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Tyabann · 2009-09-29, 01:06

Stop bitching. I have a life too.

Spoiler for September the Fifth, Day 4: Hallway- The Ponytailed Girl, Again/Hallway- The Pretty Girl, Again:

These are pretty much the same scene, just with Kyon's conclusion to the events being totally different.

The reason for this is because of how Kyon is introduced to each of them originally... whereas he sees Kyonko as just some girl just stealing his shoes, he immediately suspects that Itsuko is important.

This, in turn, is because Itsuko is the hottest thing in this game, and Kyon is very, very shallow.

Antenor · 2009-09-29, 01:34

Back from the dead to give a few comments, take it as you may Kaisos. University will be the end of me!

Good write-up. I love the dialogue in this one, especially Itsuko's fourth-wall-shattering remark. Pacing is good too. I love how different yet similar the tone is between Kyon's narration and Kyonko's. Good job.

However, something has bugged me ever since you posted the parts full of green text a few months(?) ago: you seem to like it a lot... Perhaps a little too much? Especially when Kyonko's turning crazy. I understand the tone and rhythm is part of the narrative... But if you slip key plot elements in there, there's a big risk people will do like I did on my first read-up: they'll skip most of it. LONG LIVE THE GREEN, but keep the reader in mind.

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Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

This, in turn, is because Itsuko is the hottest thing in this game, and Kyon is very, very shallow.

Find me a 16-year-old boy who isn't shallow in some way. People tend to forget Kyon's actual age... The guy's just full of hormones!

DJ_RockmanX · 2009-09-29, 01:37

Back from the dead indeed. And you aren't the only one who's tired of greentext. Luckily, I have my own plans that will be set into motion soon.

Tyabann · 2009-09-29, 01:43

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Originally Posted by Antenor

However, something has bugged me ever since you posted the parts full of green text a few months(?) ago: you seem to like it a lot... Perhaps a little too much? Especially when Kyonko's turning crazy. I understand the tone and rhythm is part of the narrative... But if you slip key plot elements in there, there's a big risk people will do like I did on my first read-up: they'll skip most of it. LONG LIVE THE GREEN, but keep the reader in mind.

Don't forget this is a visual novel... visuals and music make all the difference to parts that would otherwise be uninteresting to read. (See: Legend of the Golden Witch.)

And we planned to make the Greentext intrusive... maybe I'll have the programmers make it immune to the Ctrl key.

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Originally Posted by Antenor

Find me a 16-year-old boy who isn't shallow in some way. People tend to forget Kyon's actual age... The guy's just full of hormones!

No, seriously. It's Kyon's major character flaw. He just downplays it in his (biased) narration.

Why does he talk to Haruhi in the first place? Because he wants to ask her out.

Why does he pay so much attention to Mikuru? Because she's hot.

Why does he hate Koizumi? Because he's not a girl.

Kyon IS a good person, but my god is he shallow.

Antenor · 2009-09-29, 01:48

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Originally Posted by DJ_RockmanX

Back from the dead indeed. And you aren't the only one who's tired of greentext. Luckily, I have my own plans that will be set into motion soon.

It,s nice to be back! A student's life is a hard life... especially when you double it up with full-time work.

I've been lurking, but I wish I could have done more than that though. But it's nice to see that we're somewhat focused now. I'm ignoring the Tsuji-Macbeth for the sake of the argument.

Anyways, green text is not that annoying, but I just feel it was overused in those scenes. It just went from ominous to slightly obnoxious.

Antenor · 2009-09-29, 02:05

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Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

Don't forget this is a visual novel... visuals and music make all the difference to parts that would otherwise be uninteresting to read. (See: Legend of the Golden Witch.)

And we planned to make the Greentext intrusive... maybe I'll have the programmers make it immune to the Ctrl key.

I'm aware it's a visual novel.

Anyways, what irks me about the green text is not how intrusive it is: it's the sheer volume of seemingly useless GOING CRAZY banter. I think I know what you want to accomplish... But I know most people will skim it and miss plot points, or just plain ignoreit (if you make it too annoying). The scene is still very early into the novel, when there's no big emotional investment in the work yet. You're in danger of losing readers altogether if you make it too obnoxious.

This is a matter of writing style, I guess.

(Sorry if I sound judgemental, Kaisos. I'm a Communications student, so this is pretty much applied theory. It's fun to do!

)

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Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

Kyon IS a good person, but my god is he shallow.

Can't argue with that, just stating it's a very common flaw in his age range.

