Fan Fiction-Now and Then, Here and There:Today's Yesterday

[tkdtiger]

Here's a fan fic I'm working on...anyways it's just a rough draft and I plan to write more. Some areas I think could use some polishing up.

Now and Then, Here and There: Today is Yesterday
Based on a anime directed by Akitaro Daichi

“Because Ten Billion Years’ Time is so fragile, so ephemeral…
It arouses such a bittersweet, almost heartbreaking fondness.”
Opening to Now and Then, Here and There

Chapter 1: Yesterday is Today

“If you could go back in time and change the mistakes of the past or if you could change an unbearable future, would you...Could you…Where would the line be drawn and would it be morally right?”

Even though days passed while Shu was imprisoned in his time only a day has passed. It seem almost like a dream, but the horrors he saw yesterday were all too real. The scars on Shu’s back were evidence that everything that happened was not a dream. His torture, the scenes of death, and Sara’s rape would never leave his memories. A tear slowly rolled down his cheek. Shu touched a scar on his shoulder. He took a deep breath and slowly exhaled. He knew he could never let his father see his scars. Shu knew that too many questions would come up and he had no logical explantion to give his father. Shu quickly went and took a hot shower. The water felt soothing to his aching body. Shu grabbed a white t-shirt, jeans, and his jean jacket, which had a tear at the shoulder where a bullet had grazed the jacket. Shu carefully looked into a mirror to make sure that there were no scars visible and then went downstairs for breakfast.

Shu’s father was sitting at the table and reading a newspaper. His sister was finishing up her noodles and his mother was preparing another dish for Shu. Shu suddenly got a sense of déjà vu. Shu quickly sat down and began to eat his ramen noodles.

“Who are Sara and Lala Ru? His sister quickly asked.

Shu looked at his sister. His face became pale and his eyes became shallower as memories began flooding in his mind. His sister had never seen his brother so withdrawn before.

As she got up she gave him a hug she whispered in his ear “It’s okay if you don’t want to tell me.”

She quickly climbed the stairs and was out of sight.

Shu looked at his father and said, “I must have been talking in my sleep again.”

His father put down his newspaper and smiled as Shu got up and hugged his mom. He quickly grabbed his Kendo equipment and ran out of the shop. In the background he could hear his mother yelling for him to slow down.

As Shu started towards his Kendo class he noticed that no one was moving. Shu stopped and stared at a woman who was walking her dog, but neither of them appeared to be moving. The dog and woman appeared to be frozen in a walk-like stance. Shu walked over to the woman and poked her on the arm. Shu quickly realized what was happening. Time had completely stopped, just like before when Shu had first met Lala Ru. Shu could not believe that it was happening again. Shu fell to his knees. Tears streamed down his face like rivers flowing down a mountain. Then something else began to happen. Shu could feel his heart skip a beat. The woman and the dog appeared to be walking backwards. It was not only the woman and the dog walking backwards, but everything was moving backwards. Soon everything began to move backwards at an extremely fast pace. Everything was moving at such a fast pace now that everything looked like a blur. Shu began to feel dizzy and passed out.

Shu awoke from passing out. To his surprise he found himself sitting on a smokestack. Shu immediately recognized the smoke stack he sat on when he first met Lala Ru. Shu looked at the other smokestacks that were surrounding him. Shu was astonished to see Lala Ru sitting on one of the smokestacks. It did not take long for Shu to realize that time had reverted back to the time when he first met Lala Ru. Yesterday was again his today. The same events were repeating themselves. Shu did not understand what was happening, but for the first time he did not care. Shu looked over at Lala Ru and smiled. To his surprise the normally stoical Lala Ru smiled back.

Shu was surprised again when Lala Ru called his name and said “Shu it’s different this time. The sunset is different.” Shu stared up at the sunset. He smiled when he realized that Lala Ru still had her memories. The sunset was different. It was bigger and more beautiful then the last time. Shu began to wonder if he had dreamt everything. His thoughts were quickly interrupted by Lala Ru.

Lala Ru looked at Shu with her deep blue eyes and softly said “It wasn’t a dream.” With those word the cars and people in the streets below ceased to move. They were frozen in time.

It was not long that the peaceful scenery of the sunset became violent as a large snake-like vehicle jumped out of nowhere. Shu quickly recognized the snake-like vehicle as being to one that attacked her the last time. Without a second thought he jumped off the smokestack towards the mechanized snake. Shu reached out his and managed to grab a hold of one of the pincher-like attachments protruding from the head. When he thought about it the machine actually looked more like a centipede then a snake, but Shu quickly shook the thought away and climbed onto the head. Shu was surprised to see a young girl in the cockpit of the machine. Not wanting to hit a woman Shu hit the controls with his shinai, which he had instinctively grabbed. In the background he could hear a voice giving out commands. Lala Ru stood next to a female soldier who wore some sort of mechanized armor. To Shu’s horror he also saw Hamdo towering over Lala Ru. Shu grit his teeth as he swore to himself that things would be different.

Shu leaped from the mechanized snake and reached out his hand towards Lala Ru. Hamdo grinned as he lifted a remote-like device and pressed a button. Time seemed to be at a stand still for a few seconds, the Shu felt a hard jerk and had a feeling he was falling through a hole. As he was falling he felt an object touch his hand. It was Lala Ru’s pendant. Some how the pendant had fallen off of Lala Ru. Shu quickly grasped the pendant. Soon the time warp was complete. Shu found himself falling toward a metallic floor. After landing Shu quickly evaded the other debris falling around him. Shu stood there in bewilderment as he watched Hamdo and three small girls with rifles escorting Lala Ru away. Shu did not understand why the soldiers were young girls. Things were definitely different, but Shu did not have time to stand around. He quickly ran towards Lala Ru and grabbed her hand.

