Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Advent000]

Originally Posted by Laith

Laith+Laptop+Insomnia+plot bunny=

Spoiler for Titleless:

Raining.

It was raining. Thunders could be heard. She was scared. Hidden in a box. Avoid the people. She had escaped. The circus left behind. Hungry. Had to find food. Hated water. Had to avoid people.

---

A blond teenager was walking to her home. It had been a horrible day in school once again. Sure it was worthy because her friends were there, which was the only thing that she liked, and because it give her time to sleep.

Suddenly she felt a drop in her head. “Great, now it´s going to rain” the girl commented irritated. She had a bad day and now this. Surely some major force was conspiring against her. Unpacking an umbrella she walked faster. Ten minutes later she regretted not taking the bus to her house. It seemed like the sky was falling in her opinion.

She walked as fast as she could until she arrived at an alley. It was a shortcut to her home and she wanted to arrive as fast as possible to avoid getting more wet. In the middle of the alley, she found something that made her stop. A brunette on the floor unconscious, dressed in rags. She would have thought that she was a random addict, except for the cat ears and the tail that she had.

She pondered the situation. If she let the girl in that place, she could die. She could call an ambulance and let it go. But something in the back in her mind told her that it was a bad idea.

“Stupid conscience” she muttered while she tried to carry the other girl. Her house wasn’t far away and she supposed nobody would see her carrying a unconscious girl.

---

The blond arrived to her house with the cat girl in her arms. She had to wet herself thanks to the strange and she hadn’t waked up. Deciding that she better dry herself and the cat girl, she carried to her room and put her in the bed. She was going to change the sheets anyway. She took a towel and quickly dried her hair and face. She would take a bath as fast as she could. With all the care in the world, she dried the other girl´s face and hair. She, more carefully, rubbed the girl´s arms, thanks to the cuts that she had.

Finishing, the blonde undressed the cat girl. It was incredible that the brunette was still asleep. When the towel was passed trough the girl´s back, she moaned of pain. A recent cut was the cause of the pain as the blonde saw.

Dressing her with a pink shirt, that was big enough to cover half of her body, she quickly went to her bathroom. Taking a long bath, she thought why she had helped the unknown girl. Sure she couldn’t have let her there, but that was not all. Maybe she didn’t want to be alone anymore or maybe the girl reminded of her. Or she could be thinking to hard about it.

---

Warm.

Not wet. Rain heard from far away. Light. Comfortable. She opened her eyes. Where was she? Footsteps. A person. She had to escape. She saw the window. She had to leave before the person arrived. Tried to open the window. She couldn’t. The door opened.

“You are awake” The other said. She noticed that the other girl was in the window “What are you doing?” She asked in curious tone.

She had to escape. To leave. She would hurt her. She would hit her.
“Come here” The girl said with a smile. She would be hurt if she didn’t obey. She knew it. She got closer. A hand moved. Pain would come. “Here good girl” She petted her head. She was confused. She tilted her head.

---

The blonde decided to keep her or the equivalent to that, for a while. Sure she would have to made sacrifices to feed another mouth, but she would manage.
“Do you have a name?” the blonde asked. She didn’t know if the cat girl could talk.

The girl tried hard to speak. “Na…n…no…ha…a”

“Nanoha?” the blonde asked. The other girl nodded slowly. “Mine´s Fate” she petted her head again “I am going to take care of you okay?” The brunette stood there not understanding the meaning of the words and yet feeling happy.

Q= Do I continue or not?

Definately continue.

[yuiseppe]

Originally Posted by Allquall

Because like a fourth-grade kid, I can't leave a challenge (or a triple-dog dare) unanswered.

Spoiler for Food Discussion:

-katsudon

That was rather cute Although I'd probably maim anyone who did that to MY Oreos.

Originally Posted by Laith

Laith+Laptop+Insomnia+plot bunny=

Spoiler for Titleless:

-tonkotsu raamen-

The blond arrived to her house with the cat girl in her arms. She had to wet herself thanks to the strange and she hadn’t waked up. Deciding that she better dry herself and the cat girl, she carried to her room and put her in the bed. She was going to change the sheets anyway. She took a towel and quickly dried her hair and face. She would take a bath as fast as she could. With all the care in the world, she dried the other girl´s face and hair. She, more carefully, rubbed the girl´s arms, thanks to the cuts that she had.

It's a bit awkward parsing that passage, especially the 2nd line. It has an unfortunately comic effect. Also, I think a bit more punctuation would make the sentences flow better - commas work well in that department. Keep up the practice!


And since it's that time of the year when I'm sick for no good reason...I've had a little bit TOO much time to read the shorts and cracks posted here :S

There's too much estrogen and not enough testosterone (well, what with Hayate and her lesbian army...). SO. In the name of TSS and Bringing Sexy Back:

Spoiler for Zafira's sexy back (NEntirelySFW - your mind may imply the full monty if that's the sort of mind you have):

So I was bored and picked up a back muscle study. Then I got more bored and added wolf ears.

