Nanoha Fanfic Discussion

[Fuyu no Sora]

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Now THAT was Kha's own words

I got to get back to work now, but I'll leave you all with this little teaser of my next work... SHould i ever complete this current one

I don't think anybody has thought of writing this pairing yet though , It's a shame because it's one of the few CANON pairings in the series

Spoiler for An Island of 'SUNRISE' (Guess the pun :p):

Surveying the surrounding area, the young boy with dark hair and blue eyes concluded that their current location shouldn’t be too far from their training zone. The explosion must have blown into the water and the tide probably washed them to a near-by island.

The sound of a waterfall reached his ears and the sight of fruits in the tree above caught his attention. The large number of birds flying above the water indicates that fish was abundant.

“Looks like we haven’t been flying off too far… We have fresh water and food so we should last a few days till they find us…”

Turning away, the young boy sigh at the view before him, “Unfortunately, our biggest problem is you…”

“WHAT DO YOU MEAN BY THAT?!” Yelled the little girl with long green hair.

“Ah nothing nothing… Other than it’s completely your fault that we’re in this mess” He mumbled.

“ How was I to know that ‘inflammable’ means ‘flammable’?!”

“Lindy, both me and Leti yelled at you three times… But that’s not the point, you shouldn't be firing that big of a cannon-spell near your allies to begin with….”

“WAAH! Clyde-kun is so mean!!!”

“Sigh…”


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Lieutenant Leti Louwan pace around the control room nervously.

Sitting across her, was a young man with two kittens on his lap, “Who you PLEASE calm down?”

“HOW CAN I?! You saw how big that explosion was?!”

“Clyde’s with her, I’m sure they’ll be fine, I trained him myself!”

“That’s what I’m most afraid of…”

“Huh?”

“Look, the point is that you’re too lax about this, Gil !”

“And you’re too up-tight Leti…” Gil smirked. “You’ll never get married at this rate…”

“Shut up!”

... Interested?

You are evil. But it's not for nothing that your title is "Sith Lord" XD!!!

And yep! Interested person here

Oi! Lone Wolf, how's chapter 4 going?

[USB500]

Originally Posted by Fuyu no Sora

Oi! Lone Wolf, how's chapter 4 going?

hush! don't call me with that name here

I'm still working on it (though it's kinda complicated to finish as I'm trying to look for work vacancy ATM )

Or should I post more previews?

[Fuyu no Sora]

Originally Posted by USB500

hush! don't call me with that name here

I'm still working on it (though it's kinda complicated to finish as I'm trying to look for work vacancy ATM )

Or should I post more previews?

OK then USB

Oh, OK then *goes back and sits, waiting for another dose of hilariousness*

Maybe that'd be helpful XD!

[USB500]

Originally Posted by Fuyu no Sora

OK then USB

Oh, OK then *goes back and sits, waiting for another dose of hilariousness*

Maybe that's be helpful XD!

Spoiler for are you sure:

Spoiler for here you go:

Spoiler for well, here it is:

“We are back with this exclusive report on Time-Space Administrative Bureau’s Open Day,” a news reporter spoke to the camera as she stood in front of the audience hall. “We have confirmed reports from TSAB officers that 75 percents of audience have to be admitted to hospital due to massive haemorrhage after attending stage play conducted by Lost Property Riot Force 6.”

“This is madness!” one audience screamed as he grabbed the camera. “The stage play is total success! It is sheer madness we keep coming for more!” Then the audience collapsed on the floor and picked up by medical officers.

As the cameraman turned around to record the activity, one group of fan boys cheered “SHAMAL ROCKS!” and flagged a banner with Shamal’s name painted on it. Then a flock of fan girls squealed in excitement and shouted Chrono’s name aloud before fan boys pointed to them in protest. Fan girls stood on their ground and demanded fan boys to die. Fan boys died, revived and continued their heated argument with fan girls.

“As you can see,” the female reporter continued. “The situation here almost goes out of control, and it could have been worse if it isn’t for the Anti-Riot Force’s work in keeping everything under control.”

Again, the cameraman turned around to record an ongoing war between ARF personnel and fan people, the latter proceeded to toss objects at the law-enforcers. The cameraman and the reporter had to dodge incoming projectiles when the fan people missed their intended targets.

“We have to leave before the war enrages!” the cameraman shouted.

“I have to agree! Come on!” Nevertheless the reporter still had the time to finish her field report, dodging projectiles at the same time. “We’ll be back with more updates on TSAB Open Day! Inter-Dimensional News Network, this is Tamura Mizuki!”

Spoiler for wait! there's more!:

The hall was jammed with visitors as it usually was for the past two days. This time, the numbers of the audience increased as news circulating Riot Force 6’s stage play were spread. Because of this, the building was now overcrowded, forcing TSAB personnel to set up big screen outside the facility to accommodate the audience.

Shamal and Shamisen stepped out. In an instant audience inside and outside the hall howled in approval at them and applauded. Bashfully Shamal thanked them before she shrieked when Shamisen grabbed her tail.

“SHAMISEN STRIKES AGAIN!!!!!” male audience screamed and bled their nose. “WE SO APPROVE OF TAIL-GRABBING ACTION! RAWR!”

“Mou, Shamisen, stop it!” Shamal moaned and caught the cat. “You’re embarrassing me in front of the people! Behave yourself!” Shamisen just meowed and nudged its head against her chest. “Iyaa! It tickles!”

Male audience and fan boys nosebled. “SHAMISEN! WE LOVE YOU!”

--“PHOTON LANCER PHALANX SHIFT.”--

Fate Testarossa killed male audience and fan boys with Bardiche Assault.

Chrono stepped away from Fate in fear. The Ace shrugged and chuckled. “I guess I still haven’t lost the touch yet…” she muttered.

Someone ought to kill that cat fast...

Okay, that was a bit too much

[BPHaru]

Originally Posted by Satashi

300 Vs. legion can be solved

Spoiler for swingsets:

Nanoha: My swingset goes both ways!
Fate: Mine too!
Both: *looks at Yuuno*
Yuuno:..... Not again! *tries to run but gets tackled* Heeeeellllllppppp!!!!!

Elio: *with Caro and Lutecia clinging to his arms* I...I feel your pain... T_T

That don't solves anything, Fate/yuuno is even worst than Nanoha/Yuuno, and if you mix the 3 It’s doubly worst.

Originally Posted by Satashi

......Because I wanted to try and touch people's emotions.....

I apparently failed horribly.

You surely touched them, it was very well written (and the last part of chapter 6 was wonderful), you have skills writing this kind of fic. But I think the problems that “drama -> sad end” isn’t suitable for this fic, and not satisfactory most times, “drama- sadness-twist -> happy end” would be the best in my opinion, it’s my favorite kind of plot.

The last chapter was good, I liked it a lot, and I really enjoyed the Fate-Nanoha moments, they were so cute, your bath scenes are the bests ^^, but I was expecting less of it (I’m not rejecting the NxF moments, they never are too much C_C), and a bit more from the dramatic part, it seems a bit rushed for me, as Nanoha was shocked and she awaked knowing Fate was alive, we didn’t see an emo-Nanoha at all. I think this chapter was actually “drama -> happy end”, because the twist was in the prolog (I don’t like that idea at all), and I didn’t fell too much sadness in the characters. Maybe it would be better to skip the prolog and tell the history of how Fate escaped after she meets again with Nanoha, using a flashback or directly putting Fate-chan explaining what occurred in her own words.

And a irrelevant thought about the wedding:
I prefer both Fate and Nanoha to use a wedding dress, it’s always cuter this way. If Nanoha likes Fate as she is, and as a girl, I don’t know why she would prefer to marry her dressed as a man, isn’t like she’s regretting marrying a female.

Saludos, Haru

[Fuyu no Sora]

Like Haru stated above, it's great and very well written, but it doesn't fit this story. Sorry Satashi-san. (Original/Alternate Ending I mean)

I must once again agree with Haru in the emo Nanoha part. I was really looking forwards to that and I have conflicting opinions on this (Ryu-kun says it's okay the way it is). It would've been interesting to see that aspect of Nanoha, but what's done is done and I really like the chapter the way it is ^^ (although like I mentioned, I would've liked to see an emo Nanoha.)

I'm not complaining and I really think both endings are great.

So, now that you've finished the second book will you take a break?

