Hey guys, a question - I've got a writing notebook that I use for jotting down ideas while in class (or for doodling while I'm supposed to be participating in a critique) but I was wondering, how much of your fics are planned out before you write them?
My fics are usually unplanned when I start them and then I go walking around my block with my best friend and we bake them quite a bit. Usually, though, when I go into writing something, I have no idea what I'm doing.
Actually, when you think about it, my Nanoha Fic is sort of a grand experiment in the realms of planning fanfiction, as the plot is completely mapped out.
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Hey guys, a question - I've got a writing notebook that I use for jotting down ideas while in class (or for doodling while I'm supposed to be participating in a critique) but I was wondering, how much of your fics are planned out before you write them?
My fics are usually unplanned when I start them and then I go walking around my block with my best friend and we bake them quite a bit. Usually, though, when I go into writing something, I have no idea what I'm doing.
Actually, when you think about it, my Nanoha Fic is sort of a grand experiment in the realms of planning fanfiction, as the plot is completely mapped out.
Usually I have an idea of where I'm going to end up and I know major points along the way but everything else is unknown.
I wonder how long this would last? This feeling in my stomach, the excitement and nervousness in my throat. As I lay awake in bed staring at my ceiling I pondered exactly what it meant. Everyone always said that the feeling didn't last long, that it would slowly die off and we would become used to each other...
Well, I've seen that in some couples and it made me a little annoyed. I waited so long for Nanoha, now that I had the chance to be with her, why would I want the feelings to go away? Yes, those couples were fakes in my book. I was sure the way I felt would last. Just like that couple down at the bread store, or Nanoha's parents. That's how I wanted to be.
The light shining through my blinds finally reached my open eyes and I rolled over. Arf, in her puppy form, fell from my stomach and mumbled something sleepily before going to the foot of my bed. As I sat up I pondered what I should do today. Already I had taken Nanoha to many places so what was left?
Slowly I moved from my bed and walked to my dresser to pick out clothes for the day. A matching dark black bra with bikini style panties were placed over my body and covered with semi-baggy bluejean shorts and a shirt that showed off my stomach. Not so much for looking sexy but mainly because it was so freaking hot outside.
The way downstairs was made casually, sounds of morning filling the apartment. Just as I passed my brother's room the door opened softly. Used to running into him, I quickly danced around the person and went to wish him a good morning.
Only it was Amy.
Coming out of Chrono's room in one of his shirts.
Early in the morning.
Processing, please wait.....
My eyes went wide and I took a small breath of air to prepare myself for the squeal. Fortunetly for Amy she reacted fast enough to cover my mouth and press a finger to her lips with a 'Shhhhhh' sound. I nodded ecstatically at her and found her hand removed from my lips. "Since when?" I whispered to her softly as the door closed.
"A while," She replied with a small embarrassed smile. "I need to go,"
I understood why. If Mom caught her there would be so much teasing and questions they would never have privacy again. As I watched Amy walk away with a slight limp towards the bathroom for a shower a thought crossed my mind.
Privacy.
That's right, Mom and Chrono were going back to Midchilda today to check on their new ship being constructed... Amy was sure to go with them... Which meant I would be alone today.
Alone with Nanoha....
I could feel my cheeks burning. Was it too early? Would she be startled by it? But I'm not planning to seduce her or anything... I just want to cuddle, maybe watch a movie, cook her dinner...
Yes, that was fine. Just because we're dating doesn't mean that we're still not friends. She has come over many times to just hang out. Tonight will be same, only with cuddling. Oh wow, I want to snuggle her... The very idea was making me giddy.
A deep breath calmed me down enough to get control of my thoughts again. I was a mature adult, there was no way I was going to get all light headed and dreamy over just this. With a nod I confirmed it to myself and walked forward, tripped over myself because I wasn't paying attention, and landed with a thunk on the floor.
"Ow... I hit my nose..."
Amy and Chrono! Yay!
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Originally Posted by Satashi
Spoiler for Week pt.17:
I was nervous. That was to say the least. I spent most of the morning shopping for everything I needed to cook dinner tonight and prepared as much of it as I could so I wouldn't have to spend very long in the kitchen. Everyone was already gone and I was about to leave myself. I was going to pick Nanoha up at her house and walk her here. I didn't have to but I had a plan in mind.
As I left my house I assured myself that this wasn't going overboard. I mean, it wasn't like I was going to buy her roses or anything... Just flowers. Pretty flowers. Something to show my feelings for her, that's all. Maybe a teddy bear too? No, that's too much. Stay simple, Fate, stay simple.
The flower shop came into view about mid-way to my girlfriend's house and after a quick stop I emerged with a simply bouquet of mixed flowers. Nothing over the top, no red roses blooming, just a nice arrangement. Yes, she would like this. I'm sure she would understand that I wanted to tell her how I felt but didn't want to go overboard. One confession of love threw her world upside down, I don't need to do it again. Flowers were a nice sign of friendship and caring, as well as love. She will understand them all.
Why am I convincing myself this over and over? Calm down!
The café came into sight and I sped up a little. One because I wanted to get to see her faster and two because the sun was blazing. Have I mentioned I don't like heat?
Cool air greeted me and I exhaled in satisfaction. "Hello," I greeted Momoko happily, plucking one flower from the arrangement and handing it to her. "For you."
"Aw, thank you!" Momoko sniffed it and beamed at me. "You're so sweet."
"I try," I was blushing again at the compliment. "Is Nanoha ready or should I go fetch her?"
"I'm here," Nanoha's voice came from the kitchen and shortly she jogged out of it, stopping when she saw me. "Eh?"
"And for you," I continued my earlier statement, giving the glass vase to Nanoha.
"I...thank you..." She fidgeted softly, leaning forward and smelling them. "... Thanks, Fate-chan...."
She sounded... sad?
"Nanoha?" I asked softly, a little worried. Did I mess up?
"Sorry," The girl sniffed and rubbed both her eyes, wiping away tears that had yet to properly form. Another sniff came and Momoko took the flowers from her to place in the middle of the café. "I'm a little..." She rubbed her eyes again to make sure the tear were gone. "Allergic to some flowers."
I face palmed. Figures. "I'm sorry..."
"It's okay, let's not talk about it." Nanoha walked by me and hurried to the door. On the way after her Momoko gave me a soft encouraging look, and I got the vibe from her that I should keep trying my best. My girlfriend sniffed again when I met her and was trying to calm herself down. "Okay, what's the plan today?"
"Um," I reached out to take her hand but found her slowly wrapping her arms around my offered one and rested her head on my shoulder while hugging it. "I thought maybe we could just go to my place and hang out? Watch a movie and just talk or something?"
"That sounds okay," She nodded and walked next to me, cheek against my shoulder, despite the strange looks we got from some people. "And Darling?"
"Yes, Honey?" Back to pet names.
"They were pretty."
"Your fa-"
"My face is pretty, I know." She giggled, mood lightening and smile appearing over her face again. "You always say that."
