Claymore Fanfiction Discussion

[Shiek927]

Originally Posted by MisterJB

Could anyone please give me a good onomatopoeia to imitate the sound of a heart beating?

drums, "ba-bump", bellows, etc...

Anything I suppose that sounds deep, loud and powerful can make a good comparison.

Just be sure that it fits with Claymore; even if a heart sounds like something, that "something" has to exist in their timeperiod.

When (flushed) Raki hugged Claire(more accurately, her bosom ) to escape from Ophelia, he heard her heartbeat as "ba-bump, ba-bump, ba-bump".

I think that's what onomatopoeia means

[irvinethearcher]

like a drum?

[Bikerider]

Meanwhile, Cynthia is distracted when helping Yuma regenerate her leg

Yuma: Umm Cynthia, can you concentrate a bit more to help me..

Cynthia: huh, whuh ? oh right...

Yuma: Cynthia !!! That's the wrong foot !!

Cynthia looks at Yuma regenerated foot to see the toes are reversed from what they should be...

Cynthia: Oh dear.....

[Shiek927]

Originally Posted by Bikerider

Meanwhile, Cynthia is distracted when helping Yuma regenerate her leg

Yuma: Umm Cynthia, can you concentrate a bit more to help me..

Cynthia: huh, whuh ? oh right...

Yuma: Cynthia !!! That's the wrong foot !!

Cynthia looks at Yuma regenerated foot to see the toes are reversed from what they should be...

Cynthia: Oh dear.....

Ugh....can only imagine what will happen when Helen shows up

She better be careful or she'll get one of Yuma's toes in her eyesocket (that was sick, I know , I'm a loony after 3am )

[hell88]

Originally Posted by Bikerider

Meanwhile, Cynthia is distracted when helping Yuma regenerate her leg

Yuma: Umm Cynthia, can you concentrate a bit more to help me..

Cynthia: huh, whuh ? oh right...

Yuma: Cynthia !!! That's the wrong foot !!

Cynthia looks at Yuma regenerated foot to see the toes are reversed from what they should be...

Cynthia: Oh dear.....

OMG! You have to add some more to this one, I would add something but I can't think of anything to add lol.

[Weird D]

Not quite a sequel, more like a side story to my other works.

Spoiler for Unexpected downfall:

The Eastern lands were infamous for a single thing. They were the home of the well-know yet mysterious Organization, the place where the half-Yoma warriors, dubbed Claymore, were created. The only ones who knew what was going on there were the so-called 'Men in black' who supplied the Claymores with the necessities, gave them their assignments and collected the money. And among those, only the higher-ups knew of the darker things the Organization dabbled into, or its real purpose.

While officially all forty-seven warriors walked the lands of their assignments, this was not completely true, as some warriors were sometimes called for some business to the home town of Staff. Also, while only forty-seven warriors were active at a time, that did not mean they were all the half-Yoma available. There were always some trainees, warriors who were more or less ready to fight and could be rushed into active duty if necessary to replace any deceased warrior.

The end of the line was that Staff was more or less a concentration of half-Yoma. Usually, this was a good point, as any Yoma or Awakened Being would avoid the place like the plague. The number of warriors at hand, while not necessary huge, had always been a boon.

Until today.

Let us skip to the very heart of Staff, inside on of the deepest, darkest chambers. The kind of place only inhabited by rats, spiders and roaches. This room had a new sort of resident that day.

The five highest members were holding an emergency meeting. Only Rimuto, the head of the Organization, was missing.

None of them was young. None of them could be called handsome, many sporting some kind of deformity or scar that would make people back away. Yet they were the ones with power over this land, and by extension, the ones humans dwelled in.

They were the ones who granted or refused the requests for help. They were the ones who charged the outrageous prices for each work. One word from them and Yoma would know which city would NOT get any help, making it an all-you-can-eat buffet.

Yet today, they did not act high and mighty. They spoke in hushed whispers, huddled together like a group of rabbits facing a wolf, casting nervous glances around as if they were expecting a Yoma to come out of the shadows.

