Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Black_Wolf

Love Zafira, im a big fan of wolves, as if you couldn't have guessed lol. If only a Zafira harem was present, hes the only old enough male whos not taken or has been earmarked for death *cough Yuuno cough*

So Vita can use transformation magic, hmm, so im assuming its not some sort of illusion then? although i guess in a fanfic it doesnt matter, can just assume its real !! ah the genius of fiction writing!!

But no third part update for a while?

Actually *big grin* I truly am in the last part of the chapter I won't give an ETA since I always feel bad when I miss them but I will say this. Soon.

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Junkedcat

I can think of nothing that would be scarier... well to be on the receiving end of either’s wrath...

and for once i get the chance to comment on some backlog...


I had a suspicion a long time ago against turning Nanoha, reinforced with the revelation of her illness. Their is the possibility, given what kind of illness lupus is, vampire blood may only make it worse, not better. Turning Nanoha in this case would kill her.

Well, thats only one idea...


Busted...

It might kill her :3 but there may be other reasons too ^_^

Yay, JC! long time no see here!

[Saharet]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Nanoha:*walks in her room suddenly* I'm home early, Fate-chan!
Fate:Ahh! *scrambles to close monitors down* Na-Nanoha!
Nanoha:...* looks suspicious* what were you looking at!?
Fate:*voice cracks* nothing!
Nanoha:.... I thought I saw myself?
Fate:*hair friz/speaks fast*I wasn't looking at panty shot pictures I took of you! Specially not the purple ones with flowers all over them!
Nanoha:.....*facepalm*
Fate:.... I did it again. *also facepalms*

(For the record, Angel is very cute when she has the hiccups)

That's Fate for you!
lol WIN

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Satashi

It might kill her :3 but there may be other reasons too ^_^

Yay, JC! long time no see here!

I'm going with the being immortal ain't all it's cracked up to be and Yuuno really cares about (maybe even loves) Nanoha and doesn't want her to suffer even if it would cure her theory.

[Gillian]

I refer on my crack idea^^
would also possible for the story, but like Satashi said, it will not be a big story, though no big plot changes*or dramatic plot changes^^*

[Black_Wolf]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Nanoha:*walks in her room suddenly* I'm home early, Fate-chan!
Fate:Ahh! *scrambles to close monitors down* Na-Nanoha!
Nanoha:...* looks suspicious* what were you looking at!?
Fate:*voice cracks* nothing!
Nanoha:.... I thought I saw myself?
Fate:*hair friz/speaks fast*I wasn't looking at panty shot pictures I took of you! Specially not the purple ones with flowers all over them!
Nanoha:.....*facepalm*
Fate:.... I did it again. *also facepalms*

(For the record, Angel is very cute when she has the hiccups)

LOL, Very busted, Fate seems to be caught no matter what she does!

*Reminisces about a certain scene of lingerie nanoha pictures in SBTB*

She always gets the short end of the stick,poor Fate.

[Junkedcat]

Originally Posted by Satashi

It might kill her :3 but there may be other reasons too ^_^

Yay, JC! long time no see here!

I don't get much time during the summer weekdays to post . Until I find a way to check the forum and get my grounds keeping work done at the same time, I'm kind of stuck...

*Runs off to work of L!F ch 10*

[wanwan1203]

Originally Posted by Black_Wolf

How much blood do you have Wan Wan, ive seen more nosebleeds than i can count over the pages!!!

These will be the death of me, I swear. @_@

Love Zafira, im a big fan of wolves, as if you couldn't have guessed lol. If only a Zafira harem was present, hes the only old enough male whos not taken or has been earmarked for death *cough Yuuno cough*

great put more ideas into TSS' head.

So Vita can use transformation magic, hmm, so im assuming its not some sort of illusion then? although i guess in a fanfic it doesnt matter, can just assume its real !! ah the genius of fiction writing!!

But no third part update for a while?

That's why I love fanfiction! LOL It's great isn't it? *sparkly eyes*
And I'm a Vita fan for a day because of that picture

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

Actually *big grin* I truly am in the last part of the chapter I won't give an ETA since I always feel bad when I miss them but I will say this. Soon.

I will wait for it then.

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

I'm going with the being immortal ain't all it's cracked up to be and Yuuno really cares about (maybe even loves) Nanoha and doesn't want her to suffer even if it would cure her theory.

Or maybe Yuuno is something else...

Yuuno:I was born 400 years ago in the highlands of Scotland. I am IMMORTAL, and I am not alone. Now is the time of the Gathering, when the stroke of a sword will release the power of the Quickening. In the end, there can be only one.

Theme: Heeeeeeeere we are! Born to be Kings! We're the Prince's of the universe!

Fate:*jumps over Yuuno's sword and slashes out her attack* why won't you die!?
Yuuno: *clashes he sword against Fate's sythe* I am immortal. I have inside of me, Blood of Kings.

