Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion

[Sheba]

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

I prefer to keep it simple. What we got was what we saw. There's no reason Jail wouldn't know the Saint's gender. He knows Vivio is the best Saint King clone out there he can get.
Jail didn't make her, remember?

Remember Alien 4? While Jail is a good scientist, I can guess he has failures before Vivio.

Page Claim!

[Jimmy C]

Jail snatched her from the dupes that made her.

[Comartemis]

So that would bring up the question of what kind of mage would be able to put up a barrier of such strength that could tank an Arc shot? In which case has been lowered to merely SS standards now that you are still sticking to this questionable points.

The Arc is in excess of SS, no question. Consider that detail dropped.

I'm working out the details on this in IRC and decided that the barrier's going to get the boot. More details to come once they're sorted out.

[ghazghkull]

Well....I'm a little sad....my story hardly got any comments T T Are you guys saying that the chapter I had posted was that bland that there was nothing to comment on?

[Tempy]

I'm probably out of place saying this but...

It's okay. My little attempt at an OC has yet to be commented on either.

In fact, the few things I've posted never really got commented on. It's as if I don't exist.

*goes into his emo corner and draws circles in the ground*

[Tormenk]

Hmmm..

Add certain ingredients from SEED, Elfen Lied and Evangelion and this'll make for a wonderful mindfuck indeed.

Spoiler:

"Bring the girl in here."

The guards brought the bound and gagged girl into the darkened room and secured her in one of the doctor's restraining platforms before swiftly leaving the room.

Having had her gag removed, Vivio immediately spat into the doctor's face, leaving her spittle to stain the left side of his spectacles.

"Now, now. That's no manners for a young lady such as you Vivio. It would appears your guardian failed in that aspect of educating you well." Tucker mocked as he wiped clean the mess on his face with a handkerchief he produced from his lab pocket.

"Leave my mother out of this you sicko. You know nothing about her. At all."

"Oh but I do. Far more than perhaps even you might think you know."

"Shut up."

"Feisty. I can see where you got that from. Regardless I can't do that now, can I? If I'm going to show you the results of my hard work in here. Hehehe." Tucker giggled as he traced a finger down Vivio's cheek.

"Don't touch me you sick fuck!"

"Tsk tsk. What have they done to my lovely Vivio-chan now? Well no time to waste on words. Time to proceed onto the main show of today, shall we?" Tucker said as he turned into the deep darkness of the room. The restraining holds turned and followed as well.

"What you see here is one sector of the largest facilities in the Prize. Here we work, to further the vision of our leader and honor his wishes."

"But work can be difficult. Very difficult indeed. We ran into much problems and failures on a certain project of ours that was concluded not too long ago."

"The work of depraved minds has nothing to do with me." Vivio spat out.

"Oh.Ohhhhhh but this has much to you with you, my dear Vivio-chan."

"STOP CALLING ME THAT!"

"Yes Vivio-chan." Tucker obliviously agreed, completely ignoring her request at the same time. "As I was saying, we had many failures. But we didn't discarded them once they were deemed one. We kept them, so that we could learn and progress from our mistakes, as any good scientist would have done. Hehehe."

"And! This is the results of our massive failures!"

Vivio's neck and head was bound into place by the restrains as Tucker turned her mobile prison to face the sides of the walkway they were on. At the same time, yellow lights came on and illuminated the area.

Vivio was beyond horror at the sight and fought her hardest to keep herself from throwing up.

Rows upon rows of tanks filled with murky red liquid covered the area, impossible to estimate the number in short order. Within each, held one armored helmet. Or it might have simply been that, if not for the extension from the helmet was unmistakably a human spine. Bits of flesh could still be seen around the base of the helmets, indicating the neck region. Four indentations on the middle area of the helmet indicated where the lost souls had their sight.

What have they been doing here? Vivo couldn't help but be terrified at the thought as she felt her body trembled violently from within the restrains.

"Bah! They were boring after all. Come! Beyond there lies the greatest joy of all! Of the sweet fruit of success!" Tucker shouted as he placed himself behind Vivio to direct her quickly into the pitch black remainder of the lab.

As they approached, the lights in that area came on as well. A giant tank stood in the center, mercifully empty. Various lengths of wires and cables dangled freely inside without their previous master to attach to. In turn the tank was surrounded by various panels and monitors of observatory nature as well as chairs. She was gleefully wheeled into back-facing the tank right as she finished observing.

Despite the horrible feeling from earlier on Vivio was relieved at the empty sight before her, convinced the madman was lying after all. She managed a weak retort despite herself.

"Seems like you were just deluding yourself Shou," addressing the older man by his first name as a form of insult. "Your so-called success is no where in sight. Adding support to her guess, the scientist was silent as he turned his back to her.

The maniac's sudden silence coupled with the mortifying sight in front of Vivio inevitably unnerved her. It would not last for long as Shou Tucker spun around, the glint of his glasses hiding his eyes though unable to hide the massive grin beneath them.

"Then a fairytale to enlighten my darling here." His grin grew impossible wider with that.

"Little over a decade ago, we received a most interesting proposition from a most interesting man. I remembered how happy I was that day when I was made the head of the project." The doctor clasped his hands together as if to make his point clear.

"Ah work was difficult back then, as I had said. The technology was poor and we had few materials to work with."

"But!!! By the blessings of our glorious leader, we made much progress later on. A skip, a twitch and a crack later we made much progression. It made the task of reviving a long dead person that much more enjoyable indeed."

What..?Vivo felt herself stiffen, recognizing familiarity amidst his ravings.

"We tasted the fruits after that. Alas, the client had need of our fruit and it was sent away so soon after the tree bore fruit. To the wretched home planet of the TSAB."

The young girl could acutely feel the slowing down of her heartbeat, in dreading anticipation of his next words.

"Howeveeer!! That does not matter now! After so so so so so long a time, what was ours has been rightfully returned to us. Safe, and sound. Right back to where she belongs."

"It's not..!"

"Do not deny yourself of what you have, my girl! For you have returned home." The doctor then spun her around to face the base of the giant tank, of which letter s had been inscribed into the metal plate.

Subject STK-0749 (Vivio)

Forcing her to regard what was before her fully, the scientist's maniac laugher rang loud as he slammed the restrains holding Vivio down into the lab floor.

"Do you see? The magnificence of your birth? By the graves of your sisters?"The doctor's wide-eye crazed expression clearly exposed now even as his shook in unbridled excitement. "Do you behold all this now," Tucker paused to take in an extra lungful of air before his exclamation.

"My sweet sweet daughter?"

Shou was caught up in his hysterical mania as he rubbed both hands against Vivio's frozen face with so much force that he shook her prone form as if she was a doll.

A doll. Perhaps it was.

Mama..

I..

I am...

Spoiler for after notes:

Quick and dirty to get the idea there, after getting a sudden jolt here. Combining the traits of the Seeking Researcher and the Sewing Life Alchemist was much fun indeed.

In case anyone's wondering, this ain't no crack. I had this planned long ao and I do intend for this to come true, in one form or another.

[ghazghkull]

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

I'm probably out of place saying this but...

It's okay. My little attempt at an OC has yet to be commented on either.

In fact, the few things I've posted never really got commented on. It's as if I don't exist.

*goes into his emo corner and draws circles in the ground*

Yeah...however, this is chpt 10 i just posted :3

[Wild Goose]

Originally Posted by Tk3997

Yes and no, while stopping mid cast then picking up later isn't possible from what we see casting something and then setting it on a delayed activation trigger or storing it in some item where it can be activated very quickly later IS and the differences if done right could be minor. That said for a spell of this magnitude storing it intact and ready to go would be a challenge IMO and likely require something on the order of a device solely for that purpose.

I have no problems with delayed activation triggers, i'm pretty sure we've seen such things in the nanoverse already, and you're right, if he goes this way, he'd probably need a device.

*rubs twitching eyes*

Ugh, busting/discussing 1st thing in the morning.

And acutally given that we know that the difference between AAA+ and AAA is significant (as seen when Chrono fights Fate in the Manga) and yet Vita failed to defeat Nanoha that quickly (indeed she needed to use a bunch of cartridges to do it.) I’d acutally argue maintaining the barrier WAS weakening her.

It also assumes Nanoha WANTED to break the barrier at first this is unlikely IMO not only because she wouldn’t want to be seen but because of worrying about people getting caught in the crossfire as well. Notice she never tries to flee during the initial contact and instead seeks battle which as I noted means the Barrier isn’t doing anything. It’s only later when it becomes clear they’re overmatched that they decided to nuke the barrier and flee which they do in like 2 minutes once they make that call with a single spell from a mage that’s already been significantly weakened.
This isn’t even really open for debate IMO it’s rather simple X amount of energy spread over Y area determines the strength of a shield. When Y is a say a circle with a 1 meter radius it’s going to be VASTLY tougher then when Y is a dome with a surface area measured in square miles assuming even vaguely comparable inputs. Just like if you took all the layers out of a bullet proof vest spread them out then sowed them into a sheet the sheet would have the same amount of Kevlar in it, but only a small fraction of the original vests stopping power.

Hmmm. I guess you're right, in that. On the other hand, doesn't it say somewhere that Starlight Breaker is really good in breaking barriers? This may be just me but I'd always been under the impression that the barrier needed to be a cohesive whole, and if destabilised enough at one point, would create a ripple effect that would take the whole thing down. Carrying this further would suggest that to take down a barrier all you need is to punch a single hole in it and it goes down... wait that's what's happening already?

Argh brain not working.

As I said IMO barriers main use is keeping people from seeing magic battles when the mages don’t want them too, but even that depends on both parties thinking that way and if one guy decides not to play along he can bust it down pretty easily. This is why no one bothers with them on Mid and other administered worlds they have no real reason to hide and the barriers are to easy to break through. That's why I've never really consider barriers to be viable as single combat spells or to trap someone of comparable power to yourself as IMO if you have the power to put the barrier up he has the power to tear it down, or at least tear through a section of it rather easily.

This is pretty much why the OFM never use barriers; their targets are either Bureau or normals - and if they're normals, well how about that, the targets have vanished outside the barrier! - and the energy needed to cast such barriers will draw lots of uncomfortable attention from the mainstream Bureau, which defeats the point of being black ops.

Yeah attacks that bypass ANY defense to strike right at "hit points" tend to be VERY hard to balance without building the entire combat system around the idea.

Well there's always Leena's yuri attack, but it's not like I'm actually using it seriously, it's more played for laughs

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Undisputed heavy-weight champion.

Though Lowe brought the term in here iirc.

It was me who created the term Khrack. ORE! ORE WA! ORE WA!!!

Uh, nevermind. *goes back to writing on Assault BJ*

I'm getting the Da Vincci Code vibes all over from that, if you must know. What with true identities and a Church mixed up in this..

Which is why it's crack. :P Srsly, if Brown can fuck up the details of the Kiowa Warrior, and even WW2 history, i don't have faith in his writings. But in OC, this is cracklulz. Madness? Nah, just Crack.

Giant..mage summon?

...I'm thinking more yuri summon.......delicious yuri.....

