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Age: 35
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Originally Posted by MisterJB
Why did they stopped again?
Well, I should focuse on getting my lincence first, then I can dream about these kind of machines
Lamborghini stopped making the Diablo in 2001 I think. I don't know why, but Lamborghini still makes a lot of nice cars, like the Murciélago, the Gallardo, and the Reventón.
An exciting chapter. I see the plot is beginning to thicken further. I'm sure we'll begin to see the full machinations of Isley's work in the next chapter or two. Keep it up.
Location: Canada, but sometimes in La La-Land hanging out with Midori-chan89
Age: 35
This next chapter is a bit shorter than the others but here is chapter 12.
Spoiler for chapter 12:
Burning Rubber
Chapter 12: Burning Wreckage
Race Wars, it was something that happened every summer in July, and every street racer knew about it. It was a couple of years since T.J. had gone to it, and this time he would make it there. Racing for not only money but for pink slips to, thats how T.J. got his Trans Am a couple years ago and now he was planning on winning another car.
J.T. was going to, and she was bringing her two friends Teresa and Irene with her. T.J. knew that Teresa's BMW was a good car, it even had some hidden upgrades in it. Irene's Mclarin was a scary car to race against to, except T.J. noticed that the front suspension was very solid in her car and that it would make steering a problem.
The four of them left together on Saturday morning, they would reach the place at around noon. Priscilla watched them leave from up in her new room and looked at Teresa. Suddenly Priscilla felt dizzy and almost passed out.
"That woman! I know her from somewhere!"
In her car Teresa's eyes widened. "I feel a presence that I have not felt in a long time...."
T.J. had taken his Trans Am and the others followed him, the race was going to be held outside of the city like usual to avoid cops. The first year it was held was bad because it was in the city and there were cops all over the place in a few minutes.
At around noon they had made it, and the place was already packed with people and lots of rare and very expensive cars. J.T. looked at everyone in her rebuilt RX8, she hoped she had everything working right after what had happened to it. The four of them parked they're cars by a trailer, it wasn't to long before T.J. ran into Raki and Cynthia, and they did not look to happy at him.
"Why did you leave us like that?!" Raki yelled getting in T.J.'s face.
T.J. tried not to laugh at him. "Look kid if you are trying to be all macho for your girlfriend I don't think its working."
Raki back handed T.J. across the face and T.J. quickly answered with right fist strait to Raki's jaw. Cynthia caught Raki as he fell back, and got him out of there before something else would have happened.
"Looks like someone has a glass jaw." T.J. thought turning around only to see J.T. laughing.
The group walked around, T.J. was looking at all the cars that had pink slips with them. Then eventually he saw it, dark blue with white racing stripes. It was a 1996 Dodge Viper GTS and it had the V12.
"I want this." T.J. said with a big smile on his face. "I'm racing this car. I want it!"
The hood on the car was open and it had a lot done to it. T.J. could see NOS lines that were coming from the back, it had a supercharger. A aftermarket watercooler, air cooler, air intake, and so much more. On top of that it had wide wheels on it and the rear wheels were two inches wider than the front wheels.
Then a thin muscular man walked out from another trailer and walked to T.J. "Hey why are you looking at my ride?"
"I want to race for it man."
"Man?! I'm a woman! Thats it get on the track now!"
"Rachel calm down." A old man said coming in there direction.
"But Rimmuto he called me a man!"
* * *
Later T.J. and Rachel had got on the track, along with Raki, Teresa, and J.T. who were also interested in Rachel's Viper. Rimmuto had taken any money, and Rachel's pink slip. Then everyone walked to they're cars.
"Hey woman in the BMW!" Raki yelled. "Do you really think that car has the guts to win this race?!"
Teresa showed her famous faint smile and flicked a switch on the dashboard of her car. Then two doors on the middle of the hood opened up and folded over, next a blower had risen out of the engine compartment.
"Holy crap!" Raki thought. "Me and my big mouth...."
Next a young woman that was hardly wearing any clothes stepped infront of the cars like usual. She grabbed her shirt and through it to the ground which was the signal to start the race. The rear tires bit into the dusty ground and the cars took off. Rachel's Viper was fast and would be hard to beat, T.J.'s Trans Am was a powerful and could beat it. Raki's Hemi Cuda was evil when it came to power and speed so he would be something to worry about. Teresa's car was strong but handling was her cars main focus along with J.T.'s car.
J.T. got behind Raki and used the wind that was going around his car to draft, she bumped him a few times showing him that she did not like him to much. Teresa flew by him and her 4 litre engine roared because of the blower. T.J. stayed right behind Rachel, to him the only way to win this race was to be in second through most of it and pass her on the final turn, which looked like it was the easiest turn to pass on.
The Viper and the Trans Am ran away from the group and headed through the first turn. However on the first turn for the other three Raki had turned down thinking he was clear of J.T. and she moved up a little which had t-boned him and he spun out. As Teresa and J.T. flew by him his car hit a rock which sen't the car upside down and around over and over again. The car fell over a gaurdrail which took it down a hill, it tumbled over and over again and landed on its now crushed in roof.
Back up in front T.J. had got beside Rachel. He was using up a lot of NOS to keep up with the powerful Viper, even his supercharger seemed like it wasn't doing anything. The ram air flow system in his Trans Am also did not seem like it was doing anything.
"Come on go faster!" T.J. yelled as his adreniline pumped so hard that he felt his heart trying to beat out of his chest.
Then it happened for the first time he felt his yoki, it helped him. Rachel seemed to notice it and she looked over at him, she took her attention off the race and missed the next turn. She flew over the banking and went off course, while T.J. went on to the straitaway and passed the finishline first.
"I just won a Dodge Viper!"
Teresa and J.T. had crossed the finish line second and third, T.J. was going to get the car while they were going to get money.
As T.J.'s new 1996 Viper was being put on a flatbed to be taken back to his place Cynthia had made her way to Raki's car along with a saftey crew.
