Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by alavon

[believe it or not, i was seriously thinking of making that knight snap...

...

Maybe i'll do it as an omake?

Do it! Do it! Do it!

EDIT: Pageclaim for snapping!

[Satashi]

I know I shouldn't post too much of my fic before its done, but I just can't help it.

Have some happy Christmas fun teasers this si going to be a really fun fic to write

Spoiler for Another Nanoha Christmas Story:

Vivio grinned up at her mother as Nanoha tried in vain to reach the last inch to staple the lights at the peak of their house. "Can you get it, mama?" She called up, unable to suppress the laughter in her voice.

Nanoha grunted, trying her best not to hop on the ladder. Already at the very top on her tiptoes, she kept struggling to make it. "I can get it, Vivio," came the annoyed reply. "Just... one... inch..." After a few more seconds of trying, she rebalanced herself. "Hayate-chan would never know if I flew up an inch."

"Yes I would," Hayate's voice shocked Nanoha enough to grab a hold of the house to keep from falling off the ladder. "You okay up there, Nanoha-chan?"

"Ha-Hayate-chan!" Nanoha looked down and laughed nervously. "When did you get here?"

"Right about the time you said you would fly. You know there are laws, and I am the one who has to take responsibility when you break them."

"It's one inch!" Nanoha protested.

"Laws are laws, Mama." Vivio called up, much to Hayate's delight. "Want me to gt it for you?"

Nanoha puffed out her cheeks and tried again, balancing as best she could on her toes. "No! I have it!"

The shorter woman on the ground looked over at Vivio with a happy smile. "She's still in denial that you're taller than her now."

"She is not!" Nanoha yelled loudly.

Vivio bit back a laugh. "Mama, just come down and let me do it." Her words made Nanoha look down at her for several moments before giving off a sad sigh. "But you always hold the ladder for me while I put up lights..."

Hayate crossed her arms. "And Fate-chan always get that last little bit for you. Admit it, Nanoha, Vivio hit a growth spurt this year. You were complaining about it when you had to buy her new clothes, like her bras."

"Aunt Hayate!" the blonde blushed darkly and resisted covering her chest in favor of holding the ladder stable for Nanoha's decent. "don't say things like that so loudly!"

With a laugh Hayate shook her head. "Hey, be proud of yourself! The first girl to hit double D before the age of eighteen!"

Nanoha huffed at her friend while giving Vivio the staple gun. "Shush, Hayate-chan."

Vivio climbed the ladder and easily stapled the lights to the border. Once done she started working them down and over to the side to finish off that section of the house. "There, all done!"

Hayate nudged her friend softly. "She's grown up into quite the girl, hasn't she."

"Yeah," Nanoha admitted proudly, but her voice was laced with a bit of sadness. "I can't beleive I've had her for almost eleven years now..."

"Believe it," Vivio told her happily. "And next year I graduate high school. I wonder what apartments I should look at?"

Hayate covered her mouth when Vivio winked at her. Nanoha, on the other hand, crossed her arms firmly. "You're not moving out."

"Sure, sure," Vivio was robbed of her teasing when a truck pulled into the driveway. "Fate-mama's back!" Running over to the truck, the girl looked at the large Christmas tree in the back. "Wow, its huge!"

The blonde opened the passenger side door while her brother got out of teh other side. "Its nine feet."

Nanoha put a hand to her chin. "Will it fit with the star on top?"

Fate nodded. "Yes, our ceiling peaks at twelve feet near where the tree will go, so it will be fine."

"By the front windows?" Chrono asked curiously, letting down the tailgate.

Nanoha shook her head. "I thought we decided to put it near the back wall?"

"No," Vivio disagreed. "You decided that. Fate-mama and I agreed on the front window. Out numbered two-to-one."

Hayate clapped her hands before Nanoha could pout. "On that note, lets get this lovely tree into the house! Ami asked me to make sure dear little Chrono would make it back in time to go shopping with her."

"Shoot me," Chrono muttered under his breath while pulling the tree from his truck bed. "Why do I have to do the hard work, you girls are stronger than me anyway."

Vivio helped with the middle of the tree. "Because your the boy, that's why."

"What about Yuuno?" the male grunted while carrying the tree with Vivio's help, lead by Fate near the front while Nanoha and Hayate discussed placement as if they had a choice in the matter after the two blondies made up their minds.

"Yuuno-san doesn't count," Vivio answered the question. "He's more female than Syn."

"That's not saying much," Fate mused absently. "Okay, Brother, can you make it into the tree stand?"

"Don't call me that," Chrono struggled to get the trunk into the stand. "It's embarrassing."

After watching the small group struggle for a few moments, Hayate finally voiced her thoughts aloud. "Did you cut the tree yourself?"

"No," Chrono sighed out as the tree finally fell into the stand. "We just picked it out."

"Because," Hayate pointed at it. "Pre-cut trees need to be trimmed on the bottom so they will drink the water and absorb the nutrients."

Chrono looked at Hayate and then to Fate. "You're kidding, right?"

"Knew I forgot something." Fate bopped her fist onto her palm. A small silence passed through the group before everyone looked at Chrono again.

"For the love of..."

[Rising Dragon]

"Yuuno's more female that Syn."

... ouch.

[00-Raiser]

@Satashi: Haha, poor Chrono. Funny you should have Nanoha say that one line, though, considering I was just about to post this:

Ok folks, so here I am with what could possibly be my final Vivio/Yuuno fic. Well, there's the lemon, but that takes place during this fic. I haven't started it yet and might wait until I'm in a more comfortable place to do so.

As usual, this fic includes a helping of NanoFate too, but this time there's also Rio/OC and Corona/OC.

Spoiler for The Big Step:

“Ok, so let me make sure I have this straight.” Yuuno said. “This is an outing with your friends to celebrate finally graduating from high school, correct?”

“Yup, that’s right.” Vivio answered.

“Then why am I here?”

“Rio and Corona’s boyfriends are coming, so of course I’d invite you too.”

“And why choose the pool?”

“Because it’s summer!” Vivio smiled as she looked over at the entrance to the water park where a large number of people were entering. It was a popular spot, especially now that the schools were on break.

“Vivio! Yuuno-sensei! Sorry to keep you waiting!” Corona and Rio called as they ran up to them, each with a boy in tow.

“We didn’t wait that long.” Vivio assured them.

“We would have been here sooner, but Rio takes a surprisingly long time to get ready, despite her boyish looks.” The shorter, red headed boy explained.

“Hey, Ryuu, why do you have to say unnecessary things?” Rio huffed, attempting to jab him with her elbow.

“Because I like seeing you flustered.” He stuck out his tongue as he dodged the blow and took off when she started chasing him.

“Get back here, you!”

“There they go again.” Vivio sighed.

“They get along so well, don’t they?” Corona noted.

“He could stand to be a bit more delicate.” The taller, raven haired boy added before he turned to Yuuno and offered his hand. “It’s good to see you again, professor.”

“You as well, Honda.” Yuuno shook his hand. “How is the university treating you?”

“Very well, thanks.” Honda smiled. “Once again I must say how much I appreciate you giving me that referral. I don’t think I would have been accepted if you hadn’t.”

“I doubt that.” Yuuno denied with a shake of his head. “You’re a hard worker who I’m sure would have gotten accepted anyways.”

“And it’s thanks to hard work that Corona will be joining you there next year, right?” Vivio grinned as she nudged her friend. “This girl studied extra hard to pass those entrance exams.”

“Vivio, stop that!” Corona blushed. Her face reddened further when Honda put his arm around her.

“I’m well aware, and I couldn’t be prouder of her.” He said. “I’m looking forward to attending the same school as her again.”

“Haha! I caught you!” Rio declared triumphantly as she returned to the group, holding Ryuu in a headlock.

“Damn it, I lost again!” He lamented.

“I’ve always been faster than you, so this outcome was obvious!”

“Now that we’re all here, let’s head inside!” Vivio declared. The group did so and split off into the changing rooms of their respective genders. It didn’t take long for the guys to change into their trunks and move into the main pool area.

“This place is huge!” Ryuu said in awe as he looked around. “Wow, that water slide looks intense! I can’t wait to take it for a spin!”

“Your enthusiasm never ceases to amuse me.” Honda chuckled at the younger boy.

“Never a dull moment when I’m around, eh sempai?” Ryuu grinned. He almost dove into the pool before he reminded himself to wait for the girls. “So teach,” He turned to Yuuno. “Good thing you managed to get the day off.”

“It was a little short notice,” Yuuno scratched the back of his head. “But my staff all had huge grins on their faces as they said they’d be just fine without me.”

“Must be hard to have such a demanding job.” Honda said.

“Well, it’s really just Chrono that makes it hard.” Yuuno gave a short laugh. “I’m just glad it hasn’t hurt my relationship with Vivio like it has with others.”

“I have a hard time seeing anything hurting your relationship with Takamachi.” Ryuu stated. “I’ve known her since middle school and even back then she’d always talk about this amazing older guy and how she really respected how dedicated he was to his job.”

“Oh, really?” Yuuno flushed a little. “I didn’t know she spoke so highly of me back then.”

“You would never believe how everyone reacted when one day she came to school and declared that she had finally made you her boyfriend.” Ryuu chuckled slightly. “I’m surprised that not everyone broke down in tears over the school idol being taken away.”

“And that’s when you thought ‘I need to make my move too’ and confessed to Rio,” Honda smirked. “Right?”

“Hey, it wasn’t that easy.” Ryuu crossed his arms and angled away. “We’ve been rivals for ages, so I thought she hated me. It took a lot of guts to tell her my feelings when I was sure I’d be shot down.”

“Well, the results speak for themselves.” Honda said as he patted the other boy’s back.

“You had it easy, sempai. Timil is the one who confessed to you.”

“To be honest, that’s only because I didn’t have the same guts you did.” Honda smiled wryly. “I was incredibly elated when the cute underclassman I always had eyes for asked to go out with me.”

“However you ended up this way, I’ll tell you this much.” Yuuno passed a glance between his fellow males. “I’ve known those girls a lot longer than you, so I can tell that they’re both very happy when they’re with you.”

“I’m relieved to hear that.” Honda smiled.

“Yeah, thanks teach.” Ryuu rubbed the back of his head. “But you must have it tough, what with Takamachi’s moms being the way they are.” He hugged himself and shivered as he relived a past trauma. “I’m sorry m’am, I won’t call your daughter ‘boat lights’ again, I swear!”

“I get that a lot.” Yuuno laughed humourlessly.

“Sorry for the wait, boys, but I promise it was worth it!”

“It’s about time, Ri…” Ryuu stopped short as he saw the three girls approaching.

“So, what do you think?” Rio grinned as she showed off her blue racerback.

“How did you know my… uh…” Ryuu hid the rest of his statement with a cough. “Here I was expecting something more revealing! Well… it doesn’t look too bad, I guess.”

“Oh really?” Rio chuckled, knowing from the magazines she found under his bed that he liked this kind of swimsuit the best. “Is that all? Or is it just that you know you’ll never be able to beat me in the water because I’m wearing it?”

“Heck no!” He huffed. “Like that will give you the advantage!”

“Care to put that theory to the test?”

“You’re on!” With that they both made their way to the water, unnoticed by the others.

“You look incredibly cute in that, Corona.” Honda smiled, studying the girl’s yellow tankini. “It made my heart skip a beat.”

“T-Thank you, Honda-sempai.” She said back. “I wasn’t too sure about it.”

“You look wonderful in anything you wear, Corona.”

“I think the same about you, sempai.”

“Really? I’m glad.” He held out his hand. “Why don’t we take a walk around and see what all there is to do here?”

“Ok.” Corona smiled as she took his hand and they walked off.

Yuuno didn’t notice because he was far too busy being captivated by the girl before him. Vivio wore a white bikini that with pink straps and trim that showed off much of her smooth curves and delicate looking skin. Just from glancing at her, one would never expect that she was able to punch some one through a wall. On top of it all, her hair lacked any sort of bind and fell freely down her back, a state which Yuuno rarely saw it in. The slight change added a refreshing feel to her otherwise striking appearance.

“Yuuno-san…” Vivio began fidgeting awkwardly under his gaze. “I’m not used to you staring at me like that…”

“Oh, I’m sorry.” Yuuno snapped himself out of it. “You just surprised me with how good you look. It suits you, your hair and that swimsuit.”

“Ehehe, I guess I made the right choice.” She smiled. “Now it’s time to have some fun, right every… Wait, where did they go?!”

“Huh?” Yuuno glanced around at where the other couples used to be. “I guess they got away while we weren’t paying attention.”

“Well, if they’re going to be like that, we’ll just have to play by ourselves!” Vivio decided, grabbing hold of Yuuno’s arm. “Let’s go on that huge waterslide first!”

“Ok, sure.” Yuuno agreed, trying to ignore the sensation of her breast against his arm.

