Claymore Fanfiction Discussion

[crazyhorse]

Ah I just read this thread today so I had no idea that the one who wrote the two Miria stories: "All Work and No Play" and "Rank 47" was you, Tempest. Great job on both. They were very incharacter and most of all gave readers some Miria loving.

And Fenir your fic was hilarious. I'm glad I checked out this thread since I read part two now.

Good job to the both of you! The fandom needs more Miria fics!

[Tempest35]

Thanks a lot CrazyHorse.

Believe me when I say, we're working semi-hard towards that goal. XD Mostly for humor fics though for me - I can't do a serious one to save my life, especially with these girls (unless it was an AU).

I already got a few notes on how to continue 'Rank 47' by making it a mult-facet character study on Clare through the eyes of the other Claymores (Helen, Deneve, Ilene, Jean, etc and of COURSE Miria). Seems like an intriguing challenge that I just might take up. I can experiment with different writing directions with this one...

Wracking my brain on if I could continue 'All Work and No Play' or just let it be a diiiiiiiiiiiiistant tie-in with Fenrir's fics.

[Hamstadini]

Originally Posted by Tempest35

Whuuhaaahahaaa~ It's finally up there. You'll get hits in no-time - I already got over 350 hits for both fics already and they only got up there 2 days ago...

Hits are easy to come by. People click on the links and leave whenever they feel like it.

Reviews? Not so much. Actually garnering praise or constructive criticism apparently takes time and energy for those who read, and thus, well... there's just not a lot of attention.

I've yet to see a story with a review/chapter ratio in the double digits.

[Fenrir_valindri]

To true, I try to review every story I like, but sometimes even I get lazy when reviewing, so I can understand it sometimes when people do not review.

2nd chapter will be up on fanfic sometime this week, got lots of homework to do. >.<

[Tempest35]

Mah, well, people are fickle, so am I. ^^ I'm not too worried about how many reviews it has since I'm not going for 'Best Fanfic Author of the Year' award or anything like that. Not saying that getting a review isn't a nice thing...

[crazyhorse]

Originally Posted by Tempest35

Thanks a lot CrazyHorse.

Believe me when I say, we're working semi-hard towards that goal. XD Mostly for humor fics though for me - I can't do a serious one to save my life, especially with these girls (unless it was an AU).

I already got a few notes on how to continue 'Rank 47' by making it a mult-facet character study on Clare through the eyes of the other Claymores (Helen, Deneve, Ilene, Jean, etc and of COURSE Miria). Seems like an intriguing challenge that I just might take up. I can experiment with different writing directions with this one...

Wracking my brain on if I could continue 'All Work and No Play' or just let it be a diiiiiiiiiiiiistant tie-in with Fenrir's fics.

For serious anime/manga like Claymore, I prefer reading humor fics about it. I just like seeing the usually uptight and serious characters find themselves in situations so outrageous that they would never be seen in the actual show. Yes, this means that the characters would become OOC, but as long as it's not TOO much, I can bare with it for the humor. If the fic is in character AND funny at the same time, then it'll be even better. That's what I saw in your "All Work and No Play". It was a very good job because I can see that happening as a little extra scene. Even Claymore's need some time to relax and have fun

Expanding on your "Rank 47" would be a nice series of one shots.

I would like to see Miria in a romance fiction, but I really don't know who she would be paired up with. Eh I would love to read a romance fiction with a pairing besides Clare/Raki (since I don't like the little brat; I used to be neutral) and Clare/Teresa period. Just wanna get a taste of something else. ( I sorta sound like a yoma there).

And well for reviewing, people get lazy. I get lazy lots of time. Sometimes after I've read a fic and liked it, I don't know what else to say besides "Great job" so I don't wanna spend my time typing something that isn't constructive criticism and if it's not really constructive criticism, I at least would like my reviews to be more than two sentences long. Yeah I guess a review consisting of "Great fic! Update soon!" can boost your inspiration and make you feel good since it does show that SOMEONE is reading your fic, but it doesn't tell the author how to improve or what that person liked about the fic so it's pretty much useless. But I'm not a fanfic writer (yet, been thinking about writing some) so I wouldn't know how I would feel if I was in the author's position. Gah I'm just going around in circles. Ok basically what I'm saying is that I get lazy if I don't find enough from the fic for me to comment on, but sometimes I do get lazy just because. Blah I hope that what I've written is understandable .

[Hamstadini]

Originally Posted by crazyhorse

I would like to see Miria in a romance fiction, but I really don't know who she would be paired up with. Eh I would love to read a romance fiction with a pairing besides Clare/Raki (since I don't like the little brat; I used to be neutral) and Clare/Teresa period. Just wanna get a taste of something else. ( I sorta sound like a yoma there).

