Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[mega1987]

the only thing missing is that you take some limits/techniques/finisher from dissidia: final fantasy...

[Kuroi Hadou]

Originally Posted by mega1987

the only thing missing is that you take some limits/techniques/finisher from dissidia: final fantasy...

What's wrong with Dissidia?

[ZeroXSEED]

Spoiler for Spoiler for crap:

Mid Childan Callendar, Year 65, an incident happened within a magical ruins in the far, far away world called Shangri-la, world of treasure.
Ancient Artifact, called Jewel SEED, released accidentally as the seal broken during the incident and sent into a small, still-developing and machinery reliant planet called EARTH, registered as Non-administrated world #89.
In pursuit of the Jewel seed is a young Archaeologist Yuuno Scrya, somehow, his trip ended unsuccessfully…

“Why are you…”

“VERMIN!”

Flashing in the quiet night, two people jousting mid air with all their might, although it may seems one-sided as only one of them carried a weapon whatsoever, while the other just use a screen made of light.

“Graf Eisen!”

“[-Explosion-]”

These child, spearheads of future, meeting each other in the crossroad of fate.

Clanking and locking itself, the mallet throwing an empty shotgun shell, and suddenly a rocket mechanism appeared on its rear part, boosting the red haired girl’s speed considerably.

“[-Rakettenhammer-]”

“EAT THIS!!!”

“SHOOT!”

The blonde haired boy smashed into concrete, forming a rather large crater in said building and crack in the pavement he landed later. That boy didn’t receive much damage thankfully, probably a dislocated joint or two, as he just flinch a bit before stand up perfectly again.

“Listen! I don’t know what reason you had for attacking me blindly like that!” he cried “But I have a mission! This world is engulfed in a dangerous threat!”

“I don’t give a crap! WHY DON’T YOU DROP ALREADY!”

“Now that’s what I call big and foul mouthed” the boy clenched his teeth, “BRING IT ON!”

He took the rocket powered mallet with his shield head on, his feet sink into the pavement before thrown away by meters and bend a telephone pole.

Reality knows no boundaries, cruelties touched even the most innocent life forms.
Human atrocities created the whole sequence which put the world into it’s grave state.

“Persis…tent…little…vermin…” the red haired girl took her hat, which drop due to the shock wave caused, “GU-AGH!”

She dropped on her knees, holding her right elbow, which for obvious reason are PAINFUL “SHIT, my arm…is his shield just that…strong?!”

“O feeling’s of mine-“

“Huh…”

“Become the bind that seal the darkness…-Struggle Bind-“

Burning brightly in their hearts are torch of passionate loyalty and blazing ambition
Torn between, mixed in, and separate again.

A shining circle appeared below the girl, before she can react, it was too late, plenty of string had enraptured her. “A BIND?!”

“Not ordinary bind…” the boy chuckled as he walk toward the girl, despite his obviously bad state, lunges left and right and his eyes are dim. The girl wailed as she felt the power drained out of her body…”It continuously drains your mana and store it in the seal beneath you”

He pulled a string and hold it, channeling the power to his hand.

“Please, tell me about jewel-”

“I don’t know…what the…hell…are you talking about…”

“You’re…a mage right? You didn’t know…”

“I said I don’t know!”

“O feelings of mine, became the light-”

The boy raised his hand, the girl flinched in anticipation, instead, she felt a warm and pleasant sensation on her injured arms as the boy use a familiar skill; healing magic.

“-that rejuvenates the flesh and bone…-First Aid-”

“Dammit…you…”

The girl looked at him in disbelief, for the hell of it, why don’t use it on himself? She also didn’t need a freakin’ pity!

The boy just smirked in response, before he fell on his back, snoring. The static, eerie environment turned loud and crowded. Her funny, almost cosplay like clothes disappear, replaced by ordinary single-piece dress.

Mixed feeling erupted from her hearts, but anger and embarrassment dominated everything else, “DON’T YOU DARE MAKING FUN OF ME DAMMIT!” she barked.

“Vita-chan!”

