2012-02-11, 21:34 | Link #21722 |
Head of FRACTURE R&D
Join Date: Oct 2011
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Hey Zero, I'm finally working on Dancing in the Rain.
I am going to make it epic. From life as the son of a poor farmer, struggling to keep himself at the top of his class, to being the CEO of a gigantic company, and Charlotte's birth. I have even fleshed out her mother's character, and how she met Rafael. I'm going to include his reaction to her death, and the awkwardness of trying to connect with the distant child that resulted of their relationship. I have many plans. Estimated length: 30 thousand words. |
2012-02-11, 21:38 | Link #21724 |
Some say I'm the Reverse
Join Date: Jul 2006
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Well, we could always test out how much pain he can take before he croa--
Ichika: "DON'T GO DECIDING THAT ON YOUR OWN, BAKA!!" - A man who marries into a wealthy family afte rmuch effort will stop at nothing to hide the fact that he was not a part of said family.
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2012-02-11, 22:25 | Link #21734 |
Head of FRACTURE R&D
Join Date: Oct 2011
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@ Zero: I know that.
But the Dunois Company had to start somewhere. Starlight Systems: Programming AI for combat vehicles. Revive Systems: Programming AI for combat vehicles. When IS was released, the AI and associated technology was applied to IS, giving them the ability to create and produce IS at a head start. The Revive systems were created to support multiple weapons systems, while the Starlight systems were created to support long range combat. Which results in how the respective IS work. Rafael Dunois (in this fic) is relatively famous for producing France's military technology, i.e weapons, tactical gear, and vehicles. |
2012-02-11, 22:33 | Link #21739 |
Head of FRACTURE R&D
Join Date: Oct 2011
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@ Zero: So was it good? The sequence?
It probably could use a bit of editing. Right now, I want to know if it was melodramatic, or the more important point: Did it hold the right emotional weight to hit the readers, the kind of weight that is supposed to persist through out the story? It's going to be the same as canon timeline. The how I met your mother thing happens when he goes to meet Charlotte due to a social worker thing. It's a few months after Arianne dies. He forces himself to talk to his daughter, weighing himself responsible for his death, and not finding it within himself to even look her in the eye. Which is then in turn interpreted by her as "he doesn't really care about her". Which spawns canon viewpoint on what kind of person he is. |
2012-02-11, 22:35 | Link #21740 |
I am no one
Join Date: Apr 2010
Location: Inside your head
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Ichika's birthday is Saturday or Sunday? I'll use it as reference for the calendar.
@Rain: It's good, just need to fix the timeline. Charl is banished at young age (7-8 years) while Charl's mom died 2 year prior to canon, so when she's 13. And In canon, he only talk to Charlotte... for about 30 minutes... And he talked about her new job as Cadet Rep during that time, not even about their blood connection or their mother
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