[Reiji Tabibito]

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Spoiler for An Island of 'SUNRISE' (Guess the pun :p):

Surveying the surrounding area, the young boy with dark hair and blue eyes concluded that their current location shouldn’t be too far from their training zone. The explosion must have blown into the water and the tide probably washed them to a near-by island.

The sound of a waterfall reached his ears and the sight of fruits in the tree above caught his attention. The large number of birds flying above the water indicates that fish was abundant.

“Looks like we haven’t been flying off too far… We have fresh water and food so we should last a few days till they find us…”

Turning away, the young boy sigh at the view before him, “Unfortunately, our biggest problem is you…”

“WHAT DO YOU MEAN BY THAT?!” Yelled the little girl with long green hair.

“Ah nothing nothing… Other than it’s completely your fault that we’re in this mess” He mumbled.

“ How was I to know that ‘inflammable’ means ‘flammable’?!”

“Lindy, both me and Leti yelled at you three times… But that’s not the point, you shouldn't be firing that big of a cannon-spell near your allies to begin with….”

“WAAH! Clyde-kun is so mean!!!”

“Sigh…”


--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------


Lieutenant Leti Louwan pace around the control room nervously.

Sitting across her, was a young man with two kittens on his lap, “Who you PLEASE calm down?”

“HOW CAN I?! You saw how big that explosion was?!”

“Clyde’s with her, I’m sure they’ll be fine, I trained him myself!”

“That’s what I’m most afraid of…”

“Huh?”

“Look, the point is that you’re too lax about this, Gil !”

“And you’re too up-tight Leti…” Gil smirked. “You’ll never get married at this rate…”

“Shut up!”

... Interested?

Okay, that's either a reference to Nagasarete Airantou or one of those Gundam eps (almost all series have @ least one) where some chars are stranded.

Originally Posted by USB500

Spoiler for are you sure:

Spoiler for here you go:

Spoiler for well, here it is:

“We are back with this exclusive report on Time-Space Administrative Bureau’s Open Day,” a news reporter spoke to the camera as she stood in front of the audience hall. “We have confirmed reports from TSAB officers that 75 percents of audience have to be admitted to hospital due to massive haemorrhage after attending stage play conducted by Lost Property Riot Force 6.”

“This is madness!” one audience screamed as he grabbed the camera. “The stage play is total success! It is sheer madness we keep coming for more!” Then the audience collapsed on the floor and picked up by medical officers.

As the cameraman turned around to record the activity, one group of fan boys cheered “SHAMAL ROCKS!” and flagged a banner with Shamal’s name painted on it. Then a flock of fan girls squealed in excitement and shouted Chrono’s name aloud before fan boys pointed to them in protest. Fan girls stood on their ground and demanded fan boys to die. Fan boys died, revived and continued their heated argument with fan girls.

“As you can see,” the female reporter continued. “The situation here almost goes out of control, and it could have been worse if it isn’t for the Anti-Riot Force’s work in keeping everything under control.”

Again, the cameraman turned around to record an ongoing war between ARF personnel and fan people, the latter proceeded to toss objects at the law-enforcers. The cameraman and the reporter had to dodge incoming projectiles when the fan people missed their intended targets.

“We have to leave before the war enrages!” the cameraman shouted.

“I have to agree! Come on!” Nevertheless the reporter still had the time to finish her field report, dodging projectiles at the same time. “We’ll be back with more updates on TSAB Open Day! Inter-Dimensional News Network, this is Tamura Mizuki!”

Spoiler for wait! there's more!:

The hall was jammed with visitors as it usually was for the past two days. This time, the numbers of the audience increased as news circulating Riot Force 6’s stage play were spread. Because of this, the building was now overcrowded, forcing TSAB personnel to set up big screen outside the facility to accommodate the audience.

Shamal and Shamisen stepped out. In an instant audience inside and outside the hall howled in approval at them and applauded. Bashfully Shamal thanked them before she shrieked when Shamisen grabbed her tail.

“SHAMISEN STRIKES AGAIN!!!!!” male audience screamed and bled their nose. “WE SO APPROVE OF TAIL-GRABBING ACTION! RAWR!”

“Mou, Shamisen, stop it!” Shamal moaned and caught the cat. “You’re embarrassing me in front of the people! Behave yourself!” Shamisen just meowed and nudged its head against her chest. “Iyaa! It tickles!”

Male audience and fan boys nosebled. “SHAMISEN! WE LOVE YOU!”

--“PHOTON LANCER PHALANX SHIFT.”--

Fate Testarossa killed male audience and fan boys with Bardiche Assault.

Chrono stepped away from Fate in fear. The Ace shrugged and chuckled. “I guess I still haven’t lost the touch yet…” she muttered.

Someone ought to kill that cat fast...

Okay, that was a bit too much

Okay, Shami has to be THE most perverted cat I know of.

[Chaos2Frozen]

Originally Posted by USB500

YES! VERY MUCH SO! MORE PLEASE!!! !

Originally Posted by Fuyu no Sora

You are evil. But it's not for nothing that your title is "Sith Lord" XD!!!

And yep! Interested person here

Thanks, though the response seems kinda light though

People don't like Lindy?

Originally Posted by Reiji Tabibito

Okay, that's either a reference to Nagasarete Airantou or one of those Gundam eps (almost all series have @ least one) where some chars are stranded.

Close enough, though I had base this teaser from Code Geass

The keyword is in the title....

I figure that I might not get a lone Island Syndrome episode from StrikerS, so why not make one of my own

EDIT:

I just realized all the grammar and missing words , this is what happens when you try to type something in 5 mins

[LoweGear]

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Now THAT was Kha's own words

I got to get back to work now, but I'll leave you all with this little teaser of my next work... SHould i ever complete this current one

I don't think anybody has thought of writing this pairing yet though , It's a shame because it's one of the few CANON pairings in the series

Spoiler for An Island of 'SUNRISE' (Guess the pun :p):

Surveying the surrounding area, the young boy with dark hair and blue eyes concluded that their current location shouldn’t be too far from their training zone. The explosion must have blown into the water and the tide probably washed them to a near-by island.

The sound of a waterfall reached his ears and the sight of fruits in the tree above caught his attention. The large number of birds flying above the water indicates that fish was abundant.

“Looks like we haven’t been flying off too far… We have fresh water and food so we should last a few days till they find us…”

Turning away, the young boy sigh at the view before him, “Unfortunately, our biggest problem is you…”

“WHAT DO YOU MEAN BY THAT?!” Yelled the little girl with long green hair.

“Ah nothing nothing… Other than it’s completely your fault that we’re in this mess” He mumbled.

“ How was I to know that ‘inflammable’ means ‘flammable’?!”

“Lindy, both me and Leti yelled at you three times… But that’s not the point, you shouldn't be firing that big of a cannon-spell near your allies to begin with….”

“WAAH! Clyde-kun is so mean!!!”

“Sigh…”


--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------


Lieutenant Leti Louwan pace around the control room nervously.

Sitting across her, was a young man with two kittens on his lap, “Who you PLEASE calm down?”

“HOW CAN I?! You saw how big that explosion was?!”

“Clyde’s with her, I’m sure they’ll be fine, I trained him myself!”

“That’s what I’m most afraid of…”

“Huh?”

“Look, the point is that you’re too lax about this, Gil !”

“And you’re too up-tight Leti…” Gil smirked. “You’ll never get married at this rate…”

“Shut up!”

... Interested?

VERY MUCH PLEASE

So this is the story of how Lindy and Clyde came together huh? And I wonder what Graham has been teaching Clyde that makes Leti so nervous

Nighty would be SO OVER this

Originally Posted by USB500

Spoiler for are you sure:

Spoiler for here you go:

Spoiler for well, here it is:

“We are back with this exclusive report on Time-Space Administrative Bureau’s Open Day,” a news reporter spoke to the camera as she stood in front of the audience hall. “We have confirmed reports from TSAB officers that 75 percents of audience have to be admitted to hospital due to massive haemorrhage after attending stage play conducted by Lost Property Riot Force 6.”

“This is madness!” one audience screamed as he grabbed the camera. “The stage play is total success! It is sheer madness we keep coming for more!” Then the audience collapsed on the floor and picked up by medical officers.

