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Old 2006-07-31, 20:48   Link #21
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Here is the first part of chapter 7

Chapter 7: Deliverance

I can feel its touch upon my cheek...an
embrace through all the years...I can hear
it whisper sweet lullabies...I can feel it
wipe my tears...I can sense its magical
air...Oh how I yearn to fly as I watch him
lift the eagle so it may soar so high...Oh
how I wish to be the wind flowing softly
through and fro...Oh how I wish for the wind
To gently carry me home…

Shu woke up and found that he was still in the pit. He looked around. He was not sure how long he had been in the pit. Shu’s stomach began to growl from hunger. Shu stood up and looked around the pit. There was some light that seeped through a hole in the roof. The pit itself was not very large. It could only hold one person at a time. The pit seemed to be filled with dirt, but Shu realized that it was trash and discarded waste products. Faintly Shu could hear some foot steps. It was not long before Shu saw a familiar face looking down at him. It was Boo.

“I was told to give you some food.” Said Boo.
Boo brought out a metal bowl and threw it down at Shu. Shu quickly ate the food as Boo watched. Shu looked up at Boo and saw a tear fall from his eye.

“What’s wrong?” asked Shu.
Boo looked down at Shu and tried to regain his composure.

“I was just thinking about what you had asked me. You know if I had any innocent blood on my hands. I’ve never killed anyone myself, but I’ve seen too many people die as it is. Nabuca promised me that after the war I get to go home. I’ll do what I have to.” Boo replied.

Shu looked up at Boo. Tears were visibly coming from Boo’s eyes.

“What home will you go back to? You saw it too didn’t you! Hey killed those people they thought were too old or weak. Can you go back to your home with the knowledge that the reason someone’s grandmother or grandfather isn’t there is because you killed them? What if they thought your mother and father were too weak? You saw what they do to the weak!” Shu yelled.

Boo was visibly shaken by Shu’s words. Boo looked Shu in the eyes as tears began flowing like rivers coming down a mountain.

“You’re wrong! My parents are alive!” Screamed Boo.
Shu looked away. He knew he shouldn’t have said that Boo’s parent could be dead. Shu began to wish he could take his words back. Shu looked at Boo and smiled.

“I’m sorry. I shouldn’t have said that. I’m sure your parents are okay, but I still think this war is wrong.” Shu replied.

It was not long before Shu remembered how Boo had died the previous time. A tear rolled down his Shu’s cheek. Boo went and threw down a stick. Boo was going to let Shu escape. Shu grabbed the stick, which had become a symbol of hope for Shu. Shu looked at Boo and smiled.

“I have to get Lala Ru. Come with me. You won’t have to kill anymore.” Shu asked.

Boo looked at Shu and turned away. As he walked away Shu could hear Boo reply. “I can’t. I’m sorry, but I can’t leave Nabuca behind.”

Boo was out of sight.

Shu then felt a water droplet hit him on the head. Shu looked up and could see a faint glistening object hanging from what appeared to be a root. Shu eyes widened when he realized it was Lala Ru’s pendant. Shu reached with his stick and managed to get the pendant. Shu put the pendant on around his neck and began to climb out of the pit. The only thing in his mind at the moment was to save Lala Ru and escape. Shu’s body felt like it was on fire as he sluggishly forced himself out of the pit. Once out of the pit Shu looked around. He saw a door and quickly ran for it. It was not long before he ran into a girl soldier. Shu recognized the soldier as Kame. Kame quickly got to her feet and pointed her gun at Shu.

“Don’t move or I’ll shoot!” Kame yelled at Shu.

Shu stood to his feet and walk toward Kame. His face was emotionless. He had one goal in mind and that was his escape and he was going to take Lala Ru with him. He walked until the barrel of the gun pressed against his chest.

“Then shoot me, because I’m going to escape one way or another.” Shu calmly replied.

Kame stared at Shu. Her face was distorted into an angry stare. She pressed the barrel of the gun even harder into Shu’s chest. Kame did not waiver. She put her finger on the trigger, but did not pull the trigger. Shu looked at Kame hard and noticed that Sarang and Suzie were not with her.

“So, where are your friend’s?” Shu asked.

Kame was seemed to become even angrier when Shu had asked her about Suzie and Sarang.

“Sarang helped Suzie and a new girl escape. Sarang is imprisoned in her quarters for the time being. She’s and idiot though. Once Suzie and that girl are captured they’ll be executed.” replied Kame.

Shu grabbed the barrel of the gun and tucked it under his chin. Kame was surprised by Shu’s actions. She had expected him to surrender, but Shu was going to be defiant even if it meant his own death.

“Will this be the way they’ll kill Suzie when they catch her? Maybe they’ll tell her to get on her knees before they shoot.” Shu coldly replied.

Kame was clearly becoming distraught. Thought began to fill her head. Finally Kame lowered her gun and turned away. Shu walked passed her. A tear fell from his eyes. He felt the anger building inside him at the thought of what Kame must be going through. Shu also felt relieved when he learned that Sara had escaped. In Shu’s heart he knew that she must have been saved from the desert by Sis. The memories of Sis filled his head. It was not long before he reached a corner. He carefully looked around the corner and saw two guards escorting a girl with blue hair. Shu quickly recognized the girl as Lala Ru. Shu ran and grabbed Lala Ru’s hand. The two began to run away, but Shu accidentally tripped. Things were not going well for Shu. Shu looked back and could see guards coming at him. He saw one of the girls talk into a walkie-talkie. Shu quickly got back to his feet along with Lala Ru. They began to run. Again their escape was impeded, but to their horror it was Hamdo and Abelia. Abelia’s face was clearly angry. Hamdo seemed to smile as he saw the pendant around Shu’s neck. Shu thought it was finally over, but then all of a sudden there was a large flash of water that filled the fortress. Lala Ru had activated her powers in order to save them. The water that filled the ship carried Lala Ru and Shu out of the fortress. They were now outside. Outside Shu saw a hover device and remembered that they had escaped on it the time before. Shu looked over at Lala Ru who was now visibly weak from using her powers. Shu asked Lala Ru to climb onto his back. They got onto the hover device, which looked similar to a moped. They had escaped their captors, but Shu knew that Abelia would come after them.Shu and Lala Ru were on the moped, but it was not long before the small vehicle finally ran out of fuel. Lala Ru and Shu were forced to make their journey by foot. It felt like hours, before they finally made it to a cave. Shu decided it would be best for them to rest in the cave, because Lala Ru was still weak from using her powers. They entered the cave and went into one of the caverns. Memories fill Shu’s head about the last time he had hid in this same cave. Shu knew that a search party would come after them, but he remained optimistic of the outcome.

Abelia stood up. There was water everywhere in the fortress. Much of the water Abelia stood in was up to her knees. Abelia looked around and became infuriated when she realized that Shu and Lala Ru had escaped with the pendant. Abelia quickly went back to her office. Her office was drenched in water as well. She went to her desk and pressed on the intercom button.

