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Tempest35 · 2007-08-11, 01:15

Great job on it Fenrir! I was beginning to wonder about the continuations.

So I suppose the next installment will be about getting the uniforms eh?

Fenrir_valindri · 2007-08-11, 10:09

Yup, yup!

Will probably have Miria and Clare on that one, because Clare is the only one with experience wearing other clothes

Liked your fic on the fab 4 reunion, the one posted before the story I just posted, I always thought Helen displayed alot of concern for Clare, she just did not know how to express it in a nice way

Tempest35 · 2007-08-11, 10:40

Well, she's the only one we've seen that has worn other clothes.

I've always thought of the seven's clothes as being Clare's idea because of Irene. They look too similar not to be noticed. That and Irene looked ten times hawter in that outfit...

Random - Now that I think of it...I wonder how they'd sound if Flora's VA and Cynthia's VA were to have switched roles...Galatea would have some serious comeptition from Flora then because of that voice.

Fenrir_valindri · 2007-08-11, 15:01

I noticed that too, Cynthia has Flora's voice in the anime as far as I am concerned, I imagine Cynthia talking whenever I hear Flora's voice and vice-versa

Tempest35 · 2007-08-12, 07:58

Ah, Cynthia...I actually shivered when I heard her voice again. So sexy~

I'll wait a few more eps before writing about her and the 'others'.

Oh, and I edited my previous two stories/posts. Now I think they're good enough to put on FF.net.

Should put yours up too.

Fenrir_valindri · 2007-08-12, 10:40

Been thinking about it, might do it sometime soon.

It is a shame the anime cant seem to get some of the Claymore's looks down right, at first Ophelia looked odd, and now Flora doesnt look like herself and niether do several other Claymore's in the northern campaign.
Cynthia looks alot more mature, when she looked kawaii in the manga

Tempest35 · 2007-08-13, 19:36

I know, they role-reversed Flora and Cynthia so much. I'm beginning to think of Cynthia as being hawt moreso than kawaii. I never did get into Flora all that much to tell the truth. She just didn't seem like she'd be of much importance to the overall scheme of things...and I was partly right.

Should ask Toxic to do a Lo'real commercial with Flora for the Claymore girls. XDDD

Man, it's not fair, so many ways to write MiriaXClare and I can't decided which one to use~!! Such a fustrating yet interesting dilemma! Can even have Helen teasing Clare about Miria wanting to go off with just the two of them and everyone else are chaperones.
Can you tell, I like these two soooo much better than the accursed ShizNat.

Mandrake · 2007-08-15, 15:28

I'm always shy to put up my written work, but how else can you improve without some comments and critique right?

This is just a small part, the prologue of the storyline, the rest is allready well on its way of being written.

A question , after you've read it.

Spoiler:

As for the actual prologue.

Warriors of the Past

Spoiler:

