Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Tiresias]

Originally Posted by Filraen

Inspired by "Life after Hayate", I imagine that depending on the planet, people may have some legends of the Wolekritter's deeds, picturing them as terrible monsters and murder machines.

Legends, not history. I imagine it would be less Vlad Tepes and more Vlad the non-sparkling Vampire.

And let's not forget how...different...the historical portrayal of a certain Old Belkan ruler and the actual person can be *cough* Ix *cough*

Originally Posted by Lhklan

And my question is: Why does it have to be Shirou? He can just ask Zelretch/Touko for a favor, which lead to him being away to complete said favor.

Originally Posted by Andarkoshi

Because I like Shirou and wanted him in the story, what other reason is there in writing fanfiction? Besides do you really want Zelretch to get involved... again. That Zelretch Did It got a bit old...

Oh I fully agree about Zelretch. But that still leaves Touko...

[Andarkoshi]

Originally Posted by vic-vic

Well, there is a pucture where he got pamperd in bed by Double Nano.
Can you imagine Yuuno/Shtern/Nanoha babies or wedding (hope it wouldn't be shotgun one ).

Shotgun no, sword/magical staff yes with Dearche and Shirou Takamachi being Very insistent on Yuuno taking responsibility XD

Still, I admit that seeing Shiro going on Man of Steel rote is saddening. After all he not only betray his ideals, but he commit same mistake as Kiritsugu: Fate/Zero show us how bad any attempt to pull out Punisher would end. Heck, aren't Archer's fate is wonderful dispaly of this.

Though, I barely have any right to disagree with your idea of giving Nano characters a complicated relationship in family.

Since in my own crossover...

That was the only way to make him a good father. He wasn't Mind of Steel initially but the world slowly broke him like it did his father... In the end though Shirou avoided one mistake his father committed. He picked his family and stuck to them instead of trying to go back to his ideals.

I had an alternative scenario for this story. Shirou didn't leave Precia and stayed with her after she got hurt. With time Alicia was born, then he protected her from the Incident and the girl lived.

Several years later Fate was born as a second daughter rather than a clone of Alicia. Thus during the canon series when Nanoha and Yuuno fought some strong Jewel Seed monster the one who came to their rescue was some 6-10 years older Fate all dashing and Heroine-in-shining-armor.

Spoiler for GotB spoiler:

Nanoha is Charles zi Britannia daughter. And even if he much better person that he is in canon (Charles eben love dearly all of his childer and fives now... the ones who survived ). He still have a fair amount of blood on his hands.

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Oh dear, getting Nanoha involved in THAT particular backstabbing family. Now that's just plain crazy XD

[Andarkoshi]

Originally Posted by Lhklan

Yeah, and Shirou Saves The Girl also is. Look, you know that I like Shirou too, considering I was in the EC back in it glory days. But this and that are different. There's a limit to how much he can do you know.

Well as I said many times I tried to make the things believable. You people here are giving me some good ideas and insights but... it's kinda discouraging when instead of advice I get stuff like "I won't read it sorry" or "It's Silly". It really kinda discourages me.

Tiresias

Well as I said, this is Nano, not Nasu. There are no magi or anything around here.

[Tiresias]

Originally Posted by vic-vic

Man of Steel

I didn't know Shirou wore his red underwear on the front

After all he not only betray his ideals

Actually, no, it is choosing the girl over the people that would have been "betraying his ideas." That's the bad thing about choosing to become a hero, the choices sucks.

aren't Archer's fate is wonderful display of this.

After his death, just a reminder. He's pretty optimistic about it even when he's about to be executed.

[Lhklan]

Originally Posted by Andarkoshi

Well as I said many times I tried to make the things believable. You people here are giving me some good ideas and insights but... it's kinda discouraging when instead of advice I get stuff like "I won't read it sorry" or "It's Silly". It really kinda discourages me.

Tiresias

Well as I said, this is Nano, not Nasu. There are no magi or anything around here.

Yeah, but it's still too far on the side of Unbelieavable. For me anyway. The FFN fans might like it though.

@vic vic

Shirou, Kiritsugu and Archer never betrayed their ideals. It's the other way around. Kiri had to pick between family and ideals, while Archer got the shitty deal of the contract AFTER he's death. He was still pretty optimistic even when he's about to be executed.

If you want to talk about Shirou betraying his ideals, think HF Normal or True.

[Andarkoshi]

Originally Posted by Lhklan

Yeah, but it's still too far on the side of Unbelieavable. For me anyway. The FFN fans might like it though.

Well I'll write it, I'll post it and then I'll probably get crucified because of people being picky about rules.

Now WHAT exactly, in fine detail, do you find Unbelievable?

[Lhklan]

@Andarkoshi
The Avalon thing for one. gabe get away with it because at least in In Flight, Saber was still around for 3 years, so it stand to reason that Shirou would at least know it. But here, Shirou went without it for 5+ years, then he got send to another world. Pretty sure his image of Avalon would disappear by now, even if it's still inside of him. (He didn't even know about it during the 10 years between the 4th and 5th, remember?)

The other is how ... fast he broke. He lived longer than Archer, yes, but considering that Archer had to go around killing lord knows how many people during his time as a Counter Guardian, and how many time he had to do it, I don't see him breaking down that easily. Also, since this is, as you said, after UBW route, he should have know where his ideals could lead him. Plus, Rin would have been there to help him. And killing Sakura isn't enough to break him.

Then there's just how OOC Sakura is. She was in love with him for a long time, yet she didn't say anything at all. Hell, she knew she wasn't worthy of him, it was when he accepted her that things start to go south, since all her insecurities pour out.