---

After several hours of slides, inner tubes, inflatable balls, and lots and lots of water, the group managed to find each other and sit down for lunch.

“So far the score is five to two!” Rio declared as she bit into her hotdog. “I do believe that’s what you call an ass kicking, eh Ryuu?”

“Just wait until I refuel!” He shot back. “Then we’ll see who’s kicking whose ass!”

“Those two were simply made for each other, weren’t they?” Honda laughed as he sipped at his soft drink.

“Having a rival to compete against is really good for improving yourself.” Corona nodded, munching on her fries.

“Speaking of,” Yuuno spoke up, setting down his burger. “I was wondering why Einhart and Ixpellia didn’t come today.”

“They said something about not wanting to intrude on ‘couple time’.” Vivio shrugged, stealing one of Corona’s fries.

“Those two still haven’t found some one yet?” Honda inquired.

“Well, you know Stratos.” Ryuu said. “She insists on fighting anyone who confesses to her to test their strength and the results are always the same. Takamachi’s the only one I’ve ever seen face her on even ground.”

“I don’t really think Ix knows what exactly dating some one means.” Rio supposed. “She always looks so confused when some one gives her a love letter.”

“Can’t say I blame her.” Vivio exhaled. “Subaru-san is pretty protective of her, so I don’t think she’d let her date anyone anyways.”

“You’re probably right.”

“Do you know what those two will do now that they’re done school? Yuuno asked.

“Ix wants to be a communication officer for the Bureau.” Vivio said. “She wants to be the one to provide Subaru-san with radio support when she goes on rescue missions.”

“Ein is going to join the Bureau with Ryuu and I as combat mages.” Rio explained. “We’re gonna put all this training to good use!”

“You’re going to be working at the library from now on, right Vivio?” Corona asked.

“Yup.” Vivio affirmed, taking a drink. “Technically I’ve been working there as a librarian since I was nine, but now it’s going to be a full time thing.”

“She’ll also be assisting me in my research and at dig sites.” Yuuno added.

“But is it really all right to appoint your girlfriend to such a position?” Honda wondered.

“Well, she has been a staff member for nearly ten years already.” Yuuno said. “Everyone at the library has known for just as long, and they’re aware that she received the position because of her abilities, not because of her relation to me. It’s not all that uncommon for colleagues to become romantically involved anyways.”

“So you’re walking the path of the bookworm rather than the fighter?” Ryuu asked.

“For the most part, I guess.” Vivio smirked slightly. “There might be the occasional tomb raider I get to punish, though.”

“Or ancient guard robot.” Yuuno put in.

“Right, I forgot about those.” Vivio grinned. “I’ll be sure to protect you, Yuuno-san, so don’t worry!”

---

The second half of the day proceeded in a similar manner to the first, only with the addition of the men being horribly defeated by the women in a game of pool volleyball. Soon the day came to an end and it was time for everyone to go home.

“It’s not fair!” Ryuu complained. “All three of you have been doing Strike Arts since you were kids, while I got stuck with the academics!”

“Oh don’t be such a sore loser.” Rio said, taking his hand. “Come on, you can treat me to ice cream as punishment!”

“Fine, I guess I have no choice…” He smiled, squeezing her hand gently in return as they walked off after bidding the others farewell.

“Well, today has certainly been enjoyable. We must really do this again sometime professor, Vivio.” Honda said, pulling Corona in close. “Let’s go, Corona. I’ll walk you home.”

“Ok.” Corona blushed. “Have a good evening Vivio, Yuuno-sensei.”

“See you later, Corona!” Vivio waved as they left.

“I guess I should take you home as well, Vivio.” Yuuno said after a moment.

“Really? But it’s still not that late…” Vivio brushed a strand of her still free hair away from her face. “Can’t we spend a little more time together?”

“Ok, then how about we go back to my apartment for tea?”

“Sounds good!”

After a quick trip up to TSAB HQ’s residential district, they arrived at the door to Yuuno’s apartment.

“Excuse the intrusion.” Vivio said as she entered. Yuuno led her to the living room where she took a seat on the couch while he went to prepare the tea. She had only been there once or twice before, but it was still as empty as she had remembered it. There were no personal touches such as pictures on the wall, but Vivio knew that those were displayed in his office at the library. He spent far more time there than in this room.

“Here you go.” Yuuno said as he set down two cups of tea on his coffee table before taking a seat next to the girl.

“Thanks.” Vivio accepted the drink and took a sip. “I had a lot of fun today. I’m glad you were able to come.”

“So am I, Vivio.” Yuuno took a drink. “So you’re eighteen, out of high school and entering the work world. How do you feel?”

“Excited and a little nervous.” She answered honestly. “But I know I’ll be just fine because I have Yuuno-san by my side.”

“I promise I’ll be there whenever you need me.” He said, draining the rest of his tea before continuing. “Vivio, there’s something I want to ask you.”

“What is it, Yuuno-san?”

“Well, now that you’re going to be working with me at the library every day, I was thinking… Wouldn’t it be better if you lived close by? To be more specific…” He took a deep breath. “Would you like to move in with me?”

“… Could you repeat that?” Vivio asked, wanting to hear him say it again.

“I want us to live together.” He stated this time, voice filled with conviction. Vivio didn’t even need to think it over for she knew her answer immediately.

“Yes! Of course!” She beamed, wrapping her arms around his neck. “I’d love to!”

“It’s settled then.” They locked looks for a few moments until their lips gradually found each other. The first didn’t last very long before they broke away, but they didn’t get very far until they found each other again, and again, each more passionate than the last.

Yuuno found that he couldn’t get enough of her. The joy of her saying yes and the hunger that had arisen in him upon seeing her in her swimsuit all day threatened to overtake his logic. He leaned further into each kiss until eventually Vivio was on her back and he hovered over her.

“Yuuno-san… wait…” Her whisper cut through the fog of desire.

“Ah! I’m sorry! I shouldn’t have gotten carried away if you don’t…” He tried to move away, but her arms held him in place.

“Can… Can we go to your bed?” She panted slightly, face red and eyes clouded with longing like his were.

“Ok…” He gently helped her off the couch and, gingerly holding her fingers with his, led her to the bedroom.

---

Vivio had to resist the urge to prance through the door the next morning. She felt amazing and didn’t want to hide it, but with all that happened the night before she had totally forgotten to tell her mothers where she was. So she hoped to sneak in unnoticed and perhaps make her mamas believe she had been home the entire time.

She slowly opened the front door, only to see Fate handing Nanoha her jacket.

There goes that plan.

“Vivio Takamachi.” Nanoha said sternly when she saw her daughter. “Just where have you been all night?”

“I… uh… I’m sorry, mama…” Vivio said defectively as she slunk into the house, trying her hardest to look repentant.

Nanoha let out a heavy sigh. “It’s ok if you want to stay over at a friend’s house for the night, but I expect you to at least call us and say so. I don’t want to have to call Rio, asking where you are only to have her tell me you’re staying at her place.”

Vivio made a mental note to thank Rio later.

“Furthermore…” Nanoha meant to continue, but Fate cut in.

“Nanoha, if you don’t leave now you’re going to miss your seminar.” She gave her wife a quick peck on the lips. “I’ll talk to Vivio, so you can get going, ok?”

“All right, Fate-chan.” Nanoha relented. “But I have some things to say when I get back. See then Fate-chan, Vivio.” With that Nanoha headed out, closing the door behind her.

“I’m really sorry, Fate-mama…” Vivio apologised again.

“Let’s take this into the living room, Vivio.” Fate said as she gently led the girl inside where they seated themselves on the couch. “You didn’t spend the night at Rio’s did you?”

“… As expected of Fate-mama…” Vivio sighed. “I’ve never been able to hide things from you.”

“Of course,” Fate chuckled softly. “Vivio, you’re glowing.”

“… It’s that obvious?”

“If Nanoha wasn’t in such a hurry a moment ago, even she would have noticed it.”

“You won’t lecture me about it, right?”

“I just want to make sure of something.” Fate said. “He didn’t pressure you into it, right? It was something you both wanted?”

“Yes, of course!” Vivio responded immediately. “It hurt a little at first, but he was so gentle the whole time and it ended up feeling wonderful. When we were done, he just held me in his arms for the rest of the night…” A content sigh escaped her mouth before she could stop it.

“Ok, you don’t have to say any more about that.” Fate held up her hands. “… Did you make sure to use protection?”

“…”

“… Vivio?”

“… Oops?” She smiled sheepishly. “I guess both of us forgot about that…”

Fate sighed. “I hope you’re ready for the potential consequences…”

“Well… There is something else.” Vivio made sure to look her mother in the eye. “Yuuno-san asked me to move in with him, and I said yes.”

“I see.” Fate smiled softly. “Congratulations, Vivio.”

“You aren’t going to try and stop me?”

“Of course not.” Fate chuckled. “Nanoha might not be too keen on the idea, but we both knew that you would have to move out eventually and we’re glad you’ll be with some one we love and trust. I know this has been said in many after school specials, but it’s true: no matter where you are, you will always be our daughter.”

“Thank you, Fate-mama.” Vivio sniffed as she hugged her. “And you’ll always be my mamas.”

“Well, we know where you’ll be living, and it’s not that long of a trip so I’m sure we’ll still see lots of each other.” Fate hugged back. “But now comes the hard part.”

“What’s that?”

“Telling Nanoha about it.”

---

Yuuno couldn’t help but hum a happy little tune as he swivelled in his office chair. He could not think of a single reason not to be so elated. Even the work that had piled up while he was gone was nothing compared to the fact that he had made love to Vivio the night before and that she had agreed to move in with him.

“Come in!” He nearly sang when there was a knock on the door.

“You sure sound like you’re in a good mood, Yuuno-kun.” Nanoha noted when she entered.

“Oh, Nanoha.” A drop of worried was present in his voice. “I wasn’t expecting you.”

“I had a meeting that didn’t go nearly as long as I thought it would.” She explained, sitting down on the guest sofa. “So I thought I’d drop in and talk to you.”

“Talk to me? About what?”

“Yuuno-kun, what exactly did you and Vivio do yesterday?”

“… Did Vivio say something?”

“She didn’t have to.” Nanoha smile slightly. “She had the same look on her face Fate-chan did the day after we first slept together. Your attitude merely confirms it.”

“I had no intention of hiding it from you, but…” Yuuno met her eyes. “Yes, last night Vivio and I consummated our relationship.”

“… I suppose you expect me to take out Raising Heart and blast you?”

“Well, that’s certainly what everyone’s been saying would happen.” He smiled humourlessly. “But joking aside, I know you wouldn’t do something like that, Nanoha. You care about Vivio more than anyone and while you are protective of her, you wouldn’t do anything to restrict her independence or jeopardize her happiness.”

“That’s right.” Nanoha laughed slightly. “But people like to joke that I’m some trigger happy woman that would blast anyone who dare do anything to her little girl. Sometimes I can’t help but think that you’re only with Vivio so that she won’t be sad and you’ll escape my wrath.”

“I assure you that’s not the case.” He smiled. “I truly do love Vivio and I want to be with her. Besides, if I didn’t feel that way what would I have to worry about? You’ve never been able to intentionally break one of my barriers.”

“I can’t deny that.” Nanoha let out a full laugh this time. “Since Vivio made the decision to give herself to you, then there’s nothing I can really object to. So please continue taking good care of her, Yuuno-kun.” She rose to leave, but Yuuno stopped her.

“There is something else you must know, Nanoha.” He said. Nanoha gave him a curious look. “Last night I asked Vivio if she would move in with me. She said yes.”

“… I see.” Nanoha smiled sadly. “Making such a big decision… I guess she’s really not my little girl anymore.”

Yuuno walked over to her and placed his hands on her shoulders. “That’s not true. No matter what, you’ll always be her precious Nanoha-mama.”

“I guess… It’s still going to be hard getting used to an empty nest…”

“You can drop in and visit anytime.” He assured her. “You can see her whenever you want.”

“Thanks, Yuuno-kun.” She hugged her life long friend. “I’m glad it’s you. But I never would have thought that the wounded ferret I found that day would end up becoming my son-in-law.”

“That is kind of out there when you think about it.” Yuuno gave a small chuckle.

“However, it’s thanks to you that I was sent down the path to happiness. I just know you’ll do the same for Vivio.”

“That’s what I intend to do.”

---

Several days later, Vivio stood in the front doorway of the house she had shared with her mamas for over a decade. All she carried was a single bag, as the rest of her stuff had been shipped over already.

“Well, this is it.” She said to the two women standing before her. “Thank you for taking care of me for the past twelve years. I appreciate all that you’ve done for me.”

“We just want you to know,” Nanoha sniffed, not bothering to wipe the few tears that slipped down her face. “That you’re always welcome here.”