Lala Ru and Shu began to run at a fast pace, but there were more girl soldiers in hot pursuit. Shu looked back once more and seemed to be gaining distance from their pursuers, but when he turned a corner he found himself face to face with another girl soldier. Unable to stop in time Shu found himself stumbling forward and losing the pendant in the process. The girl soldier had short brown hair and blue eyes. Her face was stern and angry as she held the rifle to Shu’s head. Her hand was visibly shaking. It was not long before Hamdo and the other girl soldiers managed to catch up. Quickly the other girl soldiers had their rifles drawn and pointed them towards Shu. Hamdo went over and kicked Shu in the face. Shu could taste the saltiness of blood in his mouth.

“Take Lala Ru to the queen!” Hamdo barked at the small girls.

The girl looked at Hamdo and spoke in a firm voice “What about the boy?”

Hamdo gave Shu another kick. Hamdo then commanded the girl to “Take him to the cell with the other prisoner.”

Shu felt himself being led across what seemed to be some sort of bridge. He looked down and could see what appeared to be large cylinders. It was not long before he found himself in a cell. The girl hit Shu with the butt of her rifle. Shu fell to his knees and hit the floor.

Shu heard the clang of the cell door close. Shu quickly sat up. Looking around he saw a girl with long blonde hair and blue eyes sitting in the corner. Shu quickly smiled when he realized it was Sara. Shu quickly called out Sara’s name, but she eyed him suspiciously. Not thinking Shu grasped Sara’s hand. In a panic Sara hit Shu with a metal bowl that was on the floor knocking Shu unconsious. Within a few minutes Shu regained consiousness and felt a cloth touching his head. Shu quickly sat up and ignored the sharp pain on his head. Sara looked away from Shu.

“How did you know my name?” Sara asked without looking up. Shu looked away from Sara as he did not want her to see the tears that began to fall from his face. Shu slowly told Sara everything that happened before time reverted backwards.

Shu explained his torture, how little children where forced to do unspeakable acts of murder and other war atrocities, and he told Sara about her rape and pregnancy and how she chose to live in this world instead of going home. Then he told her that on his world a day had passed, but for some reason time had reverted backwards and how some events where different.

Shu looked at Sara and wiped his tears and optimistically stated that “This time will be different! I won’t let you be hurt again.”

Sara looked at Shu as if he had gone insane. “How do I know you’re telling the truth? How can I believe such a story!?”

Sara took a step back as Shu began to remove his shirt. Sara was horrified to see scars lining his back like vines going up a tree. This was the first time Shu had showed anyone his scars.

“This time things will be different! I was given another chance. I won’t let anyone hurt you and this time I don’t want to see anyone die!” Shu stood up and looked at Sara. He never realized how pretty Sara was until now. “As long as we have life then good things can happen. Sara I promise that we’ll both get out of this place!” Sara let out a slight smile.

[tkdtiger]

Chapter 2: Indominable Spirit

“Pandora opened the forbidden box. She watched in horror as all the evils of the world flew out into the world. Quickly she went and closed the box, but all that remained was hope.”

Meanwhile Hamdo was taking Lala Ru to another part of the ship. Lala Ru passed what appeared to be a nursery full of small babies. In another room they passed she could see young girls and women being injected with a needle and tested with other machines. In another room she saw young boys being stripped of their clothes. The boys appeared to be preteens of eleven to thirteen. Lala Ru recognized one of the boys as Nabuca. She turned away when he looked up at her. Lala Ru whispered Shu’s name under her breath. It was not long before Hamdo led her into a room.
The room had a single bed draped with pink silk. The room had various flowers and plants. Sitting on the bed was a woman in military clothing. Lala Ru immediately recognized her as Abelia, who was one of Hamdo’s commanders before time reverted back.

Hamdo bowed as he spoke “Queen Abelia I have Lala Ru, but the pendant wasn’t on her.”

Abelia walked over to Lala Ru and back slapped her. Lala Ru fell to the floor. Abelia motioned for Hamdo to leave the room. Hamdo bowed and quietly left the room. Lala Ru stood up and kept her usual composure. Abelia looked at Lala Ru with a distasteful expression of angst. Abelia grabbed Lala Ru.

“Where’s the pendant!” Abelia asked as she slapped Lala Ru on the cheek. Lala Ru stared at Abelia. Tears were clearly falling from Abelia’s eyes.

“All I wanted was a better world!” Abelia proclaimed. Abelia stood back onto her feet trying to regain her composure, but she was clearly agitated.

“Do you enjoy hitting small children?” Lala Ru asked as she walked towards Abelia. Abelia stared at Lala Ru in disgust.

“Don’t condescend me girl. You don’t know what I went through to get to the top! You’re not human! How could you ever know how I feel!” Abelia screamed as she again slapped Lala Ru in the face. Lala Ru lowered her head.

“Hamdo! Take Lala Ru to her quarters and bring the boy in here for questioning!”Abelia screamed as she went back to the bed at sat down.

Within a few minutes Abelia could hear Lala Ru being escorted to her room.

“Have I always been a monster?” whispered Abelia to herself.

Within a few minutes Abelia could hear foot steps of Hamdo and the boy. She sat up and regained her composure.

“Queen Abelia, Here’s the boy as that was with Lala Ru.” Hamdo said as he forced Shu through the door. Abelia waved for Hamdo to leave the room. Hamdo quietly left the room. Shu was surprised to see Abelia as the queen of Helywood.

“I’ll ask you the same thing I asked Lala Ru. Where’s the pendant.”

Shu looked Abelia in the eyes as he calmly stated “I don’t know.”

Abelia went over and punched Shu in the face. Shu felt blood gush from his mouth as a tooth was knocked loose.

“Why? Why are you doing this?” Shu asked as he received another blow. Shu looked up and saw tears flowing from Abelia’s face.

“If it hurts you to hit me why do you do it then? A bad person doesn’t cry.” Shu asked. Expecting to be hit Shu winced, but nothing came. When he looked he saw that Abelia had fallen to her knees and crying.

“Hamdo!, Take the boy to be interrogated and use what ever means to get that pendant!” Hamdo quickly came in and grabbed Shu.

“Hamdo, don’t kill him.” Abelia ordered Hamdo as he and Shu were going out the door.

