Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Raging Heart]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.30:

Vivio slowly climbed out of her bed and stumbled across her apartment. The world blurred around her but the hope that Syn was behind the knocking on her door gave her the energy to make it the rest of the way. Once she managed to reach the door, she leaned against the frame and unlocked it. Instead of a young blue haired girl waiting to talk to her, she instead found a more mature woman looking at her with a mix of shock and pity. "Hey Allquall," Vivio mumbled, eyes closing and letting her head fall against the frame.

"Eyes, you look like hell, what happened!?" The woman quickly helped the blond walk back to her bed, where she slowly crawled into it and laid face first. "Are you okay? you never came back for your checkup and when I asked I was told you haven't even come to work all week or updated your webpage! I was worried!"

"Ah." Vivio stayed silent after the short mumble but reluctantly allowed herself to be rolled over and sat up on the bed. "I want to lay down..."

"You need me to check on you." The woman sat down on the bed and started giving her a one-over. "How do you feel?"

"Dead."

"Be more specific please."

"Throwing up, my throat hurts, my eyes sting, my chest s tight, I don't care about anything."

Allquall looked at the girl a little closer. The normally shining gold hair was dull and lifeless, and instead of the faint sweet smell of perfume, she smelt sweat and neglect. "Eyes, why didn't you come in? Your cold got worse, I'm certain you have the flu now. Didn't you get pills to prevent that?" Vivio looked away. "Are you eating okay?"

"I'd just throw it up."

"Are you taking care of yourself? When did you last shower and change your sheets? You need to stay clean, you will feel better."

Vivio shrugged. "I dunno..." The hands keeping her up left and she laid back down on the bed, cheek on her pillow. "I don't really care."

"What's wrong with you?" The woman asked softly. "I've never once seen you not smiling and bouncing off the walls."

Staying quiet a moment, Vivio finally opened her eyes again and looked up at the woman. "Syn left me... After that I... I just got sick." She once again looked away and faced her pillow, fighting back the urge to cry again.

"You can't not take care of yourself because your girlfriend left you. If you don't get better you'll be in trouble."

"I know but...I don't know..."

Allquall stood up and tucked the girl in. "I'm going to prescribe you something and get your pharmacist to deliver it. She's your friend right?" She got a small nod. "Okay, I'll do that... Vivio, take a shower, you smell like ten kinda of ass." She got a small smile, but it was enough for her. "Really. I'll be back tomorrow to check up on you. May I leave your door unlocked for a few hours?"

"Yes."

"Okay, Angel will be by shortly. If she can't, I'll take it to you."

"...Thank you." For the first time in a few days, Vivio felt as if laying in bed and dieing wasn't the only solution to how she felt at that moment.

Poor Vivio it's a real heart breaking, i feel so sad *sniff, Sniff.* anyway i will be waiting for update, please hurry up and lets these two back together.

i wonder what you have in your mind for Syn, how she will get Vivio back or the other way around.

[markesellus]

Originally Posted by Satashi

I hit the text limit O.< So I'll have to do another compile for 21-29. Here's part 29!

By the way, who said this was over? We still have lots to go. :3

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.29:

Elena Virage looked up from her novel when her device decided to interrupt her reading. The tone told her that it was her favorite, and only, daughter giving one of her late night calls. A small tap made a monitor appear in front of her with the words 'voice only' displayed across it. "Hello, Syn," she greeted cheerfully.

"Hey mom." The voice made the mother sit down her book at once. "I kind of have an issue."

"What is it honey?" Light blue hair was moved over her shoulder to try and get it out of the way as she leaned back.

"Lots of things, really..." Syn paced her apartment floor while trying to decide how to start. "You know Vivio?"

"Your girlfriend?"

"Ex." Syn almost spat the word. "She's a whore."

"Excuse me?"

"She works in pornography." Syn stopped pacing and sighed out in annoyance. "She slept with... She had sex with others while we were dating!"

Elena had to think about this information before continuing. "That sweet girl you were telling me about?"

"Yes, her! She cheated on me! Several times! While being filmed and paid for it!" Syn fell onto her bed and stared at the ceiling. "I just got back from being checked for STDs..."

Elena felt her heart almost miss a beat at hearing that. "Are you-"

"I'm think I'm fine," Syn's words lost their angry tone briefly, slipping how scared she was about it. "I have two test that have to be sent off... I won't know about those until day after tomorrow."

"Oh my..."

"Mom, I trusted her!" Syn continued where she had left off. "I can't believe this, she's a porn star! Not just an actor, a STAR! She had almost ten magazines on the table and who knows what she wasn't showing!?"

The mother rubbed the bridge of her nose. "I'm still having trouble seeing that girl doing something like that..."

"Well she did. While we were dating. While lieing to me about it!" Syn hit her bed. "She lied to me! I trusted her! She blew someone then kissed me!"

"Syn, honey, calm don't, don't cry-"

"I'm not crying!" Syn screamed loudly, throat throbbing from the abuse of the sobs. Her hand rubbed her eyes furiously, voice breaking from the hard breathing. "Mom, she cheated on me!"

Once again Elena shifted, thinking hard on what to say. "Honey, take a breath." She heard a hiccup and hard gasping mixed with pauses where her daughter had to swallow.

Syn pressed her pillow against her face and wiped it. "She should have told me. She should have just said 'hey, I'm a slut' when we met." Her eyes closed.

"Would you have still hit on her?" Elena asked after a small moment of silence.

"I was drunk and lonely! I - I don't know, what kind of question is that!?"

"The kind makes you look at yourself a little closer," The older woman spoke gently. "If she had told you earlier, and still taken you home and fed you so you wouldn't be alone, would you have still been her friend?"

Syn stared at the phone in disbelief. "Why are you defending her!?"

"Isn't that what you wanted me to do?"

