Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by Thesinwithin

I know that this is true. *bricked*

Heh, I'm reminded of my favourite Mel Gibson movie: What Women Want XD A guy ends up being able to read women's thoughts. Hilarity ensues.

I would love to see a fic where Yuuno discovers a Lost Logia that gives him that ability

[Thesinwithin]

^^^ Poor Yuuno would be really put out when he discovered what Nanoha already has.

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Then I feel less guilty in admitting that by the time I reached the end of it, my brain had essentially melted into a useless puddle of goo.

Glad you enjoyed it then.

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by Thesinwithin

^^^ Poor Yuuno would be really put out when he discovered what Nanoha already has.

I'm certain I have no idea what you're talking about

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

I would love to see a fic where Yuuno discovers a Lost Logia that gives him that ability

Even he he had the ability, though, knowing Yuuno, I doubt he'd take advantage of it. He's far too nice to use that kind of thing to his own advantage.

[00-Raiser]

Well, we know how his female friends like to keep their worries to themselves, so I'm sure he'd use that ability to help them out.

Though no doubt he'd probably get hit with

Yuuno, come on. You're so sensitive, you're so aware of my feelings, you're so tuned in. You talk to me like a woman, you think like a woman; Yuuno! Come on! Admit it, you're totally and completely gay!

[Rising Dragon]

And there's probably some female thoughts that Yuuno would be better off not knowing... besides the above.

[RadiantBeam]

Honestly, I think that kind of power would cause more harm than good. Some thoughts aren't meant to be read.

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

cause more harm than good

Isn't that right up your alley then?

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

Isn't that right up your alley then?

That would be more DC's alley. I try to give my characters happy endings after I break them.

[Rising Dragon]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Honestly, I think that kind of power would cause more harm than good.

IIRC, that ends up happening for Gibson in What Women Want.

[00-Raiser]

It could have a happy ending. That movie did.

Though the way I see most of the characters, they'd willingly sacrifice their own happiness for others. Like, say, if Fate was in love with Nanoha, but Nanoha and Yuuno were in love with each other, Fate would bite back her feelings and help Nanoha and Yuuno hook up.

So in the proposed situation, even if Yuuno suffers from the ability, he'd still use it so the others would be happy and not let on to his suffering so he doesn't get in the way of the others' happiness. Then it's just a matter of having some one consider his happiness.

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by Rising Dragon

IIRC, that ends up happening for Gibson in What Women Want.

Hence why DC should write it and not me, if she wants to. She is the Queen of Tragedy, after all.

[DezoPenguin]

Originally Posted by Kuroi Hadou

Alright, so this shall be my very first foray into the world of Nanoha fanfiction, with spawnofthejudge as my co-pilot. This plot bunny basically started its dance after our discussion about Yuuno's role in both canon and fanon, and poor spawn has reluctantly agreed to co-author at the expense of his gaming time (apparently the bunnies are holding him here under threat of death).

Anyway, without further ado I present:

The Ties That Bind

Spoiler for Prologue:

Yuuno Scrya was exhausted, though he couldn’t really blame anyone but himself for that. Several days without sleep and nothing but stimulants to keep him nourished and functioning tended to catch up with a person rather quickly.

His duties as Head Librarian required he be available for consultation all hours of the day, but not that he actually be in the Library all hours of the day. Yuuno hadn’t seen his bed in nearly a week, and he found himself missing it.

I really should get something to eat and go home.

He couldn’t stop though. The book he had found stashed away in a forgotten and neglected corner of the Library a few days ago was one he had never seen before, and according to the logs it hadn’t been cataloged yet.

He hadn’t seen his friends in a while.

I should see if they’re available for a group lunch in the near future. It’ll be nice to see them again.

Nanoha, Fate, Chrono, Hayate… they were so busy with their work at the Time-Space Administration Bureau they barely had any free time, which they typically spent with their precious families. He didn’t mind though: Just seeing them when they needed his department’s help with researching a particular mission objective or location was than enough for him.

In fact, such an occasion had happened just a few weeks ago. Fate had come to him seeking information about a particular world in Sector 17. Their time together was short though; the relevant information had been located rather quickly and Fate was under a tight schedule.

If this keeps up, I'll be completely irrelevant in a few years, came the wistful thought.

Ever since he'd invented Archive magic and taught the people working with him how to use it, his personal assistance was sought less and less. Yuuno was happy though: He had dedicated the better part of his lifetime to this project, and he was determined to see it through to the end.

Speaking of...

He turned back to the book in front of him, turning a musty page. The book was written in what he referred to as “modern” Belkan, but there was something odd about it. There was no logical progression from one page to the next. Sentence structure varied wildly. Magical formulas and seals of both Belkan and Mid-Childan origin littered surface of the pages, but the text not only didn't reveal their purposes, it didn’t even make any sense.

