Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion

[arkhangelsk]

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

I could shrink it back to one K... but two has a nice ring to it. A solid 1 K radius sounds too mechanical in terms of firepower. I'll leave the final word up to you guys on where to set it. But it should be exceptionally powerful enough to leave the Epic level AWESOME in the scene.

It can be 985m if you want, or 1182m

Now the make-or-break thing is going to be, is it acceptable, for in a space of five to six seconds, to discharge 7 X the energy Hayate discharged in a ten to fifteen minute period? Not counting difference in effects between the two?

I can nit your argument, but let's summarize your request this way: If he discharged the same energy in 5 seconds that Hayate discharged over 10 minutes, you are talking 120x the power... Two orders of magnitude. 7x makes it 840x, closer to 3 orders of magnitude. Still think your request sounds reasonable?

[Saint X]

Originally Posted by tshouryuu

Although the idea does sound somewhat interesting, there are several problems. One, this OC has a device that can fire a shot that can destroy anything within 2km radius and 15K secondary zone of destruction? And a range that should be at least equal that? And did you even take into account AMF? If you did, what the hell are you smoking and why aren't you sharing.

Two, I can't see how the attack would even work in the first place. Iirc, the initial shot does nearly nothing. Its the secondary effect that does the damage. How does the secondary effect of spatial distortion and a subsequent annihilating reaction even gets generated in the middle of an AMF where the effects of said AMF is strongest?

Third, how is the situation even dire enough to warrant such action to be taken? I don't see any reason whatsoever to justify this. There are still plenty of options to be taken and sacrificing a mage in this situation is the stupidest option (No offense) I can think of.

As for recommended reads, I suggest, Nightengale's if you want something good, USB500's (Lone Wolf Neo on ff.net) The Sleeping Lyrical and Magical Girl Lyrical Cinderella for crack, PhoenixFlare's stuff is also good. For OCs try Keroko, Aaron008R, Lowegear, FlameSparkZ, Kagerou and Wild Goose. You can also try Tormenk's Katrina and Satty's Betrüger for villains.
The scene is in no way Awesome. If you want awesome, I suggest you read this Part XIV Verse Finality ~ Ender’s Nightmare by Nightengale.

Shame on us for making you work? I say shame of you to ignore advice, not do research and generally trying you get your way despite objections (Don't worry, I get that way too.)
You know, I didn't expect you to say that. Have you tried death via nose bleeds?

I completely agree on this...

Is it just me or am i seeing a trend of "Superiorization" of common, real world (Terran) weapons/systems against the Mid/Velkan type magic that is supposed to be the focal point and reality of the universe we're working on- not to mention it was supposed to be superior, and had it's own laws concerning the how and why (much like Terran Laws of Physics- which pretty much affects that world in a way, though the "Laws of Magic" are more superior in the Nanohaverse's context) and ethics as well- thus making application of Terran Ethics almost like trying to fit a square circle into a round hole, with only rocket scientists and almost no materials...

True that the forms allow endless variations of what is a "weapon", but what I'm seeing here is that there are some ideas here which completely throw away the magic factor and use Terran (us) conventionals instead- whatever magic factor that remains is almost purely whimsy or simply an attempt at loopholing.

And Yes... we tried to kill him with nosebleeds... that didn't work.


@ Thread: sorry for deleting my post- just found the words to add and the spot it was placed was not too good

Uhm... once again another friendly reminder.

Keep your tech discussions out of the OC room... that includes math, any form of argument between which is better, a gun or a staff and related items...

*points towards tech room*

[dkellis]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

For a short preview, the tale of two brother's tainted love over a lady is certainly a CLASSIC, yet so profoundly epic as well. Like how you made the actual events ambigious, as per most myths and legends

Looking forward to the rest of Lyrical Melancholy

Originally Posted by Keroko

This is one of those trailers that makes one very curious because you dont have the full picture. More please!

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Well, looks definately interesting. Can't wait to see more!

Thanks for the comments. This was one of the pieces salvaged out of the wreckage that was the Infinite Library debacle.

I'm not used to writing in mythical style, so I'm not sure if it came across the way I wanted it to, which was like, well, the narration for a backstory of a movie, as read by some deep-voiced actor like Tony Jay (voice of Megabyte in ReBoot, and slightly more famously the opening narrations for the WoW races) or some such.

I had to cheat a little by using "we" and "us", which makes it sound a bit more like the storyteller at the hearth, rather than the scribe writing it down objectively. Involving the audience, rather than the "proper" mythical style of simply telling the story without the subtle "and you could be a part of this too!" Like I said, I'm not used to writing in mythical style.

In short: I'm not entirely happy with the style of how it turned out, so comments are welcome. However, this will not even turn up in an actual story (the events will be referenced, but the actual text will not), so it is entirely probable that all the effort will be for nothing.

Originally Posted by Saint X

Saint X: Honestly, it can fit in... AND I APPROVE IT, TOTALLY.

No one has even dared make any legends/myths about Midchilda, well not me since TK said that it was undesirable, forcing me to shelve all of my Myths/Legends (which I already have a somewhat solid timeline/frame) until I can throw them into my work instead...

Looking forward to working with you on the Myths/Legends department...

Since I believe that having to explain a piece of work spoils the impact, I'll leave the following notes on why I wrote that passage under a spoiler cut.

Spoiler for Completely boring and spoilery notes:

Explaining the trailer:

Basically, all the myth is supposed to accomplish is to establish the existence of a method, namely the tower in the story, to nudge either one of the two moons of Midchilda out of its present orbit. The "brothers" are the moons, the "Lady" is the sea, and the "Sun-Father" is, well, the sun.