As the cameraman turned around to record the activity, one group of fan boys cheered “SHAMAL ROCKS!” and flagged a banner with Shamal’s name painted on it. Then a flock of fan girls squealed in excitement and shouted Chrono’s name aloud before fan boys pointed to them in protest. Fan girls stood on their ground and demanded fan boys to die. Fan boys died, revived and continued their heated argument with fan girls.

“As you can see,” the female reporter continued. “The situation here almost goes out of control, and it could have been worse if it isn’t for the Anti-Riot Force’s work in keeping everything under control.”

Again, the cameraman turned around to record an ongoing war between ARF personnel and fan people, the latter proceeded to toss objects at the law-enforcers. The cameraman and the reporter had to dodge incoming projectiles when the fan people missed their intended targets.

“We have to leave before the war enrages!” the cameraman shouted.

“I have to agree! Come on!” Nevertheless the reporter still had the time to finish her field report, dodging projectiles at the same time. “We’ll be back with more updates on TSAB Open Day! Inter-Dimensional News Network, this is Tamura Mizuki!”

Spoiler for wait! there's more!:

The hall was jammed with visitors as it usually was for the past two days. This time, the numbers of the audience increased as news circulating Riot Force 6’s stage play were spread. Because of this, the building was now overcrowded, forcing TSAB personnel to set up big screen outside the facility to accommodate the audience.

Shamal and Shamisen stepped out. In an instant audience inside and outside the hall howled in approval at them and applauded. Bashfully Shamal thanked them before she shrieked when Shamisen grabbed her tail.

“SHAMISEN STRIKES AGAIN!!!!!” male audience screamed and bled their nose. “WE SO APPROVE OF TAIL-GRABBING ACTION! RAWR!”

“Mou, Shamisen, stop it!” Shamal moaned and caught the cat. “You’re embarrassing me in front of the people! Behave yourself!” Shamisen just meowed and nudged its head against her chest. “Iyaa! It tickles!”

Male audience and fan boys nosebled. “SHAMISEN! WE LOVE YOU!”

--“PHOTON LANCER PHALANX SHIFT.”--

Fate Testarossa killed male audience and fan boys with Bardiche Assault.

Chrono stepped away from Fate in fear. The Ace shrugged and chuckled. “I guess I still haven’t lost the touch yet…” she muttered.

Someone ought to kill that cat fast...

Okay, that was a bit too much

Shamal and Shamisen should be a staple in ANY play Shamisen ROCKS!

*evades Photon Lancers*

There is something awesome about a play that requires its own Riot Police

[Kha]

(peaks in cautiously)

Good I'm not getting lynched.

And the Bluecheesium has grown here too. Welcome Ryuyu, welcome to my second abode... Na, its not just me, its also to place of worship of the great Satashi-sama.

Originally Posted by Satashi

Fanfiction.net is being a b#*%h so I'm going to post Reminisce VII here. Enjoy the epilogue!!

Spoiler for Reminisce Chapter VII:

I couldn't help but smile as the church bells rang, signaling the end of the wedding. Several people were clapping and cheering and I couldn't be more proud than I am right now. It had taken eight years but the day was finally here, everyone gathered in the remote church on the countryside of Midchilda. Everyone in our lives were here, including a few people that I had never met before. I was sure I would be shaking a lot of hands at the reception. By pairs of two, the people started walking back down the isle to finish the ceremony and I caught the eyes of Subaru and Tia, both of which looked absolutely gorgeous in their wedding gowns. Signum, dressed in a tuxedo, took my arm and we walked down the isle as well, leaving only the two blushing brides at the alter before they too started walking, getting covered in rice thrown at them. Once outside I sighed out and fanned myself to try and cool off. Yuuno and Hayate were laughing, having gotten caught with a little rice on themselves as well. Although I wasn't sure at first, the two seemed to be getting along rather happily and there were rumors that Hayate was pregnant, although I was sure I'd be the first to know if it were true. Finally the two brides made it to the hallway and yelled with joy, hugging each other tightly while we applauded. I was so proud of them, more than I could ever say.

6th Mobile Division VII
By: Satashi

“Oh, we have to throw the bouquets!” Subaru realized once everyone was out of the church and gathered in the grassy yard outside to talk and snack on things. “Everyone gather around, we're going to throw them!” Laughing out, she grinned at all the friends she made over the past eight years of her life. “Ready, Tia?”

“Ready!” The girl smiled brightly at her and both stood next to each other before tossing their flowers over their heads. Several girls cried out when Tia's bundle landed somewhere in the middle of them, but Subaru's flew over their heads. Turning around, the brides looked to see who caught them and were surprised to see Caro looking at it with a blushing face. Across from them, Lutecia felt something land on her head and reached up to take it off, realizing that Subaru had just made it land on her. “Hahahaha!” Tia laughed merrily as both girls turned to look over at Elio.

The red head flushed instantly, reaching back to scratch the back of his neck. A long ponytail hung down his back now and his body had grown to a little over six feet tall, towering the shorter girls by a clear foot. “What now, Elio!?” Yuuno called over to him with a smirk.

“Its okay,” Caro closed one eye and gave a peace sign, grabbing Elio's arm with her free hand. “My tribe practices Polygamy!” Her hair fell behind her like a waterfall, pulled into a single bunch by a white scrunchie and mimicking Nanoha's old lopsided ponytail.

“Mine too!” Lutecia added in, taking Elio's other arm and smiling up at him. “So we'll share him!” Her hair was also long still, divided into three parts. The main section fell behind her casually while her bangs each held a purple ribbon in them, over her shoulders.

Chrono shook his head. “That's going to be one hell of a honeymoon.”

Nanoha covered her laugh, also giving her head a small shake while watching her officially adopted daughter stand on her tip toes to kiss Elio's cheek at the same time Lutecia did. “I swear, those three...” Looking over the hills she took a deep breath and started walking to the side, allowing her hair to bellow out into the wind. A single black ribbon kept it together near the tip, which went to her knees. “Hayate, I'm going to talk to Fate for a little bit, I'll be back shortly.”

“Okay!” Hayate waved at her.

Walking from around the church building she made her way over to the well kept military grave yard behind it and walked silently over to a polished marble head stone. The girl knelt down slowly, being careful of her frilly pink dress, and smiled fondly. “Hey, Fate,” She began. Her eyes read the stone out of habit, despite knowing what it said. “Sorry I havn't come by lately, things have been really hectic. As you could probably guess, the wedding just ended. Subaru and Tia are officially married now, can you believe it? Sometimes it's hard to look back and compare them to the fumbling blushing girls we both knew, huh? Those were the days...” A small tear came to her eyes but she wiped it away before it could smear her makeup. “I'm still keeping my apartment clean, you would be proud. I even put my dirty clothes in the basket and straighten my shoes at the door... I still miss you, though I'm happy so don't worry. Sometimes it gets hard, though, like today. This is where I wanted to marry you at actually. Caro was going to be our flower girl, and Elio was the ring bearer. I had my dress picked out and everything...A shame it couldn't ever happen. But today is a happy day, so I won't spoil it by talking about that. I have some news for you: A new group of forward candidates are coming to section six in a few weeks. This will be my third set so far, but none of them will ever be as close as the first. Subaru is now working for me directly, as a sub-instructor. Can you believe it? Haha, wow. Subaru, the clumsy girl who was outstandingly loud and outspoken actually is a great teacher. I'm amazed. Tia? She's an enforcer now. She's in your office and has all of your bad habits, including drinking too much coffee”

Nanoha giggled to herself. “A real work-a-holic that one. She stayed with section six instead of going into the air forces like she had planned, probably because Subaru is staying here as well. Elio has come a long way since we last talked as well. That boy grew up so strong! He's now classified as a rare ability user because of his ability to form magical armor. He's currently a triple A ranked mage in his standard stance, and is S-ranked with his armor on. Speaking of, the love triangle has only gotten better. Caro-chan and Lutecia-chan are even closer than we are, and both are okay with sharing Elio between them. At first he was really against the idea but as time went on they talked him into giving it a chance and the three have been dating for almost two years now. Believe it or not, they're the picture perfect couple. They argue, sure, but it's never about anything important.” Putting a finger to her chin she thought about it. “Come to think of it, Caro has been taking after my younger years lately. Elio's neck has been bruised a lot lately and she's not shy about claiming them to be from her kisses. I feel sorry for him if Lutecia is the same way.