Something different, hm? Well, there's always Roxius' "Silver Eyes and Cold Hearts," where Teresa and Claire get it on, Opehlia and Miria make out in a situation I don't want to remember, and Deneve and Helen have sex on a dance floor.

...Ye gods, I need to shower after recommending him. I feel unclean... ><

[crazyhorse]

Ahaha sounds...interesting. I'll just check it out to see how it's like.

[Hamstadini]

If you mean interesting in the "may you live in interesting times" Chinese curse sense, you're spot on.

His "Silver Eyes and Cold Hearts" is on the second to last page. The other one, "30 Sentences of Claire and Teresa" is on the last. The bastard beat me out for first fic placed on the Claymore domain.

[Fenrir_valindri]

Only fic I was ever having Romance in is my fic I am rolling around in my head.

Involved making up a OCer.
#4 of the male generation was the plan, and having him being the first partially Awakened.
Would follow his long quest in trying to attain Revenge against Isley, spanning over several generations, and possibly having him meet, or atleast sense various characters through out the series, including Miria.

[crazyhorse]

Lol. I just finished reading his fic. How should I put it....well it gave me a chuckle here and there, but overall it's poorly written. His serious drabbles were pretty good, if boring, but the OOC ones were just too OOC. Well it gave me all the different couples to read about even if they are just drabbles and overall it was just something fun to read and not take too seriously. I think the author himself wasn't being serious when he was writing them.

[Tempest35]

Originally Posted by Fenrir_valindri

Only fic I was ever having Romance in is my fic I am rolling around in my head.

Involved making up a OCer.
#4 of the male generation was the plan, and having him being the first partially Awakened.
Would follow his long quest in trying to attain Revenge against Isley, spanning over several generations, and possibly having him meet, or atleast sense various characters through out the series, including Miria.

UGH!
Get out of my BRAIN~!!!
Seriously!! I was thinking of tossing the #4 of the Male class into a story! Argggh... XDDD This is too crazy...

:: Dancing in my head::
Somehow, the fool got away from when the other guys started Awakening one after the other. Since he held back (yes a guy can hold back if he REALLY wants to), he also got the hell outta there and hid himself, youki and all. So for nearly, give or take 150 years, he's still alive and kicking, taking out various youma for free when no one else is around and no one can see or sense him.

He meets up with Miria when the Fab 4 were scattered and after a while... blah blah...he tells her about the North (aka Rigald, whom he's got a nice hate for already)... and I'm gonna stop righ there.

Helen: Man, this is no fair!

Deneve: What is it now?

Helen: Clare's got a boytoy and now Miria!?

Devene: ... he's not...he's an ally.

Helen: Ne ne, you think they laid each other yet?

Deneve: Helen...

Helen: I wonder if she'll let us have turns with him...

Deneve: Shut UP Helen.

And with that, I have filled my daily writing quota...

[Fenrir_valindri]

RAWR my IDEA! /bites Tempest35

Was having it go along the lines of # 2-5 of the male generation go after an Awakened Isley, Rigaldo and Dauf obviously Awaken, #5 is killed, and my guy (#4) is heavily injured and gets away, but almost awakens but reverts back (he was unique that releasing Yoma energy was painful, kinda like how it feels good for Helen.

Was gonna have him meet the various characters until he meets Miria.

We best stop feeding of each others ideas lol

[Defiled one]

Well I often have writers block and I find it hard to write in a language that isn´t my own.

[Tempest35]

Originally Posted by Fenrir_valindri

RAWR my IDEA! /bites Tempest35

Was having it go along the lines of # 2-5 of the male generation go after an Awakened Isley, Rigaldo and Dauf obviously Awaken, #5 is killed, and my guy (#4) is heavily injured and gets away, but almost awakens but reverts back (he was unique that releasing Yoma energy was painful, kinda like how it feels good for Helen.

Was gonna have him meet the various characters until he meets Miria.

We best stop feeding of each others ideas lol

He was gonna be the one to help Irene build her little cottage, eh? :P

Okay fine, YOU write it but I get FIRST PRE-READ! And then he shall be the instrument of Simba's destruction - tossing him yowling from the apex of Pride - I mean Pieta Rock...XD Because we need some GAR in Claymore - Raki's not making the cut.

[Fenrir_valindri]

Lol very well, I was thinking that maybe he loaned the cottage to Irene btw

and Yes, we need some GAR!

[emu777]

Well dont take too long fenrir/tempest, your makings for this story intrigue me and I want MOAR!!!