[vic-vic]

Shotgun no, sword/magical staff yes with Dearche and Shirou Takamachi being Very insistent on Yuuno taking responsibility XD

I really doubt that Yuuno need to be forced to marry Nanoha and Shtern.

I think it would be lie that:

Shiro: Yuuno-kun, ceremony is still not end, plese restrain yourself from kissing the brides. *Que his daughters throw angry glares at him*

Oh dear, getting Nanoha involved in THAT particular backstabbing family. Now that's just plain crazy XD

Spoiler for GotB stuff:

Royals really much more nicer, trurstworthy and decent persons that they was in canon. But it's because that in the Twilight Wars many of them died, exeacly because they were ruthless backstabbers in the past.
The ones who survived awere tortured, humilated and brutalized because they couldn't create a strong alliance in the start of war to repel the attack of enemy. Eventually they realised, that if they wasn't such diuchebags, they could avoid all of this. Still Gathering of the Banners world is still pretty bleak. With rampant wars, acts of terrorism, abuse of POVs and looming presense of tremedously calamity.

To put it in perspective: Britannia is Token Good Teammate for entire Earth Empire.

Well as I said many times I tried to make the things believable. You people here are giving me some good ideas and insights but... it's kinda discouraging when instead of advice I get stuff like "I won't read it sorry" or "It's Silly". It really kinda discourages me.

*Wave "Don't give up flag furioucly"*

[Kireen]

Originally Posted by Andarkoshi

Well I'll write it, I'll post it and then I'll probably get crucified because of people being picky about rules.

[Prepares nails and cross.] Well, let's see how you're going to handle things before deciding how to react. [Contacts carpenter for a cross customized for tentacle monsters.]

Anyway, found this while cleaning my HD, decided to give it a shot again cause my lessons are boring. Please don't kill me if it sucks.

Spoiler for Operation Wingemen:

Operation Wingmen.

One can say that Chrono Harlaown is a busy person, TSAB Admiral, father of two children, talented mage and the one that people tend to seek when it’s time to pay the bills for the massive property damage that some of his most enthusiastic friends seem to generate during their fights.

But, despite his dedication to his work, he needs to take a break every once in while like every normal person, forgetting his about his work, his family and PR for just a day.

That’s why four men were sitting around a table in a random pub in Cranagan, obviously the blue haired admiral, Yuuno Scrya, the chief librarian of the Infinite Libray and probably Chrono’s best friend, (not that any one of the two would ever admit it in public) who was just dragged out from his workplace a couple of minutes ago by his friend, in what he called an act of pity toward endangered species. Seriously, the man looked like he could use a couple of days of sleep.

Next to the blond haired librarian was Vice Grandscenic, excellent sniper and chopper pilot, always present when booze and pretty waitress where present, and strangely enough a good friend with the rest of the group thanks to what they called their sessions of male bonding, with the great majority of their mutual friends being female, they all needed a day every once in a while in which they could let out their masculinity freely.

Last but not least, Zafira, Hayate’s guarding beast who, even with his great sense of loyalty, needed every once in a while a pause form his all-female family. Also the Comiket was nearing, so the proud Zafira proudly ran away, and was planning on disappearing for a couple of days, he loved Hayate dearly, but he was not going to be a dress up doll willingly.

Each and every one of them was there to escape from work, family and to enjoy the company of some fellow males, get drunk, and discuss some very important business away from the earshot of some of their other friends, like for example which waitress had the biggest rack, very important business indeed.

“That new brunette in definitely my type, I’m gonna ask her number.” The sniper declared once he had his target in sight, gulped down the contents of his mug and mentally prepared for the mission.

“Ten bucks that she’ll just laugh and give him a fake number.” Chrono declared once the sniper got up, putting a bill on the table.
“Ten that he’ll get the real one… this time.” Yuuno said adding his own bill.

“Ten that he’ll make a stupid comment and will get slapped in the face, returning here empty handed.” Zafira added his own bill on top of the other two, maintaining his usual stoic demeanor.

And what the guardian beast predicted happened right in front of the other two eyes as the white haired man took his win with a smug smile on his face, and handing half of it to the grinning man hat sat back again at their table.

“Totally worth it!” Vice said grinning and pocketing his half while massaging his red cheek, enjoying the faces of two other members of the group.

“Che, you plotting bastards.” Chrono snorted taking a sip from his mug. “If you continued like this you’ll never find a woman.”
“Pff Admiral, my kill count is already higher than yours.”

“As if that’s difficult to surpass.” Yuuno immediately jumped at the rare occasion to tease his friend. “One isn’t exactly a result to gloat bout, and I don’t see it going to raise soom.”

“Umu…” Zafira nodded sagely with a smirk on his face.

“Yeah, gang in the poor married man.” Chrono snorted. “I wish you all twins.”

“Urk…please have mercy, I’m still too young and handsome to die.” Vice replied laughing awkwardly. “But I’m sure that the Professor here has plenty of interesting stories for us, with all these sexy librarians around you, life in there must be a bliss.”

“Ghe…”

“What’s wrong oh Almighty Ferret, too embarrassed to share your stories.” Chrono teased his embarrassed friend.

“I-It’s not like that…” Yuuno trailed of, searching his mind for a new topic. “I-It’s just that…”

“Scrya, could it be that you are…” Zafira started, giving his an evaluative stare. “…Yeah, that must be it.” The guardian beast nodded to himself, receiving two set of curious looks from the sniper and the admiral.

“What do you mean Zafs?” Vice decided to inquire.