“The two Girls have really grown up. Caro is now Triple-A and working as a wildlife preservationist, protecting animals and the like from harm and helping stop natural disasters from hurting the landscape. She works out of section six and helps us with Public Safety as well. Her fourth dragon summon is lightning fast so she can get to places even before our best jets. Just between you and me, she can fly circles around me blindfolded. Lutecia is an Enforcer now as well, working under Tia. She mainly handles cases for the local police that involve any type of mage interference. She's thinking about going into special investigations and has spending a lot of time with Hayate lately. Oh! Hayate! Guess what? Her and Yuuno are getting closer and closer, I even caught them kissing! It was so cute, I wish you could have seen it!”

Hearing several cheers behind her, Nanoha glanced over her shoulder before turning back to the stone. “Sounds like they're having fun, I better get back to it before too many people realize I'm gone. I'll come visit again so rest well, okay?” Reaching up, she kissed two fingers on her left hand before placing them on the stone above the carved name. The sun reflected on the diamond ring on her hand brightly, as if Fate was smiling at her from the heavens. “I love you, sweetheart. I'll keep on living my life happily thanks to you, and you'll always be in my heart.” With that being said she stood up and walked back over to the reception area, happily waving to her friends. 'There is nothing greater than the will to live happily. I learned that from you, Fate, and I will continue to live... For both of us. '

YuunoXHayate is a Nighty-class crack pairing! Never anticipated it, and its quite fun to think about. Yuuno really likes powerful girls, ne? But I like the way to made things up. The emo and emotions went on nicely, and everything tied up well. But it seems a little short. And later, I was proved correct...

Originally Posted by Satashi

Okay fine, fine. It was an alternate ending :P

The real Chapter VII was posted on FF.N

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3585048/7/

PLOT DEVICE SAVES THE DAY!!!

I knew Fate was alive! It's marvelous what COURAGE can do for you!!!

And for the rest of the chap I went Awww... at the Lulu-Caro alliance. Erio's fanonically a pimp since he pulled a fast one, literally, and I'm glad that it's getting used. I wonder how Vivio fits into the cog of things? So far canon is hinting at ErioCaro being the "parents" here; under your skillful hands, what would you do?

And so are you going to post the full alternative ending? And kudos for being the first I know to do 2 endings in the same fic! Pull it off nicely, and you'll set a precedent like never before!

How the heck did I start reading Reminescence? The funny thing was, I enjoyed it (except the NxF bits, but that's expected). This AU isn't so AU that I can't relate to it; its a very believable self-appointed trajectory of how things could be with an alternative destiny

And lastly I'm dreadfully sorrie for all those edited extra words. I really thought they were harmless. I'm honored enough as it is to have been mentioned and then cited as a friend... In light of what I've done... I'm... speechless... Sorry...

I was inspired enough to make you an "Opening Theme" ficlet for Reminescence, and its a work in progress. But to make up for my very bad spat of tactlessness, I'd do one for "Redemption" as well, though I might need a little more info like:

which are the returning cast,
what's the time skip length,
how many villains so that I can insert the proper number of enemy "silhouettes" you see in anime openings

I had "Secret Ambition" to be the first "6th Div" fic's Opening, and for Reminecence I was waiting for the new StrikerS OP "Marvellous Wonders" to be released before making my move, but the rough scenes have been planned. I choose "Will" from Melody of Oblivion to be Redemption's OP.

And example of what I've done for another fic is here.

I hope you like the idea. I'll post both tokens once I'm done with them. There's no agenda here, just an inspired fan writing...

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Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Now THAT was Kha's own words

I got to get back to work now, but I'll leave you all with this little teaser of my next work... SHould i ever complete this current one

I don't think anybody has thought of writing this pairing yet though , It's a shame because it's one of the few CANON pairings in the series

Spoiler for An Island of 'SUNRISE' (Guess the pun :p):

Surveying the surrounding area, the young boy with dark hair and blue eyes concluded that their current location shouldn’t be too far from their training zone. The explosion must have blown into the water and the tide probably washed them to a near-by island.

The sound of a waterfall reached his ears and the sight of fruits in the tree above caught his attention. The large number of birds flying above the water indicates that fish was abundant.

“Looks like we haven’t been flying off too far… We have fresh water and food so we should last a few days till they find us…”

Turning away, the young boy sigh at the view before him, “Unfortunately, our biggest problem is you…”

“WHAT DO YOU MEAN BY THAT?!” Yelled the little girl with long green hair.

“Ah nothing nothing… Other than it’s completely your fault that we’re in this mess” He mumbled.

“ How was I to know that ‘inflammable’ means ‘flammable’?!”

“Lindy, both me and Leti yelled at you three times… But that’s not the point, you shouldn't be firing that big of a cannon-spell near your allies to begin with….”

“WAAH! Clyde-kun is so mean!!!”

“Sigh…”


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Lieutenant Leti Louwan pace around the control room nervously.

Sitting across her, was a young man with two kittens on his lap, “Who you PLEASE calm down?”

“HOW CAN I?! You saw how big that explosion was?!”

“Clyde’s with her, I’m sure they’ll be fine, I trained him myself!”

“That’s what I’m most afraid of…”

“Huh?”

“Look, the point is that you’re too lax about this, Gil !”

“And you’re too up-tight Leti…” Gil smirked. “You’ll never get married at this rate…”

“Shut up!”

... Interested?

What did I say?

Lonely Island Syndrome FTW!!! And NIGHTY is going to go crazy over this. (Not to mention shed hotblooded tears of gratitude.) der Kleriker Approved! ;D

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Originally Posted by USB500

Spoiler for are you sure:

Spoiler for here you go:

Spoiler for well, here it is:

“We are back with this exclusive report on Time-Space Administrative Bureau’s Open Day,” a news reporter spoke to the camera as she stood in front of the audience hall. “We have confirmed reports from TSAB officers that 75 percents of audience have to be admitted to hospital due to massive haemorrhage after attending stage play conducted by Lost Property Riot Force 6.”

“This is madness!” one audience screamed as he grabbed the camera. “The stage play is total success! It is sheer madness we keep coming for more!” Then the audience collapsed on the floor and picked up by medical officers.

As the cameraman turned around to record the activity, one group of fan boys cheered “SHAMAL ROCKS!” and flagged a banner with Shamal’s name painted on it. Then a flock of fan girls squealed in excitement and shouted Chrono’s name aloud before fan boys pointed to them in protest. Fan girls stood on their ground and demanded fan boys to die. Fan boys died, revived and continued their heated argument with fan girls.

“As you can see,” the female reporter continued. “The situation here almost goes out of control, and it could have been worse if it isn’t for the Anti-Riot Force’s work in keeping everything under control.”

Again, the cameraman turned around to record an ongoing war between ARF personnel and fan people, the latter proceeded to toss objects at the law-enforcers. The cameraman and the reporter had to dodge incoming projectiles when the fan people missed their intended targets.

“We have to leave before the war enrages!” the cameraman shouted.

“I have to agree! Come on!” Nevertheless the reporter still had the time to finish her field report, dodging projectiles at the same time. “We’ll be back with more updates on TSAB Open Day! Inter-Dimensional News Network, this is Tamura Mizuki!”

Spoiler for wait! there's more!:

The hall was jammed with visitors as it usually was for the past two days. This time, the numbers of the audience increased as news circulating Riot Force 6’s stage play were spread. Because of this, the building was now overcrowded, forcing TSAB personnel to set up big screen outside the facility to accommodate the audience.

Shamal and Shamisen stepped out. In an instant audience inside and outside the hall howled in approval at them and applauded. Bashfully Shamal thanked them before she shrieked when Shamisen grabbed her tail.

“SHAMISEN STRIKES AGAIN!!!!!” male audience screamed and bled their nose. “WE SO APPROVE OF TAIL-GRABBING ACTION! RAWR!”

“Mou, Shamisen, stop it!” Shamal moaned and caught the cat. “You’re embarrassing me in front of the people! Behave yourself!” Shamisen just meowed and nudged its head against her chest. “Iyaa! It tickles!”

Male audience and fan boys nosebled.

Someone ought to kill that cat fast...

Okay, that was a bit too much

I guess we're used to it. MOAR!!!