“That’s right.” Fate, who was in a condition similar to her wife, said. “If something ever happens, you can always come back.”

“I’ll remember that Nanoha-mama, Fate-mama.” Vivio said, hugging both of them. They stayed like that a moment before Vivio backed away. “I’m off.”

“Have a safe trip.” Both mothers bid farewell to the girl they had raised into a woman.

At her insistence, Vivio made the journey to her new place of residence alone. She took one last look at the neighbourhood she had grown up in, memories of times passed flooding her senses. She gave a silent thanks to the buildings that had helped shaped her into the person she was today.

She did not linger long and continued on to the place where her future lie. She reached her destination in no time, and her knock was answered by the man she had chosen to be with. As she stepped over the threshold, she only had one thing to say.

“I’m home.”

“Welcome home.”

---

“My first dinner living together with Yuuno-san,” Vivio said as she looked at the food spread across the table. However, something wasn’t quite right. “… So, why are you two here?”

“We have to have a house warming party, don’t we?” Nanoha was full of cheer as she scooped food onto her plate. “Also, Yuuno-kun said that we were welcome any time!”

Vivio shot a glance at her new roommate, who laughed nervously as he put food into his mouth.

“Sorry, Vivio.” Fate apologised. “I couldn’t stop her.”

“No, it’s all right…” Vivio sighed. “Part of me doesn’t mind.”

“But isn’t this nice, the four members of the Takamachi family sitting down to a meal together?” Nanoha asked, taking in a forkful of her meal.

“… There might be five members soon enough.” Vivio muttered, causing both Yuuno and Nanoha to choke on what they were eating.

“That was just a joke, right?” They wheezed.

Vivio just stuck her tongue out at them.

Spoiler for Notes:

So why the pool? Well, I really really like this image so I wanted to include it somehow. I had to do some research on swimwear to find something for Rio and Corona. Remember that I have 0 sense of style, so if they'd actually look good in them or not is unknown to me. Doesn't help that it's hard to invision what those two would look like as teenagers since they don't have adult modes.

Also, we need more adult form Vivio with her hair down. I tend to prefer natural looks.

I remember back to a comment some one said on this one board. Something like "THE TAKAMACHI FAMILY IS NANOHA, FATE, AND VIVIO! THERE IS NO ROOM FOR YUUNO! THE FERRET WILL NEVER BECOME A MEMBER!" They obviously never considered son-in-law!Yuuno

I've never developed a relationship to this point before, so I really don't know where to go from here. No ideas come to mind, which is why this is most likely the end. Just want to thank all those who have offered support and gave this pairing a chance.

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

Also, we need more adult form Vivio with her hair down. I tend to prefer natural looks.

Spoiler for Thanks to Angel:

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

@Satashi: Haha, poor Chrono. Funny you should have Nanoha say that one line, though, considering I was just about to post this:

Ok folks, so here I am with what could possibly be my final Vivio/Yuuno fic. Well, there's the lemon, but that takes place during this fic. I haven't started it yet and might wait until I'm in a more comfortable place to do so.

As usual, this fic includes a helping of NanoFate too, but this time there's also Rio/OC and Corona/OC.

Spoiler for The Big Step:

“Ok, so let me make sure I have this straight.” Yuuno said. “This is an outing with your friends to celebrate finally graduating from high school, correct?”

“Yup, that’s right.” Vivio answered.

“Then why am I here?”

“Rio and Corona’s boyfriends are coming, so of course I’d invite you too.”

“And why choose the pool?”

“Because it’s summer!” Vivio smiled as she looked over at the entrance to the water park where a large number of people were entering. It was a popular spot, especially now that the schools were on break.

“Vivio! Yuuno-sensei! Sorry to keep you waiting!” Corona and Rio called as they ran up to them, each with a boy in tow.

“We didn’t wait that long.” Vivio assured them.

“We would have been here sooner, but Rio takes a surprisingly long time to get ready, despite her boyish looks.” The shorter, red headed boy explained.

“Hey, Ryuu, why do you have to say unnecessary things?” Rio huffed, attempting to jab him with her elbow.

“Because I like seeing you flustered.” He stuck out his tongue as he dodged the blow and took off when she started chasing him.

“Get back here, you!”

“There they go again.” Vivio sighed.

“They get along so well, don’t they?” Corona noted.

“He could stand to be a bit more delicate.” The taller, raven haired boy added before he turned to Yuuno and offered his hand. “It’s good to see you again, professor.”

“You as well, Honda.” Yuuno shook his hand. “How is the university treating you?”

“Very well, thanks.” Honda smiled. “Once again I must say how much I appreciate you giving me that referral. I don’t think I would have been accepted if you hadn’t.”

“I doubt that.” Yuuno denied with a shake of his head. “You’re a hard worker who I’m sure would have gotten accepted anyways.”

“And it’s thanks to hard work that Corona will be joining you there next year, right?” Vivio grinned as she nudged her friend. “This girl studied extra hard to pass those entrance exams.”

“Vivio, stop that!” Corona blushed. Her face reddened further when Honda put his arm around her.

“I’m well aware, and I couldn’t be prouder of her.” He said. “I’m looking forward to attending the same school as her again.”

“Haha! I caught you!” Rio declared triumphantly as she returned to the group, holding Ryuu in a headlock.

“Damn it, I lost again!” He lamented.

“I’ve always been faster than you, so this outcome was obvious!”

“Now that we’re all here, let’s head inside!” Vivio declared. The group did so and split off into the changing rooms of their respective genders. It didn’t take long for the guys to change into their trunks and move into the main pool area.

“This place is huge!” Ryuu said in awe as he looked around. “Wow, that water slide looks intense! I can’t wait to take it for a spin!”

“Your enthusiasm never ceases to amuse me.” Honda chuckled at the younger boy.

“Never a dull moment when I’m around, eh sempai?” Ryuu grinned. He almost dove into the pool before he reminded himself to wait for the girls. “So teach,” He turned to Yuuno. “Good thing you managed to get the day off.”

“It was a little short notice,” Yuuno scratched the back of his head. “But my staff all had huge grins on their faces as they said they’d be just fine without me.”

“Must be hard to have such a demanding job.” Honda said.

“Well, it’s really just Chrono that makes it hard.” Yuuno gave a short laugh. “I’m just glad it hasn’t hurt my relationship with Vivio like it has with others.”

“I have a hard time seeing anything hurting your relationship with Takamachi.” Ryuu stated. “I’ve known her since middle school and even back then she’d always talk about this amazing older guy and how she really respected how dedicated he was to his job.”

“Oh, really?” Yuuno flushed a little. “I didn’t know she spoke so highly of me back then.”

“You would never believe how everyone reacted when one day she came to school and declared that she had finally made you her boyfriend.” Ryuu chuckled slightly. “I’m surprised that not everyone broke down in tears over the school idol being taken away.”

“And that’s when you thought ‘I need to make my move too’ and confessed to Rio,” Honda smirked. “Right?”

“Hey, it wasn’t that easy.” Ryuu crossed his arms and angled away. “We’ve been rivals for ages, so I thought she hated me. It took a lot of guts to tell her my feelings when I was sure I’d be shot down.”

“Well, the results speak for themselves.” Honda said as he patted the other boy’s back.

“You had it easy, sempai. Timil is the one who confessed to you.”

“To be honest, that’s only because I didn’t have the same guts you did.” Honda smiled wryly. “I was incredibly elated when the cute underclassman I always had eyes for asked to go out with me.”

“However you ended up this way, I’ll tell you this much.” Yuuno passed a glance between his fellow males. “I’ve known those girls a lot longer than you, so I can tell that they’re both very happy when they’re with you.”

“I’m relieved to hear that.” Honda smiled.

“Yeah, thanks teach.” Ryuu rubbed the back of his head. “But you must have it tough, what with Takamachi’s moms being the way they are.” He hugged himself and shivered as he relived a past trauma. “I’m sorry m’am, I won’t call your daughter ‘boat lights’ again, I swear!”

“I get that a lot.” Yuuno laughed humourlessly.

“Sorry for the wait, boys, but I promise it was worth it!”

“It’s about time, Ri…” Ryuu stopped short as he saw the three girls approaching.

“So, what do you think?” Rio grinned as she showed off her blue racerback.

“How did you know my… uh…” Ryuu hid the rest of his statement with a cough. “Here I was expecting something more revealing! Well… it doesn’t look too bad, I guess.”

“Oh really?” Rio chuckled, knowing from the magazines she found under his bed that he liked this kind of swimsuit the best. “Is that all? Or is it just that you know you’ll never be able to beat me in the water because I’m wearing it?”

“Heck no!” He huffed. “Like that will give you the advantage!”

“Care to put that theory to the test?”

“You’re on!” With that they both made their way to the water, unnoticed by the others.

“You look incredibly cute in that, Corona.” Honda smiled, studying the girl’s yellow tankini. “It made my heart skip a beat.”

“T-Thank you, Honda-sempai.” She said back. “I wasn’t too sure about it.”

“You look wonderful in anything you wear, Corona.”

“I think the same about you, sempai.”

“Really? I’m glad.” He held out his hand. “Why don’t we take a walk around and see what all there is to do here?”

“Ok.” Corona smiled as she took his hand and they walked off.

Yuuno didn’t notice because he was far too busy being captivated by the girl before him. Vivio wore a white bikini that with pink straps and trim that showed off much of her smooth curves and delicate looking skin. Just from glancing at her, one would never expect that she was able to punch some one through a wall. On top of it all, her hair lacked any sort of bind and fell freely down her back, a state which Yuuno rarely saw it in. The slight change added a refreshing feel to her otherwise striking appearance.

“Yuuno-san…” Vivio began fidgeting awkwardly under his gaze. “I’m not used to you staring at me like that…”

“Oh, I’m sorry.” Yuuno snapped himself out of it. “You just surprised me with how good you look. It suits you, your hair and that swimsuit.”

“Ehehe, I guess I made the right choice.” She smiled. “Now it’s time to have some fun, right every… Wait, where did they go?!”

“Huh?” Yuuno glanced around at where the other couples used to be. “I guess they got away while we weren’t paying attention.”

“Well, if they’re going to be like that, we’ll just have to play by ourselves!” Vivio decided, grabbing hold of Yuuno’s arm. “Let’s go on that huge waterslide first!”

“Ok, sure.” Yuuno agreed, trying to ignore the sensation of her breast against his arm.

---

After several hours of slides, inner tubes, inflatable balls, and lots and lots of water, the group managed to find each other and sit down for lunch.

“So far the score is five to two!” Rio declared as she bit into her hotdog. “I do believe that’s what you call an ass kicking, eh Ryuu?”

“Just wait until I refuel!” He shot back. “Then we’ll see who’s kicking whose ass!”

“Those two were simply made for each other, weren’t they?” Honda laughed as he sipped at his soft drink.

“Having a rival to compete against is really good for improving yourself.” Corona nodded, munching on her fries.

“Speaking of,” Yuuno spoke up, setting down his burger. “I was wondering why Einhart and Ixpellia didn’t come today.”

“They said something about not wanting to intrude on ‘couple time’.” Vivio shrugged, stealing one of Corona’s fries.

“Those two still haven’t found some one yet?” Honda inquired.

“Well, you know Stratos.” Ryuu said. “She insists on fighting anyone who confesses to her to test their strength and the results are always the same. Takamachi’s the only one I’ve ever seen face her on even ground.”

“I don’t really think Ix knows what exactly dating some one means.” Rio supposed. “She always looks so confused when some one gives her a love letter.”

“Can’t say I blame her.” Vivio exhaled. “Subaru-san is pretty protective of her, so I don’t think she’d let her date anyone anyways.”

“You’re probably right.”

“Do you know what those two will do now that they’re done school? Yuuno asked.

“Ix wants to be a communication officer for the Bureau.” Vivio said. “She wants to be the one to provide Subaru-san with radio support when she goes on rescue missions.”

“Ein is going to join the Bureau with Ryuu and I as combat mages.” Rio explained. “We’re gonna put all this training to good use!”

“You’re going to be working at the library from now on, right Vivio?” Corona asked.

“Yup.” Vivio affirmed, taking a drink. “Technically I’ve been working there as a librarian since I was nine, but now it’s going to be a full time thing.”

“She’ll also be assisting me in my research and at dig sites.” Yuuno added.

“But is it really all right to appoint your girlfriend to such a position?” Honda wondered.

“Well, she has been a staff member for nearly ten years already.” Yuuno said. “Everyone at the library has known for just as long, and they’re aware that she received the position because of her abilities, not because of her relation to me. It’s not all that uncommon for colleagues to become romantically involved anyways.”

“So you’re walking the path of the bookworm rather than the fighter?” Ryuu asked.

“For the most part, I guess.” Vivio smirked slightly. “There might be the occasional tomb raider I get to punish, though.”

