Infinite Stratos Character Creation and Fanfiction Discussion

[kazuma via america]

ah i never took anything by it. i just took it as constructive criticism which i needed actually XD. my first time creating an IS character. so now i know what to do. and i have two ideas already for new female characters to be featured one will be a representative from australia and the other will be a childhood friend of his from middle school.

[ZeroXSEED]

Originally Posted by kazuma via america

ah i never took anything by it. i just took it as constructive criticism which i needed actually XD. my first time creating an IS character. so now i know what to do. and i have two ideas already for new female characters to be featured one will be a representative from australia and the other will be a childhood friend of his from middle school.

Good luck!

[kazuma via america]

thx zero. hope i create great material. wait no i will create good material! as not to disappoint infinite stratos fans!

[blitz1/2]

Originally Posted by kazuma via america

thx zero. hope i create great material. wait no i will create good material! as not to disappoint infinite stratos fans!

I think IS fans are pretty easily satisfied though. I mean, the original story is 80 percent harem antics and 20 percent plot/angst.

[kazuma via america]

omg i have a good plot idea as for the hidden conflict in the stories.

[ZeroXSEED]

Originally Posted by kazuma via america

omg i have a good plot idea as for the hidden conflict in the stories.

Feel free to share it here if you want, Blitz & Wavehawk can make it 3 times darker.

[kazuma via america]

basically this is the idea that popped up into my mind. basically there is a small faction seeking to use IS units to cause civil wars within europe and asia. therefore i could even include ichika and all of the original characters. either that or my other idea was to have a small group within the IS academy who seek to become the top ranked IS pilots, but use any means necessary in order to achieve it. though i would prefer the second idea to be more dark and contain a deeper reason of why they are doing what they are.

[ZeroXSEED]

Originally Posted by kazuma via america

basically this is the idea that popped up into my mind. basically there is a small faction seeking to use IS units to cause civil wars within europe and asia. therefore i could even include ichika and all of the original characters. either that or my other idea was to have a small group within the IS academy who seek to become the top ranked IS pilots, but use any means necessary in order to achieve it. though i would prefer the second idea to be more dark and contain a deeper reason of why they are doing what they are.

I guess Blitz is happy now that he got a comrade. Character conflict is his best field.

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Okay, I knew one of them is MeisterBabylon, but who else is hiding??

[blitz1/2]

Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

I guess Blitz is happy now that he got a comrade. Character conflict is his best field.

Yes.....That's true indeed. xD

Why not combine the two? Have an unknown amount of nations/or another group that enlisted several pilots into IS academy to learn to pilot the IS, and all of them are being manipulated as pawns in order to cause a world war and with the intention to bring a new world order?

[Eratas123]

Woah I missed a lot! better get to posting then

@Kazuma- Good luck with your fic in the future, reviews don't really matter because we allwrite for fun and it's not like we're being forced to.

@Blitz- You want to corrupt another story!? How many stories are yoy trying to convert to the dark side.

@Zero- The reason I don't really care about reviews is because I just write for fun, and besides: I'm juggling three stories right now and the reviews from those keep me well satisfied.

Oh btw- That's Irish doing a massage Erika just took it the wrong way andsince she heard it from behind a closed door.

Chapter 2 of Daydreams is nearly done, should be posted soon

[kazuma via america]

@blitz well akabane i am not planning on having him being used as a pawn. then again he wouldn't have to be. maybe he is the one who helps everyone retaliate aganist the people who are using them. what do you think?

wait omg that would make a great plot. and afterwards the alaska treaty would be altered a little to include a UN for IS development and politics. as to ensure nothing like this happened again. and blitz probably won't like this plot X3

[blitz1/2]

Originally Posted by kazuma via america

@blitz well akabane i am not planning on having him being used as a pawn. then again he wouldn't have to be. maybe he is the one who helps everyone retaliate aganist the people who are using them. what do you think?

wait omg that would make a great plot. and afterwards the alaska treaty would be altered a little to include a UN for IS development and politics. as to ensure nothing like this happened again.

That's why they are unwilling pawns, they don't know that they are being manipulated.

Oh no, Eratas is getting pissed. xD

[ZeroXSEED]

Originally Posted by blitz1/2

That's why they are unwilling pawns, they don't know that they are being manipulated.

Oh no, Eratas is getting pissed. xD

Don't worry Eratas, ZeroXSEED here will insert at much sugar as he can...

If Meister didn't offer his crackpot first...

[Eratas123]

@ Blitz - Not really, my story is plenty dark on it's own The humor right now is gonna be deconstructed later.

[blitz1/2]

Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

Don't worry Eratas, ZeroXSEED here will insert at much sugar as he can...