[Nightengale]

Hmm... I originally wanted to ask permission from Satashi to write a Fate-POV short story on her moments before her death as she stood and lied amidst the burning flames sparking her skin that reminded her of her old tortures, and her earliest beginning with Nanoha, as she "reminisced" her past, her beginnings, her feelings towards Nanoha, her acceptance of death, but seeing this new ending, I'm not so sure now.

On the Lone Island/Sunrise Island... needless to say...



You've just boosted up my desire to write more of the "MSCG : AdmiralS" which in now in my planning stage... maybe we can collaberate on something when the time is right?

Hmm... how about when Clyde and Lindy first met? SONIC GROPEMOVE?

[Fuyu no Sora]

Originally Posted by Kha

(peaks in cautiously)

Good I'm not getting lynched.

And the Bluecheesium has grown here too. Welcome Ryuyu, welcome to my second abode... Na, its not just me, its also to place of worship of the great Satashi-sama.
YuunoXHayate is a Nighty-class crack pairing! Never anticipated it, and its quite fun to think about. Yuuno really likes powerful girls, ne? But I like the way to made things up. The emo and emotions went on nicely, and everything tied up well. But it seems a little short. And later, I was proved correct...PLOT DEVICE SAVES THE DAY!!!

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I guess we're used to it. MOAR!!!

1. Why? Should we lynch you?

2. You know.........His name is Ryuya <-------- meet the letter 'A' Kha
Yeah, but you're the one who rules over the OC Thread

3. I wished to see more emo ><

4. I second Kha: USB, we want more Cinderella!

[USB500]

Originally Posted by Reiji Tabibito

Okay, Shami has to be THE most perverted cat I know of.

Read the final chapter of Sleeping Lyrical.

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Originally Posted by LoweGear

Shamal and Shamisen should be a staple in ANY play Shamisen ROCKS!

*evades Photon Lancers*

There is something awesome about a play that requires its own Riot Police

And did you notice that both their names begin with "Sham"?

Well, the Riot Police is going to have hard days dealing berserk people throughout the play

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Originally Posted by Kha

I guess we're used to it. MOAR!!!

Originally Posted by Fuyu no Sora

4. I second Kha: USB, we want more Cinderella!

[Fuyu no Sora]

Satashi-san, I took a peek in FF.net and apparently everyone wants to see emo Nanoha

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by BPHaru

That don't solves anything, Fate/yuuno is even worst than Nanoha/Yuuno, and if you mix the 3 It’s doubly worst.

You surely touched them, it was very well written (and the last part of chapter 6 was wonderful), you have skills writing this kind of fic. But I think the problems that “drama -> sad end” isn’t suitable for this fic, and not satisfactory most times, “drama- sadness-twist -> happy end” would be the best in my opinion, it’s my favorite kind of plot.

The last chapter was good, I liked it a lot, and I really enjoyed the Fate-Nanoha moments, they were so cute, your bath scenes are the bests ^^, but I was expecting less of it (I’m not rejecting the NxF moments, they never are too much C_C), and a bit more from the dramatic part, it seems a bit rushed for me, as Nanoha was shocked and she awaked knowing Fate was alive, we didn’t see an emo-Nanoha at all. I think this chapter was actually “drama -> happy end”, because the twist was in the prolog (I don’t like that idea at all), and I didn’t fell too much sadness in the characters. Maybe it would be better to skip the prolog and tell the history of how Fate escaped after she meets again with Nanoha, using a flashback or directly putting Fate-chan explaining what occurred in her own words.

And a irrelevant thought about the wedding:
I prefer both Fate and Nanoha to use a wedding dress, it’s always cuter this way. If Nanoha likes Fate as she is, and as a girl, I don’t know why she would prefer to marry her dressed as a man, isn’t like she’s regretting marrying a female.

Saludos, Haru

The Yuuno/Fate/Nanoha thing was a joke.

One thing about same sex couples is there isn't a "one man one woman" situation. Either one can be their own sex or if they want, immitate the other sex. One case in point is Nagisa and Honoka from Pretty Cure. Nagisa is a tomboy, never wears skirts or dresses (besides school uniform) and in general acts like a boy. When I put the two together I can see Nagisa as a crossdresser not because she wants to 'be a boy' but more because 'it's her style'.

To relate this to Nanoha, I don't see either girl as being tomboyish, nor do I see them 'wanting to immitate a male' in any way. Although, I CAN picture Fate in more masculine clothing: Jeans, baggy shirt, sneakers. and Nanoha in more feminine clothing: Dresses, skirts, mini shorts, ect. I can picture Nanoha liking Fate cross dressing ( like for real, not just 'slightly mascuine clothes') just for the cuteness factor. Just as my Fate likes Nanoha in dresses and cute glasses, Nanoha can like Fate in a tuxedo. Once again, not because it reminds her more of a man, but because she would find it really attractive on her.

Afterall, if there was no such thing as women looking good in more masculine clothing, there wouldn't be multi-billian dollar companies making 'male' clothing to fit the female body. Just because one dresses in clothes leaning more to the other gender doesn't imply anything on thier preferances or secret preferances. It's just what they want to wear. So I don't think her asking Fate to wear a tux is because she wants to be with a more manly lover, but because she, simply, wants Fate to wear a tux.

Originally Posted by Fuyu no Sora

Like Haru stated above, it's great and very well written, but it doesn't fit this story. Sorry Satashi-san. (Original/Alternate Ending I mean)

I must once again agree with Haru in the emo Nanoha part. I was really looking forwards to that and I have conflicting opinions on this (Ryu-kun says it's okay the way it is). It would've been interesting to see that aspect of Nanoha, but what's done is done and I really like the chapter the way it is ^^ (although like I mentioned, I would've liked to see an emo Nanoha.)

I'm not complaining and I really think both endings are great.

So, now that you've finished the second book will you take a break?

The 'emo Nanoha' part was originally going to be wrote, and it had a start but after getting into it a little bit I was extremly dissapointed in it. Just as I went back and re-worked one of my chapters in another fic, I scrapped it and went more to a "resolve everything" appraoch and made Nanoha more "freaking out/stresful" after waking than sulking.

Nanoha's personality, as Jena-su stated, is more of a "Never give up!" and being from my story, after skeith, would only be more that way. After saying her 'goodbyes' to everyone and then leaving on a mission, only to succeed and be sent off to survive by being lied to and seeing your lover 'die'....anyone can snap. I feel as if Nanoha passing out and going into shock would be the thing she's most likely to do. As for beign Emo, I can't really see it. I saw her as more of a "What's going on? This can't be happening! Why is she gone? Why should I survive when she dies? Why am I still living?' thought for the first little bit and then 'coming to her sences.' and demanding that Fate is still alive, and she will find her.

Besides, you really see her love show when she has to be sedated by Shamal after 'waking up' from her shock. If fate was, indeed, dead, then I will fully agree for her to cry and be sad for a long time, hugging the bear she gave Fate and gazing out the window sadly. I don't think she would have a mental breakdown from it though ( shock doesn't count, you won't understand this untill you've experianced it first hand).

That's my thinking. I'm sorry if you didn't like it, but I'm proud of the endings ^^ I hope my future works will make up for it if you don't agree.

As for taking a break, I am and I'm not. Currently I've already started on "6th division: Side stories" which will be kind of like SNL stories ( in fact they may be posted under it). These do not interfear with the plot in any way, but simply give a deeper look in their lives. What is everyone's normal day like? What do they do to have fun? Why is everyone there so close? Bascially it's everything that goes on in their lives when they are not progressing the storyline.

Teasers include:

Spoiler for real spoiler for what will be in 6th side stories:

Fate's normal work day
Elio revealing his skills as a bartender
Caro and Lutecia's budding friendship
Subaru and Tia's progressing relationship

Redemption is still in story board only mode right now. I don't even have the main thing set up yet. I was originally going to focus it on Yuuno defecting but "defecting" has been ran into the ground in my stories.

Originally Posted by Kha

(peaks in cautiously)

Good I'm not getting lynched.

And the Bluecheesium has grown here too. Welcome Ryuyu, welcome to my second abode... Na, its not just me, its also to place of worship of the great Satashi-sama.
YuunoXHayate is a Nighty-class crack pairing! Never anticipated it, and its quite fun to think about. Yuuno really likes powerful girls, ne? But I like the way to made things up. The emo and emotions went on nicely, and everything tied up well. But it seems a little short. And later, I was proved correct...PLOT DEVICE SAVES THE DAY!!!