Shu had reached Abelia’s quarters from the opposite direction then from where Lala Ru had been escorted, but as he was being sent to the interrogation room Shu’s eyes widened with horror as he saw the same scenes of horror that Lala Ru had seen previously. In one room he clearly saw what appeard to be scientists and doctors stripping young boys naked. As they kept walking he would see young who appeared to be getting some sort of shot. It wasn’t long before he saw the nursery. Shu could not look anymore and quickly turned his head.

“What are those labs for?” Shu asked as they finally came to a stop at a door.

Hamdo smiled a crooked smile as he spoke “You’ll find out eventually.”

Hamdo forced Shu into the room. The room was small and dark. A single chair was in the middle of the room and a table with various devices was against the wall. There was a man in a white apron in the room.

“It must be the man that does the torture.” Shu thought to himself.

Shu was forced into the chair and bound by metal chains. The chains were clearly meant to allow an electric current through as there were wires attached to them. Hamdo’s eyes began to bulge and his smile grew large as the interrogations started.
Hamdo asked the same question over and over again and no matter how many times Shu stated that he lost the pendant he always received a shock. Soon the shocks became beatings and cuts. He could even feel needles being poked through his fingernails. Seconds felt like minutes, minutes felt like hours, and hours felt like days to Shu as he endured painful torture for an untold amount of time. Shu could hear Hamdo laughing.

“Having fun?” Shu cockily asked. Shu felt a blunt object hit him on his head and everything went dark. Hamdo looked down at the unconscious Shu as he spoke in to his walkie-talke.

“The boy lost consciousness. Do you want me to continue with the interrogation tomorrow?”

There was a garbled reply through the walkie-talkie by Abelia. “No, take him back to his cell. I don’t think he knows where the pendant is.”

Shu managed to regain some of his consciousness as he was forced to get on his feet by two girl guards. It felt like forever as he was finally taken to his cell. One of the girls hit him with the butt of her rifle, which caused Shu to fall hard in his cell. Everything was becoming hazy again. She saw Sara’s blue eyes as he felt her wiping the mixture of blood and sweat. He never realized how beautiful Sara’s eyes were until then.

“Sara…” Shu whispered as he finally collapsed.

[tkdtiger]

Chapter 2 is finally completed and I'll be working on chapter 3 soon. I hope if anyone is reading this that they're enjoying it. I do enjoy working on fanfiction for fun, but I enjoy writting as a whole. Currently I'm working on a novel so you'll have to forgive me that it's not as clean and polished.

[blitz1/2]

This seems good but I didn't catch what anime is it based on.

[tkdtiger]

Now and Then, Here and There is an anime produced by Akitaro Daichi
Akitaro Daichi is known for his more happy animes, but this one was known for it's dark undertones. Its about this kid who's thrust into the future where (male) children are forced to fight a war. Female children it seems are forced to sadly be forced to become mothers. It's well written, but it does leave you with questions at the end since there are only 13 episodes.

[tkdtiger]

Chapter 3: The Great Awakening

“When I’ve fallen on my knees and tears are falling from my eyes why does no one hear my cries?”

Shu awoke from his sleep. His body ached all over. Clutched in his hand was Sara’s bandana, which she had used to wipe his sweat as he lay sleeping. He looked around and noticed that Sara was gone. Tears swelled up in his eyes. Shu heard foot steps in the distance. It was three armed girl guards.

“Where’s Sara!” Shu shouted at the top of his lungs. The oldest girl walked over to the cell. She had blonde hair and blue eyes like Sara’s. Shu noticed that the girl was pregnant.

“She’s in training to become a soldier of Helywood.” Said the girl. Shu looked at the girl and saw a tear roll from her eyes.

“What’s your names?” Shu asked the three soldiers.

The oldest soldier spoke for the other girls as she said “My names Kame, the youngest Suzie, and the other one is Sarang.”

Kame began to open the cage. The girl was crying even more. “I’m sorry.” She whispered to Shu.

Shu soon found himself being led out of the cell and towards the same direction as the Abilia’s quarters, but when the passed the door that led to Abelia’s quarters Shu’s heart skipped a beat. The images of young preteens being stripped naked was fresh in his mind. Shu tried to struggle, but found himself being hit with the butt of a gun. Kame then forced Shu into the lab.

Shu looked around and could see the empty expressions on the other’s face. The doctors seemed to ignore a boy’s cry for help.

“Strip him down. Then check if he’s able to procreate.” One of the doctors stated.
Shu then felt various hands forcibly taking off his clothes. Shu felt helpless to do anything. Tears rolled down his cheek, but like the boy who screamed for help he got nothing in return. Shu soon felt himself being touched. He could hear the doctors stating that they needed more samples. More tears fell from his eyes, but again no one seemed to notice.

“Why?” Shu quietly asked himself. After the ordeal one of the doctors came and put his hand on Shu’s shoulder. Shu looked up unable to comprehend what just happened. The doctor fell to his knees and hugged Shu.

“I’m sorry,” the doctor whispered in Shu’s ear. The doctor stood up and motioned for Kame to take Shu away.

Kame took Shu to another cell located in another part of the fortress. Shu soon found himself around other male prisoners. Shu curled himself into a ball. The feeling of dirtiness would not leave him. Shu lifted his head and looked around. Most of the male prisoners were around his age.

Looking around Shu saw three familiar faces. A part of Shu was relieved when he recognized Nabuca, Boo, and Tabool even though he knew that in this time that they have not yet met.

“Things are different.” Shu whispered to himself.

Shu looked put his head on his knees, but then felt a hand on his shoulder. Shu quickly flinched and jumped to his feet ready to attack, but then he realized it was Nabuca. Nabuca looked at Shu and smiled. This was the first time he saw Nabuca smiling.

Nabuca greeted Shu and introduced him to his friends. “I’m Nabuca, the youngest one is Boo, and the other guy is Tabool.”

Shu looked in Nabuca’s eyes and could see the same sadness that he felt. Shu grasped Nabuca’s hand and smiled.