Prologue

The wastelands, desolate and lacking in life that would seemingly stretch forever to the horizon, if it wasn’t for a pair of mountains intersecting it. The temperatures reach dangerous heights during the day, and incredibly chilling temperatures during the night. It’s not a good place to be for a human, without proper attires and preparation. However the 4 individuals following the barren trail are unaffected by the scorching sun, which is unsurprising for in fact they are no normal human at all, half human and half yoma, a dreaded predator to man. The female warriors wearing broad spaulders, in tight clothing with several pieces of armour, who bear no name apart from their own…are making their way to the mountain area. They carry huge claymores on their backs, and it’s by the ease of which they can wield those weapons, that the common folk have come to call them by their swords. Pale hair, piercing silver coloured eyes, these characteristics spawned yet another name for these women, ‘Silver eyed witches’. Yet the organisation these women belong to has no name.
Milana, the front most warrior and commander of the group, scans the horizon in front of her, slowing none of her pace down. “By nightfall we will reach the mountains, no resting until then.” Nightfall, she thought. How many days have we been walking? The depressing scenery reshapes at times due to vicious sandstorms filled with dust and debris, landmarks sometimes disappear under the sand while others are uncovered. Allot of people got lost in these parts which is why man made structures in key locations offered directions along with shelter. These old remnants of a different age are mostly ruins by now.
“Great” said Cecilia, the back most warrior in the file. Visibly annoyed, she kicked the pebble in front of her. She always hated the long distances they have to travel, and never fails to let others know so.
Seraphine, the one in front of her turned her head to face her. “It’s not like you aren’t used to this by now. Don’t tell me you’re tired already?” “Yes I am tired, tired of seeing nothing else but dust, dirt and rocks. It’s boring.” “Well I cannot argue with that” she said, sighing audibly.
There is nothing much to see or do in these parts of the region, no villages or towns dozens of leagues in any direction. No chances of running in a few yoma either, the wasteland itself is the predator. Yet when she noticed a snakelike creature slithering out from behind a rock, a smile crept on her face. “Look’s like we’re not alone after all” she thought to herself. “Then why not pass time a different way? The road is long, certainly enough for a tale or two. Any of you willing to share one that you might have remembered?” Agnes waited for an answer yet silence filled the group instead. She could barely remember the last time anyone had told her a story, only that it had pleased her allot. Cecilia was the one to break the awkward silence, “I am not much of a storyteller”. “Hah, is that so? Yet you yap the most out of us lot. You’ve complained about every little thing since we’ve parted from that town.” declared Seraphine “What? Well excuse me miss, when I have something to say, I’ll say it. I won’t sit idly and be still about it.” “You wouldn’t even know the meaning of silence, if you were a deaf mute!” Seraphina was trying to suppress her snickering, but when Cecilia started mumbling incomprehensively again in her typical manner, she could no longer hold it in. In between her laughing, she managed to squeeze out a few words. “Your face, hahahaha, hilarious!” They’re at it again Milana thought., can they get any more frustrating? “You blunt cow, how I about I comment about your face after I rearrange it for you?!” “There it is again, hahahaha!” It always amazed her how quick Cecilia would respond to the tiniest provocations. And the facial expressions that accompany with her anger, made it all the more fun to persist the taunting. This hasn’t been the first mission the two collaborated on. In fact more then once they’ve simply run into each other due to the geographic nature of the two neighbouring regions they operate in. Cecilia was on the edge of blowing up, and her face showed all the signs of it too. “Hahaha, you’re too easy!” Seraphine was wiping tears away from laughter now, this is one of her more favourite ways of relieving stress, by playing Cecilia. It occurred to Cecilia, that she had yet again fallen prey to her comrade’s annoying provocations. She fell for it, every single time. “Easy, I’ll show you easy!” Milana was about to say something, but it was Agnes that stepped up. “Calm down you two, spare us this bickering” The tranquil voice of her worked rather soothingly on any kind of demeanour, including those two. Milana was at times jealous of that, these kind of situations happen more frequently then one would like. Off course today was rather innocent, but it’s not always so. When more then 2 warriors are assigned to a mission, you can bet on there being friction. Milana usually had to resort to a certain sternness and volume to her voice, which as a result commanded respect. However in other cases it could also distance her comrades or worse, frighten them. She doesn’t really understand why that happens, so she at least tries to correct it before they should part. It also didn’t help that in height, she towers well over her fellow warriors. A result of numerous factors actually. “I wasn’t always like this”, she thought to herself. These thoughts lingered for a while until Agnes spoke up again. “To my original query, none have a suitable tale for this journey?” Briefly Seraphina and Cecilia looked at each other, but it was clearly written on their faces that they didn’t. Agnes didn’t cloak her disappointment well with her smile. “That’s too bad then, I was looking forward to one. Perhaps…Oh! What about you Milana?” Milana stopped dead in her tracks, with the rest halting nervously. The suddenness of the event made the 3 uneasy, thinking Agnes might have said something wrong. The uneasiness only increased when Milana slowly turned her head meet the eyes of her comrades, and those stared right back to her. “I know a few” The uneasiness now made room for anticipation and a hint of excitement. Not so much for the fact that she did have a story, but she as a single digit warrior, in the top 5 ranking no less, would voluntarily socialise, very uncommon if not a rarity. It was when Milana revealed a mischievous smile along with her words, that there was a reason for a bit of concern. Those feelings were washed away when a gentle smile appeared in place of the mischievous one with the words uttered. “Interested?” What am I doing, I’m not much of a storyteller myself Milana thought. “You girls never have seen a male generation warrior, have you?” “I have, sorta” Seraphim declared, “It had already awakened though. It’s not exactly an experience I’m fond of remembering. “Milana was a tad surprised “You’re lucky to be alive, who was your team leader?” “Nr. 2, but even with her, we lost one comrade to injuries, and the rest was heavily wounded. I’m extremely grateful we had Nr.2 with us, had it not been for her…”
Cecilia was shocked. “Are they all that powerful?” she asked. “There’s individual differences off course, and their former rankings to be considered. But yes, generally they are.” Agnes was more curious about the male warrior prior to their awakening. “You knew one personally?”
“Yes, the last two of the generation.” Contemplative on where to start, she proceeded to follow the path in front of her. The words started coming out, flowing out naturally as if she has been waiting for decades to tell the story.