Tyabann · 2009-09-29, 02:17

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Originally Posted by Antenor

What irks me is not how intrusive it is: it's the sheer volume of seemingly useless GOING CRAZY banter. I think I know what you want to accomplish... But I know most people will skim it and miss plot points, or just plain despise it (if you make it too annoying). The scene is still very early into the novel, where people don't have as much emotional investment in the work. You're in danger of losing readers altogether if you make it too obnoxious.

Bah. It's supposed to be sudden and intrusive and make no sense. That's half the point of that scene.

I'm not toning it down at this stage.

The game rarely gets that bad ever again, and the entire scene, as a whole, is a plot point in and of itself.

The text is line by line, as well. It's... a lot more difficult to skim that way, in all honesty.

If you have other recommendations, especially on how to make that scene not boring, then I'd be glad to hear them. For example, how exactly is it "obnoxious"?

vivify93 · 2009-09-29, 02:29

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Originally Posted by Kaisos

Kyon IS a good person, but my god is he shallow.

Thankfully, I'm shallow as well.

...As is evidenced by my fangirlsm of Haruki.

Binjovi · 2009-09-29, 02:43

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Originally Posted by Antenor

I'm aware it's a visual novel.

Anyways, what irks me about the green text is not how intrusive it is: it's the sheer volume of seemingly useless GOING CRAZY banter. I think I know what you want to accomplish... But I know most people will skim it and miss plot points, or just plain ignoreit (if you make it too annoying). The scene is still very early into the novel, when there's no big emotional investment in the work yet. You're in danger of losing readers altogether if you make it too obnoxious.

Maybe I'm a more dedicated reader than the average person or something, but I haven't once thought of Greentext as annoying or long-winded. If you could point to some examples, perhaps I could see where you're coming from.

Antenor · 2009-09-29, 02:54

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Originally Posted by Binjovi

Maybe I'm a more dedicated reader than the average person or something, but I haven't once thought of Greentext as annoying or long-winded. If you could point to some examples, perhaps I could see where you're coming from.

It's safe to say that everyone in this thread is more dedicated than the average reader; we have emotional involment in this VN-to-be. Heck, I wouldn't be analyzing this if I didn't want it to work, would I?

Anyways, I need some sleep... The complete answer -- with proof! -- will have to wait, sorry.

Heatth · 2009-09-29, 03:10

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Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

Stop bitching. I have a life too.

Spoiler for September the Fifth, Day 4: Hallway- The Ponytailed Girl, Again/Hallway- The Pretty Girl, Again:

These are pretty much the same scene, just with Kyon's conclusion to the events being totally different.

The reason for this is because of how Kyon is introduced to each of them originally... whereas he sees Kyonko as just some girl just stealing his shoes, he immediately suspects that Itsuko is important.

This, in turn, is because Itsuko is the hottest thing in this game, and Kyon is very, very shallow.

Good scene. Kyon is really shallow, so tis make this scene be somewhat funny. Specially because the most important girl there is Kyonko, not Itsuko. And it was her who was one of the intruders of the last day.

Also, somewhat interesting how you compressed "Missing Shoes" in a single line, insted a whole scene.

There is one more thing is buging me since a few scenes ago. In The Answers (IV), we learn Itsuko make contact with the Organization. She obviously don't see any problem talking with people from the other world, as long they are not Suzumiya. She even censored Kyonko and Yuuki for fleeing, when it would be more simpler stay and talk. But then, why she did hide her identity from Kyon (beside plot device, I mean)? Wouldn't be better for her just call him for a chat and explain everyting?

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Originally Posted by Binjovi

Maybe I'm a more dedicated reader than the average person or something, but I haven't once thought of Greentext as annoying or long-winded. If you could point to some examples, perhaps I could see where you're coming from.

I, by the other side, was kinda tired reading that crazy scene. I think I even skiped a few lines.

I am far from being an avarage reader, tough. This might be because the scene is too long. Making the reading kinda tiresome for me. And, as Kaisos said, in the actuall game is harder to miss anything.

Binjovi · 2009-09-29, 03:45

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Originally Posted by Heatth

There is one more thing is buging me since a few scenes ago. In The Answers (IV), we learn Itsuko make contact with the Organization. She obviously don't see any problem talking with people from the other world, as long they are not Suzumiya. She even censored Kyonko and Yuuki for fleeing, when it would be more simpler stay and talk. But then, why she did hide her identity from Kyon (beside plot device, I mean)? Wouldn't be better for her just call him for a chat and explain everyting?

