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ZeroXSEED · 2012-07-20, 11:48

Haruna: "Please do not let Yuuki-kun nowhere near the cherry, it's dangerous"

Girls: "Huh?" *Looks at Rito who skilfully knot the stem*

Girls: "Don't get excited, don't get excited"

(Somewhere else in the party, Ichika does the same with a peach)

agetreme · 2012-07-20, 12:34

Spoiler for Chapter 3: Genius Beautiful Professor:

Does it feel right? The tone of terror in the story.

ZeroXSEED · 2012-07-20, 19:50

Hmm, between Char twins, who should use Custom Mark II? Should Charlotte keep it, or she passed it to her brother and get a new machine?

I have some explanation of why and why, I just need some opinion.

StratoSpear · 2012-07-20, 19:54

She keeps it and her brother gets something new... or something on par

agetreme · 2012-07-20, 20:41

No comment, I take it that the segment has no problem?

time to move on to next part.....

ZeroXSEED · 2012-07-20, 20:45

@ Age
Yeah, I barely understand but I think it's fine.

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Well, the new unit is... ah, somewhat quirky. It's supposed to use Raphael Frame as well, but FINALLY incorporate G3 system which made it immune to beam weapon but vulnerable to physical weapon.

Considering it's full-armor type, I think it suit male profile as well (because y'now, boobs)

agetreme · 2012-07-20, 20:59

Why Fuyuki is terrified of her will be explained later

If it is the name that confuse you...

I am still trying to decide to keep her name or change it..... (because of the Chapter Title character, Beautiful Genius Professor....)

Cecilia's name will not change though...

ZeroXSEED · 2012-07-20, 21:08

Unlike Reiryaku Byakuya though, it does not nullify energy and made it harmless, instead, it works like numerous microscopic barrier working against focusing field that held beam/plasma together, working as both disrupter and deflector. However, due to fragile, sponge like nature, something with large momentum (i.e. physical weapon) will be slowed down only a little.

In Charles' hand, it can even BEND the attack somewhere. He's that genius

His combat skill OTOH suck ass compared to other major character, relying on insane thinking speed to counter.

Eratas123 · 2012-07-20, 22:51

Morning guys....

HasuMasu · 2012-07-20, 23:08

^ Dude, it's noon.

Eratas123 · 2012-07-20, 23:29

It was 9 minutes from noon when I posted it:/

ZeroXSEED · 2012-07-20, 23:36

Hahaha... stop arguing menial things

Eratas123 · 2012-07-20, 23:38

Right, back to the main point: Almost done with Synchronicity, hopefully it'll be good.

ZeroXSEED · 2012-07-20, 23:45

Congrats, I'm almost done with Episode 2 as well.

Eratas123 · 2012-07-20, 23:46

How many words is it? I'm about 5000 now and still going.

ZeroXSEED · 2012-07-21, 00:17

5500 words, apparently.

Eratas123 · 2012-07-21, 00:21

Nice

I'm almost done, so it'll probably reach 6000 something by the time I finish.

Though most of it is just exposition.

ZeroXSEED · 2012-07-21, 00:37

I'm fasting starting today and my head is dizzy, can you help to enhance the last ecchi scene? It's seriously messy. It need something more than simple grammar fix

Spoiler for Warning: ecchi:

Eratas123 · 2012-07-21, 01:13

Spoiler:

How's this?

ZeroXSEED · 2012-07-21, 01:19

Much better thank you very much.