“That’s not my place to say…”

“Wait…Could it be that…” Chrono started as realization hit him like an arrow. “…Oh my good Ferret-boy, you’re still pure!” He shouted pointing a finger toward the embarrassed librarian.

“Ghe, no need to shout it from the rooftops.” Yuuno replied blushing.

“The situation is more grave than what I could have imagined.” Chrono, probably affected by the alcohol and having left his professional side locked inside his office, started to ramble incoherently shaking his head.

“This is serious business indeed.” Vice agreed nodding.

“Agreed.” Zafira nodded as well.

“Even you Zafira.” Yuuno sighed, slamming his open palm on his face. “And here I thought that you were asexual.”

“Wolf, thousand years and female masters.” The white haired man replied shrugging. “I had more than what I wanted, that’s why I usually stay in my wolf form most of the time to try to blend with the furniture.”

Somehow the three other men had the vision of a big furry toothed blue armchair on which no one dared to seat.

“This situation requires immediate action.” Chrono declared, apparently snapping out from his ramblings. “I’m willing to admit that I’m partially at fault for this.”

“I have a bad feeling about this…” Yuuno muttered, Chrono never admits when he’s at fault.

“Rejoice Ferret-boy, cause we’re going to perform one of the most sacred duty a man can perform for another one.” Chrono declared standing up and opening his arms, looking somehow like a certain fake preist. “Because tonight your whish shall be granted, we’re going to be your Wingmens.”

“Rest assured Professor, even if we must die tonight, I promise you that you’ll get some.” Vice declared, following Chrono example and standing up to put a hand on his drink buddy’s shoulder.

“This guardian beast will follow you till the end of this sacred task.” Zafira added as well, taking place on the opposite side of Vice, not drunk like the other two, but willing to see how this will end just for shit and giggles.

“Alright then, Zafira, restrain the ferret, Vice, procure some more alcohol.” Chrono started to order, emptying his mug and assuming the same expression he would have in the middle of an important operation. “Let the operation Wingmen being!” He dramatically declared with fire burning in his eyes.

“Yes Sir!” His two accomplices replied giving him a salute and immediately starting to perform their duties.

“Please someone help me!” Yuuno cried in desperation, already starting to image how badly this was going to end…

Mission Report 01: Wisdom

The next morning Yuuno got up with the strongest headache he had ever since he tried to use his scrying spell on fifty books at time to try to speed up his work, not exactly his smartest plan ever.

He was sure that this was going to be his worst hangover, not the first, definitely not the last, but he doubted that anything else could top this one. The only good thing was that he felt somehow…good. That was the only way he could describe how his body was feeling, headache aside.

It took him a while to reboot his brain and try to remember what happened last night after Operation Wingmen started, but with very little success. It was then that he finally noticed that someone was staring at him from his left side.

“Good morning Professor.” A familiar monotone voice welcomed him as he turned his head to that side.

One his head was turned, he immediately recognized the pair of piercing blue eyes that were staring intently at him, the face that he knew too well with just some minor differences and her figure. The only difference form the usual was the small smile that crossed her lips, completely replacing her usually blank expression.

“S-Stern?” He stuttered once his brain was finally able to process all the information around him: clothes thrown around the room, the strange pleasant soreness of his body and most importantly the fact that he and his bedmate were naked. “Oh my god, what happened yesterday?” He asked in a panicked tone failing to remember what exactly happened the previous day.

“We had sex.” The material of Wisdom replied bluntly in a matter of fact tone, still maintaining the unusual small smile on her face, getting up, not looking distressed in the least by her state of undress.

“Ghe…” The librarian winced at the girl’s bluntness. “I…I’m sorry!” He finally managed to say bowing his head as he caught himself staring at her body.

“Why are you apologizing?” The clone of his long time crush asked cutely tilting her head to the side. “I was happy to have this opportunity to become one with Professor.”

“Uh?” Yuuno asked dumbly, not having expected such reaction.

“I enjoyed deeply last night.” She bluntly replied again, this time blushing a bit. “Are you displeased?”

“Ah…N-no.” He replied flailing his hands in front of him as flashes of last night started to flood his mind.

“Very well then.” Stern nodded starting to crawl on top of him, giving him a good show of her body.

“S-Stern, what are you doing?” He asked blushing and trying to turn his head to not look, but finding it impossible as the girl’s hands were keeping it in place.

“Round two.” The Starlight Destroyer replied as her smile grew even larger, sealing the librarian’s lips before he could have time to reply.

Before his mind went blank Yuuno’s last thought was that he had to thank the others next time he saw them.

Sitting on his dining table Chrono silently cheered at his operation success raising his mug of coffee.

“You look somehow satisfied this morning.” Amy noted grinning as she watched him grin back at her. “Did something good happen last night?”

“Oh, nothing much, I just managed to restored a bit of my karma and earn a couple of favor from a couple of people.” He vaguely replied as he watched the congratulation messages from his fellow Wingmen.

Mission Report 02: Extreme measures.

The next morning Yuuno got up in an unfamiliar room with the worst headache he had ever had in years, failing to remember what had happened last night. He didn’t know why but he felt the urge to blame Chrono for something that at the moment was escaping him.

“?” Just as he turned his head to the side he found himself face to face with the man he was feeling the urge to strangle. “Oh my god, please don’t tell me that we did…”

“Hold your horses Ferret-boy.” Chrono stopped him clutching his head in pain. “I’m fairly sure that there is no damage on my end.”
“And there aren’t on mine too.” Yuuno nodded as he checked his body, especially a certain side. “Then, what the hell happened?”
“I have no idea, what do you, remember?”

