2012-11-28, 20:35 | Link #81 |
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I occasionally wonder if I'm communicating some ancient "70s/80s" era sensibility in their fairly open sexuality in addition to the sensibilities of musician world. I try to do reality checks with 20-somethings and I hang out in the local music scene enough to observe.
Tsika skirts prudery in some ways - she has a real romantic notion in how actual sexual intimacy should happen. Her rage bomb is certainly an issue with anyone getting close to her. Glyc is just ... an emotional hatchling. She simply wasn't ever planning on any emotional attachments, ever, before Tsika. Glyc was planning to be dead, to be blunt, in her formative years. Kpau is using any kind of sensory overload to avoid 'the monsters', sex is just part of that. I think the only person we have to worry about killing Glyc is Glyc herself. Oh, and thanks for the comments. I'd certainly like to see more of those from readers (constructive criticism, especially but positive notes make me happy, too) edit: yeah Rockband has some really lame ass animation and distortion issues (in addition to avatar collisions). Unfortunately, its the only tool that comes close to what I had in mind. I may actually commission someone to do "light novel type illustrations" at some point.
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2012-11-30, 04:58 | Link #83 |
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1) Taking me longer than expected to brainstorm details of next chapter (stares intently at outline, more scotch needed)
2) It helps to stare at the piles of videos I've made for ideas. So lets have Tsika sing a randy little tune (Glyc guitar solo fans, her bit starts at 1:40)
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2012-12-02, 19:52 | Link #84 |
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I'd forgotten her name and just rediscovered her ... a small chunk of Glyc was my recollection of this player (Orianthi Panagaris). These clips are worth a watch:
Bassist Nik West and Drummer Hannah Ford (damn, Nik is sexy when she's playing) Metal drummer, Lux Drummerette doing a cover of Mastadon goofing around in Viking garb: Metal drummer, Meytal Cohen doing Duality:
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2012-12-04, 04:49 | Link #85 |
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Okay, I'm more satisfied with Chapters 3 and 4 of volume two, I'll release those tomorrow for sure ... but I'm still stuck with Chapter 5.
So throwing this out - people seem to really really like watching Glyc sing. So here she is singing another sugary, sweet, little girl song
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2012-12-04, 21:46 | Link #88 |
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Okay, we're knee deep in Glyc's butterflies, ponies, and sharp razors ... time for some darkness (yes, I'm still fighting with Kpau's chapter, chapter 5 - feel like its important to get right)
This video is possibly the future result of Tsika talking Blar into doing a Goth Festival gig .... and yes, everyone dresses up. Tsika listened to a lot of Russian opera as a small child, Glyc solo at 2:55):
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2012-12-04, 22:59 | Link #89 |
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Volume 02 Chapter 03 (“Sex And Candy”)
(RE-RELEASE OF VOLUME TWO CHAPTER THREE)
If you don't want to re-read it, you'll live but I'd appreciate it, of course. Volume 02 Chapter 03 (“Sex And Candy”) (version 0.9) Apologies for the re-release, hopefully the read is more enjoyable. Author note: 1) Trying something different in expressing character internal first-person thoughts versus descriptive text. If I like it, will rework the prior chapters accordingly as I format volume 1. 2) Glyc's point-of-view ... always interesting/challenging to try and convey.
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2012-12-04, 23:08 | Link #90 |
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Volume 02 Chapter 04 (“Love Song For A Vampire”)
(RE-RELEASE OF VOL 02 CHAP 04)Again, you might live not re-reading it but I'd appreciate it
Volume 02 Chapter 04 (“Love Song For A Vampire”) (version 0.9) Now back to fist fighting my way through chapter 5 where we get Kpau's point of view for some important events.
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2012-12-05, 17:25 | Link #91 |
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Volume 02 Chapter 05 (“Closer”)
Volume 02 Chapter 05 (“Closer”) (version 0.9)
contents should be considered NSFW - just sayin' Author's note: Crossing a small Rubicon here, we'll see how it goes. I should say I originally wrote a much more explicit chapter but I'm abiding by the forum rule guidelines of that "PG-13" line in the sand. If I find a good spot to "publish" - I'll return the story to its uncensored form.
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2012-12-10, 10:42 | Link #92 |
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Volume 02 Chapter 06 (“White Rabbit”)
Volume 02 Chapter 06 (“White Rabbit”) (version 0.9)
This and the next chapter or two have a lot of Glycerin - just sayin'
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2012-12-10, 11:11 | Link #93 |
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Posting a few videos of what I think are somewhat thematic "character songs" that go with each character well. Glyc may need two or three depending on which reality lens is used. Read the chapter 6 above before you watch the videos ...
A certain quality of Glycerin's more erratic aspects. Best match to Tsika I've found yet. A more somber thematic for Kpau. (revised for rock festival)
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2012-12-11, 11:03 | Link #94 |
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A couple more videos and then story time:
The three Lost Girls doing what they do best - making noise together (I like the synchronized kick Blar and Glyc do in the opener): Blar's thematic, classical metalish, of course -
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2012-12-13, 15:27 | Link #95 |
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Volume 02 Chapter 07 (“She Talks To Angels”)
Volume 02 Chapter 07 (“She Talks To Angels”) (version 0.9)
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2012-12-17, 11:46 | Link #96 |
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Volume 02 Chapter 08 (“Angels and Demons”)
Volume 02 Chapter 08 (“Angels and Demons”) (version 0.9)
Author note: Hmmm, i've been planning this chapter since my initial outline. I can't decide if it actually works or not. Well, we'll see what people think. I'm not adverse to ripping out the walls and rethinking it. edit: no wall ripping so far but some good points made, minor rewrites in progress - but no actual plot line changes so far.
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2012-12-21, 22:13 | Link #98 |
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Volume 02 Chapter 09 (“I Want Your Sex”)
Volume 02 Chapter 09 (“I Want Your Sex”) (version 0.9)
contents are NSFW (sexual situations) There, we're definitely into the storyline now. I can safely say I'm past the introductions and expositions. Glyc's "asymmetric bob" without the hat. Apparently, "young adult" books are starting to trend big. Hmmmm.
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2012-12-28, 01:13 | Link #99 |
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Volume 02 Chapter 10 (“Ride A White Swan”)
Volume 02 Chapter 10 (“Ride A White Swan”) (version 0.9)
Was looking for a version of tune Glycerin sings as an example and tripped across this lovely Brit lass singing - with the instrument in question. Perfect example. The young lady's youtube handle is 'doodlebugamy' and she covers a number of tunes. Give them a listen
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2013-01-02, 13:48 | Link #100 |
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Volume 02 Chapter 11 (“Walk Like An Egyptian”) Part One
Volume 02 Chapter 11 (“Walk Like An Egyptian”) Part One (version 0.9)
My word processor says I have 40000ish characters in this chapter. The forum software claims I've got more than 50000 characters and it won't let me post the whole chapter. I think the forum software failed math (or it counts very strangely, I don't have that many meta-tags). Anyway, the rest of the chapter is in the next post.
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