2012-07-20, 11:48	Link #34401
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	Haruna: "Please do not let Yuuki-kun nowhere near the cherry, it's dangerous" Girls: "Huh?" Looks at Rito who skilfully knot the stem Girls: "Don't get excited, don't get excited" (Somewhere else in the party, Ichika does the same with a peach) __________________

2012-07-20, 12:34	Link #34402
agetreme Just another Idiot Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Delusion world	Spoiler for Chapter 3: Genius Beautiful Professor: Lesson went smoothly. For the teacher but not for me. There are things which are completely alien to me and I could not understand. Those things are things that you normally wouldn’t find in a physic textbook. Terms such as Anti-gravity and Energy Shield sounds like violation of well-established Scientific Law.... how the hell do they even work in the first place!? I rubbed my chin with my hand, trying to ponder the great mystery known as Infinite Stratos when a voice interrupted. “Orimura-kun....” It was the Japanese girl with the air of Yamato Nadeshiko (mentioned in first chapter). “You are Onikami Houki/ Houka(undecided) right? How may I help you?” Coincidentally, she happens to share the same name as that Demonic blood-thirsty “Asura”. “There is something which I wanted to talk to you...let's go to the roof top.” She signaled me to follow her as the girls were gossiping with each other loudly. ‘A confession in first day of school!?’ I panicked. ‘Should I accept or refuse?’ I thought as I followed the girl to the rooftop. = “Long time no see... ” Before she could finish her sentence, I am sprinting towards the exit door. ‘IT’S HER AFTERALL! THE PSYCHOTIC ASURA’ My head spin and my mind stamp on the panic button repeatedly. I fumble as I tried to open the door which the bitch has locked. Should I jump off the roof? But it would probably hurt more... “I just want to talk.” ..... She seems mentally-sounded..... May be communication is possible? “W-what do you want to talk about?” I tried to ask as normally as possible but my head is already breaking out cold sweat. “I wanted to apologize for what I did years ago. I am sorry for all the trouble that I have cause as a child.” The girl did a deep bow to show her sincerity. I calm down and relaxed. “Apology accepted.” I smiled. I guess people do change after all. Does it feel right? The tone of terror in the story. __________________ Ara Han

2012-07-20, 19:50	Link #34403
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	Hmm, between Char twins, who should use Custom Mark II? Should Charlotte keep it, or she passed it to her brother and get a new machine? I have some explanation of why and why, I just need some opinion. __________________

2012-07-20, 19:54	Link #34404
StratoSpear Titans Test Team Pilot Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: The Elysium	She keeps it and her brother gets something new... or something on par __________________ "You cannot be bad at watching a movie. You cannot be bad at listening to an album. ...But you can be bad at playing a videogame, and the game will punish you and deny you access to the rest of the videogame."

2012-07-20, 20:41	Link #34405
agetreme Just another Idiot Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Delusion world	No comment, I take it that the segment has no problem? time to move on to next part..... __________________ Ara Han

2012-07-20, 20:45	Link #34406
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	@ Age Yeah, I barely understand but I think it's fine. ------------- Well, the new unit is... ah, somewhat quirky. It's supposed to use Raphael Frame as well, but FINALLY incorporate G3 system which made it immune to beam weapon but vulnerable to physical weapon. Considering it's full-armor type, I think it suit male profile as well (because y'now, boobs) __________________

2012-07-20, 20:59	Link #34407
agetreme Just another Idiot Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Delusion world	Why Fuyuki is terrified of her will be explained later If it is the name that confuse you... I am still trying to decide to keep her name or change it..... (because of the Chapter Title character, Beautiful Genius Professor....) Cecilia's name will not change though... __________________ Ara Han

2012-07-20, 21:08	Link #34408
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	Unlike Reiryaku Byakuya though, it does not nullify energy and made it harmless, instead, it works like numerous microscopic barrier working against focusing field that held beam/plasma together, working as both disrupter and deflector. However, due to fragile, sponge like nature, something with large momentum (i.e. physical weapon) will be slowed down only a little. In Charles' hand, it can even BEND the attack somewhere. He's that genius His combat skill OTOH suck ass compared to other major character, relying on insane thinking speed to counter. __________________

2012-07-20, 22:51	Link #34409
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Morning guys.... __________________

2012-07-20, 23:08	Link #34410
HasuMasu Senior Member Artist Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: The Middle Way	^ Dude, it's noon. __________________

2012-07-20, 23:29	Link #34411
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	It was 9 minutes from noon when I posted it:/ __________________

