Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Nanya01]

Very nice, Iron, but one thing...

At last, they had shelter. Hewn from rock, the only opening in the tent-like structure faced away from the raging storm. "It’s safe to go in..." Yuuno informed Vita with a weary voice, just loud enough to be heard over the wind. [I don’t think Vita would wait for Yuuno to tell her to get her sister inside, but she would wait for him to tell her the magic was done.]

Shouldn't have notes in with your writing.

[Old_Iron]

I have fixed the error. >_<

Originally Posted by Craxuan

As for Old_Iron's, I'd much rather you have the first three chapters as a single one because the content and detail are mostly the same and can be summed up as 'trio's one journey to Hayate'. Not to mention that it looks to be a very, very long story...

Ugh, I have to rid myself of this laziness somehow and write, write...

The chapters were actually split up to make beta work more simple and actually writing them easier. There are fewer possible ways for me to screw up with shorter chapters here. Plus, I can put them out faster.

Yes, you must write. The pen compels you. =3

[Nanya01]

StrikerS 1-75

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - StrikerS 76:

Grunting as she was knocked back, Nanoha looked at her right arm, which was hanging limply by her side. "Okay, so she really is better than I am at melee." Data came across her visor and Nanoha nodded as she shifted her body so that her damaged arm was away from Vivio. Nanoha held up her cannon arm and fired a blast at Vivio who merely held up a hand to block the attack.

Lowering her barrier, the next thing Vivio knew was Nanoha's left hand was covering her face and dragging her along before Nanoha stopped and threw Vivio into the wall, followed by a magic blast that erupted on contact. "Divine..." Nanoha muttered as energy charged up in front of her. "Freeze..." The energy turned blue-white as the air in front of Nanoha cooled down tremendously. "Buster!"

An ice cold blast struck out, encasing Vivio in a dome of ice in an instant. Nanoha wasn't surprised when she saw cracks forming in the ice a moment later. 'Why does freezing stuff never work, anyway?' Oh well, she expected that, and she had a plan. After all, ice could do more than just hold someone down for a few moments.

Vivio broke out of the ice with a scream and a blast of cold vapor in the air. "GRAH!"

"Freeze bullet!" Nanoha cried out, shooting dozens of quick ice blasts at Vivio, who held up a hand to block them. Nanoha shot straight up and pointed her cannon arm down again. "Freeze bullet!" When Vivio held up her hand to block that, she used a flash move to get to the left of Vivio and firing more freeze bullets at her head, causing the girl's head to jerk to the side several times before ice encased her helmet completely.

Vivio staggered and punched at the ice several times, breaking it off and turning to look at Nanoha, who shot several rings out at her. Vivio flew into the air to avoid them and gasped as her arms and legs suddenly became bound.

"Restrict Lock."

Nanoha rushed in, the spear head glowing pink as she did so. "This isn't designed for melee, but it still has an edge to it, so, don't move, Vivio."

The next thing that Vivio knew, Nanoha had stabbed the tip of the weapon into the center of Vivio's helmet. For several moments, there was no movement from either Nanoha or Vivio, but soon, a cracking sound was heard and Nanoha nodded as the helmet split down the middle, breaking in half and revealing Vivio's scared face. "Vivio," Nanoha pulled her weapon away from Vivio's face, "please, talk to me."

Vivio groaned and screamed, snapping out of the binds and knocking Nanoha away as she grabbed her head. "No! Stay away! Leave me alone! Stop! Who are you?!" Vivio screamed as her power lashed out angrily around her. "Stop it! STOP IT! NOOOO!"

"VIVIO!" Nanoha screamed at the distraught girl before doing something that she never thought she'd ever do to her daughter.

There was a loud cracking sound in the air and Vivio found herself on her side, rubbing her cheek and Nanoha was standing above her, her hand trembling, but at least Vivio had finally stopped screaming, even if she was looking more shocked than hurt.

Nanoha twitched, her hand was hurting pretty bad from that slap. 'Sheesh! What is this girl made of?' She thought to herself before kneeling down to smile at Vivio. "Vivio," Nanoha mentally recalled the visor on her face to move up so she could reveal her face to the young girl completely. "Please, I don't want to hurt you, what happened?"

"Mama?" Vivio trembled and grabbed her head. "It's happening again... Garoth... He's here! I can feel him! Mama!" Vivio shook her head and groaned. "No, not him! No!"

Before Nanoha could reply, the ship lurched forward, causing Nanoha to slide back. A new screen popped up in the room and Levi's face appeared on it. Though, Nanoha was rather shocked at how her body seemed rather torn up. "Well, well, I hope you two have been having fun." Vivio screamed and pointed at Levi with a trembling finger. "Ah, so you knew what I was, probably a ghost echo from when my master, Garoth, killed the last Saint Kaiser, huh, little clone girl?"

"What do you want, Alicia?" Nanoha narrowed her eyes at the Mazoku, who merely growled at her.

"Just to let you know that I'm tired of you, and since I no longer need her to fight for me." Levi snapped her fingers and Vivio gasped, and looked down in shock. "I've decided to kill everyone and everything on the planet. But I'll be nice and let you get out of here with Vivio..." Levi sneered at Nanoha. "Of course..." Nanoha turned to look and gasped as Vivio was starting to turn red and discomfort crossed her face. "You're going to take a corpse as I squeeze her to death with that armor."

