Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion (second reincarnation)

[Kha]

Another intriguing piece of Khrack hit me just now, and even for the World of Negiha, Kouya may be dropped completely. In his place would be someone from the other side...

Spoiler for Kha...:

...the Death Knight.

EDIT: Baah maintenance night. Maybe Caa the Cleric can be up tonight.

[Kagerou]

Originally Posted by Kha

Kluize: ...everything will go according to plan.

*facepalm.jpg*

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

Aha...this sounds quite...intriguing. What interests me most about this is where it'll go from here. You can do so much more from the shadows than from the light.

Indeed.

Originally Posted by Comartemis

In other news, welcome back Kagerou! Alpha won't really be missed on this end, to be perfectly honest, but I'm looking forward to this new project of yours, assuming at least that it's decidedly less angsty than Alpha was.

Maybe, maybe not, I don't know yet. Only time will tell...

Originally Posted by Keroko

Alexander should get along great with Uomo.

Alexander gets along great with a lot of people, but only those he values get the smallest amount of lies...

Originally Posted by Keroko

I see, experimental subjects. Well, we know the TSAB High Council definetely wasn't beyond this, so it makes perfect sense.

I certainly hope so.

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Actually it was supposed to be German. According to a translator i checked with, it's supposed to mean "Shadow Man."

Supposed to, anyway...

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

I'm still @___@ at black-haired Rena. It just doesn't compute. And yet it also computes.

It grows on you :3

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

....somehow.... I get the feeling you're disapointed in me, Kanchou.... -_-;;

/me gazes sadly at the paperwork he has to do here and in real life.

Well, I was planning on refining Franz and toning down a number of Halo elements. But.... i think I'll need to read more fantasy. My current readinglist is as follows: The Royal Marines: From Sea Soldiers to a Special Force, Downrange: SEALs in the War on Terror, Marine Sniper: 93 Confirmed Kills, Black Hawk Down and Inside Delta Force.

Yeah, infuse some fantasy into your MilSci...
I'm not disappointed in you. On the flip side, I promoted you XD.

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Rebuilt!? Back to the roots of FA? @__@

Zinitra's skillset looks good and i can see more than a few spells that were dropped from previous concepts before...

Indeed...

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

History.... zomgzomgzomg this is the stuff we used to come up with! This spark! This thing that I have lost!

Like I said, it's all come back to me...

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

THIS! IS! SHIN ALPHA! The same vibe that ran in SA runs now in the Black Order!

...

*goes off to read old SA to get back into the feel of things*

I'm really, really, really excited about this. Looks awesome.

*begins preparations to ship Zirnitra/Rena*

*headdesk* not what I planned in mind, but whatever works for you I guess .

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Well, now that the OFM are mine to play with.... once I finish Soldiers of the Wasteland and Task Force 6, I'll take a break, do some long thinking on how I want to proceed...

Just don't mess things up...

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Having said all that.... I should have never brought Chief in. -_- SHoulda just left him out and kept Johnson. The Black Badass Sergeant Major is both a trope and Truth in Television.

Maybe.... but either way, we work with what we have now.

@Thread!

URGENT MESSAGE!!

Over the course of the next several days, I will be sending Private Messages to a great deal of you, and each one will work on different subjects. In an effort to not only unite the OCT tighter than ever through my work, I will be requesting the help and support of several of the members here, whether it be work with their OCs, or for different subjects that I feel they might have a good handle on. The members I will be requesting help for include but are not limited to...


Wild Goose (Military Science and Stealth Tactics)
Keroko (Original Character Development and Cross-OC Synchornization)
Aaron008R (Magitech Sciences and Applied Character Development of Canon Characters)
Kha (Refining Ideas from the Extravagant to the Practical)
SaintX (Building and Developing the TSAB from all Angles)
Admiral Tigerclaw (Equipment Function and Prototypes, Cross-OC Influence, and Testbed Tech)
Comartemis (Canon Character Development and Applying Ideas)

[Kyral]

Damn this Nanoha Movie...

Since I saw those magazin scans a image of Elric with red stripes on the sides of his coat and a Carnage with rounder edges is spooking through my brain...

Maybe I will draw it... maybe not...

On the other hand... I already have a AU Elric (and Hayate/Keroko/Shamsel ).

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by Kagerou

URGENT MESSAGE!!

Over the course of the next several days, I will be sending Private Messages to a great deal of you, and each one will work on different subjects. In an effort to not only unite the OCT tighter than ever through my work, I will be requesting the help and support of several of the members here, whether it be work with their OCs, or for different subjects that I feel they might have a good handle on. The members I will be requesting help for include but are not limited to...


Wild Goose (Military Science and Stealth Tactics)
Keroko (Original Character Development and Cross-OC Synchornization)
Aaron008R (Magitech Sciences and Applied Character Development of Canon Characters)
Kha (Refining Ideas from the Extravagant to the Practical)
SaintX (Building and Developing the TSAB from all Angles)
Admiral Tigerclaw (Equipment Function and Prototypes, Cross-OC Influence, and Testbed Tech)
Comartemis (Canon Character Development and Applying Ideas)

Sure thing, I'll help.

Originally Posted by Kyral

Damn this Nanoha Movie...

Since I saw those magazin scans a image of Elric with red stripes on the sides of his coat and ah little rounder Carnage is spooking through my brain...

Maybe I will draw it... maybe not...