Shizuru-chan · 2007-08-19, 13:14

Hey!

My friend is writing a claymore fic, a romance fic, including Galatea and one other claymore. Now she cant decide who the other claymore should be. Maybe you guys have any suggestions/ideas/requests?

Best.

zato_1one · 2007-08-19, 13:31

Quote:

Originally Posted by Shizuru-chan

Hey!

My friend is writing a claymore fic, a romance fic, including Galatea and one other claymore. Now she cant decide who the other claymore should be. Maybe you guys have any suggestions/ideas/requests?

Best.

Clare

Tempest35 · 2007-08-19, 13:38

@ Mandrake

- physical descriptions as you progress would be better. Also the phrases, 'front most' and 'back most', really don't work. It makes it sound awkward.'First' would have sufficed just fine in that sentance as well.

Quote:

“Great” said Cecilia, the back most warrior in the file.

Same note for this one as well - 'last' would be better IMO.
...hm, more spaces used to distinguish one character to the other.

Quote:

Seraphine, the one in front of her turned her head to face her. “It’s not like you aren’t used to this by now. Don’t tell me you’re tired already?” “Yes I am tired, tired of seeing nothing else but dust, dirt and rocks. It’s boring.” “Well I cannot argue with that” she said, sighing audibly.

When it runs together like that, it's hard to distinguish who's talking even though there are quotation marks.

jinntann · 2007-08-20, 02:26

Quote:

Originally Posted by Shizuru-chan

Hey!

My friend is writing a claymore fic, a romance fic, including Galatea and one other claymore. Now she cant decide who the other claymore should be. Maybe you guys have any suggestions/ideas/requests?

Best.

Helen! totally helen!

Panzerklein · 2007-08-20, 04:20

Quote:

Originally Posted by Shizuru-chan
Hey!

My friend is writing a claymore fic, a romance fic, including Galatea and one other claymore. Now she cant decide who the other claymore should be. Maybe you guys have any suggestions/ideas/requests?

Best.

yeah yeah yeah, just Helen

Galatea · 2007-08-20, 08:13

Quote:

Originally Posted by zato_1one

Clare

Clare would be the idea choice

Bikerider · 2007-08-20, 11:34

I'd say create your own Claymore and place her anywhere in time.

Sepia Tree · 2007-08-24, 00:51

Uh my friend and I have just finished writing a joint fic called A Prostitute's Smile and it's about....a little "situation" that Clare gets into. I posted the link below but be warned that it takes place after the events of volume 12. So no complaining about being spoiled, okay

?

Spoiler:

Any comments and criticisms will be welcomed

.

Tempest35 · 2007-08-24, 06:20

Interesting story. The little humor bits with Helen are great.
You tease me greatly with the image of Miria and a whip.

Negativedark · 2007-08-24, 12:01

You know if Claire had thought to carve her symbol on the tree next to the goddess, or something, Raki could potentally have a way to know she's alive.
But Hey I liked it. It goes with my feelings that there are two things Claire can absolutly never be fully rational about, Raki, and also Priscilla, although the priscilla fixation didn't play much of a role. Good work though Sepia Tree, I give it a A.