If Meister didn't offer his crackpot first...

Sugar leads to diabetes, which lead to disease and suffering. >: D

[ZeroXSEED]

Originally Posted by blitz1/2

Sugar leads to diabetes, which lead to disease and suffering. >: D

That's what I mean, you do not underestimate my Deconstruction skill indeed...

[Eratas123]

Originally Posted by blitz1/2

Sugar leads to diabetes, which lead to disease and suffering. >: D

*Munching on a sugar cookie* Say's you!

[MeisterBabylon]

Originally Posted by Saint X

Spoiler for Intelligence Item AX-IAS-YZ-TR31-2xxx-RRD-57-A:

Chastity Engine

This Behemoth of a mechanical Abomination is derived from the best and worst of IS Technology, and some more. It was of all the Phantom Task Projects discovered so far, the least known and most... horrific, even to the Phantom Task Members that were captured and have some knowledge of- infact, if Intelligence is to be believed, The Engine was not even in any of the Group’s plans and it was infact, created in secret and without any knowledge of any of the Group’s leadership or Aces.

To put it in simple words, the Chastity Engine is a horrific way of putting IS Technology to use- both technologically and ethically. In the shortest sense, the Engine was created with one sole purpose- to allow a member of the Male Gender to command an equivalent or possibly greater capability of an IS by means of banned mental manipulation and life support technology on it’s host “controllers”- namely female prisoners (some rumored to be Phantom Task members) , on top of an “undocumented core” to boot.

According from accumulated Terran Intelligence, they only have the faintest of ideas regarding the machine- infact, they were rather... shocked to see that this kind of abomination actually existed- and an ongoing investigation and further intelligence gathering is currently in progress.

The first account of this weapon came from a raid conducted by Magiforce Assault Recon - Zeta, with Tiger and Panther Groups taking the lead. The lightning assault quickly overwhelmed the target area- as well as shocking the members of Phantom Task- as they did not expect men, in strange armors, to fully outperform them in their IS units. It was during the wrap-up when the First Sighting of the Chastity Engine was made- commanded by the Criminal known as “Khaled Al-Itar”- all MARZ teams were overwhelmed until Trigger Unit TH55 managed to take it down, but with Khaled escaping.

Post Battle Analysis and Recovery has shown a very horrible sight- in the rush to quickly dispatch the target and failure to conduct proper scanning procedures had resulted in the loss of two lives- two females were found within the bowels of the thing, slaved to it by various devices and programs- further analysis of the casualties’ mental record indicated that even with them surviving the attack, they were at that moment, “beyond recovery”.

Currently, Khaled Al-Itar is being pursued by elements of MARZ, but to no avail, as quickly as s/he appeared, s/he quickly vanished.

- Kirika Kristel, Intelligence Officer.

I know Kha will hunt me for this :3

Hmm... That thing is finally back from the dead. I was thinking of reviving the Caliphate so that Metropolis has more enemies to smash against, but this saves me some effort.

Originally Posted by Saint X

well yeah it's the obvious thing- it was a feat that the "Khaled" managed to hide it from Phantom Task of all Organizations

No one expects the Spanish Inquisition.

Originally Posted by Eratas123

@Meister and Zero-Truth bet told it's probably gonna be a LONG time till I actually get to this point in the story so right now you two are my readers So I hope you keep reading

Anyway, heres a sample of the draft.

Spoiler:

POV: Gou Karon
Location: Dorm room

'Man, what a day.'

I walk towards the bed and collapse on top of it, I was too tired at this point.

That incident in the field caused a lot of rumors to fly around, I had to keep running cause I was getting mobbed by girls who wanted to know what happened.

"Good evening Mistress Karon."

"Stop calling me mistress." I tell him without getting off the bed.

Irish was rooming with me right now due to orders from the student council president, he still hasn't dropped the "Mistress" thing and I was begging to get used to hearing it at this point.

"What's wrong Mistress?"

"Nothing, I'm just tired"

"Would you like a massage?"

"A massage? Do you even know how to do that?"

"Of course Mistress! Sir Ichika taught me how."

"...Okay then, I guess I could use one."

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POV: Erika Weber.
Location Dormitory Hallway.

'I hope Karon-chan's okay.'

I was making my way to Karon and Erika's room to bring her some tea, hopefully she's okay by now.

"Karon-ch-"I was about to knock.

"A-Ah! Not so hard Irish!"

"I-I apologize Mistress!"

'Wh-What's happening.'

"Ow~ Do it more softly would you."

"This is my first time mistress."

"I can tell, the way you're moving isn't like nii-nii at all."

"Mistress, you're really wound up and everything feels tight."