“Last thing I remember is you three making me drink like a sponge and then going around making a fool of ourselves.” Yuuno started as he tried to remember all the details about the previous day. “And then in the end you declared that the situation requested for extreme measures.”

“Oh… it think that I’m starting to remember…”

“…Wait… me too…”

“Oh Shit!” They cursed in perfect sync as they turned their head to look downward at the third person on the bed.

Between them, still sleeping with a blissful expression on her face, was laying Amy, who decided to wake up right in that moment.

“Good morning.” She replied smiling radiantly at the two of them. “What’s wrong?” She then asked as she noticed that their eyes showed clear signs of a mental BSOD.

“What did exactly happen yesterday?” Chrono, the first to recover, asked.

“Uhm…I was a bit surprised yesterday when you two barged in completely wasted and you asked me to do a threesome shouting that if balls don’t touch it’s not gay.” His wife immediately replied, making him pale and swear that he would not touch any more booze for a while. “But it was amazing, I didn’t think that you two together could be this good. We should do this some other times.” She added, flashing them with a radiant smile.

“Uh?” The two men asked in unison staring at each other.

“Now I understand what I meant for Extreme Measures.” Chrono frowned.

Oh well, at least his wife seemed happy, he noted, and he maintained his promise maybe he could just shrug this off and forget about it.

Or he could make the Ferret his personal salve for this, yeah, that worked too.

[vic-vic]

Originally Posted by Kireen

Spoiler for Operation Wingemen:

Operation Wingmen.

One can say that Chrono Harlaown is a busy person, TSAB Admiral, father of two children, talented mage and the one that people tend to seek when it’s time to pay the bills for the massive property damage that some of his most enthusiastic friends seem to generate during their fights.

But, despite his dedication to his work, he needs to take a break every once in while like every normal person, forgetting his about his work, his family and PR for just a day.

That’s why four men were sitting around a table in a random pub in Cranagan, obviously the blue haired admiral, Yuuno Scrya, the chief librarian of the Infinite Libray and probably Chrono’s best friend, (not that any one of the two would ever admit it in public) who was just dragged out from his workplace a couple of minutes ago by his friend, in what he called an act of pity toward endangered species. Seriously, the man looked like he could use a couple of days of sleep.

Next to the blond haired librarian was Vice Grandscenic, excellent sniper and chopper pilot, always present when booze and pretty waitress where present, and strangely enough a good friend with the rest of the group thanks to what they called their sessions of male bonding, with the great majority of their mutual friends being female, they all needed a day every once in a while in which they could let out their masculinity freely.

Last but not least, Zafira, Hayate’s guarding beast who, even with his great sense of loyalty, needed every once in a while a pause form his all-female family. Also the Comiket was nearing, so the proud Zafira proudly ran away, and was planning on disappearing for a couple of days, he loved Hayate dearly, but he was not going to be a dress up doll willingly.

Each and every one of them was there to escape from work, family and to enjoy the company of some fellow males, get drunk, and discuss some very important business away from the earshot of some of their other friends, like for example which waitress had the biggest rack, very important business indeed.

“That new brunette in definitely my type, I’m gonna ask her number.” The sniper declared once he had his target in sight, gulped down the contents of his mug and mentally prepared for the mission.

“Ten bucks that she’ll just laugh and give him a fake number.” Chrono declared once the sniper got up, putting a bill on the table.
“Ten that he’ll get the real one… this time.” Yuuno said adding his own bill.

“Ten that he’ll make a stupid comment and will get slapped in the face, returning here empty handed.” Zafira added his own bill on top of the other two, maintaining his usual stoic demeanor.

And what the guardian beast predicted happened right in front of the other two eyes as the white haired man took his win with a smug smile on his face, and handing half of it to the grinning man hat sat back again at their table.

“Totally worth it!” Vice said grinning and pocketing his half while massaging his red cheek, enjoying the faces of two other members of the group.

“Che, you plotting bastards.” Chrono snorted taking a sip from his mug. “If you continued like this you’ll never find a woman.”
“Pff Admiral, my kill count is already higher than yours.”

“As if that’s difficult to surpass.” Yuuno immediately jumped at the rare occasion to tease his friend. “One isn’t exactly a result to gloat bout, and I don’t see it going to raise soom.”

“Umu…” Zafira nodded sagely with a smirk on his face.

“Yeah, gang in the poor married man.” Chrono snorted. “I wish you all twins.”

“Urk…please have mercy, I’m still too young and handsome to die.” Vice replied laughing awkwardly. “But I’m sure that the Professor here has plenty of interesting stories for us, with all these sexy librarians around you, life in there must be a bliss.”

“Ghe…”

“What’s wrong oh Almighty Ferret, too embarrassed to share your stories.” Chrono teased his embarrassed friend.

“I-It’s not like that…” Yuuno trailed of, searching his mind for a new topic. “I-It’s just that…”

“Scrya, could it be that you are…” Zafira started, giving his an evaluative stare. “…Yeah, that must be it.” The guardian beast nodded to himself, receiving two set of curious looks from the sniper and the admiral.

“What do you mean Zafs?” Vice decided to inquire.

“That’s not my place to say…”

“Wait…Could it be that…” Chrono started as realization hit him like an arrow. “…Oh my good Ferret-boy, you’re still pure!” He shouted pointing a finger toward the embarrassed librarian.

“Ghe, no need to shout it from the rooftops.” Yuuno replied blushing.

“The situation is more grave than what I could have imagined.” Chrono, probably affected by the alcohol and having left his professional side locked inside his office, started to ramble incoherently shaking his head.

“This is serious business indeed.” Vice agreed nodding.