“This is Abelia, two prisoners have escaped. Everyone is required to find them. I want them alive!” Abelia commanded.

Abelia soon met everyone outside to begin the search. She looked around at the see of young boys and girls. Many of the girls were pregnant, but Abelia tried to her best not to think of it.

Within the large search party were Kame, Boo, Nabuca, and Tabool. The search was on the way. All around soldiers, both girls and boys alike were scouring the desert in search of Lala Ru and Shu. It was not long before the large search party came up to a cave. The cave had many caverns and was lined with crystalline stalactites and stalagmites on the ceiling and floor of the cave. Kame and Tabool went one way in the cave, while Boo and Nabuca went the opposite direction. It felt like hours of searching, but Shu and Lala Ru were nowhere to be found.

Shu on the other hand was looking at the large search party that had just arrived. Shu knew that they had to escape, but Shu could not find a way out of the cave. It was not long before Shu saw Nabuca coming towards their direction. As Nabuca came closer Shu tried to duck away, but it was clear that Nabuca had seen him. Fear began to grip Shu as he began to wonder what Nabuca would do if he finds them. The last time Shu had saved Nabuca’s life and Nabuca had let him escape, but this time was different. Shu did not save Nabuca’s. It was not long before Shu found a light to his face. It was Nabuca and Boo. Boo was holding a gun towards Shu.

“There’s nowhere to run!” barked Nabuca.

Shu looked at Nabuca and then at Boo.

“Whats going on over there?” a soldier yelled at Nabuca.

Nabuca looked at Shu. His face was emotionless.

“Sorry sir, but I didn’t find anyone here!” Nabuca replied towards the soldier.

Shu looked at Nabuca surprised and confused. He did not understand why Nabuca was letting him go. He understood the last time Nabuca had let him go, but this time events were happening much differently.

“Don’t get me wrong. I’m not doing this for you, but if you’re captured then Boo may become implicated in your escape and he’ll wind up being executed along with you. I’m doing this for Boo not you so the next time I see you I’ll kill you without a second thought.” Replied Nabuca to Shu’s thoughts.

Nabuca then told Shu that there was a back way out of the cave if the continued further into the cavern. Shu and Lala Ru followed Nabuca’s advice and found that they were outside once more. As they began their travels Lala Ru collapsed. Shu picked her up on his back and began to carry her. They had finally escaped.

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Old 2006-08-04, 23:41   Link #22
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This ends chapter 7...it was bit hard to write since I was sick so I hope you enjoy...I'm working on chapter 8 now
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Old 2006-08-07, 22:46   Link #23
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Here's the beginning of chapter 8. I hope to have this chapter finished by tomorrow or wed., but it will def. be done by thurs. If only I didn't have to go to work then I would have a few chapters done by now : P
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Old 2006-08-07, 22:47   Link #24
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Chapter 8: Companionship

She's a fallen angel loved and despised by the world...The painfull memories, become a single blur as she puts the bottle to her lips...slowly drinking the pain away hoping to live another day...she grows tired and cold...falls to her knees and prays...putting the gun to her head she wonders...click...click...the pull of the trigger and it all comes to an end...she wonders why you didn't listen to her cries of angst and disgust...she wonders why when you called her friend you let it end...she wonders why when you call her sister...did you let it go too far...she wonders.......

The World goes quiet and still she gets no answers....

Shu carried Lala Ru on his back. Lala Ru’s weight was becoming burdensome, but Shu knew that he had to continue on. Time seemed at a stand still as the continued on their way. Shu had no clue what direction they were going, but his memories of Sis told him that he was going the correct way towards Zari-Bars. It was not long before Lala Ru finally awoke from her exhaustion.
Lala Ru looked around as she was being carried. All around her she could see the vast desert. It was just an endless sea of sand. It was beginning to get dark. The air was becoming cold and frigid. Lala Ru tapped Shu on the shoulder.

“I think I can walk now.” Said Lala Ru.

Shu set Lala Ru down. Shu could see rock formations in the distance. The rocks reminded Shu of large mushrooms. Shu and Lala Ru began their trek towards the rock formation. It took what felt like hours, before they finally reached the large rock formations. As they walked passed a few of the mushroom-like rocks they came up to a skeleton partially hidden in the sand. Next to the skeleton were a doll and a small sack. Shu picked up the small sack. In the sack there were a few explosives and a couple of matches. Shu then remembered a plant-like creature attacking them from his experience before the time change.

With that thought something came and grabbed onto Shu’s ankle. Shu looked down and saw what appeared to be a vine. Shu was being pulled to a large plant-like creature. It had a large opening with rows upon rows of teeth. Shu repeatedly hit the tendril with the femur. Eventually the plant-like creature let go, but it had not given up yet as it reached for Lala Ru. Shu quickly grabbed Lala Ru’s hand and ran. Shu and Lala Ru quickly came up to what appeared to be a large boulder. Shu quickly lifted Lala Ru to the top of the boulder. As Shu tried to climb the boulder the creature used one of it’s tendrils to latch onto Shu’s leg. Shu wasted no time and gave the creature’s tendril a hard whack. The creature let go of Shu’s leg. Shu quickly managed to get up the boulder, but the creature became more persistent as it managed to get a tendril onto Lala Ru’s ankle and pulled her onto the sand. Shu quickly took action as he leaped onto the sand and hit the tendril. The creature let go of Lala Ru’s ankle, but Lala Ru appeared to have hurt her ankle. Shu quickly remembered the explosives and the matches. Shu took one of the explosives and lit it. He threw the explosive into the creature’s mouth, but the explosive turned out to be a dud. Shu quickly grabbed the other explosive and lit it with the last match in the bag. Shu hoped that the explosive would work. Shu closed his eyes as he threw the explosive. The explosive let out a loud boom! Shu opened his eyes to see that the creature was dead.

Shu walked over to Lala Ru who was obvious hurt. Lala Ru tried to get up herself, but fell back to the ground. Shu reached out his hand.

“It’s okay, I’ll carry you.” Said Shu.

Shu carried Lala Ru onto his back. He walked over and managed to lift Lala Ru onto the boulder. Shu climbed up the boulder and joined her. Shu stood up on the large rock and stared out into the horizon. There was still vast desert that they had to cover. Shu pulled out Sara’s handkerchief from his pocket. The thought of Sara filled his head. Shu looked over to Lala Ru and helped her to his back again. They climbed down the boulder and continued their journey.

Shu could feel the heat beating down upon his head as the sun began to rise. Shu set Lala Ru down to rest. Shu realized that he was still wearing Lala Ru’s pendant. He took it off and handed it to her. Lala Ru looked up at Shu and smiled. Shu looked round and spotted what appeared to be an oasis. Shu picked Lala Ru on his back as they walked towards the oasis. Shu hoped that it was not a mirage. As they got close it was apparent that it was not a mirage after all. Shu and Lala Ru went and drank some of the water.

