Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Outlaender]

Originally Posted by AtomicoX

First time ever I tried to write in 1st person PoV, but I gotta say it felt good. Naturally felt more personal and I might write some KoE chapters like this, although it's uncertain.

Spoiler for Sacrifice:

Ah, much more to my liking . So, a flashback from dear young Sigried, unfortunately another tragic story. War is hell, and Forseti isn't Midchilda. It would be interesting to see how well Nanoha-tachi could relate to her experiences. For all they're experience as TSAB mages, they've never actually fought a war. The JS incident is the closesest so far, aside from "Forces" still to come.

[wanwan1203]

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

Ho ho double post. A cross post too. Scandalous.

I realized that the latest chapter of Gospel was shorter than usual.

So I did this really quickly. Blame the ficbunnies that torment me.

Spoiler for Unison:

-awesome was here-

TEMPESTTTTTT!!! I just finished reading and i must say it is: I liked the scene where you described the unison, rein's thoughts then, the imagery (i went *o*), as well as the post-battle scene. LOL

This made me giggle:

Spoiler:

Cry some more!

XD
wanwan likes it!

and btw, while reading this i realized that i haven't read noland's profile yet. le gasp! =O i went wha who is he talking about?? XD silly me. so because of this i immediately went to read the profile and i must say, despite not understanding some concepts completely, (after all i'm more of a fluff, nosebleed, angst reader rather than a magic/tech one so my attention span doesn't hold out that long XD") i reached the end of that post without losing interest one bit. nice profile. *o* why didn't i read it sooner!!! DX <3 noland) and so the wanwan obligatory post of: MOAR GOSPEL WOOT!

[RadiantBeam]

Baaaah....

Why don't I feel like posting anything lately?

[NorthernFallout]

'Cause you are out of ideas and motivation...or maybe that's just me.

[Satashi]

Motivation seems to have dried up lately. I thought it'd be the opposite since Vivid came out.

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by AtomicoX

'Cause you are out of ideas and motivation...or maybe that's just me.

Or 'cause you have FINALS FROM HELL and are studying like a mad woman you know I hope that's just me.

[spawnofthejudge]

That's right, it's the end of school! How could I forget?

Decided to write whatever came to mind, since I hadn't written anything Nanoha lately. Result is as follows. Hope it's a nice distraction for you studying fiends!

Imagine That

Spoiler:

What was I even doing here, anyway?

“...You failed.”

Was there a purpose? A reason? A driving force?

“You're welcome to come back next year...”

I didn't know anymore. How could I?

“but I personally wouldn't recommend going through the humiliation again.”

It was with dejection that I walked away from the training facility. It was, after all, a place that I was basically unwelcome in. I'd been there a few times before I had made this attempt... but none of them had been for my own sake. All of them had been for someone else. Someone else had asked me to do something, and I always watched when my work was being tested.

I had great ideas. Terrible execution. I don't know where I went wrong... but I knew that there wasn't much I could do about it this day. The sun may still be high in the sky, but that doesn't mean that I would be able to get myself to do anything for the rest of the day. It was the end of a dream. A nice dream, certainly; something that I had my whole being working toward for six months. For nothing, it seemed. I had wasted my time. I should have remained at my desk, in my own building, where I belonged.

My eyes were suddenly drawn to a figure that had come out of one of the medical buildings nearby. She was attractive; her hair was a reddish brown, kept in a long side ponytail... must be in her mid-twenties...

With a shock that goes through me, I realize that I'm looking at the Ace of Aces, and she is clearly not pleased.

I don't remember stopping, but I must have, because I'm not moving at this point and it takes a specific attempt from me in order to get my legs moving toward... I don't even know. The medical building is not one that I need to pass to get to either my flat or my office, so I don't even know why I had managed to get myself over here. So I stop again and look around, trying to figure out what the best way toward... well, anywhere... was from where I stood. This apparently caught the Ace's attention.

“Excuse me,” she said, causing me to snap around to look back at her. She is walking toward me. “Are you lost?”

I shook my head quickly. This was a mistake, as it exacerbated the headache that was now threatening to get only worse and worse as this terrible day went on. “I'm not. I just seem to be wandering aimlessly today, and I just realized where I had ended up...”

She laughed. “Oh, okay. Where are you headed, then?”

I looked back at her blankly, unable to tell her where I was going because I didn't know myself, and unable to bring up the reason why.

“Is something wrong?” she asked, when she noticed my facial expression wasn't changing. Maybe she could see something of my day in my face? “Are you alright?”

I couldn't say yes; I was not. But I also didn't want her to think that she had an obligation to do anything for me. This day was already bad enough; I didn't need to be imposing on the Ace of Aces' time as well. “I've been better.”

Her eyes were kind, I noticed. “I'm sorry, then. Perhaps you should head home, then? It is a weekend, after all.” She tilted her head to one side. “Where would that be?”