With a giggle I looked forward, now over my slip up on the flowers. "Let's hurry, it's way too hot outside."
"Wuss," She teased.
Too bad about the flowers. I love how Fate is so nervous and keeps second guessing herself.
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Originally Posted by Sam the Onion
Spoiler for Vivio 1:
It was that dark hallway again.
My hand drags that locket from my pocket and opens it with a gentle push. Even that I cannot see it here, I know it well enough to imagine it.
”Mothers...” I stop and touch the glass protecting that picture. ”Even if you can't be saved, let me be greedy and save myself.” A tear falls on it and I close the locket before my resolution breaks. ”You have no complains, right, Zafira?” I turn and look at the tall, gray haired man next to me.
”I am your familiar after all.” He answers vaguedly without even looking at me. It's clear he has some but he has given up already on it. He had accepted my dream. I took over fuelling mana to him after Hayate and others died.
I don't answer and begin walking again. I don't know how far we've walked but for some reason that person built this thing here. The walk finally ended and we reached that room.
”I already thought you wouldn't come.” That man smiled in the circular room, waiting for us. ”Although, I knew you couldn't just leave.” He grins like he knew about something. ”Now, let us go to the 1523rd Mirror World and let the Jail of 2361st Mirror World achieve his plans as well.” A laugh full of lunacy fills the room.
Hah. I'm not doing this for you. That just happens to be a side-effect.
”Jail, could you stop laughing. We don't have all day.” Uno calls for the man from the side.
”We have all day. Time doesn't matter for this operation.” He spins around with his arms wide open.
But I can't keep watching you all day.
”Uno is right.” Zafira walks towards the middle.
I follow him and avoid that man with my eyes as much as possible. I had nothing to do with him anymore. I just want that Vivio to be spared from this feeling.
That man grumps as we don't share his enthusiasms and he leaves with loud steps. ”Remembed that in three weeks, we'll need you to act as an anchor again.” The mechanical door closes with a hiss.
Like I was coming back to this dead world. I'll finish this and die away.
”Activating Mirror Revealer.” The room hurrs and fills with lights.
”Let us go, Excalion Assault.” I throw my jewel in the air and it falls back down as my sword.
”Set link: Mirror 852 and Mirror 1523.”
[Yes, mistress.] It answers and loads cartridges.
”Set anchors: Jewel Seed 6 and Vivio Scaglietti.” The room announces.
”Starlight Cut.” I murmur and slice the air with as much magical energy as I can. The world distorts and I feel reality bend around me enough to let us through the mirror.
When I came to, I found myself in a dark warehouse like it was planned.
”Mid-Childa...” I grinned and took my first steps in this path. Nanoha had to die, so she could never meet me and I could be spared from the pain of losing her. ”Zafira...” I call out for the name of my partner.
”I will go through with this with you.” He nods. Or so I think. I cannot see him here.
”Yes.” I answer him and we continue walking this path.
And Evil!Vivio is added into the mix. This joint fic is becoming intense!
[QUOTE=TheShinySword;1501817]New Fate Part
Spoiler for 1.7 pages long and still short T_T:
“Is something wrong Zafira?” It was best to be direct; Zafira had a tendency to take things literally.
He hesitated and looked away, “It’s about Vivio.” He nodded his head towards the coffee table. It was clear except for a single piece of paper folded up in a neat square. Fate headed over, dread clutching at her heart. However, when she unfolded the paper the dread was replaced by confusion.
“I don’t understand,” the picture was just one of Vivio’s crayon ones. Fate didn’t understand why Zafira looked so worried; Vivio drew dozens of pictures of him everyday. It was odd that Vivio had given him an eye patch but she was a little girl with an active imagination she’d probably just seen someone with one at the base and thought it was cool.
“She drew that this morning,” his gaze was distant, his mind somewhere else. “She said she saw him last night.” He turned to Fate, his focus back. “She called him ‘other Zaffy’.”
Fate dropped the picture, it fluttered to the ground. “Couldn’t she have just seen you last night and mistaken you for…”
Zafira shook his head, “I haven’t been in that form in a week. She saw someone who looks me.”
Fate’s mind reeled. She stumbled over to the couch and sat down. It made sense why wouldn’t someone else be able to cross over. This Zafira couldn’t be from little Nanoha’s world though, Nanoha would have commented when she saw Zafira had both eyes. So the questions were: where was he from and more pressingly, why was he stalking her daughter?
Zafira left, presumably to check up on Vivio, leaving Fate alone with her thoughts. If the picture was real it proved a few more things too, there were more worlds then just little Nanoha’s and hers and they weren’t all the same. Fate sighed, she needed Nanoha, she couldn’t handle everything alone.
“Fate!” Zafira’s growling yell jolted Fate from her stupor.
Fate jumped up and ran into the kitchen. Vivio still sat in her chair, with a confused and concerned look on her face. Zafira stood off to the side, an emotion resembling fear etched on his face, an emotion he never showed, as he stared at Vivio’s latest drawing. Fate gasped when she saw it.
“Why… why did she draw…” Nanoha looked to Fate for clarification but Fate couldn’t answer. She didn’t understand either; in all logic Vivio should have never seen them.
“What’s wrong?” Vivio looked at the three of them frantically, “it was what I saw!”
“Where?” Zafira didn’t look up.
“There when we colored.” She pointed to the kitchen window. “What’s wrong?” She repeated.
Nanoha still looked up at Fate as if Fate would give her an answer. Fate tried to ignore the pleading eyes and picked up the sheet of paper. On it were two figures, granted they were wobbly and drawn by a six year old but they were eerily similar the Lieze twins. Or at least masked disguises they had worn ten years ago.
“Zafira.” A low growl was her reply. That was all Fate needed to hear. She headed towards the door, her barrier jacket and Baridiche forming as she did.
“Where are you going?” Nanoha called after her.
Fate paused; she didn’t turn as she spoke. “Stay here. I’ll only be a minute.”
“Baridiche scan the area for life forms.”
Four unique signals located, her device’s reply was the same as it had been the last five times she asked it. Whoever they had been they were long gone. Fate ran a hand through her hair. Any deniability was gone. Someone was watching them.
“That was too close Vivio,” with a single motion Zafira removed his mask, his lanky disguise melting away, giving way to a muscular frame even stronger then the one he’d had all those years ago. They had hidden out of view until Fate disappeared back into her home, now the reappeared and started to move away, traveling across the roof tops.
Vivio nodded and removed her own mask. “At least we were wearing these.” She twirled it around in her hands, Zafira knew she hated it; she hated everything that man had given her. Zafira would have hated him too but there was no room in his heart for that emotion anymore. “Unlike last night,” a smirk crossed her face for a second before it gave way to her blank expression.
“I apologize. I forgot you used to smile,” he paused in his stride but continued immediately.
“I smile,” she sounded indignant as indignant as she could. “You just don’t see it.”