Her old car was smashed up bad and crushed in, she saw blood dripping out of the drivers area. Raki was dead.
"Raki! Raki! No Raki!" Cynthia yelled falling to her knees while holding herself. "Raki...." She said crying his name over and over.
"Its that womans fault!" She thought as she wept. "She killed him!"
* * *
Several hours later, Cyntha was now in her house alone and in her room curled up in a corner. Galatea had gone to her house once she heard from Tabitha about what happened. She didn't get the full story all she knew was that something bad had happened. Galatea drove into Cynthia's driveway in her Jaguar, she saw Cynthia's car parked next to the house. The front door was locked, Galatea had knocked but there was no answer. She went to the back and it was open.
"Cynthia where are you?!"
Galatea listened closely and she heard her crying, she fallowed the sound all the way to Cynthia.
"Cynthia what happened?" Galatea asked bending down to her.
Cynthia pushed herself into Galatea and held her tight. "Raki's gone...."
"He's gone? What he left you? I knew this would happen, when I get my hands on him!"
"No thats not it!" Cynthia screamed. "He's been killed."
Galatea stopped, she was not expecting to hear that. She slowly wrapped her arms around Cynthia as Cynthia pushed her face into Galatea's chest.
"Oh Cynthia...." Galatea whispered. "I'm so sorry..."
* * *
As T.J. drove back to his place with his Viper on a flatbed fallowing him, he had found out what had happened to Raki. J.T. was going back to his shop to leave her car there. Although there wasn't much room for it now as T.J. had a growing car collection of his own filling up the shop.
After they were at his place he only had one thing to ask as he took his Viper off the truck. "You killed him on purpose didn't you?"
J.T. who was getting tired of hearing that question snapped. "Alright fine! Yeah I did it on purpose! I lied earlier so I wouldn't have to go to jail. Raki killed my brother so I killed him! I did a good job making it look like an accident didn't I?!"
T.J. had stopped what he was doing and looked at who was standing behind J.T.
"What who is behind me?" J.T. said turning around only to see Priscilla standing there with a very sad and confused look on her face.
"You killed Raki...." Priscilla said as her body started to shake.
J.T. stepped to her but Priscilla stepped back then turned around and ran away back into T.J.'s house.
"You should probably leave J.T."
J.T. turned around and started walking back to her house. "Fine I will!"
T.J. looked around and could only think of one thing. "I can see it now, there are going to be cops everywhere."
What!?
Raki died No
Well, I wasn't seeing that coming for sure.
I was expecting to see more developing on his relatioship with Cynthia. However, this shows that you are not scared of killing important characthers
Rachel being mistaken for a dude was hilarious. The race was also really good. Still, It would have been better if you described in how did TJ's yoki helped him to win the race
Location: Canada, but sometimes in La La-Land hanging out with Midori-chan89
Age: 35
Quote:
Originally Posted by MisterJB
Rachel being mistaken for a dude was hilarious. The race was also really good. Still, It would have been better if you described in how did TJ's yoki helped him to win the race
It only helped him because when it activated Rachel noticed it like any other Claymore would, and she lost her attention to what she was doing by looking over for to long, which is why she went off the track.
New chapter is here. The figth scene migth be a little short. I did the best I could, please enjoy.
Spoiler for chapter 10:
Chapter 10:
Bloodshed in the North: The Pure One Awakens
The two Claymores clashed with the environment that surrounded them. It was like the North itself was fighting against them.
The snow seemed to be trying to bury the two girls and the winds roared on their ears as a snowstorm approached.
Every step was a herculean effort to Dietrich who, despite her condition as a half-yoma, was starting to feel the cold who would surely freeze a human in seconds.
Was that cursed land alive and wanted to expulse them? Or was that weather acting in accord with the will of the dark lord who had established himself in there?
In either case, that was indeed the best place to raise an army of Awakened Beings.
Walking in front of Dietrich was her superior, Amanda; she too was struggling against the elements. For every step forward, she was pulled back two by the winds.
That way, they were going nowhere.
Another howl and another step back; Amanda was thrown against Dietrich and the two Claymores fell in the snow, with Amanda lying on the top.
“Damn!” said Amanda while getting up “Are you all right, Dietrich?”
“Not really!” Dietrich answered, she too getting up “You elbow hit me in the stomach and let me say, you are very heavy.”
Dietrich was always honest, that was a thing that Amanda enjoyed about that girl, she would never tell a lie, not even to save her life.
Amanda looked better at her smaller companion; despite Dietrich being a Claymore, her hands were starting to change colour and her noise was almost completely frozen.
The number 7 looked to the horizon and saw that the dark castle was starting to get visible and that dozens of giant forms were walking around, probably the Awakened Beings.
However, it seemed that the snowstorm was coming from that castle because it would only grow stronger if they got any closer.
Amanda sighed and turned to the other girl.
“I don’t think we will be able to go any further.” she said “We should pull back for now and search for shelter.”
“What? No!” shouted Dietrich, looking at Amanda like if she had just said a blasphemy “The Organization ordered us to get the information the quickest possible.”
“We won’t be useful to the Organization if we die here, don’t you think so?” replied Amanda “C’mon, It’s almost night. Let’s find a place to rest and we try again tomorrow, after this snowstorm has passed.”
But Dietrich wasn’t ready to give up just yet. “That is not logical. This storm might be the work of the lord of that castle.”
Amanda shook her head, turned her back to her partner and started to walk away. “You are a troublesome kid. Even if this is not a natural storm, whoever is producing it will also need to rest. We will come back as soon as that happens.”
Dietrich wanted to disagree with her but her superior wasn’t going to hear her, so Dietrich sighed and followed Amanda.
She surely wasn’t going to disobey her superior, she would rather die.
* *
Even Vampira was starting to feel a little disgusted by that show.