Growling, Syn closed her phone and tossed it across the room, landing on her couch. As she fell to lay face first on her bed, she pulled a pillow closer and ignored her mother's ring tone. 'How could she?' Her mind thought as her body buried her face harder into the cushion. 'After everything, after I fell in love with her, after... God.' The music from her phone finally stopped. 'Every time... She couldn't come over, she was working... I couldn't meet her for lunch, she was updating her web page... What was it to her? She could screw anyone she wanted, why did she have to play me?' Rolling onto her back, she looked at the ceiling with an arm across her forehead. 'My first time...

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.30:

Vivio slowly climbed out of her bed and stumbled across her apartment. The world blurred around her but the hope that Syn was behind the knocking on her door gave her the energy to make it the rest of the way. Once she managed to reach the door, she leaned against the frame and unlocked it. Instead of a young blue haired girl waiting to talk to her, she instead found a more mature woman looking at her with a mix of shock and pity. "Hey Allquall," Vivio mumbled, eyes closing and letting her head fall against the frame.

"Eyes, you look like hell, what happened!?" The woman quickly helped the blond walk back to her bed, where she slowly crawled into it and laid face first. "Are you okay? you never came back for your checkup and when I asked I was told you haven't even come to work all week or updated your webpage! I was worried!"

"Ah." Vivio stayed silent after the short mumble but reluctantly allowed herself to be rolled over and sat up on the bed. "I want to lay down..."

"You need me to check on you." The woman sat down on the bed and started giving her a one-over. "How do you feel?"

"Dead."

"Be more specific please."

"Throwing up, my throat hurts, my eyes sting, my chest s tight, I don't care about anything."

Allquall looked at the girl a little closer. The normally shining gold hair was dull and lifeless, and instead of the faint sweet smell of perfume, she smelt sweat and neglect. "Eyes, why didn't you come in? Your cold got worse, I'm certain you have the flu now. Didn't you get pills to prevent that?" Vivio looked away. "Are you eating okay?"

"I'd just throw it up."

"Are you taking care of yourself? When did you last shower and change your sheets? You need to stay clean, you will feel better."

Vivio shrugged. "I dunno..." The hands keeping her up left and she laid back down on the bed, cheek on her pillow. "I don't really care."

"What's wrong with you?" The woman asked softly. "I've never once seen you not smiling and bouncing off the walls."

Staying quiet a moment, Vivio finally opened her eyes again and looked up at the woman. "Syn left me... After that I... I just got sick." She once again looked away and faced her pillow, fighting back the urge to cry again.

"You can't not take care of yourself because your girlfriend left you. If you don't get better you'll be in trouble."

"I know but...I don't know..."

Allquall stood up and tucked the girl in. "I'm going to prescribe you something and get your pharmacist to deliver it. She's your friend right?" She got a small nod. "Okay, I'll do that... Vivio, take a shower, you smell like ten kinda of ass." She got a small smile, but it was enough for her. "Really. I'll be back tomorrow to check up on you. May I leave your door unlocked for a few hours?"

"Yes."

"Okay, Angel will be by shortly. If she can't, I'll take it to you."

"...Thank you." For the first time in a few days, Vivio felt as if laying in bed and dieing wasn't the only solution to how she felt at that moment.

Hmm, very interesting. I like how Elena totally called it. Poor Syn, she deserves some shock time. Vivio should concentrate on at least getting better.

Spoiler for Ending:

Turns out Vivio gave Syn an STD and they both eventually die from AIDS. D:

Originally Posted by Knight of L-sama

Spoiler for Quack!Fate pt 10- End:

Part 10: Quack Fate

The doors swung open, slowly, excruciatingly, not because time slowed to a crawl when Fate was impatient, nor because Signum was any less excited to have another “practice spar” with her rival, but because… well… to be quite honest…

Demons are too friggin’ lazy to keep their doors well-oiled. And it was rusty to boot.

Luckily, Signum was skilled enough in the art of ghost demon jitsu and teleported from one side of the door to the other, so she was unhampered from running straight for Fate, who was similarly running towards her.

They met in a clash of teeth and nails.

Nails, clawing at sides, soft when in control, hard when desperate, rough, unrehearsed sounds being ripped from each other’s throats.

And all the lesser demons watched in horror, wondering and revering their future Devil Maiden for putting up with such torment- and in public no less.

Signum and Fate eventually fell against each other, the last tendrils of their laughter dying off as they called a truce on their tickle-fest.

Which gave Nanoha and Hayate plenty of time to stop their quick, rushed conversation to join them. Hayate grinned and said, “Let’s go eat, hm? Then you two can go off and play some more.”

At this, Fate held her breath to gather her wits about her, just long enough to frown while smiling. “Nano…Hayate will play too, right?”

“Mm… maybe a bit later, okay? Business first.”

Signum looked between Nanoha and Hayate and saw the seriousness in their eyes, but knew that if she remarked on it, Fate would not appreciate their coming.

So she poked Fate and then ran off, shouting, “Tag, you’re it!”

“Mou! That’s so childish!” Fate puffed even as she got off the floor and chased Signum down the corridor to the dining hall. She could only assume Nanoha and Hayate were following at a leisurely paced.

Halfway through her sweet potatoes and bewitched eggs, Fate realized that Nanoha and Hayate still hadn’t arrived. But then Signum flung some peas up her nose, starting a full-fledged food fight.

By the time Lilith had swept her and Signum up for a much needed bath, a couple of hours had passed before Fate had time to seek out the missing persons.

She checked in the North, West, South, and East corridors, with no luck. So she turned around and tried the NE, NW, SW, and SE hidden passages. Still nothing. Well, she did find an old potato, but she thought nothing of it.

At that point, she traded in her devil pride for necessity of the moment and started calling out their names. It wasn’t like Nanoha or Hayate to not answer her.

If they were within range.

It occurred to Fate then that they might have flown the coop. They could do that, having flying magic and all. It was entirely possible.