I've fuzzed out perceivable 'naughty' bits, but I'll post it as a link only just in case.

Cross-hatching with digital ink gone wrong

I do of course have a fuller version *snicker*

[Allquall]

Originally Posted by yuiseppe

Spoiler for Zafira's sexy back (NEntirelySFW - your mind may imply the full monty if that's the sort of mind you have):

So I was bored and picked up a back muscle study. Then I got more bored and added wolf ears.

I've fuzzed out perceivable 'naughty' bits, but I'll post it as a link only just in case.

Cross-hatching with digital ink gone wrong

I do of course have a fuller version *snicker*

BRAVO! *Claps like a seal on cocaine* That is gorgeous!

Those of you who post on FF.N, is anyone else mesmerized by the new "reader traffic" feature? I'm finding the country breakdown is a lot like collecting the wizard cards in Chocolate Frogs or Pokemon. "Another hit from the States...pbbbbt...I've already got twenty of them. Oooo...Saudi Arabia...the "Mew" of visitor hits!"

[Keroko]

New sound stage material is awesome, TSS is going to love this part: Vivio really does call Zafira Zaffy.

[Kha]

What still stuns me is, is this Zaffy the same Zaffy who refused to turn into cute form?!

Nevertheless, its a welcome change.

[Keroko]

It was also good to hear that Zafira loves to play around, and is really good with children. Babysitter Zafira made canon much?

I'm telling you, Seven Arcs reads these boards. <_<

On the other hand, really bad news for a lot of NanoFate shippers, Fate-mama is officially axed in the new Sound Stage, with Nanoha saying that Vivio views her more as an older sister.

[Kha]

*hides secret commset leading to Tsuzuki*

...

Yes everything is going according to plan.

[Preston]

I'm going on a trip (wouldn't call it a holiday myself) tomorrow for a week, which will take me away from the internet in all probability bar perhaps the spattering of the joys of 56k here and there. This means, in all likelihood, no writing and no editing.

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Laith

Laith+Laptop+Insomnia+plot bunny=

Spoiler for Titleless:

Raining.

It was raining. Thunders could be heard. She was scared. Hidden in a box. Avoid the people. She had escaped. The circus left behind. Hungry. Had to find food. Hated water. Had to avoid people.

---

A blond teenager was walking to her home. It had been a horrible day in school once again. Sure it was worthy because her friends were there, which was the only thing that she liked, and because it give her time to sleep.

Suddenly she felt a drop in her head. “Great, now it´s going to rain” the girl commented irritated. She had a bad day and now this. Surely some major force was conspiring against her. Unpacking an umbrella she walked faster. Ten minutes later she regretted not taking the bus to her house. It seemed like the sky was falling in her opinion.

She walked as fast as she could until she arrived at an alley. It was a shortcut to her home and she wanted to arrive as fast as possible to avoid getting more wet. In the middle of the alley, she found something that made her stop. A brunette on the floor unconscious, dressed in rags. She would have thought that she was a random addict, except for the cat ears and the tail that she had.

She pondered the situation. If she let the girl in that place, she could die. She could call an ambulance and let it go. But something in the back in her mind told her that it was a bad idea.

“Stupid conscience” she muttered while she tried to carry the other girl. Her house wasn’t far away and she supposed nobody would see her carrying a unconscious girl.

---

The blond arrived to her house with the cat girl in her arms. She had to wet herself thanks to the strange and she hadn’t waked up. Deciding that she better dry herself and the cat girl, she carried to her room and put her in the bed. She was going to change the sheets anyway. She took a towel and quickly dried her hair and face. She would take a bath as fast as she could. With all the care in the world, she dried the other girl´s face and hair. She, more carefully, rubbed the girl´s arms, thanks to the cuts that she had.

Finishing, the blonde undressed the cat girl. It was incredible that the brunette was still asleep. When the towel was passed trough the girl´s back, she moaned of pain. A recent cut was the cause of the pain as the blonde saw.

Dressing her with a pink shirt, that was big enough to cover half of her body, she quickly went to her bathroom. Taking a long bath, she thought why she had helped the unknown girl. Sure she couldn’t have let her there, but that was not all. Maybe she didn’t want to be alone anymore or maybe the girl reminded of her. Or she could be thinking to hard about it.

---

Warm.

Not wet. Rain heard from far away. Light. Comfortable. She opened her eyes. Where was she? Footsteps. A person. She had to escape. She saw the window. She had to leave before the person arrived. Tried to open the window. She couldn’t. The door opened.