[Fenrir_valindri]

Letting tempest read it first, hopefully he gets done with it soon, just kind of a

intro to my story that I sent him, so its short.

[Hamstadini]

Originally Posted by Defiled one

Well I often have writers block and I find it hard to write in a language that isn´t my own.

And yet, another chapter of She Lies is up...

[Fenrir_valindri]

Decided to post the story, Tempest isn't on so he cannot read his yet.

Be Gentle, first OC story.

Spoiler for Experimental story:

The Failure: Chapter 1: Meeting


They called me a failure.

My hair had not changed color completely after the operation.

I was not the only one; there were other failures as well.

Why did we fail, when so many others succeeded?

The Organization kept close watch on all of us, failure or not.

They were being careful; this was the first time anything like this had ever been done after all.

To think, we are forced to take on the flesh and blood of our enemy in order to defeat them.

I could still feel it, a second heartbeat; a heartbeat that was not human, it felt strange

having a heart that beat a split second after your own, but it was something I would have to get used to.

Even we failures had a purpose.

They pitted us against each other, to test our strength, it was obvious all of us were much stronger then before but some were much stronger then others.

The “successes” easily defeated the “failures” every failure except one.

Myself.

I had defeated all comers, I was better then everyone they had put me up against so far.

The “successes” looked at me with hate, they all believed that they should have been victorious.

That they should have been able to defeat a mere “failure.”

I was standing their, patiently awaiting the next person they would send against me, the next person to whom I would prove that I was no mere “failure.”


My opponent enter the ring, his long white hair swaying, his silver eyes focusing upon mine.

I could tell, he would not underestimate me like the others had, that much was certain.

He was handsome, at least by most standards, although I am certain many would consider him “feminine.”

He held himself like a noble, a former knight perhaps?

We stood their a few moments, analyzing each other, searching for weakness.

I found none.

He smiled.

“Begin” said a voice from outside the Arena.

I was a blur, I still found it surprising how much faster I was then before.

Remembering back on it now, I was so slow, so weak, so human.

I shot a fist forward, wishing to test my opponents strength, some of my previous fights had ended with this first blow.

He caught it easily, and I found myself flying back wards, the wind knocked out from my lungs.

How?! I did not even see him move!

I rolled midair, landing on my feet.

A split-second had passed.

He was still smiling, 20 feet away.

I charged again, this time coming in low.

I saw it this time, a kick, a mere blur, even to my silver eyes.

I managed to block it, but the force still drove me back 5 feet.

This time he did not wait for me to recover.

“Fast!” was the only thought that registered in my mind.

His entire body was a blur now, he rained blow after blow upon my quickly deteriorating defense.

I needed to do something, fast.

I barely dodged one blow, grabbed his arm, and shoulder rammed him.

That smile disappeared for a split second, pain replacing it it, but the smile reinserted itself quickly.

My stomach was already in pain from the first kick; I think it was a kick anyway, and my arms were screaming at me from blocking his attacks, but none of that prepared me for what happened next.

He grabbed my shoulders as we were falling, and before I could react, lifted his knee straight into my chest.

A flash of pain, and then darkness.

I regained consciousness a few moments later; I was on the floor.

I had lost; a failure once more.

“Hey” an unfamiliar voice spoke.

I looked up, it was him.

“That was a good fight; you are the first person so far to catch me off guard like that.”

He said with a different smile, one of kindness, on his face.

I looked at him for a moment, my mind trying to register the praise he had given me.

“My name is Isley, Isley from Alfonse, what is your name?” he said offering me his hand.

I stared at his hand for a moment.

I decided to accept it.

“I am Zeru, from nowhere in particular, and it is a pleasure to meet you, Isley of Alfonse.”

That was how we met, the so-called-failure, and the man who would one day be the strongest of the Organization’s male warriors.

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Two shadowy figures stood nearby, in the observational part of the Arena.

"Impressive, both of them."

"Yes, very much so."

"Their names?"

"The winner is Isley, he appears to be one of our more successful ones, if not the most successful one."

"Interesting, and the other?"

"Zeru, he was originally a write-off, we thought he would perform poorly at first, but it appears he is worthy to continue to the next phase."

"Good, I am most interested to see how that one will turn out"

"It is rare for you to take an interest in one of our test subjects, Rubel"

"Is it really a surprise that I would root for an underdog Ermita?." Rubel responded with a wry grin.

"Hmm, I suppose not, very well, I will have you watch his progress closely."

It is short, but I wrote it up pretty quickly, and the next chapter should be longer, maybe, hopefully.