Nudge the moon, and the other will follow (if less predictably), gravity being what it is. Nudge it a bit, and the tides will muck up. Nudge it a bit more, and the planet's rotation gets wonky, possibly leading to an ice age (the Lady's heart getting cold). Nudge it a bit more, and the tidal forces extend to earthquakes (the earth trembling in rage). I'll explain the "raining fire" thing later.

Assumptions made:
- We know almost nothing about the moons, except that there are two of them. (Do they happen to have a colour when seen with the naked eye? I forget if it's Midchilda or the Zero no Tsukaima world which had the red-and-blue moons.)

- The moons are big enough (more accurately, massive enough) to affect Midchilda. I base this on the projection Yuuno gave to Chrono in episode 21 of StrikerS, where the moons aren't relatively tiny rocks like Deimos/Phobos, but look more like the significant-size of our own Moon. Being that Midchilda has survived long enough to host at least one advanced civilization, I'm assuming that all the mechanics of the situation has worked out somehow long beforehand.

- There is something mystical happening with the moons, since Jail was so intent on getting the Cradle up around orbit. In the yesy subs, Yuuno refers to the "magical power" of the moons, and I'm assuming it to be correct.

So way back in antiquity, this Lost Logia tower was built (or found) and used to mess about with the moons, resulting in magical power going haywire down on the planet (hence the rain of fire, or more accurately rain of raw magical particles). Somehow it got fixed, which involved a total eclipse of the sun, but the tower still exists, but hidden. (Exactly how it got hidden is not really that important. Could be intentional, could be an accident, it doesn't matter to me.)

Hence the legend.

And now, in present day, my story's villain (named Vincent DeVaux) wants to obtain a huge amount of magical energy, and since he doesn't have a handy Saint King clone, he decided to use the moon-messing tower. Yes, it's way overkill, but he doesn't really care.

Also, there's a reason why I'm calling it the Tower of Babel, but that gets explained much later in my story.


About myths in the Nanohaverse in general:

I'm being very careful to make sure that the myth may be mythical, ie did not actually happen and is just a good story. Maybe it did happen, but more likely it's just a story to explain some stuff which happened more mundanely (Persephone et al). It might even just be a story completely made up to while away the long evenings, and then got taken as a True Story by others.

Those, I think, are safe enough.

The more well-defined the legend, assuming it stays a legend instead of being actual history, the less likely it is to be true. It's the very vague and uncertain ones which may have a seed of truth in them: humans prefer a good story with a point, and real life does not always accomodate that, so we make up our own endings.

In short: I don't mind writing more myths/legends, but I'll probably not be doing it much of my own accord for various reasons.

Also, I wasn't around when Tk made his interdiction against myths/legends, so I don't know what objections he might have.

Originally Posted by Saint X

Uhm... once again another friendly reminder.

Keep your tech discussions out of the OC room... that includes math, any form of argument between which is better, a gun or a staff and related items...

*points towards tech room*

I've always been unsure about where to post my questions and ramblings. On the one hand, they're inquiring about the canon, and asking for minds better than my own to extrapolate what we see into what we know, albeit commonly with what is known as "fanwank". This is well-suited for the Magic And Tech thread.

On the other hand, my only interest in the answer is in how it applies to my original creations. For example, I really don't care about the exact size of the Infinite Library (other than "looks very big"), but stuff like where it is I care about very much. Sometimes I ask "what if things are like this, would it contradict canon?" (for example, this very post), which seems to work better here, being that it's about original creations.

And if I ask "so could Ivey really specialize in binds", should it be under Magic And Tech (asking about the magic system) or OC (asking about an original character)?

Would help if a mod or some other person in authority could explain this aspect of the rules better. I mean, I don't want to post something in the Magic And Tech thread and get yelled at for speculating too much into OC territory.

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Originally Posted by Saint X

And Yes... we tried to kill him with nosebleeds... that didn't work.

Did you try the cuteness overload method yet?

I find that, when in doubt: High dosage of Kilowaii is always a sure bet.

Unless you're Excel Excel

[arkhangelsk]

Originally Posted by dkellis

Would help if a mod or some other person in authority could explain this aspect of the rules better. I mean, I don't want to post something in the Magic And Tech thread and get yelled at for speculating too much into OC territory.

Frankly, the only threads really alive on a regular basis right now is the OC, FanFiction, Image and to a lesser extent the Music, Merchandise and manga threads. All other threads are basically screaming for attention and would hardly mind any vaguely related tangent.

[Kagerou]

Right, haxx-discussion aside...

Spoiler for Vivio?:

Name: Vivio Takamachi
Age: 14
Gender: Female
Origin: Midchilda
Affiliation: Saint Church

Mage Class: Close-range
Magic Rank: AA+
Magic System: Neo-Belkan
Magic Color: Silver
Magic Affinity: Holy
Magic Style: Prefers using fists.
Magic Device: Intelligent Device "Sacred Dream" (Is referred to as "Yume")

Height: Short
Weight: Light
Build: Small
Eyes: One Red, one Green
Hair: Blonde.
Hair Style: Long. Formally had a side ponytail, but has dropped it since.
Facial Features: ... like duh?

TSAB Profile: N/A

Personality:
- Alignment: Chaotic Neutral, Good Tendancies
Vivio has changed over the years. What was once a bright-eyed girl looking forward to the future is now held back by her own self-doubt and worry. She can be stubborn at times, but has a tendancy to cave in. Years of moving around from place to place have left her feeling mistrustful of others, especially the closer they get to her; the sole exception to this rule is Syn, and the two share a strong bond. Much like her mother Fate, she can be loving and kind, but because of how the past eight years of her life have been thanks to her mother Nanoha, she's not quite as stable as she used to be.