*Yuuno leans backwards to avoid a slice and flip kicks Fate into the air, stabbing upwards to impale her with his sword. The blond grips the blade and snaps it in half before kicking off a wall and releasing it from her body. Landing, she sweep kicks him down stabs downward, only catching fluttering cloth. Yuuno appears behind her and misses an attempt to cleave off Fate's head*

Fate:Immortal or not, I will defeat you!

[illidan182]

So, heres what I finished last night. Thanks to TSS for Beta'ing for me ^_^

So heres part1:

Spoiler for The Deserts Traps:

The Deserts Traps

The desert planet that Signum Needes stood on howled as wind whipped around her feet. Pink and white Knight Armor thrashed around her legs, and dark sand sunk into the cracks of the metallic boots she wore.

“Vita,” The smaller redhead looked up at the Wolkenritter team leader. “Where are we supposed to meet up with Testarossa and Hayate?” Her eyes looked to the smaller girl for direction.

“Signum, shouldn’t you know all that?” With the Iron Count, Graf Eisen hoisted on her shoulder, Vita turned to look at Signum with an eyebrow arched.

This caused her to fully turn towards the smaller Hammer Knight. “What do you mean? I was told that Rein told you the coordinates for our rendezvous point?” This worried the Sword Knight greatly. Where were Testarossa and Meister Hayate now?

Vita turned to her left and pointed Graf Eisen in the direction. “For now Signum, let’s head in this direction. I’ve been on this planet before… there’s an abandoned facility over this way.” The chibi knight started walking, leaving the Wolkenritter team leader standing there.

“Oi, Signum… what’s wrong with her?” Agito spoke out for the first time in nearly three hours. The pink haired warrior turned to her unison partner and shrugged.

The warrior turned to look at Vita once more and sighed. “I think I know why, Agito.” Signum looked around the area, then back toward Vita, “But I won’t speak of it until I’m positive.” Slowly, the Sword Knight began following the small tracks in the desert’s sand, with the miniature Fire type Unison device close behind.

~

The heat of the day beat down on Signum and Vita as they crossed the sandy dunes, hot dry winds whipping around them constantly. Agito hovering close behind in the small bit of shade from Vita’s body.

“Vita…” Signum spoke up, wiping her brow from the sweat that had accumulated on her pale skin. “How much further do we need to go?” The heat didn’t bother the Knight nearly as much as it would anyone else, but the heat was still extreme.

The Red Knight stopped walking, making Agito run into the back of her hat and bounce backwards a bit.

“Hey!” Agito flailed her arms around in the air wildly in a way that would make Reinforce Zwei proud, “Watch where you’re going!”

Vita turned and stared at Agito coldly, causing the smaller girl to fly to and perch on Signum’s shoulder. “We’re almost there…” The blank expression on Vita’s face slightly worried Signum.

“Ahh, please, lead on Vita.” Signum’s next to emotionless tone snapped Vita out of her trance like state.

The red head turned back to the north-west and began her slow walk once again, Signum and Agito close behind.

They walked in silence for hours, no one speaking except the world on which they stood. The sun grew lower and the planet’s temperature dropped.

“Vita,” Signum spoke, stopping her pace. “How much longer? Night is going to come upon us soon. We don’t know how cold it will be.” The logic sounded fine, but Vita shrugged it off.

The girls’ face looked up to the orange painted sky, eyes peering into its beauty. “It can get very cold, Signum. We’re almost there, just a few…” Her words were cut off as she reached the tip of the dune. Vita’s eyes widened with shock, and horror, her memories coming back.

Across the valley lay thousands of metallic bodies, claws and scythes all around. Signum had climbed up behind the girl and saw everything that lay there.

“As I had suspected, Vita?” Lavender eyes looked down; the girl in question looked down herself and nodded.

“Mmnn, this is where me and Nanoha were deployed many years ago. Where I had failed to protect her.” The words were said quietly, as if in shame. Small droplets of tears leaked from the blue eyes onto the brown dirt below.

“It is in the past Vita. You did all you could.” Signum began her walk down the sand dune and across the valley of destruction, Agito and Vita in tow.

~

“Over here!” Vita yelled out to the Wolkenritter leader, who came to her side quickly. “We can enter through here. It’s where Nanoha and I came in back then. We can stay here tonight, and look for Hayate tomorrow.” Her voice was still soft and tenuous.

Vita managed to squeeze her way in through the small hole, but it proved a bit more difficult for the taller leader. “Signum stand back…” Vita called forth Graf Eisen from its storage device and swung the hammer against the steel wall, which gave way quickly. “There,” the word was simple but it managed, Signum stepped into the old facility which held a horrible odor.

“What’s this stench?” Agito whined out as she flew in behind Signum, covering her nose which ended up causing her voice to come out weirdly.

“It’s the old combat Cyborgs that were never used…” The statement caused Agito to go quite quickly. The trio walked through the old building guided only by Vita’s memories.

~

“Ne~ Fate-chan, weren’t Signum and Vita-chan supposed to arrive here by now?” Hayate walked around the slightly wooded area, as Fate sat in the center of the clearing with small screens floating around her.

“Yes, they where supposed to be here an hour ago. I tried contacting Alto, but I haven’t gotten anything back. For now it seems we’re on our own.” Fate looked up to the brunette as the small screen closed around her.