“But she promised!” Fate puffed her cheeks out at no one in particular before hurrying off down a random corridor that would likely lead outdoors do the floating labyrinth maze of doom. “Nanoha-chan! Where are you?! Hayate!”

Finally, she stopped at the foot of the attic stairwell. Signum was already there, like a sentry. Arf was there too. That was when Fate knew this was the answer.

But she hated the attic. It was high up and really scary and there were ghosts and ghouls and other things worse than any Devil she had ever known.

It struck her then that Nanoha might need help. That she had been overwhelmed by the baddies and needed brave Fate to conquer them and beat them into submission with mind-rapping Barney reruns. She had to go.

… She ran to the bathroom, hopping from one foot to the other along the way.

After relieving herself, she came back, nice and content, with her game face on. Don’t be mistaken, this is not the face that she used when playing poker (which was always some shade of red as it involved stripping and her always losing), nor was it the face she put on when hunting game (because those dagnab Monopoly pieces kept getting eaten or lost).

No, she had on the Face of Fate. Which would be pretty gosh darn scary if she weren’t so darn cute.

Signum tried to stop her. “Fate. Don’t go up there.”

Fate went up anyway, leaving Signum to play Old Maid with Arf.

What she found was and was not what she expected to find. There was magic circles, and Nanoha was in one of them. Hayate was in another one, doing an incantation.

Fate raced forward when she realized that Nanoha was unconscious, but the presence of the other magical circle stopped her.

It was glowing.

It was yellow.

It was… Quack!

“Quack!”

Hayate opened her eyes and probably would have cursed if she wasn’t in the middle of an incantation.

Fate crossed the room, tripped over some stray clump of air, got up, and ran again. She wrapped her arms over the now 7 foot tall duck and squeezed the living daylights out of him.

Fate started to feel strange.

“Quack?”

By all rights, Hayate should have stopped the incantation right there and then.

Fate fell into a dead faint as an eerie swoosh and whoosh consumed her.

When she came to, Nanoha’s body was nowhere to be seen, and neither, for that matter, was Hayate.

But the duck. Her duck was still there.

And as Fate looked up into his- no, her shining blue eyes, she realized she had never been happier.

Fate hugged her and whispered, “Can I still call you ‘Quack’, Nanoha?”

The duck nipped at her hair but fondly nuzzled her hair with its cheek. “Quack.”

Eventually, Fate and her duck made it down the narrow steps, to where only Arf was waiting for her.

Arf took one look at the duck and bowed in reverence.

“At ease.” Fate smiled first at Arf and then up at Quack. “This is the beginning of a new era. There will be demons… and devils… but there will be respect and peace too.”

And it was indeed a new era. No longer was it the era of the White Devil, but rather, after the rumors had spread that Fate had defeated Nanoha and taken her place as reigning Devil, it became a rather ironically named era.

The Era of Quack Fate, the Quack Devil that wasn’t a quack at all- she was a legit Teletubbie lover with a oversized duck companion with a menacing glare.

But they expected no less of She who Beat the White Devil

~As things end, they should be as they began, an endless cycle, yet ever changing~
~Not TBC~
The End.

Edit: Page claim for Loving Stories for being well-told stories! :O

Aww it's over! I'll miss Quack!Fate, or should I say Quack!Nanoha.

Originally Posted by TerranReaper

Spoiler for Chapter 6:

Chapter 6

On the Martian surface, Belkans wore oxygen suits to breath in that hostile environment. The battle was taking place on a flat surface with no mountains and the reactors were an easy thing to spot. The power-producing part of the reactor was deep underground though. “There it is, the damned thing that has powered Terra’s orbital cannons,” said a knight leader to the invasion force. They were all flying in the air and Terran attack jets have came out to intercept them. Not from the ground though, they came from the sky, taking off from manta ray-like titanic sky aircraft carriers. “Everyone break formation and spread! Destroy the reactors before help from Earth arrives!” the leader yelled.

In space was a battle going on between the Martian Naval Fleet and Belkan Naval Fleet. Both were equally numbered. Magic bolts and missiles filled the space and it looked like a spectacular fireworks display in space. On the ground, anti-aircraft guns tracked the Belkans and fired up a storm of tungsten bullets and high-powered lasers. Nanoha, Fate and the Wolkenritters were part of the airborne invasion team.

“It’s a shooting gallery out here. Nanoha, don’t hold any compassion for these Terrans. They won’t show any to you all. Trust me,” said Signum. Nanoha and Fate were surprised she said that and she said it without any regret. “Signum, are you okay? You suddenly seem to despise the Terrans,” said Fate. Signum just shook her head. At that moment, hails of missiles streaked past them. Some knights got hit while most of them dodged the attack from the diving attack planes. “Nanoha, I’m gonna go deal with those planes. You concentrate on attacking the reactor,” said Fate and she broke from her formation. Nanoha nodded but in reality, she’d rather follow Fate but with so many others in the air battling the aircrafts…there shouldn’t be any problem. Hopefully.

On the ground, soldiers and marines hid in trenches and pillboxes brilliantly camouflaged with the surrounding Martian terrain. One marine freshman was nervous and he trembled so badly that his aim was bad. His sergeant came by and patted his shoulder. “Stay focused, marine. If the flyboys in the air can’t get them, we will and so will the hundreds of anti-air guns. This reactor is a fortress and I am confident that it will hold. Besides, we have one final trick up our sleeves should everything go wrong,” the sergeant said coolly.

The marine nodded but trembled slightly less. He pulled the charging lever of his rifle. “Just remember this, they hit you hard, you make sure you hit those Belkans back ten folds harder. This will certainly hurt the hell out of them,” the sergeant smiled. Right on time, the Belkans flew into the anti-air gun fire zone. The guns cranked up and began firing up a storm. The marines and soldiers fired as well. Signum dodged the attacks as if they were nothing and she dodged them gracefully. She went close to a gun emplacement and slashed it once. The gun exploded into bits.