There are at least two possibilities for why she would do that:

1. She already told Taniguchi and Kunikida that her name was Yamada and she made the connection early on that those two were probably the same as Kyonko's friends. She obviously knew who Kyon was and would also suspect that he would share a class with Taniguchi and Kunikida on this side as well. So, in order to remove any confusion down the road, she has decided to use the fake name for the time being.

2. It's obvious that sometime prior to meeting Kyon on the street that morning, Itsuko contacted Itsuki's Organization. There was no way for her to have made contact during her previous jump to the other side where she met Taniguchi and Kunikida, so it must have been the night after the final ripple. It's possible the Organization requested/suggested that she not give out her true identity to anyone. Since Kyonko had given her the name Yamada previously, it would make sense that she would just roll with that to alleviate confusion.

Heatth · 2009-09-29, 03:54

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Originally Posted by Binjovi

1. She already told Taniguchi and Kunikida that her name was Yamada and she made the connection early on that those two were probably the same as Kyonko's friends. She obviously knew who Kyon was and would also suspect that he would share a class with Taniguchi and Kunikida on this side as well. So, in order to remove any confusion down the road, she has decided to use the fake name for the time being.

She could give hime the fake name and still explaning it to Kyon, you know. The name is, actually, prettymuch irrelevant

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Originally Posted by Binjovi

2. It's obvious that sometime prior to meeting Kyon on the street that morning, Itsuko contacted Itsuki's Organization. There was no way for her to have made contact during her previous jump to the other side where she met Taniguchi and Kunikida, so it must have been the night after the final ripple. It's possible the Organization requested/suggested that she not give out her true identity to anyone. Since Kyonko had given her the name Yamada previously, it would make sense that she would just roll with that to alleviate confusion.

This make more sense, I guess. You are assuming the Oranization ask her to keep secret right? However, while this make sense to the ORganization (they be relativelly more powerful if they are the only who have that information), that wouldn't explain why she asked to Mitsuuru and Yuuki to also contact their bosses (which is pretty much the same as telling to Mikuru/Yuki).

Tyabann · 2009-09-29, 04:09

I think it's just that they don't think Kyon really needs to know about this at the current time, until they determine for certain if Itsuko is really who and what she says she is.

An optional scene on Day 5 will kind of address this, actually.

Spoiler for September the Fifth, Day 4: Hallway: A Familiar Laugh:

I would remind everyone, or inform those who don't know, to keep in mind that this scene normally only triggers after you've beaten six routes, though this restriction will be removed for the demo.

I'm not actually that pleased with how this turned out, but what can you do, it's too early and I'm sleep-deprived and exhibiting the physical symptoms of stress.

Enjoy. And yes, I am a proponent of the Kansai dialect = Southern drawl translation convention.

(Those who have been paying attention up till now should draw a fair few conclusions from this scene, heh.)

Joe4evr · 2009-09-29, 04:26

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Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

Tsuruya: Sure, life is funny.

Well, I saw that one coming.

vivify93 · 2009-09-29, 04:27

Tsuruya with a Southern drawl...fits somehow.

I'm sticking by my "Sir Slangalot" style though.

Tyabann · 2009-09-29, 04:30

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Originally Posted by Joe4evr

Well, I saw that one coming.

That comment referring to this? If so, good eye.

I've mentioned it before, but that fanfic was probably my major inspiration for the VN to begin with.

Roger Rambo · 2009-09-29, 06:18

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Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

I think it's just that they don't think Kyon really needs to know about this at the current time, until they determine for certain if Itsuko is really who and what she says she is.

An optional scene on Day 5 will kind of address this, actually.

Spoiler for September the Fifth, Day 4: Hallway: A Familiar Laugh:

I would remind everyone, or inform those who don't know, to keep in mind that this scene normally only triggers after you've beaten six routes, though this restriction will be removed for the demo.

I'm not actually that pleased with how this turned out, but what can you do, it's too early and I'm sleep-deprived and exhibiting the physical symptoms of stress.

Enjoy. And yes, I am a proponent of the Kansai dialect = Southern drawl translation convention.

(Those who have been paying attention up till now should draw a fair few conclusions from this scene, heh.)

As usual, Tsuruya is awesome.

Khu · 2009-09-29, 06:24

I JUST REALISED THESE ARE FOR A VN LOL

Holy crap how stupid of me ><

But why is it in genderbending then?