“You have you’re memories of the last time too?” asked Shu

Lala Ru looked at Shu and nodded her head in agreement. Shu looked at the oasis. The oasis was actually very small. It was more of a small hole with water then an oasis, but at this point any water to Shu was a good thing. This also gave Lala Ru a chance to rest her ankle. After resting for a few minutes it was time for them to continue on their journey. Lala Ru was still hurt so Shu lifter her to his back.

Shu and Lala Ru walked for about an hour. It was nothing, but sand and more sand. An occasional wind gust would blow the sand into their face, but Shu and Lala Ru kept on walking. Eventually they got to an area with large plateaus at either side of them. Shu and Lala Ru decided to climb the cliffs. It was a hard climb, but eventually they managed to reach the top. The walked to the other side of the cliff and looked down. They could see various buildings and farms. They had finally made their treacherous journey. They finally reached Zari-Bars.

Shu carried Lala Ru down the cliff and started towards Zari-Bars. As they walked towards Zari-Bars Shu saw a smalle girl sitting on a boulder. Shu recognized the small girl as Soon. Soon stomach became tied into a knot as he remembered watching her father being killed. A tear rolled down Shu’s cheek as he remembered that the last time Soon was killed by Nabuca. Shu continued walking down the path. It was not long before he could hear two people arguing. Shu looked to see who the people were that were arguing. It was an old lady arguing with a young man.

“How many more people will die?” the lady asked the young man.

Shu immediately recognized the old woman as Sis. Shu while carrying Lala Ru walked over to Sis and the young man. The young man and Sis stopped their argument and looked at Shu.

“Hi, I’m Shu! My friend and I came from Helywood.” Shu stated. The young man looked at Shu in disgust when Shu mentioned Helywood.

Sis looked at Shu and smiled. Her smiled seem to make Shu feel safe and welcomed.

“You must have been through a lot. Who’s you’re friend over there?” Sis asked.

The last time he lied to Sis about Lala Ru’s name he got punished. Shu decided then it was best to tell the truth. The young man standing next to Sis though decided to leave the conversation.

“This is Lala Ru.” Said Shu.

Sis looked at Lala Ru in surprise and smiled warmly at Lala Ru.

“I see. Then you must have quite the story to tell. Come and we can talk about it at dinner.” Said Sis.

Shu smiled and gave a nodding agreement. The three went to Sis’ home. All the homes in Zari-Bars were made into the surrounding rock. Inside Sis’ home Shu saw many small children at the table already. Soon and Sara was not there yet. Sis invited Lala Ru and Shu to sit at the table to eat. It was not long, before Soon finally came into the makeshift home. She sat next to Lala Ru and remained quiet. It was not long after that that Sara came into the home. She was carrying some vegetables in her apron, but at the sight of Shu and Lala Ru she dropped the vegetables to the floor. Sara especially took notice of Lala Ru. Sara grabbed a fork from the table and attacked Lala Ru.

“It’s all you’re fault that all this is happening!” Sara screamed as she attacked Lala Ru with the fork.

Shu though had already anticipated that this would occur and was already on his feet. He threw his body in between Lala Ru and Sara. The fork stabbed Shu in the shoulder. Sara and Lala Ru both looked at Shu. They both were surprised by Shu’s action. Shu looked at them both and smiled.

“I’m sorry! I didn’t mean to…” Sara’s words were cut short as she collapsed.

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Old 2006-08-10, 22:02   Link #25
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This ends chapter 8 It wasn't a very long chapter, but that's because I felt like doing the next chapter separate as it's a very important issue imo. I hope it was okay. I'll be starting chapter 9...my comp. has been acting up a bit and I'm concentrating on studying the LSAT so I've been busy so sorry it took me this long : P
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Old 2006-08-11, 22:14   Link #26
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Chapter 9: Lullaby

I lay under a willow tree…
I lay and begin to dream…
Can you not hear her gently singing?
Can you not hear her cry?
I lay and I listen to her calls.
I lay and I listen to the calls
of the whispering willow and all
her songs of sorrow. I gently fall
fast asleep.

Sara and Shu were both taken to the doctor. The stab Shu received to his shoulder was not that serious, but the doctor was surprised and frowned when he saw Shu’s scars. After being bandaged Shu went to go see Sara who was in the other room. Sara was already awake by then. Shu and Sara could hear the doctor talking to Sis.

“They’ll both be okay. The boy’s wound was nothing serious, although I would like to mention that I found many scars on him. I also discovered other wounds on him, but they appeared to be healing fine. It’s quite troubling. I swear that boy was severely beaten and tortured.” The doctor told Sis.

“How is the girl doing?” Sis asked the doctor.

“The girl is doing just fine, but I find it troubling that she’s pregnant, but what makes matters worse there was no scarring or any signs of abuse. I’ll have to ask them both a few questions before I’m willing to release them.” The doctor replied to Sis.

Shu and Sara looked away from each other when they heard the news. The doctor came into the room. The doctor was an old man with balding white hair and a mustache. The doctor grabbed two stools and sat on one of them. Shu sat in the other stool. The doctor smiled at both of them. The doctor turned and looked at Sara. His face became serious as he began to speak.

“Judging by the way you two are acting I’m guessing you both heard the conversation. I’m going to give it to you both straight. After numerous tests I discovered that Sara is pregnant, but I could not find any signs of scarring or abuse. As a doctor and a man of science I’m beginning to think this pregnancy was done artificially.” Said the doctor.

The doctor immediately knew the answer as Sara quickly curled into a ball. Shu though remained on his feet still trying to comprehend what the doctor was saying. The doctor looked at Shu. Shu saw a tear form around the doctor’s eyes.

“I’m going to ask you a very personal question Shu. I saw your cuts and scars, but I need to ask if you were violated in any other way?” the doctor asked.

Shu looked away from the doctor. The memory of the lab filled his head. He did not know how to answer, but it appeared his actions already told the doctor everything he needed to know. The doctor stood up and walked over to Shu and looked into Shu’s eyes.

“Shu I’m going to need a blood test.” Said the doctor.

Shu nodded that he understood. The doctor grabbed a syringe and a test-tube. The doctor carefully withdrew some of Shu’s blood and placed it into the test-tube. The doctor then asked Shu to leave the room. Shu quietly left the room and went into the other room. Sis was still in the room waiting for the doctor to come back with some news. Shu looked at Sis and began to cry. Sis quickly walked over to Shu and embraced him in a hug. Shu looked up at Sis. Shu took a deep breath and began to tell Sis everything that happened. He started by telling her the events of the first time he came to their time period and then he told her how time had reverted backwards and many of the events had change. Shu continued to also talk about many of the events that stayed the same and how he had been hopeless to stop them from recurring no matter how hard he tried. Then he told Sis about how he promised Sara that things would be different and how much it hurt to learn that she was pregnant again through horrific means. Shu described his torture and then how he was taken to a lab and violated.

Sis looked at Shu. She was horrified to learn that young girls and boys were forced to be soldiers and then forced to have children through in vitro fertilization.

“What will you do if the child is yours?” Sis gently asked Shu.

