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Jimmy C · 2011-06-09, 07:10

But the Incubators are responsible for and dealing with that problem themselves and XCOM still can't detect them either.

Ace Of Scarabs · 2011-06-09, 10:36

I was planning to resolve that by making full use of some of the characters I've planned. Three original Girls, two of the luckiest Agents, and they're going to endure some rough times.

The original method I devised to introduce X-Com to the wonderful world of PMMM was to have a Witch-Realm intrude into a routine Terror Mission after the last Floater falls to Laser weapons, whereupon the guy carrying a HE-autocannon would get Kissed and kill himself plus some others by "going berserk". The surviving Agents would end up fighting familiars before the local Magical Girl sneaks ahead and kills the Witch.

Naturally, the higher-ups would suspect hallucinogens and Psychic attacks, at least until live footage from the gun-cams of the squad are reviewed. Threy will place interest in the Magical Girl, who exhibits nigh-superhuman abilities.

Two of this squad's survivors are going to be the major X-Com agents this story focuses one - they both have daughters, and one of those two girls will Contract with Kyubey successfully, which is how X-Com gets a keen insight into the Magical Girls.

Incubator contact will happen later through either detection via Mind Probe or use of a Psi-Amp, although their presence would have been betrayed by the Magical Girl telling her Daddy what happened. Kyubey would attempt to contract her friend as well, but the father would deny it the chance by shooting it through the girl's bedroom door with a laser pistol after triangulating its position with his Psi-Amp, which he was encouraged to practice with to develop his Psi-skill.

It will be hard to map out how X-Com will work with the Girls, but they will definitely try to lend aid secretly, without the UN ever finding out.

The guys will later get transferred to the Japan branch base of X-Com, where Homura will definitely steal a bunch of obsolete Heavy Cannons from, as well as some Blaster Bombs and Launchers. She gets tracked down by Psi-Amp users, and begins working alongside X-Com in exchange for massive firepower from their armories and support from the Original Girls after explanations are had and demonstrations are made.

I also plan to have some Alien UFOs land in Witch-realms with death-riffic results awaiting, and intend to allow information to leak up to Cydonia, so the Aliens will attempt to prepare for a massive assault on Walpurgisnacht to destroy the potential threat to their attempt to conquer Earth for human resources. This will bump the Cydonia Raid up to just before WPN, separating the Girls from their fathers.

A bunch of "maverick" X-Com agents sneak off (read: get sent on a secret mission so classified even the UN knows nothing of it!) with some additional weaponry to try and aid Homura and the Original Girls against Walpurgisnacht (they will fail, of course, since even this noncanon Crossover universe will run somewhat parallel to the true timelines). Nevertheless, they manage to stall enough so that Madoka can arrive on the scene and witness their deaths and Homura getting pinned. At the same time, the Cydonia Raid will almost horribly fail in this timeline, except that the last of the Original Girls makes a Contract and uses almost all her power to fly to Mars and save her Daddy and 'Uncle', sacrificing herself to destroy the Alien Brain thing at the heart of Cydonia. The last thing she sees is Madokami coming for her with a loving embrace before the universe is remade.

I'm going to follow much of the canonical events in PMMM, although how X-Com will fare after Madokami's retcon has yet to be determined. In the new timeline, The two Original Girls who went to WPN will survive for sure though.

Jimmy C · 2011-06-09, 11:34

Major roadblock with your idea. If you remember your XCOM, the soliders live on base, away from any families they might have. They might not even be in the same country!

Ace Of Scarabs · 2011-06-09, 11:46

Good point.

I figure that I could come up with some kind of event to get the Original Girls to Japan some time later, though, since they don't need to be there until near WPN (School trip? Holiday which coincides with Daddy's new workplace?). There will be a window of time where the two fathers worry for their families (particularly their daughters!) whenever off-duty, although stuff like Skype make it less difficult for them to keep in touch. This makes sure two of the key locations in the story are X-Com Singapore, and X-Com Japan.

Of the three Original Girls, two of them, as mentioned, are daugthers of two of the X-Com guys. They are both Singaporean, and their fathers both served in the SAF before being reassigned to X-Com's Singapore base around the start of the story. The other magical girl would have wandered in from overseas undetected by the ICA by means of magic. Both of them are transferred to X-Com Japan because of intel of Incubator activity, as well as to train some of the rookies due to their mission counts, AND because they have some Psi-potential which makes them candidates for some Psi-training in the new lab in Japan.

Unlike usual portrayls of X-Com being full of maniacs, I go with the idea that there are both crazed maniacs and genuine elites in X-Com, the crazed maniacs being used as cannon fodder and "spotters" for the elites. Some of these disturbed souls are so far-gone that Panic Attacks only make them go berserk more often than not! Granted, that only makes them more dangerous when Witchkissed.