On the other hand... I already have a AU Elric (and Hayate/Keroko/Shamsel ).

Do it do it do it do it do it.

I mean, I've been creating AU Keroko's since forever now, so why not?

[Kyral]

Originally Posted by Keroko

Do it do it do it do it do it.

I mean, I've been creating AU Keroko's since forever now, so why not?

...

Thanks to you I will now be unable to sleep because my brain will spit out different design combinations like hell...

*sigh*

Well... it so damn hot here that I won't sleep anyway... so I think it's nothing bad...

I will get something on paper tomorrow...

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Originally Posted by Kagerou

URGENT MESSAGE!!

Over the course of the next several days, I will be sending Private Messages to a great deal of you, and each one will work on different subjects. In an effort to not only unite the OCT tighter than ever through my work, I will be requesting the help and support of several of the members here, whether it be work with their OCs, or for different subjects that I feel they might have a good handle on. The members I will be requesting help for include but are not limited to...


Wild Goose (Military Science and Stealth Tactics)
Keroko (Original Character Development and Cross-OC Synchornization)
Aaron008R (Magitech Sciences and Applied Character Development of Canon Characters)
Kha (Refining Ideas from the Extravagant to the Practical)
SaintX (Building and Developing the TSAB from all Angles)
Admiral Tigerclaw (Equipment Function and Prototypes, Cross-OC Influence, and Testbed Tech)
Comartemis (Canon Character Development and Applying Ideas)

As always, I will answer any requests to assist to the best of my abilities, resources, and available time. (Let's face it, I have lots of that.)

Unless I don't feel like it. But that's rare.

[Comartemis]

I am... honored that you would request my assistance Kagerou. I may be stuck in the middle of nowhere at the moment, but I shall endeavor to make myself of use to you.

Also, I've a question of my own regarding canon character development regarding Negiha season 1, specifically Suzuka and Arisa.

While I'd originally planned on having Alex be Nanoha's pactio partner, I'm toying with the idea of making S&A into Alex's pactio partners, with Alex being a magic swordsman-style mage of the Belkan style along with a smattering of Mid spells (technically making him a Mage Knight, though nowhere near as powerful or as versatile as Hayate is). Problem is I'd like to try to do this in season 1 and there just isn't really anywhere to fit them into the plot except as extras.

Probably the best opportunity to insert them into the plot would be during one of several sub-arcs I'm inserting into the mix where a bounty hunter from Mundus Magicus tracks down Alex and abducts one of his new friends (Nanoha, originally) in the midst of the Jewel Seed crisis as a way of drawing him into a trap. I originally had Fate and Arf lend Alex and Yuuno their assistance (since they want Nanoha's jewel seeds) but if I get Suzuka and Arisa involved early then have Nanoha be the one who gets overpowered and abducted, S&A can become Alex's pactio partners and help him and Yuuno take down the enemy mage and his summoned minions.

It's rough and largely unplanned so far, but how does the general premise sound?

[Saint X]

Originally Posted by Kagerou

@Thread!

URGENT MESSAGE!!

Over the course of the next several days, I will be sending Private Messages to a great deal of you, and each one will work on different subjects. In an effort to not only unite the OCT tighter than ever through my work, I will be requesting the help and support of several of the members here, whether it be work with their OCs, or for different subjects that I feel they might have a good handle on. The members I will be requesting help for include but are not limited to...


Wild Goose (Military Science and Stealth Tactics)
Keroko (Original Character Development and Cross-OC Synchornization)
Aaron008R (Magitech Sciences and Applied Character Development of Canon Characters)
Kha (Refining Ideas from the Extravagant to the Practical)
SaintX (Building and Developing the TSAB from all Angles)
Admiral Tigerclaw (Equipment Function and Prototypes, Cross-OC Influence, and Testbed Tech)
Comartemis (Canon Character Development and Applying Ideas)

I'm already emptied my inbox in anticipation

but be prepared though

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Kagerou

Wild Goose (Military Science and Stealth Tactics)
Keroko (Original Character Development and Cross-OC Synchornization)
Aaron008R (Magitech Sciences and Applied Character Development of Canon Characters)
Kha (Refining Ideas from the Extravagant to the Practical)
SaintX (Building and Developing the TSAB from all Angles)
Admiral Tigerclaw (Equipment Function and Prototypes, Cross-OC Influence, and Testbed Tech)
Comartemis (Canon Character Development and Applying Ideas)

I believe I'll turn all your ideas from the practical to the extravagant instead.

I'll do my best. >:3


And in other news... I've got a really bad Negiha Khrack involving Lonely Island Syndrome. We've joked about it, we've thought about it, but to date, we've haven't used it that much yet. Have to resist for the lack of details, lest I crash epically again.

[Aaron008R]

Originally Posted by Kha

@_@

*removes periscope and stabs back with a microscope.* >>:3

@___@

*removes microscope and stabs back with a telescope* >>>:3

*watches Aaron disappear in a blast of blue and red*

YOU'LL PAY FOR THIS SATASHI-NYAN!!! ()

Kukukukuku... >:3

*cross-stabs with a wrecking ball* :3 :3 :3

*counter-cross-stabs with a large fireball* :3 :3 :3

Yes you Arcane Mage. >:3

Omae wa...

Nanda?

Originally Posted by Keroko

When Khrack strikes, it strikes hard.



This lovely image raised no small amount of Keroko khrack (yes, there is a sentoukijin Keroko in the Nanohaverse) red hair, black outfit with red lines, and a red gem? Yup, mucho Khrackos.