I had made the calculation by this point, so I indicated the direction of my flat. She was probably right about where I should go anyway; I wasn't going to get any decent work done toward my deadline at the end of next week.

“Would you like a lift? I'm headed home myself, and it's in that direction.”

“Oh, no... I couldn't... I couldn't accept that, Miss Takamachi...” I stuttered. I meet the Ace of Aces, she offers me a ride home, and I stutter. I clearly will never be anything but a dork.

“C'mon, can't let any up-and-coming technician be wandering about aimlessly!”

“Really, I...” Wait. What?

“I insist, Mr. Volt.” Now I'm pretty sure my mouth is open at this point and I'm staring. But I can't stop. She knows my name and my profession...?!

“A...alright...” I didn't really have a choice in the matter, did I?

“Good,” she said, apparently satisfied. She then walked past me, and I had to shake my head to try to get myself to move again. My headache objected to this, of course, but I don't think I cared. I caught up to her quickly enough. She looked at me as I pulled up alongside her. “So what's got you so melancholy today?”

Did I really have to tell the Ace of Aces that I had failed an exam to become a frontline mage? “I... failed an exam...”

She seemed to understand instantly. “Oh, I'm sorry. Lots of people fail the exam today, you know.”

I already knew that. Being told again didn't help much. “Only thirty percent of those examined at this test are passed...”

“And only one in every thousand that is past the age of majority,” she concluded. “It's not really a reflection on you or your merits if you're not able to pass that exam, Mr. Volt.”

“It's...” How do you explain to a role model of yours that your dreams of being just like her have been completely dashed? “...the end of a dream.”

We had reached her car at this point. It was a sleek black machine... far beyond my budget. Though really, I had a flat and no car. Very little was within my budget to begin with. “Why focus on this thing that you're not good at?” she asked as she unlocked the car and opened the driver's side door. I used the opportunity to open the other door and get in on the other side to stall, but I just couldn't tell her. I mean, I can't just go off and say that I wanted to be like her! Once we were in the car and she turned the key in the ignition, though, I was saved from answering when she asked a follow up question. “I mean, you're one of the best new device engineers we've got on staff. Shouldn't you focus on that?”

I'm what?!

“Oh, you didn't know?” She asked as she pulled out of the space. “I'm surprised. I'll have to give a word or two to Shari about that, then. She showed me one of your latest breakthroughs. You know, that Boost Device that you had added the auto-guard to?” I could only nod. My face was burning so much that I wanted to open the window. “Where is your place?”

I must have been coherent enough in my mumbling of the directions, because she nodded and we headed off in the right direction. “She told me that it was one of the best new things she'd seen out of an engineer younger than her, well, ever.”

“Miss Finieno... said that...?” Shario Finieno had been a visitor to my Advanced Device Mechanics class just a few months ago... she had assigned us to make an auto-guard to a Boost Device. I had done most of the work on it, and gotten a great grade to boot, but I hadn't really thought of it again.

Miss Takamachi laughed. “Yep, I really do need to have a word with Shari about encouraging good engineers. She's actually keeping an eye on you for possible relocation into the Enforcer corps.”

I couldn't actually contain my astonishment at this piece of news. “What?!”

She cast me an amused glance. “Shari really should have told you that, I think.”

I was flabbergasted. Was I... was I something to talk about when it came to my skills with a device? Sure, I'd helped others with their devices from time to time when they came to me about them, but I was always tinkering with devices with the aim of using one... I had taken a bunch of classes in that realm because they were enjoyable, and I was learning a lot about fighting with a device too... but to find out...

“So I think you should be concentrating on building devices, since you're so good with them.” She laughed again, “I mean, I'd be terrible at it. Shari tried to explain what you did, but she lost me only a few words in.”

“But... Using magic requires the same amount of math skills that device building does, doesn't it?”

“Amount, sure, but it's not the same thing by a long shot. I can do the math required for magic, but don't ask me to look at device code.” She stopped the car, and I realized that she had managed to take me right to my building. “Well, here you are. Feeling a bit better?”

I didn't quite know how I felt... but it certainly wasn't the same hopelessness that I had before I had been so kindly taken home by Nanoha Takamachi. “Yes... thank you very much for your words and the ride, Miss Takamachi.”

“Nanoha.”

I made a noise of confusion.

“Call me Nanoha. All my friends do.”

I managed to keep my tongue, for once. “Okay... Nanoha.”

She smiled.

After she drove away, I walked up to my room in a thoughtful mood. I knew that there were things that I needed to work on if I was to become an engineer in the Enforcer corps...

It was shocking that I even had a shot.

But my thoughts did stray back to Nanoha Takamachi, the Ace of Aces. A nice person who had given me a ride home when I was literally without direction. A young woman that had, through spending a bit of her time, made my day not only not suck, but had given me a new direction... a new dream.

