2013-10-16, 22:28 | Link #5542 |
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Understandable, though not discrediting omega in the slightest.
Mugino's my area of expertise; I don't know how but I am. Anyways, what felt missing; was it the scene in general or just something in the dialog that felt off to you?
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2013-10-16, 22:32 | Link #5544 | |
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Just most of it. If you want crack, check if Kyon is lurking around and leaving behind a crack trail. Although, no hard feelings. I can understand your reasoning, considering the previous snips I've written. But I do have a serious story in the middle of writing (literally, I'm taking a break from typing while I was going through the forum) and I think it's coming along a bit better than I thought it would go. On that note, I might have To Ascend Chapter 14 posted up on Thursday instead of Friday/Saturday, but I can't make any promises...
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2013-10-16, 22:40 | Link #5545 | |
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Now then, Omega... we need to talk about that shy Mugino bit...
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2013-10-16, 23:03 | Link #5549 |
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I'd say...without memories. My reasoning behind that is because it could possibly reestablish the bond which he and her had prior to his memory loss. I could be wrong on this, but from what I understand the two were relatively close.
We all know that Touma would have done it regardless of relation. But this is something his mind, body, and whatever remains of the old Touma in his heart are screaming at him to not fail. It's something he could never forgive himself for should he be unable to do so; making it that much heart-gripping when it seems like that bad result may just happen.
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2013-10-16, 23:06 | Link #5550 |
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Good to know about that, Comrade Ferret.
In fact, she'll be ready to blast Touma's head off every time she sees him in another story I'm planning after To Ascend is finished. Basic idea of the story: same OP!Touma, different past than the one in To Ascend. Upon awakening, his power accidentally killed his parents and his superstitious relatives didn't want to take him on account of the misfortune. Thus, a lonely traumatized seven-year-old wanders through the world with enough power to tear the universe apart... Along the way, Touma finds himself in the Magic Side and decides to see if there's anybody that could match him in power. After a brutal warpath of destruction by a psychologically disturbed Kamijou, the Magic Side is in shambles while the most prominent magicians watching the reality distorting showdown between the Magic God Othinus (who succeeded at the risky creation of Gungnir) and Kamijou Touma. Depressingly for Kamijou, he wins again and just walks away while leaving everybody horrified at his power. Othinus, however, is intrigued. Even after a brutal ass-kicking, she wants to know how 'that crazy Kamijou bastard' got that strength. So, she goes into hiding to recover her strength and restart her schemes. Meanwhile, Touma sneaks into Academy City (you could say his age could be around... 13? 14?) and convinces Aleister to let him stay. During his occupation, he proceeds to meet all of the Level 5's and piss all of them off. Except Gunha. They're kind of like bros, considering Sogiita and Touma's personalities and questionable sanity. Cut to time of canon. (Also the first chapter of what this fic would be) Kamijou goes out to his balcony and finds... Othinus. .... Damn, that sounds kind of weird now that I type it out... What do you guys think? @demino_hellsin: Have Touma keep his memories. It'll make him all the more determined to protect his family.
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2013-10-16, 23:49 | Link #5554 |
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So what pairing are you going for in To Ascend or is it gonna be a harem fic. Just read the latest chapter of a Certain World of Darkness. I liked how there was a comparison between how touma and uhiara help people. Do you plan on having a member of judgement or anti skill getting involved in the dark side of academy city.
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2013-10-16, 23:54 | Link #5555 | |
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A ton of ship-tease, really. To Ascend is my first real story and I don't think I have the skill to make a fic involving a solid pairing at the moment. Maybe later on, but not now...
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2013-10-17, 05:24 | Link #5558 |
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Wouldn't a Touma who kept his memory be cynical? I mean, with that much bad things happening in your life (due to his bad luck), it is kind of hard to keep a positive attitude...
Why do you think she has aversion to airplane?
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