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Tyabann · 2009-05-26, 20:29

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Originally Posted by yggdrasil325

What about the Integrated Data Sentient Entity? Are we going to leave it as such or go with the novel's Data Overmind?

Data Overmind. That was Strato's idea, I'm positive.

Also the original a.f.k. subs were "Data Integration Thought Entity".

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Originally Posted by CrowKenobi

And try using "Second Year" for Mikuru...

I'd honestly prefer to find a single word for that.

Cat Megex · 2009-05-26, 20:37

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Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

Data Overmind. That was Strato's idea, I'm positive.

I kindly request that we don't use that. Or were you not the one who agreed with me that "Integrated Data Sentient Entity" sounded better? (...Though I can't remember what the consensus on "Celestial" vs. "Avatar" was.)

...On the other hand, "Canopy Domain" sounds just as bad as "Data Overmind", and yet it's the term I've seen more often for Kuyoh's group.

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Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

I'd honestly prefer to find a single word for that.

...Well, compound words are always useful. "Second-year", perhaps?

Tyabann · 2009-05-26, 20:41

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Originally Posted by Cat Megex

I kindly request that we don't use that. Or were you not the one who agreed with me that "Integrated Data Sentient Entity" sounded better? (Or was that just on "Avatar"?)

Like I said, I'm using the official translations wherever possible. We want to remain consistent.

And yes, "Avatar" sounds better simply because it perfectly describes them, which is why I'm not using "Celestial" even though Strato did.

I'd argue that "Data Overmind" perfectly describes the aliens, as well.

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Originally Posted by Cat Megex

...Well, compound words are always useful. "Second-year", perhaps?

Hrr. Good enough.

dragon4dudes · 2009-05-26, 20:44

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Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

I'd honestly prefer to find a single word for that.

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Originally Posted by Cat Megex

...Well, compound words are always useful. "Second-year", perhaps?

Junior, Sophomore, ye-no. Besides, it'd be Junior year. Second year sounds better IMO.

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Originally Posted by Cat Megex

I kindly request that we don't use that. Or were you not the one who agreed with me that "Integrated Data Sentient Entity" sounded better? (...Though I can't remember what the consensus on "Celestial" vs. "Avatar" was.

Change of heart? Suddenly thought of Yugioh there... but whatever.

Also, that royal flush thing. Again, I am surprised that happened.

Cat Megex · 2009-05-26, 20:45

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Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

I'd argue that "Data Overmind" perfectly describes the aliens, as well.

Eh, whatever. Hell, if "Data Overmind" had been used from the beginning, I'd probably prefer that over "Integrated Data Sentient Entity", so it's mainly just bias.

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Originally Posted by dragon4dudes

Also, that royal flush thing. Again, I am surprised that happened.

...Huh?

EDIT: Nvm. But that made me think of those four 4koma I linked over in the Image thread....

Tyabann · 2009-05-26, 20:46

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Originally Posted by dragon4dudes

Also, that royal flush thing. Again, I am surprised that happened.

It can happen. Just the odds are very, very low.

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Originally Posted by Cat Megex

Eh, whatever. Hell, if "Data Overmind" had been used from the beginning, I'd probably prefer that over "Integrated Data Sentient Entity", so it's mainly just bias.

Yay bias.

dragon4dudes · 2009-05-26, 20:49

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Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

It can happen. Just the odds are very, very low.

Yeah, I know it can happen. It's just that it actually did happen, even in a novel, that surprised me... Well, whatever, Haruhi is in control of the world. Unless its Kyon that is the "true" god... nvm

otai · 2009-05-26, 21:09

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Originally Posted by Cat Megex

...Well, compound words are always useful. "Second-year", perhaps?

If you don't have to be specific, "upperclassman" would work.

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Originally Posted by dragon4dudes

Yeah, I know it can happen. It's just that it actually did happen, even in a novel, that surprised me... Well, whatever, Haruhi is in control of the world. Unless its Kyon that is the "true" god... nvm

Never take Itsuki gambling. It seems he even loses at snake and ladders. You can't deliberately lose at that.

dragon4dudes · 2009-05-26, 21:12

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Originally Posted by otai

If you don't have to be specific, "upperclassman" would work.