2012-07-20, 23:36	Link #34412
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	Hahaha... stop arguing menial things __________________

2012-07-20, 23:38	Link #34413
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Right, back to the main point: Almost done with Synchronicity, hopefully it'll be good. __________________

2012-07-20, 23:45	Link #34414
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	Congrats, I'm almost done with Episode 2 as well. __________________

2012-07-20, 23:46	Link #34415
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	How many words is it? I'm about 5000 now and still going. __________________

2012-07-21, 00:17	Link #34416
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	5500 words, apparently. __________________

2012-07-21, 00:21	Link #34417
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Nice I'm almost done, so it'll probably reach 6000 something by the time I finish. Though most of it is just exposition. __________________

2012-07-21, 00:37	Link #34418
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	I'm fasting starting today and my head is dizzy, can you help to enhance the last ecchi scene? It's seriously messy. It need something more than simple grammar fix Spoiler for Warning: ecchi: Monday, March 3, 2015. 1900 Hours Location: Infinite Stratos Academy Cafeteria “We hereby apologize” the guys, each with a small lump on their head, bowed to Yamada, who has one herself. “Ah, it’s okay, as a teacher I’m ashamed of my own action” she waved her hand in response “Then, shall we continue with the party?” “THANK YOU YAMADA-SENSEI~!” Before Saruyama can snuggle on her chest, Rito and Yui pulled his collar quickly and subdue him. “Sairenji, can’t you do something about this perverted excuse of a man?” Yui screamed while keeping his leg from rebelling. Haruna just clumsily smile. “It must be hard for you eh, Reed-san” Cecilia asked awkwardly “having such a … passionate friend” “Yeah, really, this guy is something… STOP MOVING, SCHWEIN!” “Ooh, soft” Saruyama grinned perversely as his wildly waving hand reached Kotegawa’s butt, who is practically sitting on him. The reaction as Dan described: priceless. “KYAAAH! PERVERT!” Moving away at such sudden pace, Kotegawa knocked Rito away toward Cecilia and subsequently Haruna. The chain reaction hit virtually everyone present (Save Charles and Chifuyu) and made a messed up game of twister. “Yuu-Yuuki-kun, are you alright?” Haruna asked nonchalantly… all the while his head is practically inside her skirt, and squashed by Cecilia’s chest. “Sa-sairenji… I’m… not looking” came the muffled reply. Haruna rolled her eyes, torn between shame and slight enjoyment “…Of course I know... aahh… stop moving~”, Cecilia puffed her cheek “How unfair” she gritted her teeth jealously. Meanwhile, Maya ‘accidentally’ lay her head on Dan’s lap, whose expression of small laugh is unchanged. Blood quickly rushed to her head, realizing how manly he’s looking from this angle. “Just wait till I get you!” Yui still chased Saruyama, who continue to spread the mayhem, all over the cafeteria. They met Houki who is clinging to Ichika’s arm, the result is pretty much cliché. “Hey guys, what’s with the noise-?” Yui bumped into Ichika and Houki, sandwiched his head between their ample breasts. Ichika don’t know which one is bigger, as he lost his consciousness for a moment or two. “Na-na-na, you can’t catch m-“ His mocking gesture was cut off as Chifuyu’s hand chopped his skull; he slumped on the floor unmoving. Yokoshima-sensei (who is drooling) tried to sneak in and drag him, but she was knocked out as well. “This is going to be tough” Chifuyu mumbled; think what exactly will happen tomorrow if the first day can be this hectic “Sasuga has some can left, didn’t he?” Charles just delivers a sheepish smile. On the other hand, Shino was sitting on top of Tsuda. “Ah, I’m knocked out as well” She said with amused tone. Came the usual flat toned reply “You know, we are like three meters away from it” __________________

