Infinite Stratos Character Creation and Fanfiction Discussion

[ZeroXSEED]

Originally Posted by Eratas123

@ Senpai and Rain - Like this? Just their dialogue.

Spoiler:

"You were the one person I've always dreamed of killing. The one that I always blamed for everything that's happened."

"Then why aren't you? I'm helpless right now."

"...."

"Everything I tried to do was for all of us."

"How does placing me in a death camp "For all of us"!?"

"A mistake, something I've lived every day of my life regretting."

"..."

"What are you waiting for? Kill me."

"...No, I won't."

"...What?"

"You made that mistake, I won't do the same."

"..."

"I'll call for help for you once this is over."

"Why?"

"Because I loved you at one point, and I don't want you to die because of a mistake."

Any Suggestions?

THIS I APPROVE, but please no limb cutting, instead, STAB THE HAND. MWUAHAHA (You know, for a scientist their hand is the most precious after their brain and eyes)

[MeisterBabylon]

too much boob in shootin star? Wut?

B then... >.>

[EthernalRain]

@ Eratas: I've got to go now. See you guys in the morning!

Please post a response though, I can probably read it and/or reply before sleeping.

[Eratas123]

@ Meistah - B's more reasonable Just make her higher as she ages.

@ Senpai and Rain - Then comes his sisters THAT will be significantly harder to write since they spent a lot of the story fighting each other and at one point they almost rape him when they didn't know their relation (Being raised by PT isn't healthy).

The original plan during first concept was for him to kill one of them but the other one nearly kills him in retaliation. What do you think I should write?

[ZeroXSEED]

Originally Posted by Eratas123

@ Meistah - B's more reasonable Just make her higher as she ages.

Originally Posted by Eratas123

@ Senpai and Rain - Then comes his sisters THAT will be significantly harder to write since they spent a lot of the story fighting each other and at one point they almost rape him when they didn't know their relation (Being raised by PT isn't healthy).

The original plan during first concept was for him to kill one of them but the other one nearly kills him in retaliation. What do you think I should write?

Make Irish ALMOST kill her, and she surrendered in response. The other sister tried to kill him from behind but stopped by someone.

Even more tragic if one is killed by other guys (probably from Fracture) and the other commit suicide BY PULLED IRISH' HAND TO STAB HER, but that's too dark even for a finale, and no one can support her mother then... XD

See you guys alter, I'll post To_Love Ru Stratos draft when I log in again.

[StratoSpear]

What is the White Roseloss that was mentioned in V4? Is it some kind of vehicle or something?

I think I might've missed it somewhere...

[demino_hellsin]

Alicia Worwood, probably the weirdest OC I've made yet.

Spoiler for Alicia Wortwood:

Name: Alicia Wortwood
gender: female
age: 15
date of birth: March 20
hair: waist length velvet, uneven bangs sticking through a hairband and ring hair clips that hold her side bangs away from her face in bundles.
Skin: fair
Eyes: brown
Nationality: America

Personality:
Alicia is a very bossy kind of girl with the personality of a strict librarian. She has the natural commanding presence of someone in authority. The brunette is normally quiet and prefers her peace. Alicia is very passionate about painting and writing but prefers to pore over the arts in a living room alone with some tea or coffee.

She has a complex about her abilities in an IS because of her low affinity to it. Scoring only a flat C, she is only kept as an IS pilot for her unique abilities. She has always been on bad terms with Fillia, though it's more like a bitter rivalry than anything else.

Skills:
Alicia is a natural born leader. Rather, Alicia has the natural capacity of imperiously commanding others. When she wants something, people are compelled to follow it.

Another notable ability of hers is her intelligence. Alicia's intelligence is not standard intelligence nor gained. It is an in-born gift of superhuman memory and thought processing. She is gifted with an eye for precision, noticing small tidbits like 53 things out of place in a room from before and she can name every single one(as long as she can see it). This lends her an adept ability of deduction as well.

Overall, Alicia is a capable IS pilot, but her skills are barely above average. She shines only when in command of a machine such as AE which does not take into account affinity for it to work properly. Alicia's abilities are even more evident as she can use the AE's remote weapons like they were a part of her body.

Personal History:
Alicia is the second of four children: an elder brother, a younger sister and a baby brother. She has been taking up the role of mom since her mother fell sick due to weakness from giving birth to Alicia's younger brother. Her family gets by with Mr. Wortwood's antique shop.