Shu looked at Sis. His eyes were watery and seemed as if he would burst into tears again, but Shu managed to maintain his composure. Shu knew that this was not the time to fall apart. Shu had to remain strong for Sara. Sara looked at Sis and smiled.

“I’ll do what I have to.” Shu replied.

Shu then walked out-side. He walked over to the boulder where he originally saw Soon sitting. It was already night and Soon must have went inside to bed. Shu climbed the boulder and sat down. Shu looked at the moon and stars. Everything at this moment seemed so serene and calm. Shu felt some one touch his shoulder. Shu turned a looked. It was Sara. She had tears in her eyes. She sat next to Shu and looked up to the sky.

“It’s beautiful isn’t it?” Sara asked as she pointed to the moon.

Shu looked at Sara. Here eyes seemed to glisten like jewels under the moon. A breeze blew by and Sara’s hair seemed to move like the wind. Shu thought Sara looked beautiful. Shu blushed at the thought and looked at the moon.

“What if it’s your child?” Sara asked.

Shu looked at Sara. He wanted to say that everything would be alright, but at the moment Shu did not have an answer. Things were moving so fast, that Shu hardly had anytime to think.

“I don’t know. You didn’t get pregnant this way the last time. So much is different, yet so much remains the same. I made a promise. I promised myself I wouldn’t allow anyone to be hurt anymore, but I’ve already failed so many times. I don’t know what to do.” Shu said.

Sara looked at Shu and smiled.

“You once told me that as long as we’re alive that good things will happen. Do you still believe in your own words?” Sara gently asked.

Shu looked at Sara. He forced a smile onto his face.

“Of course I still believe that.” Shu replied.

Sara smiled and gently let herself down the boulder and quietly walked back into the home. She went into the restroom and looked into the mirror. Tears streamed down her face. She picked up some scissors that were lying on the sink and cut his hair. Sara then fell to her knees and cried.

It was not long before Shu came into the home. Sis and Sara were in the hall. Shu looked at Sara and noticed that she had cut her hair. Shu also noticed that Sara had been crying, but Shu could not say anything. A little girl had come down stairs. Shu was surprised that it was the small girl that had been with Sarang and Kame.

“You’re that Suzie girl who was with Sarang and Kame?” Shu asked

Suzie looked at Shu then at Sara. She was surprised by everything that was happening. Suze smiled and ran over to Shu and hugged him.

“Sarang helped me and Sara escapes that bad place. I met lots of friends, but my best friend in the whole universe is Soon!” Suzie proclaimed excitedly.

Shu heart skipped a beat when Suzie mentioned Soon. The image of Abelia standing over Soon’s father was still deeply embedded in Shu’s memory. A tear began to flow from his eye.

“Can you tell me and Soon a bedtime story?” Suzie asked.

Shu smiled and agreed to tell them a bed time story. Sis led Shu and Sara upstairs along with Suzie. The room had various beds in it. Shu found out that Suzie slept in the bed next to Soon. Shu positioned a chair between Suzie and Soon. Shu looked at Soon and smiled as he told the story of a young girl, who enjoyed traveling to different places with her father. Soon seemed especially interested in the story and after the story Soon and Suzie bother were fast asleep. Shu wondered what they were dreaming of. Sis walked over and put a hand on Shu’s shoulder.

“You know Soon’s been much happier since she met Sara and Suzie. She uses to be so withdrawn since her father went on that mission. She would sit on that boulder and just wait for her father’s return. While we were talking in that room you said that Soon’s father had died. I know you’re going through a lot right now, but you’ll eventually have to tell her or she’ll wind up figuring out the hard way.” Sis said.

“How am I supposed to tell her?” Shu asked.

Sis looked at Shu. Her smile seemed to warm him.

“You told me she was killed when she learned her father had died, while the village was being attacked. Don’t you think she died, because she had no one to comfort her? Maybe this is your chance to save her.” Said Sis.

Shu looked down at Soon one last time as Sis walked out of the room. Soon seemed as peaceful as a baby she laid asleep. Shu knew he had to tell Soon about her father and decided he would do that tomorrow. Sara gently brushed against Shu’s shoulder as she went over to an empty bed and fell asleep. Shu stood up and went to the bed next to Sara. Shu looked at Sara. Shu was even more surprised to see that Sara looked even more beautiful with short hair. Shu went over to his bed and laid in it. The bed was soft and comfortable. There was another bed next his. Lying in the bed was Lala Ru. Lala Ru was fast asleep. Everything seemed so peaceful and serene. As Shu closed his eyes and began to sleep, he dreamt of the sun set over an ocean.

While Shu and Sara rested asleep in Zari-Bars, Abelia sat at her desk furious that not just one person had escaped, but now two have escaped. There was a knock at her door. Abelia yelled for the person to come in. It was Hamdo. Hamdo was smiling. He appeared to be enjoying everything that was happening.

“My queen, I have some good news. With all this water we can finally use our engines. We can make Helywood come alive!” Hamdo stated as his eyes bulged with excitement.

Abelia paused. The thought of Helywood finally being able to move put Abelia in a much better mood, but it still did not change the fact that two prisoners escaped. There was another knock at the door. Abelia told the person to come in. It was a girl soldier with one of the boy prisoners.

“My queen this boy claims to know who let the boy and that girl escape.” the girl soldier proclaimed.

Abelia walked over to the boy.

“What’s your name?” Abelia asked.

The boy replied, “Tabool.”

Abelia looked at the boy and asked “So you have some news for me?”

Tabool looked at Abelia. He smiled. The smile looked evil and had a dark connotation to it.

“I know who helped that boy and girl escape.” Said Tabool.

Abelia looked at Tabool. It was clear he wanted something in return for the information.

“I want something in return. I want to be more then just some kind of slave. I want to be like Hamdo. I want to be one of your commanders.” Tabool stated.
Abelia stared at Tabool. She could hardly believe that this boy would betray one of his own, just for a promotion.

“Fine, I’ll give you something in return for this information, but I can’t give you an outright promotion. It’ll take more then giving me information on traitors for me to give you a promotion.” Abelia answered.

“Of course my queen, but I at least hope this information will help you gain my trust. I saw in the cave Nabuca allowing the boy to escape.” Tabool replied.

Abelia looked at Tabool.

“Bring me Nabuca!” Abelia ordered the girl soldier.

The girl looked at Abelia and bowed as she left the room.

Hamdo walked over to Abelia.

“My queen we still have the issue about the water. Would you like me to get everyone to start pumping the water into the engines?” Hamdo asked.

“Of course I want to begin pumping the water immediately! How long will it take to pump all the water into the engines?” Abelia asked.

Hamdo smiled.

“It’ll take three days to pump the water and to get the engines online. I already sent out a person to search for the location of Zari-Bars. Hamdo replied.

Abelia smiled at the thought of getting her revenge on Zari-Bars. It was not long, before the girl soldier arrived with Nabuca. Abelia walked over to Nabuca and backhanded him on the cheek.

