2011-05-30, 12:05 | Link #301 | |
Big Game
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I changed the term. He`s not an antagonist. He`s a good guy You may check the OC profile from the previous page
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2011-05-30, 13:20 | Link #302 |
Truth Martyr
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Location: Doing Anzu's paperwork.
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*facepalms*
You're completely missing the point. He's a sniper. He needs to be a quiet professional. Off the job he could be cheerful and flamboyant and all, but on the job he has to be focused and professional - not a loud-mouthed thrill seeker. (As an aside note: Not the be a racist - god knows I'm not a whitey, even though I can speak with American and British accents IRL - but am I right in guessing that English is not your primary language? That's the only reason I can think of for why we seem to be having communication difficulties.) And you're completely missing some other points as well... leg shots can still kill people - there's no such thing as only a flesh wound in real life. Shooting the legs is in fact quite problematic because if the round is powerful enough you'll blow off the limb and the target bleeds to death rapidly. (Which is what MacMillan and Price were reasonably counting on to finish off Zhakaev. Didn't take, unfortunately, due to plot armor.) Tranq rounds... possible but not likely. You'll have to do some explaining - and also note that any round, regardless if it's lethal or supposedly less lethal like a rubber bullet, will cause fatalities if aimed at the head. Not to say that sniping can't work - goodness knows we've got Reki, and I've got two OCs taking Snipe electives, but the mindset, that's crucial. Basically, Lev strikes me too much as a sniper Leeroy Jenkins.
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2011-05-30, 13:35 | Link #303 | |
Big Game
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how bout I`ll make him return to Assault Division? it`s still counted (thanks to the inheritance ) I`m going to fix it again Now fixed and by the way , who`s Leeroy Jenkins?
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2011-05-30, 15:27 | Link #304 |
Archangelic Demon Vampire
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Join Date: May 2009
Location: Mauritius
Age: 30
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@Sheba: GOOD LORD am I happy that I canned my Masamune descendant... would've made two characters that would end out becoming too similar... XD Nice char there anyways, looks like a good one to introduce in my own fic at one time or the other.
Je vois que tu parles Francais... hehe... premier Frenchy que je rencontre qui est animephile sur ces forums. ANYWAYS GENTS, massive revision to the plot and etc... for my fic, but chars are somewhat unchanged (did modify a few details, also made their profiles more summary. The fic will take care of going in deep). Kyousuke Yamato - Mister Badass Spoiler for Portrait:
Name: Kyousuke Surname: Yamato Gender: Male Age: 17 Height: 1.79m Division: Assault Butei Rank: A Ancestor: Elisabeth Bathory Equipment: Desert Eagle "Planet Eagle" Variant, CZ 45 "Red Custom", Multiple Stiletto Switchblades Likes: Piano, Italian Food, Japanese Food, Women Dislikes: Garlic, Silver, Vegetables, Spicy Food Spoiler for Background:
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Alexandra V.H Yamato - The Platinum Princess Spoiler for Portrait:
Name: Alexandra Surname: V.H. Yamato Gender: Female Age: 17 Height: 1.68m Division: Inquesta Butei Rank: A Ancestor: Abrham Van Helsing Equipment: Glock 34, Silver Knives, Twinbow II Crossbow Likes: Violin, Flowers, Singing, Reading, Studying, Gardening Dislikes: Violence, Blood, Perverts, Kyousuke's flirtatious attitude Spoiler for Background:
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Gabriel Michaelis - God's Wrath Spoiler for Portrait:
Name: Gabriel Surname: Michaelis Gender: Male Age: 18 Height: 1.78m Division: Dagula Butei Rank: A Ancestor: Sebastien Michaelis Equipment: Smith & Wesson Model 29 Likes: Sweets, Cakes, Scaring people, Sleeping, anything related to Japan Dislikes: Otherworldly creatures, Spicy food, Working, Cowards Spoiler for Background:
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Yui Miyamoto - The Sword Maiden(?) Spoiler for Portrait:
Name: Yui Surname: Miyamoto Gender: Female Age: 17 Height: 1.72m Division: Connect Butei Rank: A Ancestor: Musashi Miyamoto Equipment: Boken, Wakizashi, Nodachi, Katana, Kahr P45 Likes: Tea, Swords, Drawing, Chatting Dislikes: Any crawling insect. Did I say any crawling insect? Spoiler for Background:
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Asuka Azai - Rambo Girl Spoiler for Portrait:
Name: Asuka Surname: Azai Gender: Female Age: 16 Height: 1.62 Division: Assault Butei Rank: A Ancestor: Azai Nagamasa Equipment: Steyr TMP Submachineguns, Retractable Lance, C4 Explosives Likes: Horses and pets in general, fooling around, guns, shopping. Dislikes: Seriousness, Bad Guys, Ghosts Spoiler for Background:
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------------------------------------- Ok, team Nightray's complete. Feedback and comments are welcome. (+ Quotes) Next coming up is relationship with the other OCs here.