Leena: "Oh yesssssssss~"

*RUNS*

Yuuno was an synthetic A and Arf was no higher than AA+ at that time. And given that even the Asura crew had trouble in even identifying the Velka-type barrier, it's safe to say it's harder for them to break out of an barrier which they had little knowledge of.

And isn't it easier to just break barriers rather than transport out of them?

Originally Posted by ghazghkull

Well....I'm a little sad....my story hardly got any comments T T Are you guys saying that the chapter I had posted was that bland that there was nothing to comment on?

Patience, ghazhopper. Patience. (It's a pun on that famous line.)

Besides right now all I can say right now is ZOMG DELICIOUS YURI VIBES WRITE MORE DAMNIT, which isn't really waht you want to hear. So I'll say it anyway. ZOMG DELICIOUS YURI VIBES WRITE MORE DAMNIT.

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

I'm probably out of place saying this but...

It's okay. My little attempt at an OC has yet to be commented on either.

In fact, the few things I've posted never really got commented on. It's as if I don't exist.

*goes into his emo corner and draws circles in the ground*

I'll be getting to you in a bit...just hang on first...and don't go emo on us. Grey Knights don't emo, they either kill the enemy or they die!

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Tormenk

I'm getting the Da Vincci Code vibes all over from that, if you must know. What with true identities and a Church mixed up in this..

I think that was the whole point, considering PF also has Templars... So I joined 2 and 2 and went on a rampage...

Originally Posted by ghazghkull

Well....I'm a little sad....my story hardly got any comments T T Are you guys saying that the chapter I had posted was that bland that there was nothing to comment on?

Sorry! I was QQing all night until I forgot to comment.

First point: Which part of 10 had yuri vibes?! I reached to the end, and I don't see it happening... Though Eva was much gentler than I expected I must admit...

...SaSword'd make a great Arena pet for a Hunter.

I don't quite know if Keroko's really pissed at Farukon, or pulling his leg. But the meeting after wards does bring out the difference in keikakudoori levels. That's why there's Yagami () in Riot 6, but I guess Reddo will do just fine.

Nicely done, and do forgive if I miss things. Work stacked on top of Randomness of the Day + Bloodrage means I miss the cheese for the crack.

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

I'm probably out of place saying this but...

It's okay. My little attempt at an OC has yet to be commented on either.

In fact, the few things I've posted never really got commented on. It's as if I don't exist.

*goes into his emo corner and draws circles in the ground*

*goes back and check. When you're in Berserker Stance, you tend to miss things...*

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Hmmm..

Add certain ingredients from SEED, Elfen Lied and Evangelion and this'll make for a wonderful mindfuck indeed.

Spoiler:

"Bring the girl in here."

The guards brought the bound and gagged girl into the darkened room and secured her in one of the doctor's restraining platforms before swiftly leaving the room.

Having had her gag removed, Vivio immediately spat into the doctor's face, leaving her spittle to stain the left side of his spectacles.

"Now, now. That's no manners for a young lady such as you Vivio. It would appears your guardian failed in that aspect of educating you well." Tucker mocked as he wiped clean the mess on his face with a handkerchief he produced from his lab pocket.

"Leave my mother out of this you sicko. You know nothing about her. At all."

"Oh but I do. Far more than perhaps even you might think you know."

"Shut up."

"Feisty. I can see where you got that from. Regardless I can't do that now, can I? If I'm going to show you the results of my hard work in here. Hehehe." Tucker giggled as he traced a finger down Vivio's cheek.

"Don't touch me you sick fuck!"

"Tsk tsk. What have they done to my lovely Vivio-chan now? Well no time to waste on words. Time to proceed onto the main show of today, shall we?" Tucker said as he turned into the deep darkness of the room. The restraining holds turned and followed as well.

"What you see here is one sector of the largest facilities in the Prize. Here we work, to further the vision of our leader and honor his wishes."

"But work can be difficult. Very difficult indeed. We ran into much problems and failures on a certain project of ours that was concluded not too long ago."

"The work of depraved minds has nothing to do with me." Vivio spat out.

"Oh.Ohhhhhh but this has much to you with you, my dear Vivio-chan."

"STOP CALLING ME THAT!"

"Yes Vivio-chan." Tucker obliviously agreed, completely ignoring her request at the same time. "As I was saying, we had many failures. But we didn't discarded them once they were deemed one. We kept them, so that we could learn and progress from our mistakes, as any good scientist would have done. Hehehe."

"And! This is the results of our massive failures!"

Vivio's neck and head was bound into place by the restrains as Tucker turned her mobile prison to face the sides of the walkway they were on. At the same time, yellow lights came on and illuminated the area.

Vivio was beyond horror at the sight and fought her hardest to keep herself from throwing up.

Rows upon rows of tanks filled with murky red liquid covered the area, impossible to estimate the number in short order. Within each, held one armored helmet. Or it might have simply been that, if not for the extension from the helmet was unmistakably a human spine. Bits of flesh could still be seen around the base of the helmets, indicating the neck region. Four indentations on the middle area of the helmet indicated where the lost souls had their sight.

What have they been doing here? Vivo couldn't help but be terrified at the thought as she felt her body trembled violently from within the restrains.

"Bah! They were boring after all. Come! Beyond there lies the greatest joy of all! Of the sweet fruit of success!" Tucker shouted as he placed himself behind Vivio to direct her quickly into the pitch black remainder of the lab.

As they approached, the lights in that area came on as well. A giant tank stood in the center, mercifully empty. Various lengths of wires and cables dangled freely inside without their previous master to attach to. In turn the tank was surrounded by various panels and monitors of observatory nature as well as chairs. She was gleefully wheeled into back-facing the tank right as she finished observing.

Despite the horrible feeling from earlier on Vivio was relieved at the empty sight before her, convinced the madman was lying after all. She managed a weak retort despite herself.

"Seems like you were just deluding yourself Shou," addressing the older man by his first name as a form of insult. "Your so-called success is no where in sight. Adding support to her guess, the scientist was silent as he turned his back to her.

The maniac's sudden silence coupled with the mortifying sight in front of Vivio inevitably unnerved her. It would not last for long as Shou Tucker spun around, the glint of his glasses hiding his eyes though unable to hide the massive grin beneath them.

"Then a fairytale to enlighten my darling here." His grin grew impossible wider with that.

"Little over a decade ago, we received a most interesting proposition from a most interesting man. I remembered how happy I was that day when I was made the head of the project." The doctor clasped his hands together as if to make his point clear.

"Ah work was difficult back then, as I had said. The technology was poor and we had few materials to work with."

"But!!! By the blessings of our glorious leader, we made much progress later on. A skip, a twitch and a crack later we made much progression. It made the task of reviving a long dead person that much more enjoyable indeed."

What..?Vivo felt herself stiffen, recognizing familiarity amidst his ravings.

"We tasted the fruits after that. Alas, the client had need of our fruit and it was sent away so soon after the tree bore fruit. To the wretched home planet of the TSAB."

The young girl could acutely feel the slowing down of her heartbeat, in dreading anticipation of his next words.

"Howeveeer!! That does not matter now! After so so so so so long a time, what was ours has been rightfully returned to us. Safe, and sound. Right back to where she belongs."

"It's not..!"

"Do not deny yourself of what you have, my girl! For you have returned home." The doctor then spun her around to face the base of the giant tank, of which letter s had been inscribed into the metal plate.

Subject STK-0749 (Vivio)

Forcing her to regard what was before her fully, the scientist's maniac laugher rang loud as he slammed the restrains holding Vivio down into the lab floor.

"Do you see? The magnificence of your birth? By the graves of your sisters?"The doctor's wide-eye crazed expression clearly exposed now even as his shook in unbridled excitement. "Do you behold all this now," Tucker paused to take in an extra lungful of air before his exclamation.

"My sweet sweet daughter?"

Shou was caught up in his hysterical mania as he rubbed both hands against Vivio's frozen face with so much force that he shook her prone form as if she was a doll.

A doll. Perhaps it was.

Mama..

I..

I am...

Spoiler for after notes:

Quick and dirty to get the idea there, after getting a sudden jolt here. Combining the traits of the Seeking Researcher and the Sewing Life Alchemist was much fun indeed.

In case anyone's wondering, this ain't no crack. I had this planned long ao and I do intend for this to come true, in one form or another.

Little wonder really. Vivi-quarium with Extended spines-in-jars AND our resident mad scientist? HELL YESSS!!!

[PhoenixFlare]

Originally Posted by Tk3997

This isn’t even really open for debate IMO it’s rather simple X amount of energy spread over Y area determines the strength of a shield. When Y is a say a circle with a 1 meter radius it’s going to be VASTLY tougher then when Y is a dome with a surface area measured in square miles assuming even vaguely comparable inputs. Just like if you took all the layers out of a bullet proof vest spread them out then sowed them into a sheet the sheet would have the same amount of Kevlar in it, but only a small fraction of the original vests stopping power.

Using the same idea, it would mean that shields are much, much tougher than barriers. Yet, shields have ALSO been breached before, so why not the barrier in Iris's spell, even if it's much smaller than the city coverage?

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

I prefer to keep it simple. What we got was what we saw. There's no reason Jail wouldn't know the Saint's gender. He knows Vivio is the best Saint King clone out there he can get.
Jail didn't make her, remember?

It is very simple already, without involving more technobabble. How is Vivio being a girl doesn't conclude that the Sankt Kaiser's gender is a female difficult to accept, really? Genetic manipulation allows one to choose the gender.

It's true that there's no reason Jail wouldn't know the Saint's gender, but was the gender really important then? And compounded by the fact that he did not make her, other scientists still had the chances of botching the job and created a partial clone. The best clone need not be fully identical, it just needs the correctly functioning one.

Originally Posted by Tormenk

I'm getting the Da Vincci Code vibes all over from that, if you must know. What with true identities and a Church mixed up in this..

The Church has a terrible secret.

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Giant..mage summon?

Do not let thy thoughts wander!

Originally Posted by ghazghkull

Well....I'm a little sad....my story hardly got any comments T T Are you guys saying that the chapter I had posted was that bland that there was nothing to comment on?

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

I'm probably out of place saying this but...

It's okay. My little attempt at an OC has yet to be commented on either.

In fact, the few things I've posted never really got commented on. It's as if I don't exist.

*goes into his emo corner and draws circles in the ground*

The two of you would have to forgive me. I'm currently withholding backlog breaking since it's exam time for me, and time isn't exactly forgiving for me . I am only doing short reads now, but be assured that I'll follow up when it's over.

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

@Kha: I've been at it for a year too, though my production speed sadly does not match yours. It's been... interesting trying to incorporate a Mages "race" into the grim and dark future.

Like hell I have a production speed. More like mental spam of names of OCs I never write of, and now in Rebuilt almost completely ditched.

But thanks, I need every bit of encouragement to make it through the daily grind RL, in WoW and here.

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

It's too bad my story doesn't match everyone's tastes, but it's a fact I've long accepted.

Well in any case, here's a preliminary attempt at my OC. Forgive me if I am ignorant of any preexisting characters with similar attributes or if there are taboos I just made. 1190 some pages is an incredible amount to go through, and the OC list is exhaustive to go through completely.

