Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[arkhangelsk]

Those "missiles" move so slowly that they aren't learning much about blocking real missiles (which I assume will be in this story). Obviously, if all he's using are those toy missiles then it is a different story.

Oh, and Striker, if you are doing a based on Halo story, try looking up Erusia on this board - it might help. Otherwise, I know nothing about Halo, so your description is no help to me.

[Keroko]

Misiles almost always move slower in anime. Take macross for example, twisting around and moving slow, only speeding up when the scene demands it. As I've said before many times, when it comes to anime, Physics and mathmetical calculation take a backseat.

I don't see reallistic calculations as a reason for saying that the TSAB would be doomed if they ever got their hands on Terran weaponry. Magic was widely used when Mass-based Weaponry was common usage, Belka even altered their bodies to get better use of magic. Obviously magic is at the very least equal to Mass Weaponry.

I don't see a reason to completely tear into a story on the sole base that 'realistically speaking mages can't counter it' A lot of things aren't realistically possible in Nanoha.

[markesellus]

Lol, nice comic Keroko. Umm, I know this is pertaining to Strikers fanfic but I think we're getting a bit off topic. Besides, this is fanfiction, lot's of things can happen.

[Jimmy C]

Originally Posted by Striker117

As for orbital bombardment, if they wish to control the galaxy then that would be a bad move because part of control is the peoples support which you will quickly lose if you just go round destroying their homes.

If I were truly cynical, I'd say "Big deal, I'll just move my own population in after I've levelled the place."
It doesn't matter if this empire of yours uses planetary bombardment as an SOP or not. Spaceship-based weapons will have no trouble reaching the surface from orbit. All that's left is deciding the level of damage when the attack hits the target.
Also, as I've mentioned before, their space superiority makes it impossible for the Bureau to deploy its ships in support of planetary operations. Heck, it makes it difficult for the Bureau to have bases on-planets. Aerial mages can defend against ground attacks, but they can do nothing against strikes from orbit. Since you've given them space superiority, the Bureau will have a difficult time dislodging any empire warship from orbit.
On the other hand, a TSAB base doesn't need to look like a conventional military base. Given the size of their devices in inactive form and the fact that they don't need vehicles too much, their bases can look like civilian housing. Which is exactly what they did in A's.

after all this is my first fic and i want it to be at least a little successful.

My advice is don't get discouraged when people point out holes in your ideas. That's the whole point of asking for comments. If some elements won't work, discard or change them and move on.

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Striker117

anything else i may have missed let me know and ill try clear it up, after all this is my first fic and i want it to be at least a little successful.

Best of luck with that! You'll get some good advice here so don't hesitate to post a few drafts and revised drafts here ^^

[Kaix]

Originally Posted by AtomicoX

EDIT: Small fluff...I don't consider it good >_>


Dancing in the Violet Light

Spoiler for Dancing in the Violet Light:

They stood at the small tent that served drinks. They had a pretty expensive and tasty drink each, toasting as if the moment was something special. They had been at a restaurant before, eating a luxurious dinner, complete with burning candles, soothing music and the moon shining in.
They were waiting for the concert to start. Nanoha had waited for several weeks for this day to come. Her favorite band was playing and she had managed to get her partner to like them too. She was very happy at this moment.
She noticed people started walking towards the big tent. It looked like the concert was about to start. She grabbed her partner’s arm and their eyes met. She smiled and pulled harder. Her partner followed after her into the crowd and after a moment they were inside. The tent was crowded with people and it was very dark. Nanoha stayed close to the person she held hands with and observed the people around her.

Then it started. The low sound grew louder and the lights on the scene turned on, revealing two men in very strange clothing and a helmet over their heads. They waved to the audience who responded with a massive cheer. The music began picking up in speed and volume. Some of the people started to move in a rhythmic dance. Then the vocals came.

One more time

By now the whole tent was in movement. The searching light swept over the people and lit up the walls in bright colors. Nanoha looked up with sparkling eyes at the face that was looking down at her. They held each other tightly and slowly danced beneath the violet light that was now spreading around the tent. The couple had a little space for themselves in the crowd, like an aura around them.

“I love you Nanoha.”

Nanoha smiled and embraced her partner harder.

“I love you too, Yuuno.”

The music continued to stream out of the speakers and the light did not stop its movement. Violet light, dancing around them.

It didn't really feel like exact fluff (to me at least), but the ending was a real pleasant surprise. It was nice to read. There is too little of that pairing around.

