To Aru ... Fanfiction Discussion Thread

[demino_hellsin]

@ferret: As the guy who writes a lot of Mugino, you think I used too much swearing in my sample scenarios?

[SmokinFerret88]

It's not so much that there wasn't enough swearing opposed to the insults which seemed kinda 'meh' in my eyes. I mean, calling someone 'trash' is kinda something you would expect someone less mature to say, where as Mugino would find something far more insulting to say than that.

Sorry, but I kinda have a hard time explaining what I mean. If it's alright with you, may I take a crack at that scenario for myself?

[tsunade666]

Originally Posted by SmokinFerret88

::::ATTENTION::::

Chapter 17 of A Certain World of Darkness is up.

::::THAT IS ALL::::

say what you like guys but I'm too lazy to read up all the post from my last post so I'll just skip it all together plus its time consuming.

Its better if I continued reading the fics. I haven't read this one for months. I can't even remember where I stopped (darn job) maybe I'll just check the reviews. I didn't leave a chapter without a review when I read before... hmm...

tsun

[SmokinFerret88]

I think you stopped a way's after the Touma vs. Mugino fight.

I don't have any reviews from you after that fight, so I'd say start with chapter 5.

[omega253]

Okay, I have a question that is pertinent to writing Chapter 7 of To Ascend.

Would anyone hold it against me if I made Fukiyose OOC? Or did something different with Aureolus?

[demino_hellsin]

@ferret: go. I quite need a proper image. Of her.

[tsunade666]

Originally Posted by omega253

Would anyone hold it against me if I made Fukiyose OOC? Or did something different with Aureolus?

what do you have in mid for Aureolus? remember this guy is considered demi god inside his ars magna as long as he has cool mind. Which is why Touma mind rape him to distort his control over ars magna.

And what about Fukiyose? situation and example might help on what do you have in mind for her. Or rather an explanation or situation.

[omega253]

I suppose I should explain.

Remember Chapter 4? Fukiyose saw part of the fight between Touma and Kanzaki and was in the presence of the Invisible Thing.

Well, Chapter 7 is going to have the conversation between Kamijou and Fukiyose. She is going to be nervous, withdrawn, and guilty. She saw a whole new side of Kamijou and feels guilty for writing him off as a lazy-ass. Fukiyose is kind of shaken up and unconfident because she felt insignificant in the presence of the Invisible Thing.

As for Aureolus, he catches word that Index doesn't need her memory erased anymore and tries to figure out why from the source. Rumors got spread that Index was somehow defeated or at least put in a draw. This stirs up the magic side because well, she has 103,000 grimoires to draw from and she still struggled with her opponent.

Cue talk between Aureolus and Touma, similar to the one that my version of Touma had with Stiyl. Interesting image, isn't it? A pseudo reality warper (Aureolus) and an unstoppable power (Touma) having a casual conversation.

[allfictions]

All this talk about Aureolus remind me of a guy on SpaceBattles who was wondering if it would be possible to write a story with the mindwiped and appearance altered Aureolus Izzard as main character.

The plot was that "Aureolus" wakes up in Heaven Canceller's hospital with a fake identity as a Level 0 and a severe case of memory loss due to an "accident". Now he is released from Hospital to live out his life (closely monitored by the Dark Side of the city) and gets involved in the Level 6 Shift experiment through meeting one of the Misaka clones. As he doesn't really have anything to do with his life he decides to save the poor clone girls. He's technically powerless, but a remnant of Ars Magna remains active in him and manifests itself erratically by warping reality in limited and plotdevicy ways. This would ironically make him very similiar to memorywiped Touma with his plotdevice-arm, playing on how Aureolus was likened to a possible future Touma that failed to save Index.

Of course, it would then show history repeating itself when Aureolus fails to stop Accelerator.

[omega253]

I am kind of altering Aureolus a bit. He was shown to be an alchemist right? He would have that speed writing ability that Sherry Cromwell had which he'd use to write transmutation circles. That or special transmutation gloves.

In a way, he'd basically be like one of the alchemists from Full Metal Alchemist.

He wanted to save people, but when the people he was working for decided to try and use his magical abilities for sinister (or at least dark) purposes, Aureolus packed up and left. His character has a lot of potential....