“Agreed.” Zafira nodded as well.

“Even you Zafira.” Yuuno sighed, slamming his open palm on his face. “And here I thought that you were asexual.”

“Wolf, thousand years and female masters.” The white haired man replied shrugging. “I had more than what I wanted, that’s why I usually stay in my wolf form most of the time to try to blend with the furniture.”

Somehow the three other men had the vision of a big furry toothed blue armchair on which no one dared to seat.

“This situation requires immediate action.” Chrono declared, apparently snapping out from his ramblings. “I’m willing to admit that I’m partially at fault for this.”

“I have a bad feeling about this…” Yuuno muttered, Chrono never admits when he’s at fault.

“Rejoice Ferret-boy, cause we’re going to perform one of the most sacred duty a man can perform for another one.” Chrono declared standing up and opening his arms, looking somehow like a certain fake preist. “Because tonight your whish shall be granted, we’re going to be your Wingmens.”

“Rest assured Professor, even if we must die tonight, I promise you that you’ll get some.” Vice declared, following Chrono example and standing up to put a hand on his drink buddy’s shoulder.

“This guardian beast will follow you till the end of this sacred task.” Zafira added as well, taking place on the opposite side of Vice, not drunk like the other two, but willing to see how this will end just for shit and giggles.

“Alright then, Zafira, restrain the ferret, Vice, procure some more alcohol.” Chrono started to order, emptying his mug and assuming the same expression he would have in the middle of an important operation. “Let the operation Wingmen being!” He dramatically declared with fire burning in his eyes.

“Yes Sir!” His two accomplices replied giving him a salute and immediately starting to perform their duties.

“Please someone help me!” Yuuno cried in desperation, already starting to image how badly this was going to end…

Mission Report 01: Wisdom

The next morning Yuuno got up with the strongest headache he had ever since he tried to use his scrying spell on fifty books at time to try to speed up his work, not exactly his smartest plan ever.

He was sure that this was going to be his worst hangover, not the first, definitely not the last, but he doubted that anything else could top this one. The only good thing was that he felt somehow…good. That was the only way he could describe how his body was feeling, headache aside.

It took him a while to reboot his brain and try to remember what happened last night after Operation Wingmen started, but with very little success. It was then that he finally noticed that someone was staring at him from his left side.

“Good morning Professor.” A familiar monotone voice welcomed him as he turned his head to that side.

One his head was turned, he immediately recognized the pair of piercing blue eyes that were staring intently at him, the face that he knew too well with just some minor differences and her figure. The only difference form the usual was the small smile that crossed her lips, completely replacing her usually blank expression.

“S-Stern?” He stuttered once his brain was finally able to process all the information around him: clothes thrown around the room, the strange pleasant soreness of his body and most importantly the fact that he and his bedmate were naked. “Oh my god, what happened yesterday?” He asked in a panicked tone failing to remember what exactly happened the previous day.

“We had sex.” The material of Wisdom replied bluntly in a matter of fact tone, still maintaining the unusual small smile on her face, getting up, not looking distressed in the least by her state of undress.

“Ghe…” The librarian winced at the girl’s bluntness. “I…I’m sorry!” He finally managed to say bowing his head as he caught himself staring at her body.

“Why are you apologizing?” The clone of his long time crush asked cutely tilting her head to the side. “I was happy to have this opportunity to become one with Professor.”

“Uh?” Yuuno asked dumbly, not having expected such reaction.

“I enjoyed deeply last night.” She bluntly replied again, this time blushing a bit. “Are you displeased?”

“Ah…N-no.” He replied flailing his hands in front of him as flashes of last night started to flood his mind.

“Very well then.” Stern nodded starting to crawl on top of him, giving him a good show of her body.

“S-Stern, what are you doing?” He asked blushing and trying to turn his head to not look, but finding it impossible as the girl’s hands were keeping it in place.

“Round two.” The Starlight Destroyer replied as her smile grew even larger, sealing the librarian’s lips before he could have time to reply.

Before his mind went blank Yuuno’s last thought was that he had to thank the others next time he saw them.

Sitting on his dining table Chrono silently cheered at his operation success raising his mug of coffee.

“You look somehow satisfied this morning.” Amy noted grinning as she watched him grin back at her. “Did something good happen last night?”

“Oh, nothing much, I just managed to restored a bit of my karma and earn a couple of favor from a couple of people.” He vaguely replied as he watched the congratulation messages from his fellow Wingmen.

Mission Report 02: Extreme measures.

The next morning Yuuno got up in an unfamiliar room with the worst headache he had ever had in years, failing to remember what had happened last night. He didn’t know why but he felt the urge to blame Chrono for something that at the moment was escaping him.

“?” Just as he turned his head to the side he found himself face to face with the man he was feeling the urge to strangle. “Oh my god, please don’t tell me that we did…”

“Hold your horses Ferret-boy.” Chrono stopped him clutching his head in pain. “I’m fairly sure that there is no damage on my end.”
“And there aren’t on mine too.” Yuuno nodded as he checked his body, especially a certain side. “Then, what the hell happened?”
“I have no idea, what do you, remember?”

“Last thing I remember is you three making me drink like a sponge and then going around making a fool of ourselves.” Yuuno started as he tried to remember all the details about the previous day. “And then in the end you declared that the situation requested for extreme measures.”

“Oh… it think that I’m starting to remember…”

“…Wait… me too…”

“Oh Shit!” They cursed in perfect sync as they turned their head to look downward at the third person on the bed.

Between them, still sleeping with a blissful expression on her face, was laying Amy, who decided to wake up right in that moment.