"You..." Nanoha growled and looked at Vivio, before nodding to herself and pointing her cannon arm at the screen, destroying it with a single shot. "Vivio," the girl groaned and looked at her, "do you trust me?" The girl whimpered and nodded as she stood up and screamed while blood started to leak out of her arms.

"Mama... Help me... It's stabbing me."

Nanoha nodded and flew up and backwards. "I never thought to use this on a person, but, I don't have time for anything else..."

"Remember, Nanoha..." Lina looked at her daughter seriously. "It's neither good nor evil. It's creation and destruction. While it's mostly used for destruction, remember what happened to the Wolkenritter and to Quint. The power can do a lot, and I think it depends on what you want to use it for."

"I trust you, mom..." Nanoha whispered as a circle appeared under her feet. "Vivio... Hold still." Vivio nodded and gasped as Nanoha's visor covered her face again, when Nanoha let out a scream, the armor covering Raising Heart slid up as did her wings as the circle under Nanoha's feet changed from pink to gold with black lightning surrounding her. "Vivio..."

Despite how evil the voice sounded, the fact it was said so softly was somehow comforting. Vivio nodded, whimpering as she saw the wings suddenly shoot off of Nanoha's back, split open and pin her arms and legs against the wall.

"Just hold still, Vivio..." Nanoha said as magic collected in front of her. "Please, just trust me." Vivio nodded and Nanoha took a deep breath, hoping that this would work as well. "Let's go... Chaoslight... BREAKER!"

In an instant, a giant golden ball of energy formed in front of Nanoha's cannon as black lightning crackled around it. "SHOOT!"

Vivio closed her eyes and waited for the worst as the golden light crashed down on her body. She let out a scream as the energy completely overwhelmed her defenses with ease.

Nanoha had to look away, she never wanted to use it on a human, ever. 'Please survive, Vivio. Please.'

When the attack abated, Nanoha threw her arm up into the air. "Raising Heart, now!"

"Alright, Chaos purge!"

There was a flash of energy and Nanoha found herself back in her Exceed mode, Raising Heart Excellion in her left hand as she looked at the, thankfully small, crater Vivio was in. "Vivio..." Nanoha floated to the edge to see the results of her attack. "Vivio..." Her eyes widened as she saw the girl, her little girl, in a dirty shirt and nothing else, laying face down around a bunch of scrap metal. "Vivio!"

"No!" Vivio called out, causing Nanoha to gasp and tremble. "Stay back!"

Nanoha found her eyes started to burn the instant that she heard that. "Vivio, I..." When Vivio started to stand up, she looked at Nanoha sadly. "Vivio is... Vivio isn't a real girl, is she, mama?" Pulling herself up was a struggle, considering how much her body hurt at that moment. "Vivio is... Just a weapon." The girl looked down, whimpering. "Mama... You... You don't want me, do you? Those two... They said that I was just a weapon, and now, Vivio is broken."

"Vivio..." Nanoha said softly and gasped as Vivio screamed at her to not move. "Please..."

"Why?" Vivio's shoulders shook as she cried. "Vivio just wanted to be normal, why was I born to be..?"

"Stop it!" Nanoha screamed out, causing Vivio to gasp and look at her. "Don't listen to them!" Tears were flowing freely from Nanoha's face as she looked at the girl. "You aren't a weapon. You're the little girl who hates her green foods, who climbs into bed with me when she has a bad dream, you're Vivio... My precious little Vivio." Vivio sniffled and whimpered. "Because weapons can't cry, Vivio..." Nanoha held out her left arm and smiled. "And even if you were a weapon, Vivio... I don't care, you're still my little Vivio."

"Mama!" Vivio suddenly cried out and ran for Nanoha, grabbing the woman's left hand and getting pulled into a tight hug. "Mama! Mama!"

"Shhh!" Nanoha could feel Vivio crying against her, and honestly, she was crying as well. "Mama's here, it'll be okay." Nanoha was just thankful that the Chaos magic didn't kill Vivio, though how that was, she wasn't sure and just chalked it up to the fact that Chaos magic did whatever the hell it wanted to do.

[mega1987]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

StrikerS 1-75

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - StrikerS 76:

Grunting as she was knocked back, Nanoha looked at her right arm, which was hanging limply by her side. "Okay, so she really is better than I am at melee." Data came across her visor and Nanoha nodded as she shifted her body so that her damaged arm was away from Vivio. Nanoha held up her cannon arm and fired a blast at Vivio who merely held up a hand to block the attack.

Lowering her barrier, the next thing Vivio knew was Nanoha's left hand was covering her face and dragging her along before Nanoha stopped and threw Vivio into the wall, followed by a magic blast that erupted on contact. "Divine..." Nanoha muttered as energy charged up in front of her. "Freeze..." The energy turned blue-white as the air in front of Nanoha cooled down tremendously. "Buster!"

An ice cold blast struck out, encasing Vivio in a dome of ice in an instant. Nanoha wasn't surprised when she saw cracks forming in the ice a moment later. 'Why does freezing stuff never work, anyway?' Oh well, she expected that, and she had a plan. After all, ice could do more than just hold someone down for a few moments.

Vivio broke out of the ice with a scream and a blast of cold vapor in the air. "GRAH!"

