Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Gillian]

Originally Posted by Kha

That's HAO you heretic! ()

Voting Hao for the awesomeness he is.
It's never too late.

I know him under Zeki

page claim dedicated to.....*search*...*found*...Mirrored Souls

keep up the awsome work

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by Keroko

Well, concidering that at that point in time she is fighting Vivio, I highly doubt she'll just drop what she is doing. The distraction would be enough for Vivio to pound Nanoha or Quattro to activate a nasty trap though.

So,Vivio got rampage, she killed Nanoha who was distracted by the notice of Fate's capture, or best, Fate's murder. And when Vivio realise what had she done, she got totally mad, she killed Quattro and Jail (Wich resolve the problem of been forced to add another villan) and ended totally twisted in mind

Originally Posted by Kha

That's HAO you heretic! ()

Voting Hao for the awesomeness he is.

Yes Hao is one of the best villans that had ever existed in an anime (the power to destrot even oponents souls make him so scary!)

Plus in Shaman King is not know if Hao was killed in the end

But I also think that should be better Evil Vivio

Current Votation

Evil Nanoha: 0
HOT Evil Nanoha: 0
Evil Vivio: ///// 5
Onaga: 0
Dr. Doom: 0
Hao: / 1
Galactus: 0
Other: 0

Winner: Evil Vivio

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by Evil Rick

So,Vivio got rampage, she killed Nanoha who was distracted by the notice of Fate's capture, or best, Fate's murder. And when Vivio realise what had she done, she got totally mad, she killed Quattro and Jail (Wich resolve the problem of been forced to add another villan) and ended totally twisted in mind

Could do, or I could write a scenario with Uomo... Having Jail survive and being responsible for Vivio's 'return' sounds rather logical.

Laying claim on the first Vivio part :3 Will hash out the details tommorow.

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Keroko

Could do, or I could write a scenario with Uomo... Having Jail survive and being responsible for Vivio's 'return' sounds rather logical.

Laying claim on the first Vivio part :3 Will hash out the details tommorow.

Darn I wanted to write the first Vivio part . So it's official we're putting in a third universe where Nanoha fails?

[Krinen]

That, or I'm thinking, maybe Jail succeeded, and ended up killing near-every one whom entered the cradle, which, upon forcing Vivio to watch, broke her spirit. Over time, anger and hate accumulated, but with no rational thought to filter it, it warped her mind, twisted her into becoming evil, now, this happened when she hit the age in that image Rick posted, so she took the liberty of killing Jail and the numbers. She didn't know why, and still doesn't, on account of her devestated psyche.

No ideas on why there's an evil Zaffy with her.

(There's also the evil-demension idea, but....)

That read so much better in my head.

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Krinen

That, or I'm thinking, maybe Jail succeeded, and ended up killing near-every one whom entered the cradle, which, upon forcing Vivio to watch, broke her spirit. Over time, anger and hate accumulated, but with no rational thought to filter it, it warped her mind, twisted her into becoming evil, now, this happened when she hit the age in that image Rick posted, so she took the liberty of killing Jail and the numbers. She didn't know why, and still doesn't, on account of her devestated psyche.

No ideas on why there's an evil Zaffy with her.

(There's also the evil-demension idea, but....)

I have an Idea for why Zaffy's with her I haven't fully worked through it yet though

[Thesinwithin]

I dunno, I think the evil dimension is a good idea as well. Someone in Fate's world should have some plot where they realize who the big bad is sooner, rather than later. Just because it makes sense that if they know what's potentially going to be going on in lil Nanoha's world that they're going to want to expiate the fixing it process so that we can have epic evil Vivio v. Nanoha battle. (or maybe Nanohas... that would just be so much epic beamspam)

[Krinen]

Originally Posted by Thesinwithin

(epic beamspam)

DBZ, anyone?

Anyway, back on topic.

(What, you expect me to try and be funny, fail, re-rail the thread, AND contribute?
What am I, Superman?)

[Satashi]

I hummed happily to myself as I arranged the food inside of my lunch box. Extra rice for myself and octopus sausages for Vita. It was a standard morning ritual come morning for me, but something was extra today. A third box was lined on the table, filled with lots of different types of things that I had spent most of last night and a little of this morning preparing. Yuuno's lunch box was so full I had to employ a second one just to hold the rice for it. I didn't mind, though, because my lunch boxes were cute and small so it was okay. Once finished preparing I took pink food coloring and folded it in part of the rice before molding it into a heart shape in the middle of the container. Standing back a bit, I looked at my creation and smiled proudly. It was absolutely perfect if I do say so myself. Shamal told me it was very pretty and my boyfriend would love it and I smiled proudly until I realized that she saw it. Quickly and embarrassedly, I put the lid on the lunch box and blushed hard at the teasing look I was getting. Great, if she told Signum about this...