And my friend. Imagine that.

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

Or 'cause you have FINALS FROM HELL and are studying like a mad woman you know I hope that's just me.

Quoted for truth. God, I hate finals.

Though I'm looking forward to graduation.

[NorthernFallout]

I forgot I had this laying around on the HDD.

Spoiler for LOST:

A land where no human had came out sane. An area filled of mysterious forces, hidden from outsiders. Those who trespassed never saw the world they had once known again. Either they succumbed to the land, or were driven insane by the powers floating around.

Those who had not succumbed and escaped with their life still close to their souls had told stories of strange creatures roaming the land, powerful beasts that instilled them with a freezing horror. Some had been brutally killed by these monsters; others had managed to kill them. There were a lot of these creatures they had said and they tried to stop others to venture into the lands.

New expeditions were sent out, but soon enough people realized it was for nothing. More people died or came back insane, and so they decided to stop venturing into the area. The coast of the land soon became void of life as the expedition parties returned to the mainland and their respective nations. They named it after its nature, implying that no one set their foot there again, else they wanted to be consumed by it.

The Forbidden Nation, or just The Zone as a few call it, fell into the shadows and was only told in legends to scare small children. Soon enough people forgot about the land to the north and didn’t bother to go there at all.
That is, until the spacecraft known as the Himalaya crashed and Cancri entered a new era. While the technology and the four nations flourished, some began to think about going north again, into the Zone, to find out whatever was hidden inside with the help of devices and more properly trained soldiers. It was discussed for a long while before a decision was made to send another expedition up north.

The operation was on a small scale and they left the mainland on a sunny Monday morning. They travelled by boat, on a large research vessel named Maria that was supposed to transport them over the rough Lobrok’s Sea and help them reach the land on the other side.
The trip took only a few hours, the distance being not that much of a challenge. The sky was cloud-free all day long and allowed them to safely reach the opposing shore. There they unloaded their equipment, said goodbye to the ship’s crew that would stay behind to wait for them until their return, and ventured across the border to the Forbidden Nation.

What they had expected to encounter after a few hours of travelling didn’t come. The forest was thick and snow covered the entirety of it. It was white, soft and calm where they walked, without as much as a sound. Some of them found that strange, as not even a single bird made a noise in the forest. No singing, no animal rushing to cover in fear, no wind blowing. It was all still and silent.
They eventually came upon a few ruins very similar to those they had seen in pictures that had survived other expeditions. They investigated them thoroughly but didn’t find anything worthy to look into more closely and so they moved further into the lands.

The radio and satellite communications devices they had brought with them still functioned properly but the signal was becoming weaker the further they went. They kept one of the soldiers talking at all times with the Maria’s crew to see when it would break.
After a few minutes of talking, the first horrifying event occurred. It was about time, since they had been undisturbed for so long.

It wasn’t a monster or mysterious creature that had caused it, as the stories had told, but one of the twelve members of the party had to sacrifice his life to something the others couldn’t figure out what it was.
When they had walked through a particularly thick part of the forest, that unlucky soldier had gone off far to the side to try and find another, easier way through. While the others kept an eye on him they saw how he suddenly froze in the middle of a step. They shouted at him, asking what he was doing but he didn’t respond. His eyes were full of fear.
Then his body started to levitate over the ground. The other soldiers stood wide-eyed and couldn’t believe what they saw. The soldier floated further up into the air until he began to spin with an increasing speed. He screamed at the top of his lungs as the gravitational forces suddenly reverted and his body exploded in a red cloud.
Nothing was left where he had walked and the rest of the party stood silent in shock. Eventually they moved on, coerced by their leader. While they had lost a comrade, they couldn’t stop this far in.

Their march continued for hours. Now and then new things happened that caused one of the party members to lose their life. Some was burnt to death by strange electrifying anomalies; others were suggested to have been poisoned by long, slender plant-like things hanging from the trees. Each death affected the party tremendously, but they knew they had to move on. Their comrades’ life had been for nothing if they returned.

Then they finally reached another building, one they had never seen or heard about. It looked like an abandoned bunker, its rounded roof sticking out of the ground with a heavy door sunk into the ground next to it. The few that were left, a total of four soldiers, gathered around it and managed to open it. They one by one entered the darkness to investigate what was inside.

Hours passed outside the bunker. It was still as silent and peaceful as it had been when they first arrived, no noise travelling through the forest. The sky was cloudy, as it always was over the Zone, caused by some strange natural phenomena no researcher had ever managed to figure out. If it was due to the atmosphere of Cancri, the location of the Zone or just this particular weather system, no one knew. It was always, without falter, cloudy.

A noise suddenly broke the silence. One of the soldiers, a woman, came running out of the bunker, screaming with horror. She was drenched in blood and made red spots in the snow where she ran. She continued to scream as she ran in the wrong direction, only venturing deeper into the Zone. What awaited her there no one knew, not even herself. All she could think of was to get away from the bunker. She entered the thicker parts of the forest again and disappeared.