Rein orbited Hayate’s head like a little moon to a planet, causing her mistress to get slightly dizzy from the motion.

“Calm down Rein, I bet Vita and Signum are ok. Really... who or should I say what in their right mind, would pick a fight with Signum and Vita-chan?” Hayate spoke to the hyper little Unison device trying to calm her, and herself down in the process.

The vibe that something was off wouldn’t shake from either Hayate or Fate.

[Sir, something is heading our direction. It is approaching fast, and appears hostile.] The sound of Bardiche speaking up caused Fate and Hayate to move together. Hayate’s Schwertkreuz and Fate’s Bardiche ready for whatever was coming towards them.

An eerie laugh echoed around them, seemingly coming from everywhere and no where all at the same time. A barrier soon flew into life around the two TSA mages, keeping them form escaping.

[Enraptured]

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

Of course this Nanoha can be Dom!Nanoha so...

Fate: I will possess your heart b!tch!
Nanoha: ... *gets out whip* Who's possessing who B!tch?
Fate: oh snap

LOL Best Quote Ever. <3

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

Quoted from the Image board



It seems Angel has done it again, I believe our resident Fatenum fans will be happy. They should have teamed up more in StrikerS :c.



And I'm still hiding out in the modshelter... just in case

OMG I WANT!! O_o
That is plain win!!!

Originally Posted by kasu1127

W-wait, I don't recall making any deals like that!



I thought that was simply transformation magic?

@thread: The amount of crack in the last couple of pages is insane. xD I read everything, but I don't know where to begin commenting.

Ditto xD
Read all the crazy soccer / nanovita / pantyshot shorts, and they made me laugh xDD
Best way to start the day <3

[Gillian]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Or maybe Yuuno is something else...

Yuuno:I was born 400 years ago in the highlands of Scotland. I am IMMORTAL, and I am not alone. Now is the time of the Gathering, when the stroke of a sword will release the power of the Quickening. In the end, there can be only one.

Theme: Heeeeeeeere we are! Born to be Kings! We're the Prince's of the universe!

Fate:*jumps over Yuuno's sword and slashes out her attack* why won't you die!?
Yuuno: *clashes he sword against Fate's sythe* I am immortal. I have inside of me, Blood of Kings.

*Yuuno leans backwards to avoid a slice and flip kicks Fate into the air, stabbing upwards to impale her with his sword. The blond grips the blade and snaps it in half before kicking off a wall and releasing it from her body. Landing, she sweep kicks him down stabs downward, only catching fluttering cloth. Yuuno appears behind her and misses an attempt to cleave off Fate's head*

Fate:Immortal or not, I will defeat you!

Yuuno the Highlander

immortal or not
cut of his head and he will die
if not, we have a funny time to see, how he handle his head seperated from his body^^

[Enraptured]

Originally Posted by illidan182

So, heres what I finished last night. Thanks to TSS for Beta'ing for me ^_^

So heres part1:

Spoiler for The Deserts Traps:

The Deserts Traps

The desert planet that Signum Needes stood on howled as wind whipped around her feet. Pink and white Knight Armor thrashed around her legs, and dark sand sunk into the cracks of the metallic boots she wore.

“Vita,” The smaller redhead looked up at the Wolkenritter team leader. “Where are we supposed to meet up with Testarossa and Hayate?” Her eyes looked to the smaller girl for direction.

“Signum, shouldn’t you know all that?” With the Iron Count, Graf Eisen hoisted on her shoulder, Vita turned to look at Signum with an eyebrow arched.

This caused her to fully turn towards the smaller Hammer Knight. “What do you mean? I was told that Rein told you the coordinates for our rendezvous point?” This worried the Sword Knight greatly. Where were Testarossa and Meister Hayate now?

Vita turned to her left and pointed Graf Eisen in the direction. “For now Signum, let’s head in this direction. I’ve been on this planet before… there’s an abandoned facility over this way.” The chibi knight started walking, leaving the Wolkenritter team leader standing there.

“Oi, Signum… what’s wrong with her?” Agito spoke out for the first time in nearly three hours. The pink haired warrior turned to her unison partner and shrugged.

The warrior turned to look at Vita once more and sighed. “I think I know why, Agito.” Signum looked around the area, then back toward Vita, “But I won’t speak of it until I’m positive.” Slowly, the Sword Knight began following the small tracks in the desert’s sand, with the miniature Fire type Unison device close behind.

~

The heat of the day beat down on Signum and Vita as they crossed the sandy dunes, hot dry winds whipping around them constantly. Agito hovering close behind in the small bit of shade from Vita’s body.

“Vita…” Signum spoke up, wiping her brow from the sweat that had accumulated on her pale skin. “How much further do we need to go?” The heat didn’t bother the Knight nearly as much as it would anyone else, but the heat was still extreme.

The Red Knight stopped walking, making Agito run into the back of her hat and bounce backwards a bit.

“Hey!” Agito flailed her arms around in the air wildly in a way that would make Reinforce Zwei proud, “Watch where you’re going!”

