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2009-05-08, 05:46 | Link #15183 |
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Spoiler for September the First, Day 0, Universe 1: Morning- The End of Eight:
Only needed minor edits. I don't know what you're talking about, Kaisos. Spoiler for September the First, Day Zero, Universe 1: Interlude- Dark People in a Dark Room:
Hmmm. I'm beginning to wonder that if, given sufficient direction, I could write a few of these scenes myself. It would certainly speed up production time. Last edited by Jintor; 2009-05-15 at 06:30. |
2009-05-08, 06:01 | Link #15185 |
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I AM NOW SOMEWHAT DERAILING THE THREAD BECAUSE I WAS TECHNICALLY TOLD I COULD! . . . SORT OF!
Spoiler for Samurai Kyonko discussion type stuff, ignore if you want.:
No, I'm not sure what the point in doing this is. I'm just very bored.
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Spoiler for I have K-On on the brain:
Nice. I especially like the bit of cultural snobbery by Asahina, which is promptly punished by karma in the form of Haruki. But isn't Mitsuuru even smaller than Kyonko ...? Still, Kyonko on bass sounds like fun. Quote:
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A nasty little twist for Taniguchi ... If Taniguchi ever acted a little too flirty with some guy who wasn't prepared to take 'no' for an answer, and Kyonko ended up saving her by kicking said guy's butt ... Would Taniguchi start to idolize her? Quote:
Re: Taniguchi: See my previous little twist. If Taniguchi -- for whatever reason -- finds a newfound respect and appreciation for Kyonko and starts to act friendly, wouldn't it mess with Samurai Kyonko's thought process? "How I wish to punch her ... But it is dishonourable to strike someone for trying to be a friend. What? No, not karaoke! Why do you want to go shopping for clothes? Let go of me? Kunikida, you traitor, don't help her drag me away! I have a hakama, I'm fine without summer dresses! Help!" Re: Haruki: If Haruki used to be in the kendo club but stopped coming, perhaps Kyonko could demand he spar with her so their skills don't get rusty, now that they're both in the SOS-dan. They could work off some of that sexual frustration by matching wills and skills, which could also bring them closer together as they learn to respect each other's abilities. Quote:
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As for a personality for the canonical kendo club member ... How about someone who is reasonably skilled in kendo, like Kyonko, but more in touch with modern culture? She respects Kyonko's focus, but is a little worried about the fact that she focuses on swordplay and the ancient codes of conduct so absolutely. There could be a few scenes of them sparring and talking, with the canonical kendo club member suggesting they go do something afterwards "for fun", with Kyonko politely refusing, citing "other responsibilities". The other girl suggests Kyonko needs to find some activities that allow her to be a part of modern society. When Kyonko is, regardless how, enlisted into the SOS-dan, the canonical kendo club member could drop by from time to time to watch what happens (or she and Kyonko could talk about it during lunch), and she'd then say to Kyonko that she's happy she finally found something fun and whimsical to do. Cue the "Kyonko's stunned"-look. Beautiful. I love it. ^^ |
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2009-05-08, 09:40 | Link #15197 |
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I might rewrite the Poker scene, since it already has a basis for me to work off.
Spoiler for September the First, Day 0, Universe 1 - Clubroom Poker:
Any problems or foreshadowing you want to introduce, I'll add them in. Last edited by Jintor; 2009-05-10 at 20:33. |
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To be honest, I'm really wanting to write up a brief "training session" between the two now... which would basically amount to Kyonko beating him like a piñata Quote:
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The individual routes... well, I really don't want to write the romantic fluff in the Alien or Time Traveler routes, and Time Traveler requires someone a little crazier than I am anyway. Quote:
AWESOME FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFF This is pretty much exactly what I envisioned. I love you. That's awesome. The original mentions where Haruhi went, however, which is important... and I need to have Kyon worrying about alternate versions of himself a bit more, which of course segues into the story we have here. |
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