"Of course I am! I've been running around all day!"

"Maybe this is better?"

"Ahhh~ That's much better"

"I hope Mistress is satisfied."

I'd heard enough, I turn around and run as fast as I could.

Tell me what you guys think.

Ah the obligatory massage eavesdrop chapter. Which reminds me I need to get the swimsuit chapter planned some time...

You should add more of Erika's reactions. Like:

~~~~~~

"Ow~ Do it more softly would you."

"This is my first time mistress."

"I can tell, the way you're moving isn't like nii-nii at all."

"M-moving...?!" Erika reddened as her mind reconstructed a steamy image.

~~~~~~

"Maybe this is better?"

"Ahhh~ That's much better"

"I hope Mistress is satisfied."

Erika couldn't take it any more, and charged off smoking from the ears.

~~~~~~

Now if she runs into Riz, that would be pretty funny.

Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

Is this your first fic?

If not, then contact MeisterBabylon, he's good at creating an OC, 3 times faster than anyone else, and the result is often good and the background makes sense, but he has this... quirk to insert SciFi element in their background and might leave you fumbled.

If this is your first fic, you can contact Wavehawk, he's by far the most experienced writer (writing since 1995) and he has this penchant for 'perfect' character (not as in, Mary Sue but a realistic, fleshed out character, hero or villain or anyone between)... however, his way of retelling story is closer to a western novel, therefore you may be a little confused as well.

If those two can't help, the rest of us might try to help anyway.

No you do not want my input to character building. It would be warped beyond measure!!

Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

Okay, I knew one of them is MeisterBabylon, but who else is hiding??

Ninja Mode [-.-]~

*pokes Zero*

Have you read this?

Spoiler for YuuKaron End?:

As the bonfire dance rolled on the parade square, Irish watched from the benches, his mind racing three times faster than the revelers of the post-school festival party. He dragged it for as long as he could, but as graduation loomed, he knew he had to do this now.

"Yuu-kun?"

There was only 1 person in the world who would call him that.

"Ah," he snorted back at Karon, not bothering to turn.

The girl giggled softly. "Don't tell me... You're plotting to kill me, again."

"Ah," he snorted once more.

"Ah, I see."

She then skipped over and plopped herself right by him. Irish's hairs instantly electrified, but he had been used to her being this close enough to not leap off the bench. The pair watched the dance mutely for a bit.

Karon then started humming Fuwa Fuwa Time to the beat of the taiko drums. That made Irish look and be lost in the moment.

"It's warm."

"What is."

"Your thoughts," Karon smiled. "They are very warm."

Irish hastily looked away. "Y-You're mistaken."

"Ah, I see."

Irish sucked in his guts, tried to bring up his courage, and watched the whole thing fall apart once more. Some soldier he was...

"Time flies, doesn't it?"

"Ah."

Karon laughed again, as the memory of that time came back to her. "First you asked me out, then tried to kill me, then got yourself almost killed in the process, then..."

"Leave it!" The boy retorted as embarrassing memories flooded his mind.

"Okay~~" She sang in reply.

Silence crept in a while more.

"It's..." Irish began, then trailed off. Karon leaned forward, and waited.

"It's..."

He fumbled some more.

"It's... um... quite unbelievable." Irish finally said, failing to speak his mind again. "Just yesterday, Humanity stood on the brink of extinction. Today, we're friends with the first aliens, and we're here having a school festival."

"Of course," Karon replied. "Today would be the last time No Hokago Kohi! is performing for ISA. Everyone was looking forward to it. I wasn't going to let some misunderstood alien invasion spoil it!"

"Ah."

Another pause.

"You're really not going to tell me why you've asked me out here, do you now?" Karon said.

"Y-You've haven't said anything about what you wanted to meet here, too."

"Ah, I see..."

Her voice sounded crestfallen.

"Alright, I'll go first the--"

"Stop," Irish perked up again. He willed himself up on his feet, and faced the seated girl squarely. "I-I won't be so much less of a man to let a woman speak first."

Yuu-kun kicked himself inside. Now he was following Ichika's advice too?

Karon tilted her head expectantly.

Irish heaved a sigh.

"I, you..."

Karon waited.

"I like you," Irish tried again. "I like you, Karon."

There, he said it! All the day's tension, suddenly free. But it then flew higher, as Karon's smile widened, and in the dim flickering bonfire's glow, seems to turn redder.

"Ah..." She croaked. She was smiling, at the same time beads of light appeared at the corner of her eyes. "This is great..."

Irish was taken aback. "Wait... Er... I didn't mean to upset you or anything! Erm, just... forget it..."