Spoiler for Here we go:

An abhorred relic from the distant past. A soul lost to madness. A traitor to king, country, and family.

The Knight of Calamity



Name: Noland Reiniger
Age: Physically, 35
DOB: Unknown
Height: 6' 2” (7’ Lunatic Mode)
Weight: 210 lbs (270 lbs Lunatic Mode)
Eyes: Red (Blind)
Hair: Black
Blood type: O negative

Affiliation: Unknown, possibly Belkan
Position: Unknown
Rank: Unknown
Mage Rank: Unknown (Normal) / S+ (Lunatic Mode)
Magic System: Ancient Belka (presumed)
Magic Color: Crimson
Specialty: Army Decimation
Position: Deep Strike Assaulter
Style: Berserker

Device: Cocytus "The Eyes of Lunacy"

Little is known about the device, and even less known is how it operates. The device is believed to be an early unison device, permanently grafted to the subject's body. In its current state, the device exists as two red orbs that take the place of the subject's eyes. While performance of the device could not be tested, the subject revealed a number of facts. The device AI is incredibly strong, capable of suppressing the persona and taking over the body if the user's willpower is not strong enough. True to Belkan-style magic, the device focuses on enhancing close combat. The gift of insanity the device bestows in turn increases the users attributes to incredible levels, dangerously so. A technician making eye contact with the revealed device is recorded in saying she felt her very grip on reality slip away from her.

The device may well be considered Lost Logia due to its age and potential, but it is too dangerous to be studied safely. It has been sealed away along with its user.

Note: The following information was withdrawn from the Infinity Library concerning the observations made by researchers before the matter was sealed away.

Personality:

The subject's original persona is relatively unknown, as much of it has been subjugated or suppressed from trauma or the device. Two distinct personas have been determined, however, and henceforth will be identified with the terms "Normal Mode" and "Lunatic Mode" for when the device is active.

In his interviews and sessions, the subject was found to be a generally calm and collected individual, showing a intelligent and well-cultured personality. He is polite, thoughtful, and was careful in his selection of responses. His tone was noted to be particularly grim, however, as much of his disposition possessed a pessimistic edge. He mentioned little of family and was often bitter when questioned about his nation. Interestingly, the subject possessed an ironic wit and dark humor in his retorts.

The subject expressed a distinct fear when discussing his device, often hesitant to release information about it. Mood swings and shifts in attitude were noted depending on how deeply interviewers pressed. More than one incident occurred where the subject had to be removed from the room or sedated after a violent scene. Afterwards, however, the subject apologized.

The subject often spoke of "raison d'etre."

In direct contrast, with his device active, the subject gains a confidence that is nigh arrogant. Proud and willful, he believes himself above all others, a god amongst mortals.

History:

All that the subject personally revealed is that he is from the time when ancient Belka still thrived.

What historical records could be found describe a single entity spawned from early experiments with Belkan magic styles. His device is recorded as one of the earliest Belkan devices that focused on close combat, and he was selected to be the test subject. It is unknown why or how the device malfunctioned, or even if it malfunctioned at all, but the device forcibly destroyed the subject's original eyes and replaced them with completely red eyes. The subject was found to be blind afterwards; only able to see when the device is activated. At the same time, his eyes become a baleful red and yellow color with slitted pupils, a most discerning sight to nearly every researcher. At first, the device performed as expected, if a bit inefficient at mana consumption and conversion; the subject was frequently exhausted after using the device, requiring up to weeks of rest before returning to service. The AI was reported to be abnormally strong and forceful, and constantly demanded battle. Changes in the subject's personality and general disposition over time as synchronization between the subject and the device increased; the higher the sync, the more violent he became and the more difficult it was to deactivate.

The final "official" record describes a catastrophic incident where 400% synchronization occurred, resulting in the subject's completely ego collapse and his mind taken over by the primal Id and device AI.

All data thus far points to the subject as this "Daemon Lord" in Belkan apocalyptic stories, and evidence suggests that he is Great Traitor that slew the Saint King.

In MC 040, a stasis pod was discovered on a remote non-administered planet (A901). Despite its archaic design and failing life-support systems, the person within was still alive, and the pod was returned to Mid-Childa for further examination. Considered an archaeological discovery of unparalleled proportions, historians, librarians, and officials alike pushed for the subject's revival and close study. Ignorant of the subject's potential, the stasis pod was transported to research planet 404, where Noland Reiniger was revived from suspended animation.

He was clothed in garments not seen in a long time, archaic in design and material. A historian would later note that the style of his clothing was similar to those worn by ordained Knights of Belka. A black strip of cloth was wrapped around his head, covering his eyes (later, the subject would reveal that the cloth was laced with hexagrammic wards and suppressed the influence of the device's AI).

At first, the subject was understandably distraught and confused. As he was reintroduced into Mid-Childan society, however, his mental state continued to degrade. He continually demanded to be returned to stasis, stating that the longer he remained awake, the looser his grip on his sanity became. Night terrors were reported and his lack of (and refusal to) sleep could not be treated even with medication. Despite his warnings, researchers continued to examine him for weeks. His device was of highest interest to researchers, but due to the invasive nature of the device, little examination could be performed.

Wanting to examine Belkan combat techniques, military officials demanded that a live combat test be performed. The subject showed greatest reluctance for this test, attempting a number of excuses and reasons to avoid confrontation. Not to be denied, however, military officials forcibly pushed the subject into combat exercises.

The subject showed amazing proficiency in close combat, utilizing non-lethal techniques to subdue the soldiers and a noted minimal use of magic. Armed or barehanded, the subject appeared unmatched in close quarters. In ranged combat, the subject frequently attempted to close the distance and assault shooters. During the final fire exercise, an unplanned addition to the combat team detonated: a phosphorous bomb that set the subject ablaze.

The subject collapsed from the trauma as fire suppression teams worked to save his life. Then came the transformation. As the subject convulsed, chitinous plating erupted from under the simple clothing he was given. Black and red armor covered every part of the subject as he screamed, his sanity once again consumed by the lunacy of Cocytus.

A terrible mistake was made. The Knight of Calamity, the Judas of Belka was reborn.

The resulting cataclysmic battle resulted in horrifying losses and near destruction of the research center. An entire military regiment was lost before full retreat and evacuation was called for. Facility lock down was initiated and naval ships prepared to bombard the facility in an attempt to kill the Knight.

Amazingly, scanners and Pathfinder teams reported a reduction in magic reaction within the facility. One brave Pathfinder infiltrated and reported that the Knight had collapsed, once again in his human form. The decision was unanimous to return the subject to suspended animation.

The subject is currently in heavy time lock stasis, device inactive.

Style:

Historical records describe of a mad blaze that razed the cities of Belka, scorched the earth and burned down the very foundations of the society. Observations of the subject in action concluded that these stories were only slight exaggerations. The subject often leaped into the deepest portion of an army, assaulting the soldiers in deadly close combat. He seemed to ignore any attack made upon his person, shrugging off most attacks. Heavier attacks only made him stumble, no pause or hesitation in his charges. No mercy or remorse was shown as he tore through the men, even as they screamed and begged for it.

The danger does not come from his magical power (though considerable and almost choking), but rather the sheer brute force further enhanced by magic and his incredible mobility.

A Berserker in every sense of the word.

OOC Stuff

Theme Music
Normal: Susumu Hirasawa – Forces
Lunatic: Nobuo Uematsu – Howl of the Departed

Alignment: Lawful Neutral (Normal) / Neutral Evil (Lunatic)
Befriendable: You can try.

A potential villain, I suppose. The Church of Belka will most likely not like him, and maybe even Vivio, in a genetic memory sort of way. The blood that stains his hands is the same that courses through her veins. I took quite a few liberties with the history since I don't know of any canonical references to events that far back in the past other than Al-Hazard. Or I could just be a loony and am completely unaware of such facts.

So there it is in its rough draft form. I made it in less than an hour.

I'll follow up with a spell list after this gets kicked around a bit.

...wait a minute... Horus...??????

*notices the Inquisition practically grind to a halt at the mention of the name*



Elements in the past will feature heavily in Keroko's work Age of an Empire (Why is it taking so long?! ()), so I can't say conclusively how to fit Noland's origins in. I left it pretty vague to be safe, but I do say that Sankt Kaiser and the old Cleric-Knights gave their lives to save their people. I mentally had the image of them battling the combined forces of Chaos, just needs work to Nanohafy them.

As for the present, Vivio might remember something of him, though I'm not quite sure if it will be with fear or just "my favorite son"... The Inquisition will want him fully investigated, and if verified put him down while he slumbered and cast the forsaken device into the deeps of Mount Mordor, metaphorically speaking. If additional help is needed, then the Ordo Maelleus Licht von Belka and possibly their elite Grey Knights Cleric-Knights of Celestial Being will be called in. But I believe an entire Wing of girls can handle 1 Daemon Prince so apart from some Battle-Brother squads assisting, the rest of the Knights can be deployed elsewhere.

In relation to timeline, when was this guy discovered? Cos as of StrikerS, the only recognized Ancient Belka practitioners are Carym, Hayate and Acous.

Other than that, good first attempt! I'm not good at spotting h4xx, but functionally, Noland looks very workable. I might even have Skane ordering a raid on the facility to bust him out; the Messiah will want this wonderful pawn amongst the Brotherhood of Nod...

Originally Posted by PhoenixFlare

The Church has a terrible secret.

And it is the Inquisition's duty to defend it.

*runs from Anita*

[Rockfest]

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

Well in any case, here's a preliminary attempt at my OC. Forgive me if I am ignorant of any preexisting characters with similar attributes or if there are taboos I just made. 1190 some pages is an incredible amount to go through, and the OC list is exhaustive to go through completely.

Spoiler for Here we go:

*Snip

A potential villain, I suppose. The Church of Belka will most likely not like him, and maybe even Vivio, in a genetic memory sort of way. The blood that stains his hands is the same that courses through her veins. I took quite a few liberties with the history since I don't know of any canonical references to events that far back in the past other than Al-Hazard. Or I could just be a loony and am completely unaware of such facts.

So there it is in its rough draft form. I made it in less than an hour.

I'll follow up with a spell list after this gets kicked around a bit.

I don't suppose you'd let me use him for TravellerS?

Originally Posted by ghazghkull

Well....I'm a little sad....my story hardly got any comments T T Are you guys saying that the chapter I had posted was that bland that there was nothing to comment on?

There really isn't anything to say other than great writing as usual and in need of the next chapter, which i'm pretty sure you're tired of hearing by now.

Also that scene between Rue and Eva didn't seem Yuri at all. A beginning of a friendship is what I see.

Originally Posted by Kha

Elements in the past will feature heavily in Keroko's work Age of an Empire (Why is it taking so long?! ()), so I can't say conclusively how to fit Noland's origins in. I left it pretty vague to be safe, but I do say that Sankt Kaiser and the old Cleric-Knights gave their lives to save their people. I mentally had the image of them battling the combined forces of Chaos, just needs work to Nanohafy them.

What am I chopped liver? I may be new, but I still troll like no other before!

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Rockfest

What am I chopped liver? I may be new, but I still troll like no other before!

