SOTM 2009 - August (Scale/Perspective) - Entry Thread

[ganbaru]

Thank for the comment guys.
2nd version, added some colors to the book. C&C are always welcome.

[White Manju Bun]

Actually found something I like.

Ok before I post let me remind everyone this is my first attempt at animation...ever Actually animating wasnt hard...getting it under 50bytes was killer x_x

C&C please.


Ugh just looking at it, I can tell the flash is too fast...

If the render is okay Ill probably end up using it, though not sure about the lightning yet...

[Solace]

Originally Posted by ganbaru

Thank for the comment guys.
2nd version, added some colors to the book. C&C are always welcome.

While not colorful, the extra color does help bring a better feeling of perspective and depth to the signature. However now that the book looks so nice, the rest of the entry feels...a little flat.

Originally Posted by White Manju Bun

Actually found something I like.

Ok before I post let me remind everyone this is my first attempt at animation...ever Actually animating wasnt hard...getting it under 50bytes was killer x_x

C&C please.


Ugh just looking at it, I can tell the flash is too fast...

If the render is okay Ill probably end up using it, though not sure about the lightning yet...

Source is fine, as you've noted the animation is a bit fast. And yeah, the optimizing is the most hairpulling part of making animated signatures work here.

[LKK]

Originally Posted by White Manju Bun

C&C please.

Looking at the sky where the clouds are darkest, I think the lightening should originate from the upper right corner and head in toward the middle. In other words, the opposite diagonal from what you've got now. Right now, the lightening looks like it's coming from a relatively clear part of the sky and not from where the storm is coming.

[ganbaru]

White Manju Bun, yes the animation is too fast I think you should shortening the time when the ligntning is visible but at least doubling the time betweem each lightning

Originally Posted by Solace

While not colorful, the extra color does help bring a better feeling of perspective and depth to the signature. However now that the book looks so nice, the rest of the entry feels...a little flat.

Of course the book have to look nice, what else do you think is proposed as food, the girl, the signature itself ? . Seriously, I wanted to make the sig to look like a old picture, even a drawing, so the flatness was somehow expected. I tried to get the head pop-up, C&C are welcome.

[Frailty]

so does this work??


if yes C&C
if not
back to the old drawing board

I really don't know what I'm doing

[ryuukazi]

Originally Posted by Frailty

so does this work??


if yes C&C
if not
back to the old drawing board

I really don't know what I'm doing

it fits fine. and should work. Though I dig idea. But looking at the shadows i think the bright light should come from the left and you can try to emphasize the middle through some effects.

[Frailty]

Originally Posted by ryuukazi

it fits fine. and should work. Though I dig idea. But looking at the shadows i think the bright light should come from the left and you can try to emphasize the middle through some effects.

hmmm I tried doing the "left part only has lighting thing"
I don't think it'll work

so I lighted everything except the floor, then I put some pyreflies(ffx) effects on the person
anyway
v2:



so C&C again

[ryuukazi]

hehe my bad, I really like the B&W version... shoulda kept it simple but what I meant was just up the contrast to highlight the black and white more and by effects maybe more snow.

[Frailty]

Originally Posted by ryuukazi

hehe my bad, I really like the B&W version... shoulda kept it simple but what I meant was just up the contrast to highlight the black and white more and by effects maybe more snow.

v3!!!!!


better?
kept the b&w thing and the pyreflies since they're nice

C&C

[ryuukazi]

yea think it looks great

[Frailty]

Originally Posted by ryuukazi

yea think it looks great

yeah I think it does too
thank you

now all it needs is a good border and a nice text that blends

[KiNA]

Originally Posted by White Manju Bun

Actually found something I like.

Ok before I post let me remind everyone this is my first attempt at animation...ever Actually animating wasnt hard...getting it under 50bytes was killer x_x

C&C please.


Ugh just looking at it, I can tell the flash is too fast...

If the render is okay Ill probably end up using it, though not sure about the lightning yet...

Welcome to the family.. if you need hairs replacement.. call Rika :x

Intriguing theme.. *digs folder*

[ganbaru]

Fraility, the 3th version is the best, but I am not too hot about thoses pyreflire c than seem to come from the person,

I made 2 other version, reworking some elements, hoping to improuve the sig. Should I keep the sig shorter or longer, make the book popping out more by the top, maybe even reducing the the in part ? C&C would be welcome

[LKK]

Does this qualify theme-wise?



(I know my shooting star needs work. Gotta find a good tutorial. This is just what I worked up all by my widdle wonesome with no clue as to what I was doing.)

[vandakiara]

@Frailty - v2 is my fav although I think the pyreflies on the person look a bit weird imo

@ganbaru - of these 2, I go with the first, smaller one which has more contrast and everything... but I think you should colour up the rest of the sig too - like colouring her hair, skin, clothes...

@White Manju Bun - it looks awkward, probably due to what's been already pointed out

@LKK - if that works, I have to say it's too empty - uhm, I don't really know how to explain but.. I think a person there would improve the sig. even if it's a tiny one, looking at the sky. that said, the shooting star looks fine to me

and now, my turn... can't decide on what to do D: and I'm really in love with ilya and berserker so... Solace, you talked about big and small...

would this image work for example?

Spoiler for size:

or this? *have to post the link cause it's HUGE resolution*

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by Frailty

v3!!!!!


better?
kept the b&w thing and the pyreflies since they're nice

C&C

This looks great!

Originally Posted by ganbaru

Fraility, the 3th version is the best, but I am not too hot about thoses pyreflire c than seem to come from the person,

I made 2 other version, reworking some elements, hoping to improuve the sig. Should I keep the sig shorter or longer, make the book popping out more by the top, maybe even reducing the the in part ? C&C would be welcome

I dunno... having a text in japanese inside the sig and a text in english outside the sig doesn't look very good.

[LKK]

Version 2.



New shooting star and a person. (Thanks for the advice, vandakiara.) Comments?

[vandakiara]

@LKK - you're welcome ^^ oh and I was right, the sig looks different with a person there I think it's definitely better this way but it can still be improved maybe some text on the left side... *no idea what you could write though D: maybe SOTM or something of the sort*

[LKK]

Originally Posted by vandakiara

@LKK - you're welcome ^^ oh and I was right, the sig looks different with a person there

Your idea was great. Adding him made a real impact.

I think it's definitely better this way but it can still be improved maybe some text on the left side... *no idea what you could write though D: maybe SOTM or something of the sort*

I have no idea what to add to the left side either. I think I'm gonna mull it over for a few days.