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

Saw a pic in the image thread that got the gears turning (or crack flowing ). This thread needs more Hayate fics anyway .

Spoiler for Experimental Mishap:

-cut-

That was quite something at the end. I was expecting something totally different to happen in the end (don't know what, but not THIS), but it was cute a cute conclusion. Needs a sequel.

Originally Posted by Laith

Crossroads

To the place among heavens

…Or the devil´s home.

Spoiler for part 3:

-cut-

Spoiler for Decision 3:

a) The two decided to investigate the noise

b) "I´ll go," the valkyrie said...

C) "I´ll go" the knight said...

Spoiler for R/S:

Yuuno 5
Fate 1

If you have noticed a better grammar thank TSS. I fail at it

Votes end in more or less 19.30 hrs remember Green and Big

I really think B sounds like a great choice.

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

Previously on Secret Ambition

Secret Ambition
Scene 3

Spoiler for Scene 3:

-cut-
A. Demand to know who the hell is grabbing my butt
B. Ask politely why the hell they're grabbing my butt
C. Scream like a little girl

And thus the trinity was complete. Big and blue choices please

C. Because it's too funny not to choose it!

[Advent000]

Originally Posted by Laith

Crossroads

To the place among heavens

…Or the devil´s home.

Spoiler for part 3:

Two figures moved swiftly and silently through the castle. One, a red armored girl with red eyes, was running as if it was nothing. The other, a white armored girl with blue eyes, was trying to keep the pace of the girl running in front of her.

She sure is fast.

Running around the castle to find their destination, Nanoha wondered where they were heading.

There are two possibilities where she might be. There is the tallest tower and the dungeons… I hope she is in the tallest tower. Please Goddess let her be in the tallest tower.

“Here we are,” the valkyrie said. A wooden door was in front of them. Unlike the others, which had the symbol of the Paltina´s royal family, this was just plain wooden door.

And this leads us to… the dungeons. Just my luck.

“Let´s go” the blonde ordered as she started to go downstairs. Unwillingly Nanoha followed her.

The dungeons are always so dirty and full of bones. Why they can´t follow the standard rules for kidnapping princess?

“Are you… sure this is the right way?” Nanoha asked, not letting all of her fear come through her voice.

“Yes,” the red eyed girl said.

“How can… you be so sure of that?” The light that entered through the door was slowly fading as they kept going down.

“I just know,” the red eyed girl replied in her calmed voice.

…How could she know that?

With no lights or torches illuminating their way, the knight tripped with something. With almost no distance between the two girls the knight made the other girl fall to the ground as well. Groaning Nanoha started to rub her head and placed one hand on something metallic.

“Nghh,” the brunette groaned in pain, “my head…”

“Lady Nanoha,” a voice sounded “could you please move?”

Wha…?

“I don’t want to repeat myself, Lady Takamachi,” Her voice started to sound irritated. Knowing that making the valkyrie mad was something that no one dared to, the knight quickly stood up from the blonde´s back.

“S…sorry, Lo…rd Fat…e,” the blue eyed knight said while bowing.

“…Let´s just continue,” the red eyed valkyrie said ignoring the apology of the knight.

I thought she was going to kill me…

Walking through the darkness, Nanoha could feel all the spider webs, the remnants of human beings and unknown things that she didn’t wanted to know.

Why in the dungeons? WHY!?

The sound of footsteps was heard in the middle of the darkness…

Spoiler for Decision 3:

a) The two decided to investigate the noise

b) "I´ll go," the valkyrie said...

C) "I´ll go" the knight said...

Spoiler for R/S:

Yuuno 5
Fate 1

If you have noticed a better grammar thank TSS. I fail at it

Votes end in more or less 19.30 hrs remember Green and Big

A

I see Fate is gaining.

[Striker117]

Change to Mikazuki's device for those who are interested:

Spoiler for Cloud:

Device Information:
Cloud's form is a large glaive. The pole is as tall as Mikazuki and the large sword like blade on the end is about the length or her forearm. The blue gem is located just under the blade and above the cartridge system. The pole is a shining silver and the blade is pitch black with blue details branching out all over the blade and two which extend down the pole of the lance which are barely visible usually but the more magic that is concentrated into the device the brighter they glow. Some of Cloud's functions are:

Energy form - When this ability is activated the blade on the end shatters revealing a blade of pure magical energy in its place increasing damage but using more energy.
Sword form - This simple form is where the pole of the lance shrinks to form a smaller grip turning the glaive into a sword.
Dagger form - This is the same as sword form only the size of a dagger.
Shooter form - In this form the blade splits down the middle creating a small shaft for concentrating magical energy. This form is very accurate for mid and long range attacks.