Stormwhite · 2009-09-29, 06:27

'Cause it has the seitenkan characters in it as well? There's an index somewhere if you go and read all of them.

2009-09-29, 01:06	Link #20081
Tyabann Homo Ludens Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Canada Age: 34	Stop bitching. I have a life too. Spoiler for September the Fifth, Day 4: Hallway- The Ponytailed Girl, Again/Hallway- The Pretty Girl, Again: The Ponytailed Girl, Again [Note: I’m combining the Missing Shoes scene with this one. No point in it now, really. Stupid Day 4.] I guess I’ll just go home. There’s little I can do now with the meeting being cancelled. And besides, my feet hurt in these visitor’s slippers. CRASH Is the onomatopoeia for the noise I just heard echoing from the top of the stairwell. …I’d normally just go on my way, but recently in my life, I’ve begun to suspect that nothing happens by coincidence. I’ll see what’s up, and if it’s nothing that needs my attention, I’ll just go back home. Hell, I might just go back home anyway. As I approach the source of the noise, I hear a voice I recognize. It’s the girl I decided was named “Girl A”, from this morning. Girl A: It was just an accident! You have no right to get so concerned. Another voice responds to her, another girl. “Girl B”, I suppose. Girl B: Recent events have given me every right to be concerned about you. Girl A: …Yeah, you’re right. Sorry. Girl B: …So, why did you fall down the stairs? Girl A: Um, well, I don’t know how to say this without worrying you further, but I sort of get the feeling I’m not used to using my legs. Girl B: …I will not ask anything else, as any further explanation you give me will probably just make it worse. Girl A: Um, yeah. So, um, what should I do with this? Girl B: Sigh… just dump the bigger pieces in some trash bin, I suppose. We’ll have to grab another monitor… Girl A: Why do we have to steal a computer again? Couldn’t we just ask your contacts for one? Girl B: They seem, ah, unwilling to trust me. And since I was told that if we ever hope to make contact with the other side, we will need some sort of terminal to interface with. He says he could have used our cellphones, but since they no longer work… Girl A: Why is that, anyway? It makes no sense. We’re still in Japan, and the service provider obviously still exists, so my phone shouldn’t be displaying “No Service” like that… Girl B: Who knows? Perhaps it was simply some sort of, ah, “deus ex machina”? [Note: I can practically see Itsuko making the awesomeface right here.] Girl A: …You think you’re clever, but that both isn’t clever and doesn’t make any sense in context. [Note: Ara ara~.] Girl B: Fine then. Let’s just go get another monitor, then. Girl A: A flatscreen would probably be easier to carry… maybe we can convince the Computer Society to lend us one, or something… Girl B: Ohoho~, an idea in the vein of our fearless leader, eh? Girl A: What’s that supposed to mean? Shut up. I hear footsteps, and the voices fade …What on earth was that about? When I checked upstairs, I found a few shards of curved glass clearly from a broken CRT monitor. I’ll repeat it. What on earth was that about? …This is none of my business. I think I’ll just go home. When I tried to get my outdoor shoes out of my locker, stuffed in alongside them were... my indoor shoes. I decided not to wonder about what that meant. The Pretty Girl, Again I guess I’ll just go home. There’s little I can do now with the meeting being cancelled. And besides, my feet hurt in these visitor’s slippers. CRASH Is the onomatopoeia for the noise I just heard echoing from the top of the stairwell. …I’d normally just go on my way, but recently in my life, I’ve begun to suspect that nothing happens by coincidence. I’ll see what’s up, and if it’s nothing that needs my attention, I’ll just go back home. Hell, I might just go back home anyway. As I approach the source of the noise, I hear a couple of girls arguing about something. Girl: It was just an accident! You have no right to get so concerned. One of the voices I don’t recognize, but the other belongs to Yamada, the extremely pretty girl from this morning. Kitsuko: Recent events have given me every right to be concerned about you. Girl: …Yeah, you’re right. Sorry. Kitsuko: …So, why did you fall down the stairs? Girl: Um, well, I don’t know how to say this without worrying you further, but I sort of get the feeling I’m not used to using my legs. Kitsuko: …I will not ask anything else, as any further explanation you give me will probably just make it worse. Girl: Um, yeah. So, um, what should I do with this? Kitsuko: Sigh… just dump the bigger pieces in some trash bin, I suppose. We’ll have to grab another monitor… Girl: Why do we have to steal a computer again? Couldn’t we just ask your contacts for one? Kitsuko: They seem, ah, unwilling to trust me. And since I was told that if we ever hope to make contact with the other side, we will need some sort of terminal to interface with. He says he could have used our cellphones, but since they no longer work… Girl: Why is that, anyway? It makes no sense. We’re still in Japan, and the service provider obviously still exists, so my phone shouldn’t be displaying “No Service” like that… Kitsuko: Who knows? Perhaps it was simply some sort of, ah, “deus ex machina”? Girl: …You think you’re clever, but that both isn’t clever and doesn’t make any sense in context. Kitsuko: Fine then. Let’s just go get another monitor, then. Girl: A flatscreen would probably be easier to carry… maybe we can convince the Computer Society to lend us one, or something… Kitsuko: Ohoho~, an idea in the vein of our fearless leader, eh? Girl: What’s that supposed to mean? Shut up. I hear footsteps, and the voices fade …What on earth was that about? When I checked upstairs, I found a few shards of curved glass clearly from a broken CRT monitor. What the hell could a girl as pretty as Yamada be doing stealing computers? And what on earth did that conversation mean? I’ll have to ask her when I see her next… It looks like I’ve stumbled across something strange yet again… could this be connected at all to the intruder from yesterday? The events of my life continue to affirm that nothing happens by coincidence. …I should probably follow them, but if Yamada and her friend are connected to the intruders at all, it’d probably be better to have Nagato with me. I’ll head home for now. When I tried to get my outdoor shoes out of my locker, stuffed in alongside them were... my indoor shoes. I decided not to wonder about what that meant. These are pretty much the same scene, just with Kyon's conclusion to the events being totally different. The reason for this is because of how Kyon is introduced to each of them originally... whereas he sees Kyonko as just some girl just stealing his shoes, he immediately suspects that Itsuko is important. This, in turn, is because Itsuko is the hottest thing in this game, and Kyon is very, very shallow. Last edited by Tyabann; 2009-10-02 at 01:32.