“Ungh…Ha…Hayate…”

The Girl turned her gaze from her friends to the boy, there’s no boy, there’s only a…“Fe-Ferret?” her eyes bulged and her jaw drop in surprise, before faint in exhaustion and surprise.

Zero & X-SEED production team
Present
Lyrical Nanoha A’s Advance

Hit and Miss I swear, basically, what if Yuuno ended in a wrong time frame on his arrival on the earth.
Just a random idea, dunno if it would be continued or not...
And here's a tribute to the fic "Material Days'

Spoiler for Long picture are LOOOOOONG:

[Justin_Brett]

That's...certainly interesting? So how does that work in regards to the First Season? Is everything there going to happen at the same time as As?

Also that move from Yuuno was pretty god-moddish. I'd fix that. I'm also fairly certain that's not how the Wolky's Barrier Jackets work.

[yuiseppe]

Here's one for Beamer, DC, Dezo, Syn and anyone else who writes or reads the ViCia/Shadowverse.

Spoiler for When night falls:

I discovered that if I put down my work, nothing really holds my attention for more than 10 mins anymore. It's that sad... but fortunately easily curable if i decide to read or draw something. I did both.

As for the pic, originally I was planning to go with a more oppressive orange-black theme, but the music changed to something bittersweet so this is what I ended up with :P

Spoiler for Omake:

"Hey Cia, wake up."

Vivio gently patted Lutecia on the cheek. It had been a warm day, but the sun was singing its flamengo coloured swan song and a small breeze had picked up.

Lutecia nuzzled against Vivio's palm and started to murmur something which sounded suspiciously like "My hip is really sore, I dreamt I was shot 4 times." Before she finished doing so, however, she sensed Vivio tense.

The first thing Lutecia noticed when her eyes snapped open was Vivio's pale face.

The second thing she noticed was that there was a dark shadow which fell over them both.

The third thing she noticed was Vivio pointing behind her, stuttering or hissing (it was hard to tell).

"ZEST!!!" screamed both girls together when Lutecia whipped her head around to see the cause of Vivio's inarticulacy.

Zest grinned, "Hi girls, I just wanted to-"

"GYYYYYYAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!" they screamed, clutching each other and running backwards as fast as they humanly could, rudely drowning him out.

"...." sighed Zest. "I just wanted to say I'm not dead."

[mega1987]

Originally Posted by yuiseppe

Here's one for Beamer, DC, Dezo, Syn and anyone else who writes or reads the ViCia/Shadowverse.

Spoiler for When night falls:

I discovered that if I put down my work, nothing really holds my attention for more than 10 mins anymore. It's that sad... but fortunately easily curable if i decide to read or draw something. I did both.

As for the pic, originally I was planning to go with a more oppressive orange-black theme, but the music changed to something bittersweet so this is what I ended up with :P

Spoiler for Omake:

"Hey Cia, wake up."

Vivio gently patted Lutecia on the cheek. It had been a warm day, but the sun was singing its flamengo coloured swan song and a small breeze had picked up.

Lutecia nuzzled against Vivio's palm and started to murmur something which sounded suspiciously like "My hip is really sore, I dreamt I was shot 4 times." Before she finished doing so, however, she sensed Vivio tense.

The first thing Lutecia noticed when her eyes snapped open was Vivio's pale face.

The second thing she noticed was that there was a dark shadow which fell over them both.

The third thing she noticed was Vivio pointing behind her, stuttering or hissing (it was hard to tell).

"ZEST!!!" screamed both girls together when Lutecia whipped her head around to see the cause of Vivio's inarticulacy.

Zest grinned, "Hi girls, I just wanted to-"

"GYYYYYYAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!" they screamed, clutching each other and running backwards as fast as they humanly could, rudely drowning him out.

"...." sighed Zest. "I just wanted to say I'm not dead."

well... any SANE person will "screams like a little girl(trope)" and run like hell in that situation....

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by yuiseppe

Here's one for Beamer, DC, Dezo, Syn and anyone else who writes or reads the ViCia/Shadowverse.

Spoiler for When night falls:

I discovered that if I put down my work, nothing really holds my attention for more than 10 mins anymore. It's that sad... but fortunately easily curable if i decide to read or draw something. I did both.