Device: Sacred Dream is a Device created by Aurion Dauer, specifically as a gift to Vivio for her 12th birthday. It's storage form is a red sphere gem with yellow "flames" in it, thus resembling a mix of Bardiche and Raising Heart. When active, the Device becomes a Bo Staff, allowing Vivio to fight in melee. Her own special brand of fighting is directly tuned to the ID, and thanks to the Device's personality, the two get along well. Vivio calls Sacred Dream "Yume", and the Device itself randomly gives Vivio some form of honorific. ("Ma'am, master, mistress, etc.")

Barrier Jacket: As it was briefly in StrikerS, but with different colors; primarily white with red trim.

Spells:
Attack Spells:
Silver Fang: Standard melee spell for Vivio. Two silver "fangs" of light emit out of stand, both of them on the same side and general location. Converts the Staff into a Slashing Weapon.

Silver Spear: As above, but modifies the staff into a Piercing Weapon.
Silver Strike: By charging the staff with magical energy, Vivio unleashes a powerful attack against her opponent.

Sunwell Shot: As Nanoha's Divine Shooter, but at point-blank range (up to 2m), and only one shot per cast.
Moonwell Smasher: Same as Nanoha's Divine Buster, but instead requires significantly more charge time.

Ashbringer: Similar to Fate's Zamber Form; Vivio summons a gigantic blade of energy to attack her opponents with.
Stormstrike: The Staff becomes charged with lightning, and a spear-tip forms again. Vivio can hurl the spear great distances (100m is her record; this is a magically-enhanced throw, mind you).

Medivh: Vivio channels more energy into her staff and swings it in an arc, emitting a powerful burst of energy that causes massive damage (for her rank).

Starlight Sunder: Collection-type energy blast spell. Vivio channels energy into her hands then cuts loose with a torrent of energy.

Oops, forgot defensive spells.

[Saint X]

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

Did you try the cuteness overload method yet?

I find that, when in doubt: High dosage of Kilowaii is always a sure bet.

Unless you're Excel Excel

Not even that worked...

It has killed off more forumers than OCs... check the archives of test results somwhere in this thread..

Yes, all the Kilokawaii and Moegatons that we can chuck in...

It's always this question that ends up being asked...

Andrei: Do you have more?

[LoweGear]

Originally Posted by Saint X

Lowe... I will also need your services with that image... And I will pay you gladly with more treasures...

BTW, how is the first shipment?

What services?

And first shipment is... YEEEERY YEEEEEES

Originally Posted by Saint X

In more ways than one, Earth will be screwed unless the Super Sentais unite to defend it~

The entire thread stares at him...

*stares*



Suddenly getting the urge to post this video. If the badguys fear one Super Sentai group... how about all of their mecha?

Originally Posted by Saint X

We are having too much of those mirror moments ne?

There has been a Dei legend of mirrors being unlucky- so much so that identical twins were considered a bad omen- just look what happened to Bridget!!!

Originally Posted by Kha

Even I can't find a feasible way of killing him off. Closest I ever got to it, Ginga went and "Prince-Charming'd" him back to life.

Go figure what that means. >_>/<_<

Only Ginga has the ability to kill him, and revive him at the same time with pretty much the same thing

Originally Posted by Kha

At least I'll pwnzor more baddies in badass-ness before Ai does me in for a short while. After all, I don't mind getting pwn'd by Ai as I get to see her in her full glory...

...some kind of death wish.

You go to hell in the end anyway... but not before having a glimpse of 'heaven'

*Runs from flaming chariot*

Originally Posted by Kha

Exactly. The only problem is that I find Nagi trying to do an airy interpretation of Mai's voice... jarring?

Originally Posted by Kha

I'll take the Latter.

*RUNS*

Originally Posted by Kha

Now even Nighty never saw that pairing coming...

...
...
...

!!!

WHAAAT?! ARISA/MAI IS GONNA KISS HIRO??!

USODAAA!!!

*RUNS*

*looks at Mai's burning fury*

... Kha, you better run

Originally Posted by Kha

Be my guest, Comrade General.

DA!

Originally Posted by Kha

SOmething like:

Unagiri von Brauhmuhl: Why do you...
Arisa Bannings: ...sound like...
Mai of the Future: me...?!

Originally Posted by dkellis

In short: I'm not entirely happy with the style of how it turned out, so comments are welcome. However, this will not even turn up in an actual story (the events will be referenced, but the actual text will not), so it is entirely probable that all the effort will be for nothing.

Well, the piece could be used as a quick ref to the story as a whole, it'd be a waste if you were to not use it now.

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

Did you try the cuteness overload method yet?

I find that, when in doubt: High dosage of Kilowaii is always a sure bet.

Unless you're Excel Excel

We have. Lots of times.

And the term we use here in OC would be the "Moegaton"

Originally Posted by Kagerou

Right, haxx-discussion aside...

Spoiler for Vivio?:

Name: Vivio Takamachi
Age: 14
Gender: Female
Origin: Midchilda
Affiliation: Saint Church

Mage Class: Close-range
Magic Rank: AA+
Magic System: Neo-Belkan
Magic Color: Silver
Magic Affinity: Holy
Magic Style: Prefers using fists.
Magic Device: Intelligent Device "Sacred Dream" (Is referred to as "Yume")

Height: Short
Weight: Light
Build: Small
Eyes: One Red, one Green
Hair: Blonde.
Hair Style: Long. Formally had a side ponytail, but has dropped it since.
Facial Features: ... like duh?