Nadia and Thelmus made wet sounds as their mouths tasted each other. The woman was sitting on top of him and Thelmus’s hand caressed her ponytail.
Nadia stopped for a moment to look at her Lord; she stared at those black, merciless eyes; to most people, those eyes would look like an abyss of pain and death but to her; to her they were an abyss of lust and pleasure. She grasped his hands; those hands that had slain thousands in the past but she knew that those hands could also be gentle when the time was propitious.
And when Nadia kissed him again, she realized that she loved him.
Yes, with her Black Awakened Heart she loved Thelmus and she hoped that he loved her back.
However, the feeling was not shared by him.
To Thelmus, Nadia was just a woman amongst the hundreds that he had possessed in the past. She was entertaining him at that moment yes but, if he needed to, he could kill her without any second thoughts.
That was just a physical act on his perspective and it wouldn’t ever become something beyond that. Never had he found a woman who could steal his heart; that was certainly impossible for any mortal woman. To steal a dark heart.
So, why couldn’t he take that Helen out of his head?
He had only met her once and yet, she assaulted her thoughts.
Even as his hands grasped Nadia’s body, on his mind he was grasping Helen’s body…
“Fuck! Compose yourself, man! She was hot, nothing more. Do you…”
Thelmus’s thoughts were interrupted by the roars of the Awakened Beings outside the castle. He buffed and pushed Nadia aside.
The Dragon-Kin approached a window and noticed that the beasts seemed more agitated than usual.
“What do they want?” he asked to nobody in particular and it was Vampira who answered. She too had approached the window and was looking at the sea of monsters. Some Yoma were being eaten.
“They are getting impatient. The master is waiting too much to attack the Organization. It’s strange.”
“Who can say what the master is thinking?” said Thelmus while turning around and approaching the door that lead to the throne chamber.
“You can, Thelmus. The master trusts you, I’m sure he has told you his plans” said Vampira, turning to the Dragon-Kin.
“Of course the master trusts me” he replied. Nadia was grabbing his feet like a little dog. “I was the one that came with him to this Island right after he made that cursed deal that removed almost all of his powers. I saved his life countless times from the Organization. Thanks the Devil that the stupid deal will be off within months.”
“Are you trying to tell me that the master will only attack the Organization when his powers come back?” Vampira asked.
There were demonic figures encrypted on the door and Thelmus touched those, admiring its details.
“I don’t know. Attacking the Organization is not the final objective of Darkhenus; he has something bigger planned; the destruction of the Organization is just a mean to get o an end and that is our master’s ultimate plan.” Thelmus kicked Nadia in the face; the Awakened Being started bleeding from her noise but apparently she enjoyed that “But the master told me that for that ultimate plan to work, he needs Clare, Miria, Helen and Deneve”
Thelmus kneeled and licked Nadia’s blood from her face, enjoying the metallic taste; but Vampira wasn’t satisfied yet.
“Why those four in particular?” she asked.
“I have no idea. He just said that they are essential.”
“Anyway, I’m just glad that the master brought someone as interesting as this Irene to this castle.” Vampira said with a naughty smile on her face.
“Fucking lesbian! What a waste!” Thelmus thought before he kissed Nadia again. Unfortunately for him, this time he was interrupted by Inez.
“There are strong Yoki near this castle.” she said. Thelmus buffed in frustration and turned to her. “Intruders?” he asked.
“It would appear so. They are not too strong.” she answered and Thelmus waved his hand, signalling that he didn’t care about that.
“Send an Awakened Being to take care of them, then. I’ve got better stuff to do.”
“I don’t think that will be necessary.” Inez said “I can feel three Awakened Beings going in their direction.”
“What class of Awakened Beings?” Vampira asked, looking at Inez.
“The lowest class. Still, three Awakened Beings against two Claymores…” Inez answered and Vampire turned to the window again, looking into the horizon.
“Let’s see how that plays out, then” she said. “Things got boring around here since Jullianna’s death. Those two might entertain us.”
Vampira closed her eyes, trying to feel the upcoming battle.
* *
Amanda and Dietrich walked in the direction of the South until they reached a town.
The town had long been abandoned, probably because of the war, seven years ago.
It was obvious that Isley’s army has passed there on their road to Pieta, most of the houses were completely destroyed and there was dry blood everywhere.
The two Claymores walked until the centre of the town and saw that there were some houses left standing.
“I will check that one.” said Dietrich, pointing towards a house that was practically intact. Amanda nodded but Dietrich didn’t see it because she was already heading to the habitation.
Dietrich noticed that the interior of the house wasn’t in such good shape as the exterior.
All the furniture that could have decorated that habitation was completely broken in such a way that it would be impossible to distinguish the table from the chairs.
Dietrich confirmed that there were no bodies before she went up stairs to the second floor. She entered the first room whose door was broken and there, she witnessed a gruesome spectacle.
Lying on the ground there were the bodies of a man and a woman; both had their guts completely eaten but, there was something more amazing about those corpses.
Even as their chests were open and their guts eaten, the pair had peaceful smiles on their faces and they were holding each other’s hands.
They had died happy, knowing that they were together in the end.
Dietrich felt a tear flowing from her right eye; was that the love that the poets sang about? The young Claymore had never experienced such a love in her life.
Dietrich pondered if she should give them a proper burial but she decided that it would be better to leave them like they were: with their hands grasped together until their bodies turned into dust.
And it was at that moment that the Claymore felt three strong Yoki nearby.
“Awakened Beings?”
Dietrich rushed to the exterior and she saw Amanda standing against three Awakened Beings.
One had a humanoid blue body; however, he was much bigger than a human and had three eyes. The other had a lizard-like body and the last one, which was a female, looked like a giant worm but with stings on her body, tentacles on the top of her head and more tentacles coming out of her mouth.
“Look at we have found here” said the lizard-Awakened Being “Two Claymores, so far away from home.”