“Or ancient guard robot.” Yuuno put in.

“Right, I forgot about those.” Vivio grinned. “I’ll be sure to protect you, Yuuno-san, so don’t worry!”

---

The second half of the day proceeded in a similar manner to the first, only with the addition of the men being horribly defeated by the women in a game of pool volleyball. Soon the day came to an end and it was time for everyone to go home.

“It’s not fair!” Ryuu complained. “All three of you have been doing Strike Arts since you were kids, while I got stuck with the academics!”

“Oh don’t be such a sore loser.” Rio said, taking his hand. “Come on, you can treat me to ice cream as punishment!”

“Fine, I guess I have no choice…” He smiled, squeezing her hand gently in return as they walked off after bidding the others farewell.

“Well, today has certainly been enjoyable. We must really do this again sometime professor, Vivio.” Honda said, pulling Corona in close. “Let’s go, Corona. I’ll walk you home.”

“Ok.” Corona blushed. “Have a good evening Vivio, Yuuno-sensei.”

“See you later, Corona!” Vivio waved as they left.

“I guess I should take you home as well, Vivio.” Yuuno said after a moment.

“Really? But it’s still not that late…” Vivio brushed a strand of her still free hair away from her face. “Can’t we spend a little more time together?”

“Ok, then how about we go back to my apartment for tea?”

“Sounds good!”

After a quick trip up to TSAB HQ’s residential district, they arrived at the door to Yuuno’s apartment.

“Excuse the intrusion.” Vivio said as she entered. Yuuno led her to the living room where she took a seat on the couch while he went to prepare the tea. She had only been there once or twice before, but it was still as empty as she had remembered it. There were no personal touches such as pictures on the wall, but Vivio knew that those were displayed in his office at the library. He spent far more time there than in this room.

“Here you go.” Yuuno said as he set down two cups of tea on his coffee table before taking a seat next to the girl.

“Thanks.” Vivio accepted the drink and took a sip. “I had a lot of fun today. I’m glad you were able to come.”

“So am I, Vivio.” Yuuno took a drink. “So you’re eighteen, out of high school and entering the work world. How do you feel?”

“Excited and a little nervous.” She answered honestly. “But I know I’ll be just fine because I have Yuuno-san by my side.”

“I promise I’ll be there whenever you need me.” He said, draining the rest of his tea before continuing. “Vivio, there’s something I want to ask you.”

“What is it, Yuuno-san?”

“Well, now that you’re going to be working with me at the library every day, I was thinking… Wouldn’t it be better if you lived close by? To be more specific…” He took a deep breath. “Would you like to move in with me?”

“… Could you repeat that?” Vivio asked, wanting to hear him say it again.

“I want us to live together.” He stated this time, voice filled with conviction. Vivio didn’t even need to think it over for she knew her answer immediately.

“Yes! Of course!” She beamed, wrapping her arms around his neck. “I’d love to!”

“It’s settled then.” They locked looks for a few moments until their lips gradually found each other. The first didn’t last very long before they broke away, but they didn’t get very far until they found each other again, and again, each more passionate than the last.

Yuuno found that he couldn’t get enough of her. The joy of her saying yes and the hunger that had arisen in him upon seeing her in her swimsuit all day threatened to overtake his logic. He leaned further into each kiss until eventually Vivio was on her back and he hovered over her.

“Yuuno-san… wait…” Her whisper cut through the fog of desire.

“Ah! I’m sorry! I shouldn’t have gotten carried away if you don’t…” He tried to move away, but her arms held him in place.

“Can… Can we go to your bed?” She panted slightly, face red and eyes clouded with longing like his were.

“Ok…” He gently helped her off the couch and, gingerly holding her fingers with his, led her to the bedroom.

---

Vivio had to resist the urge to prance through the door the next morning. She felt amazing and didn’t want to hide it, but with all that happened the night before she had totally forgotten to tell her mothers where she was. So she hoped to sneak in unnoticed and perhaps make her mamas believe she had been home the entire time.

She slowly opened the front door, only to see Fate handing Nanoha her jacket.

There goes that plan.

“Vivio Takamachi.” Nanoha said sternly when she saw her daughter. “Just where have you been all night?”

“I… uh… I’m sorry, mama…” Vivio said defectively as she slunk into the house, trying her hardest to look repentant.

Nanoha let out a heavy sigh. “It’s ok if you want to stay over at a friend’s house for the night, but I expect you to at least call us and say so. I don’t want to have to call Rio, asking where you are only to have her tell me you’re staying at her place.”

Vivio made a mental note to thank Rio later.

“Furthermore…” Nanoha meant to continue, but Fate cut in.

“Nanoha, if you don’t leave now you’re going to miss your seminar.” She gave her wife a quick peck on the lips. “I’ll talk to Vivio, so you can get going, ok?”

“All right, Fate-chan.” Nanoha relented. “But I have some things to say when I get back. See then Fate-chan, Vivio.” With that Nanoha headed out, closing the door behind her.

“I’m really sorry, Fate-mama…” Vivio apologised again.

“Let’s take this into the living room, Vivio.” Fate said as she gently led the girl inside where they seated themselves on the couch. “You didn’t spend the night at Rio’s did you?”

“… As expected of Fate-mama…” Vivio sighed. “I’ve never been able to hide things from you.”

“Of course,” Fate chuckled softly. “Vivio, you’re glowing.”

“… It’s that obvious?”

“If Nanoha wasn’t in such a hurry a moment ago, even she would have noticed it.”

“You won’t lecture me about it, right?”

“I just want to make sure of something.” Fate said. “He didn’t pressure you into it, right? It was something you both wanted?”

“Yes, of course!” Vivio responded immediately. “It hurt a little at first, but he was so gentle the whole time and it ended up feeling wonderful. When we were done, he just held me in his arms for the rest of the night…” A content sigh escaped her mouth before she could stop it.

“Ok, you don’t have to say any more about that.” Fate held up her hands. “… Did you make sure to use protection?”

“…”

“… Vivio?”

“… Oops?” She smiled sheepishly. “I guess both of us forgot about that…”

Fate sighed. “I hope you’re ready for the potential consequences…”

“Well… There is something else.” Vivio made sure to look her mother in the eye. “Yuuno-san asked me to move in with him, and I said yes.”

“I see.” Fate smiled softly. “Congratulations, Vivio.”

“You aren’t going to try and stop me?”

“Of course not.” Fate chuckled. “Nanoha might not be too keen on the idea, but we both knew that you would have to move out eventually and we’re glad you’ll be with some one we love and trust. I know this has been said in many after school specials, but it’s true: no matter where you are, you will always be our daughter.”

“Thank you, Fate-mama.” Vivio sniffed as she hugged her. “And you’ll always be my mamas.”

“Well, we know where you’ll be living, and it’s not that long of a trip so I’m sure we’ll still see lots of each other.” Fate hugged back. “But now comes the hard part.”

“What’s that?”

“Telling Nanoha about it.”

---

Yuuno couldn’t help but hum a happy little tune as he swivelled in his office chair. He could not think of a single reason not to be so elated. Even the work that had piled up while he was gone was nothing compared to the fact that he had made love to Vivio the night before and that she had agreed to move in with him.

“Come in!” He nearly sang when there was a knock on the door.

“You sure sound like you’re in a good mood, Yuuno-kun.” Nanoha noted when she entered.

“Oh, Nanoha.” A drop of worried was present in his voice. “I wasn’t expecting you.”

“I had a meeting that didn’t go nearly as long as I thought it would.” She explained, sitting down on the guest sofa. “So I thought I’d drop in and talk to you.”

“Talk to me? About what?”

“Yuuno-kun, what exactly did you and Vivio do yesterday?”

“… Did Vivio say something?”

“She didn’t have to.” Nanoha smile slightly. “She had the same look on her face Fate-chan did the day after we first slept together. Your attitude merely confirms it.”

“I had no intention of hiding it from you, but…” Yuuno met her eyes. “Yes, last night Vivio and I consummated our relationship.”

“… I suppose you expect me to take out Raising Heart and blast you?”

“Well, that’s certainly what everyone’s been saying would happen.” He smiled humourlessly. “But joking aside, I know you wouldn’t do something like that, Nanoha. You care about Vivio more than anyone and while you are protective of her, you wouldn’t do anything to restrict her independence or jeopardize her happiness.”

“That’s right.” Nanoha laughed slightly. “But people like to joke that I’m some trigger happy woman that would blast anyone who dare do anything to her little girl. Sometimes I can’t help but think that you’re only with Vivio so that she won’t be sad and you’ll escape my wrath.”

“I assure you that’s not the case.” He smiled. “I truly do love Vivio and I want to be with her. Besides, if I didn’t feel that way what would I have to worry about? You’ve never been able to intentionally break one of my barriers.”

“I can’t deny that.” Nanoha let out a full laugh this time. “Since Vivio made the decision to give herself to you, then there’s nothing I can really object to. So please continue taking good care of her, Yuuno-kun.” She rose to leave, but Yuuno stopped her.

“There is something else you must know, Nanoha.” He said. Nanoha gave him a curious look. “Last night I asked Vivio if she would move in with me. She said yes.”

“… I see.” Nanoha smiled sadly. “Making such a big decision… I guess she’s really not my little girl anymore.”

Yuuno walked over to her and placed his hands on her shoulders. “That’s not true. No matter what, you’ll always be her precious Nanoha-mama.”

“I guess… It’s still going to be hard getting used to an empty nest…”

“You can drop in and visit anytime.” He assured her. “You can see her whenever you want.”

“Thanks, Yuuno-kun.” She hugged her life long friend. “I’m glad it’s you. But I never would have thought that the wounded ferret I found that day would end up becoming my son-in-law.”

“That is kind of out there when you think about it.” Yuuno gave a small chuckle.

“However, it’s thanks to you that I was sent down the path to happiness. I just know you’ll do the same for Vivio.”

“That’s what I intend to do.”

---

Several days later, Vivio stood in the front doorway of the house she had shared with her mamas for over a decade. All she carried was a single bag, as the rest of her stuff had been shipped over already.

“Well, this is it.” She said to the two women standing before her. “Thank you for taking care of me for the past twelve years. I appreciate all that you’ve done for me.”

“We just want you to know,” Nanoha sniffed, not bothering to wipe the few tears that slipped down her face. “That you’re always welcome here.”

“That’s right.” Fate, who was in a condition similar to her wife, said. “If something ever happens, you can always come back.”

“I’ll remember that Nanoha-mama, Fate-mama.” Vivio said, hugging both of them. They stayed like that a moment before Vivio backed away. “I’m off.”

“Have a safe trip.” Both mothers bid farewell to the girl they had raised into a woman.

At her insistence, Vivio made the journey to her new place of residence alone. She took one last look at the neighbourhood she had grown up in, memories of times passed flooding her senses. She gave a silent thanks to the buildings that had helped shaped her into the person she was today.

She did not linger long and continued on to the place where her future lie. She reached her destination in no time, and her knock was answered by the man she had chosen to be with. As she stepped over the threshold, she only had one thing to say.

“I’m home.”

“Welcome home.”

---

“My first dinner living together with Yuuno-san,” Vivio said as she looked at the food spread across the table. However, something wasn’t quite right. “… So, why are you two here?”

“We have to have a house warming party, don’t we?” Nanoha was full of cheer as she scooped food onto her plate. “Also, Yuuno-kun said that we were welcome any time!”

Vivio shot a glance at her new roommate, who laughed nervously as he put food into his mouth.

“Sorry, Vivio.” Fate apologised. “I couldn’t stop her.”

“No, it’s all right…” Vivio sighed. “Part of me doesn’t mind.”

“But isn’t this nice, the four members of the Takamachi family sitting down to a meal together?” Nanoha asked, taking in a forkful of her meal.

“… There might be five members soon enough.” Vivio muttered, causing both Yuuno and Nanoha to choke on what they were eating.

“That was just a joke, right?” They wheezed.

Vivio just stuck her tongue out at them.

Spoiler for Notes:

So why the pool? Well, I really really like this image so I wanted to include it somehow. I had to do some research on swimwear to find something for Rio and Corona. Remember that I have 0 sense of style, so if they'd actually look good in them or not is unknown to me. Doesn't help that it's hard to invision what those two would look like as teenagers since they don't have adult modes.

Also, we need more adult form Vivio with her hair down. I tend to prefer natural looks.

I remember back to a comment some one said on this one board. Something like "THE TAKAMACHI FAMILY IS NANOHA, FATE, AND VIVIO! THERE IS NO ROOM FOR YUUNO! THE FERRET WILL NEVER BECOME A MEMBER!" They obviously never considered son-in-law!Yuuno

I've never developed a relationship to this point before, so I really don't know where to go from here. No ideas come to mind, which is why this is most likely the end. Just want to thank all those who have offered support and gave this pairing a chance.