A Yoma would be safer. With a Yoma, you knew what to expect : a quick, messy yet relatively painless death you probably would not see coming.

If they caught them, it would anything but slow... they had seen of couple of the men being caught... so horrible... like the Feeders if they ever got Isley.

"This is unacceptable." one of the men said, trying not to be heard from the outside while expressing his indignation.

"Do we know what has been causing this phenomenon?"

"It is definitely Yoki, but aside from that, we know nothing."

"Such a change in their behaviour should not be possible."

Let us do a small recap here : recently, the stationed warriors had been reporting some surges of Yoki emanating from somewhere, though it was so unfocused they could not pinpoint them. First they ignored it, they had bigger fish to fry than a random Yoma throwing a tantrum, especially considering they were moving against the Abyssal Ones. Ever so slowly however, the warriors began acting differently as time went on, growing restless, unfocused and sometimes irritable. Some of them described it as an annoying itch you cannot reach.

The problem steadily got worse until one of them snapped at her handler during a training session that she was, quote, 'too damn horny to listen to his bitching'. Said warrior, who was quite skilled at sensing Yoki, then surprisingly jumped at the handler, apparently eager to reach a certain part of his anatomy. Several other warriors separated them, and the rowdy one was sent to solitary confinement. The incident was written off as a bad case of hormones on a warrior who could not handle the stress.

How wrong they were.

What happened that day happened again, apparently catching all the Claymores above a certain age. Like a disease spreading, a disease that caused Claymores to become more and more sex-crazed. Even the more subdued one went out of control. Moans could be heard at night as they tried to relieve themselves. The authority the handlers held went down the drain as the women began seeing them as a way to scratch that annoying itch.

Considering the strength the hybrids had, if they caught you, you had no chance to escape. Don't even think about defending yourself, after all, they only needed you alive, and only one part of your anatomy in working order. The only thing to do was hide.

Which was what the leaders were currently doing.

"Shut up!" Ermita tensed as he listened. "I thought I heard something."

More frightful glances were cast around. Had they been found? Finally Ermita relaxed. "Alright. I was wrong."

"We should be safe here anyway. These doors would stall even an Awakened." Rado stated.

"Please tell me they're locked."

"Of course they are! I double checked not fifteen minutes ago!"

"Our greatest weapons turning on us... who would have thought?" Orsay mused.

"Whoever caused this will pay."

"How are you going to do that if we're stuck here?" Ermita shot back. "By the way, has there been any news from Rimuto?"

"I doubt we'll see him again." Orsay sighed. "If I recall well, he was overseeing Alicia and Beth when it happened." He then shuddered. "If he's lucky, it will be over quickly. If not…"

"What do you mean?" the newest member asked.

"They were having controlled Awakening practice. Most likely, Alicia’s in her Awakened form."

There was a pause as the image formed in their minds.

Ouch.

"What about the Feeders? Are they affected?" Rado asked, only to be met with four ‘how dumb are you?’ expressions.

"Do you really want to go and check?" Orsay deadpanned.

Before the man could answer, all hell broke loose as the doors were flung open and out of their hinges with no resistance whatsoever. A mob of hybrids, at least two dozens of them, came in, their silver eyes zeroing of the frightened men who instantly realized, much to their horror, that they had finally been found.

The sheer lust in those eyes as they stalked toward the cowering men made what they wanted obvious.

Ermita threw Rado a look filled with fear and anger. "I thought you said the doors were locked!" The only thing preventing him from killing the man was the simple fact that death would be merciful at the moment. After all, one less man meant each of them would have more to deal with.

"I did! I don’t underst… ARGH!" Rado was interrupted when he was caught and drowned under a group of Claymores, just like his companions. First his body disappeared though his hands and feet could still be seen as he tried to reach for help that would never come. Then even those were obscured under the swarm as scraps of black cloack and pieces of armor and silver bodysuits were sent flying.