“You are awake” The other said. She noticed that the other girl was in the window “What are you doing?” She asked in curious tone.

She had to escape. To leave. She would hurt her. She would hit her.
“Come here” The girl said with a smile. She would be hurt if she didn’t obey. She knew it. She got closer. A hand moved. Pain would come. “Here good girl” She petted her head. She was confused. She tilted her head.

---

The blonde decided to keep her or the equivalent to that, for a while. Sure she would have to made sacrifices to feed another mouth, but she would manage.
“Do you have a name?” the blonde asked. She didn’t know if the cat girl could talk.

The girl tried hard to speak. “Na…n…no…ha…a”

“Nanoha?” the blonde asked. The other girl nodded slowly. “Mine´s Fate” she petted her head again “I am going to take care of you okay?” The brunette stood there not understanding the meaning of the words and yet feeling happy.

Q= Do I continue or not?

Didn't flow very well, but in all it was cute to see the Neko!Nanoha comics done in a fic-type setting. Definetly continue.

Originally Posted by yuiseppe

And since it's that time of the year when I'm sick for no good reason...I've had a little bit TOO much time to read the shorts and cracks posted here :S

There's too much estrogen and not enough testosterone (well, what with Hayate and her lesbian army...). SO. In the name of TSS and Bringing Sexy Back:

Spoiler for Zafira's sexy back (NEntirelySFW - your mind may imply the full monty if that's the sort of mind you have):

So I was bored and picked up a back muscle study. Then I got more bored and added wolf ears.

I've fuzzed out perceivable 'naughty' bits, but I'll post it as a link only just in case.

Cross-hatching with digital ink gone wrong

I do of course have a fuller version *snicker*

Nice!

Originally Posted by Allquall

BRAVO! *Claps like a seal on cocaine* That is gorgeous!

Those of you who post on FF.N, is anyone else mesmerized by the new "reader traffic" feature? I'm finding the country breakdown is a lot like collecting the wizard cards in Chocolate Frogs or Pokemon. "Another hit from the States...pbbbbt...I've already got twenty of them. Oooo...Saudi Arabia...the "Mew" of visitor hits!"

I just saw that, it's so cool :3!

Originally Posted by Preston

I'm going on a trip (wouldn't call it a holiday myself) tomorrow for a week, which will take me away from the internet in all probability bar perhaps the spattering of the joys of 56k here and there. This means, in all likelihood, no writing and no editing.

Have fun!

[Raging Heart]

Originally Posted by Preston

I'm going on a trip (wouldn't call it a holiday myself) tomorrow for a week, which will take me away from the internet in all probability bar perhaps the spattering of the joys of 56k here and there. This means, in all likelihood, no writing and no editing.

cool i wish i can go on trip, lucky you.

damn where i am, it's so damn hot, anyway.

have fun Preston and relax.

[Advent000]

Originally Posted by Preston

I'm going on a trip (wouldn't call it a holiday myself) tomorrow for a week, which will take me away from the internet in all probability bar perhaps the spattering of the joys of 56k here and there. This means, in all likelihood, no writing and no editing.

Have a nice time.

[Allquall]

This was a lot funnier in my head.

Spoiler for Vita's Popsicles:

Vita helped Nanoha clean up the commissary after the celebration of another group of trainees passing their coursework. It had been a long month, but she and Nanoha were pleased with the ending results.

“Another group flies away from the nest, Vita-chan,” smiled Nanoha as she wiped down a table.

“At least, this group has a better chance of survival than the last group we had,” replied Vita.

“No kidding,” chuckled Nanoha in a rare confession.

The tables soon sparkled as trainer and assistant turned to leave.

“Wait!” came a cry from the kitchen, “Captain! Please, wait!”

Nanoha spun around with Raising Heart ready for action but relaxed when she saw the portly cook come waddling out of the kitchen with a worried look on her face.

“What is it?” Nanoha asked.

“There are too many leftovers from the reception. The freezer’s jammed full, and I have an entire case of Popsicles left over. Can you guys take them home?”

Nanoha and Vita looked at each other in confusion.

“Vivio might like some Popsicles,” Vita shrugged.

“Vivio would gnaw on a lead pipe so long as it was covered in sugar,” Nanoha sighed before turning to the desperate cook, “Here, I’ll take a bag of them. Fate likes them too.”

The cook turned toward Vita, and the redheaded Knight blushed in indecision.

“Give her a bag as well,” ordered Nanoha with a smirk.

“I didn’t say that I wanted any, Nanoha!”

“Who are you trying to fool, Vita-chan?” Nanoha laughed, “But if you really don’t want them, I’m sure there’s bound to be at least one person in your house who will.”

“That’s true,” said Vita with a stiff upper lip, “Hayate might like them.”

“Suuuuuuure,” teased Nanoha rolling her eyes.