“Vivio,” Zafira chuckled softly, it was hollow but the closest either of them could get to the real thing.
“Let’s go back to the hotel.” She jumped down from the roof startling people on the ground, not that she cared. Zafira followed her. “We can’t do anything more right now.”
O.o and Evil Vivio and Zaffy make an appearance. Wow...the Nanoha part is kind of...lacking.
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Originally Posted by Evil Rick
Mmm... you have already started with Vivio's path...
Hope this idea will help
Location: In the Netherrealm, thinking who to betray next...
Quote:
Originally Posted by Sam the Onion
Dedicated to Keroko and the band of Vivio
Spoiler for Vivio 1:
It was that dark hallway again.
My hand drags that locket from my pocket and opens it with a gentle push. Even that I cannot see it here, I know it well enough to imagine it.
”Mothers...” I stop and touch the glass protecting that picture. ”Even if you can't be saved, let me be greedy and save myself.” A tear falls on it and I close the locket before my resolution breaks. ”You have no complains, right, Zafira?” I turn and look at the tall, gray haired man next to me.
”I am your familiar after all.” He answers vaguedly without even looking at me. It's clear he has some but he has given up already on it. He had accepted my dream. I took over fuelling mana to him after Hayate and others died.
I don't answer and begin walking again. I don't know how far we've walked but for some reason that person built this thing here. The walk finally ended and we reached that room.
”I already thought you wouldn't come.” That man smiled in the circular room, waiting for us. ”Although, I knew you couldn't just leave.” He grins like he knew about something. ”Now, let us go to the 1523rd Mirror World and let the Jail of 2361st Mirror World achieve his plans as well.” A laugh full of lunacy fills the room.
Hah. I'm not doing this for you. That just happens to be a side-effect.
”Jail, could you stop laughing. We don't have all day.” Uno calls for the man from the side.
”We have all day. Time doesn't matter for this operation.” He spins around with his arms wide open.
But I can't keep watching you all day.
”Uno is right.” Zafira walks towards the middle.
I follow him and avoid that man with my eyes as much as possible. I had nothing to do with him anymore. I just want that Vivio to be spared from this feeling.
That man grumps as we don't share his enthusiasms and he leaves with loud steps. ”Remembed that in three weeks, we'll need you to act as an anchor again.” The mechanical door closes with a hiss.
Like I was coming back to this dead world. I'll finish this and die away.
”Activating Mirror Revealer.” The room hurrs and fills with lights.
”Let us go, Excalion Assault.” I throw my jewel in the air and it falls back down as my sword.
”Set link: Mirror 852 and Mirror 1523.”
[Yes, mistress.] It answers and loads cartridges.
”Set anchors: Jewel Seed 6 and Vivio Scaglietti.” The room announces.
”Starlight Cut.” I murmur and slice the air with as much magical energy as I can. The world distorts and I feel reality bend around me enough to let us through the mirror.
When I came to, I found myself in a dark warehouse like it was planned.
”Mid-Childa...” I grinned and took my first steps in this path. Nanoha had to die, so she could never meet me and I could be spared from the pain of losing her. ”Zafira...” I call out for the name of my partner.
”I will go through with this with you.” He nods. Or so I think. I cannot see him here.
”Yes.” I answer him and we continue walking this path.
Spoiler for Soz:
Evil just doesn't fit Vivio
I don't know, I don't like the idea of Vivio working for Jail, plus her motives aren't still very clear to me
Location: In the Netherrealm, thinking who to betray next...
Decided, Rise of Techno-Union will be Drawed, Vatican Knigths will be writted, that way the storyes will not interfiere with each other (Although in Vatican Knights maybe I can add some draws of the battles & characters) By the way, Rize of Techno-Union, 2) Skyes of Venganse is like 1/4 ready, it will bereleased in something like 20 of April. Now first chapter of the other:
Vatican Knights
Spoiler for Iniciation:
Everyone think that the evil is just a mere description of the "bad" actions that one can do, but I been saw the true face of the evil and I asure you that you are wrong. You shall wonder who I am and why I tell you this, sit dow, cause I will tell you a Story like you never hear before
My name is Vivio Valentine, and before all, you shall know that I am the daughter of Franchesko Valentine, one of the greatest Vatican Knights that live in the century XlX, or at least I was. The Vatican Knights are an order funded by the Cesar Constantino, with the only purpose to destroy the slaves of the dark that invade the earth, the slaves of the dark are hellspawns that once were humans, humans corrupted by the sins of Greed, Lust and Wrath, twisted in mind and aspect, bound only the inflict suffer and pain, the only way to releasethem, is to kill them, my father fought against this demons, but eventually, he fall,and my mother with him.
I was only 6 years old when I discover that I was alone in this world, my fathers had gone... for ever, killed and descuartizated by beeings of pure evil, beeings thgat I came to heat with all my soul, the orders of the Vatican say that if a Vatican Knight falls, and if he has suns, they will be under the protection of the Vatican and the Snt. Pop, but they will be turned into Vatican Knight with a training that shall beging since they arrive, I remember that night as if had been just yesterday.
The iniciation, a cruel task to give us just a little taste of our future, in wich we will be forced to face pains worst than the iniciation, I was the first. Two mans grab me from each arm, they naked my chest, I was scary, dam I was totally shaking in that moment my only wish was to see my father, taking away those mans and grabing me into his arms... je, but i also knew that it shall be imposible, my father was dead, I was alone, I was totally alone... other man take it from the flames, an iron seal with the mark of the Vatican Knights, the cross of this order, still incandecent, they press it agains my cehst, I could feel the hot steell burning my skin, I was screaming, I was crying, but no one cares, it was forced to happen, I was forced to feel the pain of this "holy task" it was my destint after all, to suffer and that way protect the inocents, it was the will of God, that night I couldn't sleep, the scare still burns, it still hurts, the scare of the cross that I shall carry with me the rest of my life
"It hurts, it hurts..." That voice call my atention that night in the monastery's rooms, the next bed to me "It hurts, it hurts!..." It was that little girl with golden hair, with blue eyes and with an age just like mine, I remember her, she was having the biggest and noicest crye in the iniciation "NO, NO" She screamed all the time.