I'm not going to lie, the fic itself is pretty good, but I think it would have worked better if you'd written a few fics focused on Vivio and Yuuno as a couple before you took them this far. From what I remember you only wrote the "getting together" story and "Misstep" for Vivio's concerns over the relationship, but that's it. You gave the readers a foundation for the pairing, but not much of a buildup for how they work as a couple, which would have made this fic a much better read because the reader would have had a chance to see how much Vivio and Yuuno love each other and would have appreciated them taking that last step even more. As it is now, it feels like a major disconnection from the first two you wrote to this one.

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

I'm not going to lie, the fic itself is pretty good, but I think it would have worked better if you'd written a few fics focused on Vivio and Yuuno as a couple before you took them this far. From what I remember you only wrote the "getting together" story and "Misstep" for Vivio's concerns over the relationship, but that's it. You gave the readers a foundation for the pairing, but not much of a buildup for how they work as a couple, which would have made this fic a much better read because the reader would have had a chance to see how much Vivio and Yuuno love each other and would have appreciated them taking that last step even more. As it is now, it feels like a major disconnection from the first two you wrote to this one.

You missed One Step at a Time

[SulliMike23]

Aww, poor Chrono. I gotta get my short done soon.

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

You missed One Step at a Time

I read it and totally forgot about it, my bad. But I still feel like there's a huge gap between what you wrote here and the three fics you wrote prior to it, so I'm left scratching my head going "... That's it?" at the end of the one-shot. It probably doesn't help that you introduced two OCs with only a little bit of background and didn't develop them all that much other then "they're the boyfriends of Lio and Corona".

[00-Raiser]

Well, I certainly see where you're coming from, but it might be something beyond my ability to fix... I mean, One Step at a Time was meant to be the fic that shows how they get along as a couple but I guess it didn't do that great a job. Other than that all I could think to do is showing them working in the library together, but that wouldn't be very long and would get repetative. I pretty much covered it in the omake of the first fic anyways

Show a date? That would probably be rather boring, as I would just use the same stock occurences I've used in all my other date fics... So I think I'm kinda stuck...

As for the OCs, well, I attempted to develop them a bit so they just wouldn't be stock boyfriend characters. I could have easily just said they were there and not have them do anything.

[RadiantBeam]

Then why not do a holiday fic? Halloween, Christmas, even Thanksgiving? Why not a fic where Yuuno meets Shiro and Momoko, or has a talk with Lindy and Chrono? I'm sure they had plenty to say about his dating Vivio, and it would be a good chance to develop things from his side. Most of what you write tends to focus more on Vivio (not that I'm any better; most of my ViCia fics are usually told from Lutecia's POV!).

But even then, though, the OCs don't feel developed. No offense, but Honda comes across as a little too perfect and Corona seems just a little too desperate to follow him; it wouldn't seem this way if you focused on the details of them, too, by writing other fics. And you claim that Lio and Ryuu had a rivalry, but other than their playful bickering here, we don't see much of it. Why were they rivals? Over what? Did they get into an argument when they first met and then that started it? When did Ryuu start liking Lio, and why? When did Lio start liking him back?

I'm not saying it's a bad fic. It really isn't. These are just things that bugged me when I first read through it, because some of it felt like it came out of nowhere.

[00-Raiser]

Well, at the moment I can't really think of a way those confrontations could play out so they wouldn't just be a rehash of the Nanoha and Fate controntation. Yuuno's already stated his reasons for being with Vivio, so I would just be repeating myself.

I do have an idea for a scene, but it's just that: a scene. It wouldn't be long enough nor would it be the basis of a full fic. I guess I could try for something with an actual plot rather than just romance...

I certainly won't get much thinking done right now, though. Stayed up to 3 am writing that one, so as you can imagine I'm currently dead on my feet.

[RadiantBeam]

Why not develop sidestories focused on your pairings for Lio and Corona, with some Yuuno/Vivio on the side to show that it's part of your series? Like maybe the girls go to Vivio for advice or something? Because currently Ryuu feels like a sterotypical "when a jerk loves a tsundere" and Honda gives me some incredibly creepy possessive-boyfriend vibes.

[spawnofthejudge]

Spoiler for My Own Blindness:

Essentially, I can’t see. In front of me is a glass, partially filled with a liquid that has a golden tint to it, but is mostly brown. Behind it is some wishy-washy brown. Same as under it. I smell smoke. And beer, but that should be obvious. Even if I were to turn my head, it’s not like the sense that my eyes were giving me would change much.

I grab the glass and take another swig, but even as much as I’ve managed to knock my senses down, I can’t forget. It’s been a year and I can’t forget. I never could, but sometimes I like to entertain the thought of possibly forgetting as time moves on and on. But it seems that time likes to move on without me or anyone else. I probably could have told you that a long time ago, but it seems to hit home anew every day.

I spend all my time here, now.

When I had entered the bar, it had been fairly empty, as it was fairly early in the day. I have the day off, as I had requested, but I still have to report at oh-dark-thirty tomorrow morning. So, I started early, and I’ll fall asleep early, and be sober, hopefully, in time for my report. As much as I don’t want to feel anything, particularly today, I certainly don’t want to be even more of a failure than I already am. As impressive a feat as that might be.

I manage to look down; a black blur greets me. I mumble. “Time?”

“Fourteen twenty-two,” my partner responds. So I have lots more time before I have to down a glass of water, get more food in me and get out. I hope I sleep well tonight.

“Hey there, handsome.” A woman is nearby, though I did not know this until she spoke. She stinks of smoke and whiskey. Given my appearance, since I’m off duty, I honestly doubt she’s anywhere closer to sober than I am. Still, it’s a compliment. “What are you doing in a dank place like this?”

“Forgetting. Or failing that, losing some time.” My voice slurs slightly, even to my affected senses. I hope for a moment in vain that she’ll think me too drunk and leave me alone again.

“Oh, a lot of people want to forget something, sweetheart,” she says. Now I can feel her breath on the back of my neck, which means that if she decided to close her mouth she’d look a lot like a vampire. Not sure why that came to my mind at this moment, though.

“I imagine that’s why they built the bar.” Without looking, I toast in the bartender’s general direction. He probably doesn’t like me much, save the rather constant funding of his bank account I do. Or maybe he does, if he’s the type that can ignore a slob like me sitting at his bar so long as the money and booze keep flowing.

“I can help you forget, handsome,” she says, having now placed a hand around my waist.

“Maybe you could, but I’m not interested.” Maybe I would have been, another time. Maybe I would be, tomorrow. I don’t know. But certainly not today. Today’s the day that I don’t think I could do anything that could be conceived as for myself. I owed her that much.

There’s a pause, and I take the opportunity to take a drink. I drain the glass, as it is about time to get a refill. I clank it on the bar after emptying it, and I push it forward slightly. “Another one.” I’m probably talking far too loudly, but that’s better than too quietly right now.

The bartender’s suddenly in my field of vision, but that just means that there’s some pink in the vague oval shape that makes up faces when I’m like this. “The same again? That’ll be your seventh.”

“Also something to eat. Some nuts, maybe?”

“You’re going longer than I remember you going before, kid.” I guess I should let him get away with that, though he doesn’t… didn’t… whatever… he isn’t all that much older than I am, best I’ve been able to tell. “Got something on your mind?”

“Something I’d like to get off, sure.”

He grunts. “Fine, then. You leavin’ soon?”

“Ina few hours. Wanna get lots of sleep.”

He grunts again, and I hear the clank of a glass being set in front of me, followed by the similar sound of a bowl with small objects in it. “Don’t hurt yourself, kid.” And then he’s out of my vision again, probably off to sell something else to someone else. He’s gone long before I can even open my mouth to protest such a statement.

Damn.

I reach out to nurse this glass similar to the way I’d nursed the previous one, though I miss on the first try to grab it. I hear a chuckle from behind me, and it seems that the woman had merely watched the exchange that had gone on before her. “You’re funny.” What a useless thing to say.

“I can be.” Equally useless, but I feel superior for a moment. I do wish she’d leave me alone.

“I like a funny man.” She apparently doesn’t give up easily. Reminds me of someone I knew a long time ago.

“You should go find one, then.” As if that wasn’t clear enough. But she’s already given rather impressive proof of her inability to listen to me. I try not to move anything other than what’s absolutely necessary to get more of the beer in me. Maybe I should sleep early and get my water now.

“But I have, he’s just being obstinate.” Big word for a drunkard, not that I have room to talk here. “Why don’t you come with me to my place? I can make it worth your while.”

I sigh, even though I try not to. Too late to be polite now. “No. Leave me alone.” Then I think better of it, though it’s even more too late. “Please.” Maybe some other time, even. Just… not now. Not today.

She huffs, and then she walks away. I don’t even bother to look; it’s not like I’d be able to see her if I tried, anyway. At least, not clearly enough to determine whether I should be regretting this decision. I don’t, really. I don’t think I would, even if she looked fantastic. Not today. Maybe tomorrow… well, next time I’m on leave on Mid.

If I ever see her again, that is. But my mind jumps away as soon as she’s out the door. I don’t want to think anymore.

I’ve eaten most of the nuts, so I finish them off. I’m only about halfway through on the beer, though. I feel uncomfortable, so I shift in my seat a little bit. It doesn’t help. A swig of beer. That doesn’t either. I sigh. It’s not like I wanted today to be a good day. Really, I just want it over. My wishes, particularly of late, have a habit of not coming true.

“Time.”

“Fourteen-thirty.” Dammit. Another swig of beer.

I try not to, but I feel my mind slide over to the precise subject that I don’t want to think about. I see her face for a moment crystal clear in my mind’s eye, but I’m able to replace it with my superior officer’s face during the debriefing. Then I manage to get my mind on my duties as of yesterday, which is a much safer subject, even if I was getting some strange looks from other people in the company. It’s not like it matters what they think, anyway.

I’m out of beer again. “Sir, one more if you please.”

“And if I don’t?” the bartender says. I hear him walking closer. I wonder why my eyes are so bad right now but my ears seem just shy of normal.

“I have the money. You know that.”

There’s a pause, the wishy-washy brown figure seems to remain perfectly still until “I’m shutting you off. This is your last one.”

“Aw, come on!” It’s only seven… no, eight beers. I’ve done worse with friends.

“In my bar, no less,” he says, making me realize I said some of that aloud. “But the point is that you’re alone today, and it’s about time you headed home and started sobering up, unless you ain’t got somewhere to be in the morning. And I know you do, if you’re out here drinking this early.”

I grunt.

“Last one.” I hear the new glass clank onto the table, and I feel the glass in my hand taken away with a gentle, but firm and deft touch. “Then a mug of water and out with you. Have something to eat before you pass out, too.”

“More nuts?”

He made a noise. I figured it meant ‘no’. “I’ll get you a burger.”

Hey, that sounded alright. I could handle a burger.

Since this was apparently my last drink quite a few hours before I thought I was going to be leaving the bar, I took slow sips instead of the long gulps that I’d been taking of the previous mugs. It’s not like I had much of the taste registering with me; just enough to know that he’d downgraded this one, too. Well, as long as he didn’t charge me… but that’s why I’m here, isn’t it? I’m a regular, and Joe always takes care of his customers.

Of course, that’s probably why I’m headed home soon, too.

I’m only a few sips into the beer and I hear the arrival of the plate. A burger and fries, with ketchup, all for me. Wonderful. I set the beer down and start popping fries in. It’s alright food; it’s not like you ever go to the bar because the food’s divine, after all, but it’s better than some. Filling, certainly. I’m really starting to feel full, so I slow down on the speed of both the sips and the fries. I take a bite of the burger. It tastes salty.

“Hey, Joe.”

The bartender comes back. “You need something else, Vice?”

I grunt. At least he didn’t remind me of my last name… but I manage to push the thought out of my mind. “You putting extra salt on your burgers now?”

A short pause again. A tissue comes into plain view in front of me, then he’s wiping at my eyes. I barely knew what he was doing, but suddenly I could see his face. He tosses the tissue into the trashcan that’s behind him.

Well, that certainly explains why my cheeks are wet.

I forgot about my burger. Joe just let me cry until I fell asleep.

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by spawnofthejudge

Spoiler for My Own Blindness:

Essentially, I can’t see. In front of me is a glass, partially filled with a liquid that has a golden tint to it, but is mostly brown. Behind it is some wishy-washy brown. Same as under it. I smell smoke. And beer, but that should be obvious. Even if I were to turn my head, it’s not like the sense that my eyes were giving me would change much.

I grab the glass and take another swig, but even as much as I’ve managed to knock my senses down, I can’t forget. It’s been a year and I can’t forget. I never could, but sometimes I like to entertain the thought of possibly forgetting as time moves on and on. But it seems that time likes to move on without me or anyone else. I probably could have told you that a long time ago, but it seems to hit home anew every day.