Saved by the Bell XIX
By: Satashi

~**~

*cough* just starting? Me? Never!

......... okay maybe I just started.........

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Satashi

I hummed happily to myself as I arranged the food inside of my lunch box. Extra rice for myself and octopus sausages for Vita. It was a standard morning ritual come morning for me, but something was extra today. A third box was lined on the table, filled with lots of different types of things that I had spent most of last night and a little of this morning preparing. Yuuno's lunch box was so full I had to employ a second one just to hold the rice for it. I didn't mind, though, because my lunch boxes were cute and small so it was okay. Once finished preparing I took pink food coloring and folded it in part of the rice before molding it into a heart shape in the middle of the container. Standing back a bit, I looked at my creation and smiled proudly. It was absolutely perfect if I do say so myself. Shamal told me it was very pretty and my boyfriend would love it and I smiled proudly until I realized that she saw it. Quickly and embarrassedly, I put the lid on the lunch box and blushed hard at the teasing look I was getting. Great, if she told Signum about this...

Saved by the Bell XIX
By: Satashi

~**~

*cough* just starting? Me? Never!

......... okay maybe I just started.........

Yagami house fun. Yuuno's a lucky guy.

[Thesinwithin]

Yuuno is a lucky guy, good for him.

[markesellus]

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

Well I believe we have successfully proven there are many many ways for evil Vivio to work. We'll work out details and motive when the time comes (besides the poll's still open)

On that note

New (short) Nanoha part

Spoiler for Am I incapable of writing a part longer then a page?:

It’d been a long time since I’d been to that park (or at least my world’s version of it) . I had a lot of good memories there, the first time I met Yuuno, the first time I used Raising Heart and more recently (of course more recently means until about four years ago) my Fate’s and my training there.
Fate was already there when I arrived. “Ah Nanoha,” she moved from her spot by a tree to closer to me. “Um… Nanoha, my Nanoha,” I couldn’t help but grin at that slight subconscious possessiveness. “And I normally spar but since you’re so strong…”
“Don’t worry about it, if you go all out and I go easy on you we should be fine,” Besides I still had a limiter on me, even switching the dimension didn’t remove it.
Fate nodded, “I already had Arf set up a barrier so… Baridiche.”
“Raising Heat.”
“Set up!”

I’d forgotten how strong Fate was (well is), I hadn’t sparred with mine since the accident, a choice that was all hers not mine. Fate worried too much, both Fates worried too much mine and this one.
We sparred for a good couple of hours. There was no real winner unlike when Fate spared with Signum it’d never been about winning with me, only with pushing me and this Fate was determined to push me. Back and forth our strikes and attacks went, without a single one connecting. By the end both of us ended up exhausted but content. When (not if. I would get home) I returned I’d have to convince Fate we could go at it and I’d be fine.
“Hey Fate-chan,” I didn’t want to my time with little Fate-chan to end so soon. “You wanna go get something to eat?” Mom had given me a bit of money.
She smiled, “Sure I’d like that.”
We went to a small place I remembered Fate liked. I was rewarded by getting to see Fate’s cute little smile as we walked up. What was that word again? Oh yeah moe.
Our meal went well, we managed to find things to talk about and I managed to avoid accidentally reveling Fate’s entire future. I was having trouble remembering what happened when, ten years was a long time.
“’Oi is who’s this strange woman Fate?” Well here were more people from my past. Would it ever stop being weird to see people like this? I forgot Arisa used to wear her hair so long, actually she looked a bit like Vivio. A pang of guilt went through my heart. I knew Fate would keep our daughter safe and happy but I realized I missed her a lot. But this was not the time to worry about that.
“Arisa-chan,” Suzuka sighed, “you shouldn’t be so rude.”
Fate looked flustered probably because Arisa had moved so she was only a few inches from Fate’s face.“Um… this is—”
I took over, “I’m Yukari Takamachi, Nanoha’s cousin.” I smiled, proud that I had managed to remember my alias. “Fate-ch—san,” I just barely caught myself, “was showing me around.”
Arisa eyed me like she knew I was lying, “Where’s Nanoha?”
“She’s sick,” maybe I should have been worried that I was getting good at lying.
“Oh no, then we should visit her!” Suzuka looked worried.
“No!” Fate and I shouted out at once.
“I mean, it’s not serious so she wouldn’t want you to worry,” Fate chuckled nervously.
“Yeah yeah.” I nodded.
Arisa scooted into the seat beside Fate. “Well then we’ll join you then.”
I mentally sighed. Nothing was simple was it.