“Don’t worry, Dietrich. These three are nothing compared to some other Awakened Beings I’ve felt in that castle.” said Amanda, while Dietrich stood by her side, her claymore on her hand.
“You heard that? She said we are nothing.” cried the blue Awakened Being.
“Tough talk for someone who is at disadvantage.” shouted the female one.
Then, without a warning, all three Awakened Beings opened their mouths and sent tentacles flying against the two Claymores.
Amanda jumped aside but Dietrich launched herself forward, landed on the shoulder of the humanoid-one and stabbed one of his eyes. The monster roared in pain, Dietrich got ready to chop his head but the female-one sent herself against her and the two fell on the ground with the Awakened standing over Dietrich.
That was so disgusting; there were fluids and stings everywhere. Dietrich swung her claymore blindly and she was lucky enough to slice three stings, however, the Awakened didn’t seem to mind that and she tried to suffocate the girl with her weight.
Dietrich couldn’t breed and she thought she was going to die there but, she was saved when Amanda kicked the Awakened on her disgusting head.
Amanda, after making sure that Dietrich was fine, tried to attack the worm-Awakened Being; she blocked the attack with the stings and Amanda had to twist her full-body to cut the tentacles that the lizard-Awakened sent against her.
Amanda hurled upwards and slashed at the blue-Awakened in a diagonal fashion, confident that Dietrich would protect her back.
While she was on the air, the Being attacked her with his claws, Amanda dodged them and landed. However, her nemesis slashed downwards, the woman raised her claymore, parried the attack and moved it to the right to push aside the other claw, the monster swiped again and her claw clanged audibly against Amanda’s claymore; the girl send a burst of Yoki into her muscles and she was able to withstand the strike. The exchange of blows continued with Amanda always on the defensive; roaring of frustration, the monster united his two hands in a single massive fist and attacked the claymore. Amanda smiled, seeing her opportunity; she sidestepped and raised her claymore on the horizontal, letting the Awakened Being chop his own hands off. The monster roared but he was silenced when Amanda jumped and sliced his head.
On the other side of the fight, things were not going so well. Dietrich had been able to stab through the lizard-Awakened right claw but he shoulder-charged against her and she was sent flying against the tentacles of the other one.
The tentacles wrapped around her body and she was pulled in the direction of the female-Being’s mouth. Luckily, Dietrich had been able to hold on to her claymore so, when she was close enough, she swung it, cutting the tentacles that imprisoned her and with a second swing, she sliced half of the Awakened Being’s head.
Dietrich landed smoothly on the ground and she turned around the fattest she could but, this time, she wasn’t fast enough.
Ten tentacles were sent against her and ten tentacles pierced ten different points of her chest. One almost hit the heart.
Dietrich coughed blood; she tried to slash those damned things that were wounding her but her strength was sweeping away. She could feel her blood pouring out of the wounds. She whished that someone would grasp her hand now, like those two lovers…
“NO! DIETRICH!” shouted Amanda before she slashed the tentacles that were piercing trough her partner, maybe even her friend.
Dietrich fell hard on the ground and she let her claymore go.
The Awakened Being, seeing the golden fire on Amanda’s eyes and knowing that he was overpowered, tried to run away but Amanda somersaulted behind and slashed downwards, cutting the monster in half.
The Claymore didn’t even look to the fount of purple gore that was now the body of the Awakened Being before she rushed to Dietrich’s side.
The poor girl was grasping her wounds and coughing up more and more blood, Amanda analyzed the holes and she saw that they couldn’t be deeper.
“C’mon Dietrich! C’mon girl, don’t die! Tell me, are you defensive type?” Amanda yelled but Dietrich couldn’t answer “Hear me, girl, please, hear me! This is important! Are you defensive?”
Dietrich coughed up more blood before she could answer. “N-no…”
“Holy shit…no…please…no” Amanda said, being driven to despair, trying to look for a solution.
But there was none, Dietrich was offensive and to an offensive warrior those wounds were mortal. There was nothing Amanda could do; there was nothing anyone could do.
And Dietrich knew that, she knew that she was going to die, still, on her mind, she denied it.
“No! I don’t want to die”
“Please, I want to live.”
“Please!”
“I don’t want to die!”
“…no…”
Then, in those moments, when she could see death coming for her, Dietrich reached a final hope and she raised her Yoki the highest she could.
Waves of Yoki started swirling around her body and for moments, it seemed like it would work, the wounds were starting to regenerate. She was going to live…
But soon, Dietrich realized that she had gone too far.
The Yoki was no longer swirling around her, it was being spilled from her body, ripping off her some of her clothes and raising into the sky in the form of a massive green pillar of energy.
The Yoki could no longer be controlled.
The Yoki was in control now and Dietrich realized that her destiny would be to Awake right there.
Yosei: Thank you for the review on chapter 10 and also thank you very much the kind review you left at ff.net. I'm really glad you enjoyed "My dear sister".
Location: Canada, but sometimes in La La-Land hanging out with Midori-chan89
Age: 35
Quote:
Originally Posted by MisterJB
New chapter is here. The figth scene migth be a little short. I did the best I could, please enjoy.
Spoiler for chapter 10:
Chapter 10:
Bloodshed in the North: The Pure One Awakens
The two Claymores clashed with the environment that surrounded them. It was like the North itself was fighting against them.
The snow seemed to be trying to bury the two girls and the winds roared on their ears as a snowstorm approached.
Every step was a herculean effort to Dietrich who, despite her condition as a half-yoma, was starting to feel the cold who would surely freeze a human in seconds.
Was that cursed land alive and wanted to expulse them? Or was that weather acting in accord with the will of the dark lord who had established himself in there?
In either case, that was indeed the best place to raise an army of Awakened Beings.
Walking in front of Dietrich was her superior, Amanda; she too was struggling against the elements. For every step forward, she was pulled back two by the winds.
That way, they were going nowhere.