I spend all my time here, now.

When I had entered the bar, it had been fairly empty, as it was fairly early in the day. I have the day off, as I had requested, but I still have to report at oh-dark-thirty tomorrow morning. So, I started early, and I’ll fall asleep early, and be sober, hopefully, in time for my report. As much as I don’t want to feel anything, particularly today, I certainly don’t want to be even more of a failure than I already am. As impressive a feat as that might be.

I manage to look down; a black blur greets me. I mumble. “Time?”

“Fourteen twenty-two,” my partner responds. So I have lots more time before I have to down a glass of water, get more food in me and get out. I hope I sleep well tonight.

“Hey there, handsome.” A woman is nearby, though I did not know this until she spoke. She stinks of smoke and whiskey. Given my appearance, since I’m off duty, I honestly doubt she’s anywhere closer to sober than I am. Still, it’s a compliment. “What are you doing in a dank place like this?”

“Forgetting. Or failing that, losing some time.” My voice slurs slightly, even to my affected senses. I hope for a moment in vain that she’ll think me too drunk and leave me alone again.

“Oh, a lot of people want to forget something, sweetheart,” she says. Now I can feel her breath on the back of my neck, which means that if she decided to close her mouth she’d look a lot like a vampire. Not sure why that came to my mind at this moment, though.

“I imagine that’s why they built the bar.” Without looking, I toast in the bartender’s general direction. He probably doesn’t like me much, save the rather constant funding of his bank account I do. Or maybe he does, if he’s the type that can ignore a slob like me sitting at his bar so long as the money and booze keep flowing.

“I can help you forget, handsome,” she says, having now placed a hand around my waist.

“Maybe you could, but I’m not interested.” Maybe I would have been, another time. Maybe I would be, tomorrow. I don’t know. But certainly not today. Today’s the day that I don’t think I could do anything that could be conceived as for myself. I owed her that much.

There’s a pause, and I take the opportunity to take a drink. I drain the glass, as it is about time to get a refill. I clank it on the bar after emptying it, and I push it forward slightly. “Another one.” I’m probably talking far too loudly, but that’s better than too quietly right now.

The bartender’s suddenly in my field of vision, but that just means that there’s some pink in the vague oval shape that makes up faces when I’m like this. “The same again? That’ll be your seventh.”

“Also something to eat. Some nuts, maybe?”

“You’re going longer than I remember you going before, kid.” I guess I should let him get away with that, though he doesn’t… didn’t… whatever… he isn’t all that much older than I am, best I’ve been able to tell. “Got something on your mind?”

“Something I’d like to get off, sure.”

He grunts. “Fine, then. You leavin’ soon?”

“Ina few hours. Wanna get lots of sleep.”

He grunts again, and I hear the clank of a glass being set in front of me, followed by the similar sound of a bowl with small objects in it. “Don’t hurt yourself, kid.” And then he’s out of my vision again, probably off to sell something else to someone else. He’s gone long before I can even open my mouth to protest such a statement.

Damn.

I reach out to nurse this glass similar to the way I’d nursed the previous one, though I miss on the first try to grab it. I hear a chuckle from behind me, and it seems that the woman had merely watched the exchange that had gone on before her. “You’re funny.” What a useless thing to say.

“I can be.” Equally useless, but I feel superior for a moment. I do wish she’d leave me alone.

“I like a funny man.” She apparently doesn’t give up easily. Reminds me of someone I knew a long time ago.

“You should go find one, then.” As if that wasn’t clear enough. But she’s already given rather impressive proof of her inability to listen to me. I try not to move anything other than what’s absolutely necessary to get more of the beer in me. Maybe I should sleep early and get my water now.

“But I have, he’s just being obstinate.” Big word for a drunkard, not that I have room to talk here. “Why don’t you come with me to my place? I can make it worth your while.”

I sigh, even though I try not to. Too late to be polite now. “No. Leave me alone.” Then I think better of it, though it’s even more too late. “Please.” Maybe some other time, even. Just… not now. Not today.

She huffs, and then she walks away. I don’t even bother to look; it’s not like I’d be able to see her if I tried, anyway. At least, not clearly enough to determine whether I should be regretting this decision. I don’t, really. I don’t think I would, even if she looked fantastic. Not today. Maybe tomorrow… well, next time I’m on leave on Mid.

If I ever see her again, that is. But my mind jumps away as soon as she’s out the door. I don’t want to think anymore.

I’ve eaten most of the nuts, so I finish them off. I’m only about halfway through on the beer, though. I feel uncomfortable, so I shift in my seat a little bit. It doesn’t help. A swig of beer. That doesn’t either. I sigh. It’s not like I wanted today to be a good day. Really, I just want it over. My wishes, particularly of late, have a habit of not coming true.

“Time.”

“Fourteen-thirty.” Dammit. Another swig of beer.

I try not to, but I feel my mind slide over to the precise subject that I don’t want to think about. I see her face for a moment crystal clear in my mind’s eye, but I’m able to replace it with my superior officer’s face during the debriefing. Then I manage to get my mind on my duties as of yesterday, which is a much safer subject, even if I was getting some strange looks from other people in the company. It’s not like it matters what they think, anyway.

I’m out of beer again. “Sir, one more if you please.”

“And if I don’t?” the bartender says. I hear him walking closer. I wonder why my eyes are so bad right now but my ears seem just shy of normal.

“I have the money. You know that.”

There’s a pause, the wishy-washy brown figure seems to remain perfectly still until “I’m shutting you off. This is your last one.”

“Aw, come on!” It’s only seven… no, eight beers. I’ve done worse with friends.

“In my bar, no less,” he says, making me realize I said some of that aloud. “But the point is that you’re alone today, and it’s about time you headed home and started sobering up, unless you ain’t got somewhere to be in the morning. And I know you do, if you’re out here drinking this early.”

I grunt.

“Last one.” I hear the new glass clank onto the table, and I feel the glass in my hand taken away with a gentle, but firm and deft touch. “Then a mug of water and out with you. Have something to eat before you pass out, too.”

“More nuts?”

He made a noise. I figured it meant ‘no’. “I’ll get you a burger.”

Hey, that sounded alright. I could handle a burger.

Since this was apparently my last drink quite a few hours before I thought I was going to be leaving the bar, I took slow sips instead of the long gulps that I’d been taking of the previous mugs. It’s not like I had much of the taste registering with me; just enough to know that he’d downgraded this one, too. Well, as long as he didn’t charge me… but that’s why I’m here, isn’t it? I’m a regular, and Joe always takes care of his customers.

Of course, that’s probably why I’m headed home soon, too.

I’m only a few sips into the beer and I hear the arrival of the plate. A burger and fries, with ketchup, all for me. Wonderful. I set the beer down and start popping fries in. It’s alright food; it’s not like you ever go to the bar because the food’s divine, after all, but it’s better than some. Filling, certainly. I’m really starting to feel full, so I slow down on the speed of both the sips and the fries. I take a bite of the burger. It tastes salty.

“Hey, Joe.”

The bartender comes back. “You need something else, Vice?”

I grunt. At least he didn’t remind me of my last name… but I manage to push the thought out of my mind. “You putting extra salt on your burgers now?”

A short pause again. A tissue comes into plain view in front of me, then he’s wiping at my eyes. I barely knew what he was doing, but suddenly I could see his face. He tosses the tissue into the trashcan that’s behind him.

Well, that certainly explains why my cheeks are wet.

I forgot about my burger. Joe just let me cry until I fell asleep.

Very well written. I assume this takes place after he shot Laguna in the eye?

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

The Big Step"

The first part at water park got boring really fast. I don't like OCs, but these two seemed... Like slam in your face "I should know these people but I don't" so I'm wondering if you wrote something to introduce them somewhere that I didn't read.

Anyway, I skipped to "the good part" with Vivio and Yuuno. My feelings here are mixed. First, I wonder how long they have been dating (If you mentioned that in a part I skipped, that's fine) but if it wasn't mentioned, then this seems a little rushed. This is a one shot in your universe right? Make sure the readers know that otherwise it does seem rushed.

A few disagreements also. Yuuno asking her to move in before they even had sex? I know you're old fashioned and all, but in this day and age, that's really unheard of. It's not logical either, as you need to spend a lot of time with someone at your house to really ask someone to live with them. Plus you said Yuuno's house was basically vacant because he was never there. That would make Vivio alone most of the time at night when Yuuno works late and such. It just seems "Hey, I'm never home so if you want to crash here you can" kind of thing rather than a "Lets live together" deal.

Again, maybe its just me but asking someone to live with you before having sex... I'm just unable to grasp that at all. Living together is like "You can't live together until you're married" and "You can't have sex until your married" and all of a sudden Vivio agrees to live with him BEFORE they have sex or get married. You're very inconsistent with your views here. Specially since Vivio's only been there twice? good god man @_@

Lesse, what else... *scrolls back* The conversation with Fate seemed too stereotypical and general. Like I didn't really feel as if it were FATE talking to Vivio. Also I think Fate took it a little too easily. Not in the "NO YOU CAN'T" category but more of.... I see Fate not trying to talk Vivio out of it but being more firm in the fact that Vivio is rushing things. I mean your daughter comes home in the morning after not telling them where she was, then finding out she slept with her boyfriend, then finding out she's moving in with him, after they've been dating for, what, a few months? slow down Vivio! Fate would polity tell her it is a mistake to rush so fast and to try and guide her into making the right choice "taking it a little slower". I think Fate would suggest staying with him more but not moving in. Ever heard the term "don't move in together until more than 1/3rd of your clothes are at your lover's" ..or did I just make that up? anyway, see my point?

Nanoha/Yuuno time!

Same dead as with Fate. Nanoha is taking this WAY too easily. Vivio is making a mistake rushing into all of this (and I think Yuuno made a mistake asking her to). I think Nanoha would be more firm in stating that they're rushing and would ask Yuuno, as her best friend, to give her daughter some time. Not space, but time. Vivio's young, in love, thinks she knows exactly what she wants, but she's diving head first into a "married style" relationship with someone she's only been dating for a short time.

I beleive I'm repeating my point here, but from both parent's views. I'll stop there, sorry.

The fic wasn't all bad in my eyes (I don't mean that as an insult!). I loved Vivio's "oops" when asked about a condom. Plus Vivio saying too much about it to Fate was both IC in my opinion as well as cute. I do think that their first time would probably be clumsy. Yuuno would have a condom but it'd go a little like this:

Vivio: wa...wait...Yuuno-san... we need a condom...
Yuuno: I have one... (left over from high school....)
Vivio: Oh...okay...*awkward shifting* here.. I'll put it on...
Yuuno: Okay...
Vivio:....uh...uh oh.
Yuuno: What...?
Vivio: I kind of... broke it.
*awkward silence*
Yuuno:Keep going?
Vivio: Keep going.

Anyway, as a whole it was okay. Your writing style didn't seem to hit any snags. I didn't notice anything that really stood out that needed to be fixing grammar wise. I guess what I'm trying to say here is you wrote it well, I just don't agree with what you wrote, if that makes sense.

[Thunderbird]

Hmm theres a lot of people writing about happy little stories...maybe I should come up with something dark and evil, full of desperation and sadness to counter act all of it. After all the balance in the Force must not be broken mwahahaha!!!

*stabbed, clubbed, sprayed with holy water, staked through the heart...then shot*

[Alavon]

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

@Satashi: Haha, poor Chrono. Funny you should have Nanoha say that one line, though, considering I was just about to post this:

Ok folks, so here I am with what could possibly be my final Vivio/Yuuno fic. Well, there's the lemon, but that takes place during this fic. I haven't started it yet and might wait until I'm in a more comfortable place to do so.

As usual, this fic includes a helping of NanoFate too, but this time there's also Rio/OC and Corona/OC.

Spoiler for The Big Step:

“Ok, so let me make sure I have this straight.” Yuuno said. “This is an outing with your friends to celebrate finally graduating from high school, correct?”

“Yup, that’s right.” Vivio answered.

“Then why am I here?”

“Rio and Corona’s boyfriends are coming, so of course I’d invite you too.”

“And why choose the pool?”

“Because it’s summer!” Vivio smiled as she looked over at the entrance to the water park where a large number of people were entering. It was a popular spot, especially now that the schools were on break.

“Vivio! Yuuno-sensei! Sorry to keep you waiting!” Corona and Rio called as they ran up to them, each with a boy in tow.

“We didn’t wait that long.” Vivio assured them.

“We would have been here sooner, but Rio takes a surprisingly long time to get ready, despite her boyish looks.” The shorter, red headed boy explained.

“Hey, Ryuu, why do you have to say unnecessary things?” Rio huffed, attempting to jab him with her elbow.

“Because I like seeing you flustered.” He stuck out his tongue as he dodged the blow and took off when she started chasing him.

“Get back here, you!”