Ferozban · 2007-08-29, 12:27

I've heared that Toxic made a doujin fanfic. i cant find it in the picutre thread, does anyone know where it is?

Hamstadini · 2007-08-31, 01:59

Quote:

Originally Posted by Tempest35

Girl Talk is the one.

O.o Wow, people like Girl Talk? That's a surprise. Hm... I know the next segment is around here somewhere...

*Rummages*

2007-08-11, 01:15	Link #141
Tempest35 Awe of She Author Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Orlando	Great job on it Fenrir! I was beginning to wonder about the continuations. So I suppose the next installment will be about getting the uniforms eh? __________________ "Focus entirely on me, you ordinary soldier."

2007-08-11, 10:09	Link #142
Fenrir_valindri Miria's #1 Disciple Join Date: Apr 2007	Yup, yup! Will probably have Miria and Clare on that one, because Clare is the only one with experience wearing other clothes Liked your fic on the fab 4 reunion, the one posted before the story I just posted, I always thought Helen displayed alot of concern for Clare, she just did not know how to express it in a nice way __________________

2007-08-11, 10:40	Link #143
Tempest35 Awe of She Author Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Orlando	Well, she's the only one we've seen that has worn other clothes. I've always thought of the seven's clothes as being Clare's idea because of Irene. They look too similar not to be noticed. That and Irene looked ten times hawter in that outfit... Random - Now that I think of it...I wonder how they'd sound if Flora's VA and Cynthia's VA were to have switched roles...Galatea would have some serious comeptition from Flora then because of that voice. __________________ "Focus entirely on me, you ordinary soldier."

2007-08-11, 15:01	Link #144
Fenrir_valindri Miria's #1 Disciple Join Date: Apr 2007	I noticed that too, Cynthia has Flora's voice in the anime as far as I am concerned, I imagine Cynthia talking whenever I hear Flora's voice and vice-versa __________________

2007-08-12, 07:58	Link #145
Tempest35 Awe of She Author Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Orlando	Ah, Cynthia...I actually shivered when I heard her voice again. So sexy~ I'll wait a few more eps before writing about her and the 'others'. Oh, and I edited my previous two stories/posts. Now I think they're good enough to put on FF.net. Should put yours up too. __________________ "Focus entirely on me, you ordinary soldier."

2007-08-12, 10:40	Link #146
Fenrir_valindri Miria's #1 Disciple Join Date: Apr 2007	Been thinking about it, might do it sometime soon. It is a shame the anime cant seem to get some of the Claymore's looks down right, at first Ophelia looked odd, and now Flora doesnt look like herself and niether do several other Claymore's in the northern campaign. Cynthia looks alot more mature, when she looked kawaii in the manga __________________

2007-08-13, 19:36	Link #147
Tempest35 Awe of She Author Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Orlando	I know, they role-reversed Flora and Cynthia so much. I'm beginning to think of Cynthia as being hawt moreso than kawaii. I never did get into Flora all that much to tell the truth. She just didn't seem like she'd be of much importance to the overall scheme of things...and I was partly right. Should ask Toxic to do a Lo'real commercial with Flora for the Claymore girls. XDDD Man, it's not fair, so many ways to write MiriaXClare and I can't decided which one to use~!! Such a fustrating yet interesting dilemma! Can even have Helen teasing Clare about Miria wanting to go off with just the two of them and everyone else are chaperones. Can you tell, I like these two soooo much better than the accursed ShizNat. __________________ "Focus entirely on me, you ordinary soldier."