I'm not too sure, but my Sankt Kaiser is female, and I don't exactly accept overt time-travel (I did think of one out of Khrack, but never wrote it. TK and Goose shot it down.), so it kinda makes me AU relative to you. But yes as your works progresses I believe we may find things pertinent to my side of things. Sorry, I just didn't mean to leave you out...


*Warps in*

Anyone who wishes to kill my Knights is free to do so, but I have a few requests:

1. Make it GAR.
2. And include this prayer: "I am the Hammer. I am the sword in Her hand. I am the Gauntlet about Her fist. I am the Bane of Her foes and the woes of the treacherous. I am the End."

...

*RUNS*

[USB500]

Another entry for today..... I guess.

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Spoiler for space:

// unknown location //

“So… we take it that you didn’t intend to cause troubles with us, did you?”

Poseidon nodded. “First, we must apologize for intruding your private world. Secondly, I must apologize if my appearance has spooked the very essence of your logic thinking.”

“Iie! Don’t mind, don’t mind!” Freya said with her hands flailed. “We’ve met things stranger than a talking tiger.”

Poseidon nodded. “I can see that.” He, then, turned to Aura who was grumbling at him for reasons only the older sister knew. “If there is something inside your mind that needs to be expressed, I shall gladly lend my ears.”

“W… what? Why would I share my problems with a freak tiger who speaks like a philosopher?” Aura interjected and folded her arms in denial pose. “First, you just came into our secret garden and didn’t bother apologized. Then you told us you didn’t want to look for troubles with us. What on earth are you really?”

“Oneechan, didn’t they just introduce themselves to us?” Freya asked.

“Only Alita, not this striped big cat,” Aura said and seized Alita’s body. “Isn’t that right, Librarian-chan?”

“I see.” Taking a proper seating position, Poseidon coughed a couple of time and looked at each of the twin sisters before he proceeded. “I am Poseidon of the Sea Tiger Clan. I left my people to undertake a journey, which I believe has spent more than a hundred years.”

Aura and Freya gasped. “One hundred years? Uso da!”

“Never judge Poseidon by his looks,” Alita said. “His tribe, the beast-man, is said to have impressive longevity and can live for up to 300 years. They also possess incredible physical strength that demands respect from anyone who has encountered them. And they can also shapeshift.”

“Incredible? Shapesitf? Hah, I’m not buying anyone of them,” Aura said and later giggled as she wrapped her arms around Alita. “But if it’s Librarian-chan who said it, then I’ll believe it.”

“Please call me with my name, instead,” Alita insisted. “I never find the nickname a fitting name.”

“But it is!” Aura said and tightened the embrace. “If I can’t call you with the nickname, what else I should call you?”

“Your sister is quite lively, isn’t she?” Poseidon said and approached Freya.

Freya had to giggle. “She’s always like that, though at time she can be very ferocious whenever I get caught in trouble.

“Ah, sisterly love and desire to protect,” Poseidon noted. “I can see how it works.”

“Thank you very much, Poseidon-san” Freya said. “By the way, where did you and Alita-chan come from? You don’t look like you’d come from Mid-Childa, do you?”

Poseidon let a very low-sounding cough before he threw his sight to the night sky. “Have you heard of Mon-Holm?”

“Ah, I know! I know!” enthusiastically Aura said before Freya had the chance to answer the question. “That’s the place where the Gear War took place, isn’t it? That’s a very, very faraway place from here. You surely have the strength and will to come all the way here.”

“Oneechan, you don’t have to do that,” Freya sighed.

“Do what? But it’s so fun using the knowledge you’ve learned from the School,” Aura answered. “Or is it because you already have the answer but you’re too shy to share it with me?”

“Oneechan, what are you-” Freya squealed in shock when Aura hurled at her and gasped as her twin sister caught her waist. “Oneechan! Stop doing it!”

“Aw, Freya is too shy to let her sister do this,” Aura said with a mischievous giggle and started teasing Freya with a poke on her half-exposed thigh. The gesture thrilled Freya, and despite her plea she was intoxicated by the intimately dangerous touch. “You really like it, don’t you?”

“Oneechan… the guests are watching…” weakly Freya spoke and again emitted a cry of displease as Aura stroked her thigh in sensuous motion. “Oneechan, not here… please…”

“Freya doesn’t have to be shy with her sister,” Aura whispered. “Freya likes it when her sister does it, isn’t she?”

“…oneechan… dame…”

Ignoring the twin sisters who were soon absorbed into their “forbidden fantasy world” Poseidon finished the last of his meal and left to the open ground. Alita followed his lead and they were back at the flower field afterwards.

“What do you think of them?” Poseidon asked.

“They seem to be friendly, although the older one’s dangerously unpredictable,” Alita answered. “Their behavioural pattern is unlike anything the library has to offer.”

“Because it is time to learn about the world away from the confinement of the library,” Poseidon said. “Isn’t it the reason you wanted to escape from the ‘prison’ in the first place?”

The humanoid interface module sulked. “But what would he say? He’d told me he would do anything to keep me out of the outside world.”

“It is unwise to imprison a soul that is destined to be free as a bird,” Poseidon answered and transformed into his beast-man form. “He must have learned the lesson, even though he had to take the most treacherous path a man can possibly take.”

“…I can only hope so…” solemnly Alita answered, saying nothing as Poseidon placed his battle-hardened palm upon her scalp.

“Many challenges await those who walk the road none has taken,” Poseidon spoke. “And yet so many have lost even before their journey starts. Such is the harsh fact of life you will soon learn to respect and appreciate.”

“Will I be able to survive?” the girl with the purple eyes asked.

Poseidon smiled at the naiveté of the question and proceeded to pat her head. “You possess a strong heart. That, I know, will guide you through this world.”

“Will a strong heart be able to help me, Poseidon?” Alita asked again.

Poseidon nodded. “I shall cross my heart and hope to die, if that is what you wish.”

The twos fell silent until Aura came out of nowhere and caught Alita. “So here you are,” she said and tightened her arms around Alita’s waist. “I was thinking that you might miss the fun, so I came out looking for you.”

“I wish not to become hindrance to the privacy you and your sister are having, thank you,” Alita said in slight discomfort.

“But it wasn’t fun doing it alone!” Aura protested and pressed herself against Alita. “I need some sort of partner, and you fit the description. You don’t mind letting the Gemini Sisters teach you a thing or two on this world, do you?”

“Take a stone and kill two birds with it,” Poseidon remarked.

“Hmm… I don’t know what this tough guy is talking of, but he’s right,” Aura continued. “Come on! It will be fun! I’m sure you’ll love it.”

“My duty is to help human, not having fun with-” Her words were cut short when Aura grabbed her bosom, and although not feeling anything from the “physical examination” her face did twist in discomfort. “What… what are you doing?”

Aura kept moulding Alita’s mound before she snapped and let go off the girl. “Impossible!” she exclaimed and pointed to Alita’s chest. “You have bigger size than mine! It’s cheating!”

“What does my breast size have to do with cheating?” Alita demanded.

“Because I’ve been working very hard to have bigger size,” Aura grumbled. “It’s unfair to see someone having bigger chest without doing any effort, you know that?”

The argument became heated, and while Alita stated that being a librarian had got nothing to do with chest size, Aura decided that action would speak louder than words and dragged Alita back into the deserted building. Poseidon left the girls to their privacy and headed to a nearby lake. With his battleaxe and the full moon as partners, he sat on a boulder and used the moment to sniff the atmosphere. “The foul scent doesn’t envelope this land,” he spoke with a grin. “I have no intention of becoming worried tonight. Let all emotions disappear and allow peace to accompany. Let the moon shine and the stars glitter. Let hope to bloom like the beautiful scarlet blossom of the night.”

“Poseidon, please help! Aura is harassing me…”

“Harassing? I was just doing the examination! Stay still or I have to bind you!”

“Oneechan, you’re overdoing it. You’re going to scare Alita-chan.”

“Freya, bad girl needs to be punished. I’m doing what is best.”

“But why must you be in that dominative position?”

“Oh, this? It’s because nothing is better to punish bad girl than showing your superiority over others. Now if only you could calm yourself while I do this…”

“Aura, please! It’s not the best time! I… I’m not even prepared yet!”

“That is why I’m teaching you. Or is it because you’re too embarrassed? Oh, I get it. First time experience! Of course you’re scared because it’s your first time, right?”

“I… I don’t know what you’re saying.”

“Hush. You don’t need to say it. I understand your feeling.”

“Gomen, Alita-chan! Oneechan isn’t going to stop until she gets what she wants. So…”

“…so I take it that this is one of the Gemini Sisters’ many lessons of life I have to take onwards.”

“Yup, and you’re lucky to have special treatments from me alone.”

“Please go easy on me.”

“Aw, that’s not how you say it. You have to let me believe in you. Come on. Say it again.”

“…please… please be gentle…”

“That’s better. I like it more when you said that. You look cuter.”

“Oneechan, I think people will be eavesdropping on us.”

“So just go and cast the barrier already! I don’t want this excitement to be disturbed.”

“…haii…”

Poseidon could only shake his head. “Girls… once they get along together, they will soon forget the universe. It will only be them and their secret world.”

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Okay I am very out of here. *takes cover* BTW, next OC will not be up until next week, so yeah. Wait for it.



it surely is boring weekend, isn't it?

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and here's the new OC I earlier promised.

Spoiler for Sword of Scarlet Autumn:

Spoiler for introduction:

Kagura has a straightforward and focused personality that complements her swordsmanship abilities well. As a conservative swordswoman, Kagura pays high respect to swordsmanship, often to the point she will defend her opinion to the death. However, Kagura is not as accomplished as she may look like; as a matter of fact, she frequently complains of her inability to master the techniques of the Raijin-ryuu School, essential to master the Blade of General Guardian.

Kagura is very dedicated to master the art of cookery, or “Way of the Gourmet” as her late friend Hiram Maxim once told. She enjoys watching falling cherry blossom and often recites ancient poems to suit the atmosphere. She also likes cat although she often finds problem in properly bathing a kitten since “all kittens are scared of me every time I approach them”.

Kagura has a partner named Myon, which is unique as it is neither a ghost nor a demon but “a soul manifesting from Kagura’s unconscious self’s desire to be free”. It is often seen as a white blob hovering around Kagura, although at night its appearance looks more like a carbon copy of Kagura without the legs.

Spoiler for history:

Kagura is one of the stranger entities in Excellia, part-human and part-ghost at the same time. She hails from the Konpaku Clan, one of Excellia’s tribes famous for their longevity; they age very slowly through time and since they are half-elf they can live up to a hundred years while still looking youthful (Kagura herself is 60 years old, considered to be still in children phase by many of the Konpakus. They are also highly skilled in swords combat, which suits their duty as guardians and they are very proud of their duty, which they honour with high regards.

As the youngest member of the clan, Kagura is often given the highest expectations to inherit the Blade of General Guardian: a relic revered throughout Excellia and often referred as the Sword that Smites Evil. However because the leader of the Raijin-ryuu School, who happened to be Kagura’s mentor and close friend, suddenly disappeared and left all the students without the knowledge of wielding such an exotic weapon. At such, the weapon was sealed at the heart of the Village of Scarlet Illusion under the caretaking of the Saigyouji House, Konpaku’s allied clan, and Kagura was forced to employ self-teaching courses to compensate for this.