When I get down to writing them, sure.

Not even vague ideas... =(
()

Hmm. Normal attacks can be quite nasty too.

Yep.
Let's not forget, Nanoha's attacks are all normal too!

*click* why yes... yes it does..

So it's this kind of dynamic...

Aurion: >:3

Tesla:
Grandis:

If I may give some advice, Slayers is an excellent anime to get into fantasy. There's currently one being subbed too, so its easy to grab the torrents.[/QUOTE]

Slayers is win. >:3 <~ (is currently watching Slayers Revolution, and is LOVING every minute of it!)

Originally Posted by Kha

Well, maybe not Chao, but I like Chao for the wrong reason, ie, the sheer amount of Khrack circling around her.

Like the one that Aaron is wishing me to die for.

Err... I'm not wishing for you to die...
It's just that you'll DEFINITELY be killed by Keroko if he finds out about that whether I like it or not.

Originally Posted by Keroko

Wait, Keroko ranks that high to you?

No surprise there.

Keroko ranks 2nd favorite Ace for me, and she's tied with Nanoha for that spot. >:3

Possible somewhat off-topic, but a newsflash just came in.

Originally Posted by Kha

YES!!!!!!!! and NOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!

Yes for new CCs to play with for the Licht von Belka. YES for Erio x Caro. SUPER YES for free hair Teana. NOOOOOOOOO for another season; StrikeR2 just died. T_T

I've said my piece in the Movie Thread.

That aside, I'm curious as to how they plan to make this movie unique aside from the design and format changes.

And I don't see any problems with GenerationS so far. Though it's not like I'll stop continuing it just because of possible contradictions, it's my half of MGLN Original GenerationS after all.

Eto...

New info on the Nanoha movie.

Parallel world? Parallel work? Parallel dimension?

Parallel chances for a new dimension for the Nanoha series!!!

If they do make more movies for A's and even StrikerS, it is perfectly reasonable to be able to make OC's to fit in to those new AU's. I don't know about others, but provided that happens, I'm definitely gonna port over my OC's with according adjustments to MGLN: ParallelS!

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

Harem chart?

*punts Aaron*

*is punted* @_@

What?! >_>

Originally Posted by Kagerou

@Thread!

URGENT MESSAGE!!

Over the course of the next several days, I will be sending Private Messages to a great deal of you, and each one will work on different subjects. In an effort to not only unite the OCT tighter than ever through my work, I will be requesting the help and support of several of the members here, whether it be work with their OCs, or for different subjects that I feel they might have a good handle on. The members I will be requesting help for include but are not limited to...


Wild Goose (Military Science and Stealth Tactics)
Keroko (Original Character Development and Cross-OC Synchornization)
Aaron008R (Magitech Sciences and Applied Character Development of Canon Characters)
Kha (Refining Ideas from the Extravagant to the Practical)
SaintX (Building and Developing the TSAB from all Angles)
Admiral Tigerclaw (Equipment Function and Prototypes, Cross-OC Influence, and Testbed Tech)
Comartemis (Canon Character Development and Applying Ideas)

Hmm.
Developing characters as accurately as possible to Canon is what I love to do. You can count on me there. >=3
And as for Magitech Science, I don't think you could expect that much complicated stuff from me... But I'll try. >:3
Feel free to ask. And thanks for having me on that list.

[Evil Rick]

Nanoha Rise of Techno - Union, episode 7

Spoiler for Intro:

Spoiler for Preview:

Download Link:

http://www.badongo.com/file/10620518

Enjoy!

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

@___@

*removes microscope and stabs back with a telescope* >>>:3

@______@

*removes telescope and stabs back with the Hubble space telescope* >>>>:3

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Kukukukuku... >:3

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

*counter-cross-stabs with a large fireball* :3 :3 :3

*counter-counter-cross-stabs with a charged Dragonball* :3

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Omae wa...

Nanda?

In my definition, magic devoid of an element, like Nanoha's blast spells, are called Arcane magic.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Err... I'm not wishing for you to die...

It's just that you'll DEFINITELY be killed by Keroko if he finds out about that whether I like it or not.

I'm not too hopeful about it either, but good Khrack must be shared, no matter the cost!

Funny, Keroko isn't getting curious. <.< / >.>

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

I've said my piece in the Movie Thread.

That aside, I'm curious as to how they plan to make this movie unique aside from the design and format changes.

And I don't see any problems with GenerationS so far. Though it's not like I'll stop continuing it just because of possible contradictions, it's my half of MGLN Original GenerationS after all.

I wonder... I've go so many timelines I guess another one doesn't hurt.

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Originally Posted by Kha

@______@

*removes telescope and stabs back with the Hubble space telescope* >>>>:3

*Sees Hubble Space Telescope and raises you Hubble: Ultra Deep Field. *

What are we going over again?

[Kha]

@ATC: I've forgotten.



@Thread: I recall mentioning in the IRC thread that the Tome of Devotion's (in 5th Ed is renamed Tome of Daylight, using the nomenclature set by the Night Sky) role in the Pilgrim Duels, along with the other 2 books Night Sky and Twin Moons, was to record the Linker Core of the winning Hero and grant his wish, strengthening the Light within the book and showering blessings upon the mortal realm. Daylight recorded an image of the victor's device. Images that Kha draws upon in his Traces during the last quarter of Cente Gravia, when he attains the Tome and pursues Kluize.