2009-09-29, 01:37	Link #20083
DJ_RockmanX 性転換団長 Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Socal Age: 34	Back from the dead indeed. And you aren't the only one who's tired of greentext. Luckily, I have my own plans that will be set into motion soon. __________________

2009-09-29, 04:09	Link #20094
Tyabann Homo Ludens Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Canada Age: 34	I think it's just that they don't think Kyon really needs to know about this at the current time, until they determine for certain if Itsuko is really who and what she says she is. An optional scene on Day 5 will kind of address this, actually. Spoiler for September the Fifth, Day 4: Hallway: A Familiar Laugh: A Familiar Laugh Well, I guess I’ll just go home. There’s not much I can do with the meeting being cancelled, after all. So, I’ll just deposit my hard-fought-for indoor shoes in my locker, and be on my way. On the way there, I hear raucous laughter from one of the unused classrooms on the first floor. I can pick out two distinct laughs, one male, one female. The girl’s laughter brought back old memories. It’s not a laugh you ever forget. That classroom sounds like it’s a lot of fun… and recent experiences have convinced me that there is no such things as coincidences. If an event like this is just handed to me, I should probably go check out what’s up. Still… I get the feeling that this decision, for some reason, is a big one. … 1) Go inside. 2) Dangerous things should be left alone. Postgame When I turned the doorknob, I heard a ripple. At the time, I didn’t notice. Looking back, I wish that I had. Kyon: Tsuruya-san? A long-haired girl laughs alone in an empty classroom. Desks are pushed agains the walls, and stairs are stacked neatly in the corner. This room hasn’t been cleaned in a while. It’s dusty. Is that why I’m tearing up? Tsuruya-san’s laughter cuts off when she notices me. Tsuruya: Hahahahahahaaa… Ah! …Kyon-kun! What’re ya doin’ here? Kyon: Nothing, really… are you by yourself? Wasn’t there another person in here? Tsuruya: Eh? Ya hearin’ things now? Ya might want to get yer ears checked our or somethin’, ya know. Hey now, my hearing is fine. I’m certain there was a guy in here… where’s he hiding? Tsuruya: So what brings ya ta this empty place, anyways? I could ask you the same question. Was this some kind of rendezvous? Could Tsuruya-san be hiding a boyfriend from me? If so, why? It’s none of my business. Kyon: Not much, like I said. I came in here because I heard the sound of your laughter. …Speaking of which, what’s there to laugh about in an empty classroom? Tsuruya: Oh, ya know. Life and stuff. Kyon: Life? Tsuruya: Sure, life is funny. For an example, the one day I come ta school late this week, my indoor shoes get stolen and I’m forced to wear these thingies instead. She shifts her feet, which are clad in visitor’s slippers. Exactly how is that funny!? And—wait. The second-year’s shoes I gave Girl A this morning. The first character of the name on the shoes was “Tsuru”. Oh. I feel terrible now. Kyon: I’m sorry, Tsuruya-san… it was me who stole your shoes. Tsuruya: Eh? Why? What could a boy like you possibly want with my indoor shoes? …Do you have a shoe fetish, Kyon-kun? [Note: Imagine her with a mischievous grin right here. Or the awesomeface. It’ll help.] Kyon: Gah, no, it’s not that, um… it’s a long story. Tsuruya: I got time. Kyon: Um, well, this girl was trying to steal my indoor shoes, since I don’t think she had any for some reason, so I, uh, grabbed… a random pair of girl’s shoes… that