Another howl and another step back; Amanda was thrown against Dietrich and the two Claymores fell in the snow, with Amanda lying on the top.
“Damn!” said Amanda while getting up “Are you all right, Dietrich?”
“Not really!” Dietrich answered, she too getting up “You elbow hit me in the stomach and let me say, you are very heavy.”
Dietrich was always honest, that was a thing that Amanda enjoyed about that girl, she would never tell a lie, not even to save her life.
Amanda looked better at her smaller companion; despite Dietrich being a Claymore, her hands were starting to change colour and her noise was almost completely frozen.
The number 7 looked to the horizon and saw that the dark castle was starting to get visible and that dozens of giant forms were walking around, probably the Awakened Beings.
However, it seemed that the snowstorm was coming from that castle because it would only grow stronger if they got any closer.
Amanda sighed and turned to the other girl.
“I don’t think we will be able to go any further.” she said “We should pull back for now and search for shelter.”
“What? No!” shouted Dietrich, looking at Amanda like if she had just said a blasphemy “The Organization ordered us to get the information the quickest possible.”
“We won’t be useful to the Organization if we die here, don’t you think so?” replied Amanda “C’mon, It’s almost night. Let’s find a place to rest and we try again tomorrow, after this snowstorm has passed.”
But Dietrich wasn’t ready to give up just yet. “That is not logical. This storm might be the work of the lord of that castle.”
Amanda shook her head, turned her back to her partner and started to walk away. “You are a troublesome kid. Even if this is not a natural storm, whoever is producing it will also need to rest. We will come back as soon as that happens.”
Dietrich wanted to disagree with her but her superior wasn’t going to hear her, so Dietrich sighed and followed Amanda.
She surely wasn’t going to disobey her superior, she would rather die.
* *
Even Vampira was starting to feel a little disgusted by that show.
Nadia and Thelmus made wet sounds as their mouths tasted each other. The woman was sitting on top of him and Thelmus’s hand caressed her ponytail.
Nadia stopped for a moment to look at her Lord; she stared at those black, merciless eyes; to most people, those eyes would look like an abyss of pain and death but to her; to her they were an abyss of lust and pleasure. She grasped his hands; those hands that had slain thousands in the past but she knew that those hands could also be gentle when the time was propitious.
And when Nadia kissed him again, she realized that she loved him.
Yes, with her Black Awakened Heart she loved Thelmus and she hoped that he loved her back.
However, the feeling was not shared by him.
To Thelmus, Nadia was just a woman amongst the hundreds that he had possessed in the past. She was entertaining him at that moment yes but, if he needed to, he could kill her without any second thoughts.
That was just a physical act on his perspective and it wouldn’t ever become something beyond that. Never had he found a woman who could steal his heart; that was certainly impossible for any mortal woman. To steal a dark heart.
So, why couldn’t he take that Helen out of his head?
He had only met her once and yet, she assaulted her thoughts.
Even as his hands grasped Nadia’s body, on his mind he was grasping Helen’s body…
“Fuck! Compose yourself, man! She was hot, nothing more. Do you…”
Thelmus’s thoughts were interrupted by the roars of the Awakened Beings outside the castle. He buffed and pushed Nadia aside.
The Dragon-Kin approached a window and noticed that the beasts seemed more agitated than usual.
“What do they want?” he asked to nobody in particular and it was Vampira who answered. She too had approached the window and was looking at the sea of monsters. Some Yoma were being eaten.
“They are getting impatient. The master is waiting too much to attack the Organization. It’s strange.”
“Who can say what the master is thinking?” said Thelmus while turning around and approaching the door that lead to the throne chamber.
“You can, Thelmus. The master trusts you, I’m sure he has told you his plans” said Vampira, turning to the Dragon-Kin.
“Of course the master trusts me” he replied. Nadia was grabbing his feet like a little dog. “I was the one that came with him to this Island right after he made that cursed deal that removed almost all of his powers. I saved his life countless times from the Organization. Thanks the Devil that the stupid deal will be off within months.”
“Are you trying to tell me that the master will only attack the Organization when his powers come back?” Vampira asked.
There were demonic figures encrypted on the door and Thelmus touched those, admiring its details.
“I don’t know. Attacking the Organization is not the final objective of Darkhenus; he has something bigger planned; the destruction of the Organization is just a mean to get o an end and that is our master’s ultimate plan.” Thelmus kicked Nadia in the face; the Awakened Being started bleeding from her noise but apparently she enjoyed that “But the master told me that for that ultimate plan to work, he needs Clare, Miria, Helen and Deneve”
Thelmus kneeled and licked Nadia’s blood from her face, enjoying the metallic taste; but Vampira wasn’t satisfied yet.
“Why those four in particular?” she asked.
“I have no idea. He just said that they are essential.”
“Anyway, I’m just glad that the master brought someone as interesting as this Irene to this castle.” Vampira said with a naughty smile on her face.
“Fucking lesbian! What a waste!” Thelmus thought before he kissed Nadia again. Unfortunately for him, this time he was interrupted by Inez.
“There are strong Yoki near this castle.” she said. Thelmus buffed in frustration and turned to her. “Intruders?” he asked.
“It would appear so. They are not too strong.” she answered and Thelmus waved his hand, signalling that he didn’t care about that.
“Send an Awakened Being to take care of them, then. I’ve got better stuff to do.”
“I don’t think that will be necessary.” Inez said “I can feel three Awakened Beings going in their direction.”
“What class of Awakened Beings?” Vampira asked, looking at Inez.
“The lowest class. Still, three Awakened Beings against two Claymores…” Inez answered and Vampire turned to the window again, looking into the horizon.
“Let’s see how that plays out, then” she said. “Things got boring around here since Jullianna’s death. Those two might entertain us.”
Vampira closed her eyes, trying to feel the upcoming battle.
* *
Amanda and Dietrich walked in the direction of the South until they reached a town.