"Freeze bullet!" Nanoha cried out, shooting dozens of quick ice blasts at Vivio, who held up a hand to block them. Nanoha shot straight up and pointed her cannon arm down again. "Freeze bullet!" When Vivio held up her hand to block that, she used a flash move to get to the left of Vivio and firing more freeze bullets at her head, causing the girl's head to jerk to the side several times before ice encased her helmet completely.

Vivio staggered and punched at the ice several times, breaking it off and turning to look at Nanoha, who shot several rings out at her. Vivio flew into the air to avoid them and gasped as her arms and legs suddenly became bound.

"Restrict Lock."

Nanoha rushed in, the spear head glowing pink as she did so. "This isn't designed for melee, but it still has an edge to it, so, don't move, Vivio."

The next thing that Vivio knew, Nanoha had stabbed the tip of the weapon into the center of Vivio's helmet. For several moments, there was no movement from either Nanoha or Vivio, but soon, a cracking sound was heard and Nanoha nodded as the helmet split down the middle, breaking in half and revealing Vivio's scared face. "Vivio," Nanoha pulled her weapon away from Vivio's face, "please, talk to me."

Vivio groaned and screamed, snapping out of the binds and knocking Nanoha away as she grabbed her head. "No! Stay away! Leave me alone! Stop! Who are you?!" Vivio screamed as her power lashed out angrily around her. "Stop it! STOP IT! NOOOO!"

"VIVIO!" Nanoha screamed at the distraught girl before doing something that she never thought she'd ever do to her daughter.

There was a loud cracking sound in the air and Vivio found herself on her side, rubbing her cheek and Nanoha was standing above her, her hand trembling, but at least Vivio had finally stopped screaming, even if she was looking more shocked than hurt.

Nanoha twitched, her hand was hurting pretty bad from that slap. 'Sheesh! What is this girl made of?' She thought to herself before kneeling down to smile at Vivio. "Vivio," Nanoha mentally recalled the visor on her face to move up so she could reveal her face to the young girl completely. "Please, I don't want to hurt you, what happened?"

"Mama?" Vivio trembled and grabbed her head. "It's happening again... Garoth... He's here! I can feel him! Mama!" Vivio shook her head and groaned. "No, not him! No!"

Before Nanoha could reply, the ship lurched forward, causing Nanoha to slide back. A new screen popped up in the room and Levi's face appeared on it. Though, Nanoha was rather shocked at how her body seemed rather torn up. "Well, well, I hope you two have been having fun." Vivio screamed and pointed at Levi with a trembling finger. "Ah, so you knew what I was, probably a ghost echo from when my master, Garoth, killed the last Saint Kaiser, huh, little clone girl?"

"What do you want, Alicia?" Nanoha narrowed her eyes at the Mazoku, who merely growled at her.

"Just to let you know that I'm tired of you, and since I no longer need her to fight for me." Levi snapped her fingers and Vivio gasped, and looked down in shock. "I've decided to kill everyone and everything on the planet. But I'll be nice and let you get out of here with Vivio..." Levi sneered at Nanoha. "Of course..." Nanoha turned to look and gasped as Vivio was starting to turn red and discomfort crossed her face. "You're going to take a corpse as I squeeze her to death with that armor."

"You..." Nanoha growled and looked at Vivio, before nodding to herself and pointing her cannon arm at the screen, destroying it with a single shot. "Vivio," the girl groaned and looked at her, "do you trust me?" The girl whimpered and nodded as she stood up and screamed while blood started to leak out of her arms.

"Mama... Help me... It's stabbing me."

Nanoha nodded and flew up and backwards. "I never thought to use this on a person, but, I don't have time for anything else..."

"Remember, Nanoha..." Lina looked at her daughter seriously. "It's neither good nor evil. It's creation and destruction. While it's mostly used for destruction, remember what happened to the Wolkenritter and to Quint. The power can do a lot, and I think it depends on what you want to use it for."

"I trust you, mom..." Nanoha whispered as a circle appeared under her feet. "Vivio... Hold still." Vivio nodded and gasped as Nanoha's visor covered her face again, when Nanoha let out a scream, the armor covering Raising Heart slid up as did her wings as the circle under Nanoha's feet changed from pink to gold with black lightning surrounding her. "Vivio..."

Despite how evil the voice sounded, the fact it was said so softly was somehow comforting. Vivio nodded, whimpering as she saw the wings suddenly shoot off of Nanoha's back, split open and pin her arms and legs against the wall.

"Just hold still, Vivio..." Nanoha said as magic collected in front of her. "Please, just trust me." Vivio nodded and Nanoha took a deep breath, hoping that this would work as well. "Let's go... Chaoslight... BREAKER!"

In an instant, a giant golden ball of energy formed in front of Nanoha's cannon as black lightning crackled around it. "SHOOT!"

Vivio closed her eyes and waited for the worst as the golden light crashed down on her body. She let out a scream as the energy completely overwhelmed her defenses with ease.

Nanoha had to look away, she never wanted to use it on a human, ever. 'Please survive, Vivio. Please.'

When the attack abated, Nanoha threw her arm up into the air. "Raising Heart, now!"

"Alright, Chaos purge!"

There was a flash of energy and Nanoha found herself back in her Exceed mode, Raising Heart Excellion in her left hand as she looked at the, thankfully small, crater Vivio was in. "Vivio..." Nanoha floated to the edge to see the results of her attack. "Vivio..." Her eyes widened as she saw the girl, her little girl, in a dirty shirt and nothing else, laying face down around a bunch of scrap metal. "Vivio!"