Cloud's stored mode is a small flat jewel that is a deep blue and is worn as a necklace. Both sword and dagger forms can be duel wielded in either blade or energy form. Also it has Zamber form similar to Fate's with the addition of a bladed Zamber which is also pitch black with a blue detail running down the center branching out over the blade in several places.

The old design was really just a place holder until i thought of my own device but since i hadn't used it in my fic yet i can change it now without too much hassle hope you like.

Also was planning on posting the next chapter soon which will answer some of the questions people have been asking but my computer automatically restarted itself for an update and i hadn't saved so i have to retype so will be a little later than planned.

[Vivio Testarossa]

Originally Posted by arkhangelsk

First, I'll ignore the plausibility of this with the TSAB, since JimmyC is going nicely into it. We'll just call your base setup Power A and Power B. All right?

Given that Power B has space superiority and can use weapons with at least mass destruction strength, it is going to win automatically in a all-out, no holds barred war. It'll just gain space superiority over Power A's planets in turn and bombard them into oblivion whatever the other side's ground superiority.

for atmospheric and ground combat to be major factors, there must be a very good reason why space powers don't use orbital bombardment, either precision or area. Even the inferior side can make ground combat very difficult by making raids. In Star Wars, for example, this is handled by the widespread deployment of difficult to penetrate Theater or Planetary shields, as well as highly effective planetary turbolasers or ion cannon to keep ships from getting close casually. But that doesn't seem to work for your setup.

Another alternative is that they have no precision ability - for example, the power of the guns can't be racked down below say kiloton level, and they presumably want to capture rather than destroy. Otherwise, the opportunity for ground maneuver becomes sorely limited.
---
Specific considerations:

Frankly, if you have to say that the Empire isn't very serious about winning this, it reduces the plausibility of the story. Even if they had other enemies and this is the 5th front for them, the forces fighting this front are still going to be serious.

Getting orbital bombardment out of the picture, against Midchildra's infantry forces, the first thing is to find a way to get rid of all standoff ability from the Empire. If they are allowed even Terran grade standoffs like cruise missiles or SRBMs, or AMRAAMs, they'll be hitting Midchildran facilities or even individual mages at ranges and speeds where they cannot reply, even if they are AAA-S mages. If the mages go on the offensive, even with terrain masking they'll be engaged dozens of kilometers out by long range SAMs without being able to reply (if the SAMs are in an elevated position or there are AAM equipped fighters...). It is hard to imagine anything other than a slaughter under such conditions. The fight has to be kept direct fire and WVR.

A possible idea is to sell they don't have missiles. It'll be a hard sell, but here are some ideas:
1) Power gap: Right now, we have chemical explosives, and then we have a jump up by orders of magnitude to nukes. If we assume they similarly cannot fill the gap, then maybe the emphasis on energy or plasma weapons, even though they are straight-running, is because they are more able to regulate its power and thus fill the gap b/w conventionals and nukes - they traded off LR accuracy for more usable firepower. Of course, that'll mean upping the power of the weapons (for air to air weapons, for example, just to make them better in destruction than our missiles means giving the beams over 100 pounds of explosive worth of energy), but at least it is better than a situation where the mages can't even reply.
2) Uber-advanced ECM in their civ: But that's limited because the TSAB barely seems to have concepts of EW - it won't take long for the Empire to figure this out.

Of course, you can beef up the mages too, but by the time you can beef them up enough, they won't look much like TSAB mages anymore and you might as well say this is a war b/w your Empire and a self-created, TSAB-inspired organization.

All I can say to that is read the "rules of anime", I think that you are thinking too hard about it.

@Striker117 Keep up the good work.

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Striker117

Change to Mikazuki's device for those who are interested:

Spoiler for Cloud:

Device Information:
Cloud's form is a large glaive. The pole is as tall as Mikazuki and the large sword like blade on the end is about the length or her forearm. The blue gem is located just under the blade and above the cartridge system. The pole is a shining silver and the blade is pitch black with blue details branching out all over the blade and two which extend down the pole of the lance which are barely visible usually but the more magic that is concentrated into the device the brighter they glow. Some of Cloud's functions are:

Energy form - When this ability is activated the blade on the end shatters revealing a blade of pure magical energy in its place increasing damage but using more energy.
Sword form - This simple form is where the pole of the lance shrinks to form a smaller grip turning the glaive into a sword.
Dagger form - This is the same as sword form only the size of a dagger.
Shooter form - In this form the blade splits down the middle creating a small shaft for concentrating magical energy. This form is very accurate for mid and long range attacks.