“Good morning.” She replied smiling radiantly at the two of them. “What’s wrong?” She then asked as she noticed that their eyes showed clear signs of a mental BSOD.

“What did exactly happen yesterday?” Chrono, the first to recover, asked.

“Uhm…I was a bit surprised yesterday when you two barged in completely wasted and you asked me to do a threesome shouting that if balls don’t touch it’s not gay.” His wife immediately replied, making him pale and swear that he would not touch any more booze for a while. “But it was amazing, I didn’t think that you two together could be this good. We should do this some other times.” She added, flashing them with a radiant smile.

“Uh?” The two men asked in unison staring at each other.

“Now I understand what I meant for Extreme Measures.” Chrono frowned.

Oh well, at least his wife seemed happy, he noted, and he maintained his promise maybe he could just shrug this off and forget about it.

Or he could make the Ferret his personal salve for this, yeah, that worked too.

Bwa-ha-ha, wow! Nice start Kireen, I hope there would be a Nanoha's report too. Would be even funnier if Chrono join again.

I had an alternative scenario for this story. Shirou didn't leave Precia and stayed with her after she got hurt. With time Alicia was born, then he protected her from the Incident and the girl lived.

Oh, I like this variant better - since Precia and fate would be free from suffering and gice Shiro a happy life he also so deserved. Maybe add Rin here... you know, if Vivio had two mommas, why Fate, Alicia and Levi shouldn't.

[Andarkoshi]

Originally Posted by Lhklan

@Andarkoshi
The Avalon thing for one. gabe get away with it because at least in In Flight, Saber was still around for 3 years, so it stand to reason that Shirou would at least know it. But here, Shirou went without it for 5+ years, then he got send to another world. Pretty sure his image of Avalon would disappear by now, even if it's still inside of him. (He didn't even know about it during the 10 years between the 4th and 5th, remember?)

The other is how ... fast he broke. He lived longer than Archer, yes, but considering that Archer had to go around killing lord knows how many people during his time as a Counter Guardian, and how many time he had to do it, I don't see him breaking down that easily. Also, since this is, as you said, after UBW route, he should have know where his ideals could lead him. Plus, Rin would have been there to help him. And killing Sakura isn't enough to break him.

Then there's just how OOC Sakura is. She was in love with him for a long time, yet she didn't say anything at all. Hell, she knew she wasn't worthy of him, it was when he accepted her that things start to go south, since all her insecurities pour out.

Okay here we go.

Spoiler for Backstory:

Avalon:

There are several ways to deal with it.

1. I can have this UBW to be the Route where Saber stayed and they later figured out that he had Avalon.

2. Some time after the Grail War Rin while she examined Shirou discovered that he had it in him.

3. I can modify the route to have them discover it during the War itself.

Shirou didn't know about Avalon because he was crappy magus and no one properly examined him. I doubt something as awesome as Avalon in his body would escape a proper examination of his body.

Shirou Breaking.

Sakura's death was merely part of it. It made him realize that he was Fully responsible for her death. Later in Nanoverse he slowly broke down into what Kiritsugu was, a ruthless killer who weights the lives around him. Yes he knew that he was doing the same mistake Kiritsugu did but he had no choice. On several occasions prioritizing the lives of innocent resulted in the bad guys getting away and causing MORE death.
Remember that he was a "hero" for more than 20 years. Slowly with each year he grew more ruthless because he was forced to. As he grew ruthless so did his enemies.

In the end he was the cause of lots and lots of death. It's not that he FAILED to save them. HE was the cause of their suffering and death in the first place.

Archer broke down because he could only kill. Because all of his existence was reduced to being a killer that brings nothing but death. The situation was exactly the same for Shirou, his slow spiralling down into ruthlessness created a situation where, to counter him, his enemies targeted civilians and innocents either because they couldn't find him and wanted to lure him out or because they knew he was there and opted for hitting him with as much firepower as they had in hope of killing him.

As I said, this Shirou didn't abandon his ideals because he Failed to Save but because he WAS the cause of Death and Misery. It was the same for Archer, he existed only to kill and destroy.

Remember that it IS Canon that Shirou can abandon his ideals. After all he DID it for Sakura.

Sakura.

This is actually a bit you people helped me out with.

In HF Sakura broke down because Shirou showed her kindness and made her feel worthy and then it was kinda taken away.

It's similar here. That's why I made Shirou and Sakura childhood friends. They had some 5 years rather than 1 to grow fond of each other, to become friends. Sakura had 5 years to slowly come out of her cocoon to feel actually worthy and loved by that kind-hearted boy.

This was what Zouken counted on, he encouraged Sakura to befriend Shirou. He planned to work the situation in a way that would break her even more.

But the results exceeded his expectations. Shirou actually Picked Rin over Sakura. Zouken actually allowed Sakura to confess to Shirou... because he knew how the situation was between him and Rin.

Sakura in that one moment lost the only thing that made her happy.

When she returned to Matou residence Zouken started whispering into her mind how everyone betrayed her. She still tried to resist but over the next year she saw how Rin slowly stole her beloved Shirou away. How he spent more and more time with Rin instead of her, and Zouken kept whispering.

In the end Shirou left for London, completely abandoning Sakura. Oh he kept in contact with her but it always involved some happy things he did with Rin.

Shirou betrayed and abandoned her, Shirou she thought was and would always be hers. Shirou she thought would always be kind and nice to her and would never abandon her.

And Rin, Rin who stole Shirou away from her. Rin who had everything while Sakura had nothing. Rin whom Sakura both loved and hated, she ruthlessly came into her life with boots on and trampled over everything that Sakura cherished.