I raised my head to look at her, she was sittedand still cryin, she had been crying since the iniciation, late I discovered that her name was Karil Nightstar, she had lost her parents in a very similar way that I, but in that moment the only thing I though was to stand up and go to her bed, it was the first time we look at each others eyes, I satt at her side and took her little hand "It's O.K." I told her "My mother always said that a kiss can take away any pain"
"Are... are you sure?" She told me with a chilly little voice, she was scary, she was alone, like I, like all in that cold and dark room
"Yes, just look" I told here at the time I kissed her in her front, until now, I still not know if her pain go away, but that cold and dark knight, after I kissed her, she felt sleep in my shoulder, in that moment, the only thing we ahd was each other, in that moment I knew that Karil Nighstar will be mt new family
Decided, Rise of Techno-Union will be Drawed, Vatican Knigths will be writted, that way the storyes will not interfiere with each other (Although in Vatican Knights maybe I can add some draws of the battles & characters) By the way, Rize of Techno-Union, 2) Skyes of Venganse is like 1/4 ready, it will bereleased in something like 20 of April. Now first chapter of the other:
Vatican Knights
Spoiler for Iniciation:
Everyone think that the evil is just a mere description of the "bad" actions that one can do, but I been saw the true face of the evil and I asure you that you are wrong. You shall wonder who I am and why I tell you this, sit dow, cause I will tell you a Story like you never hear before
My name is Vivio Valentine, and before all, you shall know that I am the daughter of Franchesko Valentine, one of the greatest Vatican Knights that live in the century XlX, or at least I was. The Vatican Knights are an order funded by the Cesar Constantino, with the only purpose to destroy the slaves of the dark that invade the earth, the slaves of the dark are hellspawns that once were humans, humans corrupted by the sins of Greed, Lust and Wrath, twisted in mind and aspect, bound only the inflict suffer and pain, the only way to releasethem, is to kill them, my father fought against this demons, but eventually, he fall,and my mother with him.
I was only 6 years old when I discover that I was alone in this world, my fathers had gone... for ever, killed and descuartizated by beeings of pure evil, beeings thgat I came to heat with all my soul, the orders of the Vatican say that if a Vatican Knight falls, and if he has suns, they will be under the protection of the Vatican and the Snt. Pop, but they will be turned into Vatican Knight with a training that shall beging since they arrive, I remember that night as if had been just yesterday.
The iniciation, a cruel task to give us just a little taste of our future, in wich we will be forced to face pains worst than the iniciation, I was the first. Two mans grab me from each arm, they naked my chest, I was scary, dam I was totally shaking in that moment my only wish was to see my father, taking away those mans and grabing me into his arms... je, but i also knew that it shall be imposible, my father was dead, I was alone, I was totally alone... other man take it from the flames, an iron seal with the mark of the Vatican Knights, the cross of this order, still incandecent, they press it agains my cehst, I could feel the hot steell burning my skin, I was screaming, I was crying, but no one cares, it was forced to happen, I was forced to feel the pain of this "holy task" it was my destint after all, to suffer and that way protect the inocents, it was the will of God, that night I couldn't sleep, the scare still burns, it still hurts, the scare of the cross that I shall carry with me the rest of my life
"It hurts, it hurts..." That voice call my atention that night in the monastery's rooms, the next bed to me "It hurts, it hurts!..." It was that little girl with golden hair, with blue eyes and with an age just like mine, I remember her, she was having the biggest and noicest crye in the iniciation "NO, NO" She screamed all the time.
I raised my head to look at her, she was sittedand still cryin, she had been crying since the iniciation, late I discovered that her name was Karil Nightstar, she had lost her parents in a very similar way that I, but in that moment the only thing I though was to stand up and go to her bed, it was the first time we look at each others eyes, I satt at her side and took her little hand "It's O.K." I told her "My mother always said that a kiss can take away any pain"
"Are... are you sure?" She told me with a chilly little voice, she was scary, she was alone, like I, like all in that cold and dark room
"Yes, just look" I told here at the time I kissed her in her front, until now, I still not know if her pain go away, but that cold and dark knight, after I kissed her, she felt sleep in my shoulder, in that moment, the only thing we ahd was each other, in that moment I knew that Karil Nighstar will be mt new family
I like it. And her new friend Karil too. spelling mistakes with grammar but nothing too bad.
...I started at the last page of this particular thread last week. I then had to travel many, many pages into it's past to even understand. I have now spent every night reading until 5 am to finally, FINALLY! , reach the last post and be able to triumphantly state that I am current in this forum. Woo!
So, hi all, I'm Elle. My brain is in overload so I won't comment until later on the numerous wonderful things that I've read here, but I will say that Mirrored Souls is awesome. <3 I think it, and mercuriangels corresponding Zafira image, won me over to his cause. Didn't realize the wolf man was so sexy; he will get more play in my story than I had originally planned, for sure.
Completely random side note... Maybe I missed it in my delirium... But, I couldn't seem to find not one Fate/Signum fic. This must be remedied, methinks.
Completely random side note... Maybe I missed it in my delirium... But, I couldn't seem to find not one Fate/Signum fic. This must be remedied, methinks.
Why do I smell Sata-nyan drooling at this prospect...?
And yes, welcome.
Looks like you've survived boot camp. Think that was tough? You ain't seen nothing yet... =3
This was amazing. I never really thought it would be this simple. Sitting on the couch in the corner of the "L" shaped section with Nanoha in my lap. That was it, just sitting watching a movie together. Well actually there was a little more to it than that. She was between my legs, back against my front, with her head resting against my neck and shoulder. My arms were loosely around her waist, at first playing with the hem of her shirt but now my hands were being played with by her instead.
Did I mention I could feel her stomach? Her shirt had risen slightly and I my fingertips were dancing against her skin as she amused herself. The steady rise and fall as she breathed, the scent of her hair, the weight of her body. I loved it all. I would never get used to this feeling, this... simple happiness. It didn't take anything special, we didn't have to be making out or being naughty, we just needed to be together.
That's right, Nanoha, I just need you to be happy.
"hm?" Nanoha hummed playfully and looked up slightly at my sudden cuddle of her. "What is it?"
"Nothing," I smiled back, rubbing my cheek against her hair like a kitten would.
"Mou, honey, you're so playful."
"That bad?" I wiggled my nose against her cheek for a laugh.
"Nya haha," She playfully pushed me away and stuck her nose up in the air. "I am a high class girl, it will take more than that to be able to snuggle with me."
"Oh?" I smirked.
"Yup," She glanced at me to make sure I was still paying attention to her.
"You asked for it!" I attacked at once, finger tips making use of her risen shirt, and tickled her. The reaction was immediate, eyes wide and screaming in a high pitched shriek of laughter for me to stop. Instead I gripped her so she couldn't get away and tickled her side and back as best I could in that position. Nanoha's legs kicked out repeatedly, back arching as she struggled, tears rolling down her cheeks as she helplessly laughed and begged for mercy. "Say please," I cooed at her.
"Plah- pleahhaa- pleasshehehehe-please!" I stopped my assault and she collapsed against me, panting hard and wiping her eyes. "Meanie," I moved to tickle her again but she grabbed my hands. "I take it back, I take it back!" She made sure I wouldn't go after her again and relaxed with a deep breath.
Maybe I was a little bit of a pervert deep inside. Having her laying on me, face red and panting, made me feel a little funny inside. Her shirt was over one of her breast now, showing her lime green bra but too tired to fix it. I was turned on? Well... Not really but... A little? The feelings were new to me.
I stroked Nanoha's hair and soon joined my other hands as well to comb the strands as she sank down in my lap so her head was on my thighs. Movie forgotten, I played with her locks and traced her face with my fingers.