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2011-05-30, 16:18 | Link #305 | |
NYAAAAHAAANNNNN~
Join Date: Nov 2007
Age: 35
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The idea behind it are the ballistic darts are mounted on low-powered cartridges, or air-powered cartridges using nitroguanidine as propellant instead of conventional explosive powder so the bullet does not penetrate, but rather, just stabs into the skin and administering the drug. Redesigning the cartridge to vent the gas so it produces something like opening a soft-drink can should be workable. Do whatever you want with your OC man. There isn't anything wrong with using abit of imagination and reading up more on science to match to it - though it depends on how much you have read that you are able to relate to whatever he does.
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2011-05-31, 00:40 | Link #306 |
~ Your Smile ~
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Location: 346Pro
Age: 38
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The X-Butei
Gertrude Freiherr Immelmann
“Red Baron” Affiliation: SSR - 15 Voice: Minako Kotobuki What began as a means to breed the finest super-soldiers for the Third Reich, the 1st Schwarzehase has changed lieges many times, until its current incarnation under the blessings of NATO and the international Butei Corps. Each generation of eugenic pairing yielded stronger and stronger results, with the current generation deemed worthy to be called Artificial Choutei. It is from this pristine pedigree that Gertrude comes from. Descendent of many notable Luftwaffe aces from the Red Baron to Gertrude Barkhorn (making her and Karla distant cousins), Immelmann is a fearsome predator of the skies. While transports, gunships and fighters are her thing, Immelmann is not shy on the ground. Her body was bred for strength, resilience and agility, which was then enhanced with prosthetics. She cannot hurl tanks or chase cheetahs like Suzumeno Manami can, or turn invisible and teleport like Hajime Yanko, but Gertrude can still run a marathon while lugging 100kilos of gear effortlessly, or punch like a truck, or both. She oozes cold steel logic, speaks her mind as she see fit and detests artistic pursuits or excessive expressions of emotion. In spite of all this, Gertrude finds herself drawn to cute fluffy items and music, which leaves her at a loss and would do her best to keep her composure when others are around (Alone, she gives in more readily). Having taken an elective at the Stargate facility in Langrange, USA, Gertrude is the team specialist for extra-sensory perception, psychic forensics and counter-esper operations. An esper herself, she is also taking extra classes on the subject from Prof Xie. She wears a swimsuit-like garment under her Butei uniform which protects her core bionics from EMP and electronic warfare. She contested the class rep position because she believes that Alistair is unworthy of the position given her rep, and if no one volunteered the class would fall into disrepute. She is the designated pilot of Professor’s SR-79 Blackbird transport. ~~~~~~ A German super-soldier done right should be moe as well as cool.
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2011-05-31, 01:19 | Link #307 |
Big Game
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I wonder what will be Lev`s reaction if he met him?
maybe it goes something like this: Lev: A German!!! Back in World War 2,My ancestor killed a German general with a sniper rifle
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2011-05-31, 09:17 | Link #310 |
The Interstellar Medium
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No idea if it really works or not. But he was fun to create and perhaps someone finds a use for him.