TSAB Profile: N/A

Personality:
- Alignment: Chaotic Neutral, Good Tendancies
Vivio has changed over the years. What was once a bright-eyed girl looking forward to the future is now held back by her own self-doubt and worry. She can be stubborn at times, but has a tendancy to cave in. Years of moving around from place to place have left her feeling mistrustful of others, especially the closer they get to her; the sole exception to this rule is Syn, and the two share a strong bond. Much like her mother Fate, she can be loving and kind, but because of how the past eight years of her life have been thanks to her mother Nanoha, she's not quite as stable as she used to be.

Device: Sacred Dream is a Device created by Aurion Dauer, specifically as a gift to Vivio for her 12th birthday. It's storage form is a red sphere gem with yellow "flames" in it, thus resembling a mix of Bardiche and Raising Heart. When active, the Device becomes a Bo Staff, allowing Vivio to fight in melee. Her own special brand of fighting is directly tuned to the ID, and thanks to the Device's personality, the two get along well. Vivio calls Sacred Dream "Yume", and the Device itself randomly gives Vivio some form of honorific. ("Ma'am, master, mistress, etc.")

Barrier Jacket: As it was briefly in StrikerS, but with different colors; primarily white with red trim.

Spells:
Attack Spells:
Silver Fang: Standard melee spell for Vivio. Two silver "fangs" of light emit out of stand, both of them on the same side and general location. Converts the Staff into a Slashing Weapon.

Silver Spear: As above, but modifies the staff into a Piercing Weapon.
Silver Strike: By charging the staff with magical energy, Vivio unleashes a powerful attack against her opponent.

Sunwell Shot: As Nanoha's Divine Shooter, but at point-blank range (up to 2m), and only one shot per cast.
Moonwell Smasher: Same as Nanoha's Divine Buster, but instead requires significantly more charge time.

Ashbringer: Similar to Fate's Zamber Form; Vivio summons a gigantic blade of energy to attack her opponents with.
Stormstrike: The Staff becomes charged with lightning, and a spear-tip forms again. Vivio can hurl the spear great distances (100m is her record; this is a magically-enhanced throw, mind you).

Medivh: Vivio channels more energy into her staff and swings it in an arc, emitting a powerful burst of energy that causes massive damage (for her rank).

Starlight Sunder: Collection-type energy blast spell. Vivio channels energy into her hands then cuts loose with a torrent of energy.

Oops, forgot defensive spells.

Seems like 14-year old Vivio's a mix of both Fate and Nanoha there... lightning spells asides from the standard busters, and melee and ranged spells? It seems like Vivio will have a lot in common with Keroko-chan in terms of fighting style there

Though that part about Vivio as a brawler ("prefers using fists") is

Originally Posted by Saint X

Not even that worked...

It has killed off more forumers than OCs... check the archives of test results somwhere in this thread..

Yes, all the Kilokawaii and Moegatons that we can chuck in...

It's always this question that ends up being asked...

Andrei: Do you have more?

Exactly

Do you have more?

*runs*

[tshouryuu]

Originally Posted by Saint X

I completely agree on this...

Is it just me or am i seeing a trend of "Superiorization" of common, real world (Terran) weapons/systems against the Mid/Velkan type magic that is supposed to be the focal point and reality of the universe we're working on- not to mention it was supposed to be superior, and had it's own laws concerning the how and why (much like Terran Laws of Physics- which pretty much affects that world in a way, though the "Laws of Magic" are more superior in the Nanohaverse's context) and ethics as well- thus making application of Terran Ethics almost like trying to fit a square circle into a round hole, with only rocket scientists and almost no materials...

True that the forms allow endless variations of what is a "weapon", but what I'm seeing here is that there are some ideas here which completely throw away the magic factor and use Terran (us) conventionals instead- whatever magic factor that remains is almost purely whimsy or simply an attempt at loopholing.

And Yes... we tried to kill him with nosebleeds... that didn't work.


@ Thread: sorry for deleting my post- just found the words to add and the spot it was placed was not too good

Uhm... once again another friendly reminder.

Keep your tech discussions out of the OC room... that includes math, any form of argument between which is better, a gun or a staff and related items...

*points towards tech room*

This is tricky since when discussing characters, we tend to discuss all aspects of said character which includes his device/s (Tech) and spells (Magic) and moving parts of posts here and there makes it rather difficult to keep track of things but that's just me. Like dkellis said, a mod to clarify stuff would help alot.

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

Did you try the cuteness overload method yet?

I find that, when in doubt: High dosage of Kilowaii is always a sure bet.

Unless you're Excel Excel

If death via nose bleeds did not work, kawaii overload wouldn't kill Tais. Then again, if it works, Renji (Yes, Reiji, I know I spelt your name wrongly but this time its on purpose ) would be very happy I think. His signature would fit perfectly into this scenario

Spoiler for 'Tais's death':

Speaker 1: Hey, Hey have you heard about it yet?
Speaker 2: About what?
Speaker 1: Corporal Tais Scien died.
Speaker 2: He died? How and who did he pissed off this time?
Speaker 1: The thing is, he didn't piss off anyone.
Speaker 2: You mean he died just like that? Without anyone 'helping' him along?
Speaker 1: Not exactly. They weren't trying to kill him, it was just a small prank.
Speaker 2: ...... You're saying, despite him managing to piss off a ton of powerful people by accident, he met his end, not under the hands of those he annoyed but because someone played a joke on him?!
Speaker 1: Since you put it that way, you could say that.
Speaker 2: ......
Speaker 1: ......
Speaker 2: So what exactly was the cause of death?
Speaker 1: Well, he had overdosed on enough MOE to kill a small water buffalo.
Speaker 2: 'Water Buffalo?'
Speaker 1: I got tired of saying small horse...

Sorry about using your signature without asking Reiji

[Saint X]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

What services?