Besides, I wanted to do this for two major scenes, one being Kyubey getting shot by an X-Com agent protecting his daughter from being Contracted, and the other being Homura getting her hands on Blaster Bombs for use on Walpurgisnacht.

Jimmy C · 2011-06-09, 14:08

Maniacs or not, XCOM uses the toughest, most dangerous soliders in modern militaries, even then 50-75% of them die on a typical mission. I don't know if Singapore's standards are that good.

Ace Of Scarabs · 2011-06-09, 20:02

They're mostly hired as startup consultants when getting the Singapore Branch Bas online, but ended up getting dragged along. Their survival during the Witch-realmed Terror Mission cemented their permanent role in X-Com, which was further cemented a few months later when both of them tested with at least above-average Psi strength.

Jimmy C · 2011-06-09, 23:17

XCOM doesn't need consultants like that.
As much as I like your idea and really hope you can succeed, I wish I could help you more.

Ace Of Scarabs · 2011-06-10, 10:54

No worries, poking holes in the Headscratchers in my story helps me get more consistency, and naturally I'm going to go off the rails where canon is concerned sometimes for the sake of making the story more interesting (Witch-Realm encroaches on Snakeman Base! Witchkissed Chrysallid rampage!) or cracktastic because it amuses me.

What I'm planning concerning SAF's involvement in X-Com is to lend support in various roles so the other countries could concentrate on providing field agents. The two dudes I'm throwing in are meant to be lending support in other areas besides field missions, but due to a shortage of manpower when several missions crop up at once in a single day, they're pretty much dragooned into participating in the Terror Mission. (Well, better than being stuck in the back doing the rubbish work for the others anyway)

X-Com is an international effort anyway, at least according to the lore in Enemy Unknown. SAF providing support and perhaps even a little manpower is not going to be considered odd, especially if politics demands that Singapore show more willing in such affairs in order to sweeten some trade talks that are ongoing, on top of getting scientists inside X-Com to get an inside helping on all the sweet Alien SCIENCE.

But I digress. The story is going to be pretty much partly crack in any case, so I might as well load up the Skyranger(s) and prepare for a soulcrushingly depressing meatgrinder with more firepower and magic than before.

Master Assassin · 2011-06-16, 11:18

I feel like vomiting more ideas as I pull them out from my bottom... which is essentially where my brain is. (Metaphorically, not literally.)

Must.... vomit them out from my brain!!

Spoiler for Shorty: Meet the Kamijou:

Hagoshod · 2011-07-03, 20:15

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6815052/...dia_of_Witches

This is totally not referring to what you think it's referring to.

rantuyetmai · 2011-07-04, 03:41

Has anyone read Lestaki's "Puella Magi Homura Magica"? This story took place after Madoka's transcend and Sayaka's death, in the new world our remaining girls have to fight against demons. The romance aspect will focus on Homura and Kyouko's relationship.

The fic is set in-universe, no OC (at least not yet), as a believable continuation of the anime. Characterization-wise it's the best in MadoMagi section at the moment IMHO, even Junko was portrayed perfectly. Lestaki is quite famous for building the characters through the interaction they have with each other, as opposed to using a narration or thought, so the readers can feel the characters themselves without being spoon-fed. Hopefully someone here can enjoy it as much as I do

Hagoshod · 2011-07-08, 15:34

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7159321/1/Acceleration

Spoiler:

Yep.

Ace Of Scarabs · 2011-08-08, 10:41

Spoiler for Old Spice Parody:

I got bored while watching Megatron and Grover parody the Old Spice commercial. Originally posted on the TV Tropes Madoka thread.

Zero Hurricane · 2011-08-08, 11:40

Hey guys! Check my fanfic here: The Chronicles of Magic Knights

Spoiler for Synopsis:

Well, the story still in development. Hope you guys enjoy it

Triple_R · 2011-08-11, 01:20

I just put up a new fanfic titled Puella Magi Madoka Magica, March to War.

It's based on the premise of "What could happen if another teenage girl made a massive world-altering wish like Madoka did?"

That, plus as the title suggests, it involves serious military conflict (later on).

Anyway, I'd love to know what people think of it.

Sayaka will be a very important character in this fanfic, by the way.

MinuSeveN · 2011-08-23, 22:15

My contribution to the fandom. I regret nothing!
But I would appreciate any helpful comments for future writing.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Summary

8 Seconds

"... is the time the oxygen in the brain takes to renew itself. Afterwards, the neurons no longer have an energy source to produce the necessary electrical impulses. In other words, it’s about the time Louis XVI had to think after he got his head cut off."