True... It does have the problem of not being able to be used all the time. Also, I get the feeling it is already being used.

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Never take Itsuki gambling. It seems he even loses at snake and ladders. You can't deliberately lose at that.

Never planned on it, especially after he pretty much lost against Kyon at chess, a game that Kyon said he didn't know the rules to.

Tyabann · 2009-05-26, 21:25

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Originally Posted by dragon4dudes

Never planned on it, especially after he pretty much lost against Kyon at chess, a game that Kyon said he didn't know the rules to.

Koizumi is so full of himself a lot of the time that he deserves to lose at something, often.

Speaking of which, I always loved this passage from the novel.

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"We're counting on you for the winter field trip, Koizumi-kun. Next time come up with a more shocking script! We're going to the mountain villa next time, and it has to be in a blizzard. If you don't come up with a haunted mansion that suits my expectations, I'll really be mad. Hmm, I'm so looking forward to it!"

"Erm......what should I do?"

Like a rookie Nazi officer being told by the Führer to lead just a single Panzer division to capture the Allied commander on the western front at the end of the Second World War, Koizumi smiled awkwardly and turned to beg me for help.

I looked at Koizumi, who was like a defender trying to stop what seemed like a great goal near the end of a soccer match when the scores are even after overtime, and said without hesitation,

"Well, I'm also looking forward to it, Koizumi."

Jintor · 2009-05-26, 22:53

I'll edit your upwriteness later boss, but I support 'Data Overmind'

Tyabann · 2009-05-26, 23:06

More stuff that Jintor wrote previously.

It includes the foreshadowing I always wanted to include.

Spoiler for September the First, Day 0, Universe 1- Brigade HQ: Decision Point:

I'll do Haruhi's scene first.

Jintor · 2009-05-26, 23:15

There was something I was wondering about. As this is a visual novel, seperating lines into seperate 'screens' is important. But I absolutely hate breaking up the flow of a paragraph with unneccessary breaks, since I feel that formatting is part of the presentation of a novel and effects precisely how a reading is received.

By the way, I think you need to seperate out dialogue from monologue, just via the double-spacing if possible; I'm thinking of it kind of like the script to a play.

We're probably going to need to work out a way to format this so that we can start to include graphical effects within our scripting...

Kogetsu Shirogane · 2009-05-26, 23:24

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Originally Posted by Kaisos Erranon

Spoiler for September the First, Day 0, Universe 1- Brigade HQ: Decision Point:

And now I'm sad... thanks for that

Tyabann · 2009-05-26, 23:30

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Originally Posted by Jintor

There was something I was wondering about. As this is a visual novel, seperating lines into seperate 'screens' is important. But I absolutely hate breaking up the flow of a paragraph with unneccessary breaks, since I feel that formatting is part of the presentation of a novel and effects precisely how a reading is received.

By the way, I think you need to seperate out dialogue from monologue, just via the double-spacing if possible; I'm thinking of it kind of like the script to a play.

We're probably going to need to work out a way to format this so that we can start to include graphical effects within our scripting...

We can work on all this LATER.

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Originally Posted by Kogetsu Shirogane

And now I'm sad... thanks for that

Disappearance was win.

Jintor · 2009-05-26, 23:37

Bridge cross later? Okay, whatever. Do the scripting thing though.

Tyabann · 2009-05-27, 01:17

Yet another new part. This is the Haruhi scene you get if you choose to go out into town on Day Zero.

I will say this was fun to write.

Spoiler for September the First, Day 0, Universe 1: Cafe- This Isn't a Date!:

DJ_RockmanX · 2009-05-27, 01:20

What the hell is *KSSSSSSHHH* exactly?

Kogetsu Shirogane · 2009-05-27, 01:25

I think it's supposed to be static.

Anyway... why is Haruhi's hairband mentioned? I thought that was a detail left solely to visuals.

Jintor · 2009-05-27, 01:28

Because it's a visual novel, I doubt that the scene will be *of* Kyon walking from the station and show Haruhi in the window - it's more likely that that's a transition sentence, so as to let the reader know early what precisely is going on. Background at that point seems likely to be 'random outside area'.

I love working on fluff pieces.