So is it officially decided to be called Mirrored Souls? I like it. Evil!Vivio sounds awesome so I vote that. The plots going to get a lot more complicated though If you add the 3rd universe where Nanoha fails. Especially since there are so many different people writing with different ideas. But that is what makes it fun/cool

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for SbtB:

I hummed happily to myself as I arranged the food inside of my lunch box. Extra rice for myself and octopus sausages for Vita. It was a standard morning ritual come morning for me, but something was extra today. A third box was lined on the table, filled with lots of different types of things that I had spent most of last night and a little of this morning preparing. Yuuno's lunch box was so full I had to employ a second one just to hold the rice for it. I didn't mind, though, because my lunch boxes were cute and small so it was okay. Once finished preparing I took pink food coloring and folded it in part of the rice before molding it into a heart shape in the middle of the container. Standing back a bit, I looked at my creation and smiled proudly. It was absolutely perfect if I do say so myself. Shamal told me it was very pretty and my boyfriend would love it and I smiled proudly until I realized that she saw it. Quickly and embarrassedly, I put the lid on the lunch box and blushed hard at the teasing look I was getting. Great, if she told Signum about this...

Yay a part of SbtB! Hayate is so nice. I wish I got lunches like that.

[Krinen]

Originally Posted by markesellus

So is it officially decided to be called Mirrored Souls? I like it. Evil!Vivio sounds awesome so I vote that. The plots going to get a lot more complicated though If you add the 3rd universe where Nanoha fails. Especially since there are so many different people writing with different ideas. But that is what makes it fun/cool

Indeed that's what makes this so unique. And so full of win.


I just wish all my ideas weren't going to some retarded crossover-esque fic I plan to write. Though when I actually get around to WRITING it is to be said.

But I'll contribute to this story sooner or later. You can bet on it.

[Momo Chan]

Originally Posted by Satashi

I hummed happily to myself as I arranged the food inside of my lunch box. Extra rice for myself and octopus sausages for Vita. It was a standard morning ritual come morning for me, but something was extra today. A third box was lined on the table, filled with lots of different types of things that I had spent most of last night and a little of this morning preparing. Yuuno's lunch box was so full I had to employ a second one just to hold the rice for it. I didn't mind, though, because my lunch boxes were cute and small so it was okay. Once finished preparing I took pink food coloring and folded it in part of the rice before molding it into a heart shape in the middle of the container. Standing back a bit, I looked at my creation and smiled proudly. It was absolutely perfect if I do say so myself. Shamal told me it was very pretty and my boyfriend would love it and I smiled proudly until I realized that she saw it. Quickly and embarrassedly, I put the lid on the lunch box and blushed hard at the teasing look I was getting. Great, if she told Signum about this...

Saved by the Bell XIX
By: Satashi

~**~

*cough* just starting? Me? Never!

......... okay maybe I just started.........

Oh yay. I forgot about SbtB!!!!!
Can't wait till the next chapter comes out

Yuuno's lucky indeed....
but I still need to get my head around the fact that's he's not gay.
I mean, just look at him.


Um...but why is he paired up with Hayate anyway? That's pretty random in terms of canon-ness.
Not that I mind.

[Krinen]

Originally Posted by Momo Chan

Oh yay. I forgot about SbtB!!!!!
Can't wait till the next chapter comes out

Yuuno's lucky indeed....
but I still need to get my head around the fact that's he's not gay.
I mean, just look at him.


Um...but why is he paired up with Hayate anyway? That's pretty random in terms of canon-ness.
Not that I mind.

Just offering my two cents, but it seems like an "Opposites Attract" kinda situation. Hayate being flustered and random. Yuuno being calm and collected.


That, and the situations Satashi comes up with are so full of hilarity it kinda stuck...

>.>

[Junkedcat]

Originally Posted by Thesinwithin

I dunno, I think the evil dimension is a good idea as well. Someone in Fate's world should have some plot where they realize who the big bad is sooner, rather than later. Just because it makes sense that if they know what's potentially going to be going on in lil Nanoha's world that they're going to want to expiate the fixing it process so that we can have epic evil Vivio v. Nanoha battle. (or maybe Nanohas... that would just be so much epic beamspam)

I say who ever the big bad is, like a insane evil Vivio, has the desire to start some ruckus with the (or a) TSAB by exploiting a weakness. They know that Nanoha, whichever one, would be the main force that would stop their plans. In order to get rid of the problem they decided to use a Lost Logia they discovered that can send objects into the mirror realm. The excessive magical power that was drawn in by Starlight Breaker caused an "anchor" to be established between the two Nanoha's causing them to be swapped instead of just one being misplaced.