Spoiler for 8 Seconds:

Spoiler for Author's Notes:

Hagoshod · 2011-08-24, 02:27

The Witch's name was Walpurgisnacht. I watched it materialize in Mitakihara Town myself.

It was going to fight a team of Magical Girls who would have won us the war, before they were separated from their captain.

-----Who was their captain?

The great Mami Tomoe, our mentor. She was commander of the Magical Girls before Madoka.

It's imperative that we find her before the Incubators learn of her location. Madoka has the ability to get there, and you must pray it's in time.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6814603/2/

spoiler:

Spoiler:

Quote:

Originally Posted by MinuSeveN

My contribution to the fandom. I regret nothing!

I prefer Charlotte's Cuisine Critique, but that's probably because I wrote that one.

sa547 · 2011-08-24, 03:53

Uploaded chapter 4 several days ago (yep, that's what the sig says now; working on the next chapter):
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6979524/4/

Hagoshod · 2011-08-30, 00:54

Quote:

Originally Posted by Hagoshod

The Witch's name was Walpurgisnacht. I watched it materialize in Mitakihara Town myself.

It was going to fight a team of Magical Girls who would have won us the war, before they were separated from their captain.

-----Who was their captain?

The great Mami Tomoe, our mentor. She was commander of the Magical Girls before Madoka.

It's imperative that we find her before the Incubators learn of her location. Madoka has the ability to get there, and you must pray it's in time.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6814603/2/

spoiler:

Spoiler:

I'm just about done writing the extended version of this fanfic, but I can't decide whether or not I should include the Transformers quotes I have in mind.

Any suggestions?

MinuSeveN · 2011-08-31, 04:42

^Transformer's quotes? Personally, I think it'd be cool but... kinda depends on the quotes...

2011-06-09, 10:36	Link #202
Ace Of Scarabs Mechanoid Pilot Join Date: Jun 2011 Location: In a box of scraps Age: 37	I was planning to resolve that by making full use of some of the characters I've planned. Three original Girls, two of the luckiest Agents, and they're going to endure some rough times. The original method I devised to introduce X-Com to the wonderful world of PMMM was to have a Witch-Realm intrude into a routine Terror Mission after the last Floater falls to Laser weapons, whereupon the guy carrying a HE-autocannon would get Kissed and kill himself plus some others by "going berserk". The surviving Agents would end up fighting familiars before the local Magical Girl sneaks ahead and kills the Witch. Naturally, the higher-ups would suspect hallucinogens and Psychic attacks, at least until live footage from the gun-cams of the squad are reviewed. Threy will place interest in the Magical Girl, who exhibits nigh-superhuman abilities. Two of this squad's survivors are going to be the major X-Com agents this story focuses one - they both have daughters, and one of those two girls will Contract with Kyubey successfully, which is how X-Com gets a keen insight into the Magical Girls. Incubator contact will happen later through either detection via Mind Probe or use of a Psi-Amp, although their presence would have been betrayed by the Magical Girl telling her Daddy what happened. Kyubey would attempt to contract her friend as well, but the father would deny it the chance by shooting it through the girl's bedroom door with a laser pistol after triangulating its position with his Psi-Amp, which he was encouraged to practice with to develop his Psi-skill. It will be hard to map out how X-Com will work with the Girls, but they will definitely try to lend aid secretly, without the UN ever finding out. The guys will later get transferred to the Japan branch base of X-Com, where Homura will definitely steal a bunch of obsolete Heavy Cannons from, as well as some Blaster Bombs and Launchers. She gets tracked down by Psi-Amp users, and begins working alongside X-Com in exchange for massive firepower from their armories and support from the Original Girls after explanations are had and demonstrations are made. I also plan to have some Alien UFOs land in Witch-realms with death-riffic results awaiting, and intend to allow information to leak up to Cydonia, so the Aliens will attempt to prepare for a massive assault on Walpurgisnacht to destroy the potential threat to their attempt to conquer Earth for human resources. This will bump the Cydonia Raid up to just before WPN, separating the Girls from their fathers. A bunch of "maverick" X-Com agents sneak off (read: get sent on a secret mission so classified even the UN knows nothing of it!) with some additional weaponry to try and aid Homura and the Original Girls against Walpurgisnacht (they will fail, of course, since even this noncanon Crossover universe will run somewhat parallel to the true timelines). Nevertheless, they manage to stall enough so that Madoka can arrive on the scene and witness their deaths and Homura getting pinned. At the same time, the Cydonia Raid will almost horribly fail in this timeline, except that the last of the Original Girls makes a Contract and uses almost all her power to fly to Mars and save her Daddy and 'Uncle', sacrificing herself to destroy the Alien Brain thing at the heart of Cydonia. The last thing she sees is Madokami coming for her with a loving embrace before the universe is remade. I'm going to follow much of the canonical events in PMMM, although how X-Com will fare after Madokami's retcon has yet to be determined. In the new timeline, The two Original Girls who went to WPN will survive for sure though. __________________ It's not the 'mech that makes the man, it's the MAN that makes a name for his 'mech.