2009-05-26, 23:06	Link #16172
Tyabann Homo Ludens Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Canada Age: 34	More stuff that Jintor wrote previously. It includes the foreshadowing I always wanted to include. Spoiler for September the First, Day 0, Universe 1- Brigade HQ: Decision Point: [Scene: Brigade HQ, Afternoon] Despite my excellent first hand, and the fact that Koizumi sucks at games, winning still wasn't that easy. This is because I spent about half the game distracted, because a frightening possibility had come to mind after my talk with Koizumi earlier. What if, instead of just looping around to the middle of August again, every single one of those fifteen thousand-odd universes kept going after all? How would we, or anyone, be able to tell? Fort that matter, it's perfectly possible that we might be in another loop right now, and no one would be able to tell. Even if I asked Nagato, as before, she might not tell me. Fifteen thousand versions of me, all existing at the same time, yet unable to reach one another. But it doesn't stop here, does it? I remember some mind-bending quantum physics theory that states that every single choice we make leads into a different universe. By this logic, there are an infinite number of “me”, all existing at the same time. There could be a universe where Koizumi is actually good at card games. There could be a universe where Haruhi never attended North High, and I never joined the SOS Brigade. There could be a universe where I'm a-- Itsuki: Ah, well, look at that. Looks like you win again. Koizumi's voice snaps me out of my reverie. Like I said, I only ever win when it's not important. Kyon: I'm done. It's no fun winning if there's no cash on the table, and it's no fun losing when there is cash on the table. Itsuki: Have you ever considered winning while there's cash on the table? Kyon: ...In your terms, I guess I would say "that is a fundamentally impossible turn of events that would never happen, ever, in a million years". Except in the universe where it did happen. Itsuki: Ah, that does sound exactly like me. Even when he agrees with me he mocks me! Koizumi packs up the cards quickly, making the pack seem to vanish with a flick of his wrists. A good party trick, if you can do it. Itsuki: Well, I'm off. Going to go do something, then, before we lose summer entirely? Kyon: ... [DECISION POINT HERE] 1)"Might head into town..." 2)"I should check up on Nagato..." 3)"...I might just head home..." 4)"I still have some stuff to talk to you about..." 5)"Maybe Asahina-san's still around...?" I'll do Haruhi's scene first.