--

Vita walked home carrying her clear plastic bag full of Popsicles while trying to keep it from dripping on the sidewalk.

“I wonder what the big fuss over these is?” she asked herself while liberating a Popsicle from its packaging.

‘I’ve never heard of a blue raspberry before,’ wondered Vita as she looked at the large blue frozen treat, ‘Do they really exist?’

She didn’t deliberate long before sticking the blue Popsicle in her mouth. Instantly, a smile pulled back her cheeks, and a look of child-like delight appeared on her face.

“These are wonderful!” she rejoiced while taking out another one.

By the time she returned home, she only had four Popsicles left, and she had decided that sharing would not be an option for these delicious pieces of frozen ambrosia. Thus, she placed them in the back of the Hayate’s freezer while she walked back to her room to work on filing her observation reports.

Shamal came walking into the kitchen with Agito following her.

“Thank you so much for helping me today, Agito,” said Shamal softly, “I don’t know what I would have done if you hadn’t passed by.”

“It was my pleasure, Shamal,” replied Agito politely.

Shamal opened the freezer to grab a couple ice cubes for her glass of water.

“Oooo…Popsicles!” gasped Agito as she peered into the foggy freezer.

“Here,” Shamal said sweetly while handing a Popsicle to Agito, “Consider it a ‘Thank you’ for your hard work.”

The tiny unison device beamed as she grappled with the treat that was as large as she was. She buzzed away happily causing Shamal to smile.

“What did you do?!” yelled a voice from the hallway.

“Oh, I just gave Agito a Popsicle for all her hard work today,” replied Shamal innocently, “What’s wrong? Did she drip on the carpet?”

“No!” Vita shouted in anger, “Those were my Popsicles! You can’t give away things that aren't yours!”

“It was only one,” Shamal cowered trying to defend herself, “I’ll replace it.”

“Two!” Vita yelled while holding up two of her fingers, “Two of MY Popsicles!”

“No, I only gave Agito one.”

“It will be two! Two of my precious Popsicles!”

“What makes you say-“

A loud wail erupted from the other room, and the cry quickly sped to the kitchen. Shamal stared in shock as Rein’s tearful face looked into hers. Vita’s scowl deepened.

“Why (hic) did Agito get a Popsicle and not meeeeeeeee?” the unison device cried as tears and snot fell everywhere, “I helped tooooooo!”

Shamal looked at Vita for some sort of rescue, but the redhead only glared at her with a look that said, “I told you so.”

“I’m sorry, Rein, but they’re Vita’s, and I gave one to Agito by mistake.”

The silver-haired unison turned her teary eyes to Vita and flew over to the pint-sized Knight.

“Vita…(hic)…”

“NO!”

“WHAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!” Rein cried, and her face contorted in her emotional distress.

“Vita, please?” begged Shamal covering her ears as the screams echoed throughout the kitchen.

Vita’s tightly drawn mouth twisted as her annoyance with Rein grew.

“FINE!” Vita finally shouted at Rein, “But you can’t have one now!”

“WHHHHY NOT!” cried Rein.

“Because only happy people can have Popsicles,” said Vita gruffly, “Whiners can eat their own frozen tears!”

“I’m not (hic) a whiner!” sobbed Rein.

“Well, you’re not getting a Popsicle like this either,” said Vita smugly, “No happy; no Popsicle.”

Vita tried her best not to laugh at the floating face a few inches away from her’s as it contorted and struggled to smile. Rein’s eyes were bloodshot, and her cheeks were stained with tear trails, yet there was a giant fake, toothy smile plastered on her face. It looked psychotic.

Vita couldn’t control herself any longer and burst into laughter while taking one of her treasured popsicles out of the freezer and tossing it at Rein. The tiny unison device’s face transformed into a real smile as soon as she received the treat, and she buzzed back from where she came from yelling, “I got one too, Agito! So Nanny-nanny-boo-boo!”

Vita’s mood soured as she listened to the unison devices enjoying her Popsicles.

“I’m sorry, Vita,” said Shamal cautiously, “At least, there are two more right?”

Vita started to walk to her room but stopped and said, “Wait a second! What happened to you replacing them?”

But when she looked behind her, she found that Shamal had already made her escape. She grumpily went back to typing her report

“She just gives away my Popsicles like…” Vita’s mumblings trailed off as she focused on her report and typed angrily.

“Why so glum, Vita-chan?” Vita heard Hayate say, “There are Popsicles in the fridge.”

Vita looked up in shock to see Hayate and Zafira munching on the last of her Popsicles.

“My…Pop…” she managed to say before her voice broke into sobs.

“Oh, no Popsicles for you,” said Hayate, her lips smacking as she sucked on the Popsicle, “Only happy people get Popsicles.”