School life was uneventful for Alicia. Hailed as the smartest girl in school, sometimes even openly debating with a teacher on their subject matter and winning gracefully. All this even though she was frequently absent and missed lessons. These absences were caused by various researchers who wanted to study her intelligence. They realized that unlike other genius' who achieve scientific breakthroughs, Alicia's genius was more along the lines of practicality and higher logic. She's particularly skilled at determining authenticity and choice making.

She was entering middle school when the IS was introduced to her life. Alicia was thrown aside from the research. It had not bothered her but it seemed her case was reopened and this time it was proposed to keep her as an IS pilot. She had been screened before and only came up as a C compatibility rank. Due to the intervention of researchers, Alicia was immediately thrown into the training program for those recognized to be potential IS cadet representatives. There she met people whose compatibility ranks were all A or higher. They were all trained individually but were ranked according to their performance in trials and, in rare cases, spars. Alicia was somewhere within the middle ranks, barely staying one step ahead of most. This caused many a bitter heart from those who took the training personally.

Many days in the training program were spent being bullied by girls. Alicia had even once signed in a withdrawal from the program but it was rejected because she was deemed too valuable. The bullying continued and it began to warp her, she began to hate her IS compatibility rank and most of all she began to hate the IS. She became resentful and suspicious of all the trainees there. Rather than weakening her, the bullying just made her stronger, more vicious and utterly ruthless. Alicia's rank sky-rocketed to representative candidate levels and she was taken as one of the possible girls to be the next one.

It was around this time that she met Fillia. The first time the two met, it was hate at first sight. There was no one that Alicia could not beat amongst their ranks. She was not dominant in the rankings but she got at least one win off everyone. The only person she could not get a win off was Fillia. With a ranking of A like other girls, Fillia was the epitome of a prodigy in IS piloting. Despite her newly minted registration into the country's training program, she was already amongst the top in the span of a few months. Alicia could not accept this because she had struggled a lot to reach this stage.

Then came the time when she heard of Fillia's disappearance. She didn't feel as happy as she thought she would. If anything, Alicia felt enraged. Fillia wasn't so weak as to be beaten by just anyone inside and outside of an IS. Alicia was extra hard on her opponents for those 3 months. When Fillia came back, Alicia felt as if a weight had been taken off her heart.

It was only a day after Fillia's return that Alicia was called to the IS research facility. There she came across the AE and was told to try piloting it. She initially thought it was an IS but it was a lot harder to move than an IS. When she did get the machine to move, many were amazed. It seemed that many other IS pilots had been called to try the AE but none of them could even get the machine to start up. She was then officially signed as America's pilot for the AE.

First time Alicia met with the AE's original pilot, Rong, was when he came around in shackles. She was surprised at how young Rong was, only around her age. He had shouted to her “Moving your arms and legs isn't the only way to move the AE. Think about it!”. Alicia had initially taken this as an insult and ignored it but soon grudgingly tried the advice. Amazingly the AE seemed to respond accordingly to her thoughts and she realized that there was a connection between her mind and the AE. She began to move better. Unlike her first time in an IS which mostly consisted of barely getting the machine to even fall over, the AE moved smoothly with her. Though she was shaky at first, her progress was immediate. It was literally like learning to walk. Only easier because she had the walking part down pat, just with new but similar limbs. She immediately fell in love with the AE.

The two worked together closely in the development of the AE with Rong as technical support and Alicia as the test pilot. The two were very professional with each other, not really engaging in anything outside of what their post required. But Alicia was curious about one thing so she asked why he was giving away his greatest weapon by helping the government develop the AE. Rong said that the AE was never meant to be a weapon. Alicia tells him that he's too optimistic to be terrorist if he thinks like that. Rong responds that he and the AE's creator would intervene if anything untoward happened. She saw the severity in his eyes and didn't question it.

Alicia requested a special demonstration of the AE with Rong as the pilot. The higher ups were very reluctant about it, but it seemed many of the AE staff and Alicia herself were willing to vouch for the young man. It was allowed but there would have to be IS guards. The point of the whole exercise was to obtain proper data of the AE in its full capacity. The results were mind-blowing. No one predicted the maneuvers that Rong was able to perform with the AE. Alicia was mesmerized by what she saw before her. She believed that she was already doing great with the AE, performing flight maneuvers in a matter of days as compared to her requiring years of training with the IS before getting it perfectly. At that time, she felt her own heart gripped tightly by despair.