"No!" Vivio called out, causing Nanoha to gasp and tremble. "Stay back!"

Nanoha found her eyes started to burn the instant that she heard that. "Vivio, I..." When Vivio started to stand up, she looked at Nanoha sadly. "Vivio is... Vivio isn't a real girl, is she, mama?" Pulling herself up was a struggle, considering how much her body hurt at that moment. "Vivio is... Just a weapon." The girl looked down, whimpering. "Mama... You... You don't want me, do you? Those two... They said that I was just a weapon, and now, Vivio is broken."

"Vivio..." Nanoha said softly and gasped as Vivio screamed at her to not move. "Please..."

"Why?" Vivio's shoulders shook as she cried. "Vivio just wanted to be normal, why was I born to be..?"

"Stop it!" Nanoha screamed out, causing Vivio to gasp and look at her. "Don't listen to them!" Tears were flowing freely from Nanoha's face as she looked at the girl. "You aren't a weapon. You're the little girl who hates her green foods, who climbs into bed with me when she has a bad dream, you're Vivio... My precious little Vivio." Vivio sniffled and whimpered. "Because weapons can't cry, Vivio..." Nanoha held out her left arm and smiled. "And even if you were a weapon, Vivio... I don't care, you're still my little Vivio."

"Mama!" Vivio suddenly cried out and ran for Nanoha, grabbing the woman's left hand and getting pulled into a tight hug. "Mama! Mama!"

"Shhh!" Nanoha could feel Vivio crying against her, and honestly, she was crying as well. "Mama's here, it'll be okay." Nanoha was just thankful that the Chaos magic didn't kill Vivio, though how that was, she wasn't sure and just chalked it up to the fact that Chaos magic did whatever the hell it wanted to do.

Me: Another Plan, scratched out.... Sorry Levi. Another Plan of yours was grounded into dust...

Val: The only thing missing that someone or something *Looks at Levi.* gives the disarming code for those nukes...

Odin: Earth based Nukes always got activation code and disarm code....

[Tiresias]

Originally Posted by AngryDesu

Ah... my first fictional contribution~

This is (sort of) a bit of crack inspired by a pic of Dieci in lingerie from the Nanoha pics thread. It's also sort-of part of a MGLN/B-Gata mixup involving perverted humor from... damn near everyone.

But the joke of this kind of stands alone.

Spoiler for :

Admiral Chrono Harlaown was not really meant to be out here facing one of the terrorist cyborgs himself. He was meant to be sitting on the command deck of a dimensional vessel, not dodging cannonfire from a brown-haired girl that looked so damn familiar.

From the moment he had first seen her on intelligence recordings Chrono had been struck by the vague sense of familiarity this particular cyborg had. The problem was that he just couldn't work out why she seemed so familiar. At first he thought that, being a clone, she may have been related in some way to Amy. She had the right sort of build, if a bit taller, and she did indeed bear a passing resemblance to his wife.

Except that didn't feel right. She felt more familiar than that, as if he'd seen her before somewhere... but not in person. No. Now he thought about it he was sure he had seen her before. But where could it have...

No.

No way.

"Page one-oh-seven!" He yelled, pointing at the girl in shock. "The Royce Collection!"

The girl flinched back as if struck, her face turning red in an instant as she did.

"Chrono?" Hayate's confused voice echoed slightly in his mind as she, no doubt watching from her command position, sent him a telepathic communication. "You know this girl?" There was a pause. "And what does a lingerie line have to do with it?"

The admiral merely smirked slightly. "S2U, load and display stored data - Mercede's mail-order catalog, spring seventy-five. Page one-oh-seven."

As soon as the command was given a holographic screen opened up a little way in front of where Chrono stood. Upon it was a page from a catalog... specifically it was a page covered in women modeling a variety of lingerie that was on sale. Smirking the smug admiral simply pointed at one of the models - a model that was immediately recognizable as being the girl he was technically fighting.

Said girl was looking on in embarrassed horror.

"A... A lingerie model? One of our terrorists spends her time posing in underwear for a living?" Hayate's mental voice sounded incredulous before it immediately shifted into a suspicious tone. "And why exactly do you have a lingerie catalog loaded onto your device?"

"Are you kidding?" Chrono replied, both mentally and verbally. "These catalogs are the closest thing to porn I've been allowed to own ever since I got married! I have the girls in these practically memorized!"

Across the way the cyborg girl simply squeaked in horror.

Poor Chrono. No porn for you.

Wait, so he has too much 'alone time' that he has enough time to memorize all the girls? Amy, you need to give him more attention

[Sunder the Gold]

Given his own power and the technology available, is there any reason he couldn't spend every "night shift" with his wife?

Aside from a possible need for the admiral to be on-call and on-deck 24-7 while deployed?

But that makes more sense for a ship's captain. Surely captains can handle things until an admiral arrives.


But I think the point is supposed to be the "Chrono the Lecher" gag rather than anything serious or actually in-character.

[Tiresias]

...err, it's just joke . If we discuss it seriously then Chrono would have to enjoy things the same way most sailors do, only with an advanced storage device that should realistically be able to store porn since they can also store those lingerie articles (if Amy can somehow censors his files, I doubt an image library full of sexy girls in seductive outfits can escape her vigilant watch )

[rxrx]

Didn't people say Karim and Chrono have an affair cause they work closely with each other?