2007-08-15, 15:28	Link #148
Mandrake Senior Member Join Date: May 2004	I'm always shy to put up my written work, but how else can you improve without some comments and critique right? This is just a small part, the prologue of the storyline, the rest is allready well on its way of being written. A question , after you've read it. Spoiler: Did you miss the complete physical description of the individual character? Or should it just be built up, as I go? As for the actual prologue. Warriors of the Past Spoiler: Prologue The wastelands, desolate and lacking in life that would seemingly stretch forever to the horizon, if it wasn’t for a pair of mountains intersecting it. The temperatures reach dangerous heights during the day, and incredibly chilling temperatures during the night. It’s not a good place to be for a human, without proper attires and preparation. However the 4 individuals following the barren trail are unaffected by the scorching sun, which is unsurprising for in fact they are no normal human at all, half human and half yoma, a dreaded predator to man. The female warriors wearing broad spaulders, in tight clothing with several pieces of armour, who bear no name apart from their own…are making their way to the mountain area. They carry huge claymores on their backs, and it’s by the ease of which they can wield those weapons, that the common folk have come to call them by their swords. Pale hair, piercing silver coloured eyes, these characteristics spawned yet another name for these women, ‘Silver eyed witches’. Yet the organisation these women belong to has no name. Milana, the front most warrior and commander of the group, scans the horizon in front of her, slowing none of her pace down. “By nightfall we will reach the mountains, no resting until then.” Nightfall, she thought. How many days have we been walking? The depressing scenery reshapes at times due to vicious sandstorms filled with dust and debris, landmarks sometimes disappear under the sand while others are uncovered. Allot of people got lost in these parts which is why man made structures in key locations offered directions along with shelter. These old remnants of a different age are mostly ruins by now. “Great” said Cecilia, the back most warrior in the file. Visibly annoyed, she kicked the pebble in front of her. She always hated the long distances they have to travel, and never fails to let others know so. Seraphine, the one in front of her turned her head to face her. “It’s not like you aren’t used to this by now. Don’t tell me you’re tired already?” “Yes I am tired, tired of seeing nothing else but dust, dirt and rocks. It’s boring.” “Well I cannot argue with that” she said, sighing audibly. There is nothing much to see or do in these parts of the region, no villages or towns dozens of leagues in any direction. No chances of running in a few yoma either, the wasteland itself is the predator. Yet when she noticed a snakelike creature slithering out from behind a rock, a smile crept on her face. “Look’s like we’re not alone after all” she thought to herself. “Then why not pass time a different way? The road is long, certainly enough for a tale or two. Any of you willing to share one that you might have remembered?” Agnes waited for an answer yet silence filled the group instead. She could barely remember the last time anyone had told her a story, only that it had pleased her allot. Cecilia was the one to break the awkward silence, “I am not much of a storyteller”. “Hah, is that so? Yet you yap the most out of us lot. You’ve complained about every little thing since we’ve parted from that town.” declared Seraphine “What? Well excuse me miss, when I have something to say, I’ll say it. I won’t sit idly and be still about it.” “You wouldn’t even know the meaning of silence, if you were a deaf mute!” Seraphina was trying to suppress her snickering, but when Cecilia started mumbling incomprehensively again in her typical manner, she could no longer hold it in. In between her laughing, she managed to squeeze out a few words. “Your face, hahahaha, hilarious!” They’re at it again Milana thought., can they get any more frustrating? “You blunt cow, how I about I comment about your face after I rearrange it for you?!” “There it is again, hahahaha!” It always amazed her how quick Cecilia would respond to the tiniest provocations. And the facial expressions that accompany with her anger, made it all the more fun to persist the taunting. This hasn’t been the first mission the two collaborated on. In fact more then once they’ve simply run into each other due to the geographic nature of the two neighbouring regions they operate in. Cecilia was on the edge of blowing up, and her face showed all the signs of it too. “Hahaha, you’re too easy!” Seraphine was wiping tears away from laughter now, this is one of her more favourite ways of relieving stress, by playing Cecilia. It occurred to Cecilia, that she had yet again fallen prey to her comrade’s annoying provocations. She fell for it, every single time. “Easy, I’ll show you easy!” Milana was about to say something, but it was Agnes that stepped up. “Calm down you two, spare us this bickering” The tranquil voice of her worked rather soothingly on any kind of demeanour, including those two. Milana was at times jealous of that, these kind of situations happen more frequently then one would like. Off course today was rather innocent, but it’s not always so. When more then 2 warriors are assigned to a mission, you can bet on there being friction. Milana usually had to resort to a certain sternness and volume to her voice, which as a result commanded respect. However in other cases it could also distance her comrades or worse, frighten them. She doesn’t really understand why that happens, so she at least tries to correct it before they should part. It also didn’t help that in height, she towers well over her fellow warriors. A result of numerous factors actually. “I wasn’t always like this”, she thought to herself. These thoughts lingered for a while until Agnes spoke up again. “To my original query, none have a suitable tale for this journey?” Briefly Seraphina and Cecilia looked at each other, but it was clearly written on their faces that they didn’t. Agnes didn’t cloak her disappointment well with her smile. “That’s too bad then, I was looking forward to one. Perhaps…Oh! What about you Milana?” Milana stopped dead in her tracks, with the rest halting nervously. The suddenness of the event made the 3 uneasy, thinking Agnes might have said something wrong. The uneasiness only increased when Milana slowly turned her head meet the eyes of her comrades, and those stared right back to her. “I know a few” The uneasiness now made room for anticipation and a hint of excitement. Not so much for the fact that she did have a story, but she as a single digit warrior, in the top 5 ranking no less, would voluntarily socialise, very uncommon if not a rarity. It was when Milana revealed a mischievous smile along with her words, that there was a reason for a bit of concern. Those feelings were washed away when a gentle smile appeared in place of the mischievous one with the words uttered. “Interested?” What am I doing, I’m not much of a storyteller myself Milana thought. “You girls never have seen a male generation warrior, have you?” “I have, sorta” Seraphim declared, “It had already awakened though. It’s not exactly an experience I’m fond of remembering. “Milana was a tad surprised “You’re lucky to be alive, who was your team leader?” “Nr. 2, but even with her, we lost one comrade to injuries, and the rest was heavily wounded. I’m extremely grateful we had Nr.2 with us, had it not been for her…” Cecilia was shocked. “Are they all that powerful?” she asked. “There’s individual differences off course, and their former rankings to be considered. But yes, generally they are.” Agnes was more curious about the male warrior prior to their awakening. “You knew one personally?” “Yes, the last two of the generation.” Contemplative on where to start, she proceeded to follow the path in front of her. The words started coming out, flowing out naturally as if she has been waiting for decades to tell the story.

