2010-09-28, 21:36 | Link #27282 | |
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There's a few people from over the collected series I haven't mentioned in one form or another.... yet.^^
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Again, I'll get into the three's development to this point in the next chapter, but I don't want to go into it too much here for those who don't want spoilers. I would talk about it a bit about the next chapter developments in PM's or IM's if anyone wants, but people can still vote or talk about if they see Ix's development as plausible. I admit part of it is me wanting to draw parallels, and using an established character rather than a random orphan they might have taken in, but I could create an OC orphan as well. But thanks for the other corrections, and I'll think about things, depending on what others may say.^^ In other news, I could give a glimpse of the upcoming Nanoha/Fate encounter... Spoiler for SUPER SEKRITZ SPOILRZ!:
Lastly, I'll chime in on the OC business, because I think I feel the same as Nanya. I don't hate them, just kinda dislike them because they generally have a habit of overshadowing the main cast. I'd rather get away with using an established character where I can, and if I do introduce OC's, use them to complement the mains at best. Part of the fun and challenge I find in writing is in creating situations that can alter the cast's personalities and such to be what I need; the challenge of getting there, rather than just creating a character on the spot. As such, an OC's I use are generally one-shots. |
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2010-09-28, 21:38 | Link #27283 |
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Hmm, I needed a break from SCV *chuckles* Orders Captain?
So i decided to do another little drabble. Spoiler for Part 10 i guess.:
Link to older I dare you to click this.
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2010-09-28, 22:50 | Link #27284 | |
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I know you want to use an established character to make a parallel, but when you have to change that character to make it work, you probably shouldn't do it.
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2010-09-28, 22:55 | Link #27285 | |
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A little mixed over Fate's reaction to Yuuno's joke; I know it's meant as a funny thing and all, but somehow I can't see her reacting that way. Of course, you also have to consider what she's been through recently with Nanoha, but.... I don't know. It was funny, but it also kind of bothered me a bit since it seemed OOC for Fate to act that way, even if it's someone she likes around other girls. Maybe it's just me. Also... why can't I see acting especially professional around Nanoha will end very, very badly?
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2010-09-29, 00:15 | Link #27286 | |
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It could be more along the lines of Ixy finally getting to act the way she wants to without people forcing her to be a weapon. She has people who are letting her live how she wants, so... Ixy: WHOOSH! Einhart; It's time... Ixy: *Gets serious* Alright.
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2010-09-29, 01:55 | Link #27288 |
Under Death by College
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I agree with you there, it seems quite unlikely Ixy sees them as mothers. Then again maybe she had parental issues when she was younger and is now desperate enough to do such a thing, not likely but a thought.
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2010-09-29, 07:35 | Link #27290 | ||
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On OC's, I'm heavily biased on this since I love to make OC's, but to me they never feel like cheating. Sure, if there is a situation where an established character can do things just as easily as an OC, there's no reason to create an OC just for that situation, but expanding on the existing roster can help to keep things fresh and new, and sometimes they can even help in situations where putting an established character would feel forced. In the case of villains particularly OC's are almost invaluable to prevent Orochimaru Syndrome.
I view OC's not as a cheat, but as a challenge. As was mentioned earlier, OC's can have a tendency to overshadow the main cast, and that is exactly where the challenge is. I'd hazard to say that writing a good OC, one that fits and is accepted by the readers to the point where they wish he or she was an established character, is even harder than writing a fic with purely established characters. Quote:
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Ix has been displayed as a mature character, yet this fic treats her as if she has only slightly above StrikerS-Vivio level intelligence and maturity. Ein teaching a king of an entire undead army who has been through god knows how many wars about killing intent? Really? |
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2010-09-29, 09:06 | Link #27291 | |
Labda Prakarsa Nirwikara
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Anything for the revolution!
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2010-09-29, 09:43 | Link #27292 | ||
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Anyways, glad Yuuno and Fate finally decided to be open about things. I suppose her reaction to the joke is a bit OOC like RB said, but I think it's acceptable given the situation. Yuuno made the implication that he had dates with other girls lined up, so I'm sure Fate wouldn't be happy with the idea that he'd been fooling around with other girls the entire time. I just hope Nanoha will be able to handle things, though really she has no right to be bothered by it. She lost the both of them due to her own actions so she can't blame anyone but herself. Cheering Nanoha up is apparently Hayate's job, though Quote:
It would also cause some good drama between Vivio and Nanoha when it came to light. Nanoha: Vivio, how could you! Vivio: I'm sorry mama, but I had to! Would really drive home the "ends justify the means" theme.