"No, no!" Karon said as she brushed her sleeves across her face. "I'm happy. I really really am! Thank you... Thank you so much..."

But the tears kept flowing.

"I'm sorry... I really shouldn't be like this..."

Irish swallowed. "Alright, your turn..."

"Yup... But now... It would be just too cruel..."

Yuu-kun frowned.

Karon stood up and faced away. "Ever since yesterday, the ELS have been fusing with Three Diagram, and its fast reaching critical mass. All that is missing now, is a catalyst given at the right time, and Three Diagram will complete Final Shift."

Irish's eyes went wide. "An IS the size of the Moon Shifting... That's... extremely crazy!"

Karon nodded.

"But I don't see what this has got to do with me, or us."

She turned back, trying her best to be brave.

"The catalyst, is a fully matured ISper."

Yuu-kun's heart sank.

"No, this can't be..."
"Yes, it is! All that I've worked for... "
"No you listen..."
"...to become Governor of the Regulators, was to change the world..."
"Karon you can't..."
"...Now I can do it. My dream, its finally here! I will make this all better!!"
"I WON'T ALLOW IT!!"

Irish pounced on Karon, wrapping his arms around her and pulling her in as tight as he possibly could, as if to smother the wrenching pain in his chest.

"There... There has to be someone else... God-damn..."

Karon slowly returned his embrace.

"I've changed you. I've made you better. I'm happy for you. It is time... I made every one happy."

"...God-damn it..."

"I'm sorry, Yuu-kun..."

He stepped back, keeping both arms on her.

"You know what? Forget this Three Diagram shit. Stay here! Stay with me! There will be another Awakened ISper! You don't have...!

"Yuu-kun, please..." She said. "Don't make me go back on everything I've stood for..."

He sucked in another breath, then turned to the sky and roared. Even the bonfire dancers stopped and watched as the boy fall on to his knees, his energy bled swiftly out of him.

He was one for pain, but this was just beyond him...

The remainder of the Raionman watched from afar, fully aware and holding on to each other lest one of them broke down.

He felt softness spread across his back and his neck. He felt his rage slowly ebb.

"How long will it be?"

"Rather long..."

"Damn it..."

"But I promise I'll be quick!" She shrieked with whatever courage she had left. "I'll be back in no time! We can carry on from then..."

Irish just punched the ground, ignoring the slowly growing crowd of Karon's classmates in the background.

"Yuu-kun... Do you trust me?"

"I do!" He bounced back up into Karon. "I god fucking damn do! It's just..."

Gou brushed her ruffled locks off her shoulder.

"Trust me."

Irish's hands tightened, then softened, tightened, then slowly, he let go. Karon's smile gradually grew, as lights began to come free from her. As Irish stepped back, the Awakened began to glow, casting her own light into the night sky. Her body grew lighter; her feet floated off the ground. The lights collased around her, and with a flash exploded into her full Vandam armor. The twin drives on her elbows spewed forth torrents of brilliant red ST particles, forming wings that spread far. It wrapped around the school, and everyone stopped to stare.

"Like an angel!" Nohohon cooed.

Karon's shape slowly shrank as she lifted further and further away.

"Ah mou!" Riz gave up holding it back.

"You better come back ASAP alright! You're RaionRed! You're not going to leave us here to pick up your mess, alright!!"

"Yes..."

That thought lanced through Riz's mind.

"That's right!" Houki called next. "We're all still here!"

"We'll be waiting!!" Tio screamed. "We'll see your new world!"

"You must be in it!!" Erika came next.

"Everyone..."

"Stop it, all of you!"

It was Irish.

"This is not goodbye. This never was. You haven't given your reply!"

"Yuu-kun..."

"I'll be waiting right here, you hear me!!" Irish roared. "I'll be waiting right here next year, and the year after that, and the year after that! You better damn make it quick, or I'll fly right to the moon and fucking tear you out of Three Diagram!"

"YOU HEAR ME?!?!?!"

For a moment, all Irish could see was Karon wrapped around him.

"Thank you."

Then, the ball of light wrapped up, and with a resounding bang, the angel became a comet and disappeared into the heavens.

As the combined class of 3-1 and 3-2 fell into each other's arms, Irish sat down on the bench, biting his thumbs and closing his eyes, letting darkness descend on everything.

/reviewwhore ☜(⌒▽⌒)☞

[ZeroXSEED]

Ummm.....

The Context of the story I can get, basically Karon went for a long time to solve some unfinished business, and Yuu decided to wait for her...

...

WHAT ARE YOU SMOKING? THE SMOKE HURT MY EYES!

[Eratas123]

@Meister and Zero- 3 years later and Irish still looks like he's just about to hit 14 Karon might look a shotacon since she probably looks way older than him now.