2012-02-27, 09:46 | Link #24142 |
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Hmm... Given how hell-bent Praxidike is at bringing down the IS System, what else could they attack aside from the Academy?
I'm thinking the Katami Dojo since that's where some of the Second Year students are having their attachment programme. (Athena fanon :3)
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2012-02-27, 10:02 | Link #24144 |
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That too... The naval task force had little trouble dealing with three standard drones.
Guess I could have the drone squad taking on the same task force while Inami then pops by to assist, defying warnings to not use the unit.
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2012-02-27, 10:14 | Link #24146 |
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True, having him pop by a naval task force wouldn't make sense. But then again, something needs to trigger his shift. If it's not going to be drones, it'll be either an enraged Cecilia/Tsurugi.
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2012-02-27, 10:49 | Link #24148 |
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Well, the story is regarding Tsurugi spending her time in the Academy while also being under his guidance/care.
His appearance isn't exactly avoidable as one would hope. But I am trying to find ways to give Tsurugi screen time. One of which is popping in scenes of her in normal class, quietly ranting about maths. Spoiler for Maths:
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2012-02-27, 10:56 | Link #24149 |
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So she has no life outside of Inami? That would work.....if she was named Generic harem member 2543 Just because people love someone doesn't mean they have to show up literally thinking about them every time they appear. It's especially bad if the POV stays with them and they're still acting like GHM 2543.
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2012-02-27, 11:05 | Link #24150 | |
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Btw, would you say that Laura is being herself in this excerpt? Spoiler for Short:
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2012-02-27, 11:09 | Link #24151 |
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It's amusing and yes, Laura is a literal genie. :3
As for what Eras said,m it was a pure truth. The biggest problem regarding character development of a love interest (or harem member in this chase) is if their development tied to the hero, but I knew you acknowledge it and can do better. (currently fighting this plague regarding Sacred Twins)
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2012-02-27, 11:14 | Link #24153 | |
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I do acknowledge it. Hence why I try to add class scenes in the midst... A school is a school still.
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2012-02-27, 11:30 | Link #24155 | |
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Either that or I'll mark it under Rule of Funny.
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2012-02-27, 11:33 | Link #24156 |
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A little late but.....
backlog buster!!! I believe that Tabane should appear as little as possible(unless the whole story revolved around her or you are talking about her planning something big again).... Because it is literally quite impossible for any OC to meet her (If all the top agency(FBI, MI9...etc) around the world can't even locate her, what make you think your OC can find her? The probability of finding her by chance is as high as finding a needle in space....) Which means people don't find her, she find people. With this in mind: Why would she appear before insignificant people (read: Almost every single human beings on earth) other than Ichika, Houki and Chifuyu? Characters can meet her, only when they are around Ichika, Houki or Chifuyu but it also means that it is difficult to stab her with something with them around...... Ichika will save Tabane because he is a hero Houki will save Tabane because they are sisters Chifuyu will save Tabane because she is her friend So to stab her, you need to isolate her.......and If she appear before the OC alone, it means the OC is important.....enough to get her attention, this will up the Mary Sue factor.... Although Tabane do things for LOL however she will only do things if the said things can provide her long term entrainment.....and she can instigate the fun stuff with only minimum little effort on her part.....
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