In the end, thanks to the betrayal and Zouken Sakura slowly broke. Her will could only take so much.
Probably the breaking point for her was the information that Shirou and Rin had a child. That was the final straw, the final betrayal.

[Old_Iron]

I seem to come in late to these things all the time.

Originally Posted by Andarkoshi

Well I'll write it, I'll post it and then I'll probably get crucified because of people being picky about rules.

You are in need of a means to have Shirou fix Alicia and Precia without relying on Ye Olde Zelretch trope?

I do have an idea or two that may help things along. Both are really extensions of A Jewel Seed did it though. However those are a bit less WTF owing to them being Lost Logia and not a For the Lulz device.

One is pretty much what was done in a teaser by... I believe it was Fraggle or Daneel Rush on the Beast's Lair forums. Namely Shirou and the MGLN gang, possibly just Yuuno while they're going Indiana Ferret or something (I cannot quite remember), run into a Lost Logia and it throws Shirou back in time. It was mostly set up with the snippets spawned of Mahou Senki Lyrical Days though, so it had background.

The other is a modification of that idea which requires less background. Jewel Seeds rely on the wishes of others to activate. Or at least when they go out of control. And I doubt they all wound up in Uminari so conveniently. Hence we have one or two land in Fuyuki or wherever Shirou is at the time. They go off of Shirou's (I'd suggest Fate or UBW Route here and an older Shirou to avoid the shotacon issues) desire to save others. Because it is such a warped an powerful desire, the Seeds do their dimensional shattering dance of plot relevance and hurl him through time and space where he meets Precia.

Extra bonus points if you manage to have Shirou be the father of Alicia and avoid the entire incident. Rewriting history is a valid way of saving someone. Even if they never knew it.

I just woke up. XD

[Andarkoshi]

Originally Posted by Old_Iron

I just woke up. XD

Heh I know that bit XD

Well the thing is that I don't want Nasu and Nano together, I want them separated.

Jewel Seeds themselves and using them to Save people will actually come up in my story even Before Fate appears and it will be firmly established that it is a BAD idea to use them.

As for Shirou staying and saving Alicia, while I love this idea there are some reasons why it would mess with my story.

For one thing the Nasu-lovers would complain (like they do now) that Shirou broke too easily and abandoned his ideals.

For another I have something specific in mind. I don't want to start off with a happy go lucky story. I want the drama, Shirou, Fate, Precia all being broken and hurt and then I want them to slowly recover from their mental problems.

[Lhklan]

Long answer is long, due to Andarkoshi and Old Iron's answer being long too.

Spoiler for First, the Eldritch Abomination:

Originally Posted by Andarkoshi

Okay here we go.

Spoiler for Backstory 1:

Avalon:

There are several ways to deal with it.

1. I can have this UBW to be the Route where Saber stayed and they later figured out that he had Avalon.

2. Some time after the Grail War Rin while she examined Shirou discovered that he had it in him.

3. I can modify the route to have them discover it during the War itself.

Shirou didn't know about Avalon because he was crappy magus and no one properly examined him. I doubt something as awesome as Avalon in his body would escape a proper examination of his body.

Except if it's the route where both Saber AND Rin are around, they will damn well do their best to make sure that Shirou doesn't end up becoming like Archer.

Spoiler:

- Too long didn't quote -

... Dude, this... this pretty much fuck up the entire F/SN timeline. Since he know Sakura so well now, he will pretty much fall for her. I hate to say this, but Mike once mentioned - and I had to verify it - that Shirou did start to notice Sakura at the start of the novel. Now give him 5 years, and I'm pretty sure he would lean toward Sakura more. Meaning HF is even more likely to occur now, just with less deaths due to Shirou having an easier time convincing Sakura since they spend so much time together.

Spoiler for "Next, the Forge:

Originally Posted by Old_Iron

I seem to come in late to these things all the time.

You are in need of a means to have Shirou fix Alicia and Precia without relying on Ye Olde Zelretch trope?

I do have an idea or two that may help things along. Both are really extensions of A Jewel Seed did it though. However those are a bit less WTF owing to them being Lost Logia and not a For the Lulz device.

One is pretty much what was done in a teaser by... I believe it was Fraggle or Daneel Rush on the Beast's Lair forums. Namely Shirou and the MGLN gang, possibly just Yuuno while they're going Indiana Ferret or something (I cannot quite remember), run into a Lost Logia and it throws Shirou back in time. It was mostly set up with the snippets spawned of Mahou Senki Lyrical Days though, so it had background.

I think I remember that one. It somehow produced a couple of Shirou/Olivie snippet. Which... was partly my fault.

The other is a modification of that idea which requires less background. Jewel Seeds rely on the wishes of others to activate. Or at least when they go out of control. And I doubt they all wound up in Uminari so conveniently. Hence we have one or two land in Fuyuki or wherever Shirou is at the time. They go off of Shirou's (I'd suggest Fate or UBW Route here and an older Shirou to avoid the shotacon issues) desire to save others. Because it is such a warped an powerful desire, the Seeds do their dimensional shattering dance of plot relevance and hurl him through time and space where he meets Precia.

Extra bonus points if you manage to have Shirou be the father of Alicia and avoid the entire incident. Rewriting history is a valid way of saving someone. Even if they never knew it.

I just woke up. XD

This one is very plausible.

[Kireen]

Originally Posted by vic-vic

Bwa-ha-ha, wow! Nice start Kireen, I hope there would be a Nanoha's report too. Would be even funnier if Chrono join again.

Thanks, And i'm currently working on the Nanoha and Hayate ones. As for Chrono, he'll probably show up again...maybe...