“I was told that you allowed the prisoner escape!” Abelia proclaimed.
Nabuca looked around the room. He saw Tabool standing next to Hamdo with a large grin on his face.

“You would betray your best friend Tabool?” Nabuca asked Tabool.

Abelia slapped Nabuca again.

“So it’s true. Why did you let the prisoner escape! You know the punishment for allowing a person to escape is death!” Abelia shouted.

“I’m sorry my queen, but I hesitated and that’s how he escaped. The next time I see him though I’ll kill him.” Nabuca replied.

Abelia looked at Nabuca and smiled. She knew that Nabuca was hiding something. It was obvious to her that he was protecting someone. Abelia though decided it would be best to spare him. She thought to herself that Nabuca would be the next in line after Hamdo, because Nabuca showed no fear of death and showed a strong mind.

“Very well I’ll spare you, but I don’t want this incident to repeat again. Next time I’ll have you executed. Take him back to his cell.” Stated Abelia.

Tabool was clearly agitated. He could not believe that Abelia would spare a traitor.

“My queen I must say I disagree with your judgment. He’s a traitor and should be executed!” Tabool screamed.

Abelia walked over to Tabool and punched him. Tabool looked at Abelia with surprise.

“How can anyone trust a person who would betray even their best friend? If I execute Nabuca, then I’m executing you along with him, because a person who betrays their friend is no better then an animal!” Abelia shouted.

The girl soldier led both Nabuca and Tabool to their cell.

Abelia smiled as she heard Hamdo barking orders to start pumping the water into the engines. Helywood in three days would be back online and if her spy finds Zari-Bars she’ll get revenge on the ones who tried to assassinate her.

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I'm still working on this chapter I did write a little more, but I'm taking my time with this chapter... Anyways on a side note I thought I mention a few facts on some a few things. The name Sarang pronounced Sah-Rah-ng is the Korean word for love. So far I've changed a few events around from the anime, but I did try to keep various aspects intact, such as Sara had originally cut her hair in the beginning of her escape, but I had her cut her hair after talking to Shu...I also have 2 endings planned, but I haven't decided which to do yet. Another thing I decided to do was to show how various forms of technology could be used for evil, especially technology that was meant for good. I just thought in the anime it was a good chance to show how things like technology could be used for evil, so I changed how some of the girls would be impregnated. I thought that in a time of war a person leading and army would need a much more efficient process inorder to keep up with the demand, thus I chose invitro fertilization. I thought for the reason it gave in the anime, invitro fertilization would be a much more efficient process and it allows me to show how technology that is normally used for good can be used for evil. I thought the anime did well in showing the horror and darkside of war and I'm hoping I'm maintaining that tone. although in the end I'm hoping to give it a more happy ending.
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Chapter 10: Sweet Embrace

How I miss you my dear friend…
I sit and ponder waiting for your return…
Two friends embraced in a hug…
I sit and wait as the sun begins to set…
I sit and wait when the sun begins to rise…
I sit…and I sit…waiting for your return…
Just so I can see you smile, before I go…

Shu awoke the next morning. Shu looked around the room. It appeared as if everyone had already awakened. Shu quickly went downstairs. Everyone was sitting at the table and eating breakfast. Lala Ru, Soon, and Suzie were not at the table. Shu went and sat in an empty chair next to Sara. Sis came over a put some steamed vegetables on a plate. Shu looked up and smiled.

“This smells great, but where are Lala Ru, Soon, and Suzie? Shu asked.

Sis smiled as she also gave Shu a small glass of water.

“They already finished their meals. Suzie and Soon both insisted that Lala Ru come play with them.” Sis replied.

Shu smiled he was happy that Lala Ru, Soon, and Suzie were all having fun. Shu decided that he would tell Soon about her father tomorrow, since she was having so much fun. Shu then ate his food. The food was better then the food he ate while he was imprisoned in Helywood. After he finished Sis walked over to Shu and put her hand on her shoulder.

“Since you’re staying here I require all my children to help around the place. You can handle a few chores right?” Sis asked.

Shu looked at Sis and smiled.

“Of course I’ll help! What would you like me to do!” Shu replied.

Sis smiled and looked at Sara and Shu.

“First I want you both to get some water from the caverns and then I think you both can help out in the fields.” Sis replied with a smile.

Shu felt much better today, despite everything that has happened. Shu was happy to be alive and he was happy to see Sara, Soon, and Lala Ru smile again. Sara then proceeded to lead Shu to the caverns with the water. Water was scarce, but the cavern was abundant with water. It seems the people of Zari-Bars understood the scarcity of the water supply and even had an armed guard in the cave that made sure that no one stole or took too much water. Shu and Sara filled a wooden bucket with water and carried it back to Sis. Sis used the water to water a few plants in the house. All the plants seemed to be growing either fruits or vegetables. Sis then gave the bucket to Sara and a hoe to Shu so they could work in the fields. All the children that lived with Sis joined Sara and Shu to help out in the fields.

Sara went and mostly just picked a few vegetables. Sis did not want Sara out too long though, because of her being pregnant. Shu went to another field with some of the children.

Shu then brought the hoe over his head and brought it back down as he screamed out “Men!”

The children looked at Shu and the all giggled. They had never seen anyone do anything like that before, but they thought it looked fun so they all proceeded to copy Shu. Shu laughed to himself. Everything seemed to be okay for once. After finishing in the fields Shu and the children had dirt all over them. Shu and the children went inside to get cleaned up. Sara was already setting the table for lunch. After coming down everyone quickly prayed and ate lunch.

After eating lunch Soon and Suzie walked over to Shu and Sara.

“Can you both play with us? We want to play house! You and Sara can be the mommy and daddy!” Suzie exclaimed with excitement.

Shu and Sara looked at each other and smiled. They agreed to play house with Suzie and Soon. Lala Ru played the aunt, while Sara and Shu played the parents. Shu was kind of embarrassed, but could not complain. He was having a lot of fun, especially after everything that has happened. By the time they were finished playing the sun was beginning to set. Lala Ru looked at Suzie and Soon.

“Would you want to come and watch the sunset with me?” Lala Ru asked Suzie and Soon.

Shu and Sara watched Soon and Suzie walk over to the boulder to watch the sunset. Shu could remember watching sunset with Lala Ru and smiled. Despite everything that has happened Shu found that there were really always at least a few happy times. Shu smiled at the thought.

Sara and Shu walked into the house together. Sis was cooking and some of the children were already setting the table. Sara went over and helped Sis with the cooking and Shu decided to set the table for dinner. It was not long before many of the children started to come in for dinner. Sis told the children to get cleaned up before they could have any dinner. The children quickly complied with Sis’s demands and got cleaned up. It was not long before they were down for dinner. Suzie, Lala Ru, and Soon came in while everyone were sitting down. Sis looked at them and smiled.

“Hurry now we can’t start eating without you three so go get cleaned up.” Said Sis

It took about fifteen minutes, but the three girls came down and were ready to eat. Sis looked over to Shu and spoke.