Vita turned and stared at Agito coldly, causing the smaller girl to fly to and perch on Signum’s shoulder. “We’re almost there…” The blank expression on Vita’s face slightly worried Signum.

“Ahh, please, lead on Vita.” Signum’s next to emotionless tone snapped Vita out of her trance like state.

The red head turned back to the north-west and began her slow walk once again, Signum and Agito close behind.

They walked in silence for hours, no one speaking except the world on which they stood. The sun grew lower and the planet’s temperature dropped.

“Vita,” Signum spoke, stopping her pace. “How much longer? Night is going to come upon us soon. We don’t know how cold it will be.” The logic sounded fine, but Vita shrugged it off.

The girls’ face looked up to the orange painted sky, eyes peering into its beauty. “It can get very cold, Signum. We’re almost there, just a few…” Her words were cut off as she reached the tip of the dune. Vita’s eyes widened with shock, and horror, her memories coming back.

Across the valley lay thousands of metallic bodies, claws and scythes all around. Signum had climbed up behind the girl and saw everything that lay there.

“As I had suspected, Vita?” Lavender eyes looked down; the girl in question looked down herself and nodded.

“Mmnn, this is where me and Nanoha were deployed many years ago. Where I had failed to protect her.” The words were said quietly, as if in shame. Small droplets of tears leaked from the blue eyes onto the brown dirt below.

“It is in the past Vita. You did all you could.” Signum began her walk down the sand dune and across the valley of destruction, Agito and Vita in tow.

~

“Over here!” Vita yelled out to the Wolkenritter leader, who came to her side quickly. “We can enter through here. It’s where Nanoha and I came in back then. We can stay here tonight, and look for Hayate tomorrow.” Her voice was still soft and tenuous.

Vita managed to squeeze her way in through the small hole, but it proved a bit more difficult for the taller leader. “Signum stand back…” Vita called forth Graf Eisen from its storage device and swung the hammer against the steel wall, which gave way quickly. “There,” the word was simple but it managed, Signum stepped into the old facility which held a horrible odor.

“What’s this stench?” Agito whined out as she flew in behind Signum, covering her nose which ended up causing her voice to come out weirdly.

“It’s the old combat Cyborgs that were never used…” The statement caused Agito to go quite quickly. The trio walked through the old building guided only by Vita’s memories.

~

“Ne~ Fate-chan, weren’t Signum and Vita-chan supposed to arrive here by now?” Hayate walked around the slightly wooded area, as Fate sat in the center of the clearing with small screens floating around her.

“Yes, they where supposed to be here an hour ago. I tried contacting Alto, but I haven’t gotten anything back. For now it seems we’re on our own.” Fate looked up to the brunette as the small screen closed around her.

Rein orbited Hayate’s head like a little moon to a planet, causing her mistress to get slightly dizzy from the motion.

“Calm down Rein, I bet Vita and Signum are ok. Really... who or should I say what in their right mind, would pick a fight with Signum and Vita-chan?” Hayate spoke to the hyper little Unison device trying to calm her, and herself down in the process.

The vibe that something was off wouldn’t shake from either Hayate or Fate.

[Sir, something is heading our direction. It is approaching fast, and appears hostile.] The sound of Bardiche speaking up caused Fate and Hayate to move together. Hayate’s Schwertkreuz and Fate’s Bardiche ready for whatever was coming towards them.

An eerie laugh echoed around them, seemingly coming from everywhere and no where all at the same time. A barrier soon flew into life around the two TSA mages, keeping them form escaping.

O: Eh, that was awesome xD
More please! (:
Is it going to be Nanovita and fatenum? O:
Whatever it is, it seems cool, good job! ;D

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Or maybe Yuuno is something else...

Yuuno:I was born 400 years ago in the highlands of Scotland. I am IMMORTAL, and I am not alone. Now is the time of the Gathering, when the stroke of a sword will release the power of the Quickening. In the end, there can be only one.

Theme: Heeeeeeeere we are! Born to be Kings! We're the Prince's of the universe!

Fate:*jumps over Yuuno's sword and slashes out her attack* why won't you die!?
Yuuno: *clashes he sword against Fate's sythe* I am immortal. I have inside of me, Blood of Kings.

*Yuuno leans backwards to avoid a slice and flip kicks Fate into the air, stabbing upwards to impale her with his sword. The blond grips the blade and snaps it in half before kicking off a wall and releasing it from her body. Landing, she sweep kicks him down stabs downward, only catching fluttering cloth. Yuuno appears behind her and misses an attempt to cleave off Fate's head*

Fate:Immortal or not, I will defeat you!

highlander parody?

Yuuno: Oh snap *Throws tire*
Fate: *Knocks tire out of way* THERE CAN ONLY BE ONE HIGHLANDER! Tires cannot defeat me!

[Black_Wolf]

Originally Posted by illidan182

So, heres what I finished last night. Thanks to TSS for Beta'ing for me ^_^

So heres part1:

Spoiler for The Deserts Traps:

The Deserts Traps

The desert planet that Signum Needes stood on howled as wind whipped around her feet. Pink and white Knight Armor thrashed around her legs, and dark sand sunk into the cracks of the metallic boots she wore.