The crew of the Maria, when they had waited for two days, finally unanchored and travelled home to the mainland. What had happened to the expedition party they didn’t know. The whole operation was deemed a failure and the relatives of those that had disappeared were notified. Funerals were had and tears were shed.
From that day onward no one ventured to the Forbidden Nation again. It has now been several years since anyone set their foot there. However, once again new forces are gathering, new motivation getting stronger.

The Zone will soon have new visitors.

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by spawnofthejudge

That's right, it's the end of school! How could I forget?

Decided to write whatever came to mind, since I hadn't written anything Nanoha lately. Result is as follows. Hope it's a nice distraction for you studying fiends!

Imagine That

Spoiler:

What was I even doing here, anyway?

“...You failed.”

Was there a purpose? A reason? A driving force?

“You're welcome to come back next year...”

I didn't know anymore. How could I?

“but I personally wouldn't recommend going through the humiliation again.”

It was with dejection that I walked away from the training facility. It was, after all, a place that I was basically unwelcome in. I'd been there a few times before I had made this attempt... but none of them had been for my own sake. All of them had been for someone else. Someone else had asked me to do something, and I always watched when my work was being tested.

I had great ideas. Terrible execution. I don't know where I went wrong... but I knew that there wasn't much I could do about it this day. The sun may still be high in the sky, but that doesn't mean that I would be able to get myself to do anything for the rest of the day. It was the end of a dream. A nice dream, certainly; something that I had my whole being working toward for six months. For nothing, it seemed. I had wasted my time. I should have remained at my desk, in my own building, where I belonged.

My eyes were suddenly drawn to a figure that had come out of one of the medical buildings nearby. She was attractive; her hair was a reddish brown, kept in a long side ponytail... must be in her mid-twenties...

With a shock that goes through me, I realize that I'm looking at the Ace of Aces, and she is clearly not pleased.

I don't remember stopping, but I must have, because I'm not moving at this point and it takes a specific attempt from me in order to get my legs moving toward... I don't even know. The medical building is not one that I need to pass to get to either my flat or my office, so I don't even know why I had managed to get myself over here. So I stop again and look around, trying to figure out what the best way toward... well, anywhere... was from where I stood. This apparently caught the Ace's attention.

“Excuse me,” she said, causing me to snap around to look back at her. She is walking toward me. “Are you lost?”

I shook my head quickly. This was a mistake, as it exacerbated the headache that was now threatening to get only worse and worse as this terrible day went on. “I'm not. I just seem to be wandering aimlessly today, and I just realized where I had ended up...”

She laughed. “Oh, okay. Where are you headed, then?”

I looked back at her blankly, unable to tell her where I was going because I didn't know myself, and unable to bring up the reason why.

“Is something wrong?” she asked, when she noticed my facial expression wasn't changing. Maybe she could see something of my day in my face? “Are you alright?”

I couldn't say yes; I was not. But I also didn't want her to think that she had an obligation to do anything for me. This day was already bad enough; I didn't need to be imposing on the Ace of Aces' time as well. “I've been better.”

Her eyes were kind, I noticed. “I'm sorry, then. Perhaps you should head home, then? It is a weekend, after all.” She tilted her head to one side. “Where would that be?”

I had made the calculation by this point, so I indicated the direction of my flat. She was probably right about where I should go anyway; I wasn't going to get any decent work done toward my deadline at the end of next week.

“Would you like a lift? I'm headed home myself, and it's in that direction.”

“Oh, no... I couldn't... I couldn't accept that, Miss Takamachi...” I stuttered. I meet the Ace of Aces, she offers me a ride home, and I stutter. I clearly will never be anything but a dork.

“C'mon, can't let any up-and-coming technician be wandering about aimlessly!”

“Really, I...” Wait. What?

“I insist, Mr. Volt.” Now I'm pretty sure my mouth is open at this point and I'm staring. But I can't stop. She knows my name and my profession...?!

“A...alright...” I didn't really have a choice in the matter, did I?

“Good,” she said, apparently satisfied. She then walked past me, and I had to shake my head to try to get myself to move again. My headache objected to this, of course, but I don't think I cared. I caught up to her quickly enough. She looked at me as I pulled up alongside her. “So what's got you so melancholy today?”

Did I really have to tell the Ace of Aces that I had failed an exam to become a frontline mage? “I... failed an exam...”

She seemed to understand instantly. “Oh, I'm sorry. Lots of people fail the exam today, you know.”

I already knew that. Being told again didn't help much. “Only thirty percent of those examined at this test are passed...”

“And only one in every thousand that is past the age of majority,” she concluded. “It's not really a reflection on you or your merits if you're not able to pass that exam, Mr. Volt.”