“Won’t you say the prayer Shu?” Sis asked

Shu was surprised by the request, but agreed to pray. Shu prayed for all the good things and for a blessed future. He prayed with all his heart and soul that everyone in the room would find happiness. After the prayer everyone began to eat. Shu thought the food was delicious.

After eating the meal Sis had everyone brush their teeth and get ready for bed. For once Shu felt that the day went well. He finally began to believe that he could at least save Suzie. Shu swore to himself as he went to bed that thing would only get better. Shu gently fell asleep. He dreamt of Suzie, Soon, Lala Ru, and Sara. They all were smiling as they ran through a sea of flowers. Shu smiled in his sleep. Everything was quiet and at peace.

Meanwhile in Helywood, Sarang lay in her bunk. She wondered how little Suzie and Sara were doing. She also began to notice a great change in her brother Tabool. Tabool was only a year younger then her, but she carried his best friend’s child. Sarang remembered Tabool’s friend. It was Nabuca. She had always had a crush on him, but now she despised him. She carried his child. A child she hated with all her heart. Now she wondered if she was wrong all along. A tear rolled down her cheek as she thought of Nabuca. She felt bad for hating him. He must have gone through so much with no one to comfort his pains.

Kame walked over to Sarang’s bed. Sarang looked up and saw tears streaming down Kame’s eyes. Sarang did not know what to say. Of all the girls Sarang met Kame was the strongest. Sarang sat up and held Kame.

“What’s wrong?” Sarang gently asked.

Kame looked at Sarang and smiled.

“I let that boy and girl get away. I could have stopped them, but I froze. I’m all alone. Suzie was all I had left. I’m sorry for the things I said to you.” Kame replied.

Sarang hugged Kame. All of a sudden Sarang felt a sharp pain in her stomach. Sarang was having contractions. Kame looked at Sarang. She did not know what to do. Kame quickly got up and began to scream for a doctor.

“Someone, I need a doctor! Don’t worry Sarang I’m here for you.” Kame gently stated as she held Sarang’s hand.

It was not long before doctors came and took Sarang to the lab. Kame waited outside of the lab, which was also a makeshift hospital. Five hours later a doctor came out of the lab. He walked over to Kame.

“Your friend just had a baby boy. She’ll be okay. You can go in to see her if you like.” The doctor stated.

Kame walked into the lab and walked over to Sarang. Sarang was holding the small boy. Kame was surprised to see Sarang smiling. Sarang who had always stated she hated her child seemed to genuinely love her child. Kame smiled at the thought. Sarang looked at Kame and smiled as she lifted the baby for Kame to hold.

Kame held the baby boy. He was so small. Kame looked at Sarang and smiled.

“What’s the child’s name?” Kame asked.

Sarang looked at Kame and the baby.

“I named him after that boy prisoner. I named him Tabool after my brother. I know Tabool isn’t the same person he once was, but he was a good person at one time. That’s why I chose the name Tabool.” Sarang answered.

A doctor entered and came over to Sarang and Kame.

“I’ll have to take the baby to the nursery and I think Sarang needs to rest for the time being.” The doctor gently stated.

Kame understood and left the lab. She went back to her bunk and lay down. She put her hand on her own bulging stomach. She hoped she could be as strong and as accepting as Sarang. Kame smiled as she fell asleep. She dreamt of Sarang’s and her child playing together in a meadow.

Meanwhile Sarang lay in the lab bed. She too dreamt of her child and Kame’s child. She also remembered Sara and the boy prisoner. She hoped that they were all well. Then her dream went to Suzie. She could see Suzie smiling and playing. For once Sarang felt that things would be okay. Sarang smiled as she lay asleep.

While Sarang and Kame slept Nabuca remained awake. He just got the news that his child was born. Nabuca was ordered to remain in his cell and was not allowed to go see his child at the moment as a punishment for allowing Shu and Lala Ru to escape. Nabuca took all the blame, because he did not want to see Boo get hurt. Nabuca looked at Boo, who was sleeping peacefully. Nabuca also wondered what Tabool was thinking now that he knew his sister had his child. Nabuca hoped that Tabools outlook would change. For the rest of the night Nabuca dreamt of his childhood, when he, Tabool, and Sarang use to go play in the field. Everything was so peaceful.

Nabuca was also a wake at the time. When he learned of his sister’s pregnancy he became even angrier with Nabuca. A part of Nabuca though felt bad for thinking these thoughts, but something inside him felt angry and lost. Nabuca wondered for the rest of the night if it was possible for him to change. He soon fell asleep and dreamt of how he and Nabuca use to always compete against each other. He always lost, but he still could remember that it was a happier time.

Boo also dreamt happy dreams. Shu had given him more hope for a better future.
Boo dreamt of a future with not wars, killing, or famine. He dreamt that everyone was living happily. He dreamt of his mother and his father. Boo for once felt as if things were looking up. Boo dreamt of peace and happiness. Boo hoped in his dreams that everything bad happened would just fade away into nothingness. Boo, Nabuca, Sarang, and Kame all dreamt peaceful thoughts.

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Chapter 11: Scarred

“I felt so cold and alone then you appeared like an angel holding me in your arm. I’ve finally felt the warmth and love of a human heart.”

Shu woke up from a loud commotion downstairs. Shu went down to see what the noise was. It was Sis arguing with the same young man from when he entered into Zari-Bars. Shu saw Lala Ru hiding behind Sis.

“Why didn’t you say anything about this being Lala Ru,” the man shouted!

“There was no need to mention who she is. She’s only a child! What does it matter to you,” Sis angrily replied.

“We can use that girl as a bargaining tool! Maybe we can bargain with Abelia! Many people will be saved,” The man shouted in return.

The man grabbed and tried to pull Lala Ru towards him, but Sis quickly went up stairs and came back down with a rifle.

“You’ll let her go! As long as she’s in my care I consider her one of my children and I’ll never let anyone take one of my children,” Sis shouted!
All of a sudden there was another man who ran into the house. The man was clearly out of breath as he breathed heavily.

“Sis, a soldier was captured trying to get into the village!” the man shouted as he gasped for air.

Sis and the young man quickly ran outside. Sis had brought her rifle. They went to an area outside of the village’s entrance. There were a group of men surrounding another man. Sara was there as well. Shu could tell that Sara’s hands were trembling. Shu went through the crowd and saw a man on his knees. Shu’s eyes widened with surprise. It was the doctor that had violated him in the lab. Shu’s hands trembled as he clenched his hand into a fist.

“We need to help this man he’s dehydrated and injured,” Sis shouted!

“It’s on thing helping little children, but this is a grown man who was a member of Helywood! We can’t just let him in the village,” a young man shouted!

Shu could not take it anymore. Shu rushed in and grabbed Sis’s rifle and pointed it at the man’s head.

“You’re the doctor that did this to me and Sara,” Shu screamed!