“There they go again.” Vivio sighed.

“They get along so well, don’t they?” Corona noted.

“He could stand to be a bit more delicate.” The taller, raven haired boy added before he turned to Yuuno and offered his hand. “It’s good to see you again, professor.”

“You as well, Honda.” Yuuno shook his hand. “How is the university treating you?”

“Very well, thanks.” Honda smiled. “Once again I must say how much I appreciate you giving me that referral. I don’t think I would have been accepted if you hadn’t.”

“I doubt that.” Yuuno denied with a shake of his head. “You’re a hard worker who I’m sure would have gotten accepted anyways.”

“And it’s thanks to hard work that Corona will be joining you there next year, right?” Vivio grinned as she nudged her friend. “This girl studied extra hard to pass those entrance exams.”

“Vivio, stop that!” Corona blushed. Her face reddened further when Honda put his arm around her.

“I’m well aware, and I couldn’t be prouder of her.” He said. “I’m looking forward to attending the same school as her again.”

“Haha! I caught you!” Rio declared triumphantly as she returned to the group, holding Ryuu in a headlock.

“Damn it, I lost again!” He lamented.

“I’ve always been faster than you, so this outcome was obvious!”

“Now that we’re all here, let’s head inside!” Vivio declared. The group did so and split off into the changing rooms of their respective genders. It didn’t take long for the guys to change into their trunks and move into the main pool area.

“This place is huge!” Ryuu said in awe as he looked around. “Wow, that water slide looks intense! I can’t wait to take it for a spin!”

“Your enthusiasm never ceases to amuse me.” Honda chuckled at the younger boy.

“Never a dull moment when I’m around, eh sempai?” Ryuu grinned. He almost dove into the pool before he reminded himself to wait for the girls. “So teach,” He turned to Yuuno. “Good thing you managed to get the day off.”

“It was a little short notice,” Yuuno scratched the back of his head. “But my staff all had huge grins on their faces as they said they’d be just fine without me.”

“Must be hard to have such a demanding job.” Honda said.

“Well, it’s really just Chrono that makes it hard.” Yuuno gave a short laugh. “I’m just glad it hasn’t hurt my relationship with Vivio like it has with others.”

“I have a hard time seeing anything hurting your relationship with Takamachi.” Ryuu stated. “I’ve known her since middle school and even back then she’d always talk about this amazing older guy and how she really respected how dedicated he was to his job.”

“Oh, really?” Yuuno flushed a little. “I didn’t know she spoke so highly of me back then.”

“You would never believe how everyone reacted when one day she came to school and declared that she had finally made you her boyfriend.” Ryuu chuckled slightly. “I’m surprised that not everyone broke down in tears over the school idol being taken away.”

“And that’s when you thought ‘I need to make my move too’ and confessed to Rio,” Honda smirked. “Right?”

“Hey, it wasn’t that easy.” Ryuu crossed his arms and angled away. “We’ve been rivals for ages, so I thought she hated me. It took a lot of guts to tell her my feelings when I was sure I’d be shot down.”

“Well, the results speak for themselves.” Honda said as he patted the other boy’s back.

“You had it easy, sempai. Timil is the one who confessed to you.”

“To be honest, that’s only because I didn’t have the same guts you did.” Honda smiled wryly. “I was incredibly elated when the cute underclassman I always had eyes for asked to go out with me.”

“However you ended up this way, I’ll tell you this much.” Yuuno passed a glance between his fellow males. “I’ve known those girls a lot longer than you, so I can tell that they’re both very happy when they’re with you.”

“I’m relieved to hear that.” Honda smiled.

“Yeah, thanks teach.” Ryuu rubbed the back of his head. “But you must have it tough, what with Takamachi’s moms being the way they are.” He hugged himself and shivered as he relived a past trauma. “I’m sorry m’am, I won’t call your daughter ‘boat lights’ again, I swear!”

“I get that a lot.” Yuuno laughed humourlessly.

“Sorry for the wait, boys, but I promise it was worth it!”

“It’s about time, Ri…” Ryuu stopped short as he saw the three girls approaching.

“So, what do you think?” Rio grinned as she showed off her blue racerback.

“How did you know my… uh…” Ryuu hid the rest of his statement with a cough. “Here I was expecting something more revealing! Well… it doesn’t look too bad, I guess.”

“Oh really?” Rio chuckled, knowing from the magazines she found under his bed that he liked this kind of swimsuit the best. “Is that all? Or is it just that you know you’ll never be able to beat me in the water because I’m wearing it?”

“Heck no!” He huffed. “Like that will give you the advantage!”

“Care to put that theory to the test?”

“You’re on!” With that they both made their way to the water, unnoticed by the others.

“You look incredibly cute in that, Corona.” Honda smiled, studying the girl’s yellow tankini. “It made my heart skip a beat.”

“T-Thank you, Honda-sempai.” She said back. “I wasn’t too sure about it.”

“You look wonderful in anything you wear, Corona.”

“I think the same about you, sempai.”

“Really? I’m glad.” He held out his hand. “Why don’t we take a walk around and see what all there is to do here?”

“Ok.” Corona smiled as she took his hand and they walked off.

Yuuno didn’t notice because he was far too busy being captivated by the girl before him. Vivio wore a white bikini that with pink straps and trim that showed off much of her smooth curves and delicate looking skin. Just from glancing at her, one would never expect that she was able to punch some one through a wall. On top of it all, her hair lacked any sort of bind and fell freely down her back, a state which Yuuno rarely saw it in. The slight change added a refreshing feel to her otherwise striking appearance.

“Yuuno-san…” Vivio began fidgeting awkwardly under his gaze. “I’m not used to you staring at me like that…”

“Oh, I’m sorry.” Yuuno snapped himself out of it. “You just surprised me with how good you look. It suits you, your hair and that swimsuit.”

“Ehehe, I guess I made the right choice.” She smiled. “Now it’s time to have some fun, right every… Wait, where did they go?!”

“Huh?” Yuuno glanced around at where the other couples used to be. “I guess they got away while we weren’t paying attention.”

“Well, if they’re going to be like that, we’ll just have to play by ourselves!” Vivio decided, grabbing hold of Yuuno’s arm. “Let’s go on that huge waterslide first!”

“Ok, sure.” Yuuno agreed, trying to ignore the sensation of her breast against his arm.

---

After several hours of slides, inner tubes, inflatable balls, and lots and lots of water, the group managed to find each other and sit down for lunch.

“So far the score is five to two!” Rio declared as she bit into her hotdog. “I do believe that’s what you call an ass kicking, eh Ryuu?”

“Just wait until I refuel!” He shot back. “Then we’ll see who’s kicking whose ass!”

“Those two were simply made for each other, weren’t they?” Honda laughed as he sipped at his soft drink.

“Having a rival to compete against is really good for improving yourself.” Corona nodded, munching on her fries.

“Speaking of,” Yuuno spoke up, setting down his burger. “I was wondering why Einhart and Ixpellia didn’t come today.”

“They said something about not wanting to intrude on ‘couple time’.” Vivio shrugged, stealing one of Corona’s fries.

“Those two still haven’t found some one yet?” Honda inquired.

“Well, you know Stratos.” Ryuu said. “She insists on fighting anyone who confesses to her to test their strength and the results are always the same. Takamachi’s the only one I’ve ever seen face her on even ground.”

“I don’t really think Ix knows what exactly dating some one means.” Rio supposed. “She always looks so confused when some one gives her a love letter.”

“Can’t say I blame her.” Vivio exhaled. “Subaru-san is pretty protective of her, so I don’t think she’d let her date anyone anyways.”

“You’re probably right.”

“Do you know what those two will do now that they’re done school? Yuuno asked.

“Ix wants to be a communication officer for the Bureau.” Vivio said. “She wants to be the one to provide Subaru-san with radio support when she goes on rescue missions.”

“Ein is going to join the Bureau with Ryuu and I as combat mages.” Rio explained. “We’re gonna put all this training to good use!”

“You’re going to be working at the library from now on, right Vivio?” Corona asked.

“Yup.” Vivio affirmed, taking a drink. “Technically I’ve been working there as a librarian since I was nine, but now it’s going to be a full time thing.”

“She’ll also be assisting me in my research and at dig sites.” Yuuno added.

“But is it really all right to appoint your girlfriend to such a position?” Honda wondered.

“Well, she has been a staff member for nearly ten years already.” Yuuno said. “Everyone at the library has known for just as long, and they’re aware that she received the position because of her abilities, not because of her relation to me. It’s not all that uncommon for colleagues to become romantically involved anyways.”

“So you’re walking the path of the bookworm rather than the fighter?” Ryuu asked.

“For the most part, I guess.” Vivio smirked slightly. “There might be the occasional tomb raider I get to punish, though.”

“Or ancient guard robot.” Yuuno put in.

“Right, I forgot about those.” Vivio grinned. “I’ll be sure to protect you, Yuuno-san, so don’t worry!”

---

The second half of the day proceeded in a similar manner to the first, only with the addition of the men being horribly defeated by the women in a game of pool volleyball. Soon the day came to an end and it was time for everyone to go home.

“It’s not fair!” Ryuu complained. “All three of you have been doing Strike Arts since you were kids, while I got stuck with the academics!”

“Oh don’t be such a sore loser.” Rio said, taking his hand. “Come on, you can treat me to ice cream as punishment!”

“Fine, I guess I have no choice…” He smiled, squeezing her hand gently in return as they walked off after bidding the others farewell.

“Well, today has certainly been enjoyable. We must really do this again sometime professor, Vivio.” Honda said, pulling Corona in close. “Let’s go, Corona. I’ll walk you home.”

“Ok.” Corona blushed. “Have a good evening Vivio, Yuuno-sensei.”

“See you later, Corona!” Vivio waved as they left.

“I guess I should take you home as well, Vivio.” Yuuno said after a moment.

“Really? But it’s still not that late…” Vivio brushed a strand of her still free hair away from her face. “Can’t we spend a little more time together?”

“Ok, then how about we go back to my apartment for tea?”

“Sounds good!”

After a quick trip up to TSAB HQ’s residential district, they arrived at the door to Yuuno’s apartment.

“Excuse the intrusion.” Vivio said as she entered. Yuuno led her to the living room where she took a seat on the couch while he went to prepare the tea. She had only been there once or twice before, but it was still as empty as she had remembered it. There were no personal touches such as pictures on the wall, but Vivio knew that those were displayed in his office at the library. He spent far more time there than in this room.

“Here you go.” Yuuno said as he set down two cups of tea on his coffee table before taking a seat next to the girl.

“Thanks.” Vivio accepted the drink and took a sip. “I had a lot of fun today. I’m glad you were able to come.”

“So am I, Vivio.” Yuuno took a drink. “So you’re eighteen, out of high school and entering the work world. How do you feel?”

“Excited and a little nervous.” She answered honestly. “But I know I’ll be just fine because I have Yuuno-san by my side.”

“I promise I’ll be there whenever you need me.” He said, draining the rest of his tea before continuing. “Vivio, there’s something I want to ask you.”

“What is it, Yuuno-san?”

“Well, now that you’re going to be working with me at the library every day, I was thinking… Wouldn’t it be better if you lived close by? To be more specific…” He took a deep breath. “Would you like to move in with me?”

“… Could you repeat that?” Vivio asked, wanting to hear him say it again.

“I want us to live together.” He stated this time, voice filled with conviction. Vivio didn’t even need to think it over for she knew her answer immediately.

“Yes! Of course!” She beamed, wrapping her arms around his neck. “I’d love to!”

“It’s settled then.” They locked looks for a few moments until their lips gradually found each other. The first didn’t last very long before they broke away, but they didn’t get very far until they found each other again, and again, each more passionate than the last.

Yuuno found that he couldn’t get enough of her. The joy of her saying yes and the hunger that had arisen in him upon seeing her in her swimsuit all day threatened to overtake his logic. He leaned further into each kiss until eventually Vivio was on her back and he hovered over her.

“Yuuno-san… wait…” Her whisper cut through the fog of desire.

“Ah! I’m sorry! I shouldn’t have gotten carried away if you don’t…” He tried to move away, but her arms held him in place.

“Can… Can we go to your bed?” She panted slightly, face red and eyes clouded with longing like his were.

“Ok…” He gently helped her off the couch and, gingerly holding her fingers with his, led her to the bedroom.

---

Vivio had to resist the urge to prance through the door the next morning. She felt amazing and didn’t want to hide it, but with all that happened the night before she had totally forgotten to tell her mothers where she was. So she hoped to sneak in unnoticed and perhaps make her mamas believe she had been home the entire time.

She slowly opened the front door, only to see Fate handing Nanoha her jacket.

There goes that plan.

“Vivio Takamachi.” Nanoha said sternly when she saw her daughter. “Just where have you been all night?”