Kagura’s duty as the guardian was called to service when Excellia was thrown into a civil war. At the time, the head of the Saigyouji House, Yumeko, was seeking for a Konpaku swordsman to serve as her servant (and consequently, one of the four major Scarlet Illusion Sentinels). Together with the rest of her compatriots, she defended the solitude village from invasions throughout the course of the war, exploiting the combination of the Roukanken and the Hakurouken she inherited from her father and Raijin-ryuu to the fullest.

After the civil war ended, Kagura found herself out of job as the Village of Scarlet Illusion was now safe from invasion, and was left with option of returning to her clan to continue swordsmanship. Yet she had could not forsake her duty as the Sword of Scarlet Autumn and decided to continue protecting the villagers even though they no longer needed her service. The fact was Kagura owned Yumeko for giving her another chance to live after she was saved from committing suicide following her father’s death.

Kagura continued serving Yumeko for many more years before the expedition led by former Aggressor Hiram Maxim arrived on Excellia. At this point, news of rebel rising in Excellia’s northern continents worried the former Scarlet Illusion Sentinels and they gathered to discuss on the threat. They eventually entrusted the task of protecting the village to Kagura, since she had more contacts with outsiders than anyone of them. With Roukanken and Hakurouken in hand she began a travel to the territory beyond the safe boundary of the Scarlet Illusion village. Her path eventually crossed with the expedition team, and she initially paid no attention to the self-acclaimed “archaeologists” until she met Jackson Armstrong, the man who would someday become the Sword that Smites Evil. After a series of negotiation that ended up with an energetic swordfight between the two warriors, Kagura agreed to take Armstrong and Maxim to the Scarlet Illusion village.

What Kagura expected to be a warm conversation between the Saigyouji House and the “archaeologists” became a challenge of its own when the Scarlet Illusion Village is attacked by mercenaries. Too powerful for even the combined force of the Sentinels, Kagura made the decision it was time to exert all her strength as the Konpaku warrior and fought the invaders in a battle that was unfairly one-sided. Even being outnumbered, she fought all the way to protect the village before she lost to the mercenaries’ leader. Her act of chivalry inspired Armstrong who told Yumeko he would show the invaders what it takes to merely put a scratch on the Sword that Smites Evil. In the ensuing battle that resulted in Grungust heavily damaged, Yumeko was convinced that the Terran Aggressor would be the worthy owner, and consequently, master of the Blade of the General Guardian, so she ordered the recovering Sentinels to unseal the artefact that had been kept inside the Saigyouji House for many generations. Despite Kagura’s objection that no one but the Konpaku members can wield the artefact, Yumeko had complete trust in Armstrong and entrusted Kagura to deliver the Armament of War God to Armstrong. The Thunder Child easily claimed possession of the artefact, even renaming it Dynamic General Guardian (or DyGenGuard), and used his newfound strength in the weapon (combined with Maxim’s Trombe! Override after he, too, was given the brother artefact of the blade, the Aussenseiter).

After the expedition team left to pursue the mercenaries back to their headquarters at Earth Cradle, Kagura stayed behind to help with the recovery of Scarlet Illusion Village that was almost destroyed in the invasion. She was approached by Yumeko, who wished to see her expanding her knowledge on the outside world by joining the expedition team once their task was finished. Although she resented Yumeko’s decision to hand over the ownership of Blade of General Guardian to Armstrong, she accepted the offer under one condition that he would never treat her as a servant but as an equal swordswoman.

After preparing all the necessities, Kagura joined the expedition team and left her home world to embark on a journey that would shape her opinion on the Sword that Smites Evil.

Spoiler for personal information:

Full name: Kagura Konpaku
Nickname: Sword of Scarlet Autumn
Age: physical age appears to be 18; actual age less than 70
Birthday: unknown
Hair colour: silver
Eye colour: sapphire
Height: 152cm
Weight: 46kg
Three measurements: 74-52-72 (Delicious Flat Chest)
Affiliation: none
Rank: none
Home world: Excellia (origin: Village of Scarlet Illusion)
Device: Tower-Watching Sword (楼観剣, Roukanken); White Tower Sword (白楼剣, Hakurouken); Blade of General Guardian (never used)
Device class: none (regular weapon)
Device appearance: (Tower-Watching & White Tower Swords) katana
Magic system: Excellia
Magic symbol: hexagram
Magic colour: silver
Magic rank: B
Guardian symbol: dragon
Skill: swordsmanship; concentration
Hobby: reading ancient literature texts; cooking
Most beloved things: cats; enjoying cherry blossom scenery
Most hated things: nonsensical attitude
Relationship: Myon (partner); Yumeko Saigyouji (master); Jackson Armstrong (associate); Annabelle Gato (close friend); Hiram Maxim (close friend, deceased).
Possible voice actor: undecided

Spoiler for abilities:

will be updated

[Tempy]

Yaaaay I got responses!

Squad Morale Restored!

Originally Posted by Rockfest

I don't suppose you'd let me use him for TravellerS?

If you wish to use him, then I grant you permission. However he's still relatively incomplete, so I respectfully ask that you wait until the final draft is released before incorporating him. Thank you, however, for having interest in him.

Originally Posted by Kha

...wait a minute... Horus...??????

He could very well be the Horus of Belka. At the same time, much of his transgressions were unintentional from his person, an accidental Judas. Unlike Horus, Noland has a slight chance of redemption.

Actually, I'd say he's a weird mix of Horus and Kharn the Betrayer.

... Heh. Kharn.

In relation to timeline, when was this guy discovered? Cos as of StrikerS, the only recognized Ancient Belka practitioners are Carym, Hayate and Acous.

He would be discovered well before any of the series began. Thusly, rumors / horror stories / urban legends have plenty of time to grow, wither, and mutate. According to the timeline established by Nightengale, MC 040 is about 25 years before the events of the first Nanoha season. I may make it so that the recent (re)appearance of Vivio in StrikerS awakens the sleeping bloodlust in him, thus stirring him from decades of cold sleep.

While Carim, Hayate, and Acous are confirmed practitioners of Ancient Belkan magic, Noland is still relatively unknown due to lack of study. We as readers can easily assume his ability as a practitioner of Ancient Belka, but scientists rarely accept a fact unless it's been thoroughly tested.

Before any extensive testing could be done regarding Noland's magical abilities, the military decided to step things up and "accelerate" the examination process. Thus, Cocytus was reawakened and shit hit the fan real hard. As a result, further study was deemed too dangerous and Noland was sealed away.

I purposely made Noland's history vague and mostly unconfirmed so that he can be easily inserted into storylines. After all, history is only as accurate as what is written down, and not all written history is the undiluted truth, yeah? The obscurity of his history allows it to be modified without much difficulty.

Well... I see one possible path of redemption...

Spoiler for Possibility:

Noland: My liege... allow me to serve you once again. I must atone for my grievous sins and transgressions against you and our glorious nation. I have defied gods and demons. I am your shield. I am your sword. I know you. Your past. Your future. As I was once your greatest Knight, let me be your sword and shield once again!

Vivio: Auuu~?

Noland: Then I shall swear once more. Let the earth and heavens know my vow! I am the Hammer. I am the sword in Your hand. I am the Gauntlet about Your fist. I am the Bane of Your foes and the Woes of the Treacherous. I am The End.

Suddenly, Fate and Nanoha gain a rather unsettling new housemate...

I'll see if I can throw together his spell list and put it up soon. From the looks of it right now... it's pretty nasty.

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

Now the concept for the head of Sektor 21...


Daedalus Malandra

-snip-

Ahh, Kagato? And a crush on Lindy? Interested to see where ths is going.

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

EDIT: CRACK ATTACK!

My god... what if Nanoha had to deal with...

Spoiler for THIS:

UGH.... but... at the same time... LOL.

*FANFARE*

RUBY: T. NANOHAAAA!!!!

NANOHA: O_o

RUBY: Here she is! The one and only winner of the TSAB Magiball Contest!

NANOHA: ~_~;

RUBY: This girl is FUELED BY MAGIC! So start melting guys, 'cause the girl's hotter than hot she's hot HOT HOT!

*Cue the beat.*

... Ruby? XDXDXD

Tempted, so tempted. God I love that movie.

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

...goddamnit I wanted to take a break from this sort of shit! Look what you two have done!

I managed to lock myself into a PM discussion.

Anyway, I think the biggest problem here is our varying abillity to will SoD. To quote a discussion I had with Ark before concerning Tesla, and why she went along with the TSAB plans:

"First off, you have to remember that I am only a marginally decent tactician at best, though I think our many discussions have shown that by now. Anything I do or write with Tesla is thus influenced by my limitations. In a way this puts me closer to Seven Arcs way of thinking then many of the experts on this area we have here. Indeed, I did not see much trouble myself with many of the plans the TSAB executed untill it was shown to me.

Canon integration can be a tricky busines in that department. Sure, I could have Tesla point out all the stuff you guys discussed and make everything happy, but that would make Tesla the 'hero' of the story, the main character, and eventually, the Mary Sue. It's one of the many pitfalls in integration: Actually knowing more about the subject then the writers. You get the urge to point such things out and change them. The first is not bad, the second one is.

But I'm straying of the subject, you asked if Tesla ever protested to any of the plans? The answer is yes and no.

In episode 16, Tesla expressed fierce disapointment in the defencive measures taken in he face of a possible attack, she wanted more AMF trained forces on stand-by, and have mages be ready in Barrier Jackets to act in a moments notice. The fact that the people guarding inside were not allowed to carry devices was in fact protested against prior to the meeting, but Hayate explained that they were orders from Regius himself, and he was not about to change them.

Then we arive to another much discussed subject: The defence of RF6. This was not one which Tesla protested against, and the reason for that was very simple: Nobody had any clue whatsoever that Jail would actually come after Vivio. Hindsight is a wonderfull thing, but even on this forum nobody had any clue whatsoever that RF6 would be demolished so completely. The main target by all acounts seemed to be the meeting at the Ground Forces HQ, so that was where most of the defences were placed.

Fast forward to episode 20/21: Once again, from my basic point of view there is nothing inherintly wrong with these plans. The main characters are rare and powerfull mages, and also among the few that have anti-AMF training. Splitting them up to cover the large amount of threats seems like a natural thing. With the Cradle being the largest threat, the largest amount of power was send in that direction."

As you can see, knowing about the subject greatly increases ones critisism against it. Knowing very little about millitary stuff and having only casual notice of LoP, willing SoD becomes a lot easier.

Still, willing SoD is rather easy for me anyway. I am more knowlegable then most when it comes to melee combat, and I can still enjoy the Nanoha combat, despite the fact that if I start looking at it technically, it falls down completely.

Originally Posted by Tk3997

Bet I have more I need to write.

You want to make a list and compare?

Originally Posted by Tk3997

Yeah that might work at low levels, but it's a good way to die against most skilled players since if you don't think ahead you're going to get blinded sided. I recall one match were a guy I was against rushed me with a horde of Flamethrower teams, nearly killed me but I barely held him off, but I had acutally considered this (I knew he was a rusher) and basiclly just delayed him until I got out tanks, at which point he was still using small arms and flamethrowers... SPLAT.