I knew Fate was alive! It's marvelous what COURAGE can do for you!!!

And for the rest of the chap I went Awww... at the Lulu-Caro alliance. Erio's fanonically a pimp since he pulled a fast one, literally, and I'm glad that it's getting used. I wonder how Vivio fits into the cog of things? So far canon is hinting at ErioCaro being the "parents" here; under your skillful hands, what would you do?

And so are you going to post the full alternative ending? And kudos for being the first I know to do 2 endings in the same fic! Pull it off nicely, and you'll set a precedent like never before!

How the heck did I start reading Reminescence? The funny thing was, I enjoyed it (except the NxF bits, but that's expected). This AU isn't so AU that I can't relate to it; its a very believable self-appointed trajectory of how things could be with an alternative destiny

And lastly I'm dreadfully sorrie for all those edited extra words. I really thought they were harmless. I'm honored enough as it is to have been mentioned and then cited as a friend... In light of what I've done... I'm... speechless... Sorry...

I was inspired enough to make you an "Opening Theme" ficlet for Reminescence, and its a work in progress. But to make up for my very bad spat of tactlessness, I'd do one for "Redemption" as well, though I might need a little more info like:

which are the returning cast,
what's the time skip length,
how many villains so that I can insert the proper number of enemy "silhouettes" you see in anime openings

I had "Secret Ambition" to be the first "6th Div" fic's Opening, and for Reminecence I was waiting for the new StrikerS OP "Marvellous Wonders" to be released before making my move, but the rough scenes have been planned. I choose "Will" from Melody of Oblivion to be Redemption's OP.

And example of what I've done for another fic is here.

I hope you like the idea. I'll post both tokens once I'm done with them. There's no agenda here, just an inspired fan writing...

Hehe, Yuunox Hayate technically started in Rebirth, when Fate proposed to Nanoha, he was dancing with her. Also, Hayate got him to move into section six as well, giving him a room. (floor five, across from Caro's room and to the left of Subaru/Tia's room).

I don't know much about Vivio, so she probably won't be making an apperance in this story. Also Elio/Caro/Lutecia have their hands full enough trying to figure out their three-way relationship. They are still young and so far, only Lutecia knows what a relationship is. Caro is learning what her feeligns are but Elio is still blisfully un aware. (but puberty is a beeyatch, and it plays a part in Redemption. - "Fate-san? what's sex?" - )

I'm shocked you read Reminisce and actually followed along with it without knowing much about Rebirth. @_@ But Caro/Lutecia/Elio were the main focus here so I guess it wasn't THAT bad on you. I'm in no way ever going to ask you to like Nanoha/Fate but I'm happy you got around it in this fic. If you think you can, give it a shot with a grain of salt. I'd like it if you could truely enjoy this ficcy since you're mentioned in it :P But then again, if you don't want to, then that's cool too hehe. I'm not one to push my beleifes on people ( and me being neutral is a hard beleife to ask ANYONE to take) And about those edited extra words, don't worry about them ^^.

An opening sequence? @_@ Wow, I'd be honored if you did so. Very much so. Unfortunetly Redemption is still a cloudy fog right now so I can't offer any information. Reminisce's storyline was made up as I wrote chapter 1, and beleive it or not, I pulled the whole "Base it around Caro/Elio/Lutecia" out of the blue while writing their first fight. After that it was fly-as-you-go. Quite literally. I wrote it chapter by chapter with no final plot in mind lol I just let the characters go where they wanted to, and they lead me here :P So anyway, Redemption is on hold for now untill I can figure it all out.

.........that was long.......sorry for the crowded space T_T

[Chaos2Frozen]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

VERY MUCH PLEASE

So this is the story of how Lindy and Clyde came together huh? And I wonder what Graham has been teaching Clyde that makes Leti so nervous

Nighty would be SO OVER this

Of course not

This is the part of the story where the magic first started I don't intend to make them fall head-over-heeds in love just yet

I mean, the journey's more interesting than the destination right? Why would I end it so soon

(Though I haven't thought of how to continue from there yet )

P.S - As for what Graham taught him... I think we all know the truth by now...

Originally Posted by Kha

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What did I say?

Lonely Island Syndrome FTW!!! And NIGHTY is going to go crazy over this. (Not to mention shed hotblooded tears of gratitude.) der Kleriker Approved! ;D

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1, You convinced people that I'm a being of pure evil

2, Now THIS was the type of response I had predicted

Originally Posted by Nightengale

On the Lone Island/Sunrise Island... needless to say...



You've just boosted up my desire to write more of the "MSCG : AdmiralS" which in now in my planning stage... maybe we can collaberate on something when the time is right?

Hmm... how about when Clyde and Lindy first met? SONIC GROPEMOVE?

I've set Clyde to be an exact carbon-copy of Chrono

Lindy would be... Well, you've seen it

Leti would be the twin-tailed, purple haired, over-protective Kagami of TSAB

Gil... What do you think he should be?

As for how they first met... I'm thinking....

Spoiler for Trial sample 1:

Gil: "Now that you've gotten your promotion, you'll be assigned to your own squad."

Clyde: "As expected."

Gil: "Most of them are well trained and well disciplined soldiers..."

Clyde () : "Most?"

Gil: "Well, there is one...."

Clyde: "Huh?"

*They opened the door that leads to the training room. Inside lies a pile of unconcious bodies of grown men. Standing beside them was this little girl with green hair and yellow 'fairy' wings, her face is red and her eyes are teary.

Another purple haired girl was hard pressed trying to hold her back.*

"THERE'S NOTHING WRONG WITH SUGAR IN GREEN TEA! YOU MEANIES TAKE THAT BACK!!!!"

"Lindy they're already out cold!!"

Clyde: ""

Gil pat the young boy on the shoulder, " We're counting on you, Enforcer Haralown...."

Again, this was written in 5 mins

[Fuyu no Sora]

I won't quote your post Satashi-san (length), sorry but I'll say this: I never said I disliked the ending nor the chapter nor anything else. I really like it the way it is (someone managed to convince me) and I think the chapter is really sweet ^^. I would've liked to see emo Nanoha, but as you yourself stated, that doesn't fit her personality. I think you did things exactly the way they should've been done and I personally approve of the endings. The Alternate one is really good, just a bit too sad for me to handle. I really like Nanoha and Fate together and, because of the way you portray their love, I think it would be extremely cruel to rip one away from the other.

OK.............not sure if I managed to explain myself well, but if I didn't sorry in advance

[Nightengale]

Okay, an actual "longer" preview for Fated Souls. Heck, I may even post this in parts here, and put it at FF.net once I finished it.

Spoiler for Fated Souls : Part I:

On that day, amidst the silver wing corridors that are all but distinctive, below the dim light of a small laboratory room, void and empty of anything, bar 2 people, like a mirror of light and darkness, an unique contrast of 2 wretched and kindred souls…

That was…their very first beginning, their first meeting, and the very first goodbye…

Little did both of them know then, the destiny that tied them together…

A foolish dream to recreate the past, to live on with the past, a future that chooses to abandon what defines future itself…

Project F…

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A successive sounds of explosions, a muting sound to the ears, as a girl, with golden blonde hair like lightning of the gods, beautiful and mystical, tied to pigtails rushed through a barrage of robotic droids fluently with a sharpening elegance and flowing aggressiveness, she flew down pathways of silver wing corridors, decimating all oppositions in her path, making her way somewhere... as within a small room, filled with several tanks with humanoid female figures afloat within, one man, with a toned purplish hair, and eyes not unlike those of a golden lightning watches calmly at the monitors, all of which were capturing the female mage’s acts live on screens.

“Splendid. What a marvelous sight, of something so beautiful and yet so fiery. I would love to get my hands on her. ” The man, despite looking calm, unnerving, almost as if he didn’t mean what he said, was clearly ecstatic, as none of the young girl escapes his attentive eyes.

Before long, another sound of explosions occurred, mildly shaking the laboratory room, yet he took it to himself like nothing had happened, as he simply looked on, his eyes glued to the screens, like a child to candy.

Perhaps that’s what it was…

“Dr, the TSAB enforcer had already breached the 4th line. At this rate, she’ll discover this room in 5 minutes. It is advisable that we teleport our necessities and move on to Point 17 through Route 58. “

The woman, a rough blonde speaking affluently and calmly, not reflecting the urgency in the words, appeared behind the man. Dressed in a purple/white blouse attire not unlike a professional secretary with a unique tie emblem of the Roman number I, she had a presence of an adult female, as she proceeded to open a terminal screen, inputting several commands.