She was blushing hard, but a light smile on her face as she looked up at me. My hands trailed down her neck, picked up her shirt, and fixed it for her so it covered everything. I wanted to enjoy the sight of her for myself at the proper time. Right now I just wanted her to be with me.
Nanoha's breath caught slightly, hands reaching to take mine, and simply looked at me for the longest time. Her face softened, gaze changed to a caring one, and a small squeeze of my hands came. "Are you happy?" She asked softly.
"Of course," I whispered down at her. "Are you?"
Nanoha rubbed my palms with her thumbs. "Mm, I'm happy." She smiled at me one more time before turning back to the movie to watch. "I'm happy," She repeated again, softer.
This was amazing. I never really thought it would be this simple. Sitting on the couch in the corner of the "L" shaped section with Nanoha in my lap. That was it, just sitting watching a movie together. Well actually there was a little more to it than that. She was between my legs, back against my front, with her head resting against my neck and shoulder. My arms were loosely around her waist, at first playing with the hem of her shirt but now my hands were being played with by her instead.
Did I mention I could feel her stomach? Her shirt had risen slightly and I my fingertips were dancing against her skin as she amused herself. The steady rise and fall as she breathed, the scent of her hair, the weight of her body. I loved it all. I would never get used to this feeling, this... simple happiness. It didn't take anything special, we didn't have to be making out or being naughty, we just needed to be together.
That's right, Nanoha, I just need you to be happy.
"hm?" Nanoha hummed playfully and looked up slightly at my sudden cuddle of her. "What is it?"
"Nothing," I smiled back, rubbing my cheek against her hair like a kitten would.
"Mou, honey, you're so playful."
"That bad?" I wiggled my nose against her cheek for a laugh.
"Nya haha," She playfully pushed me away and stuck her nose up in the air. "I am a high class girl, it will take more than that to be able to snuggle with me."
"Oh?" I smirked.
"Yup," She glanced at me to make sure I was still paying attention to her.
"You asked for it!" I attacked at once, finger tips making use of her risen shirt, and tickled her. The reaction was immediate, eyes wide and screaming in a high pitched shriek of laughter for me to stop. Instead I gripped her so she couldn't get away and tickled her side and back as best I could in that position. Nanoha's legs kicked out repeatedly, back arching as she struggled, tears rolling down her cheeks as she helplessly laughed and begged for mercy. "Say please," I cooed at her.
"Plah- pleahhaa- pleasshehehehe-please!" I stopped my assault and she collapsed against me, panting hard and wiping her eyes. "Meanie," I moved to tickle her again but she grabbed my hands. "I take it back, I take it back!" She made sure I wouldn't go after her again and relaxed with a deep breath.
Maybe I was a little bit of a pervert deep inside. Having her laying on me, face red and panting, made me feel a little funny inside. Her shirt was over one of her breast now, showing her lime green bra but too tired to fix it. I was turned on? Well... Not really but... A little? The feelings were new to me.
I stroked Nanoha's hair and soon joined my other hands as well to comb the strands as she sank down in my lap so her head was on my thighs. Movie forgotten, I played with her locks and traced her face with my fingers.
She was blushing hard, but a light smile on her face as she looked up at me. My hands trailed down her neck, picked up her shirt, and fixed it for her so it covered everything. I wanted to enjoy the sight of her for myself at the proper time. Right now I just wanted her to be with me.
Nanoha's breath caught slightly, hands reaching to take mine, and simply looked at me for the longest time. Her face softened, gaze changed to a caring one, and a small squeeze of my hands came. "Are you happy?" She asked softly.
"Of course," I whispered down at her. "Are you?"
Nanoha rubbed my palms with her thumbs. "Mm, I'm happy." She smiled at me one more time before turning back to the movie to watch. "I'm happy," She repeated again, softer.
Hmmmm, cant tell if Nanoha is having dought's or if she's suprised at herself.
Dinner was relatively easy thanks to preparing everything earlier. Unfortunetly Nanoha had insisted on helping cook and I found myself wishing to spend more time in the kitchen with her. I had cooked with her several time before in the past but it was a little different this time. Purposely bumping into each other and being extra flirty about things we would have normally just ignored.
The food was delicious, mainly thanks to Nanoha's ability to cook a lot better than myself. Growing up I had always microwaved things or Arf prepared it for me. Once adopted my new mother had insisted on cooking every night and making my lunches as well. I should really learn how to cook, then I could make Nanoha lunch every day.
"You're doing it again," She spoke to me with a humorous tone in her voice. "You're all giddy again."
"Ah, sorry," I flushed, slowly chewing my last bite. "I've been a little out of it lately." A long gulp of milk helped me get my head on straight again and notice she was also finished.
Together we did the dishes and had a rather large bubble fight that ended with me losing. Although we were both drenched even after cleaning up the floor we still crashed back on my bed upstairs without drying off.
Nanoha leaned against my side, allowing my arm to rest over her shoulders without protest. "So," She began while wiggling her feet stretched out on the bed. "What now?"
That's a good question. "Um, I didn't think this far." I was embarrassed at the laugh but still found it cute that she didn't seem to mind. Maybe I could ask her how it's going? An update would be nice. "Ne, Nanoha, about this week-"
"Shh," She shushed me. "I told you before, Honey, that doesn't matter right now. I'm your girlfriend." To prove her point she wrapped both arms around my waist and buried her face against my chest. I leaned over a little onto my back and had her simply lay on me completely.
"Sorry," I apologized softly, stroking her damp hair that still had soap in it.
"Mm," She hummed and shifted slightly, eyes closing. "Ne?"
"Yes?"
"Can I stay the night?" A small yawn made me realize that she was about to fall asleep after eating so much and playing.
"Sure," I leaned back on the pillows but Nanoha only moved up enough to rest her head under my chin, still on top of me fully.
"Is this uncomfortable?" Her breath tickled my skin.
Honestly? It was a little hard to breathe. "No, you're fine." I wrapped my arms around her small waist and hugged her lightly. "Are you comfortable?"
"Very," Her voice trailed off. "Sweet dreams."
"You too." I kissed her hair softly and saw her shift enough to look at me. A gentle gaze yet again and slowly her lips descended to kiss just below my neck. Her body moved slightly and she rested against me yet again.
I wasn't sure how long I laid there, awake, stroking her hair, but I did know that her steady breathing against me and warmth of her body was keeping me up. How did lovers sleep like this? With their hearts pounding so hard? Here in my arms, the girl I dreamed about, was dreaming peacefully...
But I didn't want to sleep. I could enjoy this... I sighed contently and rested my eyes, concentrating on the gentle exhales against my neck, and the soft warm body against me...
and drifted off.
Spoiler for Week pt.20:
This was a first. I have slept with Nanoha several times since we became friends but this was defiantly the first time to awake like this. My eyes opened slowly, mind groggy. Nanoha was just waking up as well it seemed. Somehow during the night we had rolled onto our sides and cuddled. Her leg was bent at the knee and was brought all the way up between my legs. Her arms were around me completly and I had half a mouthfull of her hair.