As I was reading Negima...

Spoiler for The Sarcastic Librarian:

...it seems that Ken Akamatsu agrees to that logic, to a certain extent.

[dkellis]

Spoiler for random:

Teana was sitting despondently in an island of solitude, uncaring of the bustle of aftermath that swarmed around the area.

Fate touched her shoulder gently. "Teana."

"I'm sorry about all of this, Fate," Teana mumbled.

"It's not your fault. We'll get her next time." Fate glanced at a particularly secretive clump of medtechs close to an unmarked van. "Is Subaru..."

"They said she'll be all right. She just needs some recalibration of her... her parts." Teana stood with some difficulty; Fate moved in to support her, but the younger girl shook her head, refusing the help. "Three of us here, and we couldn't stop a single fugitive from escaping."

"Not quite single," Fate corrected. "From Ginga's report, Sein was also helping Lowell. The trace isn't going very well, I'm afraid."

Teana leaned against the wall. "I'll be fine in a moment. There's probably a hundred more things more important for you to take care of than waiting for me to recover."

Fate looked uncertain. "Is there anything I can get you?"

"Answers would be nice," Teana muttered. "And some mouthwash."

"What was that?"

"Nothing." Teana tried to smile in what was theoretically a reassuring manner. "I'll be right here if you need me."

Fate picked her way through the wreckage. The local police had done a good job of keeping the ubiquitous reporters away from ground zero, citing emergency medical assistance for the unfortunate civilians caught in the battle. The last sonic bomb blast had temporarily deafened some, although full recoveries were expected. Shards of broken glass and the general chaos of crowd panic had done for the rest. No fatalities, and the most serious civilian casualty had been a broken arm. For an Over-S criminal threat, the injury list this time around had been surprisingly low. The brunt of the damage had been directed at the TSAB personnel, who were best able to withstand it.

There was a woman staring blankly at the ruins of the cafe where the fight had broken out. Fate blinked, as she tried to recall where she had seen her before; something about an old mission, a former partner or some such, except...

Oh, right.

"Mina!" Fate called out. "Mina, what are you doing here?"

Lumina Celeste, the Unyielding Ace, the Blade Breaker, the Mountain Cleaver, and freelance TSAB-affiliated contract mage, made no response.

Fate hesitated. "Mina?"

"Pray do not startle her," a deep voice emanated from the Device at Lumina's wrist. "She is in a very delicate state of mind at the moment."

Memory flipped a card. "Oh, hallo, Cyrus. What do you mean by 'delicate state of mind'?"

"They trashed my cafe," Lumina mumbled.

"Um," Fate said. "Yes, yes they did."

"I was out visiting my family for a few days, and they trashed my cafe."

"My sympathies."

"Now I'm not going to be able to show off my new waitress outfit, because they trashed my cafe."

Fate tried to think of an appropriate response to this. "I'm sorry?"

"This... this..." Lumina trembled in indignation. "This, this travesty, this utter disregard for the feelings and aspirations of others, this shall not stand! I will not have it! JUSTICE will be done, this I swear!"

"Oh dear," Cyrus said, approximating a remarkably convincing sigh despite not actually having any lungs. "If my recollection does not deceive me, you have worked with Milady before, Enforcer?"

"Yes, Mina was partnered with me for a mission once," Fate said, staring at the ranting young woman. "I don't remember her being so... dramatic."

"It comes and goes," Cyrus said sagely. "Mostly comes, these days."

"Mina!" A young man clambered over to Lumina's side. "Mina, I'm so glad you're here!"

"Thomas!" Lumina threw herself into the man's arms. "Look what they've done to our cafe!"

Thomas looked startled by the sudden addition of a theatrically sobbing woman in his arms, but he recovered somewhat when he saw Fate. "Um, good afternoon, Enforcer. Thomas Montero, proprieter of the, um, the recently-destroyed cafe."

Fate saluted. "Enforcer Agent Fate T. Harlaown. The Time-Space Administration Bureau will reimburse you for your losses, if you present an itemized list of-"

"Reimbursement is irrelevant!" Lumina interrupted. "It's also insufficient. What of the damages to our hearts, to our hopes and dreams? Oh woe, oh sorrow, oh despair..."

"Mina, it's not that bad," Thomas said. "The building's still standing, and we can replace everything, even without outside help. It'll take us maybe a week to get back up and running to full capacity, if even that long."

"The TSAB will-" Fate tried again.

"But we shall be strong!" Lumina exclaimed. She leapt up onto a lightpost, which creaked alarmingly under her weight. "We shall not let this tragedy bow our heads, but we shall use it to strengthen our resolve to administer Justice to the Evil that dares to strike at us!"

Thomas looked apologetically at Fate. "She's impossible to stop once she gets going."

"I've noticed."

"Have at thee, foul knave, villain, and rogue!" Lumina pointed dramatically. "I swear upon the Memory of the man whose livelihood you have just destroyed in your wanton rampage that I, Lumina Celeste, shall bring you to Justice!"

"I'm not dead yet," Thomas protested.

"For there is nothing greater than Justice in this Eternity, and you, Wicked and Unwholesome as you are, shall be as Nothing to the Virtue and Valour of our Just Cause! I refute thee and all thy works! Flee, flee as far as you can, and Know Ye that there will be a Reckoning, a Judgement so dire that the heavens themselves shall Tremble to hear, as I, Lumina Celeste, will Smite you down with my Power and Allies!" She shifted her finger to Fate. "Indeed, the Might of the TSAB is behind me, in the Person of Enforcer Fate T. Harlaown!"