2011-06-09, 11:46	Link #204
Ace Of Scarabs Mechanoid Pilot Join Date: Jun 2011 Location: In a box of scraps Age: 37	Good point. I figure that I could come up with some kind of event to get the Original Girls to Japan some time later, though, since they don't need to be there until near WPN (School trip? Holiday which coincides with Daddy's new workplace?). There will be a window of time where the two fathers worry for their families (particularly their daughters!) whenever off-duty, although stuff like Skype make it less difficult for them to keep in touch. This makes sure two of the key locations in the story are X-Com Singapore, and X-Com Japan. Of the three Original Girls, two of them, as mentioned, are daugthers of two of the X-Com guys. They are both Singaporean, and their fathers both served in the SAF before being reassigned to X-Com's Singapore base around the start of the story. The other magical girl would have wandered in from overseas undetected by the ICA by means of magic. Both of them are transferred to X-Com Japan because of intel of Incubator activity, as well as to train some of the rookies due to their mission counts, AND because they have some Psi-potential which makes them candidates for some Psi-training in the new lab in Japan. Unlike usual portrayls of X-Com being full of maniacs, I go with the idea that there are both crazed maniacs and genuine elites in X-Com, the crazed maniacs being used as cannon fodder and "spotters" for the elites. Some of these disturbed souls are so far-gone that Panic Attacks only make them go berserk more often than not! Granted, that only makes them more dangerous when Witchkissed. Besides, I wanted to do this for two major scenes, one being Kyubey getting shot by an X-Com agent protecting his daughter from being Contracted, and the other being Homura getting her hands on Blaster Bombs for use on Walpurgisnacht. __________________ It's not the 'mech that makes the man, it's the MAN that makes a name for his 'mech.

2011-06-09, 20:02	Link #206
Ace Of Scarabs Mechanoid Pilot Join Date: Jun 2011 Location: In a box of scraps Age: 37	They're mostly hired as startup consultants when getting the Singapore Branch Bas online, but ended up getting dragged along. Their survival during the Witch-realmed Terror Mission cemented their permanent role in X-Com, which was further cemented a few months later when both of them tested with at least above-average Psi strength. __________________ It's not the 'mech that makes the man, it's the MAN that makes a name for his 'mech.

2011-06-10, 10:54	Link #208
Ace Of Scarabs Mechanoid Pilot Join Date: Jun 2011 Location: In a box of scraps Age: 37	No worries, poking holes in the Headscratchers in my story helps me get more consistency, and naturally I'm going to go off the rails where canon is concerned sometimes for the sake of making the story more interesting (Witch-Realm encroaches on Snakeman Base! Witchkissed Chrysallid rampage!) or cracktastic because it amuses me. What I'm planning concerning SAF's involvement in X-Com is to lend support in various roles so the other countries could concentrate on providing field agents. The two dudes I'm throwing in are meant to be lending support in other areas besides field missions, but due to a shortage of manpower when several missions crop up at once in a single day, they're pretty much dragooned into participating in the Terror Mission. (Well, better than being stuck in the back doing the rubbish work for the others anyway) X-Com is an international effort anyway, at least according to the lore in Enemy Unknown. SAF providing support and perhaps even a little manpower is not going to be considered odd, especially if politics demands that Singapore show more willing in such affairs in order to sweeten some trade talks that are ongoing, on top of getting scientists inside X-Com to get an inside helping on all the sweet Alien SCIENCE. But I digress. The story is going to be pretty much partly crack in any case, so I might as well load up the Skyranger(s) and prepare for a soulcrushingly depressing meatgrinder with more firepower and magic than before. __________________ It's not the 'mech that makes the man, it's the MAN that makes a name for his 'mech.