The Belkans began their attacking run and attacked with magic attacks that ranged from fire attacks similar to Signum’s to attacks that explode when they come upon contact with something. Nanoha landed on the ground and used Raging Heart to snipe out the guns. She wasn’t a Belkan like Signum and she certainly don’t like the go-front-and-rip-them-to-pieces concept the Belkans love to apply, including Signum.

“Now, this won’t hurt a bit. Divine Buster!” yelled Nanoha.

Back on Mid-Childa, the stranded soldiers took Hayate to a secluded spot and hid there until help from Earth can come. They took off their battle armor and put on normal civilian clothes they stole, mostly from military families. Hayate’s injured arm throbbed and ached. Luckily for her, there was a medic among the soldiers. “How did you hurt your arm, ma’am? The bones have been fractured into multiple pieces,” said the astonished soldier. Hayate shrugged of the pain and said, “Well, I was flying and suddenly, I fell due to the lost of my flight abilities. I slammed into one of your damaged tanks and that is why my arm is hurt.” The medic nodded and removed the sling, carefully examining the arm by pressing it and running his fingers over her hand. “We can fix that…but we require a medical facility. I don’t have the equipments required to heal broken bones,” said the medic.

The leader was a Major and he had a stern look on his face. “Those swabbies left us in enemy territory with our objective. It’s impossible to steal a Belkan craft and return back to Earth unless someone is suicidal enough to go through all the defenses, brave enemy fire, steal a craft, brave more enemy fire and get back here in one piece. Even if the Belkan civilians are innocent, they do report to the military should we show ourselves,” the Major said. He sat on the floor of the abandoned building they were hiding in.

“I’m very much intrigued by your loss of flight ability, Hayate. Can you share with us the account of your experience and what you think about it? I like to know why,” said the Major. So Hayate accounted everything she remembered to the soldiers. When she was done, the Major nodded his head and stroked his chin. “Intriguing indeed. So you said you lost your Book of Darkness eh. If what the historians say is true, the book is everything and whoever controls that controls the Wolkenritters. Hayate, have you noticed anything strange about the Wolkenritters? Are they like ignoring you or perhaps they’re loyal to someone instead of you? Anything like that?” asked the Major.

Hayate thought about it and shook her head. “I didn’t even see Vita, Signum and Shamal for a while now. All I met was Rein, you know, that little girl with white hair. Until now, she’s not back yet,” said Hayate. “This is suspicious indeed. I tell you what, we will stay here but you must return to the Belkan military and your friends lest they get suspicious. We will attach this listening device on you and make sure we can hear what you hear. This can help us gather more intel on the Belkans. Can you cooperate with us?” the Major asked.

Hayate nodded. “I don’t trust the Belkans when I first met them. I have a nagging feeling they were up to something and it seems like my guess was only half correct as I still don’t know why they attacked you. Anyway, I’ll help in anyway I can,” said Hayate. The Major nodded and set his rifle on the floor. “Good, just don’t reveal our intentions and most importantly, our location. In return, we’ll try to contact Command and Control so they can come and extract us from this forsaken place.”

Hayate walked down the streets casually and returned to the Central Tower. Chrono was there in the lobby with Teana and Subaru. Shari was at the receptionist’s desk while Vivio was playing with a group of children. “There you are Hayate. We were looking for you and almost asked for military help when you came back. Nanoha and Fate were looking for you earlier but were called to attack a Terran base in a place they won’t reveal. What happened to your arm?” asked Chrono. “I accidentally broke it. Have you seen Rein or any of my Wolkenritters?” asked Hayate. They all shook their heads. “Then have you at least seen my Book of Darkness?” she asked again. Subaru raised her hand and said, “Well, I did notice a hooded guy carrying something that resembles the Book of Darkness when I was walking down the streets not far from here,” she said.

“How did this guy look like?” asked Hayate, now sounding slightly angry. “Can’t really see his facial features but I do notice a scar on his face. That is all I know,” Subaru said with a shrug. “Well then, that’s all I need to know. Teana and Subaru, I want you to follow me and catch this guy. Even if that thing he’s carrying looks like the Book of Darkness, I want to make sure if it is or not,” said Hayate. She stormed out of the building with Subaru and Teana following. “Wow, she’s pretty pissed off,” mused Shari. Chrono nodded but said nothing. Something was bothering him too. He noticed that Vivio was very well treated by the Saint King and his ministers.

They gave her everything she wanted, everything she desired and everything that even Nanoha and Fate couldn’t afford. They treated the rest of them like pawns and insects though. They treated Chrono slightly better but they treated Nanoha, Subaru and the others as if they were meant only for battle.

“Now I’m starting to feel that we’re only instruments to them rather than part of their society. What interests me now is the way they treat Vivio like a…Queen. Wait one second, Shari, what was Vivio’s origin?” asked Chrono.

“She originated from an ancient Saint King, a reincarnated. Is that why she is being treated like a royal?” asked Shari with a frown. Chrono nodded. “I have every reason to suspect the Belkans are up to something and they want Vivio involved as well. Humph, we’ll see about that.”

Spoiler for Random image:

Think about it. I'd like to hear your opinions on what they want with Vivio. If only that lady in that image was Vivio........

So Nanoha and Fate are still on Belkan side while Hayate is on the Terran's side. It looks like Chrono is catching on. I can't believe that the Wolkenritter would turn on Hayate.

Originally Posted by Vivio Testarossa

Spoiler for Something I've been thinking (OFF TOPIC):

Since Vivio has one red eye and one green eye, she can play "Red light-Green light", by opening and closing her eyes.

That's pretty random. Lol.

[Kagerou]

Okay, let's back up and kill the shitstorm. I must have come off as a bit harsh, because I got some people a bit riled up. Forgive me. Arguing on 4chan constantly has given me something of an aggressive attitude, and I understand that not everyone here would be accustomed to that.

To my credit, at least I'm not going "shit sux, kill yourself, etc".