It was in some form of random placement code he had never encountered. Even more troubling was the observation that the binding was so old it was falling apart. If he wasn't careful, the spine would break and loose the pages within into a chaotic mess.

“Yuuno.”

There was one phrase, though, that stood out. It wasn't in code like everything else; it wasn't even in Belkan. It was in a language from Mid-Childa itself that had long since fallen out of public awareness:

"Veritas Prohibitorum"

“Yuuno.”

He frowned. 'Prohibited... Truth'...? What in the world was that supposed to mean?

"Yuuno!"

Yuuno's head snapped up, his hands automatically slamming the book shut. A small cloud of dust escaped from between the worn pages. With shock, he realized that someone had been in his office doorway for some time now. He’d been so absorbed by the manuscript on his desk that he hadn’t even noticed. He quickly collected himself, hiding his shock.

It was Fate.

"Fate? I thought you weren't going to be back on Mid for another week."

She wrapped the long coat around herself more tightly and stepped into Yuuno's office, heels clacking against the floor.

Heels...? Fate didn't wear heels. At least... not ones quite that tall...

She flashed Yuuno a small, gentle smile as she came in front of the desk he was sitting at, "Our mission was less difficult than predicted, so we finished up and came home early."

"I-I see."

Trailing her fingers gently along the edge of the desk, she calmly walked around to Yuuno's side.

What is she…?

She was getting awfully close…

Before Yuuno had time to process it Fate had rounded the desk and come to Yuuno’s side, eyes on the closed manuscript at its center. Reaching for it, her hand stopped just before touching it.

“May I?”

He nodded, “Just be careful.”

Tenderly lifting the book, she softly opened it and leafed through the pages. Her smiling face turned serious as her eyes took in the contents within.

“What is this?”

“I honestly can’t say. The condition of the pages indicates an age of at least two thousand years, but the writing is what we call ‘modern Belkan’, which didn’t rise to standard usage until roughly one-and-a-half thousand years ago according to our records.” He was so deep in his disposition mode he didn’t notice Fate’s eyes flash from the book in her hands to his face. “Even more puzzling is that a dead language from ancient Mid – which fell out of use long before ‘modern Belkan’ even began to emerge – shows up several times, and it’s always the same phrase…”

Gently sitting the manuscript down, Fate’s eyes were hidden by her bangs, “I see…”

Faster than Yuuno could react Fate pounced on his lap, her long, bare legs straddling his waist. Calmly reaching down, she slowly undid her coat's buttons and loosened the coat’s neckline, revealing the smooth mounds of flesh underneath to his rounded eyes.

"Fa-Fa-Fa-Fate... w-what are y-y-you...?"

She leaned forward, resting her forehead against his, her eyes so close he could make out the individual flares and shades of red in them. "Yuuno... where is the Veritas Prohibitorum?"

What?

"W-What?"

She wrapped her arms around his neck, her cheek touching his and close enough that her warm breath tingled his ear. Fate’s voice dropped an octave, to an alluring, husky alto that sent jolts through his frozen body. "The Veritas Prohibitorum… where is it?"

With dawning horror, Yuuno realized what was happening.

"No, you're not Fate… you’re not even real! None of this is real!"

'Fate' drew back, looked shocked for a moment. She then smiled a smile that twisted and warped her entire face into an ugly mockery of its former, elegant beauty. Red eyes that were once filled with kindness turned malicious and sadistic. Yuuno shrank back, terrified by the abrupt change.

"Clever man."

The familiar settings of his Library office and Fate’s form shattered like glass around Yuuno, leaving him alone in a cold, dark room. At least he thought he was alone. It was too dark to see if anyone was in the room with him; he didn’t even know how big the room was.

There were no windows, and the only light came from the few dim candles flickering around the place. A deep, echoing voice resounded through the room, but Yuuno couldn’t discern a precise location.

"So you saw though that one as well, despite your exhaustion. Apparently the charms of women don’t work on you like most. We'll have to be more creative in our methods from now on."

It was calm and methodical, almost whimsical in tone.

“Why are you being so stubborn, Mr. Scrya? It would be so much easier on all parties involved if you would just tell us the location.”

Yuuno curled into a tight ball on the floor, clothes soaked with cold sweat. He tried to comfort himself with thoughts of his beloved friends, but was far too tired to even conjure up their faces in his mind.

Another voice, female this time, chimed in, “The magics might work better if he’s well rested and fed. He’s so out of it he can barely keep his head raised.”

Nanoha, Chrono, Fate, Hayate... please help me... please find me. I don't know... how much longer... I can keep this up...