[Raging Heart]

Originally Posted by Allquall

This was a lot funnier in my head.

Spoiler for Vita's Popsicles:

Vita helped Nanoha clean up the commissary after the celebration of another group of trainees passing their coursework. It had been a long month, but she and Nanoha were pleased with the ending results.

“Another group flies away from the nest, Vita-chan,” smiled Nanoha as she wiped down a table.

“At least, this group has a better chance of survival than the last group we had,” replied Vita.

“No kidding,” chuckled Nanoha in a rare confession.

The tables soon sparkled as trainer and assistant turned to leave.

“Wait!” came a cry from the kitchen, “Captain! Please, wait!”

Nanoha spun around with Raising Heart ready for action but relaxed when she saw the portly cook come waddling out of the kitchen with a worried look on her face.

“What is it?” Nanoha asked.

“There are too many leftovers from the reception. The freezer’s jammed full, and I have an entire case of Popsicles left over. Can you guys take them home?”

Nanoha and Vita looked at each other in confusion.

“Vivio might like some Popsicles,” Vita shrugged.

“Vivio would gnaw on a lead pipe so long as it was covered in sugar,” Nanoha sighed before turning to the desperate cook, “Here, I’ll take a bag of them. Fate likes them too.”

The cook turned toward Vita, and the redheaded Knight blushed in indecision.

“Give her a bag as well,” ordered Nanoha with a smirk.

“I didn’t say that I wanted any, Nanoha!”

“Who are you trying to fool, Vita-chan?” Nanoha laughed, “But if you really don’t want them, I’m sure there’s bound to be at least one person in your house who will.”

“That’s true,” said Vita with a stiff upper lip, “Hayate might like them.”

“Suuuuuuure,” teased Nanoha rolling her eyes.

--

Vita walked home carrying her clear plastic bag full of Popsicles while trying to keep it from dripping on the sidewalk.

“I wonder what the big fuss over these is?” she asked herself while liberating a Popsicle from its packaging.

‘I’ve never heard of a blue raspberry before,’ wondered Vita as she looked at the large blue frozen treat, ‘Do they really exist?’

She didn’t deliberate long before sticking the blue Popsicle in her mouth. Instantly, a smile pulled back her cheeks, and a look of child-like delight appeared on her face.

“These are wonderful!” she rejoiced while taking out another one.

By the time she returned home, she only had four Popsicles left, and she had decided that sharing would not be an option for these delicious pieces of frozen ambrosia. Thus, she placed them in the back of the Hayate’s freezer while she walked back to her room to work on filing her observation reports.

Shamal came walking into the kitchen with Agito following her.

“Thank you so much for helping me today, Agito,” said Shamal softly, “I don’t know what I would have done if you hadn’t passed by.”

“It was my pleasure, Shamal,” replied Agito politely.

Shamal opened the freezer to grab a couple ice cubes for her glass of water.

“Oooo…Popsicles!” gasped Agito as she peered into the foggy freezer.

“Here,” Shamal said sweetly while handing a Popsicle to Agito, “Consider it a ‘Thank you’ for your hard work.”

The tiny unison device beamed as she grappled with the treat that was as large as she was. She buzzed away happily causing Shamal to smile.

“What did you do?!” yelled a voice from the hallway.

“Oh, I just gave Agito a Popsicle for all her hard work today,” replied Shamal innocently, “What’s wrong? Did she drip on the carpet?”

“No!” Vita shouted in anger, “Those were my Popsicles! You can’t give away things that aren't yours!”

“It was only one,” Shamal cowered trying to defend herself, “I’ll replace it.”

“Two!” Vita yelled while holding up two of her fingers, “Two of MY Popsicles!”

“No, I only gave Agito one.”

“It will be two! Two of my precious Popsicles!”

“What makes you say-“

A loud wail erupted from the other room, and the cry quickly sped to the kitchen. Shamal stared in shock as Rein’s tearful face looked into hers. Vita’s scowl deepened.

“Why (hic) did Agito get a Popsicle and not meeeeeeeee?” the unison device cried as tears and snot fell everywhere, “I helped tooooooo!”

Shamal looked at Vita for some sort of rescue, but the redhead only glared at her with a look that said, “I told you so.”

“I’m sorry, Rein, but they’re Vita’s, and I gave one to Agito by mistake.”

The silver-haired unison turned her teary eyes to Vita and flew over to the pint-sized Knight.

“Vita…(hic)…”

“NO!”

“WHAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!” Rein cried, and her face contorted in her emotional distress.

“Vita, please?” begged Shamal covering her ears as the screams echoed throughout the kitchen.

Vita’s tightly drawn mouth twisted as her annoyance with Rein grew.

“FINE!” Vita finally shouted at Rein, “But you can’t have one now!”

“WHHHHY NOT!” cried Rein.