[novalysis]

Originally Posted by Tiresias

...err, it's just joke . If we discuss it seriously then Chrono would have to enjoy things the same way most sailors do, only with an advanced storage device that should realistically be able to store porn since they can also store those lingerie articles (if Amy can somehow censors his files, I doubt an image library full of sexy girls in seductive outfits can escape her vigilant watch )

Not just that, but VR versions of that. Remember the training simulators Nanoha underwent through raising heart?

Now imagine this Chrono, or more probably, enterprising some person realized the potential of that....

[Rising Dragon]

Originally Posted by novalysis

Not just that, but VR versions of that. Remember the training simulators Nanoha underwent through raising heart?

Now imagine this Chrono, or more probably, enterprising some person realized the potential of that....

Someone did that fic already, with Arisa getting angry upon finding out about it. Can't remember if it was Raiser or Nanya though.

[Nanya01]

Originally Posted by Rising Dragon

Someone did that fic already, with Arisa getting angry upon finding out about it. Can't remember if it was Raiser or Nanya though.

That was me, yes.

[rxrx]

This is based on a strange idea that I have. As this is the first time I'm writing a long piece, please forgive me if the grammar is bad as English is not my first language. I will try and improve as I go on. Hopefully you will all enjoy the story.

Spoiler for Story Chapter 1:

Takamachi Nanoha opened her eyes slowly as she woke up from her sleep. Yesterday, she was visited by her close childhood friend, Hayate Yagami whom was forced on a vacation by Shamal as the latter deemed that the Master of the Night Sky has been working for too long without taking a break. Knowing that she had the best interest for her in mind, Hayate reluctantly took a vacation as an answer to Shamal’s concern. It was not like she had a choice. The leave form was already handed in to her current superior, Admiral Chrono Harlaown whom permitted it before she can have a say. If she had insisted, the vacation could be voided but she did not want to worry her family and friends. Thus, the first thing she did was to give a surprise visit to Nanoha.

Remembering yesterday, Nanoha gave a small smile as she recalled how both she and Fate was shocked by the surprise visit. The three of them spent the rest of the day by just chatting with each other just like they have done when they were still living on Earth. Thinking back about home, Nanoha realized how much she missed her family and friends that are still living there. Maybe she should also take some time off work and bring Vivio to Earth and visit dad, mom, Alisa and Suzuka as well. Although they keep in contact with video transmission often, it still feels different from seeing each other directly. Going over Fate and her own work schedule, Nanoha decided that they can plan for a trip back home when Vivio’s vacation comes about. They can even invite Einhart, Rio and Corona to Earth as well and Vivio would be overjoyed in getting the chance to introduce her friends to her grandparents and friends on Earth.

Sitting up, Nanoha noticed that something is different with her bed. Putting her hand down, the material that she touched was not the comfortable mattress that she has chosen together with Fate and Hayate. Instead, the surface feels hard and a little rough, almost as if it was on hard ground. Looking to her right, she was shocked to find out that her daughter whom was sleeping between Fate and herself was gone. Not only that, Hayate whom was sleeping on her left was gone as well. Alarmed, Nanoha looked around and finds herself in an unfamiliar place. She is inside a make-shift tent which is large enough for five people to sleep in. Surrounding the four sleeping bags that were around her were books and backpacks that were opened. Though filled with concern for the safety of her friends and daughter, her experience in the TSAB allowed her to keep her calm. Reaching towards her neck, Nanoha gave a sign of relief in the back of her mind as Raging Heart is still with her in standby mode. Whoever that have brought her here must have forgotten to remove it from her and were even careless enough to not tie her up. Quietly, Nanoha edged towards the entrance of the tent peeked out form the entrance.

Sitting around the campfire are four figures that she has not expected to see again. Stirring the pot that was hanging on top of the campfire is Lord Diarche. She must be in a good mood as she seemed to be humming as she stirs the contents inside the pot. Directly opposite of her, Stern the Destructor is spreading butter on bread and then placing them on five different plates that are placed around her. She wears a soft expression which Nanoha have never seen before. Sitting on the right of Diarche is Yuri. She is pouring drinks into cups and seemed to be talking to Stern as she does so. Last but not least was Levi the Slasher. She is slicing ingredients for whatever Diarche is cooking and placing them into the pot when she is done cutting the vegetables into slices. Occasionally, she would throw the ingredient up in the air and slice them when they are in mid-air and then smacked them into the pot, laughing cheerfully as she is doing so. All of them look older than Nanoha remembered and resemble her friends and herself when they were seventeen. They do not seem hostile and Nanoha is thus even more confused about the situation she is in. Deciding that the only way to have answers was to ask them directly, Nanoha stepped out of the tent and walk towards them.

Before she can even speak, Nanoha finds herself looking at the big smiling face of Levi. “Good morning, Nanoha…?” If the situation was not so confusing, Nanoha would have noticed how the other three’s expressions change from being relaxed to cautious. However, Nanoha was too occupied by Levi as well to notice the change in the atmosphere. Nanoha find herself being amazed by Levi’s rapid change of expression, from smiling cheerfully to furrowing her eyebrows in confusion. She was snapped back to reality by the harsh voice of Diarche.

“Who are you and where have you come from?”

Turning towards Diarche, Nanoha is taken aback by her hostile expression and her exclamation that she did not know her at all. Even though they have fought each other before, she doubt that Diarche would forget her totally.