And first shipment is... YEEEERY YEEEEEES

I need a shop... do you still have the base Image that Nanoha, without the Alterations? we can start from there.

due to traffic in and out of Aqua, shipments will now be limited to 1 per certain number of days

shipments 6-8/10 are not refined like 1-5... and 9 is still missing, i still have to collect for shipments 11-12... which you know contains "that"...

Originally Posted by LoweGear

*stares*



Suddenly getting the urge to post this video. If the badguys fear one Super Sentai group... how about all of their mecha?

lol

Originally Posted by LoweGear

YES IT DOES COMPUTE...

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Exactly

Do you have more?

*runs*

*runs from the impending flood of blood*

And yes, I'm elevating Akari to -sama status.

And yes... I'll be playing an Aqua Sonata in FF.net soon...

[Kha]

The latest on the CLANNAD front:

...
...
...

WTF IS WITH THE EVANGELION-ESQUE SUMMER UNIFORMS?! Now I'm seeing Asuka in Kyou's shoes, not to mention Kotomi reminds me of Rei somehow...

And Kotomi-chaaan~~~ You're... Soo...

*flatlines*

Originally Posted by tshouryuu

You know, I didn't expect you to say that. Have you tried death via nose bleeds?

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Only Ginga has the ability to kill him, and revive him at the same time with pretty much the same thing

Like what Lowe said, the very thing that kills him could just as well revive him.

Originally Posted by Kagerou

Right, haxx-discussion aside...

Spoiler for Vivio?:

Name: Vivio Takamachi
Age: 14
Gender: Female
Origin: Midchilda
Affiliation: Saint Church

Mage Class: Close-range
Magic Rank: AA+
Magic System: Neo-Belkan
Magic Color: Silver
Magic Affinity: Holy
Magic Style: Prefers using fists.
Magic Device: Intelligent Device "Sacred Dream" (Is referred to as "Yume")

Height: Short
Weight: Light
Build: Small
Eyes: One Red, one Green
Hair: Blonde.
Hair Style: Long. Formally had a side ponytail, but has dropped it since.
Facial Features: ... like duh?

TSAB Profile: N/A

Personality:
- Alignment: Chaotic Neutral, Good Tendancies
Vivio has changed over the years. What was once a bright-eyed girl looking forward to the future is now held back by her own self-doubt and worry. She can be stubborn at times, but has a tendancy to cave in. Years of moving around from place to place have left her feeling mistrustful of others, especially the closer they get to her; the sole exception to this rule is Syn, and the two share a strong bond. Much like her mother Fate, she can be loving and kind, but because of how the past eight years of her life have been thanks to her mother Nanoha, she's not quite as stable as she used to be.

Device: Sacred Dream is a Device created by Aurion Dauer, specifically as a gift to Vivio for her 12th birthday. It's storage form is a red sphere gem with yellow "flames" in it, thus resembling a mix of Bardiche and Raising Heart. When active, the Device becomes a Bo Staff, allowing Vivio to fight in melee. Her own special brand of fighting is directly tuned to the ID, and thanks to the Device's personality, the two get along well. Vivio calls Sacred Dream "Yume", and the Device itself randomly gives Vivio some form of honorific. ("Ma'am, master, mistress, etc.")

Barrier Jacket: As it was briefly in StrikerS, but with different colors; primarily white with red trim.

Spells:
Attack Spells:
Silver Fang: Standard melee spell for Vivio. Two silver "fangs" of light emit out of stand, both of them on the same side and general location. Converts the Staff into a Slashing Weapon.

Silver Spear: As above, but modifies the staff into a Piercing Weapon.
Silver Strike: By charging the staff with magical energy, Vivio unleashes a powerful attack against her opponent.

Sunwell Shot: As Nanoha's Divine Shooter, but at point-blank range (up to 2m), and only one shot per cast.
Moonwell Smasher: Same as Nanoha's Divine Buster, but instead requires significantly more charge time.

Ashbringer: Similar to Fate's Zamber Form; Vivio summons a gigantic blade of energy to attack her opponents with.
Stormstrike: The Staff becomes charged with lightning, and a spear-tip forms again. Vivio can hurl the spear great distances (100m is her record; this is a magically-enhanced throw, mind you).

Medivh: Vivio channels more energy into her staff and swings it in an arc, emitting a powerful burst of energy that causes massive damage (for her rank).

Starlight Sunder: Collection-type energy blast spell. Vivio channels energy into her hands then cuts loose with a torrent of energy.

Oops, forgot defensive spells.

...Fists?

Apart from the Fate-mama bits (I stick firmly to Fate coming to leave Vivio in the arms of Yuuno and Nanoha. :3), it fits most of the time. I always theorized that Vivio'd:

- Grow up to be a tsundere, while you see her "twin" Sak-chan turning into Konata.
- Grab a device from Aurion someday. Everyone does from the Oji-san.
- Tsunderes are unstable, though I never guess it'll be Nanoha's fault.

As for the rest...

BEHOLD!

THE SLAYER OF SUNWELL!
THE MESSENGER OF MEDIVH!
THE SHAMAN OF LIGHT AND PALADIN OF NATURE!
THE EMBODIMENT OF THE SECOND SUNDERING!
THE ASHBRINGER!


I GIVE YOU! THE GOD EMPRESS OF NEW BELKA!


ZEIG HEIL VIVIO!
LONG LIVE THE KAISER!!!

?????: Oh looks what you've done. You've gone and spoilt everything!



*runs*

Originally Posted by LoweGear

You go to hell in the end anyway... but not before having a glimpse of 'heaven'

*Runs from flaming chariot*

Mai-chaaan~~ <3

*soul is dragged behind the boat to Hell*

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Does that for you too huh?