--

In yet another town, Isley smirked as he suddenly got the feeling justice had been served. The smirk was wiped away when he felt a tongue dragging along his leg. Looking down, he saw an Abyssal Feeder clutching him, its empty eyes locking with his and a creepy smile forming on its fanged mouth.

"From the crown of their heads to the tips of their toes… they truly are unsightly beings…"

--

Further away in a dark corridor, Rubel smirked as he heard the cries from the chamber he had ‘accidentally’ unlocked minutes ago. Some were of pain, others of fear and the last ones were of horror as clothes were torn and thrown haphazardly. This led him to roll his eyes as he foresaw the problem the attacking Claymores would be facing, namely the difficulty their prey would have to… perform… once they took their clothes.

‘Honestly! They made them that way to further separate and alienate them from humans, you’d think they would be able to stomach it.’ Then again, there's a difference between not running from it, and being able to get aroused when seeing that. He idly wondered if anyone could.

--

Elsewhere…

Raki sneezed loudly, prompting several pairs of eyes to look at him.

"What’s wrong kid? Got a cold last night? Want us to keep you warm?" Helen joked.

--

Oh, well, it was not Rubel’s problem. All that mattered to him was spy on the Organization and impede its progress without getting any attention to himself. And this was simply perfect. So improbable, yet so brilliant. The Organization’s credibility would be shattered if the incident got out, and Rubel would make sure it would. The research would be set back years even if they recovered, and that was a big if considering the leaders would probably be scarred for life if they did survive the whole ordeal. The sheer irony of the Organization being destroyed by its own weapons was just the icing on the cake.

Chuckling to himself, Rubel casually walked away, intent on leaving the sinking ship and enjoying the show from a safe distance.

At least he would have if a hand had not caught him by the neck and lifted him off his feet.

"Now look what I found." A brash voice oozing with satisfaction (and something else) snorted behind him.

Looking over his shoulder, Rubel had to gulp nervously as he realized just which warrior had caught him. His countenance cracked further when he saw a woman who out weighted him by at least thirty pounds of solid and very visible muscle. While calling her ugly would be extreme, her very short hair, sharp face and rude demeanour did little to give her a more feminine appearance. He was staring at the current number five, Rachel.

Just great, out of all the warriors, he had to be caught by the manliest one since Undine.

Rubel was then roughly slammed against the wall as those silver eyes narrowed angrily.

“MANLY?”

‘Crap! Did I say that loud?’ Rubel thought fearfully as he was effortlessly slung over Rachel’s shoulder like a bag of potatoes.

“You and I are gonna spend some quality time together, buddy.” Rachel promised as she skipped to her room. “And if I'm the man, you’ll have to be the woman I guess.”

Rubel, the manipulative, underhanded, unflappable spy, was now officially crying as he was carried to his doom.

--

Not so far from Staff, Miria suddenly stopped in her tracks, which in turn made her group look at her inquiringly.

“Is there anything wrong Captain?” Tabitha asked, voicing everyone’s question.

Miria turned to her friends / allies. She had a strange look on her serious yet beautiful face as she finally spoke. “No, nothing. I just got the strangest feeling that one of our problems just solved itself on its own…”

Everyone looked bemused for a moment before Helen laughed.

“Right! Like the Organization crumbling on itself without us doing anything! Get real big sis, like that could happen!”

Everyone shared a heartfelt laugh at that before shaking their heads and walking on, unaware that the final battle had been won without even fighting.

I'm just wondering, who got it worse in this? Rimuto or Rubel?

Anyway, I'm posting it here, and will be putting it on ff.net later.

[Shiek927]

Oh, definitely Rubel. At least the other members didn't get....her

Nice to see you continuing your works Weird D.

[MisterJB]

Is Raki the only straigth guy in that Continent or what?

Well, Rubel without a doubt got the worst. At least Alicia and Beth are sexy, even on AB form.