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Tyabann Homo Ludens Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Canada Age: 34	Yet another new part. This is the Haruhi scene you get if you choose to go out into town on Day Zero. I will say this was fun to write. Spoiler for September the First, Day 0, Universe 1: Cafe- This Isn't a Date!: This Isn't a Date! Kyon: Maybe I'll walk around for a while. I feel like crap anyway. Itsuki: A good idea. Farewell for now, then. He and I go our separate ways as we leave the clubroom behind us. Where does he live, anyway? I guess I'll head down to the mall by Kitaguchi Station. Not much else to do. [Scene: Outside Kitaguchi Station] Kitaguchi Station is an important railway hub, and, as a result, it's usually filled with passerby. On weekends, the square in front of the station is filled with window-shopping young couples. For some reason, perhaps because of the heat, it's rather slow today. Which is why I was able to see someone I knew in the window of a small cafe. Someone with a yellow hairband. ... Guess I should go make sure she doesn't cause trouble for anyone. [Scene: Inside Cafe] Huh. She didn't notice me coming in. This would be a good opportunity to surprise her. Kyon: Yo, Haruhi. Haruhi: Waaaaaagh! She practically hit the ceiling. Excellent. Haruhi: Wha-what the hell! You scared me! The hell do you think you're doing!? More importantly, who gave you permission to follow me!? Stalker! I didn't follow you at all. In fact, our meeting here was entirely a coincidence. Furthermore, isn't there a place closer to the school you could have gone to? Haruhi: This is the only place in town that serves this. She points at her half-finished meal, a plate of some kind of spaghetti. Kyon: Is that really good enough to justify coming all the way down to the station? Haruhi: Yup! Sit down and order some, you'll see what I mean. ...I don't think so. Unlike you, my mom always packs my lunches, and I ate less than an hour ago. Besides, paying late fees continually has proven to be a large drain on the money levels in my wallet. I need to save up for next time. Haruhi: Geez, whatever. Don't order anything. A-at least try some of mine. Kyon: But... I'm not even hungry, like I said. Haruhi: Whatever, whatever! Just eat some spaghetti! She looks flustered again. This looks like trouble. Kyon: ... [DECISION POINT HERE] 1)“...Ever considered a therapist, Haruhi-san?” 2)“Alright, alright, I'll have something to eat.” Divine Wrath Kyon: Ever considered seeing a therapist, Haruhi-san? Haruhi: What's that supposed to mean? And what's with the sudden formality?! I don't want to deal with this today. My brain is tired. Kyon: Well, then, see you tomorrow. Haruhi: Wh-?! Wait a minute, I'm not done talking to you yet! I ignore her and head towards the door. Haruhi: Kyon! Are you listening!? Next time you're late it'll be a double penalty! You hear!? Red card! Red card! I must endure. I guess I'll head home. Nothing else to do. ... KSSSSSSHHH Divine Blessing Kyon: Alright, fine, I'll have a bit. Kyon: ... Haruhi: So? So? How is it? Kyon: Actually, it's really good. Haruhi: See? How did she even find out about this place and its pasta? I'm surprised Haruhi actually even cares about cooking like this. In any case, this is fantastic spaghetti. What did they put in this to make it so good? Also, why is the fork now scraping the dish? Haruhi: Uh... ugh... She's making a strange face. This is probably because I just wolfed down her lunch. Haruhi:... Kyon... my lunch... I was right. ...I'm in trouble. Haruhi: You're in so much trouble! She's probably going to assign a penalty and make me pay for it. Haruhi: Penalty! You're paying for my lunch! As I thought. No wonder our classmates consider me the expert on all things Haruhi. Haruhi: For the next three days! Kyon: Wh--? That's not fair at all! Haruhi: Sure it is! You just devoured my nourishment! I thought you said you weren't hungry! I'm so ashamed. It was just... so good... This isn't my fault at all! And so... Haruhi made me pay for her spaghetti (It cost this much!? How does she afford things like this?) and then dragged me around the square window shopping for about an hour. By the time we separated, she had this huge grin on her face. At least someone had a good time... Though I guess it was better than killing time at home. I suppose I should head back there now. Nothing else to do. ... KSSSSSSHHH Last edited by Tyabann; 2009-10-06 at 02:26.

2009-05-27, 01:20	Link #16178
DJ_RockmanX 性転換団長 Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Socal Age: 34	What the hell is KSSSSSSHHH exactly? __________________

2009-05-27, 01:25	Link #16179
Kogetsu Shirogane Kneel Before Your King! Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: My kingdom Age: 39	I think it's supposed to be static. Anyway... why is Haruhi's hairband mentioned? I thought that was a detail left solely to visuals. __________________ WARNING: Kogetsu Shirogane cannot be held accountable for any actions taken by someone else. Potential side effects of communicating with this user include headaches, mild confusion, insanity, delirium, and jumping into fires. Do not expose this user to sunlight or water or feed this user after midnight. ... so you think you're a king now...

2009-05-26, 22:53	Link #16171
Jintor Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Land Down Under Age: 32	I'll edit your upwriteness later boss, but I support 'Data Overmind'

2009-05-26, 23:15	Link #16173
Jintor Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Land Down Under Age: 32	There was something I was wondering about. As this is a visual novel, seperating lines into seperate 'screens' is important. But I absolutely hate breaking up the flow of a paragraph with unneccessary breaks, since I feel that formatting is part of the presentation of a novel and effects precisely how a reading is received. By the way, I think you need to seperate out dialogue from monologue, just via the double-spacing if possible; I'm thinking of it kind of like the script to a play. We're probably going to need to work out a way to format this so that we can start to include graphical effects within our scripting...

2009-05-26, 23:37	Link #16176
Jintor Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Land Down Under Age: 32	Bridge cross later? Okay, whatever. Do the scripting thing though.

2009-05-27, 01:28	Link #16180
Jintor Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Land Down Under Age: 32	Because it's a visual novel, I doubt that the scene will be of Kyon walking from the station and show Haruhi in the window - it's more likely that that's a transition sentence, so as to let the reader know early what precisely is going on. Background at that point seems likely to be 'random outside area'. I love working on fluff pieces.