In other news, Kotomi-chaan~~ (<3)'s voice reminds me of Minami Noto's.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

*looks at Mai's burning fury*

... Kha, you better run

*throws Exia Hiro at Throne Drei Mai, making sure their faces meet*

*then RUNS out of Hell again*

Originally Posted by tshouryuu

If death via nose bleeds did not work, kawaii overload wouldn't kill Tais. Then again, if it works, Renji (Yes, Reiji, I know I spelt your name wrongly but this time its on purpose ) would be very happy I think. His signature would fit perfectly into this scenario

Spoiler for 'Tais's death':

Speaker 1: Hey, Hey have you heard about it yet?
Speaker 2: About what?
Speaker 1: Corporal Tais Scien died.
Speaker 2: He died? How and who did he pissed off this time?
Speaker 1: The thing is, he didn't piss off anyone.
Speaker 2: You mean he died just like that? Without anyone 'helping' him along?
Speaker 1: Not exactly. They weren't trying to kill him, it was just a small prank.
Speaker 2: ...... You're saying, despite him managing to piss off a ton of powerful people by accident, he met his end, not under the hands of those he annoyed but because someone played a joke on him?!
Speaker 1: Since you put it that way, you could say that.
Speaker 2: ......
Speaker 1: ......
Speaker 2: So what exactly was the cause of death?
Speaker 1: Well, he had overdosed on enough MOE to kill a small water buffalo.
Speaker 2: 'Water Buffalo?'
Speaker 1: I got tired of saying small horse...

Sorry about using your signature without asking Reiji

SO... The next big movie Mr Scien is gonna star in is Tais Must Die, starring Jiet Li () as Tais?

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Quick! Send in our Specialist! Martin! Send in... Him.

"Yessir!" "Deploying special forces unit Von Strangle!"



"Now you will taste the wrath... of my AWESOME FAIRY POWER!"

Quick Kha! Hide behind him! It might buy you about four seconds!

EDIT:

Spoiler for more:

I'll get back to the more entertaining part of the story for now and see what crops up in terms of technical scaling.

As far as the Arc-en-ciel scene I wrote goes, I don't think it's a bad piece for a few hours work, so I'll keep it on file for refference. As for the character. I think I'll keep him and his background the way it is. For the most part, even if the scene gets completely dropped (Depends entirely on where the story goes from the EDI plot) I like the idea that he's an old Vet of the test force who helped develope the Arc's concept who pretty much tore himself apart to get it working. It'll fit in with his overly serious and punctual tone and his concern for the test pilots well being. (Even if he shows it in the TOUGH LOVE format.)

Someone mentioned he sounded like he'd be an @$$ of a character. Well, not everyone can be good and nice characters. The fun part is he can't reveal why he's such a punk about everything because he's pretty much bound by a combination of secrecy protocalls and 'Need to Know' protocalls.

Part of the dramatic impact of this kind of character overall would be keeping it hidden from the readers for the story length, while dropping subtle hints in his words or actions. (That way, when it comes time to reveal the hand, one isn't seeming to jump over any sharks.)

Anyway, for now, rest. That idea alone generated nearly three pages of discussion over two days. All because I had 'CODE ZEUS: Orbital Strike' cranked up in my car on the way to work while thinking about how to procede from the landing in chapter two. I've got to get back to thinking about that, because I've already had a couple of demands elsewhere for a chapter update. O_o; I must move forward.

Edit AGAIN:

Funny scene in my head. Too punny to pass up.

*LIME AI comes over the Intercom...*

LIME: Hey hey HEY! This is Lime shouting out to everyone on base. Listen up! I have an announcement! You listening? Good! Okay! Would test pilot unit one CRASH, and Unit two FOX, please report to TICTOCC immediately? CRASH, FOX, report to TICTOCC, Tick-tock tick-tock! The Clock is ticking, hurry and report to TICTOCC! Heheheheh.... This is Lime, signing off.

[Kagerou]

As I said, I'll continue to scenes as they finish, and then put the final result in the fanfiction thread. As the story picks up, the scenes will get longer, rather than these little introduction scenes that you're getting. So, here's Maho Shoujo Lyrical Nanoha Alpha, Episode I, Scene II:

Spoiler for Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Alpha, Episode 1, Scene 2:

Non-Administered World 13UH (Uninhabited) - Moon 4

"Man, it's cold. Really cold. Really damn cold, even."
"Vita, language."

Vita Yagami looked at the old man who had just scolded her, a glare on her face. "Since when do you care whether or not I curse?"

"Well, I can't let kids I know just fire off remarks like that," Aurion Dauer said, smirking.
"You know I'm older than that!" Vita fired back. Aurion simply laughed and patted her on the head, causing her to flush. "S-stop that, I'm not a kid!"

"No, but you certainly act like one," he asid. "Hmm... it appears that Hayate and the others are late. I thought Tesla was supposed to keep them on time for these kinds of things."

The two were stranded; well, stranded was too strong of a word, as a TSAB assault cruiser was parked in orbit around the moon. Aurion and Vita, were however, alone on the barren moon, which barely had enough oxygen to support the need for it and an atmosphere just thick enough to prevent the oxygen from escaping. Nonetheless, Aurion had an oxygen tank strapped to his back for an emergency, and he was already beginning to feel light-headed. Vita likewise had the same equipment.

Underneath their uniforms, the two wore skintight body suits, which was supposed to help them acclimate to the cold weather. It helped somewhat, but Vita was still shivering as she stared up at the ship just outside of the atmosphere. Aurion seemed unfazed as he tossed a cell-phone shaped Device up and down, watching as it seemed to suspend higher and longer in the air due to the lessened gravity.