I know, and I've noticed. I'm not a top player, not by a long shot. I utterly fail at most one-on-one matches, but do better at 2v2 or 3v3.

Originally Posted by Tk3997

Still isn't quite sure what to make of all this Nod stuff really...

It's basically a rogue faction of the Church, lead by Skane who uses his own religous beliefs to control his men. You won't be seeing Avatars or Stealth Tanks rolling out anytime soon if that's what you're worried about.

Originally Posted by Tk3997

Some guy back during the large scale wars could easily have looked lik say this IMO:

Spoiler for size:

Or this

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But overtime as mass based weapons dwindled the armor and defenses meant to counter them did so as well.

I'm aiming for a more knightlike armor, something space marine-ish. Armor with a touch of medievil.

Originally Posted by Tk3997

To the point that today even so called Knights consider a mini-skirt with some small metal bits "armor" and we all know how I feel about THAT.

I actually did some research into that and found this:


Reinforce II Knight’s Garb & The Book of the Azure Sky
(StS DVD2)
Ancient Belkan practitioners generally equip defensive attire known as “Knight Armor”, but the Guardian Knights wear “Knight’s Garb”, designed by Hayate. (Concerning this, details can be found in the “Book of Darkness Incident” data files) Similarly, the Unison Device Reinforce II dons Knight’s Garb when advancing to the front lines. As fitting the support-type Reinforce II, although it does not provide top-class protection, Knight’s Garb allows for more agile maneuvering. The Book of the Azure Sky is a storage device. Similar to Hayate, Reinforce Zwei’s personal device holds an enormous volume of magic data, which is not used independantly, but makes up half of the magic data available during a Unison.

So yeah, I was wrong, the Wolkies aren't wearing Knights Armor at all.

Whoops.

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

Well in any case, here's a preliminary attempt at my OC. Forgive me if I am ignorant of any preexisting characters with similar attributes or if there are taboos I just made. 1190 some pages is an incredible amount to go through, and the OC list is exhaustive to go through completely.

Spoiler for Here we go:

An abhorred relic from the distant past. A soul lost to madness. A traitor to king, country, and family.

The Knight of Calamity



Name: Noland Reiniger
Age: Physically, 35
DOB: Unknown
Height: 6' 2” (7’ Lunatic Mode)
Weight: 210 lbs (270 lbs Lunatic Mode)
Eyes: Red (Blind)
Hair: Black
Blood type: O negative

Affiliation: Unknown, possibly Belkan
Position: Unknown
Rank: Unknown
Mage Rank: Unknown (Normal) / S+ (Lunatic Mode)
Magic System: Ancient Belka (presumed)
Magic Color: Crimson
Specialty: Army Decimation
Position: Deep Strike Assaulter
Style: Berserker

Device: Cocytus "The Eyes of Lunacy"

Little is known about the device, and even less known is how it operates. The device is believed to be an early unison device, permanently grafted to the subject's body. In its current state, the device exists as two red orbs that take the place of the subject's eyes. While performance of the device could not be tested, the subject revealed a number of facts. The device AI is incredibly strong, capable of suppressing the persona and taking over the body if the user's willpower is not strong enough. True to Belkan-style magic, the device focuses on enhancing close combat. The gift of insanity the device bestows in turn increases the users attributes to incredible levels, dangerously so. A technician making eye contact with the revealed device is recorded in saying she felt her very grip on reality slip away from her.

The device may well be considered Lost Logia due to its age and potential, but it is too dangerous to be studied safely. It has been sealed away along with its user.

Note: The following information was withdrawn from the Infinity Library concerning the observations made by researchers before the matter was sealed away.

Personality:

The subject's original persona is relatively unknown, as much of it has been subjugated or suppressed from trauma or the device. Two distinct personas have been determined, however, and henceforth will be identified with the terms "Normal Mode" and "Lunatic Mode" for when the device is active.

In his interviews and sessions, the subject was found to be a generally calm and collected individual, showing a intelligent and well-cultured personality. He is polite, thoughtful, and was careful in his selection of responses. His tone was noted to be particularly grim, however, as much of his disposition possessed a pessimistic edge. He mentioned little of family and was often bitter when questioned about his nation. Interestingly, the subject possessed an ironic wit and dark humor in his retorts.

The subject expressed a distinct fear when discussing his device, often hesitant to release information about it. Mood swings and shifts in attitude were noted depending on how deeply interviewers pressed. More than one incident occurred where the subject had to be removed from the room or sedated after a violent scene. Afterwards, however, the subject apologized.

The subject often spoke of "raison d'etre."

In direct contrast, with his device active, the subject gains a confidence that is nigh arrogant. Proud and willful, he believes himself above all others, a god amongst mortals.

History:

All that the subject personally revealed is that he is from the time when ancient Belka still thrived.

What historical records could be found describe a single entity spawned from early experiments with Belkan magic styles. His device is recorded as one of the earliest Belkan devices that focused on close combat, and he was selected to be the test subject. It is unknown why or how the device malfunctioned, or even if it malfunctioned at all, but the device forcibly destroyed the subject's original eyes and replaced them with completely red eyes. The subject was found to be blind afterwards; only able to see when the device is activated. At the same time, his eyes become a baleful red and yellow color with slitted pupils, a most discerning sight to nearly every researcher. At first, the device performed as expected, if a bit inefficient at mana consumption and conversion; the subject was frequently exhausted after using the device, requiring up to weeks of rest before returning to service. The AI was reported to be abnormally strong and forceful, and constantly demanded battle. Changes in the subject's personality and general disposition over time as synchronization between the subject and the device increased; the higher the sync, the more violent he became and the more difficult it was to deactivate.

The final "official" record describes a catastrophic incident where 400% synchronization occurred, resulting in the subject's completely ego collapse and his mind taken over by the primal Id and device AI.

All data thus far points to the subject as this "Daemon Lord" in Belkan apocalyptic stories, and evidence suggests that he is Great Traitor that slew the Saint King.

In MC 040, a stasis pod was discovered on a remote non-administered planet (A901). Despite its archaic design and failing life-support systems, the person within was still alive, and the pod was returned to Mid-Childa for further examination. Considered an archaeological discovery of unparalleled proportions, historians, librarians, and officials alike pushed for the subject's revival and close study. Ignorant of the subject's potential, the stasis pod was transported to research planet 404, where Noland Reiniger was revived from suspended animation.

He was clothed in garments not seen in a long time, archaic in design and material. A historian would later note that the style of his clothing was similar to those worn by ordained Knights of Belka. A black strip of cloth was wrapped around his head, covering his eyes (later, the subject would reveal that the cloth was laced with hexagrammic wards and suppressed the influence of the device's AI).

At first, the subject was understandably distraught and confused. As he was reintroduced into Mid-Childan society, however, his mental state continued to degrade. He continually demanded to be returned to stasis, stating that the longer he remained awake, the looser his grip on his sanity became. Night terrors were reported and his lack of (and refusal to) sleep could not be treated even with medication. Despite his warnings, researchers continued to examine him for weeks. His device was of highest interest to researchers, but due to the invasive nature of the device, little examination could be performed.

Wanting to examine Belkan combat techniques, military officials demanded that a live combat test be performed. The subject showed greatest reluctance for this test, attempting a number of excuses and reasons to avoid confrontation. Not to be denied, however, military officials forcibly pushed the subject into combat exercises.

The subject showed amazing proficiency in close combat, utilizing non-lethal techniques to subdue the soldiers and a noted minimal use of magic. Armed or barehanded, the subject appeared unmatched in close quarters. In ranged combat, the subject frequently attempted to close the distance and assault shooters. During the final fire exercise, an unplanned addition to the combat team detonated: a phosphorous bomb that set the subject ablaze.

The subject collapsed from the trauma as fire suppression teams worked to save his life. Then came the transformation. As the subject convulsed, chitinous plating erupted from under the simple clothing he was given. Black and red armor covered every part of the subject as he screamed, his sanity once again consumed by the lunacy of Cocytus.

A terrible mistake was made. The Knight of Calamity, the Judas of Belka was reborn.

The resulting cataclysmic battle resulted in horrifying losses and near destruction of the research center. An entire military regiment was lost before full retreat and evacuation was called for. Facility lock down was initiated and naval ships prepared to bombard the facility in an attempt to kill the Knight.

Amazingly, scanners and Pathfinder teams reported a reduction in magic reaction within the facility. One brave Pathfinder infiltrated and reported that the Knight had collapsed, once again in his human form. The decision was unanimous to return the subject to suspended animation.

The subject is currently in heavy time lock stasis, device inactive.

Style:

Historical records describe of a mad blaze that razed the cities of Belka, scorched the earth and burned down the very foundations of the society. Observations of the subject in action concluded that these stories were only slight exaggerations. The subject often leaped into the deepest portion of an army, assaulting the soldiers in deadly close combat. He seemed to ignore any attack made upon his person, shrugging off most attacks. Heavier attacks only made him stumble, no pause or hesitation in his charges. No mercy or remorse was shown as he tore through the men, even as they screamed and begged for it.

The danger does not come from his magical power (though considerable and almost choking), but rather the sheer brute force further enhanced by magic and his incredible mobility.

A Berserker in every sense of the word.

OOC Stuff

Theme Music
Normal: Susumu Hirasawa – Forces
Lunatic: Nobuo Uematsu – Howl of the Departed

Alignment: Lawful Neutral (Normal) / Neutral Evil (Lunatic)
Befriendable: You can try.

A potential villain, I suppose. The Church of Belka will most likely not like him, and maybe even Vivio, in a genetic memory sort of way. The blood that stains his hands is the same that courses through her veins. I took quite a few liberties with the history since I don't know of any canonical references to events that far back in the past other than Al-Hazard. Or I could just be a loony and am completely unaware of such facts.

So there it is in its rough draft form. I made it in less than an hour.

I'll follow up with a spell list after this gets kicked around a bit.

Ancient Belka? Hmm... I might be able to use this guy... mind if I make him one of the Primarchs? (genetic soldiers created of the material of the Royal Bloodline).

Originally Posted by PhoenixFlare

Full copies are only possible with fully intact genetic information. Cell cultures usually take care of the problem. For Vivio's, the Sankt Kaiser's blood has been degraded (and really, blood as a viable option for cloning really makes me bristle at how the producers gloss over details, since blood contains extremely little to no genetic information! ) by the passing years, resulting in certain information missing. Vivio is not possible to be a pure clone.

I've said it before, and I'll probably say it a milion times more: Nanoha relies on the assumption that the viewer either hasn't studied what they're using, or doesn't care. Heck, Jurasic Park is impossible too from a scientific point of view, but who cares as long as the movie is cool?

Originally Posted by PhoenixFlare

Ah, humbug-kun, thanks a lot. Been looking for you to help.

Does it sound better? =3

Anyway, to solve this problem, we'll establish Sankt Kaiser as a [CRACK]hermaphrodite[/CRACK].

