2013-03-31, 06:35 | Link #41083 |
I am no one
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I take the liberty myself
Sacred Twins' next chapter deal with the consequences, mainly her being alienated and not getting proper respect, with few having actual grudge, and her reaction to that. TLR Stratos went with different route. Dan -as the current class rep- let Lingyin took the position to show her how underpowered she is in her fight against Uber!Ichika (remember, everyone else had at least 2 years training, she barely get half a year), although Yui accused him for being lenient because Lingyin is his childhood friend (actually, it's a bit of both)
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2013-03-31, 06:50 | Link #41084 |
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Curbstomping M is probably a bad idea huh... I should run that =))
Well I was reminded of it at least. EDIT: Again, new grunt units for PT as based off ReZel defenser B units... for some reason I am questioning the capability of the cast to combat even 1 of these. Last edited by demino_hellsin; 2013-03-31 at 07:00. |
2013-03-31, 07:35 | Link #41085 |
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Speaking of M, funny how I actually thought about having this kind of scene:
Halphas Bose is M(or any bigger villain), Balbadoro is a... some monster transforming satellite which I actually thought of including as a major plot item for Athena.
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2013-03-31, 07:51 | Link #41088 |
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@stratos: Well that was crazy. Though I approve haha.
@eras: Not really. As usual, Stratos is active, jak is sulky, zero is absent but updating his work like mad... at least in his computer and I'm still stuck on what might be's and what I wish'es. |
2013-03-31, 08:04 | Link #41089 |
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Active and on hiatus. Conflicting but that's how it is for me
While I don't really want to exaggerate reactions and blow things way out of proportion... What's the best case scenario (read: most peaceful) for an ISA student if she outright declares that she already has a boyfriend? And the thing is that this declaration falls into the ears of those who are already on a manhunt for one. That one.
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2013-03-31, 08:06 | Link #41090 |
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^ The answer would be asking 5W 1H (no really)
It's half curious question and half interrogation, that's about as peaceful as you could get. ---------------------- Hmmm, I felt TLR!Ichika is quite... flat He got the skill, he got the awesome action, but... no engaging backstory? I could've always play with orphan card, which is a good idea, but I still somehow can flesh him out. Mirror verse is one chapter and I already felt he's on the right path to go, Sacred Twins version is halfway there, but TLR Stratos version is even more bland than canon. I need someone to discuss about this comprehensively, so if anyone willing to join, I'll be grateful.
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2013-03-31, 08:10 | Link #41091 |
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@stratos: Bombardment of questions on what the boyfriend is like. How they met. Advice on how to snag one. Where would be the best place to meet a guy. hmmmm
@zero: well Ichika there is flat because he holds the answer to everything. His heroic sacrifices turn into badass awesome moments where it turns out he's sacrificing something abstract and he seems to brush off anyway. Things like humanity, kindness and such which he eventually comes back and picks up the pieces for without any form of shame of being a hypocrite and whatnot. At least that's how I see it. |
2013-03-31, 08:20 | Link #41092 |
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^ I suppose you refer to Sacred Twins version there, which is exactly what I want to portray. He's a walking deus machina, appearing in the right place and time, despite what he did is wrong when faced with common sense... and he knew. But at the very least, he has inner conflict. The crossover version? hardly.
I have several unposted crossover chapter and as I reread it again, Ichika there just... GAAAH!! I'll hiatus for real, if not declare FUBAR and pulled the fic outright
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2013-03-31, 09:49 | Link #41094 | ||
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2013-03-31, 10:04 | Link #41096 |
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the first draft, I can understand the emotion. Though the writing and word flow make it feel somewhat disjointed. Overall I like the message.
for the second. I'm not quite sure. The character growth is odd in that you take a direction where Laura takes solace in the fact she is only a weapon. Her hatred is her only source of stability and that Charles is trying to comprehend that while Ichika just wants Laura to change for the better. I guess I'm just biased against this angle but it seems kind of odd. Despite being a soldier you see her as sheltered and bland. Though the best words that you can tell her are Celty's words from Durararara --- "No matter what you think. The world isn't as cruel as you paint it." |
2013-03-31, 10:39 | Link #41098 | |||
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Oh and Stratos, that plot... it's more awesome than it should. Really, you're really excellent at dropping subtle hammer. Quote:
But Laura never accept any explanation, EVER, only her own interpretation or anything. The only one she'll listen is Chifuyu... which is not different than canon, Chifuyu is figuratively mute. Which bring us the necessary evil: talk through the fist. or in this case, highly freudian jackhammer. To be fair, the 'Innovator/Newtype' scene is just as important, with Laura seeing her own actions and the aftermath... from other people's view, and vice versa.
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2013-03-31, 10:43 | Link #41100 |
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Sorry, kinda sleepy. But my point still stand, I like how you bring a very normal romance drama into the trainwreck harem that is Infinite Stratos, while making it sounds engaging.
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