The Courier
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2011-05-31, 10:01 | Link #311 | |
Archangelic Demon Vampire
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Location: Mauritius
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2011-05-31, 11:12 | Link #312 | |
RUN, YOU FOOLS!
Join Date: Jun 2006
Location: Formerly Iwakawa base and Chaldea. Now Teyvat, the Astral Express & the Outpost
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Can I ask you how did the scientists slip through the grasp of the Allies AND the Mossad? I mean, their experiments have likely killed jews, and the survivors are not going to forgive that. Moeover, I doubt the NATO is going to approve it, in the European Union we are fucking battling in councils to allow (ot not) genetically modified corn to grow in our fields, especially France. So let's not get started on humans. PS: Did you even read what Tempest about trying to not blatantly port characters from other shows? Because that's Laura from IS right here. |
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2011-05-31, 11:49 | Link #313 |
Archangelic Demon Vampire
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It's rather hard for Meister not to port chars in, or rather, it's a bit hard to come with very original characters now days. Every char created is inspired from certain other chars, very few are those that stand out from the rest for being unique and original.
Same for me, even though I try as hard not to copy any char... I often end up giving in some traits to my character that seem to be reminiscent of characters from other animes/mangas. but yeah.. he could try... XD Why did she HAVE to be german btw? That's a good question... and Schwarze Regen... AHEM. (Which reminds me, I also have an IS fic to work on... back to writing) P.S: Courier kinda reminds me of "The Transporter" movies for some reason... XD I could see him with those badass shades walking in and kicking everyone's butt or giving an extremely hot chase to a criminal while swearing everytime he gets shot at. Also... Keroko, why does Aila make me think of "Highlander"... I dunno, might be just the feeling though, as the char herself is more sweet and less OP... I"d guess, but S Rank is quite impressive (even though Kyousuke is theoretically an S Rank+, he's just stuck with a limiter).
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2011-05-31, 12:03 | Link #314 | |
Adeptus Animus
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2011-05-31, 14:23 | Link #315 | |
Archangelic Demon Vampire
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As for OPness... dunno... it's hard to gauge power levels of certain characters unless there are specific indications. We can just brag about how skilled and whatever our characters can do, but it's usually up to the author to portray power levels (even though the status of Vampire that one of my chars has makes him automatically a powerful being as he's on par with Dracula. But as I said, he's got a limiter on him).
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2011-05-31, 17:04 | Link #317 | |
RUN, YOU FOOLS!
Join Date: Jun 2006
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As a result, I added her to the "My OC toward others" posts: Kirsty, Preston and D'Artagnan. Fio, Sanae and Jin And last batch Naoko Kazami Spoiler:
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2011-05-31, 17:29 | Link #318 |
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Location: Redgrave City
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That's pretty throughout But I guess I would have to make my first impression of Minato with a bang soon; I've decided on the 'Silent Moe' personality for him since there's a large fanbase for those type of characters So now I have 'Silent Moe', a Tsundere, a Dojikko, a cute one, a sexy one, and a sweet one
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2011-05-31, 18:58 | Link #319 | ||
~ Your Smile ~
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The rest will have to wait on the novel for more details. But I'll drop NATO and add much more negotiations. Quote:
I did not include how she looks, but I'm definitely going for the Pure Aryan colors of white-blonde + blue eyes. Plus no powered armor. She runs with a Styr AUG assault rifle and a FAMAS for a "handgun". Opts for a SIG SG-550-1 for long-range engagements. Stun baton is because its the most feasible "duuh that's hi-tach" melee weapon I could think of outside of a pilebunker. I find more similarities between Gertrude and Space Marine #466387 than Colonel Bodewig. And I didn't even pack a chainsword. Most of all, I feel that this is how a German super-soldier should be done. The only link between the 2 of them is the unit, which I could simply change the name or drop it. But that would simply defeat the hinthintwink reference in the first place.
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