If it is Evil!Vivio then her home universe is her past. She can't gain whatever she wants in the home universe so she hops over to one that has what she wants and has the opportunity to see it through.

Just a random thought.

Originally Posted by Krinen

Just offering my two cents, but it seems like an "Opposites Attract" kinda situation. Hayate being flustered and random. Yuuno being calm and collected.


That, and the situations Satashi comes up with are so full of hilarity it kinda stuck...

>.>

That and I think that Hayate might be able to handle Yuuno's brains. You know, Yuuno going off babbling about something and Hayate acutely being able to understand most of it...

[Krinen]

Originally Posted by Junkedcat

I say who ever the big bad is, like a insane evil Vivio, has the desire to start some ruckus with the (or a) TSAB by exploiting a weakness. They know that Nanoha, whichever one, would be the main force that would stop their plans. In order to get rid of the problem they decided to use a Lost Logia they discovered that can send objects into the mirror realm. The excessive magical power that was drawn in by Starlight Breaker caused an "anchor" to be established between the two Nanoha's causing them to be swapped instead of just one being misplaced.

If it is Evil!Vivio then her home universe is her past. She can't gain whatever she wants in the home universe so she hops over to one that has what she wants and has the opportunity to see it through.

Just a random thought.


That and I think that Hayate might be able to handle Yuuno's brains. You know, Yuuno going off babbling about something and Hayate acutely being able to understand most of it...

That's actually a great idea. Now the only dilemma left.

...What does she want? [/ominous]

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Momo Chan

Um...but why is he paired up with Hayate anyway? That's pretty random in terms of canon-ness.
Not that I mind.

I dunno, it's just something I came up with a long time ago. They just work for me for some reason. Hayate is always kind and caring and taking care of other people, and Yuuno is an instructor, kind, caring, really soft and gentle.

In StrikerS Hayate is a leader and has a great burden on her and Yuuno is an "outsider" of the military who still helps her and comforts her.

At least in my stories

Canon wise I can't see them as a match, but in my universe they fit really well ^^

Plus, their dates are always hilarious ^_^ You think I give Fate hell? lol

[Thesinwithin]

Originally Posted by Junkedcat

I say who ever the big bad is, like a insane evil Vivio, has the desire to start some ruckus with the (or a) TSAB by exploiting a weakness. They know that Nanoha, whichever one, would be the main force that would stop their plans. In order to get rid of the problem they decided to use a Lost Logia they discovered that can send objects into the mirror realm. The excessive magical power that was drawn in by Starlight Breaker caused an "anchor" to be established between the two Nanoha's causing them to be swapped instead of just one being misplaced.

If it is Evil!Vivio then her home universe is her past. She can't gain whatever she wants in the home universe so she hops over to one that has what she wants and has the opportunity to see it through.

Just a random thought.

And a good random thought. I totally agree with you that the power of Starlight Breaker does function as an "anchor" to cause to switch between Nanoha's - something that I don't think anyone was counting on. That being the case, does this mean that Evil!Vivio is going to attack lil Nanoha's world and accidentally encounter a fully powered-up and rather annoyed big Nanoha?

Perhaps in Evil!Vivio's universe, Fate is somehow not in the picture? It seems rather foolish to completely ignore Fate in the big scheme of things - even though Nanoha is more powerful, Fate will fight tooth and nail to get her back (and we all know that Fate's level of ass-kicking can exceed even Nanoha's beam spam at times).

This idea needs five more minutes in the oven before we can write it all down.

Originally Posted by Satashi

Plus, their dates are always hilarious ^_^ You think I give Fate hell? lol

You really did gave Fate hell in Saved By The Bell. So so so much hell. If I were her, I would have died of embarrassment something like ten times over just based on the events of that fic.

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Thesinwithin

Perhaps in Evil!Vivio's universe, Fate is somehow not in the picture? It seems rather foolish to completely ignore Fate in the big scheme of things - even though Nanoha is more powerful, Fate will fight tooth and nail to get her back (and we all know that Fate's level of ass-kicking can exceed even Nanoha's beam spam at times).

Well Fate's dead in Evil!Vivio's universe isn't she. She, like pretty much everybody else, was killed by Jail's successful scheme.