Cloud's stored mode is a small flat jewel that is a deep blue and is worn as a necklace. Both sword and dagger forms can be duel wielded in either blade or energy form. Also it has Zamber form similar to Fate's with the addition of a bladed Zamber which is also pitch black with a blue detail running down the center branching out over the blade in several places.

The old design was really just a place holder until i thought of my own device but since i hadn't used it in my fic yet i can change it now without too much hassle hope you like.

Also was planning on posting the next chapter soon which will answer some of the questions people have been asking but my computer automatically restarted itself for an update and i hadn't saved so i have to retype so will be a little later than planned.

... glaive Not that it actually matters

Falling Soul: [I'm telling you call me sempai]

Vivio: At least he's not orange

Falling Soul: [Orange is the color of awesome]


Secret Ambition update:
Voting will end in two hours!
Current vote:
A:
B: III
C: IIIII

[Laith]

Votes ended. Results

A=6
B=3
C=3

You have activated my trAp card...

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

Previously on Secret Ambition

Secret Ambition
Scene 3

Spoiler for Scene 3:

The town was rather large, I realized that by the time the bus I was taking was halfway to the northern most point in it. However, I didn't realize I had absolutely no idea where I was headed. I had planned to finish up near Nanoha's bakery but unfortunately... I realized I had no idea where that actually was.

Being the genius I was, I decided it'd be best to wander southwards. Somewhere in my adolescent brain I believed that would lead me to my goal, I'd wanted to explore the city anyway. It was only after an hour of walking that I collapsed onto a bench in front of a store. Or at least attempted to.

The second before I sat I heard a sharp gasp. I immediately jumped up, fearing I was about to sit on wet paint or a cute puppy. Instead a girl pushed past me and scooped up something resting on the bench.

It clicked for me, I knew the girl, she was the same quiet blond who had been sitting next to me in class. “A-Ah Testarossa-san right?”

She looked at me over her shoulder before moving over to the bushes behind the bench, she made no noise as she walked. There, she opened her hands and released... a small cockroach into the bushes. She then turned to face me. “Please be careful Harlaown-san.” Her voice was soft but firm, like a mother gently scolding a child. “You never know who was there first.”

I was surprised, most girls I knew would have been terrified to even see a cockroach, let alone bring it to safety. I was even feeling a tad queasy knowing I had almost sat on it. However I managed to nod, “Ah, yes I'll be more careful from now on.”

She looked relieved, “Thank you,” she smiled, I was reminded of a painting of an angel I had seen once, her smile had been so pure and beautiful, but it had rung hallow and surreal. “I'll see you in class then.” She turned to go on with her business.

“W-Wait!” I called out, stopping her in her tracks. “I think I'm lost,” I rubbed the back of my head, “I know we've barely met but could you help me around?”

She stopped and seemed to contemplate my request before turning back around. “Well I can't just leave you here can I?”

I sighed happily, “Thank you very much.” It had to be destiny that I happened along to her.


~~~

“And here is the Yagami Cosplay Family restaurant. Supposedly it's one step up from being a cosplay cafe but I can't seem to find the difference.”

I chuckled as Testarossa-san, who's first name coincidentally turned out to Fate, motioned to the light red awning of the restaurant. “It could be fun to go there sometime.”

Fate nodded in agreement, “But you'd have to be careful, Hayate Yagami-san is known for dressing up any customers she likes.”

“You say that like you have experience Testarossa-san.”

The crimson color she turned gave me all the answer I needed. “Anyway,” She shook off her blush. “Where were you intending to go?”

“Oh! I'd almost forgotten,” Fate such a pleasant person I'd forgotten about my goal, “I'm looking for a bakery!”

“Heh,” she looked sorry, “I'm afraid I'll need more than that to go off of.”

“Well it's owned by the Takamachi family.”

It might have been my imagination but I swore she tensed a bit. “You mean Midori-ya?” She seemed to think for a minute, “I'll take you there, it's not far.”

“Y-you don't have to. I'm sure I can get by with just directions,” if something was bothering her I really didn't want to impose, she'd already been too kind.

“No really I've brought you this far,” again she reminded me of a mother, willing to do something she didn't like for her child.