“Because only happy people can have Popsicles,” said Vita gruffly, “Whiners can eat their own frozen tears!”

“I’m not (hic) a whiner!” sobbed Rein.

“Well, you’re not getting a Popsicle like this either,” said Vita smugly, “No happy; no Popsicle.”

Vita tried her best not to laugh at the floating face a few inches away from her’s as it contorted and struggled to smile. Rein’s eyes were bloodshot, and her cheeks were stained with tear trails, yet there was a giant fake, toothy smile plastered on her face. It looked psychotic.

Vita couldn’t control herself any longer and burst into laughter while taking one of her treasured popsicles out of the freezer and tossing it at Rein. The tiny unison device’s face transformed into a real smile as soon as she received the treat, and she buzzed back from where she came from yelling, “I got one too, Agito! So Nanny-nanny-boo-boo!”

Vita’s mood soured as she listened to the unison devices enjoying her Popsicles.

“I’m sorry, Vita,” said Shamal cautiously, “At least, there are two more right?”

Vita started to walk to her room but stopped and said, “Wait a second! What happened to you replacing them?”

But when she looked behind her, she found that Shamal had already made her escape. She grumpily went back to typing her report

“She just gives away my Popsicles like…” Vita’s mumblings trailed off as she focused on her report and typed angrily.

“Why so glum, Vita-chan?” Vita heard Hayate say, “There are Popsicles in the fridge.”

Vita looked up in shock to see Hayate and Zafira munching on the last of her Popsicles.

“My…Pop…” she managed to say before her voice broke into sobs.

“Oh, no Popsicles for you,” said Hayate, her lips smacking as she sucked on the Popsicle, “Only happy people get Popsicles.”

lolz, nice one.

i have a huge smile... seee....

[Keroko]

Yeah, me too. Poor Vita, eternal loliness got the better of her.

[Allquall]

The Name of War
Chapter Five: Trallus and Cincinnatus
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4380342/5/

Fluff chapter coming next but not this one.

[Vie]

Originally Posted by Keroko

It was also good to hear that Zafira loves to play around, and is really good with children. Babysitter Zafira made canon much?

I'm telling you, Seven Arcs reads these boards. <_<

On the other hand, really bad news for a lot of NanoFate shippers, Fate-mama is officially axed in the new Sound Stage, with Nanoha saying that Vivio views her more as an older sister.

Thanks for the Sound Stage info, but damn, I would really preferred to not have known that.
Poor Fate, imagine the amount of angst that could be done when she loves Nanoha in that way, and even Vivio doesn't help her cause.

[Keroko]

Actually, according to Nanoha Fate is deliberatly keeping distance from Vivio, because Nanoha is the real parent. Vivio still loves Fate very much, but their relationship is more sisterly-like rather then mother-daughter, that's Nanoha's part.

So no angst. Fortunately.

[BPHaru]

Originally Posted by Keroko

Actually, according to Nanoha Fate is deliberatly keeping distance from Vivio, because Nanoha is the real parent. Vivio still loves Fate very much, but their relationship is more sisterly-like rather then mother-daughter, that's Nanoha's part.

Yeah, although that’s mostly Hayate’s thinking, what would be good to know is Vivio’s POV. But as you said, according to the last sound track she still loves both Nanoha and Fate, so I doubt that she would start calling Fate-mama other way. Even if she knows that she’s not really her mama, Fate will always has that motherly image ^^

About the drama, you’re right. Sadly we will never get any drama, or at least any well developed drama from this kind of show… that’s a pain, since that’s my favorite gender

If you want to keep commenting about this topic I propose to move this to Music discussion, to don’t go more Off-Topic.


Going back on topic:

Have you guys seen Luv Hotel?

For those who haven’t, it’s an AU setting about Nanoha adopting Vivio because everyone else from her family rejected the girl, but the young mother isn’t in the best of the conditions and being alone she has some problems financial problems and problems taking care of her daughter while she’s at work… and then in the other hand we have our favorite blonde, who is a multi-hotel heir set on revenge, in need of a fake wife, and disposed to everything, including taking advantage of our stubborn Nanoha.

I recommend this fic, give it an opportunity, it only has 3 chapters yet and I can’t wait for the next one, the plot is very interesting ^^

Cuídense y sigan sonriendo

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by BPHaru

If you want to keep commenting about this topic I propose to move this to Music discussion, to don’t go more Off-Topic.

Sure thing.

Originally Posted by BPHaru

Going back on topic:

Have you guys seen Luv Hotel?

For those who haven’t, it’s an AU setting about Nanoha adopting Vivio because everyone else from her family rejected the girl, but the young mother isn’t in the best of the conditions and being alone she has some problems financial problems and problems taking care of her daughter while she’s at work… and then in the other hand we have our favorite blonde, who is a multi-hotel heir set on revenge, in need of a fake wife, and disposed to everything, including taking advantage of our stubborn Nanoha.