Fate blinked. "Me?"

"Come, Fate, join me in my Quest to rid the dimensions of the Evil that has crawled out of its lair, this knife in the dark, this dark cloud on a moonless night, this wight, this ogre, this changeling! Together, we shall carry forth the Cause of Righteousness to All! For Justice!" She leapt from her perch.

Fate took an involuntary step backwards.

After the dust cleared, Lumina sat up from her botched landing, and managed, "That was mean, Fate."

"I'm sorry, it was just so sudden... are you all right?"

"Oh, this? It's nothing. I'm used to it."

"Yes, she is," Cyrus said drily.

"So!" Lumina shot to her feet. "What's our next move, Fate? How shall we deliver Justice to this fiend?"

"Um." Fate covered her mouth briefly, before composing her features into a professional mask. "I think we'd better brief you on our target first."

"Very well! Thomas, be not afraid, for I shall avenge you!"

"Like I said," Thomas mumbled weakly, "I'm not dead yet..."

But Lumina was already marching off towards Ginga and Teana. Fate shook her head in disbelief, and hurried after her.

[Liingo]

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

-_-;

*Double Facepalm of Epic Failure's*

Haven't seen one of those before

Originally Posted by Kagerou

@Thread!

URGENT MESSAGE!!

Over the course of the next several days, I will be sending Private Messages to a great deal of you, and each one will work on different subjects. In an effort to not only unite the OCT tighter than ever through my work, I will be requesting the help and support of several of the members here, whether it be work with their OCs, or for different subjects that I feel they might have a good handle on. The members I will be requesting help for include but are not limited to...

Am here to help if you have need of it.

Originally Posted by Kha

I believe I'll turn all your ideas from the practical to the extravagant instead.

Don't you mean outlandish there

@Tormenk:
You were right, it was random. But I see alot of sentences that you could use with Katrina and the like.

Hope you get out of the fic writing slump!

@Satty:
The previews looking good Have fun in the Phillipines

@Kagerou:
Re: Zirnitra
While I get how Phantom Assasin would lead to a person's death, how exactly does Nightmare lead to the same result. Ie someone's worse nightmare may be on their partner dieing, while in another case it is their own death.

Also, on these 2 spells, time period to death? I'd assume it's not an instant thing but more of they're so immersed in the illusion that they don't eat/sleep/etc and thus die in X days.

On Misleading Image, I'd be bumping the drain up to AA or AAA (mainly due to the speed at which it occurs)

Re: Karewit
You'll have to check with Kha with this since I'm not sure myself what happens to the body when one is dead, but the Rez spell isn't exactly one that fits with canon. I wouldn't be having the spell work after much more than a few minutes (dead) , not to mention that if the spell works (and even if it doesn't) that she should be bed ridden for a few days at least.

The background and history of the black order and it's members is looking to be awesome in scope, but there's still some things to be adressed.

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ACK! Ninja Post from DK:

I'm suddenly reminded of the episode of Slayers I just watched on Monday Night.

Excuse me while I laugh and laugh

[Kyral]

Aaaaaaaallright, minna-saaaan!

Thanks to Liingos( ) awsome help with my grammar, I'm now able to present you my next chapter in terms of bloody history and Elric/Rinya goodness... (or something like that xD)

Memories of Blood and Sorrow
Part 6: Her circumstances.

Spoiler:

[Somewhere in Midchilda Capital] [November, MC 074]

Rain was falling. Dark clouds blocking the sun, painting the world in grey. He was sitting on the ground of a backstreet. His back leaned on the wall, with drawn-in knees, the crossed arms resting on them. It was cold, but he didn’t shake. He didn't move one muscle at all. Even though his ripped coat was drenched and cold rainwater was running into his collar and dripping from the tip of his nose.
He was just sitting there; waiting for something. Something he didn't even know about.
He had been evading the TSAB search parties for too long. He never should have come back to Midchilda. Midran and his squad were not the last ones. Since he had come here, all that he was doing was to hurt, to kill, old comrades and soldiers he had never seen before alike.
And it was not even himself that wanted to kill.
His body was not his own anymore.
His mind was not his own anymore.
His heart was not his own anymore.

He could feel them right now, the alien thoughts that were whispering in his mind. Impossible to translate into human thoughts, but he knew they were analytical and cold. They were the thoughts of the abomination that infested his arm and took over his soul.

Something changed. The sound of raindrops falling on wet concrete was replaced by the sound of raindrops falling on synthetic fabric. Slowly he looked up with his bloodshot eyes. He was not curious. He didn’t care. He would not be surprised if he would look at the tip of a Device that would blow his head away. On the contrary, it would be the final salvation ke knew he didn't deserve.

But there was no Device. There was not even a Member of the Bureau. Behind his drenched long wisps his eyes saw the face of a young girl holding an umbrella. The girl with somewhat messy blue hair looked at him with a strange mixture of caution and curiosity in her eyes.

“Excuse me, are you alright Mister?” Her curiosity must have won. Her voice was silent, but without hesitation.

Elric moved his dry, torn lips. “Yes, I am...” His voice sounded raspy, he couldn’t even remember anymore the last time he spoke.

“You don’t look that way…” the girl said, stating the obvious.