~~~

“Ah so this is Midori-ya,” I rubbed my chin, it was a cute little shop. “Please let me treat you to something Testarossa-san, you've done so much for and I'm a stranger really.”

“No no I couldn't, Harlaown-san. I got to meet you, so I'm pleased,” She folded her hands behind her back, “besides my mother will be worried if I don't come home soon.”

I sighed, “Alright but I promise I'll pay you back somehow.”

“I'll be waiting,” she waved slightly then walked off, disappearing into the crowd.

I hadn't learned much more about her then her name, but I already could tell I wanted to know more about this girl, but that'd have to wait for later. I pushed open Midori-ya's doors.

The small cafe was quite hopping. Teenagers of all sorts seemed to have come to eat the treats they sold. However, I couldn't spy the one girl I was looking for. I stepped into the line, it seemed my only option was to wait then. I turned to face the display shelf, peering at the sweet delicacies inside. That was when it happened, that was when I got the shock of my life.

That was when someone squeezed my butt... hard.

“Yes... I do think that maid outfit will fit you.”

A. Demand to know who the hell is grabbing my butt
B. Ask politely why the hell they're grabbing my butt
C. Scream like a little girl

And thus the trinity was complete. Big and blue choices please

C

Did I make it on time?

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Laith

Votes ended. Results

A=6
B=3
C=3

You have activated my trAp card...

*wipes forehead* phew my mistake didn't bite me in the kisser

Originally Posted by Satashi

C

Did I make it on time?

Yep only 35 minutes left~

[TheShinySword]

And with that the voting was closed, Yuuno will scream

[Striker117]

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

... glaive Not that it actually matters

Falling Soul: [I'm telling you call me sempai]

Vivio: At least he's not orange

Falling Soul: [Orange is the color of awesome]

That's funny, I've got some FS dialog in the second chapter and i dunno if i'm doing so good, he seems to be coming off as more of a jerk. Anyway when i post it i guess you can point out where i went wrong if i did.

I chose a glaive long before i even started this fic as along with claymores they are my weapons of choice.

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Striker117

That's funny, I've got some FS dialog in the second chapter and i dunno if i'm doing so good, he seems to be coming off as more of a jerk. Anyway when i post it i guess you can point out where i went wrong if i did.

I chose a glaive long before i even started this fic as along with claymores they are my weapons of choice.

You can always PM the dialog to me and I can look it over

[Naolin]

Originally Posted by DigiGatou

Spoiler for Yu-Gi-Oh crack, NanoFate style:

"I sacrifice Vivio Takamachi and Jail Scaglietti in order to summon The White Devil!", the brown haired duellist smirked.
The other duellist grinded her teeth in frustration.

"Fine, you've left me with no other choice but to summon my trump card!"
At this, the duellist slapped a card onto the interface on her arm. "Since The White Devil is a 'domination' type card, I can now summon my Rabu Rabu Fate-chan 'submisson' type card in order to force both monsters to leave the field!" Blushing, the duellist continued, "In addition, I activate the 'accessory' card The Black Bra and equip it on Rabu Rabu Fate-chan for a sure kill!"

[Both monsters are out of the field! and into the bed...]

I'd so play the game if it was like that.

[TheShinySword]

What's this two in two days *shock*
Previously on Secret Ambition

Secret Ambition
Scene 4

Spoiler for Scene 4:

“EEEEEEEEEEYYYYYYYYYYYYAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!” Quite possibly the most girly shriek ever emitted by a sixteen year old boy came from my mouth.

The entire cafe froze, everyone's eyes turned to me and my “attacker”. I felt every bit of heat in my body flood to my face.

“Mou~ Hayate-chan don't scare my guests away.”

I nearly cried in relief, Nanoha was here to save me.

“Ku ku ku,” a truly frighting laugh sounded from behind me. With a shudder I turned to face them, what kind of fiend would grab a poor expecting guy's butt? I imagined some kind of snaggle toothed, hunch backed witch with a dozen warts all over her face. So of course I nearly fell over when I found an attractive girl my own age there instead. In fact it was the same girl who had been creepily staring at me in class.

She straightened up and held out a card, presumably a business one.

I took it in both hands, fully intending to complement it, only to be shoved right out of that notion.

“Yagami family cosplay restaurant! Hayate Yagami!” I squinted to read the small text under her name only to have my eyes bulge out as I read the mini text, “Cosplay Recruiter!”

