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EthernalRain · 2012-01-28, 20:42

Hello everyone! I'm here if anyone needs me.

Eratas123 · 2012-01-28, 20:43

I'm tempted to do first person view, but I know I need to keep it third person

Also, I know I'm gonna get complaints if majority of the kids are guys, so I made only 4 of them like that.0

EthernalRain · 2012-01-28, 20:47

@ Eratas: You'd probably get complaints if they were all girls, as well...

Or not.

I'm having some difficulties with the writing of HotM... I'm finding that writing and rewriting chapter 17 has become a serious chore, and I'm having much more fun writing other stories that have a broader possible storyline. HotM... It's slowly not becoming fun to write.

I'll finish it eventually, but for now... I doubt I'll even get to it. I'm not going to push myself to getting to it, so for now...

I'm on Infinite Stratos Fic hiatus. I'll still show for this forum though.

Eratas123 · 2012-01-28, 20:50

Moat of us here chat more than write anyway

Also, only about 2 of the guys are actually boyish. Shouta(Maya's) and Charles(Charlotte's) look way too girly for comfort.

EthernalRain · 2012-01-28, 20:52

@ Eratas: That's going to throw the ISA people for a loop.

My current fic focus will be an attempt at a well-written Nasuverse fic and my Hidan no aria fic.

Eratas123 · 2012-01-28, 20:55

Nasuverse is way too complicated

I'll probably make a kingdom hesrts fic and continue my Index fic at some point. Maybe a Dragon age fic as well.

Also, FI was supposed to have a darker plot, but it eventually turned to humor. Only Kazuma's the remnant of that.

EthernalRain · 2012-01-28, 21:00

I've got a good understanding of the nasuverse, and I've got a fic idea that will work excellently (well, at least to me).

Also, humor isn't bad. Darkness can create character development, so some spices of that might be good.

Your fic idea has so much potential for character development in the background (or foreground) of the humor.

Yachiyo · 2012-01-28, 21:00

8 pages more to 1000th page!

Eratas123 · 2012-01-28, 21:04

@ Rain - It's a bit too mood whiplash. Later on, the kids explain what they were doing before they got warped. Most of these are average. However, Kazuma says nothing unusual was happening with him......then the flashback shows Ichika's recently dead corpse and kazuma trying to do CpR to it even if he knows he's already dead.

EthernalRain · 2012-01-28, 21:07

@ Yachiyo: May the fastest poster claim it!

@ Eratas: Try to slow the whiplash so you don't break your readers figurative necks. Make it seem like a fair possibility, instead of bringing it out of nowhere. Over the chapters, make it a point to see why he acts awkwardly around Ichika, and seems to avoid questions about his past and any questions regarding his relationship with Ichika.

Eratas123 · 2012-01-28, 21:10

His intro with Shouta's already markedly different from the rest. Shouta takes note of the fact that Kazuma seems to be injured, but ue keeps saying he's not and they should look for someone. Then they meet Tatenashi and he absolutely flips and runs away wjen he sees her uniform.

EthernalRain · 2012-01-28, 21:15

That could just mean he's shy, aside from the potential injuries.

Or that could portray to the audience he might have come from a universe where, dare I say it, he might have come from a universe where he was abused by his "parents". Even though we know that's not the case, and he doesn't have parents.

MeisterBabylon · 2012-01-28, 21:16

I started playing iDOLM@STER Cinderella Girls. There goes my spare time...

Trying to cut down though lol

But with my Nanoha fic in progress, with LOADS of inspiration, Vandam is on a short hiatus, cos I usually run out of steam pretty fast, which then oscillates back to Vandam.

Eratas123 · 2012-01-28, 21:22

@ Rain - He doesn't have parents

Also, he flips out only when he sees her uniform, not her. He even gets close to her till he notices the design of the uniform and immediately runs.

@ Meistah - Good luck

EthernalRain · 2012-01-28, 21:28

@ Eratas: Of course he doesn't, but the other readers who aren't on this forum don't know that.

Also, why does he run from the sight of her uniform again?

I was gone for very long lengths of time.

Eratas123 · 2012-01-28, 21:33

His world is basically the IS warfare and dominance up to ten thousand. He's an imperfect clone of Ichika, so he has no actual parents. He runs from Tatenashi because her uniform has the ISA symbol, which just about everyone from his world pisses their pants in fear of. That and he's hopped up n tranqs. He's not thinking the most logically.

demino_hellsin · 2012-01-28, 21:34

but tranqs make your thoughts blurry, not hyper accelerate O.o?

EthernalRain · 2012-01-28, 21:34

That makes quite a lot of sense.

I don't have much to say right now, since I'm trying to work on my Nasuverse fic.

Eratas123 · 2012-01-28, 21:40

@ Demi - That's why he fails to notice that he's in ISA in the first place. It took seeing the symbol to make him realize it. Also, seeing Shouta made him doubt it since he has no reason to believe a male would be in ISA. Shouta remarks that he's walking like he's sleepy or sluggish, so he's already being affected.

@ Senpai - Meh, I'm stuck as well since I'm wondering how to implement Madoka>_< Nasuverse doesn't have much of a following nowadays due to the fact that no games have been released recently. Also, is your story an OC one again?

EthernalRain · 2012-01-28, 21:42

Here`s a very short summary. Yes, its an OC fic.