“It’s me Diarche. I’m Nanoha, don’t you recognize me?”

“If you want to lie, you will have to do better than that runt.” Diarche sneered. By now, Nanoha realized that something is very wrong. Other than Diarche, Yuri and Stern are also looking at her with caution.

“Hey, Nanoha is not in the tent!”

The exclamation made by Levi whom took the opportunity to head back inside the tent had a powerful effect on the remaining three that are facing Nanoha. She could feel the hostility emitting from them and reach towards Raging Heart with her right hand. Knowing that it might be futile, Nanoha still decided that fighting should be the last option used. “What are you talking about? I am Takamachi Nanoha!”

If looks could kill, Nanoha would have died many times already. Looking at her coldly, Stern called forth Luciferion and pointed it towards Nanoha. “Your pathetic excuse of deception disgust me. For your own sake, I recommend that you tell the truth and tell us what you have done with Nanoha.”

From behind her, Levi also brought out Vulnificus and readied for combat. “You better bring Nanoha back now or you will regret it!”

Though she has not spoken a word, Nanoha could tell that Yuri Eberwein, the Sovereign of the Purple Sky shares the same sentiments as well. The blood red mist that she had used as a means of attack appeared behind her as she began floating.

Knowing that it would be impossible to avoid a fight, Nanoha grasped Raging Heart with her right hand. “For the last time, I AM Takamachi Nanoha and I have no idea what you are all talking about! Raging Heart, set up!”

“We will make you regret imitating Nanoha, runt.”

Nanoha took a deep breath as her barrier jacket forms around her. Even though she is confused by everything that has happened, she knows that all the questioning will have to take a back seat as she will be fighting against four powerful opponents at the same time. This will be one of the toughest battle that she have involved herself in and a small mistake will be fatal. She can question them when the battle is over.

[Nanya01]

This is short, sorry.

Edited over half of it away.

StrikerS 1-75

StrikerS 76

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - StrikerS 77:

"Nanoha!" The redhead turned to see Fate, holding Tre in a fireman's carry, and Sein, holding Lutecia gently, rush into the room. "We need to hurry and get out of here!" When Nanoha nodded and took a step, Fate noticed how limply Nanoha's right arm was hanging down. "Hold on, let me get that."

When Fate grabbed it and pushed upwards with a loud pop, Nanoha let out a cry of pain as her dislocated arm was fixed. "GAH! Fate-chan, that hurt!" Nanoha complained bitterly and rolled her shoulder, glad that it was back in its socket. "What's going on?" She asked as she, Fate and Sein flew out of the throne room as fast as they could, well, Fate was going a little slow, mostly because she was still looking for Hayate.

"This ship has nuclear bombs on it." Fate said, causing Nanoha's eyes to widen as her skin instantly paled. "A LOT of nuclear bombs, if what Levi said was true."

"You're calling her Levi?" Nanoha asked, slightly surprised. "But isn't she..?"

"My sister died before I was born, Nanoha, all that's left is a Mazoku." Fate said, bitterness filling her voice.

(---)

Meanwhile, outside...

"Zel!" A familiar female voice yelled in delight, causing the man to turn and smile as he saw Lina walking over to him. "So, this is where you were hiding the whole time?"

Zelgadis rolled his eyes at the barb. "I was not hiding, as you call it, I was helping the injured people out." He smirked at her. "Even though that boy, Yuuno, knows good healing spells, he's more use on the battle field than for healing. As for me, I felt that I could be of more use helping people who got injured after the robots showed up." Lina nodded, giving him a soft smile. "How about you? When did you get here?"

"This morning, actually." Lina stretched her arms above her head. "I was going to visit Nanoha and tell her some information, but I got tired from the trip, so I crashed at a hotel and only woke up when all the fun was already done with."

Zelgadis sweat-dropped at the answer. "For some reason, that sounds like you." When Lina giggled, he shook his head at her. "You know..." He tilted his head and looked at her in confusion. "Lina, has anyone ever told you that you don't look like you're in your late thirties?"

"I'm forty-one." Lina grumbled softly. "Why?"

"That's my point, Lina... You're forty-one, but you don't look that old. Tell me, do you know how old Rezo was when you killed him?"

"Not really." Lina looked up and put her finger over her lips while thinking about it. "I mean, if he was your great-grandfather, then he had to be at least sixty, but he didn't look that old and..."

"He was over a century old, Lina, I think he was about one hundred twenty-five or so..." Zelgadis shook his head. "And yet, he looked as old as you are right now." Lina raised an eyebrow at that. "It could just mean that you're aging very graciously, that's all."

Lina crossed her arms under her chest and smirked at him. "Nice save..."

Before Zelgadis could continue, there was a voice in all of their heads that they recognized as Fate's voice. "Attention, everyone! We've got some serious trouble! Before you ask, this thing, this Saint's Cradle that's in the air right now, is loaded with a lot of weapons, called nuclear bombs. The person operating the ship intends to drop them straight onto the planet, eliminating everyone. If anyone has a method for dealing with this kind of situation, now would be the time to use it."

Lina and Zelgadis looked at each other, Zelgadis in confusion and Lina in concern. "Zel, I... I need to get into the air... Now."

Zelgadis nodded at that. "Go, I have a feeling that I know what you've got planned, I just hope it works."

"Me too." Lina nodded as she turned and flew into the air.

