2012-01-08, 10:56 | Link #17181 |
That one guy
Join Date: Nov 2011
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Houki: What are you doing Ichika!? That was a rare chance!
Ichika: There's a boat down there. It'll get caught in the crossfire! Houki: *checks data* It's just an illegal fishing boat, leave it be. Ichika: Those are people down there. Houki: They knew what they were getting into when they ignored the warning. Ichika: HOUKI! Houki: !? Ichika: Why did you ask Tabane-san to build Akatsubaki? For what reason did you want that overwhelming power? Tell me Houki, is the strength you want really just for this?(last line is in a disappointed tone) ------------------------------------------ Bonus points when this line is added: "Power without meaning is just violence!" |
2012-01-08, 11:07 | Link #17183 |
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Join Date: Sep 2011
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@ Senpai - Wait, a guy likes Rito!?
Side note - The main cast drinks awesome juice in your story Side note 2 - They try to get out of it by staging a public break up scene. Any suggestions on how that'll fail? Side note 3 - Wouldn't that be painful or noticeable? Scene - I meant that it shows a genuine unheroic side to the protags. Seriously, when was the last time you've ever heard a tsundere say something like that?
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2012-01-08, 11:12 | Link #17185 | |
I am no one
Join Date: Apr 2010
Location: Inside your head
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Saruyama.
Just joking, I mean some (many?) heroine tend to forget a guy that has genuine feelings to her, and prefer to chase the resident popular guy/ handsome bastard instead. Except Tatenashi who is nerfed... I just hope the change is for good since she's still the best fighter of all Heroine. Quote:
Usually unnoticeable especially if it's smaller than average, unless it went salute, and then the comes the pain... Yes, but Demi's version is more engaging. I changed just the conversation.
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2012-01-08, 11:21 | Link #17188 |
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Join Date: Sep 2011
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@ Treme - It's not yet done! I still have to finish Tatenashi's first
@ Demi - That was due to her guilt for Sakura Even then she admits it was her being stupid and irrational. @ Senpai - Who's the handsome bastard? Ren's a jerk at times, vut he definiteky doesn't qualify for that. Side note - Give Tatenashi awesome juice and she would break the IS world Side note - I meant more on failing during the event itself Side note 3 - You sound like you have experience Anyway, can he wear long shorts under his skirt? Scene - I meant don't change their actions. Changing the convo is okay
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2012-01-08, 11:21 | Link #17189 | |||
I am no one
Join Date: Apr 2010
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Well, if it's epic fail.... I'll think about a scenario. Quote:
EDIT: I said this because it is plausible and realistically depicted as impractical. Restraining movement and uncomfortable.
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2012-01-08, 11:28 | Link #17191 |
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I said it's not yet done! Yeesh, one little typo and you two go check immediately I still have to beta-read White Night then comes furture imperfect and Tatenashi's chapter before I do that one!
@ Demi - I get Tabane for the older harem fic She's the least romantic
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2012-01-08, 11:43 | Link #17192 |
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@ Sempai - None of the protags in TLRS fit this mold since they're nice. On the oher hand, trying to be a bad boy to attract girls in a women dominated society sounds extremely stupid.
Side note - I take it back, give Chifuyu Awesome juice and PT will go on it's knees and beg Side note 2 - Please and thank you. Side note 3 - What manga is that? Anyway, I thought of something again: Don't people have a hard time sleeping in an unfamiliar place? Irish is used to sleeping in small rooms either on the floor or up against a wall. Ditto for the prison cell since this is hownhe slept there. Wouldn't syddenly transferring to a bed like the one's in ISA cause some sleeping problems due to the fact that he's not used to it?
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2012-01-08, 11:52 | Link #17193 |
Just another Idiot
Join Date: Sep 2009
Location: Delusion world
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Damn.... still lack the inspiration for IS fanfic.....
Probably because I got sided-tracked by Phantom..... Edit orz. Anyway, any good songs that would give you inspiration for writing IS?
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2012-01-08, 12:01 | Link #17197 | |||
I am no one
Join Date: Apr 2010
Location: Inside your head
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Still need time.... maybe Demi can help... Forgot the tittle, but apparently amongst the guy's family crossdressing is common stuff. He confessed to her friend since child, said friend initially hesitated and sad, but then she accept it...and then... well, BOW BOW CHIKA CHIKA WOW WOW. Quote:
My bed ain't that small, but I had to share the room when I was little. I got kicked and get my own room later, actually larger than before but for some reason i felt uncomfortable. The same goes for Irish, since he has to share a room with Tate, usually sleeping by himself. @ Age Credit to demi for "Corruption garden" by Luka, now I can't look AWAY from gospel fight even though I was supposed to finish V2 first...
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2012-01-08, 12:10 | Link #17199 |
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@ Senpai - Imagine a bad boy trying to get girls in ISA world He's ginna get his ass beat
Side note - The harem would be intimidated to do anything. There goes 90% of the content Side note 2 - Tell me that manga name! I'll just skip the sex scenes like I usually do. Side note 3 - They're sleeping in seoarate beds Tatenashi has her limits when it comes to stuff liek that Would this cause him to saty awake and be unable to relax? By the way, he has an aversion ti bath's since he didn't do it everyday due to being on the run. Cue dragging tothe bathroom @ Demi - How about another fic? You do oretty good plots.
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