2008-10-26, 20:06 | Link #4667 |
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why bother? no one gives a shit. I'm Jealous and annoyed. I'm not good at writing fan fics that include female characters, i suck at doing female roles.
now Im going to go play Dead Space..... so expect me to come back real soon with wet pants... my fan fics usualy have my OC getting together with one of the girl characters, which people don't like that, Specialy with Mizore...
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2008-10-26, 20:58 | Link #4668 |
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... that last part is probably because there's way too Mizore fanatics around here who want Mizore for themselves as well
And besides, probably the worst thing about your fics is perhaps the pacing... you need to slow down the scene a little, and put in more description
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2008-10-26, 21:01 | Link #4669 | |
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2008-10-26, 21:52 | Link #4672 |
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Look, I'm not too keen on stuff like this but, if you seriously want to become a better writer - READ. I was lucky - I came into the anime scene when Ranma 1/2, and Sailor Moon were the big ones and they nearly as many fanfiction as Naruto seems to have... And since I was in highschool, there were some GREAT fanfiction writers that I followed during that time - they helped me a lot in structuring paragraphs, narrative flow, a COHESIVE PLOT , and most importantly, giving me the passion to continue what they had done with fanfiction - GOOD fanfiction. Granted, I'm not nearly as big as they were comparatively speaking, but maybe next year. lol
Only problem is, I don't know what you like to read... About OCs - OC's are by nature, very tricky. They are 'hit-or-miss' characters - either the reader likes them or doesn't like them. So actually, the trick is not so much to get the targeted female character to like the OC, but to get the reader to like to OC enough to say, "hn, okay I can see her with him now". The reader should already know the female character(s) well enough but they hardly know anything about the OC. What really turns a reader off form an OC is if they do 'character bashing' - as in 'smacking sense' into the present male lead with knowledge that is usually only privy to us as fans. Making a character, putting them into a story and having them 'making everything right' according to the author's whims, is generally regarded as the worst among fanfiction. Good authors know not to re-write a certain 'verse' just to suit them/ an OC - those that do most likely doing it just for crack pairings that have no real basis to them in the first place. Gah, getting off on a tangent there... Anyway, it's not that people do not want to support your writing efforts, Kyero...but the character you made is not someone that we can readily accept. Because, for me, it feels as if you've replaced Moka and Tsukune for your OC Kyero as the story lead. For me, that is an ancient taboo(circa 1998) that was taught to me to NEVER do in a fanfiction involving an OC. This was also further hammered in as I was also in anime RPG groups when I was younger, but I digress. I suggest that you re-evaluate just why you created Kyero in the first place - was it to make a good Rosario+Vampire story? or was it to make Rosario+Vampire into a good story for you? Self-insertion fanfics are an almost guarrenteed 'no-read'. They are just wishful dreams of rabid fanboys/girls to be with their favorite character (even though said character would NEVER go for their type in the first place) and basically act out their fantasies....yeah, you got that sick feeling too, right? That's why no one reads them - who wants to read about what someone has potential wetdreams about at night? The way you've presented your character so far is VERY close to that of an self-insertion fic. ...now that 'Writing Fanfiction 101' is now over....
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2008-10-26, 22:53 | Link #4673 |
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No he doesn't replace them, hes a side character like Gin, but more of a peice of the plot to advance than a main character.
and I knew OC's were hated. But whos gonna stop me from having fun with making them? Whats so bad about my OC? Except the fact that you belive hes replacing people. You have OC's too, yet people still read it.. well some but some is better than none Also like I said, I suck at writing stuff for female characters. I have a problem with being a female character. EDIT: of course, How could I be so stupid.... of Course a small summary might make it seem like my character is tryin to steal the spot light.
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2008-10-26, 23:51 | Link #4674 | ||
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Also, you are naming the character after yourself, which makes it a self insert. Why make the self insert such a big character with a tragic past? That calls too much attention to him. Nobody is stopping you from writing your stories. But after being put on the internet, people will read, criticize, flame, admire, love, adore your work because you put it out there. Why are you hooking up your OC with Mizore? Why does your story call for it? Is it because you like her the most? With the names being the same, it feels too much like wish fantasy writing which few people like to read. Putting that aside, why would she like him? What aspects would draw Mizore towards him besides Tsukune dumping her for Moka? Can your OC even be interesting as a friend to her? Quote:
As a former fanfic writer and critic, I personally hated using/reading OC's and have problems with dialogue. I have seen OC's used well though. I am not trying to be mean towards your work, but you said you were jealous and wish people liked your works more and I am helping you. Guide's on OC's: http://oddlots.digitalspace.net/gues...nalcharas.html http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4468720/...nal_Characters http://alswaiter.codedaemon.com/LOTR/Help/howto.htm |
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2008-10-27, 00:14 | Link #4677 | |
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