2011-06-16, 11:18	Link #209
Master Assassin Portable Dude Mk. II Artist Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: All ghillied up spying on someone ~2,000 yards away using telescope sights. Age: 35	I feel like vomiting more ideas as I pull them out from my bottom... which is essentially where my brain is. (Metaphorically, not literally.) Must.... vomit them out from my brain!! Spoiler for Shorty: Meet the Kamijou: Sayaka reminisced the day Kyousuke... was saved from an accident about to happen. "Watch out!" Sayaka screamed. Too late. With the lorry just a feet away from that boy, there's no way he can dodge that quick. However. As if there's a camera setting itself to capture in slow motion, a man with spiky hair dived forwards towards Kyousuke, pushing him away from the impending doom - along with himself. But something dropped from his pocket. "Oh snap..." that man muttered. Kyousuke slowly got back up and looked up to who his savior might be. "MY DEBIT CARD!" he shouted. The lorry went past. "Oh, it's still safe! Yes! Now time to--" A motorcycle went past fast and immediately smashed the card lying on the road. "SUCH MISFOOORRRTUUUUUUNNNNEEEEEE!" Sayaka came over to the two boys' side from the other side of the road. "Kyousuke, are you okay?" "Ah... um. Yeah. ... Um..." He turned back towards the man. "Ah, sorry. Damn, and I had quite some savings inside that card... oh yeah, you alright? Uh..." "Kamijou," Kyousuke replied. The other boy fell silent. "Kamijou Kyousuke," Kyousuke added. "Ah," the spiky-haired boy continued, "Looks like we have the same surname, I guess?" Both Kyousuke and Sayaka were puzzled with that statement. "I'm Kamijou too. Kamijou Touma." He then offered his hand to the other Kamijou, proposing a gesture of introduction. Sayaka lowered her head a bit. Then, a small chuckle was heard. "Of course... the world is small after all." Her chuckle turned into a full-on laugh. "Seriously! It feels so stupid to think there'd be only one Kamijou in the world!" She continued laughing, until stopping for a breather. "... That 'Kamijou' is kind of cool, eh." Sayaka looked at the ceiling. "He rescued Kyousuke from that and all he cares is that already ruined debit card of his..." she muttered to herself, while chuckling a bit. EOF __________________ I like to run portable on my dude, so I ran while running runs in my portably portable, dude-like dude. --- This line over here is a placeholder. ----

2011-06-09, 07:10	Link #201
Jimmy C Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2007	But the Incubators are responsible for and dealing with that problem themselves and XCOM still can't detect them either.

2011-06-09, 11:34	Link #203
Jimmy C Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2007	Major roadblock with your idea. If you remember your XCOM, the soliders live on base, away from any families they might have. They might not even be in the same country!

2011-06-09, 14:08	Link #205
Jimmy C Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2007	Maniacs or not, XCOM uses the toughest, most dangerous soliders in modern militaries, even then 50-75% of them die on a typical mission. I don't know if Singapore's standards are that good.

2011-06-09, 23:17	Link #207
Jimmy C Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2007	XCOM doesn't need consultants like that. As much as I like your idea and really hope you can succeed, I wish I could help you more.

2011-07-03, 20:15	Link #210
Hagoshod Banned Join Date: Feb 2011	http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6815052/...dia_of_Witches This is totally not referring to what you think it's referring to.

2011-07-04, 03:41	Link #211
rantuyetmai ↓ Crazy in love with her Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Europe Age: 34	Has anyone read Lestaki's "Puella Magi Homura Magica"? This story took place after Madoka's transcend and Sayaka's death, in the new world our remaining girls have to fight against demons. The romance aspect will focus on Homura and Kyouko's relationship. The fic is set in-universe, no OC (at least not yet), as a believable continuation of the anime. Characterization-wise it's the best in MadoMagi section at the moment IMHO, even Junko was portrayed perfectly. Lestaki is quite famous for building the characters through the interaction they have with each other, as opposed to using a narration or thought, so the readers can feel the characters themselves without being spoon-fed. Hopefully someone here can enjoy it as much as I do