“But really I am.” Elric lied and forced a smile on his face. “I’m just waiting for a friend. He is a little late but he will definitely show up soon.”

The girl was clever and she had the wisdom that children possess on her side. She saw through the lie as soon it left his mouth. “You need help…” she ultimately decided. “Don’t worry! Mum and Dad are both officers in the TSAB, I’m sure they can help you!”

She turned around and started to run down the backstreet. Elric looked at the bright umbrella that covered most of her back. He didn’t care. She will bring someone here. They will find him now. He didn’t care.

But there was something inside him that did care. It was like so often. He felt his own thoughts overwritten by something else. The solution was simple actually. If local residents would inform TSAB, his mission was in danger. The noncombatant must be silenced to increase the probability of the most favorable outcome.
Before Elric could realize, he was already standing and pointing his right arm down the street.
”NO!” he screamed in his mind.

A red flash lit the street.
Water hissed as energy vaporized raindrops.
A small body crashed to the ground.
The rain was falling.

“No… no… Sankt Kaiser… no!” Elric tumbled backwards.
Lying on the stomach, the girl did not move. A smoking, now useless umbrella was lying beside her. Her blue hair getting darker as it was soaked in bloody rainwater. Elric thought his heart would burst any moment. He had thought that he had reached rock bottom already, but it was only getting worse. His vision became blurred. The liquid that ran down his face now tasted salty.
Elric sobbed.
He sobbed again and again and again. The sobbing came more frequently now..
As it was no sobbing, it was laughter. With tears running down his face, Elric Thorn was laughing.
There was no humor in this sound, nor was it the evil laughter of a villain in triumph. This laughter was born out of deepest sadness and hopelessness.

And then the girl moved. A small groan came out of her throat as she clenched her right shoulder.
The laughter died in an instant. Elric could see the wound now. The energy bolt only grazed her. She was alive.
Elric did not know if it was because the umbrella hid most of her small body, if his mental scream caused the aim to shift slightly or if the cursed Device decided that only wounding her would be enough, but she was alive.

In irony Elric thought that this girl would probably never approach a stranger again.
The Girl lifted her head. The left side of her face was covered in blood from her hard hit on the ground and partially from the bloody water she was lying in. She was brave enough to not show anything from the pain the felt.

And then she opened her eyes and looked at him.

For an instant, Elric forgot how to breathe. Her eyes showed neither hostility nor fear, neither warmth nor cold. She just looked at him with clear eyes.

Elric made one step backwards.

It was not his ripped clothing or his wild, uncut hair she looked at.

He made another step.

It was not the black Device that had formed around his right forearm she looked at.

He turned around.

It was him. She looked at him and she saw what he was.

Elric started running.

She saw his bloodstained self. She saw his soul clenched by black metal.

Water splashed around his running feet.

She saw his weak self that lost against the dark Device.

It was more than anyone could bear. The last straw…

And something broke inside of Elric Thorn.


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[TSAB Dimensional Patrol Cruiser - Auriga, canteen] [August, MC 076]

Elric rubbed his temples to drive away the dull, thumping pain in his head. It’s been a while since he recalled this particular encounter in his dreams. It was one of the most disturbing memories he had, but he was certain it wouldn't be the last time his memories would haunt him. The psychologists told him he would recall these past events for the rest of his life.

A groan from the other side of the table caught his attention. Rinya, who was sitting opposite of Elric, was resting her head on the top of the table.

“I can’t believe it…” she mourned. “…I’m dimensional sick.”

“No you are not…” Elric commented without stopping to rub his temples. “It’s standard gravity. There is no such thing as dimensional sickness. It’s just something psychological.”

Rinya didn’t respond so he continued after a while. “How about I get you something to eat? Maybe you’ll feel better with a full stomach.”

Rinya turned her pale face a little to look at him helplessly and spoke with a weak voice: “Do you want to finish me off?”

Elric let out a sigh and leaned backwards. “I wonder how you managed it to Mid.”

“It was a direct flight with a civilian shuttle. I slept most of the time.” The answer came after a short moment.

Rinya's symptoms had slowly gotten worse the more she realized she was off planet. Apart from dizziness and slight nausea she was fine, a reason why she didn't want to lie down in her room or the sickbay.

“Ah, there you are.” A new voice joined the conversation and the blond man sat down aside Rinya.

“Good morning, Captain.” Elric saluted Jorin Fafnir and pinched the spot between his eyes after that.

“Headache?” the Admiral asked and put down a glass of water in front of Rinya.

“Nothing I can’t manage, Sir.” Elric leaned forward again. Jorin, at the same time, ripped open a small white bag and started to pour the containing white powder into the water. “Here, Shuri-san, I got you something from the sickbay for your stomach.”

After Rinya answered only with a grunt, Jorin grabbed her shoulders and pulled her up. “I always thought that it was a joke between travelers. I never imagined I would meet a person that actually gets dimensional sick.”

“It’s just psychological.” Rinya silently answered and fought weakly against the arms that tried to pull her up.

“You will drink this now, Shuri-san. That’s an order!” Jorin said strictly but with warmth in his voice. “Come on, I’ll help you.”

“Yes Sir.” Rinya said and reached for the glass.

While he supported Rinya with one of his arms, Jorin helped her lift the glass to her mouth. “Drink slowly.” He said.