"Fate...-chan?" She was still mostly asleep, trying to blink away her tiredness while moving away just enough to look at me. As the realization dawned on both of us we each colored and looked downwards to escape each other's sight. "Um... morning..."
"Morning..." I felt suddenly cold when her leg retreated from between mine. "Sleep well?"
"Like a rock." We each spared a glance at the same time. She flushed and I smiled.
"Good," I moved closer to her, pulling her against my body again. "Want to sleep a little more?"
"Um," She fidgeted a little before going quiet. "...Yeah." This time I slid my knee between her legs and cuddled. Her top leg wrapped over mine and slid down to get comfortable. Arms laid over my back and her breath came against my neck again.
Neither of us slept. Instead we simply played with each other's hair, talking softly. I was flirting openly, running my finger along her spine up under her shirt, and then resting it on her side. In return she mimicked my actions and spoke against my neck. I wasn't really aware of how long we stayed like that but when we finally did pull apart I felt a strange sensation of emptiness grip at my front.
"Um," Nanoha blushed again, laughing lightly. "My bra is all out of whack." To prove her point she reached under her shirt and adjusted it. I wanted to tease her about it but mine was the same way. I was amazed we could even sleep in them like we did. But then again, I was sleeping with her... "H-Honey?" Nanoha covered her face with both hands. "Don't... don't look at me like that."
"But you're pretty," I insisted, slowly taking her wrist and encouraging her to reveal herself. "There you go."
"But... my hair is messy and my face hasn't been washed yet..." She looked at me with a half pout. Not being able to help it, I leaned forward and kissed her on the corner of her left eye. "Fate-chan..."
"Yes, My Angel?" Another small gasp and blush.
"D-don't..."
I moved forward and hugged her tightly. "Sorry," I told her gently, holding her to my body to sooth the cold that gripped me when we parted.
"... It's okay." She hugged me back. Several moments passed in silence before we parted, but she still hid herself form my sight. "Let's...Go do something?"
"Yeah, I'd like that." I tried to make her look at me but she covered her face again, ears burning red. "You're so cute."
This was amazing. I never really thought it would be this simple. Sitting on the couch in the corner of the "L" shaped section with Nanoha in my lap. That was it, just sitting watching a movie together. Well actually there was a little more to it than that. She was between my legs, back against my front, with her head resting against my neck and shoulder. My arms were loosely around her waist, at first playing with the hem of her shirt but now my hands were being played with by her instead.
Did I mention I could feel her stomach? Her shirt had risen slightly and I my fingertips were dancing against her skin as she amused herself. The steady rise and fall as she breathed, the scent of her hair, the weight of her body. I loved it all. I would never get used to this feeling, this... simple happiness. It didn't take anything special, we didn't have to be making out or being naughty, we just needed to be together.
That's right, Nanoha, I just need you to be happy.
"hm?" Nanoha hummed playfully and looked up slightly at my sudden cuddle of her. "What is it?"
"Nothing," I smiled back, rubbing my cheek against her hair like a kitten would.
"Mou, honey, you're so playful."
"That bad?" I wiggled my nose against her cheek for a laugh.
"Nya haha," She playfully pushed me away and stuck her nose up in the air. "I am a high class girl, it will take more than that to be able to snuggle with me."
"Oh?" I smirked.
"Yup," She glanced at me to make sure I was still paying attention to her.
"You asked for it!" I attacked at once, finger tips making use of her risen shirt, and tickled her. The reaction was immediate, eyes wide and screaming in a high pitched shriek of laughter for me to stop. Instead I gripped her so she couldn't get away and tickled her side and back as best I could in that position. Nanoha's legs kicked out repeatedly, back arching as she struggled, tears rolling down her cheeks as she helplessly laughed and begged for mercy. "Say please," I cooed at her.
"Plah- pleahhaa- pleasshehehehe-please!" I stopped my assault and she collapsed against me, panting hard and wiping her eyes. "Meanie," I moved to tickle her again but she grabbed my hands. "I take it back, I take it back!" She made sure I wouldn't go after her again and relaxed with a deep breath.
Maybe I was a little bit of a pervert deep inside. Having her laying on me, face red and panting, made me feel a little funny inside. Her shirt was over one of her breast now, showing her lime green bra but too tired to fix it. I was turned on? Well... Not really but... A little? The feelings were new to me.
I stroked Nanoha's hair and soon joined my other hands as well to comb the strands as she sank down in my lap so her head was on my thighs. Movie forgotten, I played with her locks and traced her face with my fingers.
She was blushing hard, but a light smile on her face as she looked up at me. My hands trailed down her neck, picked up her shirt, and fixed it for her so it covered everything. I wanted to enjoy the sight of her for myself at the proper time. Right now I just wanted her to be with me.
Nanoha's breath caught slightly, hands reaching to take mine, and simply looked at me for the longest time. Her face softened, gaze changed to a caring one, and a small squeeze of my hands came. "Are you happy?" She asked softly.
"Of course," I whispered down at her. "Are you?"
Nanoha rubbed my palms with her thumbs. "Mm, I'm happy." She smiled at me one more time before turning back to the movie to watch. "I'm happy," She repeated again, softer.
sweet part
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Originally Posted by Satashi
Spoiler for Week pt.19:
Dinner was relatively easy thanks to preparing everything earlier. Unfortunetly Nanoha had insisted on helping cook and I found myself wishing to spend more time in the kitchen with her. I had cooked with her several time before in the past but it was a little different this time. Purposely bumping into each other and being extra flirty about things we would have normally just ignored.
The food was delicious, mainly thanks to Nanoha's ability to cook a lot better than myself. Growing up I had always microwaved things or Arf prepared it for me. Once adopted my new mother had insisted on cooking every night and making my lunches as well. I should really learn how to cook, then I could make Nanoha lunch every day.
"You're doing it again," She spoke to me with a humorous tone in her voice. "You're all giddy again."
"Ah, sorry," I flushed, slowly chewing my last bite. "I've been a little out of it lately." A long gulp of milk helped me get my head on straight again and notice she was also finished.
Together we did the dishes and had a rather large bubble fight that ended with me losing. Although we were both drenched even after cleaning up the floor we still crashed back on my bed upstairs without drying off.
Nanoha leaned against my side, allowing my arm to rest over her shoulders without protest. "So," She began while wiggling her feet stretched out on the bed. "What now?"
That's a good question. "Um, I didn't think this far." I was embarrassed at the laugh but still found it cute that she didn't seem to mind. Maybe I could ask her how it's going? An update would be nice. "Ne, Nanoha, about this week-"
"Shh," She shushed me. "I told you before, Honey, that doesn't matter right now. I'm your girlfriend." To prove her point she wrapped both arms around my waist and buried her face against my chest. I leaned over a little onto my back and had her simply lay on me completely.
"Sorry," I apologized softly, stroking her damp hair that still had soap in it.