"You could stop that at any time, Aurion-san," the Device said.
"I will when Hayate gets here, Almaria," he promised, though from the look on his face he showed no signs of actually stopping.

"Sure you will," Vita muttered, still staring. "Well, here they come. It's about time, I wanna go back home already."

A blink of light emitted from the assault cruiser and approached the moon, slowly growing bigger and dimmer; a result of starlight reflecting less off of it. Aurion narrowed his eyes at the ship, catching Almaria without looking. The ship nosed upward as it approached, deploying landing gear and slowing its descent until it touched down some fifty meters away, kicking up dust and forcing the two already on the ground to cover their eyes. As the ship's engines spooled down, the airlock opened and deployed a ramp downward. Five figures exited the ship and made their way down the ramp, toward the two of them. As they neared, Aurion gave a salute.

"Rear Admiral Tesla Yagami and Brigadier General Hayate Yagami, it's a pleasure," he said firmly.
"At ease, Oji-chan," Hayate laughed, causing both Tesla and the rest of the Wolkenritter to relax by reflex. "How long has it been?"

"Too long," Aurion answered, smiling. "As always, it's nice to see you all."
"It would be nice if you could all show up on time," Almaria chirped.
"...that, too."

"Originally, we were going to teleport," Signum said from behind and to the left of Hayate. "However, in case something goes wrong and they cannot achieve a lock on our signal to get us out, it would be easier to run for the Normandy," She gestured toward the ship behind her. "The crew is on standby, in case we come running out."

"Hmm, good idea," Aurion admitted. "We are dealing with technology that's possibly derived from Al-Hazared itself. True Lost Logia..."

"So that's what this mission is about?" Tesla asked as she and the other Wolkenritter surrounded Aurion as he turned around, making his way to a cave that he and Vita were standing in front of. "More Lost Logia?"

"I was under the impression that Al-Hazared was... somewhere else," Zafira said as the group moved into a single file line with Aurion at the lead and himself at the back. There was a simultaneous activation of flashlights. "At least, that's one of the theories,"

"That's true," Aurion said. "It is one of the theories. However, recent evidence, such as the encrypted signals coming from this moon, suggest that Al-Hazared was a civilization that spanned the galaxy. They probably had such advanced Dimension Warping capabilities that it was as if they were all concentrated in one star system or one world."

"Wouldn't that contradict other evidence?" Hayate asked. "Many of the Relic Lost Logia from the JS Incident was believed to be found on Midchilda, if I recall."

"Yes, but remember the two incidents that took place on your own homeworld of Terra," Aurion said. "Lost Logia are everywhere, Hayate. And haven't you ever wondered why there are so many humans that, genetically, only vary by the percent chance of developing Linker Cores? Why are there humans in Midchilda, Terra, and the other hundreds of administered worlds? Remember, The TSAB has many member worlds that already had humans on them prior to First Contact."

"This is going outside the realm of Lost Logia and into the realm of Scifi," Tesla said, feeling slightly uncomfortable all of a sudden. "Humans on other worlds and Lost Logia spanning the galaxy? So are you saying that Al-Hazaredean humans spanned the galaxy as a sort of Precursor or Forerunner race?"

"That's exactly what I'm saying." Aurion stated.
"He may be right," Rein suddenly piped up from behind Zafira (how long had she been there?). "My kind were far more common back in those days, and there are some Unison Devices that are even older. Really, Agito-san is about nine th-"

"Shut up!" Agito shouted from Signum's shoulder, huffing and crossing her arms. "Anyway, Aurion-san."
"...right..." Aurion resisted the urge to facepalm. "Many Devices from those days seem to speak our languages quite well, don't you think? And don't you think it's odd that Terra is such a huge mash of seem like disparate cultures when most planets by now have a single, unifying one?"

"We don't know," Signum said levelly. "Al-Hazared is one of the larger mysteries of the universe."
"I'm beginning to think that might not be true, Signum," Aurion replied as he slowed down. "For you see, I think we're about to solve one of the galaxy's mysteries. The key, is right behind me."

"What do you mean?" Hayate asked. "You mean, myself? What kind of key?" Aurion didn't answer as he took several steps forward, then turned right, pointing his flashlight down the cavern. He motioned for the rest of the party to approach him, speaking as walked up.

"The galaxy is full of mysteries," he told them. "We are always trying to get the answers to those mysteries. When I was approached by the R&D Division for this Lost Logia case, I was confused. But now, I think I understand. Observe!" He turned sideways and pointed down the cavern. "This cavern is really a long gate, to this!"

Hayate rounded the corner, took one look, and gasped.

Before her was a large, metallic object, roughly two and a half meters tall and thrice that wide at its widest point. The overlapping plates that composed the object seemed to shine in a purple-blue light, seemingly unconnected and yet solid in its design. It was truly a door meant to protect something. And Hayate had the key.

In one of the door's plates, an image was engraved; that of a long staff that opened up at the end in a cross-like shape. As Hayate touched the symbol/etching, it glowed a soft white. "This image..." she whispered. "It's unmistakable..." fingers tightened around the object hanging off of her neck.

The symbol on the door, was an unmistakable match for Schwertkreuz.

So... anyone think that maybe I set Tesla's rank too high, or maybe Hayate's? It is eight years later, but if general consensus is to lower it, then I will.

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Normandy... A ship name that just ASKS for ship-to-ship boarding action.

Can't say much on the ranks... Rear Admiral and Brig. General sound about right if they have charge of say, a Post apiece. (Battlegroup in the case of the admiral, and a military base in the case of the general.)

[Kagerou]

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

Normandy... A ship name that just ASKS for ship-to-ship boarding action.