Oh who am I kidding? Just about every pseudo-plot-relevant character in this series has potential for development!

[demino_hellsin]

I'm pretty sure canon had Aurelious packing up and leaving because he was getting too hung up on index and the whole "curing" the mindwipe thing.

[omega253]

Actually, this was before he met Index. He worked for the Roman Catholic Church before he met Index or even went to England in the first place.

The Roman Catholic Church wanted to use the grimoires that Aureolus wrote to attack other belief systems, while the alchemist himself wanted to save people from witchcraft.

He wanted to save people so he packed up and left for England. It was there that he met Index.

[demino_hellsin]

Oh, you meant that part. I thought you were referring to when he hermitted himself.

[omega253]

Agh, I still need to edit some parts of Chapter 5 and 6 to include the location of Touma and Index's fight. I'm just putting them in School District 11, the same place that Touma and Thor fought in NT 6. It's also really large and just about devoid of troublesome eavesdroppers.

Bu some people will hear the explosions and feel the quakes, which will cause paranoia......

[tsunade666]

Originally Posted by omega253

I suppose I should explain.

Remember Chapter 4? Fukiyose saw part of the fight between Touma and Kanzaki and was in the presence of the Invisible Thing.

Well, Chapter 7 is going to have the conversation between Kamijou and Fukiyose. She is going to be nervous, withdrawn, and guilty. She saw a whole new side of Kamijou and feels guilty for writing him off as a lazy-ass. Fukiyose is kind of shaken up and unconfident because she felt insignificant in the presence of the Invisible Thing.

This is possible but I still can't picture why make many people knew the "IT"

its supposedly a secret that Aleister guards. Heck he even hunted down Fiamma when he saw a glimpse of it but you making its importance seems ordinary at all. I'll be frank with you. One of the beauty of Tamni is the way Kamachi teases/trolls his readers with a snippet or a clue on a secret that you want to know that you will ended up reading the next volume. With the "IT" turning into a normal thing. You level down the mystery and charm of your story.

Look at the current chapter of Railgun. People are dying to know the connection between Misaki and Touma. Its like a obvious lure that you can't escape. And I don't think your idea of Misaki challenging Touma is the answer to it. Misaki isn't childish like Mikoto. Misaki is a bit more mature because she is connected to the dark side of academy city unlike Mikoto which is a bit naive. Plus you can sense a bit intimate/close relationship between Misaki and Touma from just few words from her. That is one of Kamachi's charm. You can't wait to know what happens next.

As for Aureolus his the strongest alchemist or rather his ars magna is the pinnacle of alchemy. Within it's field. Anything is possible as long as the caster think so. The only think stopping Aureolus from turning Index into a vampire is because he himself doesn't have a clue on what a real vampire is which limits his ars magna.

And ars magna shouldn't be his only magic. His a freaking alchemist. He can transmute something into gold heck, I won't be surprised if he starts clapping his hands and press into the road to create a wall and there must be homunculus too.

There are lots of potential on this guy. Its too bad that he was wasted in the novel.

And I think Aureolus can beat accelerator if he enters the ars magna field. Its the "will be done" thing. He can say "die in suffocation" and Accelerator will be having breathing problems.

For now from what I currently read in index fic. The In Memoriam shows the greatest potential or story or maybe because I'm in love with Index in Civies and can use magic (Darn cute index)

While I'm okay for OP Touma, I prefer a level headed fight for Touma. Its his charm to use tactics in fight and not brute strength. Which is why I'm dying to see Touma wield a Thompson contender or an sub machine-gun

[omega253]

That's my thought about Aureolus, too.

And who said that Misaki had challenged Touma? That was the Railgun. I still have ideas running around about how Shokuhou could've met Touma.

As for IT.... Meh, I've got nothing about the casual appearance. If you feel disappointed, then you don't have to read my story. It was good enough to know I've got someone thinking and giving me plot holes to fill in.

[allfictions]

Originally Posted by omega253

I have the Invisible Thing, Aiwass, and also WHITE (you know what this entity is, right?) classified in something different from magic and science.

What is ''WHITE''? Could you spoil me?