(---)

Suzuka and Miyuki were trembling as Kyrie gleefully explained what she heard. "Nuclear? Oh dear gods... We're all going to die... There's not a weapon on Earth more powerful." Miyuki was trembling more than Suzuka, she had more years in school and had more time build up a rather intense fear and hatred of those kind of weapons.

"Don't..." Chrono spoke up, a small grin on his face, "be so quick to judge." He chuckled, his eyes narrowed in thought. "I actually planned for something like this."

"HUH?!" Suzuka, Miyuki, Kyrie and Amitie said at the same time.

"I never ruled out the thought of a strike from space..." Chrono chuckled and looked up into the sky. "So, I planned ahead and called in an old family friend to do something for me."

The four girls looked at each other and wondered just what Chrono had in mind.

(---)

"Admiral..." Randy looked behind him. "We have a visual on a ship leaving the planet's atmosphere."

"Good." She smirked and told him to open a hailing channel. "This is Admiral Leti Lowran of the Time Space Administration Bureau aboard the Arthra Zwei, I suggest that you prepare to lose your ship." A box was floating in front of her. "We have you locked on with our primary weapon, the Arc en Ciel and we will fire as soon as this message is over."

(---)

Levi stared as she heard the message. "How..?! How have they outmaneuvered me so badly?!" She screeched and slammed her fist through the computer. Growling, she ran her fingers over the console as fast as she could while listening to the rest of the message.

"I believe this is more than enough time. Arc en Ciel, fire!"

Levi growled and pushed a button. "HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! I STILL WIN!" She laughed as she faded from the room.

Spoiler for Comments:

Climax!

Done! Over!

[mega1987]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

This is short, sorry.

Edited over half of it away.

StrikerS 1-75

StrikerS 76

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - StrikerS 77:

"Nanoha!" The redhead turned to see Fate, holding Tre in a fireman's carry, and Sein, holding Lutecia gently, rush into the room. "We need to hurry and get out of here!" When Nanoha nodded and took a step, Fate noticed how limply Nanoha's right arm was hanging down. "Hold on, let me get that."

When Fate grabbed it and pushed upwards with a loud pop, Nanoha let out a cry of pain as her dislocated arm was fixed. "GAH! Fate-chan, that hurt!" Nanoha complained bitterly and rolled her shoulder, glad that it was back in its socket. "What's going on?" She asked as she, Fate and Sein flew out of the throne room as fast as they could, well, Fate was going a little slow, mostly because she was still looking for Hayate.

"This ship has nuclear bombs on it." Fate said, causing Nanoha's eyes to widen as her skin instantly paled. "A LOT of nuclear bombs, if what Levi said was true."

"You're calling her Levi?" Nanoha asked, slightly surprised. "But isn't she..?"

"My sister died before I was born, Nanoha, all that's left is a Mazoku." Fate said, bitterness filling her voice.

(---)

Meanwhile, outside...

"Zel!" A familiar female voice yelled in delight, causing the man to turn and smile as he saw Lina walking over to him. "So, this is where you were hiding the whole time?"

Zelgadis rolled his eyes at the barb. "I was not hiding, as you call it, I was helping the injured people out." He smirked at her. "Even though that boy, Yuuno, knows good healing spells, he's more use on the battle field than for healing. As for me, I felt that I could be of more use helping people who got injured after the robots showed up." Lina nodded, giving him a soft smile. "How about you? When did you get here?"

"This morning, actually." Lina stretched her arms above her head. "I was going to visit Nanoha and tell her some information, but I got tired from the trip, so I crashed at a hotel and only woke up when all the fun was already done with."

Zelgadis sweat-dropped at the answer. "For some reason, that sounds like you." When Lina giggled, he shook his head at her. "You know..." He tilted his head and looked at her in confusion. "Lina, has anyone ever told you that you don't look like you're in your late thirties?"

"I'm forty-one." Lina grumbled softly. "Why?"

"That's my point, Lina... You're forty-one, but you don't look that old. Tell me, do you know how old Rezo was when you killed him?"

"Not really." Lina looked up and put her finger over her lips while thinking about it. "I mean, if he was your great-grandfather, then he had to be at least sixty, but he didn't look that old and..."

"He was over a century old, Lina, I think he was about one hundred twenty-five or so..." Zelgadis shook his head. "And yet, he looked as old as you are right now." Lina raised an eyebrow at that. "It could just mean that you're aging very graciously, that's all."

Lina crossed her arms under her chest and smirked at him. "Nice save..."

Before Zelgadis could continue, there was a voice in all of their heads that they recognized as Fate's voice. "Attention, everyone! We've got some serious trouble! Before you ask, this thing, this Saint's Cradle that's in the air right now, is loaded with a lot of weapons, called nuclear bombs. The person operating the ship intends to drop them straight onto the planet, eliminating everyone. If anyone has a method for dealing with this kind of situation, now would be the time to use it."

Lina and Zelgadis looked at each other, Zelgadis in confusion and Lina in concern. "Zel, I... I need to get into the air... Now."

Zelgadis nodded at that. "Go, I have a feeling that I know what you've got planned, I just hope it works."

"Me too." Lina nodded as she turned and flew into the air.

(---)

Suzuka and Miyuki were trembling as Kyrie gleefully explained what she heard. "Nuclear? Oh dear gods... We're all going to die... There's not a weapon on Earth more powerful." Miyuki was trembling more than Suzuka, she had more years in school and had more time build up a rather intense fear and hatred of those kind of weapons.