Can't say much on the ranks... Rear Admiral and Brig. General sound about right if they have charge of say, a Post apiece. (Battlegroup in the case of the admiral, and a military base in the case of the general.)

Both were in charge of a small defence fleet and GF battlegroup, respectively. Aurion called them in because of A: The scene above and B: Their experience in dealing with Lost Logia in general (Thanks to Yami no Sho, JS Incident, RF6...)

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

So long as one remembers that the high level military ranks, especially officer ranks, are remembered to be limited opening positions. It's all good. Generals and Admirals are Leadership JOB positions. Usually fleet commanders, post commanders, and special department heads.

[tshouryuu]

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

Quick! Send in our Specialist! Martin! Send in... Him.

"Yessir!" "Deploying special forces unit Von Strangle!"



"Now you will taste the wrath... of my AWESOME FAIRY POWER!"

Quick Kha! Hide behind him! It might buy you about four seconds!

EDIT:

Spoiler for more:

I'll get back to the more entertaining part of the story for now and see what crops up in terms of technical scaling.

As far as the Arc-en-ciel scene I wrote goes, I don't think it's a bad piece for a few hours work, so I'll keep it on file for refference. As for the character. I think I'll keep him and his background the way it is. For the most part, even if the scene gets completely dropped (Depends entirely on where the story goes from the EDI plot) I like the idea that he's an old Vet of the test force who helped develope the Arc's concept who pretty much tore himself apart to get it working. It'll fit in with his overly serious and punctual tone and his concern for the test pilots well being. (Even if he shows it in the TOUGH LOVE format.)

Someone mentioned he sounded like he'd be an @$$ of a character. Well, not everyone can be good and nice characters. The fun part is he can't reveal why he's such a punk about everything because he's pretty much bound by a combination of secrecy protocalls and 'Need to Know' protocalls.

Part of the dramatic impact of this kind of character overall would be keeping it hidden from the readers for the story length, while dropping subtle hints in his words or actions. (That way, when it comes time to reveal the hand, one isn't seeming to jump over any sharks.)

Anyway, for now, rest. That idea alone generated nearly three pages of discussion over two days. All because I had 'CODE ZEUS: Orbital Strike' cranked up in my car on the way to work while thinking about how to procede from the landing in chapter two. I've got to get back to thinking about that, because I've already had a couple of demands elsewhere for a chapter update. O_o; I must move forward.

Edit AGAIN:

Funny scene in my head. Too punny to pass up.

*LIME AI comes over the Intercom...*

LIME: Hey hey HEY! This is Lime shouting out to everyone on base. Listen up! I have an announcement! You listening? Good! Okay! Would test pilot unit one CRASH, and Unit two FOX, please report to TICTOCC immediately? CRASH, FOX, report to TICTOCC, Tick-tock tick-tock! The Clock is ticking, hurry and report to TICTOCC! Heheheheh.... This is Lime, signing off.

As for the scene, the writing isn't bad its the ideas. I have pointed out the points where its rather iffy imo. As for the OC, being a old tough SOB is ok. Its the concept you're operation on that I highly disagree with. As mentioned before, why would the prototype Arc need to be using a mage to provide the power and fire it on an island when said prototype can be mounted and attached to a generator and programmed to shoot a target (rock) in space, preventing both damage to mage and land. I need to go check this next part but I think the Arc was developed more than 35 years ago.

[Kagerou]

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

So long as one remembers that the high level military ranks, especially officer ranks, are remembered to be limited opening positions. It's all good. Generals and Admirals are Leadership JOB positions. Usually fleet commanders, post commanders, and special department heads.

I'll try . Due to the circumstances that occur within the next few chapters, though, this may get turned on its head.

Originally Posted by tshouryuu

As for the scene, the writing isn't bad its the ideas. I have pointed out the points where its rather iffy imo. As for the OC, being a old tough SOB is ok. Its the concept you're operation on that I highly disagree with. As mentioned before, why would the prototype Arc need to be using a mage to provide the power and fire it on an island when said prototype can be mounted and attached to a generator and programmed to shoot a target (rock) in space, preventing both damage to mage and land. I need to go check this next part but I think the Arc was developed more than 35 years ago.

Hmm... I want to say that the Asura was one of the first Arc-installed ships?

And if I recall correctly, the principle of using a mage as a guinea pig instead of machinery is actually close to being completely viable. If you're a pilot and you eject, you're more likely to be yelled at for losing a billion dollar piece of equipment than seeing people concerned for your safety. As far as military is concerned (in some cases), a person is expendable. Machinery, is not.

[Wild Goose]

To follow on above, this normally happens when the aircraft in question is rare, one of a kind, or really really REALLY special.

If it's a run of the mill Hornet or Tomcat, the Navy would prefer to write off the plane as the plane is considered less valuable than a trained pilot and RIO.

Whether the pilot surviveves his fellows after trashing a Sacred Tomcat is another matter entirely...

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Quick answer for the prominent question. *I'm TRYING to get to sleep, but the people in the house don't seem to like it nice and cool... so I'm MELTING here...*

Merely as a potential answer to why a mage would be used over equipment. Perhaps slapping a generator to a cannon WAS attempted, but didn't get anywhere because they could only figure out HALF of the puzzle. The equipment was insufficient for getting a test firing done because they needed to fill in the gaps before the equipment would work. That would tie in that a mage had to be good enough, and powerful enough, to generate an attack based on a support device and rudimentary magical principles. It would only be after at least ONE successful test shot that there would be enough recorded data to reproduce completely mechanical substitutes.

*Shrug.* Just a random thought, I'm going to try and go to sleep again, this headache and it being unnaturally warm for sleeping is a bit annoying.