2012-07-21, 01:13	Link #34419
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Spoiler: “We hereby apologize” The guys, each with a small lump on their head, bowed to the green haired teacher, who was also bowing her head in apology. “Ah, it’s okay, as a teacher I’m ashamed of my own actions,” She waved her hand dismissively in response, “Then, shall we continue with the party?” “THANK YOU YAMADA-SENSEI~!” Saruyama quickly stood up and tried to hug the blushing greenhead, but was stopped by Rito and Yui grabbing him by the collar, choking him into submission. His hand tried to in futility to grab the soft marshmallowy temptation that lied in front of him, but alas, salvation would not come for him now. “Sairenji, can’t you do something about this perverted excuse of a man?” Yui screamed, grabbing his leg which was pushing his body forward against all odds. Unbelievable, he was somehow moving forward even as the two tried in vain to pull him back. Haruna just clumsily smiled in response to their antics, “It must be hard for you eh, Reed-san?” Haruna asked awkwardly, “Having such a … passionate friend must be very diffucult.” “Yeah, really, this guy is something… STOP MOVING, SCHWEIN!” He/She (Dunno who's talking) yelled in irritation. He wasn't going to get anywhere at this point. Time to switch targets. “Ooh, soft” Saruyama grinned perversely as his wildly waving hand reached Kotegawa’s butt, who was practically sitting on top him of him at this point. The reaction, as Dan would later describe, would be called priceless. “KYAAAH! PERVERT!” Moving away at a sudden pace, Kotegawa knocked Rito away towards Cecilia, and subsequently Haruna. The chain reaction hit virtually everyone present (Save Charles and Chifuyu), which resulted in a messed up game of twister, only without the colors. “Yuu-Yuuki-kun, are you alright?” Haruna asked nonchalantly, trying to stop the dizziness in her head. Rito wanted to say yes, he really did, but the circumstances didn't allow him too. His head was caught under her skirt, where (thankfully) no light penetrated and he couldn't see anything. His hands weren't that much better off, having landed on a pair of British hills, where they were currently doing some exploration. Whether he was in heaven, hell, or heaven within hell was up to you. “Sa-sairenji… I’m… not looking” Came the muffled reply. He was desperately trying to stop the blood from rushing out of his nose like a faucet. Haruna rolled her eyes, torn between shame and slight enjoyment, “…Of course I know... aahh… stop moving~” Why was his breathing so hard? It was beginning to make her feel dizzy the more hot air blew. Cecilia could only puff her cheek at their little show, “How unfair,” she gritted her teeth jealously. Meanwhile, Maya had ‘accidentally’ laid her head on Dan’s lap, whose expression of a small laugh is unchanged, save for the slight redness on his. Blood quickly rushed to her head. Was it just her, or did he look really manly from that angle? “Just wait till I get you!” Yui angrily chased Saruyama, who continue to spread his special brand of mayhem, all over the cafeteria. It wasn't long before the two of them bumped into Ichika and Houki, the latter of who was clinging tightly onto the former. If things were more calm, it would look like a cliche love comedy situation. “Hey guys, what’s with the noise-?” Ichika didn't get a chance to finish his sentence before Yui tripped and bumped into him, sandwiching his head between her ample breasts and his childhood friends. He couldn't breath because of the immense pressure and he fainted soon afterwards. Shame, he was in the best position to judge who was bigger, a question which no one was able to answer. “Na-na-na, you can’t catch m-“ His mocking gesture was cut off as Chifuyu’s hand chopped his skull. He slumped on the floor unmoving, twitching slightly and drooling. Yokoshima-sensei, who was watching nearby, quietly tried to sneak in and drag him, but she was knocked out by the avatar of Asura as well. “This is going to be tough” Chifuyu mumbled. This was only the first day and it was only going to get worse from here, “Sasuga has some can left, didn’t he?” Charles just gave her a sheepish smile. Nearby, the two teachers were on the floor was well, with Shino lying on top of the brown haired teacher. "Ah, I was knocked down as well!" Shino smiled down at Tsuda cheerfully. He just gave her his trademark deadpan look and answered, "....We're 3 meters away from them, though." How's this? __________________

2012-07-21, 01:19	Link #34420
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	Much better thank you very much. __________________