The town had long been abandoned, probably because of the war, seven years ago.
It was obvious that Isley’s army has passed there on their road to Pieta, most of the houses were completely destroyed and there was dry blood everywhere.
The two Claymores walked until the centre of the town and saw that there were some houses left standing.
“I will check that one.” said Dietrich, pointing towards a house that was practically intact. Amanda nodded but Dietrich didn’t see it because she was already heading to the habitation.
Dietrich noticed that the interior of the house wasn’t in such good shape as the exterior.
All the furniture that could have decorated that habitation was completely broken in such a way that it would be impossible to distinguish the table from the chairs.
Dietrich confirmed that there were no bodies before she went up stairs to the second floor. She entered the first room whose door was broken and there, she witnessed a gruesome spectacle.
Lying on the ground there were the bodies of a man and a woman; both had their guts completely eaten but, there was something more amazing about those corpses.
Even as their chests were open and their guts eaten, the pair had peaceful smiles on their faces and they were holding each other’s hands.
They had died happy, knowing that they were together in the end.
Dietrich felt a tear flowing from her right eye; was that the love that the poets sang about? The young Claymore had never experienced such a love in her life.
Dietrich pondered if she should give them a proper burial but she decided that it would be better to leave them like they were: with their hands grasped together until their bodies turned into dust.
And it was at that moment that the Claymore felt three strong Yoki nearby.
“Awakened Beings?”
Dietrich rushed to the exterior and she saw Amanda standing against three Awakened Beings.
One had a humanoid blue body; however, he was much bigger than a human and had three eyes. The other had a lizard-like body and the last one, which was a female, looked like a giant worm but with stings on her body, tentacles on the top of her head and more tentacles coming out of her mouth.
“Look at we have found here” said the lizard-Awakened Being “Two Claymores, so far away from home.”
“Don’t worry, Dietrich. These three are nothing compared to some other Awakened Beings I’ve felt in that castle.” said Amanda, while Dietrich stood by her side, her claymore on her hand.
“You heard that? She said we are nothing.” cried the blue Awakened Being.
“Tough talk for someone who is at disadvantage.” shouted the female one.
Then, without a warning, all three Awakened Beings opened their mouths and sent tentacles flying against the two Claymores.
Amanda jumped aside but Dietrich launched herself forward, landed on the shoulder of the humanoid-one and stabbed one of his eyes. The monster roared in pain, Dietrich got ready to chop his head but the female-one sent herself against her and the two fell on the ground with the Awakened standing over Dietrich.
That was so disgusting; there were fluids and stings everywhere. Dietrich swung her claymore blindly and she was lucky enough to slice three stings, however, the Awakened didn’t seem to mind that and she tried to suffocate the girl with her weight.
Dietrich couldn’t breed and she thought she was going to die there but, she was saved when Amanda kicked the Awakened on her disgusting head.
Amanda, after making sure that Dietrich was fine, tried to attack the worm-Awakened Being; she blocked the attack with the stings and Amanda had to twist her full-body to cut the tentacles that the lizard-Awakened sent against her.
Amanda hurled upwards and slashed at the blue-Awakened in a diagonal fashion, confident that Dietrich would protect her back.
While she was on the air, the Being attacked her with his claws, Amanda dodged them and landed. However, her nemesis slashed downwards, the woman raised her claymore, parried the attack and moved it to the right to push aside the other claw, the monster swiped again and her claw clanged audibly against Amanda’s claymore; the girl send a burst of Yoki into her muscles and she was able to withstand the strike. The exchange of blows continued with Amanda always on the defensive; roaring of frustration, the monster united his two hands in a single massive fist and attacked the claymore. Amanda smiled, seeing her opportunity; she sidestepped and raised her claymore on the horizontal, letting the Awakened Being chop his own hands off. The monster roared but he was silenced when Amanda jumped and sliced his head.
On the other side of the fight, things were not going so well. Dietrich had been able to stab through the lizard-Awakened right claw but he shoulder-charged against her and she was sent flying against the tentacles of the other one.
The tentacles wrapped around her body and she was pulled in the direction of the female-Being’s mouth. Luckily, Dietrich had been able to hold on to her claymore so, when she was close enough, she swung it, cutting the tentacles that imprisoned her and with a second swing, she sliced half of the Awakened Being’s head.
Dietrich landed smoothly on the ground and she turned around the fattest she could but, this time, she wasn’t fast enough.
Ten tentacles were sent against her and ten tentacles pierced ten different points of her chest. One almost hit the heart.
Dietrich coughed blood; she tried to slash those damned things that were wounding her but her strength was sweeping away. She could feel her blood pouring out of the wounds. She whished that someone would grasp her hand now, like those two lovers…
“NO! DIETRICH!” shouted Amanda before she slashed the tentacles that were piercing trough her partner, maybe even her friend.
Dietrich fell hard on the ground and she let her claymore go.
The Awakened Being, seeing the golden fire on Amanda’s eyes and knowing that he was overpowered, tried to run away but Amanda somersaulted behind and slashed downwards, cutting the monster in half.
The Claymore didn’t even look to the fount of purple gore that was now the body of the Awakened Being before she rushed to Dietrich’s side.
The poor girl was grasping her wounds and coughing up more and more blood, Amanda analyzed the holes and she saw that they couldn’t be deeper.
“C’mon Dietrich! C’mon girl, don’t die! Tell me, are you defensive type?” Amanda yelled but Dietrich couldn’t answer “Hear me, girl, please, hear me! This is important! Are you defensive?”
Dietrich coughed up more blood before she could answer. “N-no…”
“Holy shit…no…please…no” Amanda said, being driven to despair, trying to look for a solution.
But there was none, Dietrich was offensive and to an offensive warrior those wounds were mortal. There was nothing Amanda could do; there was nothing anyone could do.
And Dietrich knew that, she knew that she was going to die, still, on her mind, she denied it.