Shu pulled the trigger of the rifle. Click! The gun did not go off. The rifle did not have any cartridges in it. Sara ran over and snatched the gun from Shu’s hand and threw it on the ground. Shu fell to his knees and began to cry. Sara went and hugged Shu. Tears began to fall from her eyes as well. Shu stood back up and looked at his hands. Shu was astonished that he was willing to commit murder.

“Sis, when will the doctor have the blood test done,” asked Shu?

Before Sis could answer the prisoner spoke.

“That’s not necessary. The child is yours,” said the prisoner as he turned his eyes away from Shu.

“Why would you do this to us?” Sara asked.

The man looked at Sara and replied, “I’m truly sorry, but you have to understand I did what I had to in order to survive.”

Shu walked towards the prisoner. His eyes were cold with hatred. Shu never felt this angry before.

“You took our childhood away and you expect forgiveness!” Shu shouted.
Sara was surprised at Shu’s tone of voice. She did not expect Shu to lose his cool so much. She remembered that it was Shu who had always been strong, but at this very moment she knew that she had to be strong for both of them. Shu stared at the man for several more second, but then walked off.
Before Shu even realized it he was in the cavern that contained the water supply. Shu looked around and saw many small jagged rocks. Shu picked up one of the rocks. The rock had a sharp point and a jagged sharp edge. Shu closed his eyes as he placed the edge of the rock on his wrist. Shu breathed in deeply and exhaled. As soon as Shu was about to cut into his wrist he felt someone smack him in the face. Shu dropped the rock. Shu opened his eyes to see Sara staring angrily at him.

“Was everything you told me a lie,” Sara screamed as tears fell from her eyes?

Shu looked at Sara. She was right. He always said that as long as people were alive then good things would happen, but here he was fixing to end his own life. Sara went over and hugged Shu.

“Can’t you see that I need you? You were always the strong one and I can’t do this without you,” said Sara.

Shu knew that Sara was right. He knew that he had to be there for Sara and the child more then ever.

“I’m sorry. I was being selfish,” said Shu.

Sara smiled. Shu and Sara walked out of the cave together. Shu and Sara walked back to Sis’s house. When they entered the building they saw a group of young men, some of the elders of the village, and Sis. Sis was arguing her case for keeping Lala Ru. Shu and Sara also learned that they had decided to allow the prisoner to stay in Zari-Bars for the time being. The young men tried to argue their case of negotiating with Abelia by using Lala Ru.
Eventually though their arguments against Lala Ru fell apart as the elders and women all agreed that Lala Ru was just a child and should not be used as a bargaining tool. After the decision the young men left the room grudgingly. Sis walked over to Sara and Shu and smiled.

“I’m glad you two are feeling better, especially you Sara,” said Sis.
Shu looked at Sis then at Sara. He did not know what they were talking about. Sara touched Shu’s arm.

“Sis caught me in the restroom while trying to force an abortion. It was that same night I cut my hair,” said Sara.

Shu looked at the floor. He felt bad for being so selfish. All this time he’s been thinking of his own pains and suffering that he forgot that there were other people around him suffering as well.

“I’m sorry. I was being selfish. It’s my fault that you…” Shu was suddenly cut sort by Sis.

“Why do you try to carry everyone’s burden yourself? Shu we’re here for each other. We created this village to create a safe haven for people just like you and Sara. You don’t have to blame yourself. It wasn’t your fault,” said Sis.

Shu knew that Sis was right, but he could not help, but to feel partially responsible for the things that happened. Soon and Suzie entered the house. Shu remembered that he had told Sis that he would tell Soon the truth. Shu’s hands trembled as he slowly walked towards Soon.

“Soon would you like to take a walk with me,” Shu gently asked.

Soon looked at Shu and smiled. Shu wondered how long that smile would last.

“Okay,” said Soon.

Shu and Soon took a walk outside. Soon stopped and looked at the flowers. The flowers were very pretty. Shu smiled as he plucked one of the flowers and placed it Soon’s hair.

“We have to talk about your father,” Shu gently stated.

Soon looked down at the ground. It was clear that she was no longer smiling. Shu took in a deep breath. He could not forget the image of Abelia shooting Soon’s father. Shu trembled as he spoke.

“I don’t know how to say this, but I saw your father,” said Shu.

Shu’s voice had cracked. Soon looked up and could see tears in his eyes. Soon knew then that something was wrong.

“He’s not coming home is he?”

The question Soon asked pierced his heart. Soon grabbed Shu and hugged him. She was in tears.

“I’m so sorry. I tried to save him Soon, but I failed. I know it hurts, but you have to know that your father loves you and even though his body is gone his spirit still lives inside of you. I promise though that I’ll take care of you. I’ll be your big brother for now on and I’ll protect you,” Shu stated.

Soon looked up at Shu and saw that Shu was crying too. Something about Shu’s tears made Soon stop crying. She knew then that even though her father was gone that she still had a family who cared for her. Even though Shu’s words did not take away her pains the thought of Shu as her big brother comforted her. Soon continued hug Shu and the tears kept flowing.

“It’s okay to cry,” whispered Shu.

Soon soon fell asleep in Shu’s arms. Shu gently picked Soon up and carried her back to her bed. Shu gently laid her down and placed a blanket over her. Shu then felt someone touch his shoulder. It was Sara.

“You really would make a good father,” Sara stated.

“I hope so, but we’re both so young. I’m scared Sara,” Shu replied.

“It’s okay. I’m scared too. The doctor told me that, because I’m so young that there’s a greater chance for me to miscarriage or I could even die,” said Sara.

Shu looked up at Sara and smiled. Shu then got up and walked his bed. Shu lay in his bed awake. Shu slowly drifted to sleep. He hoped that things would be different.

While everyone in Zari-Bars laid asleep the former doctor of Helywood silently snuck pass a sleeping guard. He slowly walked out of the village and set up a homing beacon in the rocks. He had just alerted Abelia of Zari-Bar’s location. The doctor felt guilt for what he was about to do, but felt that it was the only way. The prisoner doctor pressed a red button, which activated the homing beacon.

It was not long before Abelia received word that Zari-Bars had been located. A smile crept across her face. She could finally get her revenge. She could finally build a new world, where men would become slaves to women. There was then a knock on her door.

“Come in,” said Abelia.

It was Hamdo. His eyes were wide with excitement.

“My queen Helywood can take flight by tomorrow afternoon,” Hamdo said with a wide grin.

Abelia walked over to Hamdo and gave him a kiss. Tomorrow she was going to finally attack Zari-Bars.

“Tomorrow will be the beginning of a new world order. My queen no man will ever hurt you again,” Hamdo whispered into Abelia’s ear.

“Tomorrow we attack Zari-Bars,” Abelia stated.

That night Abelia could not sleep. She remembered the time when she was violated and how it was Hamdo who had found her in the streets. From that day on she swore that she would create a new world. She would create a world where women were in control and men would be nothing, but cattle. She smiled at the idea of this new world. She finally felt invincible. Nothing would stand in her way.