Originally Posted by Gespenst

There's nothing wrong with WAFF in appropriate stories.

Hey now, I didn't say that. I appreciate a good WAFF as much as any. I'm just saying that we seem to be rather overloaded with it.

Originally Posted by Gespenst

It's amazing how you can speak so authoritatively about something that you not only know nothing about but refuse to ever learn about.

I never cease to be impressed by the people on the internet.

...eh wha? Okay you're gonna have to explain this one to me. I fail to see how I know nothing about this.

Originally Posted by Gespenst

Sarcasm aside your objections are factually incorrect.

How am I incorrect? The story is about someone who stars in pornography? Am I wrong?

Originally Posted by Ryand-Smith

So, you don't like it, because you are sensitive? You hate porn in any form? Well, you do know your Nanoha was at first... a Pornographic video game?

Sensitive? I think you mistook me for the wrong guy. :\
Yes, I do despise pornography. I'm not the only one who does, but that said, I'm not elevating myself upon a higher pedestal because I don't like it compared to people who do. It's simply a matter of taste and personal preference, and, having tasted it, I decided that it left something bitter in my mouth.

In my eyes, the very concept of pornography absolutely destroys the beauty of sex. There's no love, no desire, just two people getting it like rabbits for the enjoyment of people who like to watch it. I just can't get over that, you know? For me, sex is supposed to be a wonderful thing that two people who are deeply in love should share, and it shouldn't be sold for money. That's not fair to anyone, I don't think.

And I'm kinda of the opinion that pornography destroys anything women ever strived for when it comes to have equal rights. Yes, I know women still watch it, and that's cool too, I just feel that these people, men and women both, are degrading themselves. It seems to me that these people would have serious psychological issues.

Lastly, that's what it was gonna be, and this is what it is. MSLN did not end up an H-game/anime/whatever, and I think it's better for that. Sex kinda gets in the way of plot for some people (read: This is why F/SN's non-H version is way better than the H-version, unless you absolutely positively need it).

Originally Posted by Ryand-Smith

Oh no! It is the EEVILL porn monster! To be honest, I was going to comment later, its just this comment, accusing others of being "cancer"[my term] and "the problem"[your term] annoys me.

I accused people of nothing. I just said we had a fluff overload. No harm done.

Originally Posted by Ryand-Smith

I find this attitude "I hate it I hate it I hate it!" mindless and childish. Genphest explained it with TVtrpes, but I will also call you out on this sort of comment.

Feel free. Opinions are awesome and cause the brain to function.

Originally Posted by Ryand-Smith

It annoys me to no end when you mindlessly condemn an entire genre just because of your personal beliefs. If you were giving criticism, ok. If you were hating, BUT you read it, Sure! BUT to say I HATE IT IT SUCKS, when you haven't even read it...

Hold on what. I didn't say it sucks, I just said I'd never read it. You may have misinterpreted, or I may have come off as a bit aggressive.

Originally Posted by Ryand-Smith

AND you proudly admit it is a waste of internet bandwith. It would be like me going to the Naruto subforum and saying NARUTO SUX IT IS T3H WORST GET OUT if I had not seen a single episode.

A-ha, but I have read a bit of it.
And also, you called me out, and I'll accept it. Post me links to everything written for the story, and I'll gladly read it tomorrow. If that's what it takes, fine. I don't care and I'm not so arrogant as to dismiss absolutely everything.

Originally Posted by Ryand-Smith

DAMN, this is my first angry post here. That attitude of "I won' t look at X at all and autocondem it" is the truest version of "cancer" on the internet, in fandoms to be more precise, in fact.

Why So Serious? There's nothing to be angry about. Hell, I wasn't angry when I posted my rant, why should you be? Count backwards from ten, chill out, watch a movie... you know, The Internet is Not Serious Business.

Originally Posted by Ryand-Smith

Thank you.

Anytime.

Originally Posted by Satashi

I'd take my time to point out how wrong you are on so many levels, but since you proudly declare your hate on it while saying you know nothing about it... I won't waste my breath.

Fair enough. But as I just said, I'll gladly read it if it makes anyone feel better. It's only right and proper in the context of things I suppose, but forgive me if I'm not taking all of this seriously. The only thing I really do take seriously on the Tubes are the friends I've made here, and I'd rather not let it be ruined by a silly debate over "teh pronz".

Originally Posted by Satashi

As it was said, I don't care if you hate it, bash it, say it sucks, complain, get a petition to try and make me stop writing it.... Hey, that's GOOD. It means my work affected you in a very strong manor, even negative, and I'd be damn proud to have caused such an emotion.

Whoa, what? I don't want you to stop writing! Far from it! I encourage everyone to write to their hearts' content.

You as an author know as well as I do that people aren't going to like everything you write, whether it's the current issue or anything else. I'm sure there are people who won't read anything you've been writing simply because you have an OC in there.

You can't please everyone. You shouldn't try to please everyone. It'll make you sick worrying about it.

Originally Posted by Satashi

But you don't even READ it? I'm sorry, that just baffles me. how can you complain about something you don't know about? How can you call Vivio a whore without even knowing her? What if she was raped, or someone was terminally ill and needed money for surgery so she sacrificed herself to get it? What if she cried every night about how she hated it but had to keep doing it for some reason?

Hm... from what I've been told, this doesn't exactly happen?
And it's personal bias. My experience with anything involving pornography, implied or explicit, usually ends badly for me. My brain goes into overdrive, I think about it too hard, and then I get headaches.

Originally Posted by Satashi

Bottom line is, don't complain about things you don't know about. It's childish, pointless, and makes people look at you like you're an idiot. Specially against fanfics you haven't read, on a fanfic thread.

See, obviously, it appears that I've made a mistake here. I felt that I did know a bit about it, at least enough to say what I did, but sense everyone is going psycho on me I guess not. It won't be the first time that I've been wrong, and I have no problem admitting that. I've been tempered in the fires of 4chan and steeled by the haxxbusters of the OCT, I can take a little negativity.