Shu smiled as he proclaimed,“I’m Shuzo Matsutani, but you can call me Shu.”
Meanwhile in a millitary barracks Sara found herself in a room with many bunkbeds. Sara had not slept in a bed in what felt like days. Sara looked around and saw many of the girls were in military uniforms. Some of the girls were visably pregnant. All the girls seemed to carry a gun. One of the girls walked over to Sara and extended her hand.

“I’m Kame.” Said the girl as she grasped Sara’s hand.

Sara looked at the girl confused. The girl had short blonde hair and blue eyes. She wore a green vest with a matching green skirt. Sara noticed a slight bulge on her stomach and realized that the girl was pregnant.

Sara replied, “I’m Sara.”

Two other girls walked over to Sara. The youngest girl looked to be about eight and she introduced here self as Suzie. Suzie had red hair and green eyes. Sara kindly smiled at the girl.

“I’m Sarang and I don’t shake hands.” The other girl bluntly replied.

Sara noticed that the girl was very pregnant and it appeared that she could give birth at any time. A tear fell from her eye.

“You have to forgive her. We’ve all been through a lot.” Kame replied with a sad expression on her face. Sara thoughts wandered off as she suddenly thought of Shu.

“What do they do with your babies after they’re born?” Sara asked.

Sarang eyes flashed into anger as she looked at Sara.

“This isn’t my baby! Don’t ever call this thing in me mine! I never asked for this!” Sarang angrily replied.

Kame went over and hugged Sarang. “You’ll have to forgive Sarang. Even though she she’s grown to hate her child I’ve grown to love mine. I mean the child didn’t have a say on how it would be born, but that’s how things are. There has to be sacrifices in order to see that Queen Abelia’s dream come true.” Kame replied as she continued to hug Sarang.

“How can you just accept things as how they are? This is wrong! Are you telling me you’re going to tell little Suzie to just accept it, because that’s how things are!” Sara replied.

Kame got up and walked over and slapped Sara. Sara looked at Kame in surprise. Kame who seemed so calm and cool headed had lost her temper. Sara could see the look of anguish in her eyes. All of a sudden there was a voice on the intercom.

“This is Hamdo and by the order of Queen Abelia everyone is to cease daily duties and is to search for a blue pendant. I repeat. Everyone is to cease daily activities and concentrate on searching for a blue pendant. The one who finds the pendant and returns it to me will be greatly rewarded. Thank you that is all.” Said Hamdo.
Sara watched as everyone began searching. They searched through vents, under beds, and in various other areas, but after hours of search the pendant still was not found. Soon everyone was told to go to sleep and continue the search tomorrow. Sara laid awake in her bunk. She thought of Shu and remembered his promise that everything would be okay in the end. She also remembered Shu’s story, especially about her becoming pregnant from being raped. Fear entered her heart. She didn’t want to end up like Kame or Sarang. Tears fell from her eyes. She buried her head in her pillow.

“Will I become like them?” She said to herself as she slowly fell asleep.

Sara began to dream. She dreamt of Shu. In the dream Shu was walking into the sun set like some hero from a movie. Shu stops and turns around. Sara can see his smile and can see his tears. Sara is soon awakened by Kame’s hand.

Kame spoke “It’s time to get up. I was ordered to take you to the lab today.” Tears were running down her face. Fear gripped Sara like hands wrapped around her throat.

“Come on. I was told to use force if I had to. Don’t make this any harder then it has to be.” Kame coldly replied.

Sara did as she was told. As they began to walk towards the lab Kame stopped.
Kame looked away as she said, “Tell the boy you were imprisoned with, when you see him again that I’m sorry about the other day and please don’t hate me.”
Sara looked at Kame with a puzzled and fearful expression. “What happened to Shu? Why does she apologize to me?”

It was not long before they walked by a room were they saw preteen boys around Shu’s age being stripped. Sara paused and stared in horror.

“Is this what you did to Shu!” Sara yelled at Kame.

Kame stared at Sara. “The doctors told me it’s necessary for invitro fertilisation. I was told that invitro fertilization was more reliable and cleaner, but no matter how hard I try to forget, the images remain. You’re right Sara. This shouldn’t be acceptable, but it’s the only way we’ll survive. Please don’t hate your future child. It deserves to be loved.”

They continued walking until they reached the other lab. Sara felt herself being pushed through the door. Sara felt one of the doctors grab her by the arm. Sara tried to run, but felt a blunt object hit her on the head. The next thing she knew she was bound onto some sort of medical chair. Without realizing it she called out Shu’s name. One of the doctors walked over Sara.

“I was told your name is Sara. Your data sheet says that you were brought to Helywood and imprisoned with a boy. I hope you both can forgive me then.” The doctor kindly told Sara. Sara soon passed out and awoke in her bunk. Sara clenched her stomach with her hand.

“Was it a dream?” she asked herself.

[tkdtiger]

Well I just finished chapter 3 I hope everyone is enjoying it. I already wrote an ending and I will make it a happy one, but since the Anime was for the most part dark in tone I tried to maintain that same tone. My friend told me he think mine is probably a bit more disturbing then the original. I plan to have chapter 4 posted by tomorrow. I'm not sure how long the story will be, but it shouldn't be super long...haha : P

[tkdtiger]

Chapter 4: Perpetual Dreams

“When I am cut do I not bleed? When I am hurt why can you not see all the pains I have endured for the sake that you will not suffer too?”

Abelia stared out a large window. The sunset looked beautiful as the giant red sun went down beneath the desert dunes. It was because of the red sun that the planet had very little water. The world was thrown into war and chaos. Hamdo came into the room and placed his hand on Abelia’s shoulder.

“Is anything wrong my queen?” he whispered in her ear.

Abelia asked herself the same question. Ever since she met Shu and Lala Ru she had become more hesitant towards her ultimate goal.

“Why did you let the boy live?” Hamdo softly asked.