“Vita,” The smaller redhead looked up at the Wolkenritter team leader. “Where are we supposed to meet up with Testarossa and Hayate?” Her eyes looked to the smaller girl for direction.

“Signum, shouldn’t you know all that?” With the Iron Count, Graf Eisen hoisted on her shoulder, Vita turned to look at Signum with an eyebrow arched.

This caused her to fully turn towards the smaller Hammer Knight. “What do you mean? I was told that Rein told you the coordinates for our rendezvous point?” This worried the Sword Knight greatly. Where were Testarossa and Meister Hayate now?

Vita turned to her left and pointed Graf Eisen in the direction. “For now Signum, let’s head in this direction. I’ve been on this planet before… there’s an abandoned facility over this way.” The chibi knight started walking, leaving the Wolkenritter team leader standing there.

“Oi, Signum… what’s wrong with her?” Agito spoke out for the first time in nearly three hours. The pink haired warrior turned to her unison partner and shrugged.

The warrior turned to look at Vita once more and sighed. “I think I know why, Agito.” Signum looked around the area, then back toward Vita, “But I won’t speak of it until I’m positive.” Slowly, the Sword Knight began following the small tracks in the desert’s sand, with the miniature Fire type Unison device close behind.

~

The heat of the day beat down on Signum and Vita as they crossed the sandy dunes, hot dry winds whipping around them constantly. Agito hovering close behind in the small bit of shade from Vita’s body.

“Vita…” Signum spoke up, wiping her brow from the sweat that had accumulated on her pale skin. “How much further do we need to go?” The heat didn’t bother the Knight nearly as much as it would anyone else, but the heat was still extreme.

The Red Knight stopped walking, making Agito run into the back of her hat and bounce backwards a bit.

“Hey!” Agito flailed her arms around in the air wildly in a way that would make Reinforce Zwei proud, “Watch where you’re going!”

Vita turned and stared at Agito coldly, causing the smaller girl to fly to and perch on Signum’s shoulder. “We’re almost there…” The blank expression on Vita’s face slightly worried Signum.

“Ahh, please, lead on Vita.” Signum’s next to emotionless tone snapped Vita out of her trance like state.

The red head turned back to the north-west and began her slow walk once again, Signum and Agito close behind.

They walked in silence for hours, no one speaking except the world on which they stood. The sun grew lower and the planet’s temperature dropped.

“Vita,” Signum spoke, stopping her pace. “How much longer? Night is going to come upon us soon. We don’t know how cold it will be.” The logic sounded fine, but Vita shrugged it off.

The girls’ face looked up to the orange painted sky, eyes peering into its beauty. “It can get very cold, Signum. We’re almost there, just a few…” Her words were cut off as she reached the tip of the dune. Vita’s eyes widened with shock, and horror, her memories coming back.

Across the valley lay thousands of metallic bodies, claws and scythes all around. Signum had climbed up behind the girl and saw everything that lay there.

“As I had suspected, Vita?” Lavender eyes looked down; the girl in question looked down herself and nodded.

“Mmnn, this is where me and Nanoha were deployed many years ago. Where I had failed to protect her.” The words were said quietly, as if in shame. Small droplets of tears leaked from the blue eyes onto the brown dirt below.

“It is in the past Vita. You did all you could.” Signum began her walk down the sand dune and across the valley of destruction, Agito and Vita in tow.

~

“Over here!” Vita yelled out to the Wolkenritter leader, who came to her side quickly. “We can enter through here. It’s where Nanoha and I came in back then. We can stay here tonight, and look for Hayate tomorrow.” Her voice was still soft and tenuous.

Vita managed to squeeze her way in through the small hole, but it proved a bit more difficult for the taller leader. “Signum stand back…” Vita called forth Graf Eisen from its storage device and swung the hammer against the steel wall, which gave way quickly. “There,” the word was simple but it managed, Signum stepped into the old facility which held a horrible odor.

“What’s this stench?” Agito whined out as she flew in behind Signum, covering her nose which ended up causing her voice to come out weirdly.

“It’s the old combat Cyborgs that were never used…” The statement caused Agito to go quite quickly. The trio walked through the old building guided only by Vita’s memories.

~

“Ne~ Fate-chan, weren’t Signum and Vita-chan supposed to arrive here by now?” Hayate walked around the slightly wooded area, as Fate sat in the center of the clearing with small screens floating around her.

“Yes, they where supposed to be here an hour ago. I tried contacting Alto, but I haven’t gotten anything back. For now it seems we’re on our own.” Fate looked up to the brunette as the small screen closed around her.

Rein orbited Hayate’s head like a little moon to a planet, causing her mistress to get slightly dizzy from the motion.

“Calm down Rein, I bet Vita and Signum are ok. Really... who or should I say what in their right mind, would pick a fight with Signum and Vita-chan?” Hayate spoke to the hyper little Unison device trying to calm her, and herself down in the process.