[Tiresias]

Originally Posted by Kireen

Spoiler for Operation Wingemen:

“I-It’s not like that…” Yuuno trailed of, searching his mind for a new topic. “I-It’s just that…”

“Scrya, could it be that you are…” Zafira started, giving his an evaluative stare. “…Yeah, that must be it.” The guardian beast nodded to himself, receiving two set of curious looks from the sniper and the admiral.

“What do you mean Zafs?” Vice decided to inquire.

“That’s not my place to say…”

“Wait…Could it be that…” Chrono started as realization hit him like an arrow. “…Oh my good Ferret-boy, you’re still pure!” He shouted pointing a finger toward the embarrassed librarian.

"You know what this is?! This is a MAN EMERGENCY!!"

[Andarkoshi]

First, the Eldritch Abomination

Spoiler for Backstory:

Yeah except Rin and Saber are NOT around in Nano.

Not necessarily, Shirou is a bit on the dense side as we all know and he doesn't really see Sakura as a girl-to-love but a friend with whom he grew up. He knows her, he likes her but she is a friend to him rather than lover material. Remember that they met soon after Kiritsugu's death so they were still kids. Shirou befriended Sakura, they started to spend time, play together, have fun together. Even after Sakura grew up to be a fine young lady he just saw her as a friend.

Not to mention that there was that thing with Shirou becoming friends with Shinji as well, and you don't touch the friend's sister

[Lhklan]

@Kireen
Eh, you failed at the Kirei line. It should have been short, precise but delivered dramatically. Like this: "Rejoice, Yuuno Scrya. Your wish shall finally be granted tonight."

Originally Posted by Andarkoshi

Spoiler for Backstory:

Yeah except Rin and Saber are NOT around in Nano.

Not necessarily, Shirou is a bit on the dense side as we all know and he doesn't really see Sakura as a girl-to-love but a friend with whom he grew up. He knows her, he likes her but she is a friend to him rather than lover material. Remember that they met soon after Kiritsugu's death so they were still kids. Shirou befriended Sakura, they started to spend time, play together, have fun together. Even after Sakura grew up to be a fine young lady he just saw her as a friend.

Not to mention that there was that thing with Shirou becoming friends with Shinji as well, and you don't touch the friend's sister

Yeah, but what about BEFORE he went to Nano? Not to mention, since he have Rin and Saber, he'll definitely try to come back to them.

... ... ... ... ... ... ... I tried. Sorry, I tried.

[Old_Iron]

Originally Posted by Andarkoshi

Well the thing is that I don't want Nasu and Nano together, I want them separated.

Hmm... That makes for a very, very tough order to fill. By separated, do you mean to have the various events and magic separated. IE: No White Devil in the Grail War and Shirou can't use Nanoverse magic?

I ask because having Shirou save Precia and Alicia during the events of Season 1 and fixing them requires an insane amount of effort done in a very short amount of time while having Shirou involved from the beginning. And if it's an older Shirou, then you're going to likely sart having some very Nasu solutions pop up in the nanoverse world.

Jewel Seeds themselves and using them to Save people will actually come up in my story even Before Fate appears and it will be firmly established that it is a BAD idea to use them.

Ah, that's a good call if you want to avoid that route then.

As for Shirou staying and saving Alicia, while I love this idea there are some reasons why it would mess with my story.

For one thing the Nasu-lovers would complain (like they do now) that Shirou broke too easily and abandoned his ideals.

Bah, having Shirou abandoning his ideals and doing it right is an absolute goldmine of character development and story meat if done right. Go look at Daneel Rush's Days series. He does a really good job of it, with a comedic angle at many times, and it may help inspire a few ideas for you.

But if it doesn't work for your story, don't worry about it. Just don't worry too much about Shirou abandoning his ideals for someone who isn't Sakura because the Nasu fans won't like it. Simply make sure that if you do have him abandon them, you do your absolute best at it.

For another I have something specific in mind. I don't want to start off with a happy go lucky story. I want the drama, Shirou, Fate, Precia all being broken and hurt and then I want them to slowly recover from their mental problems.

I think I see where you're going with this. I believe I missed something important when I jumped in. XD

The issue then becomes having Precia not die and taken into custody of some sort rather than Shirou offing her to save Fate or something of the sort.

Hmm... Might I get back to you on this? I must prepare for work. XD

[Andarkoshi]

Originally Posted by Lhklan

@Kireen

Yeah, but what about BEFORE he went to Nano? Not to mention, since he have Rin and Saber, he'll definitely try to come back to them.

... ... ... ... ... ... ... I tried. Sorry, I tried.

Spoiler for Backstory:

Well originally I'm going with only Rin being around. He was actually pretty happy before he got hauled to Nano. Rin managed to keep him mostly under control. He even had a daughter with Rin but then he went with Waver and Rin to Fuyuki to dismantle the Grail and... things got nasty.

After he landed in Nano he tried to go back to Earth. Precia helped him out with that, but when he arrived he found his Earth being Completely wrong. No magi, no Rin, no anybody he knew.

Precia offered him a place to stay while he decided what he wanted to do next. He tried, he looked for a way, researched various artifacts, trans-dimensional travel. He tried everything but there was no way he could find.

Finally he gave up on that, after a year or two of frantic searching. He got closer to Precia who was Very much interested in him. But later his old hero habits re-awakened, he got involved with some bad stuff and Precia got hurt.

This reminded him of his situation with Sakura, how he was the cause of her suffering and left Precia.

Without anyone to look after him or stop him he slowly descended down the path of Asura.