Abelia pretended she did not hear the question. Her thoughts returned of Shu.
“Why if it hurts to see them like this do I let it happen?” she asked Hamdo as he embraced her in a kiss.

“There has to be sacrifices made to reach our ultimate goal my queen. You should know this better then anyone. I found you alone and distraught wandering the streets. You were abused and violated by men and it was I who saved you.” Hamdo replied.

Abelia clenched her fist. Her memories of wandering the streets and being forced into slavery was not a good one. Her only good memories was of Hamdo, but she could not forget what Shu had told her. She could not forget the pain she saw in his face. She could not forget that despite all the pain she inflicted on Shu he still implied she was a good person.

“Have I become a monster?” Abelia asked herself.

Abelia’s goal had always been the concquest of the planet inorder to create peace. She wanted to create a world ruled by women. A world where no woman would ever be violated by a man’s hand again. She even thought she had found the perfect method to fill in holes in her army. Hamdo was the one who had suggested invitro fertilisation. He claimed it was more reliable and faster. Abelia thought it was funny how something that was meant to help infertile couples have a baby was now used to help her maintain an army.

“Have I become a monster?” she asked herself once more.

All of a sudden Abelia could hear her phone ring. Abelia pushed Hamdo out of her way and grabbed the reciever.

“This is Abelia. What’s the problem?” she quickly said.

“An enemy craft was spotted.” The voice on the other end stated.

Abelia took a deep breath. “Deploy all troops.” she she screamed into the phone.

“And the pregnant girls? Did you want me to deploy them too?” the voice asked.
Abelia paused for a moment. She could not decide.

“It’s a necessity my queen.” Hamdo whispered into Abelia’s ear.

Abelia glanced out the window. “Deploy all troops to the battle field.” She wearily stated in the reciever.

Meanwhile Sara and the other girls were still looking for the pendant. It was not long thought before a siren sounded. All the girls suddenly stopped their search.

“This is Hamdo speaking. An enemy craft had been spotted. This is not a drill. All soldiers of Helywood are expected out on the field for battle. I repeat this is not a drill.” Hamdo stated in the intercom.

Sara watched as all the girls suddenly started to run in every direction. Many othem grabbed whatever gun they could find. Sara felt a hand on her shoulder. She turned around to see Kame holding two rifles. Kame handed one of the rifles to Sara. Sara stared at the rifle in disgust. She never used a gun before.

“You pull back on that piece and put the bullet in there. Then you put the piece back in place to secure the bullet. That little protrusion on the side is the safety. Make sure the safety’s off when you’re shooting the gun.” Kame coldly stated.

Soon Sara found herself out side. It was not long before she could see the enemy soldiers in the distance. It was not long after seeing the enemy that bullets began to fly by. To her horror she saw many of the younger girls shot dead on the spot. She saw Kame able to kill some of the incoming soldiers. All of a sudden Sara was pushed to the side. To her horror she realized that a small girl had just taken a bullet for her.
Sara quickly ran over to the girl with tears in her eyes. She placed her hand over the bullet wound in hopes that the bleeding would stop. It was not long before the small girl stopped breathing. The small girl had died. Sara let out a loud scream.

Kame along with Suzie, and Sarang grabbed Sara and hid behind a large rock.

“What do you think you’re doing out there? It’s either shoot or be shot! There is nothing else!” Sarang screamed.

Kame used a mirror so she could see the battle. Her eyes widened with horror. Curious to see what Kame had seen Sara poked her head around the corner of the rock. To her astonishment she saw a huge vehicle that resembled a cross between a large tank and a large fortress. She turned her head away when the vehicle fired a round into a group of young soldiers. Sara’s thoughts moved to Shu and his promise that they would get out of here.

“What is this place?” Sara asked herself.

Meanwhile Abelia was in her quarters looking at the battle taking place from her window. A young girl soldier ran into Abelia’s quarters and gave a salute.

“We’re receiving heavy casualties on the front lines. At this rate we’ll lose this battle.” The young soldier stated.

Hamdo who was standing beside Abelia smiled.

“We can use the missile my queen.” Hamdo whispered in Abelia’s ear.

Abelia looked up at the girl. Abelia’s eyes seemed to burn with a new fire.
“Launch the missile!” Abelia commanded.

The girl soldier looked at Abelia in astonishment.

“But that would cause heavy casualties.” Replied the girl soldier.

Abelia went over and slapped the girl.

“Don’t ever question me! If we lose this war then everything I’ve fought for is lost! Launch the missile!” commanded Abelia.

The girl saluted and walked off.

In another quarters Lala Ru was also watching the war from her window. Lala Ru placed her hand on the glass. The glass had a cold feel to it. In the distance Lala Ru saw a bright blue and white light and then heard the loud explosion of the missile. She wondered where Shu was and if he was okay. A tear flowed from her usually stoic expression.

In his cell Shu felt the ground shake and could hear the explosion of the missile. Thoughts of what Kame told him filled his head.

“She’s in training to become a soldier of Helywood.” Kame had told him.
A tear rolled from his eyes. He remembered when he was hung on a rope the bright light flying by.

“I hope she’s alright.” Shu whispered to himself.

Shu all of a sudden felt someone kick him. Shu fell over, but managed to get to his feet. Standing infront of Shu was Tabool.

“Where is it? I heard you came in with that girl Lala Ru. If you give me the pendant then maybe everything that is happening will stop!” Tabool screamed at Shu.
“I don’t know where the pendant is.” Shu replied.

Tabool angrily punched Shu in the cheek. “You liar!” he screamed.

Two other boys came over and held on to Shu’s arms as Tabool began to hit Shu numerous times. The beating though suddenly stopped. Shu looked up and saw Nabuca standing inbetween Tabool and himself.

“What do you think you’re doing Tabool!” barked Nabuca.

Tabool stared at Nabuca in disgust. “Someone like you has no right to question me!” Tabool stated as he walked away.

Shu felt himself being thrown to the floor. Nabuca stretched out his hand and helped Shu to his feet.