2011-07-08, 15:34	Link #212
Hagoshod Banned Join Date: Feb 2011	http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7159321/1/Acceleration Spoiler: Inori bravely entered a dark alleyway. Her mystical senses told her a great evil was lurking ahead, and she was wearing her bright yellow Magical Girl costume for the occasion. The silky dress seemed to emit a soft light of its own in the dim passageway. Inori stopped when she reached an unexpected sight. Two other girls were leaning against opposite walls in a small clearing. They appeared to be a few years older than their guest, probably in late high school. They were both dressed in their own Magical Girl uniforms, albeit much darker in color. Their dresses were also shorter, slimmer, and generally much more sensual in nature than Inori's rather elegant attire. The one dressed in black with pink trim grinned toward Inori before speaking first. "Hey Yui, this one's pretty cute." Yui, clad in black with blue trim, nodded in agreement. "Yeah. I hope she turns out to be worthwhile, Chikane." Chikane left the wall she had been leaning against so she could address the arriving Magical Girl. "What's your name, sweetie?" Inori was looking from side to side in the alley, apparently uncertain about something. She responded with slight hesitation. "Inori..." Chikane nodded and cast a warm smile before she continued. "Nice to meet you, Inori. What are you doing here?" Inori responded in an increasingly puzzled tone. "I'm... confused. I sensed a powerful Witch in this direction, but..." Chikane shook her head as she retained the same cheerful tone. "Nope. No Witches here. We would have taken them out way before you if there were." Her homely nature disappeared and her smirk became much more devious before she continued. "Ohhh, you must have detected all the grief WE'VE been causing." Inori found herself taking a small step back in lingering fear. She blinked in surprise before speaking. "Who are you?" Chikane turned her head to acknowledge Yui before her eyes returned to Inori. "We're Magical Girls just like you. Together, we like to call ourselves the Three Midwives." Inori appeared as confused as ever as she thought out loud. "Three Midwives? But there's only two of you..." Just as Inori took another step back, a pair of slender arms emerged from the shadows behind her. She had backed into yet another girl who was clad in the same style of clothes as the first two strangers, now colored in black with yellow trim. The hostile Magical Girl used her superior strength to wrap her arms firmly around the smaller target's shoulders and waist. Yui seemed to growl in annoyance before she spoke from her wall. "You're late, Reimi." Reimi giggled over Inori's shoulder as she winked and replied. "You guys know how I love making entrances." Inori had seen enough. She pushed herself forward and tried to squirm out of her restraints. It was all a futile effort, however, and she frantically shook her head as she shouted. "Stop it! We're supposed to be on the same side!" Chikane shook her head in disagreement and casually replied. "There's no rules that say that. Magical Girls are just supposed to gather Grief Seeds through any means necessary." Yui now spoke in support of her teammate. "We don't like hunting Witches, though. It's too dangerous. We prefer to take a more direct approach, and Kyubey seems to be proud of us all the same." Chikane walked further toward Inori. Once she was close enough, she reached to a braid on the captured girl's right side. She pulled a tiny ornament from her hair, which soon changed to its native form: a small, egg-shaped decoration that sat on a flat base in the palm of her hand. The object was a glowing yellow jewel surrounded by a golden metal grid. Chikane poked at it a few times in the same way a jeweler would inspect his fine work. When she was finished, she spoke with a satisfied smile. "Your Soul Gem is adorable. It matches your outfit really well." She then squinted as she studied the tiny sculpture that adorned the top of the egg. "Your symbol has... horns, or ears, or something on it. Did your wish have something to do with animals?" Inori's fear had increased due to Chikane's actions. She knew her life was now in another Magical Girl's hands, but Reimi's grip firmly prevented her from doing anything about it. Her only option was to play along, and she explained the origin of her miraculous powers in the calmest voice she could manage. "I want to be a vet, and my friend's dog was sick, so I wished for the power to help him get better." Chikane snickered in disbelief. "That's all? Sheesh, you got ripped off big time. I hope your Grief Seed has a decent payoff, though." This statement clearly perplexed Inori. She didn't know how to respond. "I... don't have a Grief Seed. Only Witches have those." Yui instantly knew what Inori's words meant. She replied in half-sarcastic pity. "Aww, you're one of the ones Kyubey didn't explain all of the rules to. No wonder you made such a dumb wish." Reimi had reached the same conclusion, and she spoke playfully into Inori's ear. "Haven't you ever wondered why you're supposed to keep collecting Grief Seeds? You've been using them to absorb the emotional energy that's always building in your Soul Gem. If you didn't do that, your soul would be in too much turmoil for the shell to contain it. That's how Witches are born." Inori gasped in horror. She didn't know what to believe, but escaping her captors was now her top priority. She began thrashing about in Reimi's arms as she summoned her signature weapon: a short, hallowed out white wand fit with a mouthpiece and several finger holes. Its wielder struggled to point the device toward Chikane as she shouted. "You... you're lying!" Chikane only shrugged. "See for yourself, then." The older girl then took to the ground to begin some new procedure, kneeling on the paved walkway and carefully placing the Soul Gem in front of her. Reimi covered for her by grabbing Inori's weapon with her closer arm as she taunted her prey. "Heh. A flute? How do you even kill Witches with this thing? Playing out of tune?" Inori desperately tried to regain the weapon as she growled through her teeth. "Let go of that!" Reimi smirked as she managed to stay in a game of tug-of-war over the wand. At the same time, Yui moved to a new position a few feet beside Chikane and summoned her own weapon. It was a large staff with a diamond-shaped point, which quickly popped open to reveal a single gun barrel built within. Yui carefully aimed the business end toward Inori's Soul Gem. With Yui in place, Chikane encircled her hands around the Gem in the same way one would seek warmth from a small fire. When a distinct purple aura began pulsating from her fingertips, Inori suddenly writhed in agony and involuntarily allowed her instrument to clatter to the ground. When the trapped Magical Girl regained her composure, she was still wincing in pain and spoke weakly. "I... I don't understand. What are you trying to do?" Reimi rolled her eyes, finding her opponent to be a bit slow on the uptake. "You're kind of a ditz, you know that?" She shifted her elbow so Inori's head turned toward her kneeling teammate. "Let me spell it out for you. Chikane is using an incantation to dirty up your Soul Gem. Once she's given it a nice dose of black magic, it'll crack open and you'll come out as your Witch self." She then directed Inori toward the