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Chapter 12: Frustration

“Why does it seem that every time I take one step forward I find myself going two steps back.”

Abelia woke up early in the morning. A smile formed on her face. It was a new day and today she would finally take over Zari-Bars. There was a light beep at the phone next to her bed. Abelia quickly picked it up.

“This is Abelia,” said Abelia over the receiver.

“The engines are online and ready. We have already set the coordinates towards Zari-Bars,” said a soft voice.

“Very well I want all the soldiers ready to attack and capture Zari-Bars,” Abelia replied.

Abelia then hung-up the phone and got dressed. Abelia walked over towards her desk, but was startled to see Hamdo sitting in her chair with his feet propped up on the desk. In his hand he held a gun at Abelia. Hamdo eyes were wide and he had a wide grin on his face.

“Hamdo what is the meaning of this,” Abelia asked?

“Isn’t it obvious my queen? You played your part well, but I’m afraid that I have no use for you anymore,” Hamdo replied.

Abelia was speechless. She never expected to be betrayed by the one man she trusted.

“Why are you doing this? You told me when you found me that you would help me to create a perfect new world,” Abelia stated as she began to become hysterical.

Hamdo grin seemed to get larger.

“That’s right I did find you beaten and violated, but then again it wasn’t hard finding you as I was the one who hired that man,” Hamdo replied with a laugh.

Abelia could not believe what she was hearing. She quickly fell to her knees and and grabbed her hair. The one man she trusted was the one who created all the angst in her life.

“You see all this has happened before! I was once the leader of Helywood, but all my plans were ruined and I even thought I was dead, but something glorious has happened! I got another chance to reach my goal,” Hamdo stated with a loud voice.

Abelia looked at Hamdo as if he went crazy. She did not understand what Hamdo was talking about. She thought then that maybe Hamdo had finally lost it.

“You’re insane! How can you have been the leader of Helywood if Helywood didn’t exist before,” Abelia asked.

Hamdo stood up from the chair and walked over to Abelia. He placed his hand on her cheek. Even though Abelia felt betrayed she found herself still wanting to be with Hamdo.

“My dear Abelia I will make you my queen,” Hamdo whispered into her ear.

Abelia looked up at Hamdo. Tears were falling from here eyes.

“You’re not going to kill me,” Abelia asked?

Hamdo smiled and gently kissed Abelia. Abelia found herself closing her eyes. She no longer knew what to think. Despite Hamdo’s betrayal Abelia found that she still loved him.

“Of course I won’t kill you. You’re too valuable for me to lose,” Hamdo stated.

Abelia was confused. It was not long before two boys came in holding guns. She remembered them as Nabuca and Tabool. She looked at them as tears streamed down her face. When she saw them she saw small children being forced to do things they never wanted to do. Guilt entered her heart when she realized what she had done. She took these children’s innocence away and now they were betraying her.

“How ironic,” Abelia whispered to herself.

“She’s to stay in her quarters and I want two guards guarding her at all times,” Hamdo ordered the boys.

Hamdo quickly went to the microphone and spoke into it. His voice was loud and clear over the intercom.

“This is Hamdo speaking. Due to some unforeseen circumstances I will now be in charge of Helywood. We will proceed as planned towards Zari-Bars.

A female soldier entered Abelia’s quarters. She was very young with long brown hair.

“I was told to tell you that we’ll be arriving in Zari-Bars in approximately ten minutes,” the girl stated to Hamdo.

Hambo had a large grin on his face and his eyes widened when he heard the news. Everything was going as planned. He would finally get revenge on the boy who had defeated him before. He still had the memories from his defeat and those memories had been slowing eating at his mind. Ever since he learned he was still alive he had swore to find away to exact his revenge. The time was fast approaching.

“Prepare all the troops,” Hamdo commanded the girl.

The girl nodded and left the room.

It was not long before Helywood was finally mobile and began its journey towards Zari-Bars.

As Helywood slowly mad its trek towards Zari-Bars Shu and Sara were both doing laundry outside. To them everything seemed to be well. The weather was sunny and warm, but was not overly hot. Shu looked at Sara and smiled. He hoped that times like these would last a life time. As the two went back to do the laundry they could see a man walking towards them. It was the prisoner they had caught before. When the man reached them his face was pale and he seemed withdrawn. He looked at Sara and Shu and tried to give a smile.

“We have to get out of here,” said the man.

Shu and Sara both looked at the man. This was the man who had violated them and now this man wanted them to go with him. Shu walked toward the man and looked him in the eyes.

“You betrayed this village,” asked Shu?

When the man looked away Shu and Sara knew the answer.

“We have to warn the others,” Shu replied to the man.

The man looked up. He was surprised by Shu’s answer.

“If you warn the others you’ll be captured,” the man stated.

This time it was Sara who walked over to the man. Sara then slapped the man on his cheek.

“Only a coward would run,” Sara replied.

With those words Shu and Sara quickly ran into the house and explained to Sis what they had learned. As they started to explain to her the prisoner’s betrayal one of the younger men busted through the door. He was with a group of armed men. Lala Ru came down stairs to see what the commotion was about.

“Helywood has been spotted coming towards the village,” yelled the man.

Sis looked at the man and could see the anger in his eyes.

“How far from the village is it,” asked Sis.

The man was clearly annoyed by Sis’ question.

“We have about an hour or two at the most before it reaches out village,” the man replied.

“Then we’ll have a meeting in the center of town. Shu and Sara can you watch the children,” asked Sis.

The man grabbed Lala Ru. Shu and Sara went to help their friend, but Sis quickly stopped them.

“Why do you need Lala Ru for?” Sis asked the two men calmly.

“We can use her as a bargaining tool with Queen Abelia. Maybe she will spare us,” said the man.

Sis went to protest, but one of the town’s elders interrupted her.

“Sis let us not be too hasty. If there is a chance to save the life of many don’t you think the sacrifice of one person is enough?” said the elderly woman.

“Sis was angry, but she could not argue. She knew that by the laws of Zari-Bars that she had to file a complaint at the town meeting. Sis then looked at Sara and Shu.

“Don’t worry I’ll make sure nothing happens to Lala Ru,” said Sis as calmly as she could.

Shu and Sara watched as Sis and Lala Ru were taken out of the house. Some of the children had come downstairs after hearing the commotion. Sara looked at the children, but didn’t see Soon or Suzie.

“Soon and Suzie are missing,” said Sara

Shu looked at the children. Many of them were frightened and scared.

“Sara take them to the cave and go hide. I’ll go find Sara and Suzie,”replied Shu.

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Old 2006-09-15, 17:23   Link #39
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this is the beginning chapter 12 sorry I'm a bit late starting on this chapter, but I've been busy with school so there has been a bit of a slowdown, but then maybe thats a good thing : )
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I added a little more to the chapter again thank's for the patience. I wasn't going to just stop writing and I'll continue to write it. It's getting close to the end. As a side not I actually have 2 ending for this story. I'll show both endings when I get to that point. : )
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