Rong notes that Alicia is depressed, she blames him for it and rants to him of her despair, of her weakness. He tells her his own experiences of weakness. How he spent half a decade practicing and perfecting his skills with the AE. He tells her that the weak shouldn't curse the strong, the weak should curse their weakness and seek their strength.

Alicia and the rest of the IS research facility continued to work with Rong for the next week. The staff was impressed with how he was able to keep up with them, doing all nighters and surviving only on caffeine. A good majority of the staff were not capable of handling the stress and had to take breaks, Alicia included. She would watch Rong speaking to other technicians, barking orders when stressed, but overall it was like he'd naturally become a part of the staff. She felt that the time of the past week and a half were more like a year and a half with all the work they did.

Another few days of non-stop work and Rong finally left for IS academy with Fillia. Most of the IS research institute was glad that the terrorist was finally gone. But those who worked with him were not quite so joyful. All of them were somber, realizing they had become attached to a terrorist, or a former one at least. He was a good guy to work with, knew what he was talking about and was probably the one who worked the hardest on this venture. Rong was just someone you couldn't genuinely hate when you got to know him.

Alicia was not immune to this. Whenever she thought of Rong a rushed mix of emotions filled her. Someone she had to surpass, someone she could trust, someone who supported her. She wondered if any of the people he worked with meant anything to him. He always seemed so distant even as he shared his own past with them. She wanted to know, she wanted to know what was in his mind. What was he really thinking when he offered his help in developing the AE? Was he honest that it was not a weapon? Why could he say something about being weak when he was so strong? She starts to regret not asking all these questions. She regrets pushing him away. Most of all she regrets not realizing they were the same.

^profile above is subject to change or scrapping. Criticize and deconstruct to your heart's content^

EDIT: Sorry about the wall o' text era. Still working on it.

[Eratas123]

@ demino_hellsin - Can you please shorten it to the more important parts? It's hard to read walls of texts.

[DarkJak2050]

Originally Posted by DarkJak2050

Just a little something...

Spoiler for Flashback:

The clean up in the base is going rather smoothly. Truth be told, there was actually too much help going on for any of us to do. So me, Sideswipe and Scourge were allowed to relax and join the others at the bonfire.

"So, what are you going to do now that our days as mercenaries are done?" I asked Sideswipe.

"Don't know. Maybe I'll major in philosophy and teach it at Tokyo U or something."

Sideswipe teaching philosophy? Man, that's a good one.

"Yeah, I could see that. 'Good morning, today we'll be talking about the philosophical theory behind a bullet in the head'." I chuckled a bit.

"Heh. Yeah, and if they act up, I'll just cut them in half."

"Got to keep them in line somehow, right?"

"Exactly. So, how about you? Going to hold out for Navy SEAL or Army Ranger?"

Not much, but better than nothing.

Originally Posted by Eratas123

Seems more like an epilogue to me.

Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

Ditto.

It's them talking about their "original" future plans after being Thunder Crash, before "that" occured.

[Eratas123]

@ Jak - Eh? Then why didn't they follow through with their plans? Either way their group was disbanded and they had nothing left for them.

[demino_hellsin]

I can't seem to cut the character profile any shorter...

[HasuMasu]

And just for fun, reposting my first post here, so, how is it?

Originally Posted by Detective-san

just putting this guy out there, first time doing this, my fan-made character which i, spending countless hours lying in bed and standing around in the bathroom, much to the dismay of myself and my roommate, decided to make

well, hope it's interesting

Spoiler for my (possibly AU-ish character):

Name: Satoshi (codename), Yuusuke (possible real name)

Gender: Male.

Hair: Black, lengthy, spiky, messy.

Eyes: Initially black, but i'll explain later.

Body: Fair skin (not dead-looking though), his body is...well, think of Ulquoria from bleach in his segunda etapa (without all the demonic stuff ofcourse).

Height: Slightly taller than Ichika.

Age: Presumably around the age of the main characters.

Alignment: Unclear, presumably chaotic good.