As for the pic, originally I was planning to go with a more oppressive orange-black theme, but the music changed to something bittersweet so this is what I ended up with :P

Spoiler for Omake:

"Hey Cia, wake up."

Vivio gently patted Lutecia on the cheek. It had been a warm day, but the sun was singing its flamengo coloured swan song and a small breeze had picked up.

Lutecia nuzzled against Vivio's palm and started to murmur something which sounded suspiciously like "My hip is really sore, I dreamt I was shot 4 times." Before she finished doing so, however, she sensed Vivio tense.

The first thing Lutecia noticed when her eyes snapped open was Vivio's pale face.

The second thing she noticed was that there was a dark shadow which fell over them both.

The third thing she noticed was Vivio pointing behind her, stuttering or hissing (it was hard to tell).

"ZEST!!!" screamed both girls together when Lutecia whipped her head around to see the cause of Vivio's inarticulacy.

Zest grinned, "Hi girls, I just wanted to-"

"GYYYYYYAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!" they screamed, clutching each other and running backwards as fast as they humanly could, rudely drowning him out.

"...." sighed Zest. "I just wanted to say I'm not dead."

The pic made me go "D'aaaawwwwww", just because it was very sweet, even if sad. Then the omake had me choking on laughter. Awesome work.

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by yuiseppe

Here's one for Beamer, DC, Dezo, Syn and anyone else who writes or reads the ViCia/Shadowverse.

Spoiler for When night falls:

I discovered that if I put down my work, nothing really holds my attention for more than 10 mins anymore. It's that sad... but fortunately easily curable if i decide to read or draw something. I did both.

As for the pic, originally I was planning to go with a more oppressive orange-black theme, but the music changed to something bittersweet so this is what I ended up with :P

Spoiler for Omake:

"Hey Cia, wake up."

Vivio gently patted Lutecia on the cheek. It had been a warm day, but the sun was singing its flamengo coloured swan song and a small breeze had picked up.

Lutecia nuzzled against Vivio's palm and started to murmur something which sounded suspiciously like "My hip is really sore, I dreamt I was shot 4 times." Before she finished doing so, however, she sensed Vivio tense.

The first thing Lutecia noticed when her eyes snapped open was Vivio's pale face.

The second thing she noticed was that there was a dark shadow which fell over them both.

The third thing she noticed was Vivio pointing behind her, stuttering or hissing (it was hard to tell).

"ZEST!!!" screamed both girls together when Lutecia whipped her head around to see the cause of Vivio's inarticulacy.

Zest grinned, "Hi girls, I just wanted to-"

"GYYYYYYAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!" they screamed, clutching each other and running backwards as fast as they humanly could, rudely drowning him out.

"...." sighed Zest. "I just wanted to say I'm not dead."

Wow! I definitely got the bittersweet feel from it, although I could easily see the colours being different and giving it a darker edge. I like how you ended up doing it though, it makes the whole scene kind of vague, so that the viewer isn't quite sure if Lutecia is just sleeping while thinking of Zest, or if it is the scene at the end of RB's "Sunset" and she's not "just sleeping"...

Great job!

[ZeroXSEED]

Originally Posted by Justin_Brett

That's...certainly interesting? So how does that work in regards to the First Season? Is everything there going to happen at the same time as As?

Also that move from Yuuno was pretty god-moddish. I'd fix that. I'm also fairly certain that's not how the Wolky's Barrier Jackets work.

Ahahahaha, thank you for the response. Yes, I'd fix the story, if a bit.
Certainly, there's 'ripple effect' about what changed and what's not. In fact, Nanoha still the very 'destructive' Nanoha as we knew.

Also, Vita's barrier jacket work just like that...well, in this story, Hayate's more obvious to magical anomaly than normally the canon indicated. That's why Hayate realized that there's SOMETHING going on and went outside.

So, Vita had to be careful and thus made her using the very same concept of transformation as average mage, not reliant on her Knight form (which Hayate would sense as her Knight form generates a LOT of mana emission).