"Mm," She hummed and shifted slightly, eyes closing. "Ne?"
"Yes?"
"Can I stay the night?" A small yawn made me realize that she was about to fall asleep after eating so much and playing.
"Sure," I leaned back on the pillows but Nanoha only moved up enough to rest her head under my chin, still on top of me fully.
"Is this uncomfortable?" Her breath tickled my skin.
Honestly? It was a little hard to breathe. "No, you're fine." I wrapped my arms around her small waist and hugged her lightly. "Are you comfortable?"
"Very," Her voice trailed off. "Sweet dreams."
"You too." I kissed her hair softly and saw her shift enough to look at me. A gentle gaze yet again and slowly her lips descended to kiss just below my neck. Her body moved slightly and she rested against me yet again.
I wasn't sure how long I laid there, awake, stroking her hair, but I did know that her steady breathing against me and warmth of her body was keeping me up. How did lovers sleep like this? With their hearts pounding so hard? Here in my arms, the girl I dreamed about, was dreaming peacefully...
But I didn't want to sleep. I could enjoy this... I sighed contently and rested my eyes, concentrating on the gentle exhales against my neck, and the soft warm body against me...
and drifted off.
Spoiler for Week pt.20:
This was a first. I have slept with Nanoha several times since we became friends but this was defiantly the first time to awake like this. My eyes opened slowly, mind groggy. Nanoha was just waking up as well it seemed. Somehow during the night we had rolled onto our sides and cuddled. Her leg was bent at the knee and was brought all the way up between my legs. Her arms were around me completly and I had half a mouthfull of her hair.
"Fate...-chan?" She was still mostly asleep, trying to blink away her tiredness while moving away just enough to look at me. As the realization dawned on both of us we each colored and looked downwards to escape each other's sight. "Um... morning..."
"Morning..." I felt suddenly cold when her leg retreated from between mine. "Sleep well?"
"Like a rock." We each spared a glance at the same time. She flushed and I smiled.
"Good," I moved closer to her, pulling her against my body again. "Want to sleep a little more?"
"Um," She fidgeted a little before going quiet. "...Yeah." This time I slid my knee between her legs and cuddled. Her top leg wrapped over mine and slid down to get comfortable. Arms laid over my back and her breath came against my neck again.
Neither of us slept. Instead we simply played with each other's hair, talking softly. I was flirting openly, running my finger along her spine up under her shirt, and then resting it on her side. In return she mimicked my actions and spoke against my neck. I wasn't really aware of how long we stayed like that but when we finally did pull apart I felt a strange sensation of emptiness grip at my front.
"Um," Nanoha blushed again, laughing lightly. "My bra is all out of whack." To prove her point she reached under her shirt and adjusted it. I wanted to tease her about it but mine was the same way. I was amazed we could even sleep in them like we did. But then again, I was sleeping with her... "H-Honey?" Nanoha covered her face with both hands. "Don't... don't look at me like that."
"But you're pretty," I insisted, slowly taking her wrist and encouraging her to reveal herself. "There you go."
"But... my hair is messy and my face hasn't been washed yet..." She looked at me with a half pout. Not being able to help it, I leaned forward and kissed her on the corner of her left eye. "Fate-chan..."
"Yes, My Angel?" Another small gasp and blush.
"D-don't..."
I moved forward and hugged her tightly. "Sorry," I told her gently, holding her to my body to sooth the cold that gripped me when we parted.
"... It's okay." She hugged me back. Several moments passed in silence before we parted, but she still hid herself form my sight. "Let's...Go do something?"
"Yeah, I'd like that." I tried to make her look at me but she covered her face again, ears burning red. "You're so cute."
@Sam: Way to go with Evil!Vivio part :3 :3 It must've been tough writing it
And.....
Spoiler for You're right:
True. Evil doesn't fit Vivio at all
Can't deny that but after sleeping over it I noticed many places I could've done better
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Originally Posted by TheShinySword
New Fate Part
Spoiler for 1.7 pages long and still short T_T:
*snip*
Spoiler for technical notes:
Baridiche can't sense Alt. Zafira and Vivio because Fate asked for unique life forms and Baridiche can't differentiate between different versions (he just thinks they happened to be in two different places at once) its a really technical thing but the plot demanded it! Also I know the last part verges on being Vivio's storyline but since it's in Alt. Zafira's point of view I kept it in
Great addition
Extra props for avoiding Jail's name
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Originally Posted by Thesinwithin
Hey guys, a question - I've got a writing notebook that I use for jotting down ideas while in class (or for doodling while I'm supposed to be participating in a critique) but I was wondering, how much of your fics are planned out before you write them?
My fics are usually unplanned when I start them and then I go walking around my block with my best friend and we bake them quite a bit. Usually, though, when I go into writing something, I have no idea what I'm doing.
Actually, when you think about it, my Nanoha Fic is sort of a grand experiment in the realms of planning fanfiction, as the plot is completely mapped out.
ETA: Page Claimed in the name of my roommate deciding to use the bathroom just as I want to shower. D:
Same as TheShinySword. Major points and ending point. Everything else I make on the way.
Mirrored Souls seems to have sloved down a bit. Should we continue it longer than the planned week if this goes on?
Spoiler for 125:
I thought about it for long time but this kid is bad company. He keeps bragging how he teased those and stealed these, doing everything without a good reason. I knew that 'normal' kids of my age were rascals but this was strangely bad. I wanted to go back to home but somehow I thought this would get better.
”You seem pretty good fellow. What about if I introduce you to my gang?” Renhys stopped walking and waited for my answer. I had a habit of accepting pretty much everything I was asked. This was one reason why I was called dependable.
”Sure, why not.” I accepted like always. I was cautious of the boy. He was suprisingly capable as he had pulled of major schemes around the city and everybody knew of his existance but not his name.
”What a coincidence!” He opened his arms and inspected closely the abandoned parkhouse. On the front, there was a chain with a warning sign for deconstruction. Usually these areas were protected by fields so kids like him couldn't get there but this didn't seem to have one. The parkhouse was strangely tall and had atleast 30 stories above ground. I had never heard about the existance of such place. I was sure I had walked past this place many times for various reasons but I guess I never paid enough attention. ”This is just the place where I was suppose to meet them.” He stated and jumped over the chain. I followed obediently even that I knew this was a bad idea.
”How convenient. Who are we meeting?” I asked. If they were ordinary children I would have no proplem taking them all at once as I knew this kid had some hidden reasons for this strange friendliness.
”Lost and Precisious.” He smiled innocently. He had gray and ruffled hair. I didn't want to look directly towards him as his eyes were almost like snake's. I swear those pupils aren't real and the color is abnormally purple as well, even deeper than Same's. The clothes he wore were broken on many places but his face was very carefree and friendly. ”We just skip duties so don't take the name too seriously.” He explained and we began walking up the endless slopes.
Duties? Propably school. I wonder if he has a reason to call skipping school so distantly or just a habit he has developed.