remaining Magical Girl. "Yui, our sharpshooter over there, is going to put you out of your misery the second that happens. We get our Grief Seed, Kyubey gets his energy for entropy or whatever, and you get to become your adult form without having to hurt anyone. It's a pretty efficient system." Inori was terrified by this revelation. She put up her most frantic struggle yet as she screamed in objection. "Stop it! I don't want to be a Witch!" Chikane groaned to herself and temporarily halted her efforts to complain. "Ugh. Will you tell her to stuff a sock in it, Reimi? I can't concentrate on incubating her when she's whining like that." Reimi cupped her hand over Inori's mouth accordingly, muzzling her resistance and allowing Chikane to return to her despicable task. Inori became somewhat calmer as she communicated in muffled whimpers, adding in a sharp yelp each time Chikane bombarded her Soul Gem with another concentrated wave of darkness. Her captor found the display too pathetic to watch when her eyes began to fill with frightful tears. Reimi spoke quietly to her prisoner after sighing in defeat. "Promise not to yell anymore?" Inori nodded obediently before Reimi removed her hand. The older girl then smirked as she defended her own unsavory actions. "You're going to turn into a bad girl sooner or later, Inori. Even if you keep your Soul Gem clean and never transform into a monster, you'll still grow up to be someone like us. You'll be relying on the suffering of other Magical Girls in one way or another to cling to your own humanity. I doubt a sweetheart like you really wants either of those, so you should be glad we're helping you get through the rough part." Inori closed her eyes and hung her head as far the crook of Reimi's arm would allow. After fighting back a flood of tears, she sadly replied. "There... there has to be a better way..." Reimi's response was delivered in the usual cynical matter, void of any sympathy toward Inori's predicament. "Nope. We were all screwed the moment we made contracts with Kyubey, and now there's no going back." Yui raised her voice from across the alleyway in agreement with Reimi. "It's nothing personal, cutie. You know, survival of the fittest and all that stuff." Before she had a chance to speak again, Inori suddenly threw her head back and let out a deafening scream. Her Soul Gem began throbbing with dark energy waves that filled the narrow space between Chikane's hands, and her Magical Girl outfit and weapon both disappeared in a flash of yellow light. She had reverted back to her civilian form, and her new appearance caused Reimi to blink a few times in mild surprise. "Hmm... I don't recognize your school uniform. Your district must be pretty far away." The hostage taker's expression then changed to evil delight before she spoke again. "Oh well. They'll just have to get used to not having their precious little guardian around anymore." Yui now donned a wicked smirk of her own. She sounded anxious as her eyes stared intently at the Soul Gem. "I can't wait to see what your Witch form looks like, Inori." While her enemies basked in delight, Inori became nearly lifeless in Reimi's arms. She barely had the energy to speak between sobbing breaths. "Pl-... please... d-... don't do it..." Reimi shook her head at Inori's pleas and only offered some more taunting words. "Hey, don't worry so much. Yui will blow your brains out on her first shot. You won't be a Witch for too long." Chikane finally released Inori's Soul Gem from the cage formed by her hands when she started to hear the sound of glass softly cracking. The once yellow jewel was now totally black, with negative energy boiling inside as its restraints slowly gave way. She grinned and announced the good news to her teammates. "Here we go, guys! She's about to hatch!" Seconds after saying this, the Soul Gem exploded into an enormous pillar of darkness. At the same moment, Inori closed her eyes for the final time and became like a rag doll in Reimi's grasp. Her youthful face was forever frozen in a look of troubled sleep. As the black cloud expanded from its point of origin, it began altering the world around it. The walls of the alleyway were pushed outward and became the stained glass windows of a hectic cathedral. In the center of this holy place, at the exact spot where Inori's Soul Gem had been destroyed, arose a being resembling an angelic statue. The creature's wings began to open, revealing her beautiful yet sorrowful face. It was at this first opportune moment that Yui took her shot. The Witch's head burst into marble rubble before she even got a chance to open her eyes. Her remains quickly followed suit, as the impact sent cracks splintering through her entire stone body. She had been struck by a single magical round with perfect accuracy, causing her Grief Seed to appear and fall to her crumbling feet. Her dimension collapsed on itself almost as rapidly as it had unfolded. As soon as the dust settled, the trio of Magical Girls were back in the alley as if nothing had happened. That is, nothing aside from the dead body Reimi was now placing on the ground. None of the girls ever stopped to acknowledge the absurdity of what they had just witnessed. Instead, Chikane casually stepped forward before crouching on one knee at the spot the Grief Seed had landed. Up close, the object appeared as a tiny black sphere adorned by a sharp pin on one side and the same symbol that had sat on Inori's Soul Gem on the other. She lifted it into her hand and began rolling it through her fingers as she inspected it. After a few moments in deliberation, she shook her head and mumbled to her teammates. "For such a rambunctious little thing, her Grief Seed is pretty crappy. Split between all of us, I doubt we'll get more than a couple of battles out of her." Yui willed her weapon to disappear from her hands before she sighed in disappointment and stretched her arms. "Do you think we teased her enough? You're the one who said her emotional state makes a big difference." Chikane scratched her chin with her opposite hand before she shook her head. "I don't think that's it. You guys did great with that. I guess she was just a weak one." Reimi spoke next after coming to terms with her own discouragement. "Did you see the Runes for her name?" Chikane shrugged when she replied. She seemed to be disinterested in the matter. "Yui's getting really good at this, so I only had a chance to read the first half. 'Celes' something or other." Reimi moved to her next and probably more significant question after turning to Inori's lifeless form. "Should we hide the body?" Chikane's response came swiftly as she stored the new Grief Seed in her dress. She had thought the issue over well beforehand. "Let the cops find it. Her family should at least be able to pay their last respects. Besides, we used magic to kill her, so it's not like they'll have any evidence to trace us." The other two members of the team were quick to agree with this strategy, and the trio subsequently abandoned their victim in the alley. They joked among themselves and raised each other's spirits in anticipation of the next trap they would set as they walked away. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Note: I believe I have successfully invented the three most sadistic Puella Magi Madoka Magica characters in all of Puella Magi Madoka Magica history. Yep. Last edited by Hagoshod; 2011-07-10 at 00:08.