But still, I should do my homework and look for more information.

Also, almost everyone is 'somewhat' out of character, beware.

here's the full revision of the prologue:

Spoiler for Even more crap:

Mid Childan Callendar, Year 65, an incident happened within a magical ruins in the far, far away world called Mid Childa, world of treasure and magic.
Ancient Artifact, called Jewel SEED, released accidentally as the seal broken during the incident and sent into a small, still-developing and machinery reliant planet called EARTH, registered as Non-administrated world #97.
In pursuit of the Jewel seed is a young Archaeologist Yuuno Scrya, somehow, his trip ended unsuccessfully…

Uminari City, Nakaoka Town, Yagami Residence, June 3rd, 09:05 P.M.

Solitude, the song of lone hearts wailing though the silent night.

The house was silent, for it having only one resident, that is Hayate Yagami, creaking sound of the wheels only adding the eerie sensation, but fear not, it was from Yagami Hayate’s wheelchair.

She approached the phone, as the bleeping lights of the message recorder indicated that someone had called her.

Her expression were flat, if a bit sad, and she pushed the button.

Reality knows no boundaries, cruelties touched even the most innocent life forms.

“[Hello? This is Dr. Ishida from Uminari University Hospital]”

Dr. Ishida, what a familiar name, probably the only people Hayate knew in this city. Hayate isn’t so much as antisocial as she’s really an outcast, as nobody else cared about her.

“[So, your birthday’s finally tomorrow, Hayate-chan]”

She had no close relatives, she lived by herself. True, she never worried about economy of sort, which is sustained by her so-called ‘distant relative’. Someone KNEW her birthday already counted as miraculous, much less celebrating it.

“[I was wondering if you’d like to go out for a bite to eat after tomorrow’s examination]”

“[It would be great if you could reply before coming in tomorrow]”

Right, examination again, of course.

“[End of message]”

Oh, most awry sound EVER. Hayate smiling sadly, sometimes she wonder why can’t she act like most children? Oh right, she’s ‘special’. But even that simply cannot justify all the treatment she received.

But Hayate never complains.

She left for her bed, but thinking again, she cannot sleep.

So as usual, she turned on the bed lamp and began reading some books, she always loved books, and hanging around the library A LOT.

Time went fast, before she realized, it was already midnight.

Only the strongest could triumph, but only those with hearts would survive.

For a sudden, the light became dim. For the first time in her entire live, Hayate never saw a…black light? She flipped and sat, to find the very source of the anomaly.

It was a book.

Hayate gasped in surprise, Hayate remember that book, cool and creepy golden cross, as well as beautiful but scary purple crystal…

The ground is shaking, she squeaked for a bit and bracing herself to her bedside, that’s when the book float and approached her.

Hayate blinked, isn’t this is already weird enough? No, it isn’t. As if the book are alive, it tries as hard as it can to break the chain.

These binds broke, then the book open and shown it’s empty page rapidly, hundreds of empty pages. Reflecting in Hayate’s eyes is her sudden fear and helplessness…

Why nobody comes to help her?!

The book spoke in German, which would translate into “Releasing Seal” or something like that, and as the book finished to scan all it’s own pages, it says something would equivalent to “Activated”

The book descend near Hayate as if she’s isn’t intimidated enough, she began to crawl backward out of fear.

For the road began here.

Uminari City, Nakaoka Town, Residential area, September 18th, 07:30 P.M.

“Why are you…”

“VERMIN!”

Flashing in the quiet night, two people jousting mid air with all their might, although it may seems one-sided as only one of them carried a weapon whatsoever, while the other just use a screen made of light.

“Graf Eisen!”

“[-Explosion-]”

These child, spearheads of future, meeting each other in the crossroad of fate.

Clanking and locking itself, the mallet throwing an empty shotgun shell, and suddenly a rocket mechanism appeared on its rear part, boosting the red haired girl’s speed considerably.

He’s so dead.

“[-Rakettenhammer-]”

“EAT THIS!!!”

“SHOOT!”