”Humm...” I hummed and followed the boy. We had little to talk about so we didn't.
We kept going higher and higher. Even that I had great stamina, was this boy even stranger. We had climbed atleast 20 stories now but he wasn't even panting. I thought he was just ordinary boy but I guess I was wrong.
”Hello peeps.” He waved when we reached the near top floor. 32 shows the sign a pillar. I guess my estimation was incorrect. The parkhouse was builded strangely. The slopes were at the opposite sides of the floors. No wonder this was going to be deconstructed.
”Who's the other guy?” A girl, slightly older than us, asked. There seemed to be three people here. Two of them were male and third one was the slightly older girl.
”Erio Mondial.” Renhys introduced me to them.
”Welcome, welcome.” One of the boys walked closer to me and shook my hand. ”I am Domor Leinia.” I twitched from the sight. He was a striking image of me. It was if I was looking into some strange mirror although he was much younger.
”Nice to meet you sir. I am Fesat Tasoresta.” The other boy came to shake my other hand. He had red eyes and long golded blonde hair, giving him a girly image. He seemed to be in pretty bad condition as he had scars all over him.
”I'm Cilsia Tasoresta.” The older girl waved. I twitched again. Is that... ”What's special about him?” Cilsia asked and cut my thoughts.
So there was a reason for his strange friendliness after all. It could explain their strange appearances as well...
”This boy, even if he doesn't look like it. Is a mage that works for the TSAB and more specifically RF6.” Renhys explained and all three wooved for me. I don't remember telling that I worked for RF6 but the kid was very capable after all so I guess it's not too big of a deal.
”Nice to meet you.” I bowed myself at them. I see now... They must have rare skills of some sort to be able to pull of something like that.
”We gather special people here and share our experiences.” Renhys walked next to the older girl. ”Come.” He waved and the two boys in my hands ran to his side and they formed a circle with one spot missing. Easy to find a reason for that.
”What's special in you all?” I asked, sitting on the spot.
”We'll tell you that some other time.” Domor winked.
”Rules of the guild.” Renhys continued. ”I don't think anybody here has seen magic close.” Everybody but me shook their heads. I could easily see where this was leading to.
”I guess you want me to show something?” I asked and they all nodded at my deduction capabilities. That was strangely easy to figure out. ”Well my linker core has just fixed, so I guess a little spell won't hurt.” I rose up.
”Oh, no. We can all cast the basics and such. What we can't do is real magic. Big magic!” Renhys explained with big arm movement. I didn't like where this was going but I guess it is my small wish for normal life, so I only nodded. Maybe these kids could buy that a simple projectile spell would be big magic.
”That pillar looks sturdy.” Cilsia pointed the main pillar. She was right, there was no spell I could do to even harm that. It was pure magically reinforced concrete, strong enough to carry all these 35 stories.
”Great. Show us something.” Domor turned to look at the pillar. The rest followed quickly. I guess this was it. I had a habit not to cast spells unless absolutely necessary but even I can be naughty sometimes. Even if I scratched the pillar, this building was going to be deconstructed anyway.
”Something...” I repeated and walked closer to the pillar. I knew I didn't have any reason to actually do something strange as this.
Wait...
Strange
Capability
Habit
Reason
Existance
Somehow I can't stop thinking about those words. I guess that Renhys kid has a rare skill. But wasn't there one more word?
Ignoring my wavering thoughts I ready myself for a spell. I didn't want to summon Strada for some specific reasons.
-Photon Sphere- I cast and extend my arm to shoot a single orb.
But I can't.
”Where's the spell Erio?” Renhys asked.
”Let me try again. My linker core has just healed so I think it'll take some time to get used to it again.” I explain and try again.
-Photon Sphere-
Still nothing. Strange.
”Two times failed in a row? Isn't that pretty bad score for a mage?” Cilsia asked and the four behind me started talking, although Fesat stayed obediently silent.
”Let me try again.” I flex my fingers and neck just for the show.
-Photon Sphere-
Not even a spark.
”Are you really a mage?” Renhys snickered. The four laughed a bit.
-Photon Sphere- I cast again and again and again. But nothing ever came out. Not even the feel of casting.
”I guess he fooled you Renhys.” Domor giggled.
”And here I thought I was good at judging people.” Renhys laughed.
Soon after all four were laughing at me.
-Photon Sphere- Come on!
Nothing. Why am I trying this much in the first place?
All four keep on laughing.
Don't laugh at my existance!
There must be some strange reason for this!
I don't have a habit of failing in spells.
I have the capabilities for such a small spell.
What? That wasn't me. Was there even a reason for me to think something like that?
”There was one word more.” A woman's voice. More devious than anything.
I don't want to say it.
”It's just a word. What are you afraid about?” Her voice sounded like it was grinding my brains away.
I don't want to say it. Then it would be like I'm accepting the corruption of Renhys.
”But you don't want them laughing do you?” The voice taunted me. All four were still laughing, some of them were on their backs.
I don't care about that. I don't want to say it because of that. Then it would be like I had lost to you. To your influence.
”Lost to me? I have done nothing. The corruption has always been in you and weren't you the one wishing for change?” The woman's voice showed amusement.
Go away. Vanish. Fade away. Leave me alone. Stop talking. Out of my mind.
”There is only one word that will make me go away.” The woman laughed with the most mind reaping way ever. I was sure that her voice reflected into my body but the laughing didn't stop in either side.
I don't want to say it.
”This is just the beginning, child. I have all the time in the world. ”
Disapear!
”Accept the path of Corruption with your life.”
-Disintegrate-
What did I cast?
Edit: Forgot the Weeks
I'm getting cavies from all the fluff and waff
Last edited by Sam the Onion; 2008-04-01 at 14:01.
Hey guys, a question - I've got a writing notebook that I use for jotting down ideas while in class (or for doodling while I'm supposed to be participating in a critique) but I was wondering, how much of your fics are planned out before you write them?
My fics are usually unplanned when I start them and then I go walking around my block with my best friend and we bake them quite a bit. Usually, though, when I go into writing something, I have no idea what I'm doing.
Actually, when you think about it, my Nanoha Fic is sort of a grand experiment in the realms of planning fanfiction, as the plot is completely mapped out.
well utmost planning at each phase of mental idleness
that;'s why my plans are always upset by other things.
sometimes, i do "test threads", some fic snippets just to check if it computes or not...
@Satashi's week It's nice, sweet but somehow I cann't shake off slightly bad feeling that it will not work out well for Fate. Maybe it's because I don't want to see her broken...
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Once some one asked me where I came from. I just pointed behind myself. When the same person asked where I was heading, I just pointed towards the horizon I was looking at. "It's simple, I neither belong here nor there. I am just walking..."Current fandoms: RWBY - White Rose, Frozen - Elsanna and all previous.
@Satashi's week It's nice, sweet but somehow I cann't shake off slightly bad feeling that it will not work out well for Fate. Maybe it's because I don't want to see her broken...