“I… uh… I’m sorry, mama…” Vivio said defectively as she slunk into the house, trying her hardest to look repentant.

Nanoha let out a heavy sigh. “It’s ok if you want to stay over at a friend’s house for the night, but I expect you to at least call us and say so. I don’t want to have to call Rio, asking where you are only to have her tell me you’re staying at her place.”

Vivio made a mental note to thank Rio later.

“Furthermore…” Nanoha meant to continue, but Fate cut in.

“Nanoha, if you don’t leave now you’re going to miss your seminar.” She gave her wife a quick peck on the lips. “I’ll talk to Vivio, so you can get going, ok?”

“All right, Fate-chan.” Nanoha relented. “But I have some things to say when I get back. See then Fate-chan, Vivio.” With that Nanoha headed out, closing the door behind her.

“I’m really sorry, Fate-mama…” Vivio apologised again.

“Let’s take this into the living room, Vivio.” Fate said as she gently led the girl inside where they seated themselves on the couch. “You didn’t spend the night at Rio’s did you?”

“… As expected of Fate-mama…” Vivio sighed. “I’ve never been able to hide things from you.”

“Of course,” Fate chuckled softly. “Vivio, you’re glowing.”

“… It’s that obvious?”

“If Nanoha wasn’t in such a hurry a moment ago, even she would have noticed it.”

“You won’t lecture me about it, right?”

“I just want to make sure of something.” Fate said. “He didn’t pressure you into it, right? It was something you both wanted?”

“Yes, of course!” Vivio responded immediately. “It hurt a little at first, but he was so gentle the whole time and it ended up feeling wonderful. When we were done, he just held me in his arms for the rest of the night…” A content sigh escaped her mouth before she could stop it.

“Ok, you don’t have to say any more about that.” Fate held up her hands. “… Did you make sure to use protection?”

“…”

“… Vivio?”

“… Oops?” She smiled sheepishly. “I guess both of us forgot about that…”

Fate sighed. “I hope you’re ready for the potential consequences…”

“Well… There is something else.” Vivio made sure to look her mother in the eye. “Yuuno-san asked me to move in with him, and I said yes.”

“I see.” Fate smiled softly. “Congratulations, Vivio.”

“You aren’t going to try and stop me?”

“Of course not.” Fate chuckled. “Nanoha might not be too keen on the idea, but we both knew that you would have to move out eventually and we’re glad you’ll be with some one we love and trust. I know this has been said in many after school specials, but it’s true: no matter where you are, you will always be our daughter.”

“Thank you, Fate-mama.” Vivio sniffed as she hugged her. “And you’ll always be my mamas.”

“Well, we know where you’ll be living, and it’s not that long of a trip so I’m sure we’ll still see lots of each other.” Fate hugged back. “But now comes the hard part.”

“What’s that?”

“Telling Nanoha about it.”

---

Yuuno couldn’t help but hum a happy little tune as he swivelled in his office chair. He could not think of a single reason not to be so elated. Even the work that had piled up while he was gone was nothing compared to the fact that he had made love to Vivio the night before and that she had agreed to move in with him.

“Come in!” He nearly sang when there was a knock on the door.

“You sure sound like you’re in a good mood, Yuuno-kun.” Nanoha noted when she entered.

“Oh, Nanoha.” A drop of worried was present in his voice. “I wasn’t expecting you.”

“I had a meeting that didn’t go nearly as long as I thought it would.” She explained, sitting down on the guest sofa. “So I thought I’d drop in and talk to you.”

“Talk to me? About what?”

“Yuuno-kun, what exactly did you and Vivio do yesterday?”

“… Did Vivio say something?”

“She didn’t have to.” Nanoha smile slightly. “She had the same look on her face Fate-chan did the day after we first slept together. Your attitude merely confirms it.”

“I had no intention of hiding it from you, but…” Yuuno met her eyes. “Yes, last night Vivio and I consummated our relationship.”

“… I suppose you expect me to take out Raising Heart and blast you?”

“Well, that’s certainly what everyone’s been saying would happen.” He smiled humourlessly. “But joking aside, I know you wouldn’t do something like that, Nanoha. You care about Vivio more than anyone and while you are protective of her, you wouldn’t do anything to restrict her independence or jeopardize her happiness.”

“That’s right.” Nanoha laughed slightly. “But people like to joke that I’m some trigger happy woman that would blast anyone who dare do anything to her little girl. Sometimes I can’t help but think that you’re only with Vivio so that she won’t be sad and you’ll escape my wrath.”

“I assure you that’s not the case.” He smiled. “I truly do love Vivio and I want to be with her. Besides, if I didn’t feel that way what would I have to worry about? You’ve never been able to intentionally break one of my barriers.”

“I can’t deny that.” Nanoha let out a full laugh this time. “Since Vivio made the decision to give herself to you, then there’s nothing I can really object to. So please continue taking good care of her, Yuuno-kun.” She rose to leave, but Yuuno stopped her.

“There is something else you must know, Nanoha.” He said. Nanoha gave him a curious look. “Last night I asked Vivio if she would move in with me. She said yes.”

“… I see.” Nanoha smiled sadly. “Making such a big decision… I guess she’s really not my little girl anymore.”

Yuuno walked over to her and placed his hands on her shoulders. “That’s not true. No matter what, you’ll always be her precious Nanoha-mama.”

“I guess… It’s still going to be hard getting used to an empty nest…”

“You can drop in and visit anytime.” He assured her. “You can see her whenever you want.”

“Thanks, Yuuno-kun.” She hugged her life long friend. “I’m glad it’s you. But I never would have thought that the wounded ferret I found that day would end up becoming my son-in-law.”

“That is kind of out there when you think about it.” Yuuno gave a small chuckle.

“However, it’s thanks to you that I was sent down the path to happiness. I just know you’ll do the same for Vivio.”

“That’s what I intend to do.”

---

Several days later, Vivio stood in the front doorway of the house she had shared with her mamas for over a decade. All she carried was a single bag, as the rest of her stuff had been shipped over already.

“Well, this is it.” She said to the two women standing before her. “Thank you for taking care of me for the past twelve years. I appreciate all that you’ve done for me.”

“We just want you to know,” Nanoha sniffed, not bothering to wipe the few tears that slipped down her face. “That you’re always welcome here.”

“That’s right.” Fate, who was in a condition similar to her wife, said. “If something ever happens, you can always come back.”

“I’ll remember that Nanoha-mama, Fate-mama.” Vivio said, hugging both of them. They stayed like that a moment before Vivio backed away. “I’m off.”

“Have a safe trip.” Both mothers bid farewell to the girl they had raised into a woman.

At her insistence, Vivio made the journey to her new place of residence alone. She took one last look at the neighbourhood she had grown up in, memories of times passed flooding her senses. She gave a silent thanks to the buildings that had helped shaped her into the person she was today.

She did not linger long and continued on to the place where her future lie. She reached her destination in no time, and her knock was answered by the man she had chosen to be with. As she stepped over the threshold, she only had one thing to say.

“I’m home.”

“Welcome home.”

---

“My first dinner living together with Yuuno-san,” Vivio said as she looked at the food spread across the table. However, something wasn’t quite right. “… So, why are you two here?”

“We have to have a house warming party, don’t we?” Nanoha was full of cheer as she scooped food onto her plate. “Also, Yuuno-kun said that we were welcome any time!”

Vivio shot a glance at her new roommate, who laughed nervously as he put food into his mouth.

“Sorry, Vivio.” Fate apologised. “I couldn’t stop her.”

“No, it’s all right…” Vivio sighed. “Part of me doesn’t mind.”

“But isn’t this nice, the four members of the Takamachi family sitting down to a meal together?” Nanoha asked, taking in a forkful of her meal.

“… There might be five members soon enough.” Vivio muttered, causing both Yuuno and Nanoha to choke on what they were eating.

“That was just a joke, right?” They wheezed.

Vivio just stuck her tongue out at them.

Spoiler for Notes:

So why the pool? Well, I really really like this image so I wanted to include it somehow. I had to do some research on swimwear to find something for Rio and Corona. Remember that I have 0 sense of style, so if they'd actually look good in them or not is unknown to me. Doesn't help that it's hard to invision what those two would look like as teenagers since they don't have adult modes.

Also, we need more adult form Vivio with her hair down. I tend to prefer natural looks.

I remember back to a comment some one said on this one board. Something like "THE TAKAMACHI FAMILY IS NANOHA, FATE, AND VIVIO! THERE IS NO ROOM FOR YUUNO! THE FERRET WILL NEVER BECOME A MEMBER!" They obviously never considered son-in-law!Yuuno

I've never developed a relationship to this point before, so I really don't know where to go from here. No ideas come to mind, which is why this is most likely the end. Just want to thank all those who have offered support and gave this pairing a chance.

...

7.5 out of 10, 00-Raiser.

Since I love the idea of Vivio/Yuuno pair, I'm actually with RB and Satashi on this one; their relationship seemed rushed. And both Fate and Nanoha could not have accepted it so easily...

Yes, Vivio is 18 and of age but because they didn't have enough "screen time" as a couple, I realized that I really don't know anything about the couple. The last thing I had in mind before reading this was, "OMG! Yuuno is still a virgin" to "OMG! They are no longer virgins!" Quite a big step (no pun intended). When I agreed that you should write the "lemon", I thought it would be plausible for it to work out nicely but I was wrong; I just didn't see Yuuno and Vivio *really* develop as a couple for them to take that step. Sorry.

You should definitely write more fics about how ViVio and Yuuno went from point A to point Z and not from point A, and Point F, and then to finally point Z. What about the other letters?

I am really looking forward to knowing more about one of my favorite couple. And if I have to sacrifice reading "Rise of the Deamon Kaiser" and "Remembrance" for a good Yuuno/Vivio fic, than so be it.

Write fmore Yuuno/Vivio fics that shows Yuuno and Vivio developing as a couple.

BUT I REALLY LIKED THE ENDING!!! XD XD XD XD XD!!!!!!! And the "Oops..."...I foresee Yuuno being Starlight Breaked into Oblivion by Nanoha-mama...

YUUNO: Please, Nanoha! Calm down! *cowers behind Vivio*
NANOHA: YOU MUST DIIIIIE!!!!
FATE: *sighs* There goes our chances of having grandchildren...

[Kaijo]

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

Well, I certainly see where you're coming from, but it might be something beyond my ability to fix... I mean, One Step at a Time was meant to be the fic that shows how they get along as a couple but I guess it didn't do that great a job. Other than that all I could think to do is showing them working in the library together, but that wouldn't be very long and would get repetative. I pretty much covered it in the omake of the first fic anyways

Show a date? That would probably be rather boring, as I would just use the same stock occurences I've used in all my other date fics... So I think I'm kinda stuck...

As for the OCs, well, I attempted to develop them a bit so they just wouldn't be stock boyfriend characters. I could have easily just said they were there and not have them do anything.

Just as a thought, as I tend to watch romantic comedies a lot, so tossing this out there to think on...

Manga/anime toss in a heaping of other stuff that happens. They help other people, or something strange comes to town, etc. A lot of other chapters/episodes focus on the other characters, too. When you're focusing solely on a relationship, yeah, it gets hard to bring up stuff. That's why you gotta merge it with other stuff going on to really develop it.

And you have to take things slowly if you wanna stretch it. Yuuno and Vivio basically started dating in your first fic, I believe, unless I missed something. Some initial fics where one or the other takes interest, but is afraid to say something, and initiates plans to get closer. Then perhaps fear of letting someone like Nanoha know. Misunderstandings, etc.

This gives your couple a chance to learn via other events, perhaps have their disagreements and then come back and apologize or something. Plot, tension, issues, all serve to make the eventual romance more fulfilling. Of course, some like Ranma 1/2 make little to no progress by the end, so you have to be careful of that, too.

You might try tossing in some other stories along in this vein. Someone getting injured, or kidnapped with the other person the only who is in a position to do a rescue. Rivals that come in seeking affection, or just inane comedy to help spice things up. Try watching some romantic comedies and take note of how the writer creates stories that ultimately somehow relate to the couple at the end, or force them to develop just a bit further.

That's one of the reasons I stick with adventure mainly, as I can write romance in as a subplot while giving the characters chances to develop along the main story. I'll also be progressing some character's relationships in Red Jewel Diaries.

Anyway, just a few thoughts. Take what you find useful(if anything) and discard the rest. =)

[NorthernFallout]

Originally Posted by Thunderbird

Hmm theres a lot of people writing about happy little stories...maybe I should come up with something dark and evil, full of desperation and sadness to counter act all of it. After all the balance in the Force must not be broken mwahahaha!!!

*stabbed, clubbed, sprayed with holy water, staked through the heart...then shot*

Read Tempest's Gospel found in his sig space and my Walla shorts, that should set you up for some darkness.

Although more dark is always welcome, it's needed.