The vibe that something was off wouldn’t shake from either Hayate or Fate.

[Sir, something is heading our direction. It is approaching fast, and appears hostile.] The sound of Bardiche speaking up caused Fate and Hayate to move together. Hayate’s Schwertkreuz and Fate’s Bardiche ready for whatever was coming towards them.

An eerie laugh echoed around them, seemingly coming from everywhere and no where all at the same time. A barrier soon flew into life around the two TSA mages, keeping them form escaping.

Very Nice!! I like where this is going! you set the whole scene up very well!!!! Especially the bit where Vita gets to the top of the dune.

You even left a big cliffhanger in there!!! gah! must have more now!!!

*sits in a huff tapping foot waiting for illidan to write a sequel*

[kasu1127]

Originally Posted by illidan182

So, heres what I finished last night. Thanks to TSS for Beta'ing for me ^_^

So heres part1:

Spoiler for The Deserts Traps:

The Deserts Traps

The desert planet that Signum Needes stood on howled as wind whipped around her feet. Pink and white Knight Armor thrashed around her legs, and dark sand sunk into the cracks of the metallic boots she wore.

“Vita,” The smaller redhead looked up at the Wolkenritter team leader. “Where are we supposed to meet up with Testarossa and Hayate?” Her eyes looked to the smaller girl for direction.

“Signum, shouldn’t you know all that?” With the Iron Count, Graf Eisen hoisted on her shoulder, Vita turned to look at Signum with an eyebrow arched.

This caused her to fully turn towards the smaller Hammer Knight. “What do you mean? I was told that Rein told you the coordinates for our rendezvous point?” This worried the Sword Knight greatly. Where were Testarossa and Meister Hayate now?

Vita turned to her left and pointed Graf Eisen in the direction. “For now Signum, let’s head in this direction. I’ve been on this planet before… there’s an abandoned facility over this way.” The chibi knight started walking, leaving the Wolkenritter team leader standing there.

“Oi, Signum… what’s wrong with her?” Agito spoke out for the first time in nearly three hours. The pink haired warrior turned to her unison partner and shrugged.

The warrior turned to look at Vita once more and sighed. “I think I know why, Agito.” Signum looked around the area, then back toward Vita, “But I won’t speak of it until I’m positive.” Slowly, the Sword Knight began following the small tracks in the desert’s sand, with the miniature Fire type Unison device close behind.

~

The heat of the day beat down on Signum and Vita as they crossed the sandy dunes, hot dry winds whipping around them constantly. Agito hovering close behind in the small bit of shade from Vita’s body.

“Vita…” Signum spoke up, wiping her brow from the sweat that had accumulated on her pale skin. “How much further do we need to go?” The heat didn’t bother the Knight nearly as much as it would anyone else, but the heat was still extreme.

The Red Knight stopped walking, making Agito run into the back of her hat and bounce backwards a bit.

“Hey!” Agito flailed her arms around in the air wildly in a way that would make Reinforce Zwei proud, “Watch where you’re going!”

Vita turned and stared at Agito coldly, causing the smaller girl to fly to and perch on Signum’s shoulder. “We’re almost there…” The blank expression on Vita’s face slightly worried Signum.

“Ahh, please, lead on Vita.” Signum’s next to emotionless tone snapped Vita out of her trance like state.

The red head turned back to the north-west and began her slow walk once again, Signum and Agito close behind.

They walked in silence for hours, no one speaking except the world on which they stood. The sun grew lower and the planet’s temperature dropped.

“Vita,” Signum spoke, stopping her pace. “How much longer? Night is going to come upon us soon. We don’t know how cold it will be.” The logic sounded fine, but Vita shrugged it off.

The girls’ face looked up to the orange painted sky, eyes peering into its beauty. “It can get very cold, Signum. We’re almost there, just a few…” Her words were cut off as she reached the tip of the dune. Vita’s eyes widened with shock, and horror, her memories coming back.

Across the valley lay thousands of metallic bodies, claws and scythes all around. Signum had climbed up behind the girl and saw everything that lay there.

“As I had suspected, Vita?” Lavender eyes looked down; the girl in question looked down herself and nodded.

“Mmnn, this is where me and Nanoha were deployed many years ago. Where I had failed to protect her.” The words were said quietly, as if in shame. Small droplets of tears leaked from the blue eyes onto the brown dirt below.

“It is in the past Vita. You did all you could.” Signum began her walk down the sand dune and across the valley of destruction, Agito and Vita in tow.

~

“Over here!” Vita yelled out to the Wolkenritter leader, who came to her side quickly. “We can enter through here. It’s where Nanoha and I came in back then. We can stay here tonight, and look for Hayate tomorrow.” Her voice was still soft and tenuous.

Vita managed to squeeze her way in through the small hole, but it proved a bit more difficult for the taller leader. “Signum stand back…” Vita called forth Graf Eisen from its storage device and swung the hammer against the steel wall, which gave way quickly. “There,” the word was simple but it managed, Signum stepped into the old facility which held a horrible odor.