Clare's Yoki is screwing the whole Continent and I can't wait to see how the resident God Eye is dealing with the situation at hands

[Shiek927]

Originally Posted by MisterJB

Is Raki the only straigth guy in that Continent or what?

Well, Rubel without a doubt got the worst. At least Alicia and Beth are sexy, even on AB form.

Clare's Yoki is screwing the whole Continent and I can't wait to see how the resident God Eye is dealing with the situation at hands

It is weird when you think about it

Actually, in his last fic, Galatea was giving him some glances as well...

[MisterJB]

Originally Posted by Shiek927

It is weird when you think about it

Actually, in his last fic, Galatea was giving him some glances as well...

Wasn't it Tabitha?

[Shiek927]

Originally Posted by MisterJB

Wasn't it Tabitha?

Tabitha only likes Miria, and Miria...doesn't really like anybody (a shame since Raki/Miria is great). Hard to say with Deneve but she isn't making any moves either apparently(WHY do authors always make her like that? )

Nah, reread it. "Still, even their resident ‘eye’ was starting to give Raki some speculative looks".

[Weird D]

Originally Posted by MisterJB

Is Raki the only straigth guy in that Continent or what?

Why are you asking that?

Well, Rubel without a doubt got the worst. At least Alicia and Beth are sexy, even on AB form.

True, but would you let her get close to you, for specifically that part of you, with those big ass arm blades?

[Shiek927]

Why are you asking that?

, he's asking that because none of the other males seem to "enjoy" what's happening.

But can you blame them? At least the Ghosts are relatively human. Can't blame Isley for not getting the hots for the Feeders, and I can't blame Rubel for not digging the man-beast known as Rachel

[MisterJB]

Originally Posted by Weird D

Why are you asking that?



True, but would you let her get close to you, for specifically that part of you, with those big ass arm blades?

Because of what shiek said.

Dude, as long as she has those legs of hers...

Originally Posted by Shiek927

Tabitha only likes Miria, and Miria...doesn't really like anybody (a shame since Raki/Miria is great). Hard to say with Deneve but she isn't making any moves either apparently(WHY do authors always make her like that? )

Nah, reread it. "Still, even their resident ‘eye’ was starting to give Raki some speculative looks".

Don't complain, at least there are fics about them. I don't get that much luck Just some pics and doujins.

Tabitha needs to get a personality. I used to like her until chapter 90.

Originally Posted by Shiek927

, he's asking that because none of the other males seem to "enjoy" what's happening.

But can you blame them? At least the Ghosts are relatively human. Can't blame Isley for not getting the hots for the Feeders, and I can't blame Rubel for not digging the man-beast known as Rachel

Well, I don't know. With their faces hidden, the AFs can be quite attractive.

And if I remember correctly, in the last fic he said that he had left the Ghosts because he was starting to feel uneasy due to the looks they were giving him.
...stupid...

[Shiek927]

Don't complain, at least there are fics about them. I don't get that much luck Just some pics and doujins.

Tabitha needs to get a personality. I used to like her until chapter 90.

Their are Miria doujins? The only doujins I know are the ones about the Abyssals(which I'm still hoping for translations one day), and a few others for OC's I think.

Has Tabitha ever had a personality? She's a good sensor, but other then following Captain Miria around whereever she goes, she's never really said or done anything.

Her new hairdo isn't that bad actually, I like it.

Well, I don't know. With their faces hidden, the AFs can be quite attractive.

And if I remember correctly, in the last fic he said that he had left the Ghosts because he was starting to feel uneasy due to the looks they were giving him.
...stupid...

,, I guess. I suppose if I put a paperbag over their head and muffled the growls. XDXD

He did? Huh.....that was stupid of him.

[MisterJB]

Originally Posted by Shiek927

Their are Miria doujins? The only doujins I know are the ones about the Abyssals(which I'm still hoping for translations one day), and a few others for OC's I think.

yeah, there is one of Miria with Rigardo and one called Tokimeki 2 but I must advise you...