“Mm… I suppose you’re right. Uno, activate the teleportation device and transfer the vital “materials” to Substitute 7. Get the place up and running within 3 hours after arrival. I should be back by then.”

Jail continued speaking nonchalantly, his eyes still not vied away from the screen as Uno, for once expressed a semblance of minor shock as her eyes slightly widened from his words.

“Dr!”

“I don’t have enough preparations to add this little girl into my collection of subjects for now, but even so, it wouldn’t feel right to me as a scientist if I escape without getting some on-field information on my prospects. You understand, don’t you, Uno?”

The time was ticking furiously as Jail went on with his demeanor, as he spoke to Uno on his intentions.

“Dr! It’s too dangerous! If Dr needs to, I could-Umph!!”

Just so suddenly, without warning or advances, he just closed the distance between their faces, as Jail kissed Uno…hard. Kissing seemed too tame of a word, as Jail pushed his tongue inside, penetrating hers, exchanging their saliva and playing tango with each other’s lips and tongues, mutual violation of lips seemed more appropriate, as Jail gave their kiss one push to the wall, on Uno’s back, as he finally broke their kiss…

Uno tried to stay calm, but her cloudy, dreamy eyes were betraying her as she felt like she was naked in front of Jail, in more ways than one. Jail could only smirk as he licked his lips, savoring the taste of his little Uno.

“Don’t worry, Uno. I’ll be fine… Right now, it’s more important to make sure your sisters who are still asleep make it in one piece… You’re their elder sister, right? Show an example.” Jail continued speaking, this time with a more seductive, dominant tone as he pressed his weight on her against the wall, his nose touching hers, lips only millimeters away, as if enticing her, making her feel hungry for more.

“I…I under..stand, Dr...” Uno’s monotone, cool voice now ragged as she breathed heavily. She quickly readjusted herself, as she proceeded to continue pressing some keys, slowly teleporting away the multiple tanks and capsules away from the room… Just as she was going to press the key that would teleport her away...

“Please…be safe, Jail.” She gave Jail one last show of concern, in a voice that seemed almost unlike hers, soft and meek, almost indistinguishable from her conventional voice.

Jail could only smirk.

“Uno… I haven’t done any medical check-up on you lately, right?”

“That’s alright, Doctor. I am self-capable of-“

“No, no, that’s not what I meant.” Jail sighed, as he gave a sideways glance at Uno, who was also eyeing him a little… He continued speaking as he said in a surprisingly low tone, “Do you mind if I come over tonight?”

Uno blushed furiously as she quickly turned her head away from Jail, hiding her clearly embarrassment, of red. She quickly pressed the key as her figure was shown to slowly dissipate away with the devices…

“I don’t mind…”

A soft answer, as within an instant, the room cleared itself clean, and empty, leaving behind only Jail, as he laughed amusingly, turning off the multiple screens of the young blonde mage as she seemed to have made it closer and closer to his location.

“My creations are perfect indeed… Now, how long more till my cute little prospect arrives?”

He looked at his watch, as it showed the countdown of a minute and a half…

“Looks like I have enough time to play that game....”

Smiling from ear to ear, Jail was high in excitement and anticipation. He was so going to enjoy this, he thought… He had high expectations for that young little budding golden fruit to entertain him…

“Make me entertained, will you?”

Yeah, I like Jail, so I'm writing on him. :3

[Aaron008R]

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Now THAT was Kha's own words

I got to get back to work now, but I'll leave you all with this little teaser of my next work... SHould i ever complete this current one

I don't think anybody has thought of writing this pairing yet though , It's a shame because it's one of the few CANON pairings in the series

Spoiler for An Island of 'SUNRISE' (Guess the pun :p):

Surveying the surrounding area, the young boy with dark hair and blue eyes concluded that their current location shouldn’t be too far from their training zone. The explosion must have blown into the water and the tide probably washed them to a near-by island.

The sound of a waterfall reached his ears and the sight of fruits in the tree above caught his attention. The large number of birds flying above the water indicates that fish was abundant.

“Looks like we haven’t been flying off too far… We have fresh water and food so we should last a few days till they find us…”

Turning away, the young boy sigh at the view before him, “Unfortunately, our biggest problem is you…”

“WHAT DO YOU MEAN BY THAT?!” Yelled the little girl with long green hair.

“Ah nothing nothing… Other than it’s completely your fault that we’re in this mess” He mumbled.

“ How was I to know that ‘inflammable’ means ‘flammable’?!”

“Lindy, both me and Leti yelled at you three times… But that’s not the point, you shouldn't be firing that big of a cannon-spell near your allies to begin with….”

“WAAH! Clyde-kun is so mean!!!”

“Sigh…”


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Lieutenant Leti Louwan pace around the control room nervously.

Sitting across her, was a young man with two kittens on his lap, “Would you PLEASE calm down?”

“HOW CAN I?! You saw how big that explosion was?!”

“Clyde’s with her, I’m sure they’ll be fine, I trained him myself!”

“That’s what I’m most afraid of…”

“Huh?”

“Look, the point is that you’re too lax about this, Gil !”

“And you’re too up-tight Leti…” Gil smirked. “You’ll never get married at this rate…”

“Shut up!”

... Interested?

VERY INTERESTED!!!
This is great! A good chance to do some exploration of the former top of the line mages.

And I believe you just completely made Nightengale's day.

Originally Posted by USB500

Spoiler for are you sure:

Spoiler for here you go:

Spoiler for well, here it is:

“We are back with this exclusive report on Time-Space Administrative Bureau’s Open Day,” a news reporter spoke to the camera as she stood in front of the audience hall. “We have confirmed reports from TSAB officers that 75 percents of audience have to be admitted to hospital due to massive haemorrhage after attending stage play conducted by Lost Property Riot Force 6.”

“This is madness!” one audience screamed as he grabbed the camera. “The stage play is total success! It is sheer madness we keep coming for more!” Then the audience collapsed on the floor and picked up by medical officers.

As the cameraman turned around to record the activity, one group of fan boys cheered “SHAMAL ROCKS!” and flagged a banner with Shamal’s name painted on it. Then a flock of fan girls squealed in excitement and shouted Chrono’s name aloud before fan boys pointed to them in protest. Fan girls stood on their ground and demanded fan boys to die. Fan boys died, revived and continued their heated argument with fan girls.

“As you can see,” the female reporter continued. “The situation here almost goes out of control, and it could have been worse if it isn’t for the Anti-Riot Force’s work in keeping everything under control.”

Again, the cameraman turned around to record an ongoing war between ARF personnel and fan people, the latter proceeded to toss objects at the law-enforcers. The cameraman and the reporter had to dodge incoming projectiles when the fan people missed their intended targets.

“We have to leave before the war enrages!” the cameraman shouted.

“I have to agree! Come on!” Nevertheless the reporter still had the time to finish her field report, dodging projectiles at the same time. “We’ll be back with more updates on TSAB Open Day! Inter-Dimensional News Network, this is Tamura Mizuki!”

Spoiler for wait! there's more!:

The hall was jammed with visitors as it usually was for the past two days. This time, the numbers of the audience increased as news circulating Riot Force 6’s stage play were spread. Because of this, the building was now overcrowded, forcing TSAB personnel to set up big screen outside the facility to accommodate the audience.

Shamal and Shamisen stepped out. In an instant audience inside and outside the hall howled in approval at them and applauded. Bashfully Shamal thanked them before she shrieked when Shamisen grabbed her tail.

“SHAMISEN STRIKES AGAIN!!!!!” male audience screamed and bled their nose. “WE SO APPROVE OF TAIL-GRABBING ACTION! RAWR!”

“Mou, Shamisen, stop it!” Shamal moaned and caught the cat. “You’re embarrassing me in front of the people! Behave yourself!” Shamisen just meowed and nudged its head against her chest. “Iyaa! It tickles!”

Male audience and fan boys nosebled. “SHAMISEN! WE LOVE YOU!”

--“PHOTON LANCER PHALANX SHIFT.”--

Fate Testarossa killed male audience and fan boys with Bardiche Assault.