“What’s this stench?” Agito whined out as she flew in behind Signum, covering her nose which ended up causing her voice to come out weirdly.

“It’s the old combat Cyborgs that were never used…” The statement caused Agito to go quite quickly. The trio walked through the old building guided only by Vita’s memories.

~

“Ne~ Fate-chan, weren’t Signum and Vita-chan supposed to arrive here by now?” Hayate walked around the slightly wooded area, as Fate sat in the center of the clearing with small screens floating around her.

“Yes, they where supposed to be here an hour ago. I tried contacting Alto, but I haven’t gotten anything back. For now it seems we’re on our own.” Fate looked up to the brunette as the small screen closed around her.

Rein orbited Hayate’s head like a little moon to a planet, causing her mistress to get slightly dizzy from the motion.

“Calm down Rein, I bet Vita and Signum are ok. Really... who or should I say what in their right mind, would pick a fight with Signum and Vita-chan?” Hayate spoke to the hyper little Unison device trying to calm her, and herself down in the process.

The vibe that something was off wouldn’t shake from either Hayate or Fate.

[Sir, something is heading our direction. It is approaching fast, and appears hostile.] The sound of Bardiche speaking up caused Fate and Hayate to move together. Hayate’s Schwertkreuz and Fate’s Bardiche ready for whatever was coming towards them.

An eerie laugh echoed around them, seemingly coming from everywhere and no where all at the same time. A barrier soon flew into life around the two TSA mages, keeping them form escaping.

I had my suspicions too, when Vita said she had been on the planet before. I like how everything was set up here, definitely looking forward to more

[wanwan1203]

Originally Posted by illidan182

So, heres what I finished last night. Thanks to TSS for Beta'ing for me ^_^

So heres part1:

Spoiler for The Deserts Traps:

The Deserts Traps

The desert planet that Signum Needes stood on howled as wind whipped around her feet. Pink and white Knight Armor thrashed around her legs, and dark sand sunk into the cracks of the metallic boots she wore.

“Vita,” The smaller redhead looked up at the Wolkenritter team leader. “Where are we supposed to meet up with Testarossa and Hayate?” Her eyes looked to the smaller girl for direction.

“Signum, shouldn’t you know all that?” With the Iron Count, Graf Eisen hoisted on her shoulder, Vita turned to look at Signum with an eyebrow arched.

This caused her to fully turn towards the smaller Hammer Knight. “What do you mean? I was told that Rein told you the coordinates for our rendezvous point?” This worried the Sword Knight greatly. Where were Testarossa and Meister Hayate now?

Vita turned to her left and pointed Graf Eisen in the direction. “For now Signum, let’s head in this direction. I’ve been on this planet before… there’s an abandoned facility over this way.” The chibi knight started walking, leaving the Wolkenritter team leader standing there.

“Oi, Signum… what’s wrong with her?” Agito spoke out for the first time in nearly three hours. The pink haired warrior turned to her unison partner and shrugged.

The warrior turned to look at Vita once more and sighed. “I think I know why, Agito.” Signum looked around the area, then back toward Vita, “But I won’t speak of it until I’m positive.” Slowly, the Sword Knight began following the small tracks in the desert’s sand, with the miniature Fire type Unison device close behind.

~

The heat of the day beat down on Signum and Vita as they crossed the sandy dunes, hot dry winds whipping around them constantly. Agito hovering close behind in the small bit of shade from Vita’s body.

“Vita…” Signum spoke up, wiping her brow from the sweat that had accumulated on her pale skin. “How much further do we need to go?” The heat didn’t bother the Knight nearly as much as it would anyone else, but the heat was still extreme.

The Red Knight stopped walking, making Agito run into the back of her hat and bounce backwards a bit.

“Hey!” Agito flailed her arms around in the air wildly in a way that would make Reinforce Zwei proud, “Watch where you’re going!”

Vita turned and stared at Agito coldly, causing the smaller girl to fly to and perch on Signum’s shoulder. “We’re almost there…” The blank expression on Vita’s face slightly worried Signum.

“Ahh, please, lead on Vita.” Signum’s next to emotionless tone snapped Vita out of her trance like state.

The red head turned back to the north-west and began her slow walk once again, Signum and Agito close behind.

They walked in silence for hours, no one speaking except the world on which they stood. The sun grew lower and the planet’s temperature dropped.

“Vita,” Signum spoke, stopping her pace. “How much longer? Night is going to come upon us soon. We don’t know how cold it will be.” The logic sounded fine, but Vita shrugged it off.

The girls’ face looked up to the orange painted sky, eyes peering into its beauty. “It can get very cold, Signum. We’re almost there, just a few…” Her words were cut off as she reached the tip of the dune. Vita’s eyes widened with shock, and horror, her memories coming back.

Across the valley lay thousands of metallic bodies, claws and scythes all around. Signum had climbed up behind the girl and saw everything that lay there.

“As I had suspected, Vita?” Lavender eyes looked down; the girl in question looked down herself and nodded.

“Mmnn, this is where me and Nanoha were deployed many years ago. Where I had failed to protect her.” The words were said quietly, as if in shame. Small droplets of tears leaked from the blue eyes onto the brown dirt below.