were lying around… This makes me sound so petty… Tsuruya: Wahahaha! That’s great, that’s great, Kyon-kun. Kyon: It is? Tsuruya: Sure it is! It’s so silly! It’s so… like ya. How exactly is that like me at all?! I should probably make up for this somehow. Those slippers do not look comfortable to run around in all day. Kyon: I could probably find her and convince her to give you your shoes back. Tsuruya: Nah, nah, it’s okay. I’m sure they’ll be there on Monday, anyways. That’s right. Tomorrow is the weekend already. It sure came fast. Kyon: At least come to the shoe lockers with me to see if they’re there. That’d mean Girl A has already gone home. Tsuruya-san agreed to come look, and, sure enough, the shoes were there. Tsuruya: Oh good, ya weren’t lyin’. Kyon: Wh--? Tsuruya: I was kinda thinkin’ you had kept them for your, how should I say, personal needs… I don’t have a shoe fetish! Tsuruya: But I’m glad ya were tellin’ tha’ truth. I hate liars. She sticks out her tongue at me. That doesn’t fit your character at all, Tsuruya-san. Kyon: Well, now that I’ve recovered your indoor shoes for you… Not that I actually did anything. Kyon: I guess this is farewell for today, Tsuruya-san. I was about to walk off waving my hand nonchalantly at her, but… Tsuruya: Hey, boy. She interrupted me. Tsuruya: So, ya think ya can just leave a girl behind when we’re going the same way anyways? C’mon, let’s walk home together. And suddenly, she’s beside me, wrapping her arms around my left, pulling me towards the gate. …Wh-what? What is this? Tsuruya-san, what are you doing? What are people going to think with you doing that? What will your boyfriend do if he sees me this close to you? Tsuruya: Eh? What’re ya talkin’ about? I don’t have a boyfriend. ‘Least not yet, heh. Okay, that’s good to know, but what if Haruhi sees me like this? What will she do then? I’ll probably be killed. Tsuruya-san, like usual, just laughs. I’ll probably be killed. Hijack Avoided I’ll leave possibly dangerous situations alone. I don’t know what she’s up to in there, and if she’s with her boyfriend or someone like that it would be rather awkward to interrupt them. I’ll just deposit my shoes in my locker and head home like I originally planned. Hmm? I thought I heard a noise. ...It’s probably nothing. I would remind everyone, or inform those who don't know, to keep in mind that this scene normally only triggers after you've beaten six routes, though this restriction will be removed for the demo. I'm not actually that pleased with how this turned out, but what can you do, it's too early and I'm sleep-deprived and exhibiting the physical symptoms of stress. Enjoy. And yes, I am a proponent of the Kansai dialect = Southern drawl translation convention. (Those who have been paying attention up till now should draw a fair few conclusions from this scene, heh.)

2009-09-29, 04:27	Link #20096
vivify93 Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Age: 30	Tsuruya with a Southern drawl...fits somehow. I'm sticking by my "Sir Slangalot" style though. __________________ LONG LIVE THE QUEEN.

2009-09-29, 06:27	Link #20100
Stormwhite Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2009 Age: 29	'Cause it has the seitenkan characters in it as well? There's an index somewhere if you go and read all of them. __________________

2009-09-29, 06:24	Link #20099
Khu そんなやさしくしないで。。。 Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: NSW, Australia Age: 29	I JUST REALISED THESE ARE FOR A VN LOL Holy crap how stupid of me >< But why is it in genderbending then?