"Don't..." Chrono spoke up, a small grin on his face, "be so quick to judge." He chuckled, his eyes narrowed in thought. "I actually planned for something like this."

"HUH?!" Suzuka, Miyuki, Kyrie and Amitie said at the same time.

"I never ruled out the thought of a strike from space..." Chrono chuckled and looked up into the sky. "So, I planned ahead and called in an old family friend to do something for me."

The four girls looked at each other and wondered just what Chrono had in mind.

(---)

"Admiral..." Randy looked behind him. "We have a visual on a ship leaving the planet's atmosphere."

"Good." She smirked and told him to open a hailing channel. "This is Admiral Leti Lowran of the Time Space Administration Bureau aboard the Arthra Zwei, I suggest that you prepare to lose your ship." A box was floating in front of her. "We have you locked on with our primary weapon, the Arc en Ciel and we will fire as soon as this message is over."

(---)

Levi stared as she heard the message. "How..?! How have they outmaneuvered me so badly?!" She screeched and slammed her fist through the computer. Growling, she ran her fingers over the console as fast as she could while listening to the rest of the message.

"I believe this is more than enough time. Arc en Ciel, fire!"

Levi growled and pushed a button. "HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! I STILL WIN!" She laughed as she faded from the room.

Spoiler for Comments:

Climax!

Done! Over!

Me: A CHIFFIE!? NOOOOOOIUUUUUUHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Odin: Stop being so dramatic, NEET.

Me: I can't help it.... The suspense is killing me....

Odin: Argh!!! Shut up!

[YF19EX]

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - StrikerS 77:

"Nanoha!" The redhead turned to see Fate, holding Tre in a fireman's carry, and Sein, holding Lutecia gently, rush into the room. "We need to hurry and get out of here!" When Nanoha nodded and took a step, Fate noticed how limply Nanoha's right arm was hanging down. "Hold on, let me get that."

When Fate grabbed it and pushed upwards with a loud pop, Nanoha let out a cry of pain as her dislocated arm was fixed. "GAH! Fate-chan, that hurt!" Nanoha complained bitterly and rolled her shoulder, glad that it was back in its socket. !

Nanoha should be be able to now pull a Riggs and win some money out of Hayate!

Can't wait to see what role Lina will play in the final outcome!

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by Craxuan

On deathcurse's latest chapter, I really could not think anything else other than 'Final chapter final chapter final chapter', so I'll refrain from reviewing in detail, unless someone thinks a full page of 'final chapter' is good...

I know, final chapter...I'm both delighting and dreading the thought .

Originally Posted by yuiseppe

Wooooo!!! Have been waiting for this.

I thought the best part was how you played the tone of conversation during the concert. It was just dialogue but the succinctness reflects the lack of time to converse in an actual concert. I was also cringing for Vivio ;D Can totally empathize with her feeling miles and miles out of her league with the whole affair.

Shizuka and Arisa's talk really set the theme for this chapter, huh. I am glad there was some shock in there, which made Hayate ask what anyone should be asking themselves in that situation. Nice to see that she's more clued in by the end of the chapter

Also very glad you kept the line about getting pedophile points XD LOL!!

Oh, oh, one curious point: how on earth does one mistake Vivio for Hayate's daughter? :O :O

Thanks for the review!

I'm glad you liked the dialogue section--I knew what I wanted to do with it, but I worried that it would be too unclear and strange for readers to swallow . But I dreaded the thought of writing faux-classy descriptions about this high-class concert to fill up that space!

Chapter 6 really was more of a wrap-up chapter, since it draws to a close a lot of the threads from the previous chapters. It was a nice summary of things, but hard to write because I actually had to keep track of plot!

Poor, poor Hayate XD. Such a cradle-robber!

Eh, well, maybe Hayate looks very mature for her age? *shot by Hayate and Vivio, and slammed into the pavement by Vita's hammer*

[Filraen]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

This is short, sorry.

Edited over half of it away.

StrikerS 1-75

StrikerS 76

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - StrikerS 77:

Levi growled and pushed a button. "HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! I STILL WIN!" She laughed as she faded from the room.

Spoiler for Comments:

Climax!

Done! Over!

I wonder why Levi didn't just go for manually (in the most literal sense of the word) trigger the nuclear bombs. It isn't like the bombs can hurt Levi.

Wait, she needs to rub her victory in the aces' faces (specially Fate), that's why.

[yuiseppe]

Originally Posted by deathcurse

Eh, well, maybe Hayate looks very mature for her age? *shot by Hayate and Vivio, and slammed into the pavement by Vita's hammer*

But but but Vivio is decidedly white and Hayate is not :P (Or am I just forgetting to apply the anime filter where people simply don't notice these things? )

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by yuiseppe

But but but Vivio is decidedly white and Hayate is not :P (Or am I just forgetting to apply the anime filter where people simply don't notice these things? )

....my brain totally did not notice that @_@....

On another note, a new fic from me: a Nanoha fanfic that's actually about Nanoha!

Besides her infamy for using superfluous force in her spellcasting, Nanoha Takamachi is first and foremost a teacher of young mages. By that standard, Nanoha had failed in her duty...and she was not the one who suffered the cost of that failure.

Breaker

[Craxuan]

Hmm. I've always thought that magic cannot kill a living being, but I suppose one can 'tune' their magic to kill.