2012-12-21, 13:56 | Link #561 |
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A few hours more and everyone can enjoy some delicious Comet cake.
And I totally did not start the chapter with Henry the Fifth. What can I say, I did actually act out Shakespeare. .... I need Major Christopher icon now.
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2012-12-21, 14:33 | Link #562 |
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Now that's what I'd say would be a quote that fits or sets the tone for the chapter.
And now that it's officially out I can now congratulate you on that Chapter, pat myself on the back for being a pretty decent BETA () and breathe a sigh of relief that it's over. Now to touchup the Middle chapters. XD And then once that's done, it'll be time for me to work on the saga of Lipan Squadron...
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2012-12-21, 19:29 | Link #564 |
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A quote at the beginning of the chapter sets the tone. It should be one understandable to all, without knowledge of source material of the quote. It should not require deep thought and massaging of concepts to make it fit.
The connection should not require hard thinking. But as always, you obviously know better; you may do as you please. It is your fanfic, afterall.
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2012-12-21, 19:37 | Link #565 |
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The thing, though, is the quote on its own has nothing to do with the source material of the quote. If you just know a little bit about what happens in the fanfic and the character it revolves around, it's really easy to understand how it relates to Hisako Kanemoto talking about barriers which are invincible.
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2012-12-21, 23:06 | Link #566 | |
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Thing is, on the face of it there is a jarring disconnect. Happy Barrier? Invincibility? In Alternative? It creates such a jarring feel. Now if you'd started with "Once more unto the breach", for example, that gives off a feel that is less jarring. As another example, one chapter of Tiberium Wars opens with a poem by Alan Seegar - "I have a rendezvous with Death, at some disputed barricade" - that perfectly captures the grim desperation of the Pentagon siege.
But you have your heart set on that quote, and you obviously wish to use it, no matter how jarring it may be. You ask for my opinion and I have given it. What more do you want? Quote:
The world does not revolve around you, nor this persecution complex you appear to be laboring under.
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2012-12-22, 00:53 | Link #568 |
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Hagoshod, your entire presence around these parts has for the most part been focused around showing myself and other posters how we are wrong and you know better. A jab it may be, but it is also the truth.
I just call it the way I see it. Also, I realise that it may be difficult for you to do so, but I do wish you would not misrepresent me so. You were the one who started this whole tangent of Hagoshod Haet Thread, and I never claimed you were imagining things, or that you were deranged. I simply pointed out that I do not need to do anything of the sort, because you'll do a good enough job of things by yourself. I do urge you to reread and comprehend what has been stated, though I fear this may be a futile endeavour, as you appear determined to find insult in all things. Now, as for the quote you wish to use, my opinion, that you have sought, is that it does not work for that chapter, because it creates a jarring feel. It is akin to Thorin's company singing their song with a cheery beat and instruments: it clashes horribly with the mood that has been set. However, you strongly desire to use that quote: at the end of the day it is your story, and as you obviously feel that you know your story better than I do (and this can be seen in your responses), then by all means, act as you please. You are writing for your gratification, not mine.
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2012-12-22, 10:10 | Link #569 | |
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Quote:
Spoiler for Chapter 5 Homefront:
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2012-12-22, 10:24 | Link #570 |
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... what, no love for Wild Goose the BETA editor?
That said, I personally don't think it's going to be that happy: Spoiler for Speculation for Yuuya's fate:
Also, now that it's officially out, I'm quite pleased to state that I've been helping AMT to BETA edit Comet, and the Prologue and Chapter 1 have been edited. Work is progressing on Chapters 2-4. 5 was edited by yours truly. *basks in happiness, not noticing there's a Soldier-kun behind him* CHOMP!
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2012-12-22, 22:43 | Link #572 | |
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Quote:
Spoiler for reply:
Thanks.
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2012-12-26, 10:43 | Link #575 |
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Speaking of fics...
anyone read Lunatic Lunarian? http://www.mai-net.net/bbs/sst/sst.p...35776&n=0#kiji One of the better ones around it seems, and it is indeed quite good
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2012-12-26, 13:59 | Link #579 |
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sorry just got overboard and posted in the character page ...
( Any chance that going to see Cryka & Inia in Final extra with Papa Sandek scheming to take over Kotobuki (Kotobukiya) and A4 ( A3) making only russian Valge-on mecha/TSF and over price all US/Euro/Japan/ TSF/Valge-on Yuuya ala Phoenix wright OBJECTION!!!!! Which tries to get the aid of BANZAI( Bandai) Which Mitsurgi Zaibatsu has tries with. a certain Iwaya Eiji works a division chief, then Inform the Mitsurugi Twins about this matter..... Takeru and gang gets involved ..... And by the way A certain Kouhai form Hakuryou named Tatsunami Hibiki which was accidentally drag in the ensuing chaos ( By the Hibiki loves Kamen Raiders and even has his on special move " Final Altered form ride ... Unlimited drop maneuver .... and insert muv luv bgm Last edited by kaizerknight01; 2012-12-26 at 14:20. |
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