“I’m sorry about that. He wasn’t always like that. There was a time when him, his sister, and I use to play together. He use to smile all the time, but now he’s grown cold and angry, especially since he found out his sister was pregnant with my child.” Nabuca softly said.

Shu looked down at the floor. He had no words to comfort their pain.
He looked around and yelled out to the crowd. “As long as we’re alive good things will happen! Has everyone lost all hope!”

The crowd looked away from him. Not one person said a word after that. Shu looked around and then sat back down. He buried his head in his knees and cried. No words of comfort came his way. Everything was quiet. There were no girl soldiers running around in a frenzied state. The missile had done its job.

“I guess the battle’s over.” Shu quietly told himself.

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Well that finished chaper 4. I'm not sure when I'll have chapter 5, but hopefully I'll have it by tomorrow night.

[Lost]

I love and hate this Anime and would like to read your fanfic. What's stopping me is the intimidating lack of paragraphs. Would you please consider using them? From the little bits here and there that I'm reading, very nicely done ~ just needs paragraphs!

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I'm trying to do that now and I'm trying to fix some of the other mistakes. : )

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I just finished editing the 1st chapter, although I mostly corrected spelling errors and sep. it into paragraphs. I'm still working on fixing the other chapters : )

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Here's chapter 5

Chapter 5: Illusions of Granduer

Do you truly know a friend by their name?
And what happens on every given day?
Have you ever wondered if a friend is truly happy?
Or just maybe. . .life is just too long to live another day.
Do you truly know a friend by the expressions on their face?
Or could there be another ace up the sleeve?
Afraid within a day the friend decides to leave.
Do you truly know a friend within the midnight hour?
Could they be crying. . .praying. . .
So their soul may be devoured?
Do you know your friend?
Do you lend your hearts desire?
Do you know your friend?
Do you know their fire and the reason that it burns?
Or do you yearn to know more to give your life for them?
For you may never know the day or the hour when the essence
of their life comes to a final end.

Abelia sat at her desk looking at the casualty report from the battle the day before. Almost half of her units were destroyed by both enemy fire and the missile she had ordered to be launch. She had won the battle, but Abelia wondered if the cost was too high. She knew she could not afford another costly battle. Staring at a map Abelia began to contemplate her next move. She knew she had to replenish the number of troops she had. Abelia looked at the map and saw a village slightly east of their current location. Abelia took a marker and drew a circle around the village. She grabbed her walkie-talkie and called for Hamdo to come to her quarters. It was not long for Hamdo to arrive.

“How may I be of service my queen?” Hamdo asked.

“I need to replenish my troops so I need you to prepare the boys for deployment to this village.” Abelia commanded as she pointed to the village she had circled on the map.

“As you wish, I’ll deploy them immediately.” Hamdo remarked as he quickly left the room.

Abelia sat back down at her desk and rested her head on the desk. She felt that everything was finally running smoothly. All she needed now was Abelia’s pendant. Abelia began to wonder if she should have the boys help in the search, but decided against it. Abelia felt that she did not need the pendant, but Hamdo assured her that the pendant had special properties that would assure her victory. Abelia began to think of all the horrific deeds that has been done in her name and she wondered if history would see her as a great leader or as a tyrant. Abelia laid her head on her desk and closed her eyes. All she ever wanted was a peaceful existence, but instead she found herself surrounded by destruction.

Shu was in his cell. Shu and the other boy prisoners were just ordered that they would be deployed to a village. Each of the boy prisoners including Shu were forced to wear some sort of collar. The collar had a red LED light that glowed when it was locked in place. Shu also realized that the only adult soldier he had seen were the nurses, doctors, Hamdo and Abelia. Shu walked over to Nabuca.

“I was just wondering why the only adults I’ve seen are in the labs?” Shu asked

Nabuca looked at Shu. “It depends. Adult males are killed if they are deemed too weak or too old. Most adult males though do maintenance on the ship, but a few of them are trained as doctors. Adult females have it the easiest. They’re used as nurses. Some of the young ones though are impregnated through invitro fertilization. Since there is no way to keep our samples you’re probably already a father.” Nabuca replied.

A tear rolled down Shu’s cheek. He could not believe what he had just learned. Nabuca handed Shu a yellow and orange uniform. Shu quietly put the uniform on. It was not long before a girl escorted all the boys outside. Once outside everyone was given some water. Nabuca, Boo, and Tabool came back with some rifles. Nabuca tried to hand Shu a rifle, but Shu declined. Shu instead grabbed a stick off the ground.

“I won’t fight, but I’ll help you dig trenches and care for the wounded.” said Shu.

“Only the girls do actually fighting. What we do is much worse.” Nabuca replied without looking at Shu.

Shu looked away, because he already knew what Nabuca had meant. The boys were not only forced to have children, but they were made to bring in new recruitments.

Shu looked Nabuca and stated, “I won’t do it! I won’t force people to do something they don’t want to do!”

“You don’t have a choice. We’re soldiers just like the girls. Can’t you see that we have to do this to survive! Once this war is over we can all go home!” Nabuca replied.

Nabuca began to tell Shu everything that happened in his life. He began to tell the story of how Tabool was once a good kid, who would smile all the time. He talked about how they all use to run through the meadow. Shu learned that it was these memories that kept Nabuca sane. Nabuca’s wish to be home is what kept him alive. Tabool walked over and grabbed Shu’s canteen and began to drink the water.

“If you’re not going to help then you’re just a waste of good water.” Tabool angrily screamed.

Tabool then grabbed Shu and held him by Shu’s shirt.

“I’ll give you back the water if you give me that pendant.” whispered Tabool.

Nabuca though pushed Tabool to the ground. Tabool got back to his feet and stared at Nabuca. It looked as if Tabool was ready to attack, but instead he walked off without a word. Nabuca picked the canteen up and handed it back to Shu.

“Don’t get the wrong idea. I’m in the same opinion as Nabuca. If you won’t help then you’re a waste of water.” Nabuca harshly replied.