Spoiler for Nasuverse Fic Summary:

2012-01-28, 20:43	Link #19822
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	I'm tempted to do first person view, but I know I need to keep it third person Also, I know I'm gonna get complaints if majority of the kids are guys, so I made only 4 of them like that.0 __________________

2012-01-28, 20:50	Link #19824
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Moat of us here chat more than write anyway Also, only about 2 of the guys are actually boyish. Shouta(Maya's) and Charles(Charlotte's) look way too girly for comfort. __________________

2012-01-28, 20:55	Link #19826
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Nasuverse is way too complicated I'll probably make a kingdom hesrts fic and continue my Index fic at some point. Maybe a Dragon age fic as well. Also, FI was supposed to have a darker plot, but it eventually turned to humor. Only Kazuma's the remnant of that. __________________

2012-01-28, 21:00	Link #19828
Yachiyo ~`Seito Kaichō`~ Join Date: Sep 2011 Location: ~`Afterlife`~	8 pages more to 1000th page! __________________

2012-01-28, 21:04	Link #19829
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Rain - It's a bit too mood whiplash. Later on, the kids explain what they were doing before they got warped. Most of these are average. However, Kazuma says nothing unusual was happening with him......then the flashback shows Ichika's recently dead corpse and kazuma trying to do CpR to it even if he knows he's already dead. __________________

2012-01-28, 20:42	Link #19821
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	Hello everyone! I'm here if anyone needs me.

2012-01-28, 20:47	Link #19823
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	@ Eratas: You'd probably get complaints if they were all girls, as well... Or not. I'm having some difficulties with the writing of HotM... I'm finding that writing and rewriting chapter 17 has become a serious chore, and I'm having much more fun writing other stories that have a broader possible storyline. HotM... It's slowly not becoming fun to write. I'll finish it eventually, but for now... I doubt I'll even get to it. I'm not going to push myself to getting to it, so for now... I'm on Infinite Stratos Fic hiatus. I'll still show for this forum though.

2012-01-28, 20:52	Link #19825
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	@ Eratas: That's going to throw the ISA people for a loop. My current fic focus will be an attempt at a well-written Nasuverse fic and my Hidan no aria fic.

2012-01-28, 21:00	Link #19827
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	I've got a good understanding of the nasuverse, and I've got a fic idea that will work excellently (well, at least to me). Also, humor isn't bad. Darkness can create character development, so some spices of that might be good. Your fic idea has so much potential for character development in the background (or foreground) of the humor.

2012-01-28, 21:07	Link #19830
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	@ Yachiyo: May the fastest poster claim it! @ Eratas: Try to slow the whiplash so you don't break your readers figurative necks. Make it seem like a fair possibility, instead of bringing it out of nowhere. Over the chapters, make it a point to see why he acts awkwardly around Ichika, and seems to avoid questions about his past and any questions regarding his relationship with Ichika.

2012-01-28, 21:10	Link #19831
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	His intro with Shouta's already markedly different from the rest. Shouta takes note of the fact that Kazuma seems to be injured, but ue keeps saying he's not and they should look for someone. Then they meet Tatenashi and he absolutely flips and runs away wjen he sees her uniform. __________________

2012-01-28, 21:15	Link #19832
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	That could just mean he's shy, aside from the potential injuries. Or that could portray to the audience he might have come from a universe where, dare I say it, he might have come from a universe where he was abused by his "parents". Even though we know that's not the case, and he doesn't have parents.

2012-01-28, 21:16	Link #19833
MeisterBabylon ~ Your Smile ~ Author Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: 346Pro Age: 38	I started playing iDOLM@STER Cinderella Girls. There goes my spare time... Trying to cut down though lol But with my Nanoha fic in progress, with LOADS of inspiration, Vandam is on a short hiatus, cos I usually run out of steam pretty fast, which then oscillates back to Vandam. __________________ 白露型駆逐艦の４番艦、夕立です。第三次ソロモン海戦では、けっこう頑張ったっぽい★？

2012-01-28, 21:22	Link #19834
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Rain - He doesn't have parents Also, he flips out only when he sees her uniform, not her. He even gets close to her till he notices the design of the uniform and immediately runs. @ Meistah - Good luck __________________

2012-01-28, 21:28	Link #19835
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	@ Eratas: Of course he doesn't, but the other readers who aren't on this forum don't know that. Also, why does he run from the sight of her uniform again? I was gone for very long lengths of time.

2012-01-28, 21:33	Link #19836
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	His world is basically the IS warfare and dominance up to ten thousand. He's an imperfect clone of Ichika, so he has no actual parents. He runs from Tatenashi because her uniform has the ISA symbol, which just about everyone from his world pisses their pants in fear of. That and he's hopped up n tranqs. He's not thinking the most logically. __________________

2012-01-28, 21:34	Link #19837
demino_hellsin That one guy Join Date: Nov 2011	but tranqs make your thoughts blurry, not hyper accelerate O.o?

2012-01-28, 21:34	Link #19838
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	That makes quite a lot of sense. I don't have much to say right now, since I'm trying to work on my Nasuverse fic.

2012-01-28, 21:40	Link #19839
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Demi - That's why he fails to notice that he's in ISA in the first place. It took seeing the symbol to make him realize it. Also, seeing Shouta made him doubt it since he has no reason to believe a male would be in ISA. Shouta remarks that he's walking like he's sleepy or sluggish, so he's already being affected. @ Senpai - Meh, I'm stuck as well since I'm wondering how to implement Madoka>_< Nasuverse doesn't have much of a following nowadays due to the fact that no games have been released recently. Also, is your story an OC one again? __________________

2012-01-28, 21:42	Link #19840
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	Here`s a very short summary. Yes, its an OC fic. Spoiler for Nasuverse Fic Summary: *Across the Multiverse* My name is Kouhei Takeda. I happen to be the latest and unluckiest apprentice of the grand magician, Kischur Zelretch Schweinorg. I'm a second-rate magus, can't do much, and my master wants to take me on a road trip across the multiverse... F**k my life.