As for looking like an idiot, I stopped caring about that a long time ago. It only makes my head hurt when I care about what others think of me.

Originally Posted by Satashi

I'm sorry, this is the first time I've just been pissed about comments on my fics. If you want to say that, read it, then say it. I'll listen then and offer my thoughts. Until then, don't mention my story anymore.

Wait, what?
You're mad, and I fail to understand why. It's just a story, right? Nothing to get upset about...

And I won't, not until I get someone to link me the... er, scenes, chapters, what have you.

Originally Posted by Satashi

and BTW, Nanoha WAS a hentai. It was planned a hentai, and it was scrapped. There are actual photos of this and you can find them if you look. The final Scene in Nanoha was her having sex with Chrono. they changed it to a real series later and re-did it. Now, if you didn't know they changed it, because you never even attempted to watch it, and you complained about how Nanoha was a whore and stuff...... people would look at you like you were from another planet. Like "WTF are you talking about!?" That's exactly how this is, just ina fanfic.

The concept is never as important as the finished product.

I await everyone's reply rather eagerly. I'm always up for clarifying my thoughts when directing them to others, as I know that sometimes it can be lost in the way my head works. Since SB told me earlier that I shouldn't post 4chan style because "we should probably keep it there" or something, I'll try and be calm. Actually, I take that back. I will be calm, because there's nothing to be angry about.

Besides, stimulating the mind is always good for you .

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by Kagerou

In my eyes, the very concept of pornography absolutely destroys the beauty of sex. There's no love, no desire, just two people getting it like rabbits for the enjoyment of people who like to watch it. I just can't get over that, you know? For me, sex is supposed to be a wonderful thing that two people who are deeply in love should share, and it shouldn't be sold for money. That's not fair to anyone, I don't think.

Considering this story is about Vivio realizing that very fact, that sex is not just something you do for money, I'd think that's all the more reason for you to read it.

[Kagerou]

Originally Posted by Keroko

Considering this story is about Vivio realizing that very fact, that sex is not just something you do for money, I'd think that's all the more reason for you to read it.

So I've come to understand... I dunno...
I do feel like I've made a mess of things when I didn't mean to.

[Wild Goose]

I just feel somewhat annoyed that my whole counter to the love is fluff idea was ignored. Repost below.

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Love is not always fluff. Real love goes beyond the cotton candiness of the fluff of FFT.

There is no greater love than someone to die for their friends.

Michael Monsoor.

Raphael Peralta.

Michael Murphy.

Jason Dunham.

Ross McGinnis.

Paul Smith.

And many, many more.

They died showing a love greater than any fluff.

All of the above are Someone You Should Know.

[Keroko]

It was probably ignored because many people have not the slightest clue who those people are, and aren't really inclined to read their Wiki entries, as they really don't care that much either. Not everyone loves to read up on American war heroes.

[Wild Goose]

True. As proven by Obama and the Legion, the vast populace cares not for those who serve them, only for their personal enjoyment.

Most of those guys above died throwing themselves on grenades, ensuring they would die so that their friends would live. Murphy and Smith were killed in combat by making themselves that couldn't be missed so that everyone would go after them instead.

Five Medal of Honor Winners, 1 Navy Cross. Not too shabby.

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

True. As proven by Obama and the Legion, the vast populace cares not for those who serve them, only for their personal enjoyment.

Or perhaps not everyone on this board is American, thus doesn't even have that connection.

[Knight of L-sama]

Fluff is good for the brain. Overload of fluff counteracts all the reading I have to do for ultra-depressing class on mental illnesses, including the 700-page tome about a guy with schizophrenia, another guy who is so lost in grief that he tries to teach his dog to talk, and now... a girl who's traumatized by almost-rape and is now fixated and unlocking the puzzle of a late homeless guy with schizophrenia.


Fluff. Overload. Equals. Love~~

D: So don't hate against the influx of WAFF.

Edit: Enough clogging of the off-topic quota with stuff loosely related to PS!Vivio. That energy could be better spent writing fics. Or you know, reading. Or having a life outside the FFT (that one's always particularly fun). Wheet.

[Satashi]

@Kagerou: People are upset because you proudly declared you didn't read it and then proceeded to bash it with personal beliefs and ideas that are completely unrelated to the story. You think this story is about Vivio being a porn star, and hate it because of that. In reality, vivio's job is being an porn star but the story is about her trying to understand what love is, as well as just trying to make it through her life.

@Goose: 95% of the people here aren't Americans, so they probably don't care at all about the things you listed.

[Satashi]

Spoiler for Previously:

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.30:

Vivio slowly climbed out of her bed and stumbled across her apartment. The world blurred around her but the hope that Syn was behind the knocking on her door gave her the energy to make it the rest of the way. Once she managed to reach the door, she leaned against the frame and unlocked it. Instead of a young blue haired girl waiting to talk to her, she instead found a more mature woman looking at her with a mix of shock and pity. "Hey Allquall," Vivio mumbled, eyes closing and letting her head fall against the frame.

"Eyes, you look like hell, what happened!?" The woman quickly helped the blond walk back to her bed, where she slowly crawled into it and laid face first. "Are you okay? you never came back for your checkup and when I asked I was told you haven't even come to work all week or updated your webpage! I was worried!"

"Ah." Vivio stayed silent after the short mumble but reluctantly allowed herself to be rolled over and sat up on the bed. "I want to lay down..."

"You need me to check on you." The woman sat down on the bed and started giving her a one-over. "How do you feel?"

"Dead."

"Be more specific please."

"Throwing up, my throat hurts, my eyes sting, my chest s tight, I don't care about anything."

Allquall looked at the girl a little closer. The normally shining gold hair was dull and lifeless, and instead of the faint sweet smell of perfume, she smelt sweat and neglect. "Eyes, why didn't you come in? Your cold got worse, I'm certain you have the flu now. Didn't you get pills to prevent that?" Vivio looked away. "Are you eating okay?"