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2010-09-29, 09:56 | Link #27294 | |
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While I'm still considering angles here (and given that there is talk, that at least means I haven't gotten ideas across), Ix definitely isn't "slightly above StrikerS level intelligence." Regardless of all else, she is still a young girl, and has been given the chance to act like a child. It's partly an act, although after a couple of years, she's really gotten into it, enjoying the chance to actually be a kid. People change over time, and part of the problem is you haven't seen that change yet. And as I tried to get across (although this will be explored more next chapter), she still has that mature side of her. She wouldn't be a serious person all the time, especially with people who can show her how to have fun. If you woke up 1000 years from now, would you feel older than someone else your own biological age? That's kind of how I approach this, and what the challenge is: to show that not only is she a mature war-torn individual scarred by people using her to make weapons, but that there is a young girl in there who is being given the second chance at childhood. And yes, I'll admit that it partly was an attempt to mirror the whole Nanoha/Fate/Vivio thing, with the adoption of a Belkan king while keeping any relationship that may or may not be present ambiguous, heh. Anyway, I'm still looking over where I need to go and what I need to do with this fic, and considering how I might rewrite things. Like I said before, I haven't been able to explain exactly how their characters have developed to this point, which is something I have planned for next chapter (along with some Fate). I suppose it might be helpful if I could run down how I developed her with a few people, to see if it comes across clearly, but that would entail people getting some spoilers for next chapter. If interested, PM or IM me and I'll give a brief rundown for how things went. |
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2010-09-29, 10:13 | Link #27295 |
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Giving her a chance at childhood is all well and good, but you can give her that without her having her friend become her mother.
If it's done as some elaborate game of house, that could work. Sure, such a role play wouldn't reflect well on their mental state, but that could be understandable given the circumstances. At the very least when Ix enters 'serious mode' I think she should drop the 'mamas.' And when Nanoha initially questions Vivio about it, Vivio should explain "Well... At first it was a game but it kind of stuck..."
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2010-09-29, 11:06 | Link #27296 | |
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...unless, she previously refused anything but the original flavour, and is now torn between wanting to kill her or ravish her... ...which means in the end, she finally surrenders to Clone-Nanoha's roguish charm and decides that a clone is fine t- [DIABOLIC EMISSIONED]
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2010-09-29, 12:06 | Link #27297 |
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In non-Ixy-related news, I sent Allquall a message about the removal of [M]Other Love. His response was that he took it down because it'd been complete and up for a while, and that there were other great works for Nanoha in FF.net, and he wanted to make room for those.
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2010-09-29, 12:27 | Link #27298 | |
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She's not a child like Vivio who was used, she was an actual ruler. Less Vivio, more Olivie. Yes, she later came to regret her actions and even her existence, but that doesn't change that she hardly is some scarred child forced to do things she couldn't even comprehend. Like the Wolkenritter, she is far older than she seems, and that includes mentally. |
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2010-09-29, 12:32 | Link #27299 |
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I say, before we tell Kaijo to change it completely...
Let's at least see the next part of this story. But, Kaijo, don't post it to FF.Net until then at least. That way, we can see just how Ixy became the way she did in this story. But, yes, Ixy is way older than she seems... ... Especially if you consider the song "my friend" and how, if it's directed at Subaru, it makes Ixy seem like she has one HELL of a crush on Subaru.
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2010-09-29, 12:40 | Link #27300 | |
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At least, given the lack of exact evidence spelling things out, this is the viewpoint I am taking with this fic. Part of the problem is that this is the Nanohaverse we're talking about, where Nanoha is an incredibly mature 9 year old, so it's easy to mistake that maturity for an adult. I'm simply taking the viewpoint that, no matter how mature they may seem, there is still a kid in there. Anyway, I'm in the process of PM'ing you, so hopefully we can work something out. I'm also in the process of rewriting parts of the fic, so don't think I'm not listening to what people are saying; I'm just trying to meld the concerns with the vision I had of where I saw things going. |
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