Watching both in silence, Elric suddenly caught himself glaring at Jorin. He shook his head and closed his eyes for a moment. ”Must be this damn headache…”

“So, you two are already two days on board of the [I]Auriga[/].”Jorin suddenly started, causing Elric to open his eyes again and look at the speaker who continued. “Apart from the current problems, is the journey comfortable enough for both of you?”

Elric looked to Rinya, who had her elbows on the table, supporting her head with her hands. She didn’t looked like she was going to answer, but at least she was sitting upright now.

Elric answered: “Yes it is. Thank you, Sir. But I don’t quite understand why you ask. It’s not like we are on a holiday.”

Jorin smiled warm. “I’m proud of my ship, Thorn-san. And even though you both are on a mission, you are guests on this ship, so the least thing I can do is to make your work as comfortable as possible. I know how hard it can be if you just sit around and wait for something to happen.”

Elric returned the smile slightly. “I’m grateful, Sir.” Rinya managed a little nod.

“Of course I’m also here to tell you that your medical checkup and Device maintenance is scheduled for tomorrow at 1500, Thorn-san.” Jorin stretched his back a little and stood.

Elric let out a little sigh. “Yes Sir, Thank you, Sir.”

Jorin chuckled. “Well if you two need me, you’ll find me on the bridge.”

With a final nod at his two guests, the captain left the canteen.

“You’re having medical checkups and Device maintenance at the same time?” Rinya asked and rested her head back on top of the table.

“Pretty much. As I’m unable to take of Carnage, they thought it would be less boring for me to be checked at the same time.”

“Well…” Rinya let out a small chuckle while smiling weakly. “…sucks to be you.”

Well... that's it...
Next time I will post my Movie Version of Elrics BJ.

Byebye!

*runs but is glomped by Cadia-tan befor he can escape*

Urks~!

[Wild Goose]

Originally Posted by dkellis

Spoiler for random:

*snip*

Lumina is far, far, far too entertaining to be a sue. *grins* I was chuckling and giggling at it. Quite a rather amusing and entertaining piece of short fiction.

Also, I present the following spell to the Thread:

Jacket Disruptor: A special spell created by Leena Tokarev of Contractor Group O, Jacket Disruptor uses the combination of magic, sonic vibration and a physical strike to disrupt the defenses of a Barrier Jacket. This spell is primarily used by Leena to tear open Barrier Jackets of female targets for intense groping.



Anybody who is unhappy with this (admittedly outlandish) spell should direct their complaints to Professor ark, who through his math proved that barrier jackets can't defend against anything physical.

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Jacket Disruptor: A special spell created by Leena Tokarev of Contractor Group O, Jacket Disruptor uses the combination of magic, sonic vibration and a physical strike to disrupt the defenses of a Barrier Jacket. This spell is primarily used by Leena to tear open Barrier Jackets of female targets for intense groping.

The best kind of spell! One developed by master mages for "Extremely Dangerous Offensive Attacks"... Just like the Legendary Anything-Goes martial arts techniques of the martial arts master Happosai. Of course, the only spell more important will be the one that allows the user to 'safely recover' the 'Special Protective Garments' of an active female mage in live combat.



Remember... Just as Happy would say. The Pervasive (SEE: Perverted) Magic System (PMS) is an important and powerful set of combat magics that is a highly respected magical art known to a minute few.

[Estavali]

Originally Posted by Kagerou

@Thread!

URGENT MESSAGE!!

Over the course of the next several days, I will be sending Private Messages to a great deal of you, and each one will work on different subjects. In an effort to not only unite the OCT tighter than ever through my work, I will be requesting the help and support of several of the members here, whether it be work with their OCs, or for different subjects that I feel they might have a good handle on. The members I will be requesting help for include but are not limited to...


Wild Goose (Military Science and Stealth Tactics)
Keroko (Original Character Development and Cross-OC Synchornization)
Aaron008R (Magitech Sciences and Applied Character Development of Canon Characters)
Kha (Refining Ideas from the Extravagant to the Practical)
SaintX (Building and Developing the TSAB from all Angles)
Admiral Tigerclaw (Equipment Function and Prototypes, Cross-OC Influence, and Testbed Tech)
Comartemis (Canon Character Development and Applying Ideas)

Kagerou's new work => Outer Cadia: The Movie? =3

Originally Posted by dkellis

Spoiler for random:

Teana was sitting despondently in an island of solitude, uncaring of the bustle of aftermath that swarmed around the area.

Fate touched her shoulder gently. "Teana."

"I'm sorry about all of this, Fate," Teana mumbled.

"It's not your fault. We'll get her next time." Fate glanced at a particularly secretive clump of medtechs close to an unmarked van. "Is Subaru..."

"They said she'll be all right. She just needs some recalibration of her... her parts." Teana stood with some difficulty; Fate moved in to support her, but the younger girl shook her head, refusing the help. "Three of us here, and we couldn't stop a single fugitive from escaping."

"Not quite single," Fate corrected. "From Ginga's report, Sein was also helping Lowell. The trace isn't going very well, I'm afraid."

Teana leaned against the wall. "I'll be fine in a moment. There's probably a hundred more things more important for you to take care of than waiting for me to recover."

Fate looked uncertain. "Is there anything I can get you?"

"Answers would be nice," Teana muttered. "And some mouthwash."

"What was that?"

"Nothing." Teana tried to smile in what was theoretically a reassuring manner. "I'll be right here if you need me."