Nabuca walked off towards the gathering troop formation. Boo looked up at Shu. Shu could see the confusion in Boo’s face. Boo looked away and ran after Nabuca. Shu looked at the half full canteen. He closed the canteen and attached it to his belt. Slowly Shu got up and with his stick in his hand he joined Nabuca and Boo. Shu handed the half full canteen to Boo.

“Go ahead and drink it. I won’t drink it if you all feel I didn’t earn it.” Shu replied mostly talking to Nabuca.

“Why did you come in formation if you don’t plan on helping us?” Nabuca asked.

Shu looked at Nabuca. Shu’s face was expressionless as he replied, “To stop you.”

It was not long before they all began their trek across the desert. Within a few minutes they found themselves at the outskirts of the village. In the distance Shu could barely distinguish the people, but imagined small children playing together. He imagined mothers and fathers doing their daily chores. A tear streamed down his cheek. There were various vehicles with them. One of the vehicles fired a missile at the village. The missiles hit three building. Hamdo claimed that the building was military targets, but in Shu’s heart he knew the building were really a warning that if the villagers did not surrender then he would kill them all and take the children by force. After the missiles hit they were all ordered to enter the village. As they entered the village there was a group of adults standing and waiting for them. Hamdo walked forward and ordered the adults to surrender. An old man stepped forward.

“We’ll give you water and supplies, but you cannot take our people” the old man replied

Then two of the younger men ran and attacked Hamdo. Shu watched in horror as Nabuca and Tabool shot them dead. Shu ran towards the men. In a panic stated he tried to stop the bleeding on one of them men. The blood was gushing like a geyser. Hamdo walked over to Shu and kicked him out of the way. With no remorse Hamdo placed the gun to the man’s head and pulled the trigger.

“What do you think you’re doing?” Hamdo angrily yelled at Shu.
Nabuca quickly intervened.

“Sorry sir. He’s a new recruit. I’ll make sure it doesn’t happen again.” Nabuca replied.

Shu was forced back to his feet. Nabuca ordered Boo to keep watch of him.

Boo pointed the gun at Shu. Shu could sweat forming on Boo’s head.

“Don’t try anything funny or I’ll shoot.” Boo shouted.

“Is your hands tainted by the blood of innocents too?” Shu replied to Boo.

Shu’s reply seemed to shaken Boo as he looked away. Shu looked over and saw small children being loaded into trucks. He noticed that the girls and boys were separated into different trucks. They did the same with adults. Shu saw the older adults lined up side by side to each other. They were all blind folded. Shu realized what was happening. Shu quickly got to his feet and started to run towards them in hope that he could stop it, but then he felt a sharp pain in his leg. Boo had shot him. Not wanting to look he heard the sounds of gun fire. They all were executed on the spot. On the way back to their cells Shu remained speechless. Shu went to a corner and fell asleep. He dreamt of Lala Ru and Sara. In his dream he could hear the faint cry of a small baby.

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I don't know the anime but it seems you did a good job on your chapters.

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Thanks for the feed back : ) I'm working on chapter 6 now. The anime I think is good, although I think it kind of leaves some questions in the end.

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Here's the beginning of chaper 6

Chapter 6: Elysian Fields

Oh!, the days I've seen
The things I've felt
Purity lost in a forgotten realm as I
Travel through a dark, thick, gloomy haze
When will the horror end...
The unforgiving pain in my forsaken life
I live...I die...
I stand alone, in a forgotten land...
Alone I live...alone I'll die...
Forever More...Good-bye

Sara lay in her bunk bed. The battle from a couple nights ago was still fresh in her mind. The image of the girl taking a bullet for her would not allow her to sleep. Tears streamed down Sara’s face. She stared at her hands. She tried to save the little girl, but in the end she had failed. Sara began to wonder if Shu’s word had any merit. Sara closed her eyes in an attempt to fall asleep, but then she felt something tap her shoulder. Sara opened her eyes and saw Sarang standing next to her bunk. Sara could see tears coming down Sarang’s face.

“I’m sorry about waking you, but I have a favor to ask.” Whispered Sarang.

Sara sat up and looked at Sarang. Sarang had brown eyes and black hair. Sara looked at the soon to be baby and a tear fell from her eyes as she remembered that she too was going to be a mother.

“Of course, what do you need?” Sara asked Sarang.
Sarang looked around to make sure no one was awake. It appeared that everyone was fast asleep. Sarang let out a sigh of relief. Sarang looked at Sara and smiled. It was the first time that Sara could remember seeing Sarang smile.

“I’m going to help you escape.” Sarang whispered.
Sara looked at Sarang. She could not believe what she was hearing. Sara began to wonder if this was some sort of sick joke being played on her. Sara wondered why Sarang would risk so much for someone she hardly knew. She began to think that maybe Shu was right. As long as she is still alive then maybe good things could still happen.

Sara smiled as she said, “Okay, but how are we going to escape?”
Sarang glanced over her shoulder to make sure that no one was listening.

“I have guard duty so I can help you out of Helywood, but once you’re outside I’m afraid you’re on your own. Like I said though I also have a favor, I want you to take Suzie with you.” Sarang replied.

“What about Kame and you?” Sara asked

“Kame is a delusional fool. She’s been brainwashed into believing Abelia’s dream of a world run by women. These babies we carry are a testament of how crazy Abelia is, but Kame refuses to see that. I won’t let that happen to Suzie. She’s a good girl and so are you.” Sarang replied.

“You still haven’t answered me. What about you? You can’t stay here!” Sara said.

“I’ll only be a burden, besides this child I carry is close to delivering. It’s just too risky.” Sarang replied.

Sarang quickly handed Sara a guard’s uniform and woke up Suzie. She quickly explained to Suzie that she was going to help her escape. Sara could see tears in Suzie’s eyes as Sarang told her that she was not going to be coming. Sarang gave Suzie a guard’s uniform as well. All three of the girls now wore guard’s uniform. Sarang led Sara and Suzie through various twists and turns. Every once in a while Sarang would stop and make sure no one had spotted them. It was not long before they arrived at some sort of vent. Sarang told Sara and Suzie that the vent leads outside into the desert. Sara and Suzie gave Sarang a hug as they told each other good-bye.

