘Rin?’
“Honestly, this wouldn’t have happened if you took your kendo training seriously” a voice dripping with disapproval remarked.
‘Houki?’
“It’s my fault, I should’ve kept a closer eye on you” a sad voice said softly.
‘Cecilia-san’
Taking a few seconds to catch my breath, I notice Houki, Rin, and Cecilia-san all looking at me with worried expressions.
“D-Don’t worry about me you three, Chifuyu-nee saved me and I didn’t get hurt” I said trying to reassure them
They all looked like they wanted to say something else but Chifuyu-nee made an announcement before they could start.
“Alright that’s enough, we can continue this conversation at the bus, we’ve wasted enough time here”
Time skip: 20 minutes later Location: Bus
Me and Houki were seated together at the back of the bus, Cecilia and Rin got seated together towards the front (They didn’t look too happy about it for some reason), it’s been 20 minutes since the start of the bus ride and Houki hasn’t said a word.
‘Why’s she being so quiet? Usually she’d be telling me about our next kendo session or something’
“You’re a bad liar Ichika” Houki suddenly remarked.
“What are you talking about Houki? ”
“You really did get hurt didn’t you?”
“Like I said, Chifuyu-nee saved me before anything could happen”
“There are bruises all over your neck you know” she said as she pointed towards my neck.
‘What! There are?’
Putting my hands up to touch my neck, I flinched at the sore feeling around my throat area.
‘How come I didn’t notice earlier?’
“It’s not a big deal, really, I’m used to getting hit you know”
“What do you mean you’re used to getting hit!?” Houki suddenly yelled in an outraged voice.
“W-Well, you do hit me a bunch of times when something awkward happens or when I have an accident or something” I said trying to stop her yelling.
…
Houki stopped talking and just looked down at the floor in front of her.
‘M-Maybe that was the wrong thing to say’
“…Did you really get hurt by those hits like you did today?”
“H-Hey Houki, I didn’t mean it th-“
“U-Um, e-e-excuse me” A soft voice said before I could finish trying to apologize.
Looking to my right I noticed a girl standing nervously and fidgeting in place, she seemed to be trying to say something but I couldn’t hear because her voice was really soft.
“Uh, yes, what is it?” I say in a slightly anxious tone as I stand up to talk to her.
“I-I-I j-just want to t-thank you for h-helping me and my f-friend earlier” She said in a nervous tone.
‘Her and her friend? She must be the girl from earlier, funny I didn’t notice that earlier’
“Oh it was nothing, Chifu- I mean Orimura-sensei was the one who did all the work, I just distracted them for a bit that’s all”
“Y-You were still the o-o-one who saved us so I’d like to-AHHH!”
The bus suddenly hit a bump on the road and the girl, unfortunately, had not held onto anything and fell right towards me.
*Crash*
I’m on the floor again, and this time I have somebody on top of me (that sounded wrong).
‘I’m spending a lot of time on the floor today aren’t I? Hm? what’s this soft feeling on my hands?’
*Squeeze*
“K-KYAAAAH!”
‘I have a bad feeling about this’
“L-LET GO OF MY CHEST!”
I suddenly feel something hitting me painfully hard on the face before I see the girl running back to her seat.
“Hey! Did you see that?”
“Orimura-kun DOES have urges”
“WE HAVE A CHANCE!”
Girls suddenly started talking with each other while pointing at me who’s still sprawled out on the floor.
‘Why does do these things always happen to me’
“Everybody quiet down now!” I heard a voice from the front of the bus yell.
“Yes Orimura-sensei” all the girls said
Chifuyu-nee suddenly appeared in front of me and helped me up from the floor.
“You never stop getting in trouble, do you Orimura? I’d advise you to be careful though”
“Why? Who was that girl?”
“She’s Saranshiki Kanzashi, the little sister of the student council president, and she’s very protective of her, so you better go to sleep with one night open from now on” she said with genuine concern in her voice.
‘I hate my life’
Time skip: 2 hours later Time: 6:30 pm Location: Hotel lobby
“Alright class, listen up. We’ll be staying here for a duration of 4 days and 3 nights, we start the registration for the conference meeting tomorrow at noon so make sure to wake up and prepare before then, that is all, now go to your rooms" Chifuyu-nee announced to the class.
Following her advice I made my way to the elevator and hit the button for the 19th floor.