“It's...” How do you explain to a role model of yours that your dreams of being just like her have been completely dashed? “...the end of a dream.”

We had reached her car at this point. It was a sleek black machine... far beyond my budget. Though really, I had a flat and no car. Very little was within my budget to begin with. “Why focus on this thing that you're not good at?” she asked as she unlocked the car and opened the driver's side door. I used the opportunity to open the other door and get in on the other side to stall, but I just couldn't tell her. I mean, I can't just go off and say that I wanted to be like her! Once we were in the car and she turned the key in the ignition, though, I was saved from answering when she asked a follow up question. “I mean, you're one of the best new device engineers we've got on staff. Shouldn't you focus on that?”

I'm what?!

“Oh, you didn't know?” She asked as she pulled out of the space. “I'm surprised. I'll have to give a word or two to Shari about that, then. She showed me one of your latest breakthroughs. You know, that Boost Device that you had added the auto-guard to?” I could only nod. My face was burning so much that I wanted to open the window. “Where is your place?”

I must have been coherent enough in my mumbling of the directions, because she nodded and we headed off in the right direction. “She told me that it was one of the best new things she'd seen out of an engineer younger than her, well, ever.”

“Miss Finieno... said that...?” Shario Finieno had been a visitor to my Advanced Device Mechanics class just a few months ago... she had assigned us to make an auto-guard to a Boost Device. I had done most of the work on it, and gotten a great grade to boot, but I hadn't really thought of it again.

Miss Takamachi laughed. “Yep, I really do need to have a word with Shari about encouraging good engineers. She's actually keeping an eye on you for possible relocation into the Enforcer corps.”

I couldn't actually contain my astonishment at this piece of news. “What?!”

She cast me an amused glance. “Shari really should have told you that, I think.”

I was flabbergasted. Was I... was I something to talk about when it came to my skills with a device? Sure, I'd helped others with their devices from time to time when they came to me about them, but I was always tinkering with devices with the aim of using one... I had taken a bunch of classes in that realm because they were enjoyable, and I was learning a lot about fighting with a device too... but to find out...

“So I think you should be concentrating on building devices, since you're so good with them.” She laughed again, “I mean, I'd be terrible at it. Shari tried to explain what you did, but she lost me only a few words in.”

“But... Using magic requires the same amount of math skills that device building does, doesn't it?”

“Amount, sure, but it's not the same thing by a long shot. I can do the math required for magic, but don't ask me to look at device code.” She stopped the car, and I realized that she had managed to take me right to my building. “Well, here you are. Feeling a bit better?”

I didn't quite know how I felt... but it certainly wasn't the same hopelessness that I had before I had been so kindly taken home by Nanoha Takamachi. “Yes... thank you very much for your words and the ride, Miss Takamachi.”

“Nanoha.”

I made a noise of confusion.

“Call me Nanoha. All my friends do.”

I managed to keep my tongue, for once. “Okay... Nanoha.”

She smiled.

After she drove away, I walked up to my room in a thoughtful mood. I knew that there were things that I needed to work on if I was to become an engineer in the Enforcer corps...

It was shocking that I even had a shot.

But my thoughts did stray back to Nanoha Takamachi, the Ace of Aces. A nice person who had given me a ride home when I was literally without direction. A young woman that had, through spending a bit of her time, made my day not only not suck, but had given me a new direction... a new dream.

And my friend. Imagine that.

That was enjoyable :3 It was neat seeing Nanoha from an outside source.

[Satashi]

So, How is everyone doing here? School finals and exams going on and all that. IT's been so dead here lately, lets get some life back into it! Are our authors going to be able to write again soon? :3

My finals are over (3 weeks ago lol) I don't know my grades on the tests, but I have an A in every class. Woohoo! 6 for 6 A's so far!

As for fics, my current one, Amber Dreams ( previously Onyx chip ) is almost done. I think it'll take about 2,000-3,000 words to be completed. I originally wanted to release it as one chapter but it pressed way too far. So I'm going to have one 8,000+ word chapter and one 3,000-4,000 word chapter. I should have chapter 1 done soon, Denzo is betaing it for me and then Angel will proof it.

One thing is, this'll be the first fic I've done where I actually sat down and wrote it in about 3-4 fics now. My last few were actually shorts here that compiled and then put together ( like Vampire!Fate, PornStar!Vivio, ect ) so this one will actually be good quality! *gasp!*

Anyway, Amber Dreams is a NanoFate fic with a twist. Set a few years before Vivid, Nanoha is over working herself trying to be a good mother, a flight instructor, and an active duty Ace for the Air Force. Fate, only able to come home for a day or two a month, has broken off her relationship with Nanoha after they split ways. Now broken up with her girlfriend for almost half a year, Fate comes to visit again and finds Vivio sick. Staying to help take care of her, Fate realizes that even though she wants to distance herself from Nanoha, it gets harder and more painful each day. Now Nanoha wants to re-kindle the fire while Fate tries to push her away for reasons that even she herself doesn't fully understand. Torn between a girl calling her "mama", an ex-girlfriend who still loves her, and her duty as an enforcer and the emotional baggage built up over the years of her life, Fate will have to make the decision that will effect everyone's life around her. And, like my other fics, it could go either way >3

[Jimmy C]

Just a suggestion, don't let anyone but you decide which way it goes. And only write one version of the outcome. No alternates.