Sara and Suzie must have walked for hours. The sun was rising and they both could feel the heat bearing down on them. Suzie fell in the sand. The heat was too much and her small legs could not walk anymore. Sara went over and picked Suzie up on her back. Sara also began to feel exhausted, but she knew that if they stopped under the hot sun now then their chances to survival were none. After a few more hours of walking in the desert Sara’s legs buckled and she fell forward. Everything began to become hazy and dark. As she was about to finally collapse she saw two shadowy figures that appeared to be wearing some sort of suit. The suit reminded her some what of a rain suit. They wore goggles and a mask on their faces. Sara wondered if they were here to save them as she finally collapsed.

Abelia sat in her office. She had become more frustrated, because the pendant had not been found. She also grew concerned over a rumor that there may be an assassination attempt. There was a knock at her door. Abelia took a pistol from her drawer.

“Enter!” Abelia commanded.

A young girl walked into her office. She brought in a heavily pregnant girl and pointed a rifle at her. The pregnant girl’s remained expressionless. She showed no fear towards Abelia.

“What’s the meaning of this?” Abelia asked for answers.

“This girl helped a couple of prisoners escape.” The girl replied.

Abelia looked at the pregnant girl in disgust. She walked over and back handed the pregnant girl.

“What’s your name?” Abelia demanded.

The pregnant girl smiled. She showed no fear towards Abelia. This seemed to anger Abelia even more as she once again slapped the pregnant girl.

“My name’s Sarang. Tell me does it feel good to hit a pregnant girl?” Sarang replied with a smile.

This comment infuriated Abelia. Abelia pulled out her pistol and pointed it at Sarang’s head. Abelia and Sarang stared at each other. Both refused to say a word. Sarang closed her eyes. She hoped that Abelia would pull the trigger, but nothing came. Abelia lowered the pistol and walked to her desk.

“Take her to her quarters.” Abelia commanded.

“She’s a liability; shouldn’t we make an example of her?” The girl commented.

Abelia stared at Sarang and then at her unborn child.

“No, she has suffered enough. Take her to her quarters and no one is to lay a finger on her. Is that clear?” Abelia commanded.

The other girl soldier politely bowed and led Sarang back to her quarters. Sarang was confused. She did not understand why Abelia had spared her life.

“Why did you leave me cursed?” Whispered Sarang to herself.

Abelia was back on at her desk. She laid placed her pistol on the corner of the desk and laid her head down to rest. The look of Sarang’s face was still fresh in her mind. It was the look of someone who wished to die. It was the same look she had carried when Hamdo had found her in the streets. Abelia heard a knock at her door. Abelia sat up. Something did not feel right. Abelia picked up her pistol and grasped it under her desk.

“Come in!” Abelia ordered.

The door suddenly swung open. Two men wearing a bandana over their mouth opened fire at Abelia. Abelia quickly leaped under her desk. Shooting over the desk she managed to shoot one of the assassins. The other assassin quickly ran out the room. Abelia walked over to the corpse of the assassin she just killed and kicked it. She went over to her desk and pressed the button to the intercom.

“This is Abelia! There has been an attempt at my life and one of the perpetrators has escaped. All soldiers both male and female are to find him and shoot him on sight. I repeat I want this man dead. He has a tattoo of two bands on his right wrist. Find him and kill him!” Abelia ordered over the intercom.

Shu heard Abelia’s orders and saw a bunch of girl guards running around. The boys in the cell were forced to wear the same collar as when they had to capture more recruits. Shu shuddered when Abelia described the tattoo. Shu remembered Soon and how he witnessed her father being killed. Shu quickly ran to Nabuca and grabbed him.

“We can’t kill that man!” Shu hysterically screamed at Nabuca.

Nabuca looked at Shu as if Shu had finally lost his mind.

“You heard the orders. We’re to kill the assassin!” Nabuca replied

Shu did not say a word. He was afraid that he would fail again to save Soon’s father. It was not long before Nabuca , Boo, and Shu began to search for the assassin. They went from corner to corner in search of the assassin, but could not find him. All of a sudden though someone grabbed Boo and placed a knife to his throat.

“I’ll kill him I swear I’ll slit his throat!” Soon’s father fearfully proclaimed.

Nabuca lifted his rifle and was about to shoot, but Shu jumped in the way.

“You can’t kill this man. He has a daughter named Soon!” Shu stated.

When Soon’s father heard the name of his daughter he quickly dropped his knife. He raised his hand in surrender. It was not long before Abelia arrived at the scene.

“Why didn’t you shoot this man like I ordered?” asked Abelia.

“Sorry my queen, but this soldier is new and he got in our way.” Nabuca stated as he looked at Shu.

Boo was still on the floor, but got up and stood next to Nabuca. Abelia looked at Shu with disgust. She walked over to the Soon’s father and placed the gun on his temple.

“Stop it! He has a daughter! You can’t kill him!” Shu yelled as Nabuca and another soldier held onto him.

Abelia looked at Shu and smiled. She pulled the trigger and Shu could hear a loud bang. Soon’s father was dead. Shu had failed to save him a second time. A tear fell from his eyes. Abelia walked over to Shu and hit him with her pistol. The world around Shu went dark. Boo stared at Shu and then at Nabuca. Boo could still remember what Shu had asked him. A tear fell from Boo’s eyes as he looked away.

“Take the boy and throw him in the pit!” ordered Abelia.

Nabuca and Boo took Shu to the pit. The pit was deep and dark. Nabuca then lowered Shu into the pit. Shu awoke to find himself complete darkness, Shu sat down and buried his head into his knees.

“Why, did he have to die again?” whispered Shu to himself.

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Okay that makes chapter 6 done. I'll be working on chapter 7 I hope you enjoy

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I was wondering if there was anything anyone would like me to add to this story, especially for those who has seen the anime.