“Yes and I think you'll be--”

“How many times have I told you not to hassle our customers?” Nanoha stopped Hayate. She was flanked by Arisa and Suzuka, one of whom, guess who it's not hard, was glaring at me. Nanoha turned to me, “I'm glad you could make it Yuuno-kun.” She raised up onto her tip toes, “But I don't see any empty tables, so--”

“The pretty boy can sit with me!” Hayate's eyes lit up and she grabbed my arm very very tightly, giving me the feeling I had no chance of getting away.

“Pretty boy?” I numbly repeated, I couldn't begin to fathom why this girl found me so interesting.

Hayate lead me to the small table she had been sitting at, forcing me into the chair and giving me a look that promised if I tried to leave she'd find out where I lived.

I rubbed my head and met eyes with Nanoha who looked very sorry for me.

CLAP!

I nearly fell out of my chair, “Sorry!”

Hayate placed her hands back into her lap. “Good. Now listen Yuuno-kun.”

“K-kun,” apparently like Nanoha Hayate was a friend of informality.

She ignored me, “I need your help.”

“Huh?” I looked at her dumbly.

She looked like she was trying to find out how to properly say whatever it was, “It very rare... that a guy... looks,” she rubbed her chin and looked down, “as pretty as you.”

“E-excuse me?” I didn't think I was that feminine.

“Yeah I can see it, you'd... you'd look really good in a dress!” Her eyes shown.

I didn't know how to respond.

“So please,” She took my hands, “Please work in my family's restaurant. Just for one day! I need cross dressers but I can't find a single guy as perfect as you!”

“I'd like to help but,” I rubbed the back of my head, “I barely know you and I'm new in town so...” I trailed off.

“Please Yuuno-kun,” she did look desperate... and she looked really really cute when she was begging. Damn my soft spot!

“Well I guess one day can't hurt,” I chuckled half heartedly. I really needed to learn to say no. I had to have some kind of pride that would not allow me to wear a dress because a girl asked me too.

She looked surprised, like she hadn't actually expected me to say yes. Then her face lit up, “Thank you!” She pumped her fist into the air and jumped up, “Thank you thank you thank you! Oh!” She turned to me one last time, “oh and if you could bring along two other people I'd be in your debt forever!” Hayate dashed out of the building before I could say no.

I stared at the blank space that had been Hayate Yagami for little while, long enough for Nanoha to come over and wave her hand in my face.

“Hello~ is Yuuno-kun still with us?”

I still stared but I did respond, “Is she always like that?”

“Hayate-chan?” Nanoha asked but she already knew who I was talking about, “Yep, she's been like that ever since I met her a few years back. Apparently she was in an accident before she moved here and was confined to a wheelchair for a while. Nya ha ha so I guess she's making up for all the energy she didn't get to use. She's a really nice girl though even if she is always into everything. All the guys at school love her, I hear they have a fanclub going on though she hasn't gone out with a single one.” Nanoha grinned mischievously, “you're not developing a crush on her too are you, Yuuno-kun?”

I shook my head ferociously, trying to forget the fact that Hayate was very attractive, “N-no.”

“Oh?” Nanoha put a finger on her chin and looked up at the ceiling, “then I suppose... it'll be up to detective Nanoha to discover Yuuno's type!” She looked down and twirled her fingers around in the air.

“Let me test out Detective Nanoha's deductive skills,” I played along, “What do I want to eat?”

Nanoha pretended to think long and hard about it, “Why a cinnamon bun of course! They're our best pastry.” She smiled down at me.

“Then that's exactly what I'd like,” I smiled back.

She walked off to get me my pastry, leaving me to think about my promise. Well not really a promise but Hayate did sit behind me so there was not way I'd be able to avoid her asking about it. With a sigh I begun to think about who I would ask to help me out...


A. It really sounds like she's running a sort of maid cafe there so maybe I'll ask Nanoha and Fate

B. Vice seems like the type to do whatever a pretty girl asks to and Griffith will be dragged along no matter what, I'll bring them along

C. It's payback time, there has to be a way I can get Chrono-nii to go... I guess Anki will have to come along as well but he'd be a real hit!

Think carefully about who you want working and who you want visiting...

Remember big and blue

[Nya~n]

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

And with that the voting was closed, Yuuno will scream

scream, Yuuno. Scream. Cue awkward moment as everyone in Midori-ya stares at him xD

edit: ga, I fail! tss udpdated before i posted! =/


C. Need... more... Chrono....

[Laith]

And Yuuno didnt go honorably...

And lets make Zaffira suffer C

Edit: page claim for Yuuno