The blonde haired boy smashed into concrete, forming a rather large crater in said building and crack in the pavement he landed later. That boy didn’t receive much damage thankfully, probably a dislocated joint or two, as he just flinch a bit before stand up perfectly again.

“Listen! I don’t know what reason you had for attacking me blindly like that!” he cried “But I have a mission! This world is engulfed in a dangerous threat!”

“I don’t give a crap! WHY DON’T YOU DROP ALREADY!”

“Now that’s what I call big and foul mouthed” the boy clenched his teeth, “BRING IT ON!”

He took the rocket powered mallet with his shield head on, his feet sink into the pavement before thrown away by meters and bend a telephone pole.

Human atrocities created the whole sequence which put the world into it’s grave state.

“Persistent…little…vermin…” the red haired girl took her hat, which drop due to the shock wave caused.

She holding her right elbow, for unusual reason feel numb “My arm…is his shield just that…strong?!”

“O feeling’s of mine-“

“Huh…”

“Become the bind that seal the darkness…-Struggle Bind-“

Burning brightly in their hearts are torch of passionate loyalty and blazing selfish ambition
Torn between, mixed in, and separate again.

A shining circle appeared below the girl, before she can react, it was too late, plenty of string had enraptured her. “A BIND?!”

“Not ordinary bind…” the boy chuckled as he walk toward the girl, despite his obviously bad state, lunges left and right and his eyes are dim. The girl wailed as she felt the power drained out of her body…”It continuously drains your mana and store it in the seal beneath you”

“Please, tell me about jewel-”

“I don’t know…what the…hell…are you talking about…”

“You’re…a mage right? You didn’t know…”

“I said I don’t know! Dammit…you…” the girl broke the bind, which for obvious reason made the boy gasped in surprise, "Well, that's my ace in the hole" he sweatdropped and evaded yet another smash from her hammer.

The girl looked at him in disbelief, for the hell of it she didn’t need a freakin’ pity!

Mixed feeling erupted from her hearts, but anger and embarrassment dominated everything else, “DON’T YOU DARE MAKING FUN OF ME DAMMIT!” she barked.

"Making fun of you? I should be dead if not for my shield" he cried just as pissed as her.

"GOING DOWN ALL THE WAY!"

"Is this is my end?" he couldn't even move his foot, much less fly or using teleport.

the girl finalized with a realistically hard jab on his stomach (that wouldn't injure him compared to concretes and pavement), said boy just smirked in response, before he fell on his back, snoring. The static, eerie environment turned loud and crowded.

“Vita-chan!”

“Ungh…Ha…Hayate…haven't you sleep yet?”

"No, I was reading this book all the time" Hayate pointed her a thick novel, apparently about detective story or something "And I heard the rumbling sound, like there's a construction work or something"

"Just-just your imagination probably"

The Girl turned her gaze from her friends to the boy, there’s no boy, there’s only a…“Fe-Ferret?” her eyes bulged and her jaw drop in surprise, before faint in exhaustion and surprise.

Zero & X-SEED production team
Present
Lyrical Nanoha A’s Advance

Thank you, thank you!

[mega1987]

Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

Ahahahaha, thank you for the response. Yes, I'd fix the story, if a bit.
Certainly, there's 'ripple effect' about what changed and what's not. In fact, Nanoha still the very 'destructive' Nanoha as we knew.

Also, Vita's barrier jacket work just like that...well, in this story, Hayate's more obvious to magical anomaly than normally the canon indicated. That's why Hayate realized that there's SOMETHING going on and went outside.

So, Vita had to be careful and thus made her using the very same concept of transformation as average mage, not reliant on her Knight form (which Hayate would sense as her Knight form generates a LOT of mana emission).

But still, I should do my homework and look for more information.

Also, almost everyone is 'somewhat' out of character, beware.

here's the full revision of the prologue:

Spoiler for Even more crap:

Mid Childan Callendar, Year 65, an incident happened within a magical ruins in the far, far away world called Mid Childa, world of treasure and magic.
Ancient Artifact, called Jewel SEED, released accidentally as the seal broken during the incident and sent into a small, still-developing and machinery reliant planet called EARTH, registered as Non-administrated world #89.
In pursuit of the Jewel seed is a young Archaeologist Yuuno Scrya, somehow, his trip ended unsuccessfully…

Uminari City, Nakaoka Town, Yagami Residence, June 3rd, 09:05 P.M.