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

Just a suggestion, don't let anyone but you decide which way it goes. And only write one version of the outcome. No alternates.

I never write alternatives unless it replaces the original. Trust me, I got several request for it on "Week" and the other ones I did that had a "bad end".

But as for who decides this ending, it's not me but rather Fate. To some that may sound silly, but a few of you here know what I mean. I don't really plot what happens, I just give the characters a scenario and let them take it from there.

Hm.... have a short

Spoiler for Blush!Fate:

"Are... Are you sure?" Fate's words a little shaky and her face was tinted so much that she felt a little faint from it. "Hayate..."

"She'll love it!" The short brown haired girl was grinning like a school girl, holding up a set of lingerie. The black fabric was sheer, white lace and frill running along the edges. several red bows were scattered over the materail as well, giving it an innocent but devilishly revealing appearance. Paired with the bra/pantie combo came thigh high stockings connected to a garter belt to go around her stomach. laced around the back and sides of the bra was a free flowing sheer sheet that covered her skin lightly but still allowed it to be seen. Satin gloves hung from the rack as well, long enough to go well past her elbows, leaving her hands uncovered, save for a loop for her middle finger to go through.

"But its... I don't even know how to put all that on!" Her eyes were looking everywhere save for the lingerie her friend had picked out.

"Relax, I'm sure you can figure it out. Besides, Nanoha-chan will do all the work taking it off.... But then again, she'll probably leave most of it on..." She put a finger to her chin in thought. "I'd definitely leave it on, makes it more exciting!"

"Hayate!" Fate was almost ready to leave the story, eyes closed tightly. "I- I changed my mind, maybe we're not ready-"

"You're ready!" Hayate told her firmly, but her voice was still laced with humor. "For goodness sake, you've been dating for how many years, have an adopted daughter, and ahve lived together since I had my division made! It's time to have sex!"

"Hayate!" Fate stammered, holding the front of her own shirt with a hand as if it would help calm her rapidly beating heart. "I-It's making love, not... sex" The last word was almost whispered out, eyes now looking at the floor.

"Sure, sure," Hayate pushed the lingerie at Fate and smiled as it was taken. "Just be sure to be yourself. Don't be so nervous about it girl! I'm sure Nanoha wants to take the next step as well, but she's probably worried it'll frighten you to get so intimate." She judges Fate's red ears. "And I can see why, you're so shy and innocent."

"You're not making this easy..." Fate mumbled lightly, eyes still downcast as she was suddenly starting to be pushed toward the register to check out. After what seemed like an eternity at the counter, she finally was able to leave the store with the set in a bright pink and white striped bag that proudly displayed the store name, much to her embarrassment. "Um, thanks again for the help."

"Anytime!" Hayate nudged her friend playfully. "Make sure you give me all the juicy details!"

"Hayate!?"

~**~

"Nanoha!" Fate knew she sounded nervous when the girl on the screen in front of her suddenly looked conscerned. "Um, hi! How's your day going?"

"Everything okay?" She asked instead of answering the question. "You look really red, do you have a fever?"

"N-no!" Fate heard her voice almost break. "Hey, um, will you be off at your normal time today?"

"Yes?" Nanoha looked at Fate oddly.

"Well," Fate glanced to the side where Hayate was flailing silently at her to calm down. "I'm going to cook dinner tonight for us, something really nice since we haven't been.. alone... in so long." She inhaled through her nose, suddenly remember what it felt like so many years ago when she asked Nanoha on a date. "Since, you know, Vivio is staying at a friend's and all..."

"That would be wonderful." Nanoha smiled brightly, eyes closed. "Should I bring anything home?"

Fate smiled, feeling her heart skip a beat at the happy look she was getting. "No, just your appetite. I'll see you at six then?"

"I'll be there." Nanoha waved lightly and got a happy nod before the monitors cut off.

Fate sighed out at once. "I was obvious wasn't I?"

"Badly." Hayate agreed without delay. "But you're only home here a few days a week so it's not too bad. Anyway, I need to get back to base. You set?" She got a small nod. "And Fate-chan?" She took her friend's hands and smiled at her. "Really, you two love each other. It's natural to be nervous the first time you make love. Just remember that she loves you deeply, and I promise you that she will be speechless when she sees you. Okay?"

"Okay," Fate gave her friend a tight hug before smiling at her. "Thanks."