*runs from Keroko and Kha*

Now, I may be one of the most accepting tolerant people here, and I would be lying if I said I didn't enjoy the occasional futanari comic, but let's not do that to Vivio shall we?

*evil eye*

Or else...

Originally Posted by Tk3997

And acutally given that we know that the difference between AAA+ and AAA is significant (as seen when Chrono fights Fate in the Manga) and yet Vita failed to defeat Nanoha that quickly (indeed she needed to use a bunch of cartridges to do it.) I’d acutally argue maintaining the barrier WAS weakening her.

Let's not forget that Vita was holding back.

Originally Posted by Tk3997

It’s only later when it becomes clear they’re overmatched that they decided to nuke the barrier and flee which they do in like 2 minutes once they make that call with a single spell from a mage that’s already been significantly weakened.

Ah, but SLB Total Seal Break is noted to be a special effect, it's not 'just' a single spell.

Originally Posted by Tk3997

As I said IMO barriers main use is keeping people from seeing magic battles when the mages don’t want them too, but even that depends on both parties thinking that way and if one guy decides not to play along he can bust it down pretty easily. This is why no one bothers with them on Mid and other administered worlds they have no real reason to hide and the barriers are to easy to break through.

That is actually argued by canon, as Vita's Gefangnis der Magie (which litterally translates to prison of magic) is created to trap Nanoha. Also note that both Arf and Yuuno note in the battle that it is hard to get out of the Barrier, even though Vita is the sole creator. Then in A's 4/5, the tables are turned and Vita and Zafira get captured (which is supported by Lindy, Signum and Shamal blatantly saying so) and that one needed the Yami no Sho to crack. Signum merely managed to get in, but not out.

Originally Posted by PhoenixG

I'm more inclined that there are more than one Sankt Kaiser ( different generation ). and each time it has a different gender....

We know there is a Royal Bloodline, as this is noted in the vearious booklets.

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Hmmm..

Add certain ingredients from SEED, Elfen Lied and Evangelion and this'll make for a wonderful mindfuck indeed.

Spoiler:

"Bring the girl in here."

The guards brought the bound and gagged girl into the darkened room and secured her in one of the doctor's restraining platforms before swiftly leaving the room.

Having had her gag removed, Vivio immediately spat into the doctor's face, leaving her spittle to stain the left side of his spectacles.

"Now, now. That's no manners for a young lady such as you Vivio. It would appears your guardian failed in that aspect of educating you well." Tucker mocked as he wiped clean the mess on his face with a handkerchief he produced from his lab pocket.

"Leave my mother out of this you sicko. You know nothing about her. At all."

"Oh but I do. Far more than perhaps even you might think you know."

"Shut up."

"Feisty. I can see where you got that from. Regardless I can't do that now, can I? If I'm going to show you the results of my hard work in here. Hehehe." Tucker giggled as he traced a finger down Vivio's cheek.

"Don't touch me you sick fuck!"

"Tsk tsk. What have they done to my lovely Vivio-chan now? Well no time to waste on words. Time to proceed onto the main show of today, shall we?" Tucker said as he turned into the deep darkness of the room. The restraining holds turned and followed as well.

"What you see here is one sector of the largest facilities in the Prize. Here we work, to further the vision of our leader and honor his wishes."

"But work can be difficult. Very difficult indeed. We ran into much problems and failures on a certain project of ours that was concluded not too long ago."

"The work of depraved minds has nothing to do with me." Vivio spat out.

"Oh.Ohhhhhh but this has much to you with you, my dear Vivio-chan."

"STOP CALLING ME THAT!"

"Yes Vivio-chan." Tucker obliviously agreed, completely ignoring her request at the same time. "As I was saying, we had many failures. But we didn't discarded them once they were deemed one. We kept them, so that we could learn and progress from our mistakes, as any good scientist would have done. Hehehe."

"And! This is the results of our massive failures!"

Vivio's neck and head was bound into place by the restrains as Tucker turned her mobile prison to face the sides of the walkway they were on. At the same time, yellow lights came on and illuminated the area.

Vivio was beyond horror at the sight and fought her hardest to keep herself from throwing up.

Rows upon rows of tanks filled with murky red liquid covered the area, impossible to estimate the number in short order. Within each, held one armored helmet. Or it might have simply been that, if not for the extension from the helmet was unmistakably a human spine. Bits of flesh could still be seen around the base of the helmets, indicating the neck region. Four indentations on the middle area of the helmet indicated where the lost souls had their sight.

What have they been doing here? Vivo couldn't help but be terrified at the thought as she felt her body trembled violently from within the restrains.

"Bah! They were boring after all. Come! Beyond there lies the greatest joy of all! Of the sweet fruit of success!" Tucker shouted as he placed himself behind Vivio to direct her quickly into the pitch black remainder of the lab.

As they approached, the lights in that area came on as well. A giant tank stood in the center, mercifully empty. Various lengths of wires and cables dangled freely inside without their previous master to attach to. In turn the tank was surrounded by various panels and monitors of observatory nature as well as chairs. She was gleefully wheeled into back-facing the tank right as she finished observing.

Despite the horrible feeling from earlier on Vivio was relieved at the empty sight before her, convinced the madman was lying after all. She managed a weak retort despite herself.

"Seems like you were just deluding yourself Shou," addressing the older man by his first name as a form of insult. "Your so-called success is no where in sight. Adding support to her guess, the scientist was silent as he turned his back to her.

The maniac's sudden silence coupled with the mortifying sight in front of Vivio inevitably unnerved her. It would not last for long as Shou Tucker spun around, the glint of his glasses hiding his eyes though unable to hide the massive grin beneath them.

"Then a fairytale to enlighten my darling here." His grin grew impossible wider with that.

"Little over a decade ago, we received a most interesting proposition from a most interesting man. I remembered how happy I was that day when I was made the head of the project." The doctor clasped his hands together as if to make his point clear.

"Ah work was difficult back then, as I had said. The technology was poor and we had few materials to work with."

"But!!! By the blessings of our glorious leader, we made much progress later on. A skip, a twitch and a crack later we made much progression. It made the task of reviving a long dead person that much more enjoyable indeed."

What..?Vivo felt herself stiffen, recognizing familiarity amidst his ravings.

"We tasted the fruits after that. Alas, the client had need of our fruit and it was sent away so soon after the tree bore fruit. To the wretched home planet of the TSAB."

The young girl could acutely feel the slowing down of her heartbeat, in dreading anticipation of his next words.

"Howeveeer!! That does not matter now! After so so so so so long a time, what was ours has been rightfully returned to us. Safe, and sound. Right back to where she belongs."

"It's not..!"

"Do not deny yourself of what you have, my girl! For you have returned home." The doctor then spun her around to face the base of the giant tank, of which letter s had been inscribed into the metal plate.

Subject STK-0749 (Vivio)

Forcing her to regard what was before her fully, the scientist's maniac laugher rang loud as he slammed the restrains holding Vivio down into the lab floor.

"Do you see? The magnificence of your birth? By the graves of your sisters?"The doctor's wide-eye crazed expression clearly exposed now even as his shook in unbridled excitement. "Do you behold all this now," Tucker paused to take in an extra lungful of air before his exclamation.

"My sweet sweet daughter?"

Shou was caught up in his hysterical mania as he rubbed both hands against Vivio's frozen face with so much force that he shook her prone form as if she was a doll.

A doll. Perhaps it was.

Mama..

I..

I am...

Spoiler for after notes:

Quick and dirty to get the idea there, after getting a sudden jolt here. Combining the traits of the Seeking Researcher and the Sewing Life Alchemist was much fun indeed.

In case anyone's wondering, this ain't no crack. I had this planned long ao and I do intend for this to come true, in one form or another.

Hmm, 'kill Jail' urges are rising. That means this was damn good written.

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

He could very well be the Horus of Belka. At the same time, much of his transgressions were unintentional from his person, an accidental Judas. Unlike Horus, Noland has a slight chance of redemption.

Actually, I'd say he's a weird mix of Horus and Kharn the Betrayer.

... Heh. Kharn.

*mumble mumble* Well, the Horus he wouldn't be in Fall of an Empire, but he certainly would play a bigger role.

[Sheba]

Originally Posted by Keroko

I'm aiming for a more knightlike armor, something space marine-ish. Armor with a touch of medievil.

Like this?

Spoiler:

or like that?

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

Yaaaay I got responses!

Squad Morale Restored!

Your Faith in the Emperor is weak for a Grey Knight. ()

For me, I'm too Simon, hotblooded, confused and careless to be one too. Not to mention having not a shred of badass to my name.

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

He could very well be the Horus of Belka. At the same time, much of his transgressions were unintentional from his person, an accidental Judas. Unlike Horus, Noland has a slight chance of redemption.

Actually, I'd say he's a weird mix of Horus and Kharn the Betrayer.

... Heh. Kharn.

[Khane]It is as you've noticed, my brother...[/Khane]

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

He would be discovered well before any of the series began. Thusly, rumors / horror stories / urban legends have plenty of time to grow, wither, and mutate. According to the timeline established by Nightengale, MC 040 is about 25 years before the events of the first Nanoha season. I may make it so that the recent (re)appearance of Vivio in StrikerS awakens the sleeping bloodlust in him, thus stirring him from decades of cold sleep.

While Carim, Hayate, and Acous are confirmed practitioners of Ancient Belkan magic, Noland is still relatively unknown due to lack of study. We as readers can easily assume his ability as a practitioner of Ancient Belka, but scientists rarely accept a fact unless it's been thoroughly tested.

Before any extensive testing could be done regarding Noland's magical abilities, the military decided to step things up and "accelerate" the examination process. Thus, Cocytus was reawakened and shit hit the fan real hard. As a result, further study was deemed too dangerous and Noland was sealed away.

I purposely made Noland's history vague and mostly unconfirmed so that he can be easily inserted into storylines. After all, history is only as accurate as what is written down, and not all written history is the undiluted truth, yeah? The obscurity of his history allows it to be modified without much difficulty.

Well... I see one possible path of redemption...

Spoiler for Possibility:

Noland: My liege... allow me to serve you once again. I must atone for my grievous sins and transgressions against you and our glorious nation. I have defied gods and demons. I am your shield. I am your sword. I know you. Your past. Your future. As I was once your greatest Knight, let me be your sword and shield once again!

Vivio: Auuu~?

Noland: Then I shall swear once more. Let the earth and heavens know my vow! I am the Hammer. I am the sword in Your hand. I am the Gauntlet about Your fist. I am the Bane of Your foes and the Woes of the Treacherous. I am The End.

Suddenly, Fate and Nanoha gain a rather unsettling new housemate...

I'll see if I can throw together his spell list and put it up soon. From the looks of it right now... it's pretty nasty.

I see. That'll be LOL. But... 0_0

Mindburst!

Spoiler for A scene for StrikeR2?:

Noland had been arguing with a Knight-Sister about how things should be and how it's all wrong, and the Neophyte is trying her best to calm the confused and irate Knight down. Then, Foy Rokker intervenes.

