2012-01-16, 06:51 | Link #18386 |
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Well, I did say I won't read daydreams, but I'll make an exception this time.
So in Tatenashi's daydream Ichika is submissive? I though you said Tatenashi will project Ichika as cool and manly?
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2012-01-16, 07:00 | Link #18388 | |
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Plus I have one Yandere in planning.....
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2012-01-16, 07:03 | Link #18389 |
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Doesn't meant Ichika should win, I mean, even if he lose, he lose gracefully (think a knight that lose a honorable duel), not being a pathetic loser that getting beaten the crap out, and worse if he's submissive while at it.
Anyway, just realized that Rin's Shenlong ain't that tall either, it lacked the overtly hueg foot extension.
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2012-01-16, 07:08 | Link #18390 | |
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2012-01-16, 07:08 | Link #18391 |
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I originally planned for the fight to continue woth Ichika using the back of his head to smash against hers and break the grip, but I was afraid of it being a major OOC moment. Think it'll be okay if I use that?
Side note - Aren't all IS the same size?
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2012-01-16, 07:19 | Link #18392 |
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@ ERas
Hmm, hard choice, we never knew what kind of guy Tate liked so it's hard to predict. We can justify the OOC-ness being Taste's mere fantasy, but I think you can find another way. Side note - I dunno, Canon didn't explain that much. But I compare the official artwork then got this number estimation Byaku Shiki + 40 cm Blue Tears + 45 cm Shen Long + 30 cm Raphael + 45 cm Schwarzer R + 50 cm
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2012-01-16, 07:33 | Link #18394 | |
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2012-01-16, 07:40 | Link #18395 |
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@ Senpai - Actually, the sparring was supposed to be a real life segment. This is why I got nervous when I wrote the headbutt scene since it seems OOC for Canon!Ichika. (I got part of that scene from a Shadow Draft for when Irish and Tatenashi sparred and it's more combat based due to the combat pragmatism Irish has).
Side note - Maybe it's because Shenlong is a multi level unit. She uses both shock waves (Which have a lot of recoil) and double sided saber which requires acrobatics. It'd make sense for her to have the smallest unit. Side note 2 - I'm writing Shadow after finishing this Daydream arc. Can I ask for your help in reading out parts of it? Don't worry, it's not rom-com. @ Jak - Be careful about using rape in backstories. Many people use it to try and get sympathy points for characters and it's become a bit stale to read. Though admittedly, male rape is rare and mostly unseen.
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2012-01-16, 07:50 | Link #18397 |
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Change Male lead to a new one because Imber is actually quite static for a character and I am not good enough to give Static character development.
=== So changing Male lead again.... Good news is the prologue is still in work. The Male lead has no impact on the prologue. The new Male lead has three theme: Fire (Inbuilt, his nature) Growth (Developing, to tame that nature) Balance (Something which he need to strive to obtain) When fire is use correctly, it can be very useful but incorrect use of fire can be destructive. Hence his name: Ignis. New characteristic given to Male Lead: > Impulsive and emotional > Short temper and flare up easily (get into argument with others easily) > Temper go down quickly too (only regret it later) > Hot-headed and hot-blood (obviously) His machine still specialize in things which other Male lead don't specialize: Scanning and healing. It give me room to develop him. ====== Note: Obviously run into trouble trying to develop Imber..... Edit: Working on new way to introduce male characters (The kiss that lead to incident isn't going to work (due to Anime state that it is a drone and not everybody read the novel...))
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2012-01-16, 07:50 | Link #18398 |
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@ Senpai - Male rape is subverted in Shadow. Ichika looks and acts very uncomfortable when M makes remarks about raping him while he's tied up (she's bullshitting to scare him.) and Irish's segment features very violent reactions to actions of the same reasoning.
Side note - Alright, where do I start first: Irish's or Ichika's? This'll determine the sequence of events. @ Treme - Just try sticking with one lead already. I'm not sure if I can develop Irish into a good enough character, but that doesn't mean I'm changing whenever I see something I don't like.
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2012-01-16, 08:02 | Link #18400 |
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@ Senpai - Michael's segment will always be last and you already know it ends. If Ichika goes first, then the rescue attempt will be shown first and his usage of partial deployment. If Irish's, then they'll discuss why Cecilia was taken and Irish will notice the bomb detonator in Sam's pocket.
Side note - By the end of the arc, all of the terrorists - bar Irish, Joshua, and Viktor - should be dead. Ichika only knocks out the mooks in his segment so that'll be a bit of a problem. Do you think it's possible for the building they're in to get rigged with explosives so when Cecilia, Irish, and Ichika leave the building, it collapses and kills anyone else inside?
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