Solitude, the song of lone hearts wailing though the silent night.

The house was silent, for it having only one resident, that is Hayate Yagami, creaking sound of the wheels only adding the eerie sensation, but fear not, it was from Yagami Hayate’s wheelchair.

She approached the phone, as the bleeping lights of the message recorder indicated that someone had called her.

Her expression were flat, if a bit sad, and she pushed the button.

Reality knows no boundaries, cruelties touched even the most innocent life forms.

“[Hello? This is Dr. Ishida from Uminari University Hospital]”

Dr. Ishida, what a familiar name, probably the only people Hayate knew in this city. Hayate isn’t so much as antisocial as she’s really an outcast, as nobody else cared about her.

“[So, your birthday’s finally tomorrow, Hayate-chan]”

She had no close relatives, she lived by herself. True, she never worried about economy of sort, which is sustained by her so-called ‘distant relative’. Someone KNEW her birthday already counted as miraculous, much less celebrating it.

“[I was wondering if you’d like to go out for a bite to eat after tomorrow’s examination]”

“[It would be great if you could reply before coming in tomorrow]”

Right, examination again, of course.

“[End of message]”

Oh, most awry sound EVER. Hayate smiling sadly, sometimes she wonder why can’t she act like most children? Oh right, she’s ‘special’. But even that simply cannot justify all the treatment she received.

But Hayate never complains.

She left for her bed, but thinking again, she cannot sleep.

So as usual, she turned on the bed lamp and began reading some books, she always loved books, and hanging around the library A LOT.

Time went fast, before she realized, it was already midnight.

Only the strongest could triumph, but only those with hearts would survive.

For a sudden, the light became dim. For the first time in her entire live, Hayate never saw a…black light? She flipped and sat, to find the very source of the anomaly.

It was a book.

Hayate gasped in surprise, Hayate remember that book, cool and creepy golden cross, as well as beautiful but scary purple crystal…

The ground is shaking, she squeaked for a bit and bracing herself to her bedside, that’s when the book float and approached her.

Hayate blinked, isn’t this is already weird enough? No, it isn’t. As if the book are alive, it tries as hard as it can to break the chain.

These binds broke, then the book open and shown it’s empty page rapidly, hundreds of empty pages. Reflecting in Hayate’s eyes is her sudden fear and helplessness…

Why nobody comes to help her?!

The book spoke in German, which would translate into “Releasing Seal” or something like that, and as the book finished to scan all it’s own pages, it says something would equivalent to “Activated”

The book descend near Hayate as if she’s isn’t intimidated enough, she began to crawl backward out of fear.

For the road began here.

Uminari City, Nakaoka Town, Residential area, September 18th, 07:30 P.M.

“Why are you…”

“VERMIN!”

Flashing in the quiet night, two people jousting mid air with all their might, although it may seems one-sided as only one of them carried a weapon whatsoever, while the other just use a screen made of light.

“Graf Eisen!”

“[-Explosion-]”

These child, spearheads of future, meeting each other in the crossroad of fate.

Clanking and locking itself, the mallet throwing an empty shotgun shell, and suddenly a rocket mechanism appeared on its rear part, boosting the red haired girl’s speed considerably.

He’s so dead.

“[-Rakettenhammer-]”

“EAT THIS!!!”

“SHOOT!”

The blonde haired boy smashed into concrete, forming a rather large crater in said building and crack in the pavement he landed later. That boy didn’t receive much damage thankfully, probably a dislocated joint or two, as he just flinch a bit before stand up perfectly again.

“Listen! I don’t know what reason you had for attacking me blindly like that!” he cried “But I have a mission! This world is engulfed in a dangerous threat!”

“I don’t give a crap! WHY DON’T YOU DROP ALREADY!”

“Now that’s what I call big and foul mouthed” the boy clenched his teeth, “BRING IT ON!”