Foy: Pretty loud for a fallen Knight, much less a Cleric-Knight.
Noland: And you are...?
Foy: The only Justicar present. (adjusts glasses)
Noland: J-JUSTICAR! (snaps to attention) But...
Foy: But?
Nol: You... (trails off)

Foy: I don't look my rank? I assume that means you are the Knight from the past?
Noland: Yes, Brother. I wish to speak to you. I want to rejoin the ranks of the Licht.

Foy: In due time, my brother. But you must know that times have changed. We Knights have been reborn in Kha's vision, and to that end, this is the reality you must accept.

Noland: This is just a minor point. As long as I serve the Emp--
Foy: Vivio is not the Sankt Kaiser, Noland.
Noland: No, she--
Foy: Her Holiness has ascended and now watches us from the Golden Throne. We serve the Light she bathes us with.

Noland: (getting annoyed) The Kaiser Lives!

Foy: That's not the case.

Noland bit his lip, almost spitting out curse unfit for the Brother in front of him.

Foy: What's the word I hear? Heretic? Heathen? (eyes narrow) Listen, Noland. We do not become Knights to serve a liege, a memory or ourselves. We are Cleric-Knights because we are born to be and have answered the call on our own volition!

Nol pauses, not believing the blasphemious lies coming from a Justicar of the Celestial Being.

Foy: Until you accept that, Noland, until you find the real Fire of Retribution within you, you will never be a true Cleric-Knight.

Nol: I have the Fire! It was given to me--

Foy: Then it is not your Fire, Noland.

Nol choked as several more harsh thoughts welled up from within.

?????: Hey stop pouring water on a hot man.
Foy: (adjusts glasses) When did you come back?
?????: Only just. Aren't you happy to see me?
Foy: (smirks)

Nol: (turns around into an outstretched hand) You...?
Gimmy: Brother-Captain Gimmy Mifuelle. And don't mind Foy; he's always an ass.
Nol: Ca--!!
Gim: Am I that scary?
Nol: No! I'm just... honored. To meet. You. (still not shaking the hand; didn't recognize Midchilda greeting)
Gim: Well. (retracts hand) Let me just ask you a few simple questions: Apart from some 300 years of updates and patches, do you know what a Cleric-Knight is?
Nol: Huh?
Gim: Just answer Yes, or No.
Nol: ...Yes.
Gim: Do you know wake up in the morning, feeling that you must do something for this great nation?
Nol: Yes.
Gim: Do you feel the pain of the innocent being punished for something that is not their fault?

Nol flashes back to one particular purging, where the Cleric-Knights glassed a town for having witnessed a daemonic incursion. Despite all his training, it haunted him...

Gim: Well?
Nol: ......yes......
Gim: Do you know what it takes wield power for the good of all?
Nol: ...yes.
Gim: Oi, where's your spirit?!
Nol: YES!

Gim: Now (looks Noland straight in the eyes) do you want to kick ass?
Nol: ...sorry?
Gim: I said, do you want to kick ass?
Nol: Why would I want to kick the Justicar?

Gimmy went pffffft, Foy looked incredulous, and because of Gimmy's reaction Noland found himself rather... amused and struggled to control himself. Outright laughter came from behind him. Two more knights joined him, and they were in foreign uniform, with their names on their badges. Noland stiffens as the laughing guy was identified as Justicar Taiyo Aosora and his stern-faced companion, Terminator Yui Hiro.

Taiyo: (still laughing) I believe he means do you wish to go knee deep in Chaos and throw them back into the hole they crawled out from, mind, body and soul, while looking absolutely great at it?
Nol: I believe... Yes.

Gim: That settles it then. (slaps Noland on the back) When you're feeling a lot less lost, come back to us, and we'll see how much 300 years have dulled your blade.

Noland looked from smiling face to smiling face while seeing the contrast of the grimy, wrinkled faces of his era. Layers of blessed magical armor had been replaced with simple cloth ready. Grey skies had turned blue. War had turned to peace. 300 years... It didn't make sense.

Then again, this was the peace he had long fought for, when he was a recognized Battle-Brother. Before he picked up that cursed blade to save a peasant's life. Before he became mistaken for a heretic. Before he entered that nightmared slumber...

This was his chance, this was his time. He would become a Knight again.

Ironically, the day had just one more surprise for him.

Another hand took his, and a tall, white-maned man in black pastor garb came into view.

"I'm Grande Meister Kha. Noland, I presume?"

Till this day, Kha still wondered why the good man just passed out after that.

I think I went a little overboard and took many liberties there... I even assumed he was a Cleric-Knight and tried to make it reconcile with his profile, but I think I made a mess turning Noland into another Arthas... Do forgive me. ><

Originally Posted by Keroko

I actually did some research into that and found this:


Reinforce II Knight’s Garb & The Book of the Azure Sky
(StS DVD2)
Ancient Belkan practitioners generally equip defensive attire known as “Knight Armor”, but the Guardian Knights wear “Knight’s Garb”, designed by Hayate. (Concerning this, details can be found in the “Book of Darkness Incident” data files) Similarly, the Unison Device Reinforce II dons Knight’s Garb when advancing to the front lines. As fitting the support-type Reinforce II, although it does not provide top-class protection, Knight’s Garb allows for more agile maneuvering. The Book of the Azure Sky is a storage device. Similar to Hayate, Reinforce Zwei’s personal device holds an enormous volume of magic data, which is not used independantly, but makes up half of the magic data available during a Unison.

So yeah, I was wrong, the Wolkies aren't wearing Knights Armor at all.

Whoops.

*struggles not to do an "I told you so" dance.*

Originally Posted by Keroko

Now, I may be one of the most accepting tolerant people here, and I would be lying if I said I didn't enjoy the occasional futanari comic, but let's not do that to Vivio shall we?

*evil eye*

Or else...

Originally Posted by Keroko

*mumble mumble* Well, the Horus he wouldn't be in Fall of an Empire, but he certainly would play a bigger role.

Yeah... Now to confirm if he was a Primarch, or a Cleric-Knight...

[Comartemis]

As you can see, knowing about the subject greatly increases ones critisism against it. Knowing very little about millitary stuff and having only casual notice of LoP, willing SoD becomes a lot easier.

Still, willing SoD is rather easy for me anyway. I am more knowlegable then most when it comes to melee combat, and I can still enjoy the Nanoha combat, despite the fact that if I start looking at it technically, it falls down completely.

Same thing goes for me, but I haven't had the benefit of someone pointing out all the flaws in TSAB military doctrine.

It's basically a rogue faction of the Church, lead by Skane who uses his own religous beliefs to control his men. You won't be seeing Avatars or Stealth Tanks rolling out anytime soon if that's what you're worried about.

Anyone mind if I use a variation on this for my work?

[Tempy]

Originally Posted by Keroko

Ancient Belka? Hmm... I might be able to use this guy... mind if I make him one of the Primarchs? (genetic soldiers created of the material of the Royal Bloodline).

If you so desire, then let it be so. However like the previous person, I respectfully ask that you wait until I release the final edit. Thank you for accepting my OC though.

Originally Posted by Kha

Your Faith in the Emperor is weak for a Grey Knight. ()

For me, I'm too Simon, hotblooded, confused and careless to be one too. Not to mention having not a shred of badass to my name.

Who is this Emperor you speak of? I serve only the eternally glorious and holy God-Empress of Mankind. All other false idols will be purged with extreme prejudice and hate.

Besides, fighting daemons is one deal. Social interactions with humans and xenos is not part of the skill set unless it involves one or more of the following: purging, scourging, cleansing, purification, annihilation, or everyone's favorite, EXTERMINATUS.

Originally Posted by Kha

Mindburst!
*snip*

Hey, that was pretty awesome. My only comment is that he's blind unless his device is active.

Originally Posted by Kha

Yeah... Now to confirm if he was a Primarch, or a Cleric-Knight...

Hmmmmmm... now that's a good question.

I like the idea of Primarch, but I also like the Cleric-Knights.

...Heh.

Noland Reiniger: Damned Primarch of the Cleric-Knights. He forsook his sanity and everything he ever lived for in order to save the kingdom he would shatter.

"The galaxy is not yet strong enough to face the horrors lurking beyond our sight. Our existence is one of indulgence, To heal a broken bone you must first break it. I will unify our fallen empire and strengthen it... even if I must be damned to hell forever for it."

Well, while we're at it, I'll put up the spell list.

Spoiler for The Power of Madness:

Note: This list is incomplete, possessing only those witnessed and recorded in history logs.

Knight Armor – Cocytus: Plate-style armor that almost seems alive. The armor seems to shrug off all forms of attacks under A class power. Damage to the armor is sealed up immediately, and no visible injury seemed to affect him significantly.

Knight Armor – Ancile: The legendary shield of the god of war. This manifests as an invisible field of sorts that deflects beams, missiles, and other forms of bombardment. The shield does not seem effective against melee attacks, but it has expressed stability in defense against bombardment spells up to Buster-type spells.

God Hand – Endless Jihad: (Passive) Highly accelerated metabolism allows for rapid regeneration of wounds and injuries. Given time, even lost limbs can be regenerated. The subject possesses the ability to remain alive even with major organs damaged or destroyed. It is speculated that the accelerated healing is responsible for his apparent lack of aging, or a considerable reduction in lifespan.

Insanity Sign – Mad Enhancement: (Passive) All physical attributes are increased drastically at the cost of sanity. The greater the synchronization, the greater the attribute increase, but the more difficult it becomes to snap out of it.

Insanity Sign – Terror of Death: (Passive) Laced into his aura and voice are subtle hallucinogenic spells that target the sanity and mentality of all those around him. Those caught in the spell are afflicted with debilitating visions of friends and family suffering, unspeakable horrors, and their own deaths.

Restriction Sign – Chains of Heaven and Hell: Originating from his gauntlets, two chains extend to incredible lengths for purposes of restraint, capture, defense, movement, and even attack. The chains themselves appear invulnerable to conventional weaponry.

Murder Sign – Bloody Hands: Swathed in disruptive energies, physical defenses like armor crumple like tin foil against the armored fists and greaves of the Berserker. Strangely, the hands themselves can extend out in a feat of anatomical and physiological manipulation, increasing his reach considerably. The hands are cursed to drip the blood of the Saint King eternally as a reminder of his greatest sin.

Tyrant Sword – Wraith Blade "Tyrfing": The cursed sword of tragedy. A long sword composed of as of yet unidentified energies, this ethereal blade disintegrates any unprotected matter in contact with it. The weapon can split into two short blades.

Reality Defiance – Kronos Shift: Manipulation of time-space allows for him to move at incredible speeds. Its maximum range has yet to be determined.

Bullet Hell – Gatling Rave: Long range suppression fire. Staccato burst fire of small explosive “bolts.” Rapid fire, but relatively low power. The sheer volume of fire makes it difficult for opponents to act. Originates from gauntlets.

Bullet Hell – Infernal Devil's Spear: Medium range anti-armor. A large bullet from hell, this fiery shot melts through heavy armor and shields alike. After piercing the defenses, the bullet explodes violently in a burst of sorcerous energy.

Cataclysm Sign – Holocaust: Close range anti-unit. The very air in front of and around the subject explodes in a firestorm of wild, scorching power. Any unit caught within the attack can be instantly incinerated.

This stuff will probably need the most revision.