Yuuno’s body finally succumbed to its neglect, and he knew no more.

****************

Several thousand light years away, Vivio Takamachi was woken from a disturbing dream by a crash of thunder.

Spoiler for Authors' Notes:

1) So there you have it. This was originally written to be a “teaser” to gauge interest, but we just decided to make it a full-blown prologue and jump right in.

2) This is set post-ViVid (for what it’s worth), mostly so we can include a certain character.

3) In case you couldn't tell, Latin is standing in for Ancient Mid, much like German does for Belkan.

4) Updates posted here by me will show up in a few days time on fanfiction.net under spawnofthejudge's account.

5) No: This is not an April Fool’s joke, unlike a certain someone who’s prison sentence recently expired.

Spoiler for Just in case someone else hasn't read it yet:

Oh, my, a rather effective teaser. Yuuno in trouble and being assailed by either illusion or mind-affecting magic (or both). Mysteries from the past and fun with research and a rescue mission to come! Sign me up for this one.

[Rising Dragon]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Hence why DC should write it and not me, if she wants to. She is the Queen of Tragedy, after all.

But as Raiser points out, that movie also had a happy ending... thus putting it squarely back into your court. :V

[Kuroi Hadou]

Moczo told me he's decided to take up the request, thus settling the jurisdiction debate.

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Even he he had the ability, though, knowing Yuuno, I doubt he'd take advantage of it. He's far too nice to use that kind of thing to his own advantage.

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

Well, we know how his female friends like to keep their worries to themselves, so I'm sure he'd use that ability to help them out.

While it would be a nice thing for Yuuno to do , I think personally that helping someone while given private information about them without their knowledge won't help them in the long run. Even with the best of intentions, it's still a breach of privacy . And depending on how forgiving the girls are, it could badly impact their friendship .

^Of course, this is the Worst Case Scenario way of thinking .

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

Though the way I see most of the characters, they'd willingly sacrifice their own happiness for others. Like, say, if Fate was in love with Nanoha, but Nanoha and Yuuno were in love with each other, Fate would bite back her feelings and help Nanoha and Yuuno hook up.

So in the proposed situation, even if Yuuno suffers from the ability, he'd still use it so the others would be happy and not let on to his suffering so he doesn't get in the way of the others' happiness. Then it's just a matter of having some one consider his happiness.

Yeah, but I still find that very unfair . Sometimes what someone is thinking isn't entirely their true feelings/what they want to do about the matter. And doing the I Want My Beloved To Be Happy thing isn't fair since it's not letting the person involved make her own decisions . (I love Dezo's "Midnight of the Heart"/"Divided Heart" series because it addresses that )

Of course, I believe that I'm taking this conversation far too seriously....

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

That would be more DC's alley. I try to give my characters happy endings after I break them.

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

It could have a happy ending. That movie did.
*snip*

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Hence why DC should write it and not me, if she wants to. She is the Queen of Tragedy, after all.

..............Hmmmmmmm : Yuuno gets Mind Reading Skill -->tries to help out his friends-->they find out-->trust is broken all around-->All their friendships fall apart and no one likes/loves/trusts each other anymore-->everyone dies from random attack because they're not watching each others backs.

Yup, sounds like my kind of a story ...

Originally Posted by Kuroi Hadou

Moczo told me he's decided to take up the request, thus settling the jurisdiction debate.

....but thank god someone else is writing it

[spawnofthejudge]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Even he he had the ability, though, knowing Yuuno, I doubt he'd take advantage of it. He's far too nice to use that kind of thing to his own advantage.

Sure, but he might be persuaded slash persuade himself to use it to someone else's advantage.

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by Kuroi Hadou

Moczo told me he's decided to take up the request, thus settling the jurisdiction debate.

Nice I'm pretty sure this is the first time some one's ever decided to write something I proposed

Originally Posted by deathcurse

And depending on how forgiving the girls are, it could badly impact their friendship .

Oh please, the girls have Ryusei levels of forgiveness. Besides, he would have gained the powers completely by accident and he can't control whose mind he reads, so I'm sure they'd cut him some slack.

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by deathcurse

..............Hmmmmmmm : Yuuno gets Mind Reading Skill -->tries to help out his friends-->they find out-->trust is broken all around-->All their friendships fall apart and no one likes/loves/trusts each other anymore-->everyone dies from random attack because they're not watching each others backs.

Yup, sounds like my kind of a story ...

Told you so.

[Moczo]

Originally Posted by Kuroi Hadou

Moczo told me he's decided to take up the request, thus settling the jurisdiction debate.

That said, if someone else wants to do their own take on it, they are welcome... I don't know how much Raiser will appreciate mine.