2011-08-08, 10:41	Link #213
Ace Of Scarabs Mechanoid Pilot Join Date: Jun 2011 Location: In a box of scraps Age: 37	Spoiler for Old Spice Parody: Hello, girls! Look at yourself, now back to me. Look at yourself, now back to me. Sadly, you aren't a Goddess. But, if you make a contract with Kyubey, you can at least become a Magical Girl. Look down, now up! Where are you? I'm in Heaven, looking over you all. Look at your hand! Now back at me - I have it! It's that delicious cake you'll wish for just so you can become a Magical Girl. Look again! The cake is now a Soul Gem. Anything is possible if you'll fight for the fate of the universe. I'm on an Incubator. I got bored while watching Megatron and Grover parody the Old Spice commercial. Originally posted on the TV Tropes Madoka thread. __________________ It's not the 'mech that makes the man, it's the MAN that makes a name for his 'mech.

2011-08-08, 11:40	Link #214
Zero Hurricane I'm here for the reason.. Join Date: Jul 2011 Location: Surabaya, East Java, Indonesia Age: 31	Hey guys! Check my fanfic here: The Chronicles of Magic Knights Spoiler for Synopsis: One year after the anime, Homura can live her life in peace. However, she had the strange dream about the new power emerges, just like Madoka dreaming about her fighting with Walpurgisnacht. Instead, she saw a two siblings fight each other. One with shor hair and the other with long hair. If the anime tells about Homura and Madoka, then in this fanfic about sisterhood relationship. This story I create inspired by Devil May Cry series. Well, the story still in development. Hope you guys enjoy it __________________ "Use of deadly force is authorized"

2011-08-11, 01:20	Link #215
Triple_R Senior Member Author Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Newfoundland, Canada Age: 42	I just put up a new fanfic titled Puella Magi Madoka Magica, March to War. It's based on the premise of "What could happen if another teenage girl made a massive world-altering wish like Madoka did?" That, plus as the title suggests, it involves serious military conflict (later on). Anyway, I'd love to know what people think of it. Sayaka will be a very important character in this fanfic, by the way. __________________

2011-08-24, 03:53	Link #218
sa547 Senior Member Author Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: Philippines Age: 47	Uploaded chapter 4 several days ago (yep, that's what the sig says now; working on the next chapter): http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6979524/4/ __________________

2011-08-31, 04:42	Link #220
MinuSeveN Lurker with free time Join Date: Mar 2011 Location: Portugal Age: 31	^Transformer's quotes? Personally, I think it'd be cool but... kinda depends on the quotes... __________________