~*To be continued*~

[Master Kosa]

@Satashi: Finally something from MSLN section to look forward to. Not that there are bad works but... just too much action or violence for my taste (well except 2-3 other alreadi started fics). I hope this one wouldn't end like Week. Or not. I don't know, I just hope to have something good for reading.

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by KoSSa

@Satashi: Finally something from MSLN section to look forward to. Not that there are bad works but... just too much action or violence for my taste (well except 2-3 other alreadi started fics). I hope this one wouldn't end like Week. Or not. I don't know, I just hope to have something good for reading.

Aw thank you, hearing that really makes me smile.

[RadiantBeam]

I get out of school next week, so here's looking forward to THAT. Graduation, HUZZAH!!

On the writing front, I've got another ViCia work in the wings (a direct sequel to "Shadow") and am currently chipping away at the next chapter of Bless the Broken Road.

[TheShinySword]

*clears throat*FINAAAAALSSS! *coughs*
That is all, see you in a week when I actually have the brain power write again.

[Satashi]

Spoiler for Blush!Fate:

"Are... Are you sure?" Fate's words a little shaky and her face was tinted so much that she felt a little faint from it. "Hayate..."

"She'll love it!" The short brown haired girl was grinning like a school girl, holding up a set of lingerie. The black fabric was sheer, white lace and frill running along the edges. several red bows were scattered over the materail as well, giving it an innocent but devilishly revealing appearance. Paired with the bra/pantie combo came thigh high stockings connected to a garter belt to go around her stomach. laced around the back and sides of the bra was a free flowing sheer sheet that covered her skin lightly but still allowed it to be seen. Satin gloves hung from the rack as well, long enough to go well past her elbows, leaving her hands uncovered, save for a loop for her middle finger to go through.

"But its... I don't even know how to put all that on!" Her eyes were looking everywhere save for the lingerie her friend had picked out.

"Relax, I'm sure you can figure it out. Besides, Nanoha-chan will do all the work taking it off.... But then again, she'll probably leave most of it on..." She put a finger to her chin in thought. "I'd definitely leave it on, makes it more exciting!"

"Hayate!" Fate was almost ready to leave the story, eyes closed tightly. "I- I changed my mind, maybe we're not ready-"

"You're ready!" Hayate told her firmly, but her voice was still laced with humor. "For goodness sake, you've been dating for how many years, have an adopted daughter, and ahve lived together since I had my division made! It's time to have sex!"

"Hayate!" Fate stammered, holding the front of her own shirt with a hand as if it would help calm her rapidly beating heart. "I-It's making love, not... sex" The last word was almost whispered out, eyes now looking at the floor.

"Sure, sure," Hayate pushed the lingerie at Fate and smiled as it was taken. "Just be sure to be yourself. Don't be so nervous about it girl! I'm sure Nanoha wants to take the next step as well, but she's probably worried it'll frighten you to get so intimate." She judges Fate's red ears. "And I can see why, you're so shy and innocent."

"You're not making this easy..." Fate mumbled lightly, eyes still downcast as she was suddenly starting to be pushed toward the register to check out. After what seemed like an eternity at the counter, she finally was able to leave the store with the set in a bright pink and white striped bag that proudly displayed the store name, much to her embarrassment. "Um, thanks again for the help."

"Anytime!" Hayate nudged her friend playfully. "Make sure you give me all the juicy details!"

"Hayate!?"

~**~

"Nanoha!" Fate knew she sounded nervous when the girl on the screen in front of her suddenly looked conscerned. "Um, hi! How's your day going?"

"Everything okay?" She asked instead of answering the question. "You look really red, do you have a fever?"

"N-no!" Fate heard her voice almost break. "Hey, um, will you be off at your normal time today?"

"Yes?" Nanoha looked at Fate oddly.

"Well," Fate glanced to the side where Hayate was flailing silently at her to calm down. "I'm going to cook dinner tonight for us, something really nice since we haven't been.. alone... in so long." She inhaled through her nose, suddenly remember what it felt like so many years ago when she asked Nanoha on a date. "Since, you know, Vivio is staying at a friend's and all..."

"That would be wonderful." Nanoha smiled brightly, eyes closed. "Should I bring anything home?"

Fate smiled, feeling her heart skip a beat at the happy look she was getting. "No, just your appetite. I'll see you at six then?"

"I'll be there." Nanoha waved lightly and got a happy nod before the monitors cut off.

Fate sighed out at once. "I was obvious wasn't I?"

"Badly." Hayate agreed without delay. "But you're only home here a few days a week so it's not too bad. Anyway, I need to get back to base. You set?" She got a small nod. "And Fate-chan?" She took her friend's hands and smiled at her. "Really, you two love each other. It's natural to be nervous the first time you make love. Just remember that she loves you deeply, and I promise you that she will be speechless when she sees you. Okay?"

"Okay," Fate gave her friend a tight hug before smiling at her. "Thanks."