“No! I don’t want to die”
“Please, I want to live.”
“Please!”
“I don’t want to die!”
“…no…”
Then, in those moments, when she could see death coming for her, Dietrich reached a final hope and she raised her Yoki the highest she could.
Waves of Yoki started swirling around her body and for moments, it seemed like it would work, the wounds were starting to regenerate. She was going to live…
But soon, Dietrich realized that she had gone too far.
The Yoki was no longer swirling around her, it was being spilled from her body, ripping off her some of her clothes and raising into the sky in the form of a massive green pillar of energy.
The Yoki could no longer be controlled.
The Yoki was in control now and Dietrich realized that her destiny would be to Awake right there.
Finally we get to see some more action in your fic. Although I think you should stop calling the continent that they live on an island, its way to big to be called an island. So its a continent.
I'm interested to see what will happen to Dietrich, will she awaken? Or partially awaken, or will Amanda kill her? Next chapters should be good.
I don't want to spoil too much but I can tell already that Dietrich won't get killed by Amanda. I think that what will happen will surprise everyone or at least I hope so
Location: Canada, but sometimes in La La-Land hanging out with Midori-chan89
Age: 35
Next chapter!
Spoiler for chapter 13:
Burning Rubber
Chapter 13: Coming For You
Early Sunday Morning.
Galatea and her group stood infront of Easley's lab. Jean, Clare, Tabitha, Yuma, Helen, and Deneve, along with Galatea standing in the middle of them. Galatea grabed her sword, and the others copied her as they drew they're swords along with her.
"Ummm Galatea." Tabitha said. "Where is Cynthia?"
Galatea looked over to her. "She won't be joining us in any type of mission anytime soon, she is not herself right now."
"Yeah and who is watching our two prisoners?!" Helen yelled getting everyones attention.
Galatea was not to happy about Helen's loud mouth in this stealth mission. "They are being watched by Raphaela. Now lets go in there and destroy that building!"
The girls charged the building breaking into windows and the front door. They all stayed near each other and on they're gaurd, Galatea signaled everyone to split up. Clare went with Jean, Helen stayed with Deneve, and Yuma and Tabitha stuck with Galatea. However Easley had left and there was no one left.
"Alright lets get out of here." Clare said to Jean.
Jean walked out of the room they were in with Clare following her. Then she heard Clare scream, she turned around only to see Clare on the floor, and a yoma standing behind her.
"How dare you!" Jean yelled cutting the yoma in half. "How could we miss this?!" She thought as another yoma came down at her and she sliced it in two.
In another room Helen and Deneve were setting up charges. "Hey sounds like Jean is having all the fun again." Helen said laughing.
"Stick to the mission."
"Deneve your always so cold to me, hey I know why you just need to be loosened up a little if you know what I mean?"
"Shut up Helen!"
Galatea sen't Tabitha to go and help Jean and Clare while she and Yuma set up more charges in another part of the building. Tabitha ran up some stairs dodging dead bodies of yoma that were falling back as Jean killed one after another. Then Jean made a mistake as she killed a yoma behind her another one came at her from behind and attacked, Jean killed it but the one she thought she killed before that got up and rammed its right hand through her stomach from behind.
"Jean!" Tabitha screamed killing the yoma that had spilled Jean's blood all over.
Clare looked over and forced herself up to catch Jean as she fell forward.
"Clare..." Jean mumbled couphing up blood. "Isn't our job fun?"
"Don't talk Jean! Lets just leave this place! Clare said limping out of the building holding Jean in her arms as Tabitha protected them from anymore yoma.
Galatea had set the charges and they had now thirty seconds to get out. "Alright everyone lets go!"
Helen and Deneve had broken out of a window upstairs and landed on the ground outside, Galatea and Yuma ran out the front door as the others followed them. Then the building exploded leaving nothing behind.
* * *
After sunrise.
T.J. had brought back a dark red 1996 Camaro SS, it had the 5.7 litre V8 just like his 1998 Camaro Z28. He had just won it from another race, earlier in the morning he had raced his Camaro for pinks against another Camaro and he had been driving his new car around all morning. He had his two Camaro's parked beside each other and he went in the shop to look at his four other cars that he had just taken. The Diablo, CCX, and F430 were on hoists, they needed some body work then they could be put back on the road. T.J. rubbed his hands together just thinking about what it was going to be like to race those cars, they could win him a lot of cash. Then there was the Viper which was ready to go anytime.
He saw Priscilla standing against his house with her head down, her brother was dead now and she knew who killed him. T.J. knew this wasn't going to be good.
"Hey Priscilla, why don't you come over here? I'm going for a drive, come with me."
Priscilla nodded and walked over, they sat in the Viper and went down the street in it.
"This is a nice car don't you think Priscilla?"
"Yes it is. T.J. why do you like cars so much?"
"Hmmm thats a good question. I don't know actually, I just do I guess."
It was queit for a minute. "That woman killed my brother didn't she? Didn't she?"
"Yeah she did...."
I don't think she is going to live much longer." Priscilla said under her breath.
"What was that?"
"Nothing, don't worry about it."
Again it was silent for a few minutes.
"Hey T.J."
"Yeah."
"I was wondering if I could stay with you."
"What do you mean?"
"My father hates me.... I don't want to go back to him, he's evil and he has used me at every chance he has. He even tried to kill my brother before."
"Alright stop." T.J. said stopping for a few seconds. "You can stay with me for as long as you like then."
"Really?! Thank you so much!" Priscilla yelled jumping out of her seat and hugging T.J.
"Hey wait Priscilla stop! I can't see where I'm going!"
Priscilla quickly stopped and started to giggle. "I'm sorry."
What happened next surprised them both. Rigardo had jumped off a building in his awakened form to cause havok in the city. People started to run and scream, as people in they're cars started to crash into one another as they tried to miss him.