"I'd just throw it up."

"Are you taking care of yourself? When did you last shower and change your sheets? You need to stay clean, you will feel better."

Vivio shrugged. "I dunno..." The hands keeping her up left and she laid back down on the bed, cheek on her pillow. "I don't really care."

"What's wrong with you?" The woman asked softly. "I've never once seen you not smiling and bouncing off the walls."

Staying quiet a moment, Vivio finally opened her eyes again and looked up at the woman. "Syn left me... After that I... I just got sick." She once again looked away and faced her pillow, fighting back the urge to cry again.

"You can't not take care of yourself because your girlfriend left you. If you don't get better you'll be in trouble."

"I know but...I don't know..."

Allquall stood up and tucked the girl in. "I'm going to prescribe you something and get your pharmacist to deliver it. She's your friend right?" She got a small nod. "Okay, I'll do that... Vivio, take a shower, you smell like ten kinda of ass." She got a small smile, but it was enough for her. "Really. I'll be back tomorrow to check up on you. May I leave your door unlocked for a few hours?"

"Yes."

"Okay, Angel will be by shortly. If she can't, I'll take it to you."

"...Thank you." For the first time in a few days, Vivio felt as if laying in bed and dieing wasn't the only solution to how she felt at that moment.

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.31:

Syn felt a small shake on her shoulder and jerked slightly in shock, blinking and turning to the side to see Riyuu looking at her oddly. "Huh?"

"You're spacing out again." The girl told her in a matter-of-fact tone. "You've been like that the past few days, what's up?" Her accented voice came casually while she stirred the dish in front of herself. "Are you having problems?"

"Yes." Syn sighed and went on auto pilot, once again disregarding the recipe she was supposed to stick to and going by what she wanted to add to the meal she was preparing. "Girlfriend issues."

"Oh, I'm sorry to hear that. I hope it works out okay."

"Already broke up." Syn declared her task done and walked away to plate it before anymore questions could be asked. "Wan, order up." The next ticket was taken and she went about making it along with one more on the side. 'I wish I could just go a day without having to think about this crap again.' Her mind went off again as she moved around, purposely trying to avoid the pity looks she was getting from her boss. 'It's already been a week and two days for crying out loud.' While her current orders were cooking, she stared at the food and thought to pass the time. 'She's probably with some guy right now, getting a load on her face.' The bitter thought both pleased her and pissed her off at the same time, leaving her with a knot in her stomach. 'Bastard touching my girlfriend...'her motions got rougher while tossing the contents of a skillet around. 'I have have half a mind to... damnit Syn, stop thinking about it!'

The girl angrily kicked the bottom of the stove and huffed out. "I thought I saw a bug," she spoke, voice clearly mad. "It wasn't, so we're okay." Her eyes closed and a breath was taken, images of Vivio having sex with faceless people invading her against her will. 'Damn it! Why am I so mad!?'

"Syn," Wan's voice came, snapping the girl back to the present. "I have a customer out here who would like to speak with you."

"With me?" Syn tried to figure out who she knew that would request to see her. "A girl?"

"A guy."

Syn wiped her hands and walked out along with Wan, being left alone at a table where a tanned man was looking at her. "Miss," he began. "Did you prepare the meal I just had?"

Looking down at the mostly cleared plate, Syn nodded. "I did."

"I heard that this place recently hired a new chef and that the food here was suddenly a lot better. The newspaper even reported complaints about people parking next door because your parking lot was full."

"Well... We have been busy lately." Syn tried to think where this was heading.

"Miss, My name is Tempest, I own The Shiny Sword downtown. I would like to hire you as my new chef."

Syn blinked again. "Wait, the really fancy place?"

"Yes, miss." He nodded. "I could offer you three times what your pay would be here, and even creative liberty on creating new dishes."

"Sold." Syn stated before the man could even start his next sentence. "When can I start?"

"Tomorrow."

"What time?"

"One PM to nine PM." He stood and shook the girl's hand. "I look forward to it."

"Me too," Syn smiled and walked back to the kitchen. 'Finally! Something good in my life!' She looked at both wan and Riyuu giving her questioning looks. "Sorry girls, I just got hired on at another restaurant because I kept changing your recipes." The dissapointed looks on their faces made her soften just a little. "I'll leave my changes with you, too." She got smiles and a few words of encouragement, and even a promise fora good reference if thy called.

With a grin, Syn started finishing the day. 'I can't wait to tell-' Her hands stopped, hovering above what she was reaching for. '... Like she would care.

[Wild Goose]

@Keroko & Satashi: Hell, 95% of Americans themselves don't care.

Point I tried to make, which apparently got overrun, was simply that fluff isn't the end all be all of love. It's been said, "Greater love hath no man than this, that he lay down his life for his friends." That's a sort of love that I try to show in my writing (nevermind that I haven't gotten up to that point in the story yet).

Yes, that is a spoiler for my TF6 project. People are going to die in it. (Though not like the bucketloads in Alpha... like almost 85% of all OCs died, no less than 9 CCs died, Signum was killed and zergified and resurrected as the Queen of Blades (unholy fusion of Kerrigan & Signum), even the dead weren't spared; Precia was revived and killed, Alicia was revived and killed, I think we killed Vivio somewhere along the line, ditto Nanoha... let's not get into Erusia getting glassed, Mid-Childa being fucked up, and Earth ending up as a last bastion of safety due to the Almighty Badass of the United States Marines and the TSAB Marines.)

"Regret...regret...regret..."

"Catchy. Any idea what it means?"

"Dear humanity: We regret being alien bastards. We regret comin' to Earth. And we most certainly regret the Corps shooting up our raggedy-ass parasite fleet!"

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Originally Posted by wild goose

"regret...regret...regret..."