Personality: Now this one is a bit touchy since his personality is...far from normal, he acts, almost all the time, without letting a sliver of his true face slip through his mask, probably the only ones who get to see his true nature (and just a small portion of it) will be us, the viewers, his "mask" changes depending on who he's with, where he is, etc. he usually puts on the guise of a nice guy (though he might actually be one...it's possible), regularly teases other characters (though his verbal interaction will be limited to a few people only), and he often pretends to be clumsy and incapable, though this is probably not true since his abilities, when displayed, usually catch people around him off-guard, though he is careful to not make himself seem too capable so as not to "blow his cover", since he is a guy, although he isn't a regular student at the academy, there will be the same reaction to him as you would expect, considering he is a guy, he is nice enough to his "fans" at the academy, but shows no particular romantic interest (outside his obvious teasing), although he sometimes lets a bit of particular concern to a certain character slip through his mask sometimes, he is usually able to dismiss it as more teasing, basically think of his acting as on par (if not surpassing) light yagami or lelouch, he's the "read between the lines within the lines" character that nobody seems to be able to read or understand, and usually confuses a particular girl with "does he really like me or is he just teasing again"?

Abilities: The full extent of his abilities is not expanded upon, as i said, he's careful not to let it slip through, although from what the viewer is able to gather through flashbacks and small glimpses of his abilities, he is presumably very capable, his IS is only ever used, at most, partially, although it is hinted that there is no "complete" version of it.

Background: Again, not revealed in it's entireity but from what the viewer can gather based on flashbacks, and the bits that he makes known to us, his past is presumably grim, think of bruce wayne/tetsuo/wolverine/akira/nagato, yup, it's pretty messed up, from what we know, his parents disappeared, likely killed, at some point he was experimented on (for what we do not know, presumably his "psuedo-newtype" abilities, which might have something to do with being able to pilot IS, anyway, he eventually escaped and traveled, presumably using IS, to an obscure village in Japan, in which he was able to live in an abandoned house for a while, at some point though, mysterious people came to his location and tore up the village looking for him, these were, probably the same people who killed his parents, and experimented on him, realizing this, he fights back a bit and somehow escapes, some time, presumably years later, a mysterious figure appears in, what appears to be some sort of base, and, in true solid snake style, takes down the guards, infiltrates the building, and eventually, makes his way, all the while taking out guards and being sneaky, to what appears to be a room full of tubes with glowing purple liquid, with ofcourse, the inclusion of deformed humans, our mysterious figure takes a look and, sure enough, a deranged looking man in a lab-coat appears and seems to have been waiting for him, he, ofcourse, goes on to explain a few things to our silent mystery man, after which, he, sure enough, takes off his helmet, pulls out a switch, sets off some bombs that he, apparently set before-hand, and silently walks out while our deranged scientist makes his last remarks. Thus concluding what we know about him prior to his involvement in the main story.

thus concludes the, i have to apologize, lengthy introduction to our, quite obviously alternate-universe fan-made character Yuu--...err...Satoshi.

hope it was interesting and...

thanks for sitting through that boring wall of text

I'm surprised at how polite I sounded back then, WHO ARE YOU AND WHAT HAVE YOU DONE WITH ME!!??

It's a good thing I never used this character in an actual fic.

[demino_hellsin]

@Detective: I'm actually trying to read it completely but as of right now my mindset of waking freshly from a nap is not very pleasant. However I understand one thing about this character profile. "This is a character who may or may not be a overpowered. It's for him to know and you to find out."

*brain ache*

I always believed naps were supposed to refresh the mind... and yet I feel completely tired...

[HasuMasu]

Yeah, I'm not sure what I was trying to get at back then, reading it now is really...weird.

That was way back in page 36.

[demino_hellsin]

I think anyone would feel that way... I still have the stuff I wrote up in my second year of highschool and the naruto fic I wrote in my 1st year of highschool is still up. I don't recognize any of it o.o

[Eratas123]

Finished Daydreams Chapter 5!

[demino_hellsin]

gratz era-era

[StratoSpear]

Noice, Eras!

[Eratas123]

@ Stratos - Any questions or anything you need?

[StratoSpear]

Originally Posted by Eratas123

@ Stratos - Any questions or anything you need?

I initially asked about the White Roseloss... but then I found out shortly after that it's a car.

Then there's also the completed Chapter 1. Thinking of publishing the story now...