I recommend this fic, give it an opportunity, it only has 3 chapters yet and I can’t wait for the next one, the plot is very interesting ^^

Cuídense y sigan sonriendo

Drama meters are spiking just from the summary. I'll give it a shot.

[Evil Rick]

I'been workin a lot in my gramma, once again I ask you to give me another chance to surprise you,

Spoiler for Chapter 2:

Spoiler for Event 2:

Vita awaked confuesd, she had have that strange dream again, she, dressed with a very ellegant european costume, with a doll on her hads, tring to reach that door, but this time, when she reached it, a strangue man stoped her from opening it, it was a tall man, but Vita couldn't remember his face

She found herself on a hospital bed, flowers and chocolates around her with leyends like "get better soon" or "we love you"

"Vita! You finally awake!" Vita turned and saw Shamal getting inside the room, the doctor aproached to her and kissed the red haired girl in the forehead before start checking her eyes and face in order to see if everything was okay

"Shamal. Wh-What happened?"

"You were unconcius for 3 days"

"3 days?! But... but..."

"You were druged Vita, with a strange kind of allusinogen, when we found you, your blood was full of it, the good thing is that I managed to aislate it, creating a counter sustance who encapsulated the drug allowing your body to expulsate it through your sweat"

"Uh?" Vita replyed totally confused, Shamal just giggled

"I mean that I created the antidote... but if I had delayed a few hours more... your mind would broke, this sustance create strong allusinations who are not, well... very nice"

"Yeah, that's for sur..." Before Vita could finish, she remembered what happened on the roof in the junkyard

"Maligno! Were is he?"

"He escaped"

"Damn it! And Parca?"

"Eh... Who?"

"Parca! The guy who was with Maligno! The one who launched me the gas, that, made me this!"

"Don't... you'r telling me that this Parca guy used the allusinogen as a... weapon?"

"The guy is not a human" Vita said "He launched the gas from his mouth, and he said something... strange..."

"What?"

"He said 'You are not as strong as she said' or something like that"

"I think that we must see Hayate" shamal Replyed
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"Nanoha"

"mmm..."

"Nanoha"

"mmm..."

"Nanoha!"

"Woa!" Nanoha falled from the bed because of the scream of Fate, she quickly reincorporated

"We are late Nanoha" Fate said pointing at the clock on the wall "We were suposed to randevous with Hayate like half hour ago!"

"S-Sorry Fate,it's just that... woahhh... Lately I had been very tired, I supose that it's all that train with..."

"Stop laing to me!"

"Eh?" Only at this point Nanoha noticed that Fate was really angry

Fate throw Nanoha's clothes to the bed and without saing something she turned away

"I'll wait for you down in the car!" Fate said before closing the door

Really confused, Nanoha get dressed and quickly ran downstairs in order to randevous with Hayate who was alredy sited in the driver's site of the vehicle, Nanoha opened the door of the passager's site and got inside the vehicle, Fate started to drive without saing a word

"Ehhh.... Fate, it's everything okay?"

"No,Nanoha"

"I'm sorry for fallen asleep again, but as I said..."

"It's not for that!"

"Uh.... so?"

Fate toke from her pocket a paper and gave it to Nanoha, she opened it and saw what it was, what she was tring to hide from Fate since long ago: Vivio's Notes

"Oh, crap" Nanoha replyed

"5 on magical actitudes & aplications, 5 on belkan escriture and lecture, she never presented half of the homeworks and 0 on conduct!"

"I... I'm sorry Fate..."

"Why you never told me?"

"I knew that you would get angry with her"

"And why shouldn't I get angry with her?! Nanoha, she's 16! She is no longer a little kid, she must understeand that not all is 'games and friends'... I know that you really love her, and belive me, I love her as much as you... but she must madurate"

"I know... but, I still saw her as my little girl"

"Nanoha, I..." Before Fate could finish, the sound of the vehicle's comunicator started to bip, Fate activated it and in the olografic screen appeared Hayate's face

"Hey, I finally found you, I was just about to call the aereal and naval force, were have you been?"

"Hi Hayate, eh, sorry, we are a bit late, but we'll arrive in a few minutes" Fate replyed

"Well, you better get hurry, Vita just awaked and she needs to tell us something important"

"Vita awaked? Good news! Yeah, we are on our way" Nanoha replyed
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1 Hour later, TSAB Section 6 departments, Hayate's office"

"An allusionogen Gas?" Fate asked

"Yes, Vita was drugen with a powerfull allusinogen gas" Shamal replyed

"Maligno?" Hayate asked

"No" Vita replyed "Another guy named Parca, he shooted the gas against me"

"Vita, we searched the data and there is no information about any criminal named 'Parca' are you sure?"