“It is in the past Vita. You did all you could.” Signum began her walk down the sand dune and across the valley of destruction, Agito and Vita in tow.

~

“Over here!” Vita yelled out to the Wolkenritter leader, who came to her side quickly. “We can enter through here. It’s where Nanoha and I came in back then. We can stay here tonight, and look for Hayate tomorrow.” Her voice was still soft and tenuous.

Vita managed to squeeze her way in through the small hole, but it proved a bit more difficult for the taller leader. “Signum stand back…” Vita called forth Graf Eisen from its storage device and swung the hammer against the steel wall, which gave way quickly. “There,” the word was simple but it managed, Signum stepped into the old facility which held a horrible odor.

“What’s this stench?” Agito whined out as she flew in behind Signum, covering her nose which ended up causing her voice to come out weirdly.

“It’s the old combat Cyborgs that were never used…” The statement caused Agito to go quite quickly. The trio walked through the old building guided only by Vita’s memories.

~

“Ne~ Fate-chan, weren’t Signum and Vita-chan supposed to arrive here by now?” Hayate walked around the slightly wooded area, as Fate sat in the center of the clearing with small screens floating around her.

“Yes, they where supposed to be here an hour ago. I tried contacting Alto, but I haven’t gotten anything back. For now it seems we’re on our own.” Fate looked up to the brunette as the small screen closed around her.

Rein orbited Hayate’s head like a little moon to a planet, causing her mistress to get slightly dizzy from the motion.

“Calm down Rein, I bet Vita and Signum are ok. Really... who or should I say what in their right mind, would pick a fight with Signum and Vita-chan?” Hayate spoke to the hyper little Unison device trying to calm her, and herself down in the process.

The vibe that something was off wouldn’t shake from either Hayate or Fate.

[Sir, something is heading our direction. It is approaching fast, and appears hostile.] The sound of Bardiche speaking up caused Fate and Hayate to move together. Hayate’s Schwertkreuz and Fate’s Bardiche ready for whatever was coming towards them.

An eerie laugh echoed around them, seemingly coming from everywhere and no where all at the same time. A barrier soon flew into life around the two TSA mages, keeping them form escaping.

Originally Posted by Black_Wolf

Very Nice!! I like where this is going! you set the whole scene up very well!!!! Especially the bit where Vita gets to the top of the dune.

You even left a big cliffhanger in there!!! gah! must have more now!!!

Yeah what he said. Very nice for a first chapter. Me wants to read more.

*sits in a huff tapping foot waiting for illidan to write a sequel*

*sits beside Black Wolf and rocks back and forth while waiting*

[Satashi]

BTW, the whole soccer!mom and soccer!coach thing really had me giggling :3

[illidan182]

*Grins and quotes* "Cower and dispare mortals! DOOM! Has come to this world" *Ends Archimonde quote from Warcraft III* >.>

lol, Glad you guys like it, I've alreayd began on part 2, but as well as trying to do that along with 4 other fics includeing a Dirtbiker!Fatenum w/ guest star Natsuki form Mai-HiME, I'm feeling swamped lol xD

[TheShinySword]

FREE CRACK IDEAS TO ANYONE WHO WANTS THEM

Because I have too much to write already so these go to whoever claims them first XD

Spoiler for Free Crack idea 1:

go here
and click on long version for the accompanying song
If you can't get that to work here's the short version

Out of the night,
When the full moon is bright,
Comes the horseman known as Fate.
This bold renegade
Carves a "F" with his blade,
A "F" that stands for Fate.

Fate, Fate, the fox so cunning and free,
Fate, Fate, who makes the sign of the F.

She is polite,
But the wicked take flight
When they catch the sight of Fate.
She's friend of the weak,
And the poor and the meek,
This very unique warrior Fate.

Fate, Fate, the fox so cunning and free,
Fate, Fate, who makes the sign of the F.

Fate, Fate, Fate, Fate, Fate.


Zorro!Fate

Spoiler for Free crack Idea 2:

Admitedly you might have to be an american to get this one

Born on a mountain top in Tennessee
The greenest state in the land of the free
Raised in the woods so's she knew ev'ry tree
Kilt her a b'ar when she was only three
Nanoha, Nanoha Crockett, king of the wild frontier

Fought single-handed through many a war
Till the enemy was whipped and peace was in store
And while she was handlin' this risky chore
She made herself a legend forever more
Nanoha, Nanoha Crockett, the woman who knew no fear

She went off to Congress and served a spell
Fixin' up the Government and the laws as well
Took over Washington, so I heard tell
And she patched up the crack in the Liberty Bell
Nanoha, Nanoha Crockett, seeing her duty clear

When she came home her politic'ing was done
And the western march had just begun
So she packed his gear and her trusty gun
And lit out a-grinnin' to follow the sun
Nanoha, Nanoha Crockett, leading the pioneer


Davy Crockett!Nanoha

Edit:
Page claim for free ideas
Edit2: It has been decided that Idea 1=Outlaw!Fate