DON'T READ TOKIMEKI 2 OR YOU'LL BE SCARRED FOR LIFE

There is also one of Miria and Galatea

[Shiek927]

Originally Posted by MisterJB

yeah, there is one of Miria with Rigardo and one called Tokimeki 2 but I must advise you...

DON'T READ TOKIMEKI 2 OR YOU'LL BE SCARRED FOR LIFE

Hentai? I don't bother. The Claymore hentai I was bored enough to look up were all pretty much based off the anime, centered around Claire, and had terrible artwork. Fanfiction like Weird D's series or the various harems are better because it's funnier, you use your imagination, and they're no where need as mindless, graphic or stupid.

Nevertheless....MiriaxRigardo eh?.......so THAT's where people get the crazy idea to make them into a couple

Better then FloraxRigardo

[Weird D]

Originally Posted by Shiek927

, he's asking that because none of the other males seem to "enjoy" what's happening.

But can you blame them? At least the Ghosts are relatively human. Can't blame Isley for not getting the hots for the Feeders, and I can't blame Rubel for not digging the man-beast known as Rachel

May I remind you that whatever Teresa had on her chest was enough to stop a bunch of men who had been drooling over her... And IMO, only Galatea comes close to her in looks alone.
The MIB don't even consider Claymores as women to start with, merely slabs of meat. This and that make it impossible for them to... well... perform.

Originally Posted by MisterJB

Because of what shiek said.

And if I remember correctly, in the last fic he said that he had left the Ghosts because he was starting to feel uneasy due to the looks they were giving him.
...stupid...

Actually, I was talking about Priscilla, Renee and Dietrich. I said in Consequences that Isley had taken them as 'hostages' and Priscilla was also back with him for his protection (which is why she was not in Misunderstanding).
(Note to self, if I ever do a conclusion, explain why Dietrich has not gone back to the Org)

[Shiek927]

May I remind you that whatever Teresa had on her chest was enough to stop a bunch of men who had been drooling over her... And IMO, only Galatea comes close to her in looks alone.
The MIB don't even consider Claymores as women to start with, merely slabs of meat. This and that make it impossible for them to... well... perform.

Weird D....I was in a joking mood when I wrote that, you didn't have to get so analytical

But those were guys were raping bandits, of course that would stop whores them. Raki is going on with Claire and he doesn't seem to care, does he?

and yes, saying Teresa and Galatea are the only good ones are your opinion, one I don't share at all. They have an overwhelming "goddess" look to them, but all the other Ghosts(and most Claymores actually) are all attractive, especially since most of them have a "down-to-earth" practical\average appeal to them rather then Teresa and Galatea who clearly try to sweep everyone off their feet.

[Weird D]

Originally Posted by Shiek927

Weird D....I was in a joking mood when I wrote that, you didn't have to get so analytical

But those were guys were raping bandits, of course that would stop whores them. Raki is going on with Claire and he doesn't seem to care, does he?

and yes, saying Teresa and Galatea are the only good ones are your opinion, one I don't share at all. They have an overwhelming "goddess" look to them, but all the other Ghosts(and most Claymores actually) are all attractive, especially since most of them have a "down-to-earth" practical\average appeal to them rather then Teresa and Galatea who clearly try to sweep everyone off their feet.

Sorry, I tend to get defensive at times...

Yup, Raki does love Clare, and truly cares about his (all female) friends. That's why he can look at her naked and not mind.

But I do think you misread me. If you were to put a poll for the most attractive Claymore, those two would most likely be near the top. That did not mean they are 'the only good ones', simply that if you were to judge them physically, they have a serious advantage. Yagi pretty much made them goddesses among models. Personality wise however, they have some serious flaws.
If you count other factors, well, all the Claymores are special in their own way: Miria's charisma is unmatched IMO, Cynthia's cute, bright and cheerful which is rare among Claymores, Renee's plain hot... Heck, even Rachel would not be so bad if she were more feminine in attitude.