~*To be continued*~

Spoiler for Blush!Fate pt.2:

"Okay, let's see..." Fate spoke aloud to try and calm herself down. "Dinner is almost done... Salads are in the refrigerator waiting for the dressing... rolls are cooling, wine is chilled..." She checked the table, already set, and made sure her side dishes were already in serving bowls with spoons. "Okay... good here..." The blonde walked around to the few steps leading up to the raised section of their loft. "Candles are ready to be lit." Picking up her fire stick, she made sure it worked. "Okay... incense is out." She inhaled heavily, smelling the faint scent of cinnamon spice.

Reaching to the side of the bed, she picked up her bag and laid out the contents on the bed. "Okay... I can change into this and light the candles after asking Nanoha to put the dishes in the kitchen to clean later... I'll have just enough time to set everything up... but..." Fate picked up another bag and felt her cheeks color even more as she opened it, being rewarded with several roses worth of petals. Taking a handful gently, she started scattering them over the bed that had one side of the blankets turned back already. After a few more sprinkles, she smiled at the sight. On Nanoha's side was a vase full of matching roses, a medium sized teddy bear, and a jewelry case. Moving to it, she opened the small box and smiled fondly down at the golden ring. Twin hearts were designed on it, each containing their different birth stones. With a slight tilt, she looked at the band of the ring, seeing the words I love you, forever engraved into it.

Slowly closing the box, Fate took a deep breath and went over everything once more before walking back down the stairs. Dinner was placed on the table and the candles were lit. A small bucket of ice was sat on a pedestal she had moved from the living room and the wine was placed in it. Again, she nervously triple checked everything and sat down into her seat.

Red eyes looked at the candles flickering flame and her thumbs started to nervously fiddle with each other. After a few minutes she looked at the clock on the wall and started to nervously bounce her leg while waiting.

One minute passed, and then another. After checking her watch several more times, she took a nervous breath and let it out slowly. The anticipation was building on her and she could feel each minute tick by with a painstakingly slow pace. Finally she looked at the clock once more after forcing herself not to for a while and noticed that it was far past what she had thought. 'She's almost an hour late...

Fate looked at the almost room temperature food layed out and sighed again, still nervously playing with her hands. 'Where are you, Nanoha...?

[ghazghkull]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for Blush!Fate:

*snip*

Spoiler for Blush!Fate pt.2:

*snip*

You realize that you're teasing people right?

And as far as I can tell, I can see it going one of two ways and branching out from there |3

[BPHaru]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for Blush!Fate pt.2:

"Okay, let's see..." Fate spoke aloud to try and calm herself down. "Dinner is almost done... Salads are in the refrigerator waiting for the dressing... rolls are cooling, wine is chilled..." She checked the table, already set, and made sure her side dishes were already in serving bowls with spoons. "Okay... good here..." The blonde walked around to the few steps leading up to the raised section of their loft. "Candles are ready to be lit." Picking up her fire stick, she made sure it worked. "Okay... incense is out." She inhaled heavily, smelling the faint scent of cinnamon spice.

Reaching to the side of the bed, she picked up her bag and laid out the contents on the bed. "Okay... I can change into this and light the candles after asking Nanoha to put the dishes in the kitchen to clean later... I'll have just enough time to set everything up... but..." Fate picked up another bag and felt her cheeks color even more as she opened it, being rewarded with several roses worth of petals. Taking a handful gently, she started scattering them over the bed that had one side of the blankets turned back already. After a few more sprinkles, she smiled at the sight. On Nanoha's side was a vase full of matching roses, a medium sized teddy bear, and a jewelry case. Moving to it, she opened the small box and smiled fondly down at the golden ring. Twin hearts were designed on it, each containing their different birth stones. With a slight tilt, she looked at the band of the ring, seeing the words I love you, forever engraved into it.

Slowly closing the box, Fate took a deep breath and went over everything once more before walking back down the stairs. Dinner was placed on the table and the candles were lit. A small bucket of ice was sat on a pedestal she had moved from the living room and the wine was placed in it. Again, she nervously triple checked everything and sat down into her seat.

Red eyes looked at the candles flickering flame and her thumbs started to nervously fiddle with each other. After a few minutes she looked at the clock on the wall and started to nervously bounce her leg while waiting.

One minute passed, and then another. After checking her watch several more times, she took a nervous breath and let it out slowly. The anticipation was building on her and she could feel each minute tick by with a painstakingly slow pace. Finally she looked at the clock once more after forcing herself not to for a while and noticed that it was far past what she had thought. 'She's almost an hour late...

Fate looked at the almost room temperature food layed out and sighed again, still nervously playing with her hands. 'Where are you, Nanoha...?

Noooo Nanoha, where are you!? Blush!Fate needs you!!

Thanks for this second part, I'll be looking forward to your next update, and hoping for some fluff ^^

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