2007-08-19, 13:14	Link #149
Shizuru-chan Junior Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Estonia Age: 39	Hey! My friend is writing a claymore fic, a romance fic, including Galatea and one other claymore. Now she cant decide who the other claymore should be. Maybe you guys have any suggestions/ideas/requests? Best.

2007-08-20, 11:34	Link #155
Bikerider Senior Rider of Bikes Join Date: Jun 2007	I'd say create your own Claymore and place her anywhere in time.

2007-08-24, 00:51	Link #156
Sepia Tree Namie Amuro Worshipper Join Date: Aug 2007	Uh my friend and I have just finished writing a joint fic called A Prostitute's Smile and it's about....a little "situation" that Clare gets into. I posted the link below but be warned that it takes place after the events of volume 12. So no complaining about being spoiled, okay ? Spoiler: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3742348/1/ Any comments and criticisms will be welcomed .

2007-08-24, 06:20	Link #157
Tempest35 Awe of She Author Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Orlando	Interesting story. The little humor bits with Helen are great. You tease me greatly with the image of Miria and a whip. __________________ "Focus entirely on me, you ordinary soldier."

2007-08-24, 12:01	Link #158
Negativedark Proud Yuma Lover. Join Date: Apr 2007	You know if Claire had thought to carve her symbol on the tree next to the goddess, or something, Raki could potentally have a way to know she's alive. But Hey I liked it. It goes with my feelings that there are two things Claire can absolutly never be fully rational about, Raki, and also Priscilla, although the priscilla fixation didn't play much of a role. Good work though Sepia Tree, I give it a A. __________________ *YUMA PUNCH! YUMA BARRIER! YUMA HEALING MAGIC!* Yuma has a very diverse moveset.

2007-08-29, 12:27	Link #159
Ferozban Junior Member Join Date: Aug 2007	I've heared that Toxic made a doujin fanfic. i cant find it in the picutre thread, does anyone know where it is?