"Totally! The guy wasn't human, and he was sided with Maligno, so if we find Maligno, we find Parca"

"Right, we alredy have an entire squad of intelligence searching for Maligno" Hayate said while standing up from her chair "We only need to wait for him to make a bad move and we will have him"

While Hayate keeped talking, Nanoha noticed that Vita looked very strange, she aproached to the little mage and asked her

"Hey Vita, it's everytinh Okay?"

"Uh? Yeah, yeah... uh, don't be silly! Oh, I forgot to ask, Is Tiana Okay?"

"Yes, she's fine and worried for you, she thinks that is her fault that Maligno managed to escape"

"Mmm... Maligno tricked her, it's not her fault"

Nanoha didn't know, but Vita was worried about that strange dream of she, tring to reach that door, it looked so real, morte than a dream it seemed like a memory, an old one

In that moment Signum entered in the room

"Hayate"

"What is it Signum?" Hayate asked

"We found him"
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Central City, Mall's auto parking

The expensive vehicles arrived to the Auto Parking of the main Mall of CentralCity, mens well armed get down of the cars, drug traficants

"Well, my dear friends! Nice to see you again!" Maligno said aproaching to the leaders of the mens with Parca walking behind him

"Keep your formalities for yourself!" One of the traficants said

"Oh... come on! Don't need to get angry" Maligno replyed

"Really?" The traficant made a signal and two of the mans pulled out a corpse of a guy out of one of the car's trunk and droped it at Maligno's feets "This is what your stupid sustance makes to our clients, how are we suposed to sell drugs to the adicts of the city, if there are no adicts on the city?!"

"But they are buing, no?"

"Listen you Asshole! We are not very pleased, in fact, maybe we will blow your head and the one of your friend with the Halloween mask just for fun, how about that?"

"Oh my sweet heart, we don't want to start an unecesary fight. Did we?" A female's voice replyed

A woman dressed in black appeared behind Maligno and Parca, she wasn't very tall, her entire body was covered with a long black tunic, black gloves, and a silver maks covering her face, she had in her hands a long black cane, she stood in the front of the traficants "I asure you that our sustance is the best that you can find, and it's cheap, we had alredy on that truck 5 tons of the stuff and I'm only asking you something in exchange... Did you have it?"

The traficant pulled out of his jacket an old scroll, it looked very old, tied with a little red rope

"Ahhh,my dear, I could kiss you for that, now give it to me and you can take your drug" The misterius woman replyed

"You know" The traficant said "I was very curius of why you were giving to me all that drug only for a pice of paper that I stoled from the belkan museum, it was very illustrative to find all this about... the order of the 7 white kings... And the Master Light"

"I told you to NOT READ IT!"

"The price is doubled... and I want money, not your stupid Drug"

"I will not bagger with a stupid Drug traficant like you!" The strange woman sounded very angry " Give me now the scroll and I'll conciderate to not kill you"

"To bad you pea..."


One of the cars expolted interrupting the guy, after that Nanoha appeared among the traficants

"TSAB! You are under arrest!"

"Shit! RUUUUUN!" The traficant said, all the mens started tyo run away, but the place got full of mages and all them were catched"

"This Idiots again!" Maligno said

"Time to go" Parca replyed

Maligno, Parca and the woman in Black ran back to the truck in wich they arrived

"Is he!" Vita screamed pointing at Parca "Some of the mages ran at the fugitives and tried to get them, but Parca launched the strange gas against them, the mages falled screaming and covering their faces, Maligno and the other got aboard the truck and started to drive out of the complex

"Oh no, you don't" Vita said while starting to chase the vehicle, the driver was good, Vita saw that Maligno, Parca and the woman in Black ran at the back of the truck, so the driver was another one, Vita keeped fling behind the vehicle, she didn't wanted to attack it directly, because she wanted to capture them alive

"Stop!!! Stop right now!!!" Vita screamed while following the Vehicle but in an instant, the vehicle made a 180º turn and now was runing againt Vita, the mage stoped and she managed to saw the driver, the only thing she saw was a blue face, a human blue face after that, in a green flash the vehicle disapeared, it was teletransported, someone teletransported the truck out of the place

"What the Hell was that?!" Vita said to herself, only a very powerfull mage would be able to teletransportate something so big in less than a second

"Vita!" Nanoha screamed while fling in direction to the little mage

"Were are they?"

"Someone teletransportated them out, I wonder what did they wanted?"

"I think that it was this" Nanoha said while showing a strange, old scroll to Vita

EDIT: Oh, I almost forgot, Page claim... uhmmm

Oh, I know, Page claim in the name of Satashi finishing "To Make a Mother Proud" XP