He took the rocket powered mallet with his shield head on, his feet sink into the pavement before thrown away by meters and bend a telephone pole.

Human atrocities created the whole sequence which put the world into it’s grave state.

“Persistent…little…vermin…” the red haired girl took her hat, which drop due to the shock wave caused.

She holding her right elbow, for unusual reason feel numb “My arm…is his shield just that…strong?!”

“O feeling’s of mine-“

“Huh…”

“Become the bind that seal the darkness…-Struggle Bind-“

Burning brightly in their hearts are torch of passionate loyalty and blazing selfish ambition
Torn between, mixed in, and separate again.

A shining circle appeared below the girl, before she can react, it was too late, plenty of string had enraptured her. “A BIND?!”

“Not ordinary bind…” the boy chuckled as he walk toward the girl, despite his obviously bad state, lunges left and right and his eyes are dim. The girl wailed as she felt the power drained out of her body…”It continuously drains your mana and store it in the seal beneath you”

“Please, tell me about jewel-”

“I don’t know…what the…hell…are you talking about…”

“You’re…a mage right? You didn’t know…”

“I said I don’t know! Dammit…you…” the girl broke the bind, which for obvious reason made the boy gasped in surprise, "Well, that's my ace in the hole" he sweatdropped and evaded yet another smash from her hammer.

The girl looked at him in disbelief, for the hell of it she didn’t need a freakin’ pity!

Mixed feeling erupted from her hearts, but anger and embarrassment dominated everything else, “DON’T YOU DARE MAKING FUN OF ME DAMMIT!” she barked.

"Making fun of you? I should be dead if not for my shield" he cried just as pissed as her.

"GOING DOWN ALL THE WAY!"

"Is this is my end?" he couldn't even move his foot, much less fly or using teleport.

the girl finalized with a realistically hard jab on his stomach (that wouldn't injure him compared to concretes and pavement), said boy just smirked in response, before he fell on his back, snoring. The static, eerie environment turned loud and crowded.

“Vita-chan!”

“Ungh…Ha…Hayate…haven't you sleep yet?”

"No, I was reading this book all the time" Hayate pointed her a thick novel, apparently about detective story or something "And I heard the rumbling sound, like there's a construction work or something"

"Just-just your imagination probably"

The Girl turned her gaze from her friends to the boy, there’s no boy, there’s only a…“Fe-Ferret?” her eyes bulged and her jaw drop in surprise, before faint in exhaustion and surprise.

Zero & X-SEED production team
Present
Lyrical Nanoha A’s Advance

Thank you, thank you!

looks like we got another fine story coming up... let's us see after a few chapter if it live to everyone's expectations...

[DezoPenguin]

Originally Posted by yuiseppe

Here's one for Beamer, DC, Dezo, Syn and anyone else who writes or reads the ViCia/Shadowverse.

Spoiler for When night falls:

I discovered that if I put down my work, nothing really holds my attention for more than 10 mins anymore. It's that sad... but fortunately easily curable if i decide to read or draw something. I did both.

As for the pic, originally I was planning to go with a more oppressive orange-black theme, but the music changed to something bittersweet so this is what I ended up with :P

Spoiler for Omake:

"Hey Cia, wake up."

Vivio gently patted Lutecia on the cheek. It had been a warm day, but the sun was singing its flamengo coloured swan song and a small breeze had picked up.

Lutecia nuzzled against Vivio's palm and started to murmur something which sounded suspiciously like "My hip is really sore, I dreamt I was shot 4 times." Before she finished doing so, however, she sensed Vivio tense.

The first thing Lutecia noticed when her eyes snapped open was Vivio's pale face.

The second thing she noticed was that there was a dark shadow which fell over them both.

The third thing she noticed was Vivio pointing behind her, stuttering or hissing (it was hard to tell).

"ZEST!!!" screamed both girls together when Lutecia whipped her head around to see the cause of Vivio's inarticulacy.

Zest grinned, "Hi girls, I just wanted to-"

"GYYYYYYAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!" they screamed, clutching each other and running backwards as fast as they humanly could, rudely drowning him out.