‘Room 1907 huh, I wonder who my roommate is? They said I had to partner with a girl but what are the chances it’s someone I know’
Stepping out of the elevator, I made my way for the room designated in my card.
‘You just slide the card in, and it opens the door automatically right? Well, here goes’
Reaching into my pocket, I pull out my keycard, place it on the card reader, and make my way inside.
POV: Chifuyu Orimura
Looking up from the bed I’m resting on, I notice my brother entering the room, he suddenly stopped and stared at me.
‘Seems surprised to see me, he was probably expecting someone else’
“Chifuyu-nee! You’re my roommate?”
“Well, what did you expect? That they’d let you room with another girl after what happened at the dorms? It was either me or Yamada-sensei’
“Well, at least now it won’t be awkward” he said as he went to the second bed and collapsed into it.
Standing up I make my way for the door.
“Huh? Chifuyu-nee, where are you going?’
“I’m going to the lounge and go drinking with Yamada-kun. I’ll be back later tonight, will you be alright by yourself?”
“Yeah, Cecilia-san will be here later and help me with something for the demo, don’t worry it’ll be just the two of us”
‘That’s exactly what I’m worried about, I wonder if it’s too much to hope that nothing will happen tonight?’
“Alright then, I’ll see you later Ichika”
Location: Hotel Bar
“Ahh~ what a tiring day”
“Are you alright Orimura-sensei?”
“I’m fine Yamada-kun, just have some jetlag, that’s all”
“Alright then, be careful though, you can’t be too drunk because we have to wake up before noon”
“I’ll keep that in mind, thanks”
Contrary to my words, I kept drinking more of the alcohol that was placed in front of me
“Is Orimura-kun ready for his demo?”
“He’s practicing for it right now, he told me that Alcott’s helping him with it”
“Y-You mean they’re alone in your room right now!” She suddenly yelled out.
“Yeah? What’s your point?”
“A-A-Aren’t you worried about what could happen! A b-boy and a g-girl, all alone in a room”
“You really need to stop reading those ero manga you confiscate from the girls”
“E-Ero Manga! I don’t read those!”
‘Yeah right’
“Besides, she wont try anything if she knows what’s good for her” I said as I took another shot of alcohol.
‘At least I hope so’
POV: Ichika Orimura Location: Hotel toom
“You have to try HARDER Ichika-san”
“I-I know that, but this is my first time doing this kind of thing you know”
“What? But everyone in school has done it at least once, myself included”
“It’s harder than I thought it would be alright!”
“You can’t give up Ichika-san, I’m sure Dunoa’s representative has done something as simple as this multiple times
as well, you cant lose to him!”
‘I didn’t think this was a competition, might as well try my best either way’
“Maybe I should call Rin, I do see her doing this a lot”
“Why? Am I not enough Ichika-san?”
“No! I’m not saying you’re a bad teacher or anything, I just see her doing it a lot more than you do, that’s all”
“Honestly Ichika-san, it isn’t that hard, you just have to know when to flex your fingers. You’re a beginner so you can move your arms up and down if you want”
After three minutes of thrusting my arms up and down nothing had changed.
“Argh! This is so annoying, it really won’t come out no matter what I do”
“Calm down Ichika-san, just imagine something white and it’ll be out before you know it”
“Yeah, I guess your right Cecilia-san”
Thrusting my arms up and down yet again I imagine a white empty space and before I knew it I felt something make contact with my hand.
“I DID IT!”
“See, I knew you could do it Ichika-san. Now try practicing without moving your hands, remember, flex your fingers”
Here's my guess for what Ichika and Cecilia were doing at the end, Partial Deployment.
When they mentioned Rin, I thought of what made her different from the others girls at my end. And the only thing that I consider that makes her "stand out" from the other girls (in terms of IS use), is that she can do a Partial Deployment *snaps* just like that.
When they mentioned Rin, I thought of what made her different from the others girls at my end. And the only thing that I consider that makes her "stand out" from the other girls (in terms of IS use), is that she can do a Partial Deployment *snaps* just like that.
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Originally Posted by Eratas123
Very clever. When will you post your fanfic? I'm dying to read it.
Now excuse me while I go get a cookie.
When it comes to details and Checkov's clues, Jak is scary!
2011-09-10, 07:29
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