Fate picked her way through the wreckage. The local police had done a good job of keeping the ubiquitous reporters away from ground zero, citing emergency medical assistance for the unfortunate civilians caught in the battle. The last sonic bomb blast had temporarily deafened some, although full recoveries were expected. Shards of broken glass and the general chaos of crowd panic had done for the rest. No fatalities, and the most serious civilian casualty had been a broken arm. For an Over-S criminal threat, the injury list this time around had been surprisingly low. The brunt of the damage had been directed at the TSAB personnel, who were best able to withstand it.

There was a woman staring blankly at the ruins of the cafe where the fight had broken out. Fate blinked, as she tried to recall where she had seen her before; something about an old mission, a former partner or some such, except...

Oh, right.

"Mina!" Fate called out. "Mina, what are you doing here?"

Lumina Celeste, the Unyielding Ace, the Blade Breaker, the Mountain Cleaver, and freelance TSAB-affiliated contract mage, made no response.

Fate hesitated. "Mina?"

"Pray do not startle her," a deep voice emanated from the Device at Lumina's wrist. "She is in a very delicate state of mind at the moment."

Memory flipped a card. "Oh, hallo, Cyrus. What do you mean by 'delicate state of mind'?"

"They trashed my cafe," Lumina mumbled.

"Um," Fate said. "Yes, yes they did."

"I was out visiting my family for a few days, and they trashed my cafe."

"My sympathies."

"Now I'm not going to be able to show off my new waitress outfit, because they trashed my cafe."

Fate tried to think of an appropriate response to this. "I'm sorry?"

"This... this..." Lumina trembled in indignation. "This, this travesty, this utter disregard for the feelings and aspirations of others, this shall not stand! I will not have it! JUSTICE will be done, this I swear!"

"Oh dear," Cyrus said, approximating a remarkably convincing sigh despite not actually having any lungs. "If my recollection does not deceive me, you have worked with Milady before, Enforcer?"

"Yes, Mina was partnered with me for a mission once," Fate said, staring at the ranting young woman. "I don't remember her being so... dramatic."

"It comes and goes," Cyrus said sagely. "Mostly comes, these days."

"Mina!" A young man clambered over to Lumina's side. "Mina, I'm so glad you're here!"

"Thomas!" Lumina threw herself into the man's arms. "Look what they've done to our cafe!"

Thomas looked startled by the sudden addition of a theatrically sobbing woman in his arms, but he recovered somewhat when he saw Fate. "Um, good afternoon, Enforcer. Thomas Montero, proprieter of the, um, the recently-destroyed cafe."

Fate saluted. "Enforcer Agent Fate T. Harlaown. The Time-Space Administration Bureau will reimburse you for your losses, if you present an itemized list of-"

"Reimbursement is irrelevant!" Lumina interrupted. "It's also insufficient. What of the damages to our hearts, to our hopes and dreams? Oh woe, oh sorrow, oh despair..."

"Mina, it's not that bad," Thomas said. "The building's still standing, and we can replace everything, even without outside help. It'll take us maybe a week to get back up and running to full capacity, if even that long."

"The TSAB will-" Fate tried again.

"But we shall be strong!" Lumina exclaimed. She leapt up onto a lightpost, which creaked alarmingly under her weight. "We shall not let this tragedy bow our heads, but we shall use it to strengthen our resolve to administer Justice to the Evil that dares to strike at us!"

Thomas looked apologetically at Fate. "She's impossible to stop once she gets going."

"I've noticed."

"Have at thee, foul knave, villain, and rogue!" Lumina pointed dramatically. "I swear upon the Memory of the man whose livelihood you have just destroyed in your wanton rampage that I, Lumina Celeste, shall bring you to Justice!"

"I'm not dead yet," Thomas protested.

"For there is nothing greater than Justice in this Eternity, and you, Wicked and Unwholesome as you are, shall be as Nothing to the Virtue and Valour of our Just Cause! I refute thee and all thy works! Flee, flee as far as you can, and Know Ye that there will be a Reckoning, a Judgement so dire that the heavens themselves shall Tremble to hear, as I, Lumina Celeste, will Smite you down with my Power and Allies!" She shifted her finger to Fate. "Indeed, the Might of the TSAB is behind me, in the Person of Enforcer Fate T. Harlaown!"

Fate blinked. "Me?"

"Come, Fate, join me in my Quest to rid the dimensions of the Evil that has crawled out of its lair, this knife in the dark, this dark cloud on a moonless night, this wight, this ogre, this changeling! Together, we shall carry forth the Cause of Righteousness to All! For Justice!" She leapt from her perch.

Fate took an involuntary step backwards.

After the dust cleared, Lumina sat up from her botched landing, and managed, "That was mean, Fate."

"I'm sorry, it was just so sudden... are you all right?"

"Oh, this? It's nothing. I'm used to it."

"Yes, she is," Cyrus said drily.

"So!" Lumina shot to her feet. "What's our next move, Fate? How shall we deliver Justice to this fiend?"

"Um." Fate covered her mouth briefly, before composing her features into a professional mask. "I think we'd better brief you on our target first."

"Very well! Thomas, be not afraid, for I shall avenge you!"

"Like I said," Thomas mumbled weakly, "I'm not dead yet..."

But Lumina was already marching off towards Ginga and Teana. Fate shook her head in disbelief, and hurried after her.

For a moment, I feared for Lumina.

Then... After another moment, I just can't stop laughing .

A good well-done, Dk! (@^_^)b