"Come with me humans!" Rigardo yelled. If you don't I will force you to, or eat you either one works!"
"Priscilla stay in here." T.J. said stopping his car at the side of the road and getting out.
"What are you doing?!"
T.J. got out and looked at Rigardo. "This is why I got the experiment done." He thought.
"What is this? You have yoki?" Rigardo said seeing T.J.
T.J. ran at Rigardo, his eyes turned amber. He didn't stand much of a chance though once Rigardo grabbed him and threw him to the ground.
"You must be the one Easley told me about. Oh well there is no use for you anymore."
"This really isn't good!" T.J. thought, then he saw Priscilla knock Rigardo over.
"Don't hurt him!"
"Priscilla?" T.J. asked himself once he saw her knock over that beast.
Then he was shocked as he watched her transform into an even more frightening beast. "What is this?" T.J. asked himself as he now watched a winged purple monster attack Rigardo.
Rigardo fell back on his back hard and looked at Priscilla. "What are you doing here? I thought Easley was going to have you dead Priscilla?!"
"What?! You go and run! Tell my father that he is the one that will be dead!" Priscilla screamed watching Rigardo take off.
Next she turned back into her human form and fell to the ground. Her body had aged a bit because of the process, she looked about six years older. That and all her clothes were ripped off. T.J. quickly picked her up and put her in his car before anyone would come back to look and see. He made a break for it and sped home quick. The effects of the fight were getting to him to. Rigardo had taken a lot out of him by just throwing him to the ground, T.J. was starting to wonder how he survived. "Must have been the yoma infusion."
Once he got home he put Priscilla on his bed and fell down beside her, she was already asleep and he was so weak from what happened that he fell asleep beside her.
* * *
In an underground building Rigardo had made his way to Easley who was experimenting on his test subjects.
"Rigardo your back with no experiments to create?"
"Easley! It was Priscilla! She's not dead yet! She stopped me!"
"What slow down Rigardo I haven't heard you this worked up in a long time."
"Alright listen, that guy that you experimented on that was supposed to kill her. He didn't, it seems she is friends with him now."
"Really now? This is most unfortunate."
* * *
Galatea again had checked out the files in her room. Re was still in her bed behind her, he looked over when he heard her in there and had seen her on the computer looking at the screen reading all of the information he had stolen.
"Galatea... Is it good?"
Galatea turned around and stood up. "Re I didn't think you were awake." She said covering herself.
It wasn't until then that he noticed her white seethrough eveningwear. "I wasn't looking Galatea, just so you know."
Galatea smiled and walked to him and sat on her knees while putting her elbows on the bed and looked at him.
"Is something wrong?"
She smiled. "No Re, its just that I have put you through so much and you could have died. This may sound a bit strange but I'm glad I found someone like you."
"Well its kind of hard to not do the things I am told to do when I have the most stunning woman in the world telling me to do them." Re countered.
Without saying anything Galatea put her hands on his face and kissed him. "Would you like to see just how stunning I am?" Galatea said getting on top of him and sitting on his lap.
"Wait Miss Galatea."
"Stop calling me miss! Makes me feel old."
"But I..."
"I know your still wounded, just let me do the work. Just relax....."
* * *
Meanwhile in a park, Cynthi had walked out of her car and sat on a bench alone as the night sky continued to get darker. She spent a lot of time here with him in the past half a year. She knew he was the one and yet he was murdered, why her? Why did things like this always have to happen to her?
Then she heard someone talking. It was Sid and he was with Galk.
"Hey Galk look its Cynthia!"
Sid ran over to Cynthia and noticed how sad she looked. "Hey whats wrong? Raki not good enough for you or something?"
Cynthia covered her face. Of all times and of all people.
"Sid!" Galk yelled shutting him up.
They obviously didn't know what was going on. "Raki has been killed...."
Sid and Galk both looked at Cynthia, they didn't know what to say. Cynthia didn't bother looking at them, she just looked down and walked to her car and drove away.
"Galk did you hear her?!"
"Yeah...."
"Raki can't be dead?!" Sid yelled punching the air. "It can't be!"
Galk felt the same pain but didn't show it. "Lets just get out of here Sid..."
Cynthia thought to herself as she drove down the dark street. "That woman, I know she killed him. I'm going after her!"
* * *
Priscilla was awake now, she put some clothes on and looked at T.J. who was still asleep. She did age because she transformed, but she remembered Easley telling her that whenever she went into her awakened form it would make her mature faster. Priscilla looked at herself, she did infact mature more because of it. She guessed that she had to have the body of a twenty-one year old now. She went to the window and looked out as the moon light filled the room.
"It was J.T. that killed my brother.... I'm coming for you." She thought. "I'm going to make you pay!"
hell: First of all, nice chapter. Some good relationships between characthers
Still I think your figth scenes migth be a little short for example, Rigardo vs Priscilla could have been a little more explored if you described from his point of view that he was facing an invicible monster or something like that and altough we know how Priscilla and Rigardo Awakened forms look like, a description of them would only enrich the text.
By the way, how many chapters are you planning for this?
Dialogue is quite good, especially between Re and Galatea. However, the restriction on words continues to be a small problem. Before Jean was injured you used "kill" too many times. A less serious case is where you said isley had left and there was no one left. XD
Location: Canada, but sometimes in La La-Land hanging out with Midori-chan89
Age: 35
@MisterJB: There is a reason why the fight scenes are so short, because long detailed fights are not what I'm going for in this fic.
Oh and there is a ton of characters in this story.
@Yosei: Yeah I must have been in La La Land when I wrote this chapter.
comparing to the other fic I'm reading rigth now it's obvious that you worked more on the figths on that.
Well, the races are amazing, that's for sure.
In this chapter in particular I was talking about Re, Galatea, Priscilla and TJ
oh, I almost forgot. Good sugestion about the continent stuff. I don't believe I didn't noticed it.
Thanks
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