"catchy. Any idea what it means?"

"dear humanity: We regret being alien bastards. We regret comin' to earth. And we most certainly regret the corps shooting up our raggedy-ass parasite fleet!"

HOO-AH!!!!!

^_^v

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

HOO-AH!!!!!

^_^v

Is...

HUU-RA!!!

=_=;

@Thread: The next chapter of VSOTP should be coming tonight or tomorrow (depends on your timesone )
and the next chjapter of NROTU should be posted Friday or Saturday this week

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Originally Posted by Evil Rick

Is...

HUU-RA!!!

=_=;

@Thread: The next chapter of VSOTP should be coming tonight or tomorrow (depends on your timesone )
and the next chjapter of NROTU should be posted Friday or Saturday this week

I'm Army, Rick. THINK about it.

[Vivio Testarossa]

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

@Keroko & Satashi: Hell, 95% of Americans themselves don't care.

Point I tried to make, which apparently got overrun, was simply that fluff isn't the end all be all of love. It's been said, "Greater love hath no man than this, that he lay down his life for his friends." That's a sort of love that I try to show in my writing (nevermind that I haven't gotten up to that point in the story yet).

Yes, that is a spoiler for my TF6 project. People are going to die in it. (Though not like the bucketloads in Alpha... like almost 85% of all OCs died, no less than 9 CCs died, Signum was killed and zergified and resurrected as the Queen of Blades (unholy fusion of Kerrigan & Signum), even the dead weren't spared; Precia was revived and killed, Alicia was revived and killed, I think we killed Vivio somewhere along the line, ditto Nanoha... let's not get into Erusia getting glassed, Mid-Childa being fucked up, and Earth ending up as a last bastion of safety due to the Almighty Badass of the United States Marines and the TSAB Marines.)

"Regret...regret...regret..."

"Catchy. Any idea what it means?"

"Dear humanity: We regret being alien bastards. We regret comin' to Earth. And we most certainly regret the Corps shooting up our raggedy-ass parasite fleet!"

So in order to be a good story in your book, there can be NO FLUFF, only death in as much scenes as possible? How could you kill Vivio!

Greater love hath no man than this, that he lay down his life for his friends.

I'm placing in a vouch for Self-preservation, above all else.

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Vivio Testarossa

So in order to be a good story in your book, there can be NO FLUFF, only death in as much scenes as possible? How could you kill Vivio!

The OC thread is mainly military people who go for war. The fanfic thread is mainly fluff addicts who go for love.

We both like different things, so generally the war stuff is accepted on OC thread (even if it really isn't OC much) and the love stuff is more accepted here ( even if , for example, Syn shows up)

@Goose: Sorry, I don't care about things like that either,even if I am American. I don't want to read about people blowing up and getting shot regardless of why it happened >.<

[Wild Goose]

Originally Posted by Vivio Testarossa

So in order to be a good story in your book, there can be NO FLUFF, only death in as much scenes as possible? How could you kill Vivio!

You misread as usual. I simply pointed out that this is a form of love that is greater than fluff, and then indicated that yes, that meant that people were going to die in TF6, protecting others. And I'm not going overboard like Gundam; I firmly believe in the cast earning their happy ending. That said, Death does make for good drama - I grew up in the Eva fandom, afterall.

And some deaths are especially memorable and strike the heart. Episode 20 of Macross Frontier. Michel Blanc's death is one of those scenes that resonate with you: touching, sad, painful, shocking... and to add insult to injury, the BGM song, Shinku no Diamond Crevasse, is a girl singing about parting with the guy she loves.

Alpha, meanwhile, is a dead fic. It won't be continued, so you don't have to nerdrage away, mon Legionaire. And besides, sure, we killed Vivio...

...and she was reborn as Der Sankt Kaiser, so I think it was a fair trade.

Oh yeah, in TF6, Vivio technically dies at one point - her heart is stopped.

"Charging! Two hundred!"

"Clear!"

*beepbeepbeep*

"We got a pulse!"

The power of modern medicine. You can "die" and be "resurrected".

I'm placing in a vouch for Self-preservation, above all else.

So basically, you consider yourself more important than your friends, and if your death means that you will save others, you will instead save yourself and let the others die, due to the value you place on self-preservation.

That's your choice. It is, afterall, your life, to do with what you will.

Originally Posted by Satashi

The OC thread is mainly military people who go for war. The fanfic thread is mainly fluff addicts who go for love.

We both like different things, so generally the war stuff is accepted on OC thread (even if it really isn't OC much) and the love stuff is more accepted here ( even if , for example, Syn shows up)

Actually, it's only me, Kagerou and Kha who write about war. Kha writes about "IN THE FUTURE THERE IS ONLY WAR" mixed with Nano, Kagerou is writing about... something GITS-ish, and I'm writing blackops mages and a more hard scale mil-SF take on Nano. Oh, and there's TK too.

The rest of OC? Lotsa different things, and not all is war (atm it's like only me and TK are writing stuff that's more militariy & tactically oriented). But yes, there is more combat and action in OC writings.

Besides, I write about love too. It's just subtler and a different kind of love. Not related by blood incest & tsundere imouto FTW. Oh, and married couples.

@Goose: Sorry, I don't care about things like that either,even if I am American. I don't want to read about people blowing up and getting shot regardless of why it happened >.<

It's essentially the same context as episode 16, when Nanoha tanked Deici's blast to protect the chopper. If she hadn't been able to raise a barrier, you can bet your last dollar she would have tanked that blast with her body.

But yes, most people don't care, especially in FFT. That's why I don't really post here, because FFT is not my target audience. (Which would, this time 1 year ago, caused another minirant on how FFT is not truly welcoming of all fanfics but we went through that once and don't need to do so again. I know my audience and it isn't here.)

[PhoenixG]

I wouldn't say mainly military. It's just I think 4 or 5 that mainly about pure military. Others are more about interaction between the cast in TSAB and around it.