Chrono stepped away from Fate in fear. The Ace shrugged and chuckled. “I guess I still haven’t lost the touch yet…” she muttered.

Someone ought to kill that cat fast...

Okay, that was a bit too much

That's alright.
Tamura Mizuki? HAHAH! I can't believe nobody seems to be reacting to this VA in-joke. That was clever.

By the way, since when did Shamisen ever get THAT perverted?

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

I've set Clyde to be an exact carbon-copy of Chrono

Fits.

Lindy would be... Well, you've seen it

Fits.

Leti would be the twin-tailed, purple haired, over-protective Kagami of TSAB

Tsundere/Tsukkomi? Fits!

Gil... What do you think he should be?

You should ask Nightengale for that.

As for how they first met... I'm thinking....

Spoiler for Trial sample 1:

Gil: "Now that you've gotten your promotion, you'll be assigned to your own squad."

Clyde: "As expected."

Gil: "Most of them are well trained and well disciplined soldiers..."

Clyde () : "Most?"

Gil: "Well, there is one...."

Clyde: "Huh?"

*They opened the door that leads to the training room. Inside lies a pile of unconcious bodies of grown men. Standing beside them was this little girl with green hair and yellow 'fairy' wings, her face is red and her eyes are teary.

Another purple haired girl was hard pressed trying to hold her back.*

"THERE'S NOTHING WRONG WITH SUGAR IN GREEN TEA! YOU MEANIES TAKE THAT BACK!!!!"

"Lindy they're already out cold!!"

Clyde: ""

Gil pat the young boy on the shoulder, " We're counting on you, Enforcer Haralown...."

HAHA! This reminds me of 'Belling the Cat' scenario for Chrono and Hayate.

Again, this was written in 5 mins

Well, it's pretty damned good for five minutes. Good job!

Originally Posted by Nightengale

Okay, an actual "longer" preview for Fated Souls. Heck, I may even post this in parts here, and put it at FF.net once I finished it.

Spoiler for Fated Souls : Part I:

On that day, amidst the silver wing corridors that are all but distinctive, below the dim light of a small laboratory room, void and empty of anything, bar 2 people, like a mirror of light and darkness, an unique contrast of 2 wretched and kindred souls…

That was…their very first beginning, their first meeting, and the very first goodbye…

Little did both of them know then, the destiny that tied them together…

A foolish dream to recreate the past, to live on with the past, a future that chooses to abandon what defines future itself…

Project F…

~~~

A successive sounds of explosions, a muting sound to the ears, as a girl, with golden blonde hair like lightning of the gods, beautiful and mystical, tied to pigtails rushed through a barrage of robotic droids fluently with a sharpening elegance and flowing aggressiveness, she flew down pathways of silver wing corridors, decimating all oppositions in her path, making her way somewhere... as within a small room, filled with several tanks with humanoid female figures afloat within, one man, with a toned purplish hair, and eyes not unlike those of a golden lightning watches calmly at the monitors, all of which were capturing the female mage’s acts live on screens.

“Splendid. What a marvelous sight, of something so beautiful and yet so fiery. I would love to get my hands on her. ” The man, despite looking calm, unnerving, almost as if he didn’t mean what he said, was clearly ecstatic, as none of the young girl escapes his attentive eyes.

Before long, another sound of explosions occurred, mildly shaking the laboratory room, yet he took it to himself like nothing had happened, as he simply looked on, his eyes glued to the screens, like a child to candy.

Perhaps that’s what it was…

“Dr, the TSAB enforcer had already breached the 4th line. At this rate, she’ll discover this room in 5 minutes. It is advisable that we teleport our necessities and move on to Point 17 through Route 58. “

The woman, a rough blonde speaking affluently and calmly, not reflecting the urgency in the words, appeared behind the man. Dressed in a purple/white blouse attire not unlike a professional secretary with a unique tie emblem of the Roman number I, she had a presence of an adult female, as she proceeded to open a terminal screen, inputting several commands.

“Mm… I suppose you’re right. Uno, activate the teleportation device and transfer the vital “materials” to Substitute 7. Get the place up and running within 3 hours after arrival. I should be back by then.”

Jail continued speaking nonchalantly, his eyes still not vied away from the screen as Uno, for once expressed a semblance of minor shock as her eyes slightly widened from his words.

“Dr!”

“I don’t have enough preparations to add this little girl into my collection of subjects for now, but even so, it wouldn’t feel right to me as a scientist if I escape without getting some on-field information on my prospects. You understand, don’t you, Uno?”

The time was ticking furiously as Jail went on with his demeanor, as he spoke to Uno on his intentions.

“Dr! It’s too dangerous! If Dr needs to, I could-Umph!!”

Just so suddenly, without warning or advances, he just closed the distance between their faces, as Jail kissed Uno…hard. Kissing seemed too tame of a word, as Jail pushed his tongue inside, penetrating hers, exchanging their saliva and playing tango with each other’s lips and tongues, mutual violation of lips seemed more appropriate, as Jail gave their kiss one push to the wall, on Uno’s back, as he finally broke their kiss…

Uno tried to stay calm, but her cloudy, dreamy eyes were betraying her as she felt like she was naked in front of Jail, in more ways than one. Jail could only smirk as he licked his lips, savoring the taste of his little Uno.

“Don’t worry, Uno. I’ll be fine… Right now, it’s more important to make sure your sisters who are still asleep make it in one piece… You’re their elder sister, right? Show an example.” Jail continued speaking, this time with a more seductive, dominant tone as he pressed his weight on her against the wall, his nose touching hers, lips only millimeters away, as if enticing her, making her feel hungry for more.

“I…I under..stand, Dr...” Uno’s monotone, cool voice now ragged as she breathed heavily. She quickly readjusted herself, as she proceeded to continue pressing some keys, slowly teleporting away the multiple tanks and capsules away from the room… Just as she was going to press the key that would teleport her away...

“Please…be safe, Jail.” She gave Jail one last show of concern, in a voice that seemed almost unlike hers, soft and meek, almost indistinguishable from her conventional voice.

Jail could only smirk.

“Uno… I haven’t done any medical check-up on you lately, right?”

“That’s alright, Doctor. I am self-capable of-“

“No, no, that’s not what I meant.” Jail sighed, as he gave a sideways glance at Uno, who was also eyeing him a little… He continued speaking as he said in a surprisingly low tone, “Do you mind if I come over tonight?”

Uno blushed furiously as she quickly turned her head away from Jail, hiding her clearly embarrassment, of red. She quickly pressed the key as her figure was shown to slowly dissipate away with the devices…

“I don’t mind…”

A soft answer, as within an instant, the room cleared itself clean, and empty, leaving behind only Jail, as he laughed amusingly, turning off the multiple screens of the young blonde mage as she seemed to have made it closer and closer to his location.

“My creations are perfect indeed… Now, how long more till my cute little prospect arrives?”

He looked at his watch, as it showed the countdown of a minute and a half…

“Looks like I have enough time to play that game....”

Smiling from ear to ear, Jail was high in excitement and anticipation. He was so going to enjoy this, he thought… He had high expectations for that young little budding golden fruit to entertain him…

“Make me entertained, will you?”

Yeah, I like Jail, so I'm writing on him. :3

Damn, this Jail totally OWNZ!
imagine if he was indeed like this in the show...


@Ryuya: Welcome! Hope you enjoy your stay.

[Ryuya]

Originally Posted by Satashi

As for taking a break, I am and I'm not. Currently I've already started on "6th division: Side stories" which will be kind of like SNL stories ( in fact they may be posted under it). These do not interfear with the plot in any way, but simply give a deeper look in their lives. What is everyone's normal day like? What do they do to have fun? Why is everyone there so close? Bascially it's everything that goes on in their lives when they are not progressing the storyline.

Teasers include:

Spoiler for real spoiler for what will be in 6th side stories:

Fate's normal work day
Elio revealing his skills as a bartender
Caro and Lutecia's budding friendship
Subaru and Tia's progressing relationship

Don't mind Fu-chan, Satashi, the chapter and 'no emoness' were great ^___^

Is that something like "Behind the scenes"? Neat! It'd be fun to have a greater insight in the lives of our 6 Division .

If you're "sort of taking a break" then you should read some other fics. I recommend "The Sleeping Lyrical" by Lone Wolf NEO. I was laughing like mad while reading it

@Kha: Thanks for the welcome ^_____^