"...." sighed Zest. "I just wanted to say I'm not dead."

Gorgeous and moving work, yui! And the omake was cute.

[synaesthetic]

Lulu really looks like Rider in that picture...

[Justin_Brett]

I still don't think that's how it works, at least while the Wolkies are still part of the Book of Darkness. Why should a servant get to choose what they wear?

Actually, wouldn't transforming herself like that both not do anything for her defense, and WASTE mana?

And when I was talking about godmoddish, I meant the 'drain all your mana away' bind. I don't doubt Yuuno COULD beat Vita if he was smart about it, but he's never done anything like that. No mage in the series has, honestly.

[mega1987]

Originally Posted by synaesthetic

Lulu really looks like Rider in that picture...

There's a reason why Lutecia is sometimes called Loli-Rider as she looked like a chibi Rider(medusa)...

[yuiseppe]

Originally Posted by mega1987

well... any SANE person will "screams like a little girl(trope)" and run like hell in that situation....

Zest really just needs a bit more practice at the 'hey guys, I got better' act. Granted, he's had the most experience out of the entire Nanoha cast at doing so, but people skills obviously weren't his forte.

Zest: Hey, I thought it went pretty well with Regius...
Agito: The man nearly had an aneurism right there on the spot, Zest.

Originally Posted by deathcurse

Wow! I definitely got the bittersweet feel from it, although I could easily see the colours being different and giving it a darker edge. I like how you ended up doing it though, it makes the whole scene kind of vague, so that the viewer isn't quite sure if Lutecia is just sleeping while thinking of Zest, or if it is the scene at the end of RB's "Sunset" and she's not "just sleeping"...

Great job!

I mostly just enjoyed mashing pink clouds around

Agito: You know man, it's kind of creepy how you keep watching Ojou sleep at your grave.
Zest: But you said waking her up wasn't a good way to break the news...

Originally Posted by DezoPenguin

Gorgeous and moving work, yui! And the omake was cute.

Hehe thanks :3

Agito: Consider yourself lucky Ojou didn't summon Garyuu to finish the job.
Zest: Actually I'm more worried about Her Majesty doing the same.

Originally Posted by synaesthetic

Lulu really looks like Rider in that picture...

Which is both convenient and annoying because it's hard to stray from the mindset that loli-rider would grow up to be Rider. Her barrier jacket as a child is a damn near perfect match for Rider's costume. Add a few years on Lulu, extrapolate a little and you have a barrier jacket that might as well be ripped straight from Rider...uh... not... not like that. I didn't, ok?

Agito: you bloody perverted old man.
Zest: HEY!

[Yasanagi]

Zest is too awesome to stay dead. He cut the Death God with his Colossal Blade Device to return to the land of the living.

[Moczo]

Next chapter of Infinity is up! A bit shorter than the norm, but it brings back what you really all read the story for: the kickoff to several straight chapters of exposition! Whoo-hoo!

[Jimmy C]

No complaints, but I don't think Jail would be tinkering with No.9's parts yet, considering that he wouldn't be obtaining the "material" to make her base for at least another year...
But there are ways around that and it is rather trivial, so I'll let it pass...

[SilentOutlaw]

Originally Posted by Moczo

Next chapter of Infinity is up! A bit shorter than the norm, but it brings back what you really all read the story for: the kickoff to several straight chapters of exposition! Whoo-hoo!

You know, I really hate the way you have to end almost every chapter in a way that makes me want to see what happens next right now.

[Moczo]

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

No complaints, but I don't think Jail would be tinkering with No.9's parts yet, considering that he wouldn't be obtaining the "material" to make her base for at least another year...
But there are ways around that and it is rather trivial, so I'll let it pass...

Blaaaah, you're right... I meant to put in a snippet that makes it clear he's working on the mechanical aspects of Nove, but it was slow going because he couldn't find a base appropriate to use them on yet, and I totally forgot to add it. I'll put it in later.

Originally Posted by SilentOutlaw

You know, I really hate the way you have to end almost every chapter in a way that makes me want to see what happens next right now.

I do it because I'm evil.