[tsunade666]

^really? cause I kinda remember reading that part. Oh, well. I will check on it. But seriously when I read that part I was Maybe I misread Misaki as Misaka. But I will try to check it again. I did read it while I'm on the bus on the way to work kinda bumpy ride.

[SmokinFerret88]

demino, here's the snippet for you. Given, this is just how I write Mugino honestly; because let's face it, she's a bitch.

Spoiler for Sample for A Certain Highschool Student:

Mugino: Well isn’t this a surprise, I didn’t think that rumors about the #3 were true until now.

Misaka: *Eyes narrow* *Shifts closer towards Kamijou*

Mugino: Who would have thought that the fucking poster-child of Academy City would give up her powers for some useless nobody? Did you really stoop that low? Did you really just throw away being an elite Esper just to the rot in the gutter with this piece of shit?

Mikoto: *Sparks flare* *Grits teeth*

Muigno: Did he steal your precious virginity in a gritty alleyway somewhere? Is that why you gave up your power to this fucking Level 0; because he gave you one good fuck and made you his little whore? Come on then you damn brat, give me an answer fitting of the #3! Fire your infamous Railgun; I’ll gladly answer your challenge and show you why my Meltdowner is superior to your ability in every fucking way imaginable!

Mikoto: *Reaches into pocket* You asked for this-

Touma: *Stops her hand* *Steps forward*

Mikoto: H-hey, what are-

Muigno: *Raises eyebrow* *Sneers* Oh, well, look what we have here; we have a damn cripple playing hero all of a sudden. Did I hit a chord in that spiky head of yours? Did I upset you? Good, I’ll be sure to enjoy tearing you apart limb by fucking limb. But don’t worry, I’ll deal with that rich little whore after I dismember you; I’ll even spare you’re dick so she has something nice to remember you by. Would you like that you piss ant or would you rather I just killed you both together so you can rot in the ground as one big cluster of shit.

Mikoto: *Tugs on his shirt* Stop, you don’t need to do this! I can handle her, so you don’t need to get involved! *Grip tightens* Please, don’t do this to yourself.

Muigno: What the hell are you waiting for, an invitation? Fight me Railgun; fight me alone or with that pathetic fucking cripple you gave your powers to help! I’ll prove it right here that, even at your strongest, even with this sack of piss’s help, you were always second rate and not worth being comparable to me! Both of you are going to die here today regardless of what course of action you take! The only thing that’s going to change, the only difference that will be made, is the order I kill you in!

Touma: *Eases out of her hold* *Right hand clinches* *left hand raises towards electrode*

Mikoto: *Still hesitant* Are you sure you want to do this?

Touma: *switches electrode on* Yeah, that messed up illusion of her’s…it needs to be broken.

[omega253]

Originally Posted by allfictions

What is ''WHITE''? Could you spoil me?

Let me put up some quotes from Chapter 4 of my story first.

"'Chosen of WHITE'? You mean her?" Kamijou blinked, looking down at the bruised girl in his arms. He could feel that ITS eyes (or whatever passed for ocular organs to the incomprehensible being in his right arm) lock onto the unconscious swordswoman.

…

"Wait a minute," Kamijou requested. His mind worked, wondering what IT meant by 'WHITE'. He remembered Tsuchimikado talking about people that were born with blessed bodies who were dubbed as Saints. He could feel an abnormal aura that was, dare he say it, holy rolling off Kanzaki. The final pieces in his mind clicked as Kamijou finally realized what 'WHITE' was.

'Well, I guess that explains why Christianity exists,' Kamijou thought, as he finally obtained an important revelation about Christianity. The identity of 'WHITE' was rather easy, when presented with the facts. He knew that each and every being with a disposition similar to IT had a Symbol defining their existence.

And he now knew that WHITE's Symbol was a cross.

If that doesn't give enough hints, then I'll just put it in spoiler tags below.

Spoiler for Identity of WHITE:

WHITE is God. Mind you, this is an AU and I wanted to bring more exposition on the Invisible Thing. I labeled IT as an Other Being, because they are just powerful and different. WHITE is the name because God is often symbolic of the color white. It's a pure color and representing all that is good and holy. Every Other Being has some type of symbol to define their existence, understand? And God's symbol is kind of a cross because of Christianity.

Does that elaboration in the spoilers help?